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one heck of a woman let me tell u
always liked how finn looks like a baby getting lifted by canyon like this
>>6541526>scissoring, but futa
>>6542154...so docking?
>>6542306no, penetration
>>6542379I can't think of anything unironically gayer than sticking a dick in a vagina
>>6542438doing that but wearing a frilly sailor outfit is the best I got
>>6542576Who told you what I was wearing right now
New pic by me. Any feedback is appreciated (still learning the basics)
>>6546916It does need improvementShould have tried a different angle because it's hard to tell if it's Garnet's other hand that's pulling on Finn's shirt or if it's just scrunched up like that
>>6546916Her breasts look odd to me, like they're not following the angle of her shoulders. The one closest to us seems to be attached lower than the other, even if Finn's body is meant to be pushing the far breast up.
>>6547603>>6547630Thanks for the feedback. I'm going to rework on it.
>>6549676GOTDAMNThose smooth shading and highlights get me rock fuckin hard.I love mastery of craft
>>6550204Really glad you're almost done with this, I appreciate your translating skills but this comic is just depressing
>>6553122Yeah it's really not WB's best work. I like it, but it could be better. I didn't realize initially just how little dialog Shoko actually has. Also since the last page hard cuts to Shoko as a ghost, I was kind of worried it would end with her saying, "and then they fucked me to death! Literally!" Then I would have to tag this thing with snuff. But nah that's not what she says. Still though, the implication seems to be that Shoko spends an indeterminate amount of time as the Bath Boys' fuck slave and she doesn't even get hentai-logic mindbroken into enjoying it. Kinda dark but then again this is a rape comic so...
Aaaand we're done! Just have to translate the author's big block of text on page 25, then go back through the whole thing and touch up the dialog to make sure it flows properly from page to page.
I did this yesterday.
>>6555112Very cute!
>>6555112Someone chopped her head
>>6553727Alright gotta give them credit for ending it on a pretty good joke.You'd think Shoko would be weirded out seeing Finn get so horny over a story about her being brutally gang-raped, but at the same time you'd think Finn would be weirded out by making the story of her being brutally gang-raped so erotic.
>>6541910>always liked how finn looks like a babyyou have explicitly stated that you enjoy pedophilia. Please give me the peace of mind that there aren't any young children in your life, yes?
>>6556013My rape basement full of babies is frankly of no concern to you, good sir.
>>6556625>not keeping your babies in a rape atticWhat kind of degenerate
>>6557223It would be too hot for them up there, it's nice and dank in my dungeonHeat stroke is no joke
Trying to get into making nsfw art so I drew some flame princess
>>6560508Nice work, man! I also like the PB one you posted on Newgrounds.
>>6560975Why are these proportions so fucked
>>6562656Are they? I'm a retard with no taste but they look pretty fine to me. I guess Marceline's thighs look bigger than they should.>>6566486Yay I always like how cute this person's stuff is.
>>6567005Legs are way too long. If she unbends her knees her legs would be almost twice as long as her entire torso. Go grab a tape measure or a meter stick or something. Take off your clothes and measure the distance from the floor to crotch level, and then from crotch level to the top of your shoulder. Your legs aren't twice as long as your torso is tall unless you measure it really wrong.Upper leg/thigh is super thick (not thicc just regular thick) and lower leg/ankles are twigs by comparison. Marceline's legs are chicken drumsticks apparently. Marcy's toes are kind of weird too, the big toe is too small the the first toe is too long, but I'm not a footfag and I know feet are hard to draw so I'll let it slide.Faces are both super fucked up. We can only see one eye on each of them so they seem to be facing profile, yet the mouths are angled partly towards us. It's like the artist googled "how to draw a cartoon mouth" and didn't realize what parts were supposed to be visible based on where the "camera" is pointing. Marcy's upper lip is slanted down and there's a bunch of space by the left side of her mouth - none of this should be visible if she's in profile. Finn is the same but worse, with his eye and mouth pushed way back from the front of his face. He seems to just have this huge round empty space in the middle of his face, I guess that's where the nose would be, except it's just huge and empty and weird because AT characters don't have noses. Also Marcy is grabbing that exact spot for some reason.Both Marcy and Finn's heads are too small for their bodies. Personally I think their heads should be larger than you'd normally draw a person to match the cartoon art style but that's just a preference, not objective.>inb4 It's better than anything I can drawI don't rake in $2500 a month on Patreon. And the artist CAN do better! Look at pic related. It also has some minor imperfections (Marcy's right hand for example) but it's just so much better overall.
>>6570417of course the girl who can turn into a tree would have a BUSH
>>6571223CARLOS
>>6569084JaAaMes Baxter
>>6570710"Shit my dick froze!"
>>6542065TIL breakfast princess is a white bossy bimbo with a tanning addiction.
>>6576555this pic would be so much better if you jus chopped off half of Finn's dick length
