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A thread to discuss any personal yuri creations you're currently working on or have ideas for, and to get feedback and advice from other anons. Tell us what you're making!

This includes but is not limited to:
>yuri stories (note that fanfiction has it's own dedicated thread)
>yuri video games
>yuri comics
>yuri card games
>yuri 3D modeling and/or printing
>yuri graffiti
>yuri food
>using deep learning to construct two sentient female AI and setting them up on a blind date

Note that all the normal board rules still apply, e.g. no hetshit, etc.
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What's a good way to help solidify a Love interest's...interest in the MC if they've got an apparent age gap? I feel like after a certain point it kind of becomes just normal adult stuff unless the LI knew the MC when they were a teen.
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>>3679522
Which is which?
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>>3679522
Well, why does the LI like the MC?
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>>3679525
LI is older. Like was a parent's friend when MC was a child/teen.
>>3679533
Hasn't seen them in a good five years or so, and the differences are smacking LI upside the head cause MC's attractive and stirring some things within LI but it's at a point where it could either be rationalized away or fed if MC wants to re-connect with the LI in a friendly manner.
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>>3679522
>>3679553
Pushing from the MC's side, or being repeatedly exposed to those differences/temptation.
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>>3679553
Doesn't need much more than that I think. Sometimes the beginning of it all can honestly be something as little just thinking the little girl you've seen grow up is just smoking hot now. And also >>3679557

Honestly feels like the only way to go
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A few days ago I was in a bad mood and decided to return to writing smut and spent a couple hours writing about my very specific fantasy about evil older lesbians raping young straight girls in a historical setting. And now I need to make everyone aware of this fact.
Written quickly and never properly proofread, possibly contains some hard ESL.
http://www.hentai-foundry.com/stories/user/MrRoach/56975/Gloria/147196/Chapter-0/Gloria
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In one of my last stories, the childhood friend of the main girl ends up mind-raping her and turning her into her personal pet.

She more or less sells her soul to the Devil in order to pull her away from a het relationship that's happy, supportive and healing just because she's too jealous to see her with anyone besides herself.

Childhood's friend does not give a shit because she's just that obsessed. In the end she sacrifices their entire village to create a fake world in which she can have her prize.

I'm not sure if I should publish this shit tho. It would probably send twitterfags seething because it's "not healthy" or some shit. Or I can just turn it into porn. Thought, sisters?
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>>3679973
This sounds like fetish thing anyway.
Unless it's a part of a larger plot.
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>>3679982
Oh, it is. I like my corruption with a good side of worldbuilding and drama
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>>3679960
Is everything okay?
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>>3679973
>Giving a shit about twatter kiddies
This is an 18+ site
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>rape rape rape corruption abuse
yawn
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>>3680036
Got any good ideas for not rape?
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>>3679960
>>3679973
Holy based
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I'm almost finished with the story of my VN, but I noticed the main character has chemistry with most of the female cast. My intent was her girlfriend is totally obsessed with her and the MC likes her because she reminds her of her past and loves the idea of someone so loyal to her. The MC is also tied to her past with angst over her first girlfriend she was forced to leave and voluntarily tried to forget out of grief before she came back into her life. But she ends up with such nice chemistry with many other female characters (and one male character, one of her rivals, though the MC has no attraction to men whatsoever, but I can see how the audience might think it) that it's like I inadvertently wrote her a harem.

Does it feel strange if I don't present it as a harem, even if characters like her flirty older instructor have really good chemistry with her?
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>>3680428
Turn the player character into a matchmaker for her. That'll subvert everyone's expectations.
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>>3680447
I feel most bad she can't be with her former instructor because a student who surpassed her theory-bound teacher yet still gets along well with her makes a great couple. Every single scene with the two is just pure fun to write but makes me think the instructor HAS to have a man or woman or else she'd totally seduce the MC and make her leave behind all the immature younger girls in her life
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>>3680428
>Does it feel strange if I don't present it as a harem, even if characters like her flirty older instructor have really good chemistry with her?
Well, yeah. You wrote her a harem.
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All of things posted here usually are great and at least well thought.

But would you all tell me about your yuri story/drawing you mad during yor high school/middle school years?
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>>3680458
Okay, okay.

>Two girls are soul linked
>Soul links only occur when two people are born at the exact same time, down to the last millisecond
>People that are soul linked have their feelings, emotions, thoughts, even pain shared with the soul linked (not overwhelmingly so, more like, 10% of it)
>Can also feel when your soul link is getting closer or moving further way
>The ultimate rule of soul link: If one dies, so does the other

Okay, now to actual story.

>Two girls are soul linked
>Like with every other soul link, they find out about it when they have feelings that don't feel like their own
>First verbal contact via the soul link occurs
>They don't speak the same language
>But due to the power of the soul link, they can ostensibly understand each other to a certain degree
>Girl A asks parents what language Girl B is speaking by mimicking the sounds she hears
>Girl A starts takes classes in girl B's native language at school
>After some time, they can truly have some form of basic conversation

>As they grow up, they become really good friends
>Talk to each other all the time, not a thing about each others lives they don't know
>Girl A starts talking about this really nice girl she started talking to at school, and how they're planning to go out to eat together
>Girl B gets jealous
>Girl A asks what's wrong (based soul link power)
>Girl B says it's nothing
>Girl A gets mad because Girl B should know by know that she can't truly hide anything from her soul link so she might as well say what's up

That's about as far as I got, I imagined that girl B eventually becomes an exchange student and comes over to be with girl A because if she wants any chance of being together than she can't be on the other side of the world. Not going to lie, I might go back to it now that I've typed this out, but my younger writing was even more cringe than it is now.
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>>3680458
Akuma no Riddle but during the previous Class Black: Meichi Yuri seducing and murdering the fuck out of everyone using her mind control Queen Bee pheromones. I had to stop after designing a few characters because making a full set of classmates and writing the story arcs did not give me time for schoolwork.

Also I was pretty dissatisfied with episode 8 and 9's fight scenes so had some poorly drawn story outlines of an AU where the Akuma no Riddle mobage characters would try to invade Class Black and kill Haru - as a weak justification for why I wanted to see this pic-related girl fight Isuke in hand-to-hand combat.

I am way too ambitious and my current daydreams are to enter something into a Yuri Game Jam someday but the biggest obstacle is of course, scope creep.
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>>3680458
>some kind of urban fantasy/sci-fi superhero story
>MC's working essentially the state department in charge of tracking more serious and domestic threats in the area
>had plans to slowly reveal MC's faction's magic adjacent since most of the setting's sci-fi/superhero heavy
>Legally married to her sister through story reasons
>her niece/daughter was set to be some prolific black mage
>MC's essentially an elite assassin that's second-in-command for her faction with an undisclosed superpower
>had plans where MC takes over the resident factions through wetwork+manipulations and pseudo revolts
>nothing bad would happen to her wife
It was very self-indulgent and I'm largely glad it never went anywhere
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Anyone doing a yuri terrorism story yet or what?
I would but I lack the drive to do so.
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How would one reasonably get away with a preteen girl viewing her older sister(14 year gap) as a parent while they both have a surviving parent? Like I can imagine a more realistic situation that's reminiscent of Nani and Lilo with the older sibling getting guardianship, but not one where a parent is alive. Unless it's like really informal and kinda uncomfortable for the parent.
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>>3681663
One parent is dead, and the other parent is so struck by grief over the loss that their mental state is deemed unfit to take care of the younger sibling
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>>3681666
That is a definite path, Lilith. I kinda wanted to avoid overbearing grief while keeping most of the angst centered on like the older sister wondering how the hell she became a 'parent'. Why it doesn't really bother her despite it coming from her younger sister, and maybe some angst from the mother regarding self-worth via being a rich widow and her feelings regarding her daughters and whether she's really a mother cause, like, she gets on better with her eldest now that the eldest is an adult than she ever did when eldest was a child/teenage.
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>>3681677
Hmm. I'm struggling to think of other extenuating circumstances that would send a girl to live with her older sister.

What is the relationship between the siblings like? And what about the relationship between the younger girl and the mother?
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>>3681684
Ah I suppose I nip the circumstances thing in the bud: Mother, Eldest sister, and youngest sister all live in the same place. Eldest, arguably, is the least connected and is only staying cause she's doing a degree and its' the cheapest housing around her and she refuses to ask her mom for money.

As for relationships: between the siblings? Good, if you know, weird. Like the youngest grew up for a good while, thinking her older sister was her aunt in some manner. A lot of familial loopholes get brought up since Eldest is basically on top of that shit for the youngest and frequently picks her up from school. Mom's stay-at-home nature of being a rich widow kinda bludgeons any natural sibling bonding that might crop up when she's not around. I'd like to joke that for a solid year or two, she actually thought her mom and sister were a married couple and she was their child. Kind of in that way pre-10 yo kids make assumptions about their family which led to Mom and eldest sitting her down and straightening things out despite the girl being like "Mommy's it's fine if you love aunt ES. My friend has two moms too."

Mother and youngest? Better than it was for Mother and eldest but it's still kind of distanced? Youngest definitely knows her mom is caring and whatnot. Being, largely a preteen, that's kind of really all she expects out of her mom though there's a lot more going on behind the scenes and the mother is more involved in her youngest's life than she was with the Eldest.
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Did that anon making that doom wad die?
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>>3681688
Ohhh, I see. The way you worded it made it seem like the elder sister and the mother were living separately. So back to your original inquiry:

Wouldn't something like that just happen naturally? If the elder sister is doing everything that a parent would normally do for their child, it's only natural that the younger sister would view her older sister in a more parent-like fashion. I guess you want this viewpoint to be more... prominent? If that's the case, then the mother would have to feel like less of a parent.
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>>3681073
Are you well aware of Yaya meme back when you write it?

>>3681260
Akuma no riddle have mobage? That's new. I'm interested on characters you have made. Anything to tell?

>>3681309
Interesting and honestly reminds me of Chuuni yuri I made back in high school.
>very self-indulgent
Does it have writer self-insert?
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>>3681721
Prominent's one way to put it. I suppose the snag in my head is that it's almost entirely from the Eldest's pov. So it sneaks up on her and just blindsides her, along with her Mom being completely nonplussed by the idea of Eldest being the other parent to her sister and the rather direct coupling said sister mentioned, overt or otherwise. I suppose, when looking at it like that, Eldest is kind of cynical and/or has blinders on when it comes to the amount of parenting her mom does in relation to her sister. Along the lines of 'Mom didn't do any of this stuff for me, so why should I expect her to follow through for my sister. I'll have to do it.' type stuff. Cause, you're right, it'd be a natural evolution for how the child would view her little family unit.
Huh, I suppose the keystone of the dilemma really is just Eldest not being aware of how she comes off to her sister and how their little family unit comes off to society. To keep it more board-related, the little sister confusing her mom and eldest sister as a couple does lead to romance but that's tighter plotwise in my head and gets particularly weird.
I was just more concerned over the youngest sister naturally reaching the idea her sister+mom are her birth parents.
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Had this thread ever made anything?
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>>3681746
Yes, hiwo did make very funny and interesting yuri webcomics and post it here too.
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>>3681741
>self-insert
I mean kind of? The MC I originally used for a superhero rp and I just repurposed her but she wasn't a self-insert in a typical manner.
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>>3680458
It was some turbocringe hero/villain couple concept based on OCs I made in City of Heroes. MC was some kind of time-traveling mercenary and LI was her vampire nemesis (who she then saves in the past when LI was a little girl). Thankfully it never went anywhere, why do I even remember this garbage.
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>>3681745
Well then, it seems like you're problem had already been solved? The older sister is already so much older than her little sister too, so that helps with what you're going for.
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>>3681741
>Yaya
No, but now that you mention it, it really fits on a level. It'd be extremely painful though. Since Girl B would be able to feel the positive emotions that girl A feels when she's with her school friend, and she'd have to sit there knowing that there's someone that could potentially become girl A's girlfriend. On the flip side, Girl A would be able to feel the negative emotions that Girl B feels over this, and since girl A deeply cares for her soul linked, she can't really sit right knowing that something is really bothering them.
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>>3681778
Guess so, just needed to explain it out for it to click thanks. Almost tempted to have some little mom pov glimpses though I fear they'd largely focus on the Eldest or angsting over minor things.
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>>3681746
Well, I did write something.
Maybe if I didn't have such short attention span, I could write something longer.
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>>3681934
What?
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>>3681746
YagaKimi room anon made a neato 3D room, and Ghost-exorcist-game anon made an interesting demo.
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What would be a practical way for two cougars to flirt with each other? Both have rather important jobs and largely keep their budding attraction on the downlow since there could be conflicts of interest if they get together.
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>>3683713
Are they single women or do they have families? Do they share a social circle? Are they rich? What are their jobs?
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>>3683717
Single women but they have dedicated but small support networks. I'd say they'd share a social circle since they're essentially a representatives on a city council representing specific facets of the city and then leading said facets/departments when not in a council meeting. Oh they're rich but it's kind of on a scale where most of their money is liquid because of, maybe, personally financing a lot of side projects that need to be done and fuckhead businessmen can't be arsed to take a short-term loss for widespread long-term gain for the city and, consequentially, themselves
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Just like any other women except they have time consuming jobs and lots of money.
Maybe they go to a spa together one night and flirt in the sauna?
Maybe they're spotted giggling together in the back of the conference room during a break in a government meeting?
Thinks don't change that much just because they're older.
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>>3679518
My idea is for a story about a teenager lesbian who didn't realize she was groomed.

Turns out she had a 35 year-old girlfriend when she was 13. And worst, then she discovers her lesbian mothers "offered" her to one of their friends to be her girlfriend, and that's why everything happened
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>>3685258
Is it supposed to be dramatic or erotic?
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>>3685393
Both.

It's kinda silly too, because it implies there's a secret organization of lesbian abusers who help each other to adopt little girls and abuse them
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>>3685621
Yeah, that'd be really funny...absolutely riveting...hehe...
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>>3681073
Against my better judgement, I decided to go back to writing this, from complete scratch. Now, for a little bit of inspiration, I need to ask. How would you write the very first paragraph to something like this?
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>>3686198
Easy.
To establish the shared feelings premise:

If this was a NSFW yuri oneshot:
Girl A is minding her own business when suddenly she clamps her legs together in confusion because her counterpart is out there masturbating somewhere. Bewildered, why does she routinely feels sexual pleasure over nothing?

Serious tone:
Girl has a dream where she wanders around of a darkened version of her room, scattered with some personal belongings that are not her own. She comes across a mirror, only that instead of her own reflection, there stands Girl B.
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Is there a good place to post short written smut? I haven't been posting anything in a while but I want to make a comeback, but don't know where.
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>>3686694
The usual place, A03
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>>3686696
What about original fiction, rather than fanfics?
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>>3686700
AO3 still. They have a section for original works as well.
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>>3686701
Interesting. I never figured out how it works. Is it a tag or something else?
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>>3686705
Yeah it's a fandom tag. Just type in Original Work in that section.
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>>3681741
>Anything to tell?
White-haired sniper twins, but really I was exploring elimination options. Sabotaging each other, temporary alliances, destroying each other's entry papers, making fake entry papers, having the teacher find out so they get disqualified. Instead of the Assassin of the Week format.
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>>3681948
>anon thought it was interesting!
>let's make something smaller to enter Yuri Game Jam
>hours
>only a minute of prologue cutscene made

My goddess. I'm not giving up though. Thinking about cutting animated scenes and using shitty MS paint CGs to churn out a "complete entry" and then refining it from there. Think about a sandwich with a piece of ham and two slices of bread and then adding lettuce and whatever to make it "better.

St. Saintbomber is a fucking miracle.
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>>3687466
>Yuri Game Jam
I have an idea for a game but I suck at having the motivation to write anything. I might make the demo and release it here for /u/ since I'm not going to submit it alongside "a game about two transwomen and their experiences early in transition".
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>>3687468
>submit it alongside
Well that's quite a point. Maybe I'll ignore entering it too since dark humor isn't wholesome. Gonna ignore itchio altogether and Dropbox it or what?
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>>3687515
Why don't we just do a /u/ Jam. Not even games specifically.
Call it the first annual "/u/ Clam Jam", assign some dates, any type of content, and see what we get.
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>>3687770
>/u/ Clam Jam
That's the lamest shit on /u/ so far.
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>>3687468
>I'm not going to submit it alongside "a game about two transwomen and their experiences early in transition"
No, submit your project and drown out this shit by games with actual /u/.
Though I wouldn't object to >>3687770 too
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A monster, vaguely insectoid knight saves a peasant human girl as they uncover a cult threatening to take over a village.
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>>3686328
I didn't follow either of those, but thank you anon.

>Establish shared feelings premise
Is what got me going, writing wise. I sometimes get too caught up in the scene itself, instead of thinking about what I want a particular scene to accomplish. And getting the whole "This is how Soul Links work" thing out of the way was the clear best way to go.
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>>3689469
Oh, and another thing. As a general question about the story. Should I make skill-sharing part of the soul link? They start off speaking different languages (the story doesn't go over this period in their relationship) but I was thinking that part of why girl B learns girl A's language pretty quickly is because of the soul link
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>>3689469
C'mon anon: 1st is about Girl A masturbating and Girl B can feel it and the 2nd is a cliche forshadowing mirror scene.
>>3689471
Just don't write in any contradictions.
>Hey, if they did X earlier, why can't they do Y?
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>>3690626
Fine, fine. I'll throw in a "Hey, are you masturbating?" scene.

Actually, you gave me an even better idea. Girl A feels Girl B's pleasure, but instead of Girl B masturbating, she's having sex with another girl. Girl B tries to hide the fact she was with another girl, but she can't really do so, and girl A puts two and two together
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>>3691137
>I'll throw in
Not saying you have to do it, it's just to address whether or not they share "everything" if your thing is NSFW. Don't know if you want an indulgent smutty piece or something PG-13.
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>>3691370
It's not NSFW, but in terms of things being shared, I wouldn't say shared, but felt might be a better way to describe it. If one has an orgasm, the other would feel that orgasm too. Not a full 1:1 feeling, but they'd definitely know. Pain, fear, anxiety, all shared. However, things that are knowledge and skill based would not be. For example, during said orgasm, the other girl wouldn't know if it was masturbation, or the result of another person performing a sexual act.
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>>3692566
Yes, that's why I suggested the scene if you wanted to introduce this principle, if sex is an element at all.
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>>3691137
>even better idea
Nah. The masturbating scene is better because of naivete, coming of age feeling and it's a more intimate moment between the protagonists. In my humble opinion it would be worse to throw a third wheel like that unless you want the two soul linked girls to not end together.
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even if i write a yuri story, where do I even publish it?
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>>3694509
Well, you can kinda try your luck on Twitter. There's people who work with publishing companies on Twitter that sometimes ask for manuscripts/synopsis/summaries for stories of particular genres.

Now, that's only if you're looking for something more professional. If you're just doing it for fun/hobby, then AO3 and Wattpad are places.
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>>3694509
wanna elaborate on that? >>3694793 largely has the right idea though Wattpad isn't really worth any kind of mention.
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>>3694795
I don't know when the time will come but I got a lot of stories I wanna write and/or draw. But I realize I don't really know where to post them at all.
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I will make a comic set in a fantasy modern setting (Like the tech level is relatively contemporary.) where everyone in this world have their own personal "item of power" that possess a level of sentience. These items' power/s will largely depend on the function of these items, like watches being able to slow or quicken time for someone or a hammer or wrench being able to repair things just by hitting them. Historically, those whose items are outright weapons or can easily be used as weapons became part of the warrior class to something akin to knights or samurai and wielded a lot of power. Reforms have been made to better account for their influence and disparity of power between other people in recent day, to the point where they started accepting people whose power items are not traditionally seen as weapons into academies for teaching new members of this class. The main character, a young adoloscent girl, would be one such person enrolling in an academy. A uppity upperclasswoman will begin a mostly one sided riviary with her due to a petty intial incident between them but they'll gradually become friendlier and eventually start a romantic relationship.
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>>3695319
I'd read it.
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Tell me what y'all think.

>Isekai where Mc gets put into OG! Villainess body
>Villainess spirit is still there and MC helps her grow as a person (find hobbies she likes, setting boundaries, getting the fuck away from abusive family, etc.)
>MC and Villainess don't have any romance together but MC helps Villainess express herself to a fellow lady that she's had a crush on but has been stopping herself from doing anything due to expectations from society and shit.
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>>3695373
Not a fan of the otome/villainess version of isekai, but being isekai'd into someone else's body as a voice is an interesting concept.
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>>3695319
A good idea would be to make these items of power be a recent concept introduced into your universe, otherwise having such thing since prehistory would shape the world into something unrecognizable to us by the time this story takes place.
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>>3695421
You're correct. I'm still tinkering with this idea, so I may go the extra mile, or do a compromise where such a thing wasn't very recent or prehistoric. Perhaps in the middle of their industrial revolution maybe.
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>>3695421
I don't disagree, but also this is true of all fantasy universes ever made. None of them should be so close in structure and development to real history, because any sort of magic or other fantastical element fundamental to the world would wildly change the development of their peoples.
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>>3695373
I'd read it. I'm a sucker for villainness stuff.
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>>3695319
The items of power somewhat similar to what I'm currently working on. Except that there's only 8 special magical weapons, one for each type of magic that can only be wielded by someone who has complete and full mastery of said type of magic. Otherwise, the weapons magical energy will overpower them and likely kill them.

The story is different though. A young prodigal magician takes a noble girl of the same age under her tutelage at the request, or rather, begging of her older sister, who happens to be one of the wielders of said magical weapons. The two don't get off to the greatest of starts, as the noble girl doesn't want to learn magic despite her status as a natural, and doesn't take well to the MC's teachings. However, the noble girl starts falling for MC after a series of events in which MC shows off magics potential.
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Anons, this is a tale of two stories: one is about an alchemy academy for young ladies with magic, midnight feasts, and a touch of political intrigue; the other is a cyberpunk neo-noir set in a dystopian city where everything happens at night, and on motorcycles. One promises cute uniforms and love spells gone awry, the other offers hot girls on bikes and accidental incest.

I've drawn the main character concepts for both stories, but I need to draw the rest of the cast including the primary love interests, and I just can't decide which premise is more deserving of my time and energy right now. What would you prefer to see out of the two of these?
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>>3697679
The first one. I'm completely over anything cyberpunk.
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>Sort AO3 by most hits in Original Work
>The first few pages is almost exclusively porn
Looks like I'm adding NSFW scenes to my yuri.
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>>3697692
My most popular fic is the one with rape and sex in it. Fucking degenerates.
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>>3697682
This, but also incest.
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>>3697679
Do both, magic cyberpunk like Shadowrun. A classic would be a cute alchemist falling for a bad girl biker chick or viceversa. Maybe multiple couples.
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>>3697715
Is it lesbian rape? If yes hook me up sis
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>>3697692
My most popular ones are tooth-rotting fluff. I honestly thought it was more popular, or at the very least it generates more discussion than the smut I've written.
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>>3697995
>Tooth-rotting fluff
Link me?
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I want to write some heartfelt teacher-student romance with no rape now that I'm in a better mood but I want to also spice it up with something and I'm not sure what.
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>>3698523
One has a secret the other finds out. i.e. the student is actually an X and the teacher is the only person who knows. X being whatever interests you: magical girl, alien, youkai, time traveler, android, idol, vampire, succubus, angel, yakuza ojou-chan, vigilante, eldritch abomination, etc.; the teacher is an otaku and the student is a gyaru who finds out and uses blackmail as a pretense to get close to her.

Something like that.
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>>3698446
https://archiveofourown.org/works/30190119
https://archiveofourown.org/works/30664706
https://archiveofourown.org/works/27472489
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I’ve read all the translated sayohina stuff that I can, so I wanna learn how to draw so I can make more of it.

I’ve also began to write fanfics
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>>3698587
Good luck. SayoHina is one of the best pairings.
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>>3698640
I got inspired after reading some sayohina doujin on dynasty and I realized that even if the art is only mediocre and not even good nobody cares as long as story good and this world needs more good sister x sister content.
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>>3697980
Well, okay. It's a Danganronpa fanfic, so beware of spoilers if you've never played that game. It's also unfinished and I have no motivation to continue it but I think were I left it could be considered an open ending, so I don't think it's too bad.

https://archiveofourown.org/works/31724833/chapters/78522187
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>>3698675
Well a lot went over my head because I don't know the source material but overall was good. Thanks for sharing.
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I made my own Clash of Clans clan with accounts named after RWBY ships... Yes, I know...
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i wanna do something with a ginger and a black girl
with all the redhead characters getting blackwished in media, i feel like a good way to counter this is having a cut yuri couple of the 2 types
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>>3699756
Set it in Victorian London between Irish and Caribbean maidservants.
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>>3699922
>Irish
You're thinking of Scottish
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>>3699927
I figured they should bond over facing racism, so I suggested Irish. I think Scottish girl could be a mistress but that seems like it's been overdone.
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>>3699922
At that point you might as well just set it in the Caribbean. I'd read colonial yuri.
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>>3700010
Yeah, this actually sounds great. I wish I knew anything about colonial life.
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>>3699945
Give them guns.
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Today I have discovered that I enjoy seeing character discovering other characters in illicit relationship and have a conversation about it. What I saw is offtopic here (being brother-sister incest instead), but idea is solid for yuri too. Anyone doing anything like this?
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>>3701356
The closest to this is one character hiding another character who's an enemy combatant of the state. My couples generally are more or less accepected as they are, at the very least with society being merely indifferent towards them.
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>>3701356
I have a sister flirting with her older sister, sharing a bed (in a chaste way), hugging, etc. To everyone else it looks like an overtly protective big sister and her clingy little sister, and the way I wrote the little sister she doesn't think of her relationship as romantic.

I'm not sure how far I want to take this. Does it feel lowbrow/trashy if the sisters end up in a relationship?
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Lets get some discussion.

What are you working on? What inspired the idea? What troubles, if any, are you having with your project?
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>>3702986
>What are you working on?
See >>3697141

>What inspired the idea?
I couldn't tell you. This story I'm writing has taken many different forms. Believe it or not, it originally started as something about a few of gods chosen angels that live a double life in human society.

>What troubles, if any, are you having with your project?
Just how I want the romance to develop. There's a lot of fantasy elements, but it's still a romance story at it's core. But the way I have it now is that it's a one-sided love because the MC is mostly focused on her goal of finding Sir Don Khan Van's Searing Signet. While she does notice a shift in the noble girls' behavior, she doesn't think much of it.

Another thing I'm struggling with is a plot point at the very start of the story. I need a way for the MC to feel compelled to return to her hometown, where her sister, and the noble girl live.
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>>3703074
>I need a way for the MC to feel compelled to return to her hometown
It burned down, or was attacked by the Demon Lord's army.
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> I need a way for the MC to feel compelled to return to her hometown, where her sister, and the noble girl live.
Quite simple: a letter, either from her sister or her mother. If from the sis, she just wants to see her (it's a trap, she already has planned to ask mc to tutor the noble), if from her mother, she might have something important to tell her (meybe about her quest).
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>>3703075
While I'm open to all ideas, I don't think that's going to fit with what I already have.

>>3703080
>If from the sis, she just wants to see her (it's a trap, she already has planned to ask mc to tutor the noble), if from her mother, she might have something important to tell her (meybe about her quest).
A letter is actually a good shout. I was about to take the copout route and just have MC return to the village out of homesickness, but at least with a letter, MC's sister can ask MC to take a break from her travels and come back home. To see her, their mother, and there's someone that "wants" to see her. Maybe with a picture attached of the tutee.

With MC haven't been back home since she left, her journey being fruitless in terms of her main objecting, and the curiosity piqued by the picture of her soon to be protégé, she can easily decide to see what's going on. It'd feel much more organic, I think.
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I started trying to put a story together that's supposed to be kinda like "runaway tragic lesbians who make bad decisions" and then it ends up working out.

Like a guy dies and they're on the run, except he died in a way neither of them are legally responsible for and they're just idiots.
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>>3702986
I had this big story I wanted to write for 2 years and I just feel stressed writing it. I always change my mind on what I wanna do in terms of the tone, how the plot goes, and what I want the characters to do. I'm afraid it's ultimately going to be bad and no one will read it.
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>>3703375
>I'm afraid it's ultimately going to be bad and no one will read it.
Not writing it is even worse and no one can read it if it doesn't exist. So you might as well write it and if it's terrible you can ask why and go about fixing it.
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>>3703375
>I'm afraid it's ultimately going to be bad and no one will read it
Just write it for yourself. It doesn't have to be for anyone, just putting your ideas down in writing and leaving it somewhere should be enough motivation. As long as you enjoy the process, you'll get better at it.

> I always change my mind on what I wanna do in terms of the tone, how the plot goes, and what I want the characters to do
Then start with something that's just a really simple idea. For example, two girls repeatedly having random encounters with each other. It doesn't need a plot because each chapter can be it's own standalone, and the setting handles both the tone and what they're doing. It's also open enough that you take it in any direction you want, whenever you want to.
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I actually liked Demon Master Chris. The idea of dominating or being dominated by girls was a fun, if a bit poorly executed here and there.

I made a few simple games before and I would like to try to make a yuri eroge rpg. My problem is that I have no idea what people want, or what turns people off.
I don't mind a little bondage but dislike seeing it leaving marks.
I read people liking futanari, something I know is a turn off for others (me included).
and many more examples like: monsters, hypnosis, incest, etc

Some things, like for example futanari, can be made optional. But doing that for everything is too much work.
What would be a good set of guidlines? Are there some usefull articles written about this?
I tried poling, but this didn't work. Anon polls attract trolls and asking people directly is also difficult because I'm sure as hell not going to tell anyone what kind of degenarate stuff I like.
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>>3703436
Just do what you want and you'll just naturally find your audience.
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>>3703436
Don't write what you don't like.

Let your own preferences shine bright in your work, without worrying about what's "popular".
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>>3703436
Doing what you want is a good advice. Maybe when you are famous enough you can make someone pay you to do what they want instead.

I think in terms of niche appeal that is better off segregated, appearance is the biggest dealbreaker, that includes futa and furry variations, followed by different mundane behaviour (Like mixing sexual violence with no sexual violence) or turning them into mindless fuck dolls or something. Things like incest are probably easiest to ignore, it's fiction anyway and when two cute girls are scissoring, it doesn't matter so much that you declared them sisters in previous scene.
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>>3704793
Thank you, this is a good guideline to keep in mind.

>>3703570
>>3703822
I will also keep this in mind, it would make it more difficult if I had to work on something I hated.
I just want more people making yuri games. If people go: "oh that was fun, but I can do [insert part] better" I would be very happy.
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I'm in a bit of a trouble with a yuri love triangle.

Let's say the protagonist and other girl always had a crush on each other, and they were in that weird passive place where none of two made the first step into becoming actual girlfriends even thought they acted like it for the longest time.

So, the whole thing gets ruined because the protagonist hears a conversation between her almost-girlfriend and her male best friend, where she finds out they dated on the past, and the almost-girlfriend keeps loving him but only as a friend. That won't necessarily have to be bad but the MC is insecure as fuck and falls into depression because her "almost-girlfriend" never told her the words "I love you".

So, this is where the other girl enters the triangle. She is kinda of a tomboy, but of music, and she always had a crush on the protagonist but the poor girl never has been able to confess because the knows the MC loves other woman, but know because the protagonist is depressed she takes her chance and actually becomes her girlfriend.

How would you girls handle the situation? Because in my mind the obviusly path is for the mc to realize her almost-girlfriend loving another person as you could love a parent isn't a bad thing, but at the same time, she probably won't want to hurt her now tomboy girlfriend.
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I bought RPG Maker on sale but I'm still not going to ever write anything, am I. Coming up with interesting stuff is really hard, isn't it.
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>>3706280
Start with something you'd want to read, not what you think someone would want to read. Unless you're trying to make money off your project
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>>3706141
>So, the whole thing gets ruined because the protagonist hears a conversation between her almost-girlfriend and her male best friend, where she finds out they dated on the past

Stopped reading there.
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>>3706141
>Let's say the protagonist and other girl always had a crush on each other,
>the protagonist hears a conversation between her almost-girlfriend and her male best friend, where she finds out they dated on the past, and the almost-girlfriend keeps loving him but only as a friend.
Hate this shit, fuck you. Either make the girl who dated a guy in the past someone who never thought they liked a girl or don't pretend they always liked each other.
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>>3706141
>Always had a crush on each other
>Dated a guy

Yeah, don't do this. Don't do this.
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>>3706326
>>3706336

>pretend they always liked each other.

Well they like each other since they know each other, which is after one of them dated a guy, but I understand the sentiment
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>>3706280
Can you even make anything other than archaic pixel trash with that?
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>>3706280
You just bought RPG maker?
Would this be your first game?

If both answers are yes, you should probably try to make something that works. Try out some random dialog and mess around with the models and tiles. Then you can try and make a simple scene. It's harder then it looks to make a fun game, better make sure it's fun to make games.

>>3706281
This advice is also pretty good, just make what you want. Like any art, it's about the journey. Some people would be willing to help with coming up with things, but you should probably know what sort of game you would like to make first.

>>3706350
Actually you can make some cool looking stuff, most just don't put in the effort to get there. If you use the assets right out of the box without changing much, then yeah it will look just like every other shitty rpg maker game.

"After I met that catgirl, my questlist got too long!" is made with rpg maker and it's a fun simple game. It still uses some default assets, but they made combat fun.
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>>3706364
Yeah, RPG Maker is where the Lisa games were made, obviously not /u/ but it's pretty cool

VX Ace has a ton of scripts that can streamline the dev process and let you do really amazing shit.
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>>3706338
I mean, it's not only that, but the whole relationship between the other girl and the male is just weird to see in a story like this. From what you described, it just sounds like they had no reason to even break up in the first place.
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I want to write something about a juvenile delinquent that falls in love with the student council president that tries to rehabilitate her but I'm not sure if I want to to set it in Japan or America. Japan seems like an obvious choice for the yuri vibes but, being an original work, I'm not sure if I could put in enough pop culture references to make it seem like the characters really live there. I went to an American high school so I'm more familiar with how they work but it never held any gay vibes for me, it was just a boring and miserable experience and I want to write something that's at least moderately happy.
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>>3706464
You could just make an original universe. The setting for the book I'm never going to write takes place a few thousand years in the future in a post post apocalypse after civilization was rebuilt on another planet. The schools in that world are based off of what little information people have about what ancient humanity did that they could glean from sifting through the ruins.
That way I have enough creative freedom to do what I please, but I can still take from real life whenever I need to.
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>>3706464
Chances are the student council president is more in love than the delinquent. "I can fix her" is a real thing.
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>>3706492
Mars colony it is then.
>>3706494
Yeah, that's exactly what I was thinking too. The delinquent starts off helping the prez clean up the school, then they study together, then she confesses and the prez is like, "I had my eye on you since the start of the year, that's why I tasered you when you were bullying that other girl" sort of thing.
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>>3706464
I mean, it sounds like you went to one High School here, and said high school didn't have a lesbian couple.

But disregarding that, you can have your idea take place legit anywhere. Whether you know something about the place or not isn't important. Since it's a high school story, being culturally accurate only takes like a 5 minute google search.
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>>3706464
>juvenile delinquent that falls in love with the student council president that tries to rehabilitate her

>Tfw I was already doing something somewhat similar
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hello /u/
give me your lewdest prompt for a mother-daughter fic
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>>3706645
Daughter seduces Mother A and fucks her.
Mother A feels terrible for cheating on her wife with their daughter but can't help it.
Daughter also seduces Mother B.
Mother B feels the same as A.
They eventually find out what's happening and have a threesome.
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>>3706645
While out walking at the park on a nice weather day the daughter asks to hold hands with Mother A. Unsurprisingly, Mother B gets jealous and she holds the other hand of her daughter, and next thing you know, all three of them are doing that in the public park.
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>>3706645
Daughter is a virgin who really wants to have her first time. Mother works a normal job by day and is a prostitute at night to make ends meet.
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>>3706645
Mother's something of a no-nonsense executive type who's daughter is something of a bimbo hbic. Openly mentions plans of wanting to marry a rich older woman despite going to uni and getting into a good sorority. Things begin to take a turn for the weird as the bimbo's partying takes a subdued level and the daughter begins to spend more time with her mom doing various activities. Activities that can be read as dates but the mother passes off as mother-daughter bonding, despite how handsy and affectionate her daughter has gotten.
Things come to a head when daughter invites her mom to some gala the uni's hosting under the guise of being her daughter's date. A fact that doesn't register in the mother's mind until they're already at the gala and now the mom has to play the part of her daughter's sugar mommy girlfriend all the while she slowly realizes her daughter has been trying to seduce her. Little late night confession, after the gala, where the bimbo comes clean about wanting to be her mommy's trophy wife.
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>>3707233
Man asked for a prompt, not a synopsis
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Is that anon who shared his drawings for a comic he was planning still around?
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>>3707532
Pic related was one of the drawings in question
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>>3707532
Yeah, I'm lurking. What's up?
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Well, I'm writing something, and I'm interested in adding images to it. I can't draw for shit, and I felt like your artstyle would fit what I'm going for even though what you were working on and what I'm writing are probably very different and I was wondering if you might be interested. Obviously, I'd be paying you, and the images wouldn't be anything too serious. Something like pic related.
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>>3707639
Is it going to be a regular book, or a web novel, or something else? How many illustrations would there be in total? Full color or BW? What's your budget?
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Is anyone actually working on stuff or is this just ideas general?
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>>3707854
Yeah, I just don't post my stuff here. And I'm really slow with my writing, because I'm bad with stuff that goes inbetween dialogue
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>>3707854
People work on stuff. It's just a pretty small board and progress can be slow if the project isn't a big priority for the person (or even if it is). I know I personally never have anything to post because I keep working on things only to later decide the idea isn't great and move on to something else.
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What is love? Can there ever be too much love? Can love ever be wrong? The first video of a new audio series looks at this, featuring a diary entry of the younger sister of the main character in an anime series I've been working on. The extensive backstories of the characters have taken a life of their own and I wish to share them as well. Please check out what I hope to be the first of many looks into the minds of my characters, and stories that take place outside the episodes. I present: "Darlene's Diaries of Debauchery - March 24th Entry".
Link: https://youtu.be/ro_ZG6_bpR8
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>>3707854
I did things before, though currently I do a thing that is offtopic for this board.
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>>3707854
I test my ideas here, but always get barely any (you)s so I give up on them and start something else. One day, I will create a personal project that excites /u/. But today is not that day
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Here's a dark fantasy porn (very) short story that I wrote at 2am in some kind of trance state while I was meant to be doing coursework. I have never written a sex scene before and I have no idea if this is any good. Enjoy (or don't).

https://pastebin.com/fSJFMvXU
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I desperately want to make a therapist/patient twisted romance webcomic, but i know i'll get cancelled and my life will be ruined because the losers on twitter hate kink and fantasy
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>>3708265
You are stupid.
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>>3708265
You’ll get a pass or praise solely by virtue of it being gay though
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>>3708221
Your writing fundamentals are sound but I didn't find it to be very erotic. The whole thing with the mask made me think of a female Bane fucking a forest hippie.
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Two single mothers realize they are gay for each other and gets married. Their daughters get jealous about their mothers paying attention to someone else and try to steal their respective stepmothers.
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>>3707854
See >>3707860

>because I'm bad with stuff that goes inbetween dialogue

Basically that, I think? But to clarify, I feel like I suck at the technical aspect of writing. I feel like my writing reads stiffly and when I feel like that, I begin to procrastinate instead of doing something to try and fix how I think it reads
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>>3707854
Once in a blue moon I cryptically mention something here that I will release in the next year or so, but I maintain plausible deniability and most people forget I even post here.

After releasing two yuri games in a row, though, my current project has both male and female marriage options.
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>>3708280
From some people. Others will come down on it harder because it's gay and how dare you be gay and problematic.
>>3708265
As long as you have a thick enough skin not to get upset at people telling you to kill yourself and the sense to pick a webhost that isn't going to kick you off for a few threats, go for it. You'll get some complaints, you'll get some fans. Hell, write filthy fucking smut on AO3 if you want, they will absolutely back you up even if what you want to write is therapists hypnotising lolis into becoming sex slaves.
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>>3708785
Traitor.
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>>3708785
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=nF_Ca45JRFs
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>>3708265
I feel like that's the kind of thing that'd be popular smut anyway.
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>>3708796
if people would buy more of the pure yuri stuff so i could afford to make more...
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>>3703295
I started writing this and then it started getting way more serious than I wanted it to lol

Like it's supposed to be kinda smutty fun in a dark comedy kinda way but then I started it like "wait what if they're actually messed up?"

Which on one hand is cathartic to write about, but it probably gets in the way of the smutty fun part.
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has anyone made a yuri game on godot?
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You're a lonely lesbian who plays bishoujo games for the hot chicks. The latest game you played, you despise the male protagonist even more than usual and resent him ruining the girls. Naturally you get isekai'ed into the game, but as a random background schoolgirl. You now take it upon yourself to use your knowledge of the plot to stop the male protagonist from scoring points with any love interest so you can keep them for yourself.

Is this better or worse if it's one of those all-girl-school crossdressing-MC games, which might imply all the girls are at least a bit gay anyway since they would fall for the disguised boy in-game before finding out he's a boy?

if so, is it better if there's a twist where it turns out the "MC" really IS a girl in your isekai world, which you eventually discover and she becomes a romance option, or if he's still a crossdressing boy that you can expose and beat up?
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>>3708972
I just don't want to deal with males at all.
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>>3708972
The boy was always a crossdressing girl and the mc just didn't get that when playing because "can't be bothered with reading the male bio".
Once mc finds out you can
> romance her
> compete for the harem
> team up and be each other wingwoman
Also don't forget to add the milf romance
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>It's not an all girls setting, romance might not even be the main focus, but somehow all the girls in the cast are gay
Do you have you provide an explanation when that happens?
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>>3709163
No. In fact you shouldn't.
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>>3709163
You don't need one, just write what you want and don't add some token heteros either, your readers will notice them and dislike them just like what happens when a author makes a token character for the sake of some "realism"
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>>3709163
It would come as fetishistic whenever you provide a reason or not, so you might as well not do so.
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>>3709163
I don't see why you should, no need to be self concious about it, just do it
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>>3709163
Microplastics in the water.
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>>3709163
If it's a group of friends it's not even weird if they all happen to be gay, sometimes people cluster
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Is it bad to say I hate straight ships? I found most of them pretty misogynistic.

I forced myself to write straight couples for so long because I was scared of make every women character gay, but I found myself unhappy. Now 90% of my cast are gay girls, and there's some male characters, but they are better than before cause on this time I'm not forcing myself to write them.
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>>3709177
>your readers will notice them and dislike them just like what happens when a author makes a token character for the sake of some "realism"
That's a pretty sensible way to put it. Thanks, sisters, I wasn't planning to address it but had something that might sound like an excuse.
>>3709350
More like nation, solar system, galaxies, etc.
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>>3709640
Pretty sure you can find every /u/ poster here hating every straight pairing. Literally, who cares just make everyone gay.
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>>3709728
Yeah, but I feel like most people hate straight ships just because they are on the way of the yuri ones.

I hate straight ships because they genuinely make me uncomfortable.
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>>3709730
I'm in the same boat as you, I think the way men treat women or most hetero relationships treat women like shit and ultimately doesn't actually work due to gender differences and other various reasons.
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>>3709728
I did this. Lol. Mostly. Some are bi. Even the femboy who is in love with his male bodyguard, but kinda flirts with the flat-chested MC when they first meet. Most of the other females have a crush on the MC as well (even her younger sister...), which frustrates her as she's in denial. It wasn't intentional. It just kinda happened as I wrote the scripts. C'est la vie!
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>>3709728
Why is /u/ like this? I prefer yuri romance, but it's not like I hate men or anything. It's just makes it seem like people got into /u/ only because they were somehow betrayed/traumatized by men, or have some such retarded comic villain backstory, instead of simply appreciating girls' love for what it is.
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>>3709841
>noooo you can't have taste
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>>3709737
Did your dad beat your mom or something?
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>>3709841
Not those anons nut it is not hate, it is just that after reading too much yuri you become aware of all the stupid tropes of het romance, romance that most of the time is too onesided to one side or the other depending on the marketed demographic, shoujo idealizes.their male.characters for the sake of the female MC and shonen/seinen idealizes their submissive female characters for the male MC sake, in yuri this is hard to find, even in those old one-shots inspired by Marimite you can see that most likely both woman are real characters and not just idealized versions for the sake of one of them.
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>>3709841
>>3709888
I don't hate all men, but the boys I do like don't treat women as sexual objects.
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>>3709841
Only a few loud and annoying Anons, mind you, and I suspect they're self-loathing users of a certain four letter board that ends with "t" (and not /bant/).
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>>3709888
>Anons thinks the only form of abuse in straight relationship is physical violence
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>>3709841
Nee-san, I don't hate men, and I enjoy reading an angsty taboo /u/ relationship in a het world too, but sometimes it's refreshing to just have a world full of cute girls and no stress about it everybody's just gay.

_Someone_ hates every ship in existence, straight or gay. I know I can find One True Pairing really tiresome when a show entirely revolves around forcing its perfect couple together and that's true sometimes even with a yuri couple.

I watched a show recently where I feel like the writers backed themselves into a corner because the main lesbian ship was a disaster in which one character did completely unforgivable things, but it's the show's main ship and most of the fans are 1000% watching just for them and they can't break this couple up or the writers will be murdered, so never mind you're instantly forgiven no problem.

I'm not sure I've ever yet seen a story that starts with someone being pushed into the 'expected' /u/ match and then slowly realises actually some other girl is a better match for her and jumps ship.
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>>3710028
Catra did nothing wrong, fuck you.
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>>3710028
>I watched a show recently where I feel like the writers backed themselves into a corner because the main lesbian ship was a disaster in which one character did completely unforgivable things, but it's the show's main ship and most of the fans are 1000% watching just for them and they can't break this couple up or the writers will be murdered, so never mind you're instantly forgiven no problem.

Woman character do bad stuff and gets forgiven = unforgivable she is the true eviiiiil bad writting reeee

Male character do bad stuff and gets forgiven = Lol he is so badass he got away with it
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>>3710029
Wrong guess, Catra is way more sympathetic than the character I'm thinking of.
>>3710031
my point was that i get annoyed at artificial one-true-couple regardless of it being a man or a woman?

i don't blame the fans for forgiving her because they want their hot headline couple back that they've already written a million AUs about. I just personally don't like the way it was handled.
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>>3710045
Have considered you have shit taste, sister? Or it just simply your inner misogyny showing.
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>>3710063
Y’know lesbians can have toxic relationships too and romanticising that shit isn’t necessarily a net good?
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>>3710028
There’s a handful of love rival manga which have this premise, but it is relatively rare.
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>>3710065
How is Catradora toxic? Stop repeating /co/nonsense for a moment and give me an argument.

I would say it's toxic if it was from season 1 to 4, but after Catra changed? No.
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>>3710071
Nta, never said I was talking about Catradora (I’ve only seen the first episode) and that anon already made it clear their first post wasn’t about Catradora either.
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>>3710075
It's pure misogyny anyways
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>>3710076
Acknowledging that lesbians can have toxic relationships is misogynistic?
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>>3710095
No, but saying a woman character can't achieve redemption it is because that would be bad writting it is
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>>3710099
Only you ever said that.
And there's only one t in writing.
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>>3708342
I appreciate the feedback, that's pretty much the reaction I was expecting. Not entirely sure how to inject more eroticism into my writing, but it's good to have a direction to head towards.
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>>3710110
How do you tease? Cause, from reading whole a lotta porn, there's two ways to tackle it. Depending entirely on if you wanna do just regular fucking or more kink stuff. Regular sex is really about build up, teasing, and the like where it helps to metaphorically edge into the sex where as kink stuff can be more...literal in description since it's kink.
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>>3710099
How often does male villain just gets redeemed and not killed soon after for convenience?
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>>3710142
Not that anon but that is probably the worst part of Regaliaand the worst Pretty Cure seasons.
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>>3710146
Thank goodess for Healin' Good.
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>>3710110
>Not entirely sure how to inject more eroticism into my writing
You can start by including all fives senses in your descriptions instead of just what things look and feel like. I found https://archiveofourown.org/works/955716 to be a handy guide to improving my own smut. It also didn't help that your characters have about as much chemistry together as two blocks of wood. Characters in an original work can still have chemistry together with well-written and engrossing dialogue and backstories. I read a really good original smut story the other day where a girl tied up and fucked her homophobic stepsister in the ass with a strapon and it really nailed the chemistry through the dialogue and how good it felt the MC to stick it in her stepsister's pooper and then kick her out of her apartment.
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>>3710605
>it really nailed the chemistry through the dialogue and how good it felt the MC to stick it in her stepsister's pooper and then kick her out of her apartment.
I don't know why, but this sentence made lose hard
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>>3702986
>What are you working on?
Some RPG maker thing where you get to flirt with girls and solve some fake mystery. I have to finish something even if it's lousy.
>What inspired the idea?
The fact that it's been five years and I still haven't submitted anything to YuriJam. Other inspirations include the otome game genre, Hotel Dusk, and some other franchises that would spoil the fun.
>What troubles, if any, are you having with your project?
I don't have very much free time and I'm gonna need a lot for the interactive bits. Hoping to dropbox the prologue soon with the general idea and "gameplay".
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I had this idea of a MC being arranged by her old-fashioned parents to marry another girl. Is such an idea already exist in any medium?
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>>3711093
*Does such an idea
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>>3711093
>>3711097
Probably not, since "old-fashioned" and girl/girl marriage doesn't sound like they go hand in hand. And the usual spin on that story is that the arranged marriage is to a male, and the MC runs away with the girl she loves
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>>3711093
>>3711099
If examples exist, they're very much against arranged marriage as a concept than the lover being a girl. A twist more suitable for >>3711093's needs might be already be a trope. Namely; MC plans on meeting with a childhood friend they haven't seen in ten plus years because they're back in town for business or some such when the news of MC having an arranged suitor causes shenanigans to happen. MC goes about trying to get out of it despite never meeting her suitor and her parents give something of an ultimatum about 'you can decide whether to break it after you've met each other and had a date' which is rough cause meeting her friend has awakened long buried feelings.
The day of the date+meeting arrives and surprise: her mysterious suitor is her childhood friend
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>>3711093
Itou Hachi's non-oneeloli series is based on that premise, though that's mostly just the intro point.
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>>3711093
How about arranging marriage with someone who heroine's parents think is a man?
Like take some classic "pass trials, marry the princess" tale, but princess is a lesbian and the knight who passes the trials is her girlfriend in disguise.
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Does gynecologist yuri exist?
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>>3711093
you can have arranged marriages for all sort of reasons but 'old fashioned' is hard to combine with 'lesbian'. extremely weird old-fashioned parents could try to give you to the emperor's harem despite the emperor being female ("She still needs a harem, right?") or you could use some of the other standard reasons for quick forced marriage (usually to claim an inheritance)
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>>3711371
I legitimately cannot think of a single one involving a gynecologist.
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>>3711093
If you want to make it in modern times it can be something like a forced "acquisition" between two families thay only have daughters, because money is more important than old values or something like that, or because the big boss said that and nobody dared to oppose them.
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Being old-fashioned doesn't mean you cannot accept times have changed in any fashion. You can be old fashioned enough to be concerned about your heir being unmarried and still accept their 'peculiar modern romances'.
Imagine two classic super old stoic Japanese heads of family who are way past their feuding days, sit down at the same sake table, and just straight out say:
>X-san, we have feuded well these past decades, but the years of our blooming have waned and the petals fall swiftly from the trees. We must not let blood be further spilled into this new era.
>Y-san, you old bastard, long have I held the deepest ire for you and your family when our paths have crossed. Let this end today.
>A beautiful young grand-daughter, born of my own daughter - my Nadeshiko. She cares not for the men I send her way, and instead hides her pretty face between the pages of manga with only feminine appeal. Her room is adorned from floor to ceiling in 'mahou shoujo' posters of which she talks with such passion. And your Madoka?
>Ah, Madoka, a strong heart, she, and beauty as well. She is the most loved of all students at her girl's school and would be suited for my family business long after I pass... were she not adamant about working at the aquarium after graduation. Her young friends tell of a talent for "shellfish alignment'.
>Hmm... (sips sake) Let it be done by the next sakura bloom, before we have all but withered away.
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>>3711322
>Itou Hachi's non-oneeloli
The betrayal, the deception!
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>>3702986
>What are you working on?
A VN where a female military officer in a relationship with a nice girl who seems to have it made re-encounters her past and is forced to reconnect with her childhood friend from another country she deliberately blocked from her mind out of past tragedy, yet in the era she lives in she knows she might have to invade her childhood friend's homeland.
>What inspired the idea?
My favorite science fiction and mecha anime and real life
>What troubles, if any, are you having with your project?
Editing it so it passes my high standards. I want the emotional notes to hit the reader like they hit me.
>>3709163
My VN is a dramatic military science fiction story, but I hoped my readers would understand it's all pure chance. Although there's some scenes centered on male characters and one hinted het romance (to make the MC's rival more human). I want a well-written het romance or two in the background to complement the girl-girl relationships.
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>>3711810
>military officer in a relationship with a nice girl who seems to have it made re-encounters her past and is forced to reconnect with her childhood friend from another country she deliberately blocked from her mind out of past tragedy, yet in the era she lives in she knows she might have to invade her childhood friend's homeland.
I'm having a real hard time deciphering this sentence
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>>3711830
Sorry
>MC forced to leave her childhood friend and homeland behind
>meets and falls in love with local girl in new country
>joins military of other country
>an era of international tension
>childhood friend from homeland reappears in her life
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>>3711936
Could be cool. Makes me think of Chrome Shelled Regios, which had a bit similar plotline
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I liked Caged Bird, an arranged marriage KotoUmi fanfic. The story was decent, the writing... well, if you want to die of alcohol-poisoning after two chapters, take a shot everytime you read taupe-haired/etc. But if you just like to read about characters you like being gay in a historical AU it's good.
>>3711499
I'd read it.
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>>3712006
Is the fanfic thread dead?
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>>3712163
Well, I think that anon was just linking to a fic that has a similar concept.
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>>3711973
I've never read/watched that one, although I've mentioned here that one day I was thinking of what I'd written and noticed that it could be summed up as "gender-swapped Gundam Seed."
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>>3711371
Is Maker's Mark that good?
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How toxic is a toxic lesbian relationship? And how good a toxic relationship can be?

Two of my ocs are almost married, but they relationship is having a rough time, because the queen wants to break up with her girlfriend (in a nutshell, the difference of opinion in royal matters is causing them struggle) but her girlfriend doesn't want to break up, instead she beats the living shit out her using her magical powers complaining the queen never lets her take a matter in the choices for the kingdom.

It's a very co-dependent relationship, as none can be apart for the other for so much time
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>>3712454
That sounds incredibly stupid. I hope you mean some sort of magical fight between the two? There's other problems but..what the F.
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>>3712454
Wouldn't she be drawn and quartered for attempted regicide?
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>>3712454
>How toxic is a toxic lesbian relationship? And how good a toxic relationship can be?
Read Kitanai. Ignore the ending.
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>>3712454
Realize it's fiction and then look at it from a perspective about fitting the plot and if it's good for the plot. Also maybe rework the foundation if you immediately go for domestic violence like some kind of edgy teen.
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>>3712498
I mean, edgy violence and rape is one reason people want to read toxic relationship stories, to purge that sort of emotion
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>>3712487
Not really. No one sees them fighting, and the girlfriend doesn't even hit her really hard. And most importantly, the queen doesn't really care about being beaten up
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>>3712524
>beats the living shit out her
>doesn't even hit her really hard
Choose one?
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>>3712454
This is something I'm thinking about too but probably not in the same wavelength.

The thing I want to write is sort of "performatively" messed up, like the two reunited childhood friends involved make it sound weirder to make it more exciting where the protagonist all but kidnaps her friend out of the shitty small town she never got to leave, and they play it up like a gothic dom/sub romance that ends up giving the protagonist's friend a chance to heal and confront her own mental instability and trauma until the focus shifts to the protagonist's own sordid history where, in the past, she was a domestic abuser because of control issues born from a traumatic incident and she's viscerally regretful of it.
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i wanna make a footfag yuri story but it feels like i gotta draw to depict what i actually wanna make. anyone feel the same? that you cant do some stories because you're incapable of drawing?
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>>3712757
If you want to write it you just gotta write what it's like.

Write what it makes you feel instead of just the visual.
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>Usually procrastinate writing, can only manage a pathetic 50 words per day
>Today just in a groove, almost doubling current chapters word count

I'm just happy right now. The beginning of a story is always the hardest for me, I feel like it'll get easier from here on out.
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>>3713491
Good job, anon. Proud of you.
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>>3712006
>well, if you want to die of alcohol-poisoning after two chapters, take a shot everytime you read taupe-haired/etc.
You weren't kidding. I even looked at the last chapter to see if the author ever stopped but nope, still cobalt-haired people. I'm not sure how someone could write so much without anyone telling them to cut it out. And it's especially weird when it comes to Umi since she's explicitly said to have black hair since she's the Yamato Nadeshiko character and it's just drawn as blue because anime I guess, so you'd think a feudal AU would make her a classic Japanese raven-haired beauty but nope. The power of autism is just too strong I guess.
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>>3713497
Thanks. I'm just glad that my idea of a yuri story is finally starting to get some life. I still think my writing reads stiffly, so I'll probably run it by here to get opinions on that front
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YagaKimi 3D anon here. I've been extremely lazy, but I got started on a ceiling lamp and the bed. There's also a pinboard over her desk now. It looks different, since I couldn't find one anywhere that looked like the one in the manga (pic related). Maybe someone here knows wtf that thing is.

I might try to do weekly updates from now on, maybe that'll motivate me to actually get shit done.

Here's a panorama: https://renderstuff.com/tools/360-panorama-web-viewer-sharing/?image=https://i.imgur.com/9MB65Nf.jpg&title=Yuu%20Room%20Panorama%20WIP
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>>3714838
Looks like a cork board with triangles cut out as pseudo handles.
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>>3714849
>>3714838
And then obviously minus the aluminum frame and with rounded corners.

Anyway, the room is looking great.
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>>3714849
>>3714854
Yeah, I can tell that much. But what are those cutouts, exactly? Are they actual holes or just indentations? If they're holes, then what's on the other side? Another board, or just the wall? Really hard to tell with the black and white, and they just used a generic board with a wooden frame in the anime, so that's not much help either.

I'm pretty sure that if Nakatani drew this thing, then there's probably some sort of model for it IRL, but I haven't found anything so far. If push comes to shove I'll just make a few different versions and pick the one people like best, but that's kinda low on my list of priorities right now.
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>>3714863
My guess is that there are actual holes cut straight through and the other side is just the wall. i poked around google and amazon.jp but couldn't seem to find any triangle ones, but it reminds me a lot of the holes you find cut in drawing boards to act as handles. In fact, the top pic in your first post suggests to me that the way she has the whole thing mounted is to put two pins/pegs/whatever into the wall and then just hang the board by the holes on those.

Here's maybe a similar one, but with circles instead of triangles.
https://sumally.com/p/521306
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Well this is a crossover paring, but it feature these two who are happily married and are nudists at their home that they live together, but it has some drama like what you would see in your usual LGBTQ drama show and/or movie.
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>>3714897
You having autism isn't a project.
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>>3714838
Wow, that looks really great!
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>>3714838
>It looks different, since I couldn't find one anywhere that looked like the one in the manga

Looks like the animators took the lazy way. But that's easy to model by hand. I'm pretty sure the material is cork.
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>tfw you want to make a class rep x big tiddy tomboy comic, but you can't into anatomy and shading.
Life is pain.
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>>3715511
Practice then!
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Probably won't start working on this for another year or two because I need to learn how to animate first but I'm thinking of making a little animation of FFXIV's Ryne x Gaia based on this segment of the Aoi Hana OP, from :46 to 1:01.
https://youtu.be/LN1umHSPTKI?t=46





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