I created this comic 1 hour ago. It's not finished, but i rest after making these 5 pages. What do you think? I know "too much text"- and i would remove text in the later pages and draw more images. I know i can do that. But for a quick exposition/story, i thought, at the beginning, that i can allow myself to do a bit more text then usual.Besides that, how's the story?And what would you suggest i change, remove or add? How should it continue?Thanks in advance.
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It looks like a document with random doodles. You aren't using the medium as intended Think of the drawing first then add the text. Also you need to learn how to draw
>>83169423second panel looks like a buttholeI have no other opinions because I flunked media literacy at school
>isekai is just wish fulfillment /r/im12andthisisdeep called. They want their top post back
>>83174390Oh, no, i'm invading this board.I stay here and i know what i'm doing.You go back, not me.Unlike you, i actually put effort and love/meaning into my messages.Can you tell me actual responses, not this garbage you gave as a response?
>>83173300Well to me it looks like the average 4chan comic: except with more text.It doesnt have unneccessary drawings. It does not have unneccessary style. Only some crude simple drawings ("learn how to draw"- no, i draw well enough ,maybe not this time, but overall, it is more then enough)I think the story is good, and that the depiction of it is partially not perfect/very fast, but that is the best part about it: it is quick, rather then having anything to add.What to add? Style? Garbage? More unneccessary filler? Unneccessary images?I could make the images larger, and slightly "more aesthetic".I could also position the text in a way that it seems less disordered.Besides that, maybe even more lines to split up things.That's it. I could add more images to certain texts, but why add things when they do not improve it? This is a comic due to images, not due to "comic being the purpose of a medium". I do not intend to make a comic "like a comic", i do intend to create something as useful/good/fitting as possible, not restrained by "image amount" or "style" or "amount of text".Yes, i could remove so much text that the plot would get lost, and then, it would perhaps be "more of a comic" to you. Do i want to produce garbage? no!oh right, "think of the drawing first". I thought ofthe story first, and i would have drawn more had i not tried to actually prioritize quick story over "comic-image-fullfilledness"--- do you truly claim your "comicness" is more importiant then my "quick storyness"?
