hey brosim writing a story thats a hybrid of turner diaries and harassment architecture with less schizorant and more interesting story while sticking true to the idea and messageimportant context:- "initium finis" means "the beginning of the end"- "The IN" is the "initium nova", or the resistance, means "new beginnings"- while The IN is anti-capitalist, they arent commie chuds, theyre more in favour of authoritarianism/fascism, and im going to tie those related to the turner diaries IRL into this story as it progressesi havent really wrote much yet, but im going to continue working on it as time goes by as i already feel it will become a really fun project for myself and a couple friends who are helping me with ideas, names, plotlines, etclet me know your thoughts, link is below for the PDFP.S. im also accepting ideas for formatting, fonts, style of writing, perspective, etc. literally any ideas you guys have i am willing to hear out and consider, and they'll probably get implementedhttps://files.catbox.moe/0zfzj3.pdfenjoy!!
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Define "capitalism" if I like I read, if not I put your stylometric fingerprint into the database
>>521497279Capitalism is an economic system where private people and companies own things, compete, and try to make a profit, instead of the government directly controlling everything. obviously this isnt how capitalism has actually been applied thanks to muh bureaucracy etc.etc. but thats my laymans definition of it. hope you enjoy reading brotisserie chicken>>521497276my favourite sentence ive written so far is: "The brutality ever-lasting and ever-visible, those sympathetic to The IN across America begin to carry out the same acts of violence, anger and resistance, and soon the fragile stability of the Union comes crashing down, shattering all-around those who thought their control, their system, their influence was eternal, but, this moment would be remembered as The Day of Reckoning."
>>521497818Yeah. Stylometric fingerprint it is. Never publish
>>521497980well i dont really know what else i was supposed to say since you asked me to define capitalism, sorry you weren't satisfied with it i guess, have a good night
>>521498152Its a shit test, the term capitalism doesn't exist outside of marxist dogma.
>>521497818Would you put this sentence on a mug and sell it at a bazaar?
>>521498362what kind of crack do you smoke?Marx coined the word ‘capitalism,’ not the system. markets, private property, and profit existed long before him. I just gave the definition you asked for, you cant beg for your cake and then throw it at the wall cause its what you asked for
>>521498557lab made gem, 5/10, more effort next time plz americhud
>>521497155my opinion is that didactic literature is an abomination and a true artist can express ideas indirectly and communally with the reader
>>521497818That's not a sentence you faggot memeflag Thats a fucking paragraph.If you think that's the best you have to offer, it's going to be a slog to read, and no one will.
>>521498918The epistemology of the term is in itself marxist. It doesn't exist outside the marxist lense and the marxist lense is flawed for marx being a pedophile retard. Marx term translated to human isA socialist system that doesn't socialize my risk and costs onto somebody else for my profits but the profits for somebody else. Its effectively a curse word by a poor socialist against a "rich" socialist. Both want the same. Capitalism doesn't exist, its just a pejorative for socialism you don't like, in 3000 pages.
>>521499068i appreciate your feedback, but i wouldnt say what im writing is didactic, i feel thats largely reductive, its meant to read as if the book is talking to you while still telling a fictional story rooted in a real possbility, which leaves me unsure if you read what i've got so far all the way through
>>521499107its a novel not a short story, not really many sentences in it, i just pulled out what i liked the most since thats the best i could offer, your hostility speaks volumes of your individual mindset, sorry you didnt like what i have to offer
>>5214992253/10 bait, semi-coherent opinion riddled with ad hominems and nice sperg wordvomit, go find a different thread.
>>521499667You are dumber than a box of niggers. Keep your word vomit in your diary.
>>521499667You can't falsify it. Admit it, you just want that somebody else is going to take your risk and costs for you to profit. That's satanic, it deserves a worse fate then death, no matter the wallet, the thought alone is a travesty and tells somebody all that is necessary to know about the other. Take your own damn risk, socialist
>>521499848ok americhud
>>521499868the bait gets lower tier with everything you say, please move to another thread, i just want advice idk why this has turned into a dickmeasuring contest when im not even remotely close to a socialist
>>521500268As the other anon said meme flag that tries to spread a 0 days in his pdf, stupid like a box of niggers. Show flag
>>521500358if i was trying to RAT devices i wouldnt put it on catbox so you can read without downloading, instead of dickmeasuring why dont you worrying about the jeets invading austria btw i chose no flag because i want to be anonymous, kinda the whole point of posting on 4chan
>>521499445Its gonna suck.>It was the best of times, it was the worst of times.Is a sentence in another novel too.Just because its a "novel" doesn't mean you need to pad it with bullshit.Long=/=good.Unless it is.I recently read a very good novel about a week ago, just over 500 pages. Took two days. Could have easily gotten it in one. I could barely get through whatever you wrote as a "sentence"
>>521500536Chinks are second rank problem. BoomerX are the primary problem chang
>>521500600well this is the kind of advice im actually looking for despite your continued unreasonable aggression, i'll work on making it shorter and more tasteful/readable, i did try and break down the actual paragraphs in what ive already wrote. just wish you would go through what ive actually written and give me some more structural feedback amongst the other replies full of shitspeak and 3/10 baitbtw ive literally only just started writing this which is why im seeking feedback on what ive wrote
>>521500739please move onto another thread you're no longer funny
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>>521499068>hates didactic poemsanon, I...
>>521497155>while The IN is anti-capitalist, they arent commie chuds, theyre more in favour of authoritarianism/fascism, and im going to tie those related to the turner diaries IRL into this story as it progressesDifferent Austrian, and I don't get the appeal of rethreading these already regurgitated ideas from WWII.If you're bothering to write for the right-wing, what's the point of following in the footsteps of Pierce when our time faces completely different challenges.Just your initial confrontation reeks of 80s media sensibilities. Where's the deepfake of your hero being framed and boomers believing it. Where are the zoomers who reject any and all narratives presented to them by the MSM. It's like you're writing for a world that doesn't exist anymore.>Helicopters of the military, police and media...Is that really the world we're heading into and if not why would anyone care? I see drones chasing your protagonist, a frantic nerd in a police cubicle switching between CCTV cameras to follow him while the some roastie reporter tries to find anything on social media linking him to the political bad guys of your story.tl:dr: nothing wrong with practise, but nobody's going to give a shit about a "what if nazis, but american?"-kind of concept that failed several times already.Also, different Austrian, but I agree with everything he said.
>>521501849if you even read a single thing, its set in the time period where the turner diaries came out (60s-80s).its not about "what if nazis but americans", its about a fictional story rooted in the truths of movements that have existed for a long long time in the US+ cool, i dont really give a fuck if you agree with him, he was spergposting and doing 3/10 bait. also, theres 3 main characters. please just actually read through it im begging you, instead of the prelude. J.T. (joseph) is 1 of 3 main characters.RHM2V
>>521501849Also, like the Austrian said, you don't live in a capitalist system even if you use a Marxist lens. You live in a credit-based system where access to credit and leverage translates to economic agency. The old dialectic between the owners the machines and the people who work them is completely irrelevant unless you live in a third world shithole that still produces like that (which is why the kikes moved their ideology there). The west has regulations, ideologies and low-wage globalism as forces far more oppressive than the carricature of the cruel and fat industrialist of a Charles Dickens novel.Point being: learn how the world works before you try to tell other people about it.
>>521502444nowhere have i tried to tell other people about the world all i said is exactly the facts. youre literally wordvomiting things irrelevant to my only request in this thread. why is it so hard for the retards on this website to fucking do what people ask in the subject of the thread, i dont want to hear your politics, im looking for advice on a fictional fucking story im writing, i dont CARE about that shit, i was literally just trying to give context so people didnt open it and think "leftoid slop" because they saw what the prelude references. PLEASE just read the fucking PDF in its entirety and give me some constructive feedback, otherwise get the fuck off the thread
>>521500944>Memeflag Kys
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>>521502219>its about a fictional story rooted in the truths of movementsI guess if you want to salvage whatever value can be unearthed. sure.Not sure there is even all that much. Rockwell inadvertently proved that a lot of rw ideas attract only mal-adapted freaks, and Pierce resented him for making it obvious while simultaneous also being unable to gather the sophisticated crowd he dreamed of.Maybe you can find something they missed, who knows?
>>521502650Nigger never publish, my nlpk powered stylometric fingerprint script now has your ideolect. If you want to publish without being fucked, change your writing style and thinking style on a fundamental level
>>521503007ive never had any intention of "publishing" this, im literally just writing it for the love of the gameP.S. stylometrics require literally thousands upon thousands of words for even a chance at a positive match and would likely produce negatives with sub-20k words + 0/10 ragebaitPLEASE kill yourself
>>521497155Turner diaries was kinda cringe.
>>521497155mossad glownigger hands typed this
>>521502940my story isnt going to be about sophisticated individuals or mal-adapted freaks, these people in the story while yes they harbour nazi and nazi-adjacent views, their direct goal isnt to implement naziism, their goal is simply to prove to the american people that their system is broken, theyre dying in random countries for pedo jews, and that theres more to life than miserable 9-to-7s in a rundown steel manufactory in Nowhereville, USA, i appreciate your feedback and i agree with your points about rockwell and pierce, but those individuals were neither sophisticated nor normal themselves, and its why their movements failed to gain any real significance or traction beyond their megabased works such as the turner diaries
>>521503363says the fascist memeflag, please leave the thread, i can smell the grease on you through my screen.
>>521503257No. It requires 2000 token on the lower end, 5000 for extreme high accuracy. You wrote far more then enough :3Grow up and snap out of the BoomerX mental prison, its not the 1980s - your thinking is antiquated.
>>521503682How's this for a stylometric fingerprint *braps in your face*
>>521503682ok furfag well i doooont care because this would never get published nowadays anyways. like i said, its for the love of the game not for the fame, now go kill yourself or spread STDs or whatever you "people" do
>>521503807wholesome chungus, grade A 90% pure tanzanite
>>521503807Not enough. Brap posting is unfortunately too common to reliably find your posts. Do you have a favorite macro you post often? The md5 hash and the archives could help to build a corpus for training
>>521503842The critic remains. Your thinking and therefore your writing is antiquated, doesn't resonate. Its bad, you were born 50 years too late for your "style"
>>521502650>PLEASE just read the fucking PDFUnless there was some error, it's only 3 pages and the last one is way too much of you trying to flex gun knowledge for this point in the story. It's terrible pacing. I'd want to read about the people, not their guns. At that point, what's relevant is how they cope with abandoning every single comfort in their life for this attack on the system. Guy has some papers? Nice, but what does everyone feel about a pivotal moment where they could go all-in. As a reader, I don't give a shit what kind of gun the guy wields, I want to know what kind of person able to do this.
>>521497276>“I have to find A.J. …”The La-Li-Lu-Le-Lo?
>>521503924Pepe the frog
>>521504457There are still brokes niggers here? Or a Wilson plant?
