Rate my poem /lit/
I like how it rhymes.
I'm not a big rhymer but your rhythm seems a bit all over the place. Also many of the rhymes you're going for don't really fit, like wonder and colder, more and raw etc.
>>23982127It's simple but earnest. Hang onto it for a few years, and rewrite it now and again. Thanks for sharing.
>>23982127would be better if it was typed.every poet should have a typewriter.
You have talent. Keep trying and it will automatically get better and better.
>>23982127You sound like a fucking dweeb
>>23982127What does the drawing signify?
>>23982127I'd rather have you in my life Instead of choosing the real knife
>>23982138>Thanks for sharing:-)
>>23983162Thank you so much for the warm words, Anona. Wishing you health & happiness.
>>23982127Gaaaaaaaaay
>>23982127I like the flow of the third verse, but the rest seems…choppy. Not sure how to explain it.
>>23982127poem you present to /lit/makes you seem a mid of witsaddest choice amongst words writsurely you must be a britor a beastly amerikanerthough handwriting is bit finerA woman! Possibly a minortruly this one is a whinerMy darling there is naught to rateone can only fiercely beratefor it was my sentence by fateto read worst poem up until this date
