what do you think of my writing internationally speaking
>>223738725i think its pretty good. much of the photography went over my head but your descriptions of the dog and cabin are very good, particularly the second page. be proud man, its not out of this world but it's quality, bueno
É muito bom t. Has finished reading all that
>>223738725cringet. didn't read it
i think it's badwhat makes his fur "too yellow"what do you mean "blended with the universe" that doesn't convey an image for methe narrator sounds like a mumbling idiot because he brought an expensive "rig" out in the rain for a picture he has no reason to be late for, yet he is rushing.Felt no desire to continue after the first paragraph, especially not to read some kind of tangent about a stray dogand from quickly scanning the rest it is just tangent upon tangent without any importanceand most importantly, why not write in your native tongue? assuming you speak portuguese
>>223739098i didnt care for the first two paragraphs but i feel it greatly picks up after
>>223739147seriously? you read "he was too polite to bark at me" and you think it's great?what reason does the narrator have to assume the dog is friendly, let alone "polite"? plenty stray dogs are aggressive and territorial, especially after being chased in a field.This is just retarded furry smut tier>I foun dis happy puppy an it made my tummy tingly an den I pet it and we was bestest frends
>>223739254>Before I could knock on the ajar door the dog flung the door open and started sniffing inside the housem I had barely known this dof for five minutes but I already felt guilty for its actions.say what you will but i found this section and even the god being too polite to bark charming writing and something I could relate to through experience. im sorry youre too irony poisoned to take at value metaphors, anthropomorphizing or social atmosphere
>>223739434its one brown mumbling retard after the other in hereglad you enjoy each other's drivel
>>223739513rather unfortunate faggots like you infest the mainstream. so adverse to anything experimental or trying that you give little to no constructive feedback. oddessy and mcu are made for faggots like you>verif not required
>>223739647>little to no constructive feedbackread this again >>223739098i think neither of you have read any literature>he kept filling his mouth with air and huffing it outwhat the fuck does that even mean?the more I read the worse it gets
>>223739724not reading, boo hoo, faggot
>>223739771copecan you even provide critique? you can't, it's all subjective "I thought the dog seemd breddy cute becuz it says so on da paper. what do you mean iz bad riting"that's the most depth your perception will ever have.
>>223739830>your wrong cuz, you think his description is good subjectively>im right cuz i think his description is bad subjectively. no i wont expound furtherokay, nigger
da cute dawg in da fieldat dawg was a bit yello acksually bezus my camra coudent pick it up very easy in da fielbut den i went too pet him he did some breathing and he ate my nuts because he wuz all frendly and stuff an he was da bestest boiand den there was a room and we wuz kinda just being there kinda like. wit da doggy and shiet.
>>223739899what's there to expound, my critique is self explanatorymeanwhile your feedback is "dont be meen to da cute doggy plese becus he is cute and i like da cute dogy"
>>223738725Read 2 lines and it's AI-made.
>>223740017>>223739975whatever nigger
>>223740048says the literal somalian
>>223740059says the slop chomping eu chimp. im done with fags like you, hopefully this thread'll pick back up from your aneurysm
>>223738725you already know it's shit or you would have posted it in /wg/so I did it for you>>>/lit/25453005
better than most college students here
>>223740142next time when you can't handle someone giving their honest opinion just be quiet if you care about thread quality because you picked an argument with me and now you're coping and seething because you can't handle it
