Am I wrong for thinking this just sounds like yapping?
what kind of femslop perpetual victim shit is this?
>>25468616There's nothing offensive about this at all, besides the repetition of "thoughts". Whoever wrote this clearly has a sturdier architecture to their writing than most do nowadays. That might not be saying much given today's standards, but I mean it as a compliment.
>>25468616by all appearances you are reading someone relating a conversation they had with their friends about houseplants, why would you have expected it to be anything more than yapping?
>>25468685it's supposed to be a poem
>>25468699oh I seeyou cut off the ending it gets more overtly metaphoricalanyway if you cannot see how this text might have a deeper meaning beyond the literal subject of keeping houseplants you might have autismthis post is also a poem btw
Full poem:https://www.loc.gov/programs/poetry-and-literature/poet-laureate/poet-laureate-projects/poetry-180/all-poems/item/poetry-180-089/on-the-psychological-effect-of-living-with-houseplants/tl;dr:OP has autism and the poem is about the impacts of childhood neglect and generational trauma
>>25468746>the poem is about the impacts of childhood neglect and generational traumaYou couldn't glean that from the excerpt OP posted? That's sad.
>>25468759I didn't read the excerpt, I saw someone say it got cut off and just googled for the full thing (yes this is a very autistic response, no I have not been tested)
>>25468746This is a cool story, I really like it.How is this a poem, by the way? I'm no expert. Does this have a meter? Rhythm? Does it follow a beat pattern? To my untrained eye it seems like you could just remove the line breaks and make it into a traditional short story. Microfiction.
>>25468776who cares whether it's a poem or not? What does it matter? Why do you need expert guidance on deciding what is a poem or not, what practical purpose would it serve for you?
>>25468713It didn't fit in the screencap but I read the whole thing. I understood the deeper meaning because she outright says it. That's what I mean it reads like someone just telling me something in a text message
>>25468785>who cares whether it's a poem or not? What does it matter? Why do you need expert guidance on deciding what is a poem or not, what practical purpose would it serve for you?>/programs/poetry-and-literature/poet-laureate/poet-laureate-projects/poetry-180/all-poems/item/poetry-180-089
>>25468785>Curiosity?? GROSS!!!Calm down
>>25468807kek
>>25468810but not enough curiosity, apparently, to question your own attachment to arbitrary categories handed down from above
>>25468821If categories don't matter then why do you need it to be a poem so badly?
>>25468821Except that's literally exactly what was being questioned
>>25468844let's play a new game any posts beyond this line must clearly demonstrate a capacity for higher-order thought and reflections_________________
>>25468847>>25468821>>25468785ur a dumb nigger lol
>>25468699>no verse scheme>no good writing>no epic scene of decapitation then he picks up his own head>no line breaks>"poem" is just some bitch crying that she's a heartless cunt and it's everyone elses fault
>>25468616I like yapping and so should most readers. This is highly neurotic and is a bit nasty to read
>>25468616This is truly horrendous writing, and I mean legitimately horrendous; the analogy of a dying houseplant being a "dying" child is so obvious that is borders on the grotesque. It is all the more laughable because the analogy does not work at all, which is why she had to construct her asinine epithany to such an unrealistic degree. The reality is that childhood trauma and neglect would so rarely lead to the death of a child that it is totally laughable to let the metaphorical plant die as a symbol for it. "Oh, I will accept that they/he/she/I ignore my needs a little longer, I do not need to be pampered and cared for because my parents neglected me. I will just die because people taught me to die." Childhood trauma is much harder to detect than starvation or thirst which is also precisely the reason why it is so burdensome, because it is so easy to deny for everyone involved. Yes, it is not that the topic itself is banal, it's not that childhood trauma of any kind is banal, what is banal is this utterly meaningless writing. What I hated about it is that I could immediately tell that it was written by a woman, even without the mention of the husband, which in our day and age could just as well mean a gay husband. It is also obvious that it was not a man pretending to be a woman, which would honestly be crude because it is so flabberghastingly superficial in every way, that it would be comparable to the young "woman" I saw yesterday who had a man's hairline—early onset baldness, and who could not even bring "herself" to laser her face and neither to actually learn how to do makeup, how to use a foundation to cover up that disgusting 5 o'clock shadow (but it was actually 4 o'clock).The text is so egregiously boring, and yet so overwhelmingly self-confident in the subject matter that it could only have been written by a woman, just as a ridiculous sci-fi scene or an overly descriptive, and yet totally unrealistic raunchy medieval rape-scene in a high-fantasy setting could only be written by a man. This text is a testament to her own shallowness. It reads as though she always stopped herself, all her life, whenever she risked going just a little too deep into her own mind, because if she did, if she actually went beyond the shiny veneer, the brushed alumin, the aesthetic trauma that serves as a catch-all apology for every single shortcoming, she would be at the risk of realizing that there is nothing there, and that all the performative symbols of her own depth were merely carefully placed icons, hollow shapes, like props on a movie set, but every door is locked and every single structure is hollow.Truly pitiable writing.
>>25470685>The reality is that childhood trauma and neglect would so rarely lead to the death of a child that it is totally laughable to let the metaphorical plant die as a symbol for it.>Childhood trauma is much harder to detect than starvation or thirstYou do not live in the real world.
>>25468847Did any relatives touch you inappropriately when you were a child?
>>25470818Are you perhaps retarded or just American? Maybe read the last sentence you were quoting again you fucking mental midget. If you think childhood trauma is more obvious to see or notice than it is to see that someone is starving to death, you must be the biggest brainlet alive. I hate you /pol/brained faggots so much, you cant even read a sentence before you reply to it in the most retarded fashion.
>>25470910You being unable to empathize with victims of neglect is not the author's problem. Your response makes me suspect that you have some trauma of your own to deal with. I wish you luck, anon.
>>25471012I literally said that childhood trauma is much harder to detect and that it usually does not lead to death in nearly the same coherence as not watering a plant leads to its very obvious death. Youre a fucking retard, stupid and ignorant, incapable of reading.
>>25468616>words words wordsnigger
>>25468616Yes, she's driving at a point, still it's yapping. It's the female conversational style. A writer should want to say all that in fewer words, there might be many ways to do it.
>>25470685>The text is so egregiously boringIt's lazy, publishing your poem without meter, objectively low skill and without artfulness. A lot of modern poets do this thing, they take a central metaphor then abandon other techniques, even imagery in this case, as if the metaphor is so powerful it can carry the entire intellectual and emotional experience. The truth is, even this metaphor is poorly thought out, lazy, just so weak. Imagine the variety of crazy intense shit you could write in the theme of childhood trauma. Someone needs to tell the foids they're allowed to write in a character;s voice. They get away with turning in their journal pages as poetry. Essentially notes.
