"Caught a fish THIS BIG" editionPrevious: >>25573088/wg/ AUTHORS & FLASH FICTION: https://pastebin.com/ruwQj7xQRESOURCES & RECOMMENDATIONS: https://pastebin.com/nFxdiQvCPlease limit excerpts to one post.Give advice as much as you receive it to the best of your ability.Discuss the written works below for practice; contribute, and you shall receive.If you have not performed a cursory proofread, do not expect to be treated kindly. Edit your work for spelling and grammar before posting.Expect critique, not praise.Shitposters should be ignored and reported.>Beginner guides on writing:https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pHdzv1NfZRM (Improve your Writing: Show, Not Tell) [6:08]https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=whPnobbck9s (George Orwell's 4 Tips For Speaking Clearly) [23:00]https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YAKcbvioxFk (How to Show, Not Tell: The Complete Writing Guide) [27:19]>Intermediate guides on writing:https://www.goodreads.com/book/show/48654.Storyhttps://www.goodreads.com/book/show/3097766-borges-on-writinghttps://www.goodreads.com/book/show/23056.Image_Music_Text>Advanced guide on writing:Just do it.
total tranny death.
Need help, is any trans or otherwise spicy in that way character a dealbreaker for you. I have gone insane and now write insane things >>25578191Read here>>25578428Huh!? Total!?
>>25578434Trannies are overdone. You want something insane? Try writing about the last normal person.
I've got 20 pages done of my fat anthro cub story. I know how the climax is going to be, just haven't decided if it'll end in demonic corruption or will the main character have the strength to resist falling to temptation.
>>25578445I am here.
4 diet cokesone diet coke, she ordered another four after the initial sip. “don't you want some lunch to go with that?” yes she would have loved to forcibly go down on a three stack of pancakes accompanied by two large turkey sausages dripping in grease, a steamy plate of hash browns peppered in brown flakes she wished she could ask for a dipping side of vanilla fluff with her pancakes she would ask for a refill free of shame. a fat older woman would come skirting through the diner in her tight little apron breasts all coming out from the top but in a homely kind of way, in a way that reminded you how you'll never be a child again your mother will never love you like the way she once did when she let you ruin her once perfectly set breasts, her breathtaking figure, you ruined her, she now hates you for it. unwarranted hatred but somehow your fault. she stuck with your father her lackluster bust now prevents her from cheating on a man worth cheating for so she settled hard and became a shut-in, this was her dream, something she could do in the privacy of her own home her own bathroom, she didn't have her own bathroom but she also lacked the shame of others listening in on her purging her imperfections down the drain, she must have been some sort of exhibitionist with the orgasmic thrill she received strutting out of the bathroom, teeth stained, stomach empty, there was nothing that could replace the confidence she exuberated, the exhilarating energy exuded after purging. well, there was, but they were out of her reach momentarily due to her flawed way of perceiving the world: a boyfriend, money, a new view from her window, stable relationships (humans and and miscellaneous other).
>>25578456There you go! Rebel against the evil and insanity of the real world... by being honest, decent, and hard working! When people ask you why, tell them you do it for the shock value.
>>25578471Jesus spoke of this.
>>25578476A pro-sanity work of fiction would certainly be a novelty in this day and age.
>>25578466Consider punctuation and starting your sentences with a capital letter.
Nice ad. I ain't buying
>>25578466>>25578482I think it’s rough but has a lot of potential. I assumed they’re going for a Faulkner or Beckett type thing with the run-ons. Keep practicing and posting, anon.
He kept the receiptsfrom every repair he'd paid for.She knew which drawer held them,which numbers were wrong.When the house was sold,he asked what she'd contributed.She folded the curtains.Still searching for a better source of inspiration.
>>25578466https://vocaroo.com/14UQzlhmlntd
>>25578537post bobs.
https://rentry.org/kbgp5gco
>>25578537How are you able to hide your Adam's apple so well?
I got someone cooking something
>>25578537You're rushing through it. You also need to enunciate and reduce that lisp. This isn't listenable I'm afraid
>>25578482But then he wouldn't be able to call himself the second coming of Corncob
>>25578482suggestion noted>>25578492>>25578537thanks
>>25578620it’s so raw and captivating for some reason.do you always write about fucked up stuff?
>>25578731I see.
>>25578658 yeah i realize how absurd and vulgar it is
>>25578456kek I took that test and apparently I'm a Duginist according to it.
>>25578434Being boring is a deal breaker for me.Tranny shit is fucking boring. >*plays heelsvsbabyface clip*
>>25578434Even the most beloved classics in history aren't universally liked. What are you expecting to find here? Some people will say no, some people will say yes. The key is to write something that you want to write and do it well.
>>25578745>>25576206>the beat sheet is just the scenes of the outline.The outline is the road, the beats are the sights you see along the way, as well as the crossroads. The outline places the beats in context of the general direction of the plot. The beats are both important scenes that readers want, e.g. the bang bang pew pew in Saving Private Ryan, and the outcomes of the beats place the characters on the desired path laid by the outline, e.g. Upham saving Mickey Mouse places him at the start of a road that leads in a particular direction. But you still need to fill in the connecting bits of road: you still need to detail Upham's journey from there to the next major action scene. And if you decide that the road won't travel in that particular direction - if Upham saving Mickey Mouse was meant to prescribe mercy rather than demonstrate the consequences of suicidal empathy - then the beat would remain largely the same but the subsequent direction of the path would differ from that chosen by the movie writers.
We're such fertile ground... basically manure.
>>25578897I respect them because at least they're trying and have the confidence to put themselves out there. I scrap all of my manuscripts without even having the courage to ask someone to read them
>>25578900Rather than scrapping them, put them away for a few months or even a year, until you've forgotten the details and you've essentially turned back into a reader instead of the author. Then re-read them and see if they elicit any sort of positive feeling.
If you want a copy of CC with the snail stomp cover now's the time to get it because I'm updating the cover this weekend
>>25579321holy fucking cringe lmao
>>25579324Hey at least it's not your book's cover
>>25579321I hate the title font. Looks like comicsans
>>25579347It's in the same font category as comic sans (handwritten-style) but no, it looks nothing like it
Threadly reminder to remind on a threadly basis that the thread has a reminder.
How do you incorporate artificial intelligence into your writing workflow?
>>25579449the only thing I've found it useful for is finding added/missing spaces or context-dependent typos that spellcheck sometimes misses. even then it misses a ton of stuff that can only be found by line-editing yourself. it's a big time nothingburger for actual writing purposes.
>>25578900you are confusing confidence with neurotic megalomaniacs
>>25579641You're confusing meglomania with mega-based mania
>>25579641>writing thread>these fucking people who finish books and share them - what a bunch of arrogant cocksuckers!seems like more of a (You) issue
>>25579697You should know better than to be rational with frogposters
>>25579449I’ve been doing a mirror draft where I get my ideas down in one draft, then pass it through using what I think are my best prose examples from the work as a stylistic reference, having it expand length and then I can reference both drafts when I do my second complete rewrite. Sometimes it can unlock better more intentional meaning from what I’m trying to convey. I do this because I have legitimate brain damage and memory problems.
>>25579321objectively worse. just fix the title typeface on the original snail art
>>25579778I object to your use of "objectively"
>>25579868well im gonna shove my foot up your ass
>>25579944I object to the fact that I can't watch.
>>25579944That would be objectively bad for both of us
>>25578833>What are you expecting to find here?A den of haters and crabs in a bucket who attack anything with a scrap of sincerity.
>>25579449I don't.
Where do you guys advertise? Shits so expensive. I put it on amazon targetted ads and face book but got zero sales. Lost money on advertising. There has to be cheaper options
>>25580287I haven't gotten that far yet, and I plan to publish my stuff to the web first for free and see if I gain a readership that way. You know, beta test the story to see if there is actually a demand for it.
>>25580295worst part is that I'm getting clicks, but nobody is biting. I wonder if ARC paid reviews are worth it
>>25580299You really want to risk your account with fake reviews?
my horror slop story is turning into generic action slop
>>25580287There's always this method...
>>25580287...or this method...
What is with tards in writing threads thinking they are copy editors every time someone actually post something regardless of the the person posting asked or not.It's especially dumb because the wannabe editors often can't even understand writing about a second grade level.
>>25580642>What is with tards in writing threads thinking they are copy editors every time someone actually posts something regardless of whether the person posting asked or not?>It's especially dumb because the wannabe editors often don't understand writing above a second grade level.FTFY
>>25578454Up to 26 pages and still not at the end. Gonna end up with the fat fetish version of War and Peace.
I am done with dictation. Because I am not restricted to words I can comfortably spell and instead whatever the first word that comes to mind, I end up writing stuff that has vocabulary that is too hard for basically everyone I have shown my writing to.I still get complaints about the vocabulary being too difficult when I type stuff, but to a much lesser degree since I am far less likely to use "obscure" words that I have to pause to consider the spelling.
>>25580670Incredibly based>>25580829Gonna try this
“Looks like it’s you and me, big guy,” Kyle whispered in my ear. He took me by my hard-on and led me over to the fire. I almost blew a load just from him touching it. And out of everything that had happened today, that would have been the most embarrassing by a long shot. We passed Emile and Charlotte, but they had their eyes closed and were busy trying to swallow each other’s tongues. We sat down on a log. The heat from the fire being so close was a bit much, because of how warm the summer air already was. Kyle had his hand around my shoulder. “So, what do you think?”I honestly had no idea how to respond, so I just said the first thing that came into my head. “Uh, It looks like everyone’s having a good time.”Oh that was smooth. Why not quit while you’re ahead and throw yourself in the fire?He kept one paw on my shoulder, and moved his other down to my cock. “Got a girlfriend back home? Boyfriend?”I looked away at nothing. “Course not. Who’d want a fat dork like me?” The second I said it, I wished I hadn’t. He was fat. His sister was fat. Everybody here was, and I’d just insulted them. I shivered as I felt his lips press against my cheek.“I do,” he whispered. He gave me another squeeze and I could already feel the pressure building. He pulled my speedos down and let it bounce out. There was already sticky stuff all over it. The stuff you get before you cum, I didn’t know what it was called. “You’re telling me no one else has ever gotten to play with this? A cute boy like y—” He didn’t get to finish. Ten seconds of stroking and I blew all over everything. Spurts of cum shot out of my cock and then petered off into dribbles. Never mind, that was now the most embarrassing this you’ve ever done. Give yourself a round of applause for not even lasting 20 seconds into a paw-job.I buried my face in my paws. “I’m so sorry.” My voice came out muffled. Kyle laughed and patted me on the shoulder. He still had his other paw wrapped around the limp cock and was squeezing the last few drops out. “It’s different when it’s someone else doing it, huh?”
>>25581030And my dumb ass had to ctr F every instance of "hand" and replace it with "paw" to be consistent. But I'm not sure how to phrase "handed"
>>25580287Reddit, 4chan ads, making reddit posts for recommendations of stories like my own and using an alt account to recommend my stories. There are no limits that I'd go. Write fanfiction of something popular like Pokemon or Naruto and link it to my non-fiction accounts in the bio. Develop a readership there and try to get them to check out original stuff. Buy my own stories, review them on alt accounts.
>>25578425Is using an in-universe history lesson too heavy handed for exposition? I wanted to explain the settings general backstory but I'm not sure if that's a good idea to start.So I thought a history lesson might work cause then we can see some people's reactions and the main character's mannerisms
>>25581140I think its perfectly dietetic and fun but you're gonna get people screeching about how exposition and loredumps are always wrong and have to be shown not told
>>25581140Yes it is heavy handed. Particularly if it's broad and information that can be defined as "common knowledge" within the world. Also, how realistic is the lesson? Consider actual history lessons, they are rarely exposition dumps. Usually, they are about a very specific time frame and location, or about a specific person's life (great man theory); and not about a setting or describing a timeline of facts, but rather weighing causes and consequences of certain events.If you absolutely need to do this, consider changing the approach. One alternative is to set an established narrative of history that a character(s) knows about, and then have another character (s) that brings an alternative narrative. This makes the characters active, as they are not receiving information, but rather it creates a back and forth. Also illuminates on the characters backgrounds and the society they were raised in, as it shows what that society placed focus in. You can vary a lot with this, not just facts and series of events. E.g. one can have a more structuralist view and another a more agentic view (like great man theory). Or perhaps one sees things as events more isolated geographically, while another as a more interactions between societies.You can play a lot with it, so it doesn't register as exposition. Having more than one perspective will allow you to sneak in the information you want, while also developing the characters by what they know, don't know, think, reject, and focus on. Both perspectives may be right, or wrong. What matters is that the characters think that, and why they do is what illuminates on their backgrounds.
Started writing a drama about a shut-in who lives in the woods and has a cult show up next door.
>>25578897all the authors should review each other's books
>>25581508all they do is review bomb and talk shit and nobody actually reads because 98% of these threads are third-world retards
>>25581487>>25581454>Great man theoryThat's a good idea. So my idea is there's a festival coming up honoring the founder of the city. The basic premise is magical dungeons like Dungeon Meshi began appearing and much of the world began dying, with only dungeons as a source of food for the most part. The festival is in honor of the city's founder who lead many people to safety and protected them.I think maybe for an alternative narrative idea, someone posits it was actually his wife who lead them (the city was formed about 100 years ago) and creates an argument with the MC and others. Not sure if this would be too modern feminist-like though.
>"DON'T USE ADVERBS">...>everything i read is full of adverbs
>>25581847follow the rules except you're an exceptional genius, but also nobody will read your shit unless you are an exceptional genius anyways
>>25581847that means dont' use adverbs when there's a better word to be more clear.Instead of quickly ran, he could be sprinting, dashing, darting, etc. But if your intention is to have the character "run quickly" then use the adverb. Those words all have different meanings
>>25581140>>25581487my personal favorite is the "lie to the reader" tech where the 'history lesson' is just biased in-world propaganda
>>25581866>implying people read works of exceptional genius
>>25581847At least it isn't as retarded as the dude a few threads ago insisting that you shouldn't use adjectives.
>>25581866It isn't even a rule, it's a style suggestion that has been over generalized.
>>25579697cry harder. your books suck
>>25581847Why do you reddit brained stupid shits need to always simplify everything beyond the point of usefulness?The rule isn't "don't use adverbs". They're part of your language, of course you can and should use them, but IN THE RIGHT AMOUNT AND CIRCUMSTANCES. Writing well is not as simple as memorizing little rules like "no adverbs, show don't tell".
>>25581977The adjective is the enemy of the substantive, nigga.
>>25581939Every book is a mirror thus every book I read by definition becomes a work of exceptional genius
>>25582049>doubles down on being retardedywnmi
>>25582040Yeah but they even use the ones that end in -ly!
>adverbs bad>adjectives badtake the poet pillput whatever as long as the Flow is good. there must be a rhythm to every sentence
>tfw finished an entire work without a single -ly adverb>had to fuck with sentence structure all over the place to get the same meaningi didn't break the rule but now i feel bad
>>25581497https://sharetext.io/qu9dk138got the first chapter finished today.
>>25582070It's mostly just people pushing minimalist prose because they are too dumb to read anything more complicated than a picture book. It's idiots making their stupidity your problem and blaming you because they can't read.
>>25582087>If you’re reading this, I’d prefer if you stopped.Ok.
>>25582083>but now i feel badWhy?
>>25582055The suspicious mind sees phantoms everywhere.
>>25582454because now I need to go back and do a new revision where I add the adverbs back
If I post a poem in here will the Prose Gods lay me out on a stone tablet as a sacrificial lamb?
>>25582467The blood of a poet is of no worth to the Prose Gods. You may post your work and you'll receive nothing more than some snide remarks and sniggering. Perhaps if your work is good, you'll even get some proper resentment as well.
>>25578425idk why this is the case, but anything creative including writing I feel is pointless due to thinking about the fact that "it won't amount to anything". I know writing for fame/money etc misses the point entirely and it's not a good way to think, but I don't know what my deal is.any anons know what I'm talking about? any insight?Read Knausgaard's essay 'Inadvertent' that is kind of on this topic and it's one of the only things that helped. I don't know
I got an idea for an interesting story, I think, but it would involve rewriting history to recontextualize 9/11 as a pranknot sure that has commercial potential
Is incest okay in fantasy stories?
>>25582573Incest is "ok" in any stories meant for a mature audience.
>>25582533Eerrrmmm you should do what you like to do and if you don’t like to do it then don’t
>>25582467There are no prose gods in the /wg/
>>25582459>unrelated fortune cookie nonsense
>>25582005you are gonna be so fucking mad when NJB blows up lmao. Stephen King and Tarantino aren't shit, in the end he's competing with Shakespeare.
I feel like King of Comedy when I write because I'm performing for an audience that doesn't exist.
>>25582464Why?
>>25579321Nobody does, faggot.
I don't think I actually want to write as a hobby if modern readers hate anything other than modern contemporary style with simplistic striped down prose and vocabulary. I dumb myself down in real life. I thought creative writing would be the one place where I could express myself without dumbing myself down.Instead it's even worse. Like getting accused of looking up obscure words because I mentioned a armoire being in a room of one scene. A word I learned when I was 4.I just at my limit of catering to people who blame me for them not knowing basic words.
>>25583023If you write as a hobby, there is absolutely no limit yourself to a style that you hate.
>>25583061I do actually want at least some people to read my stories. I just don't care about trying to make money or being super popular.
>>25583074You can always share with friends and family.
>>25583077I have nether. Mostly due to early deaths and having to move away from my hometown for work.
>>25583086Guess you should quit.Not everyone is cut out for writing.
>>25583097guys who couldn't even pass intro to rick and morty are trying to express themselves these days
>>25582996But enough about wanting to make love to you, let's talk about the book
Woe betide any AI the trains itself by plagiarizing my work. Thing's gonna come out like a Chernobyl mutant.
>>25582914To make it better
>>25582464This is why I Save As different versions when I do major revisions. It was a habit I picked up when I learned basic graphic design. Iteration I think the class called it.Though you have to stay on top of file organization of your projects though.
>>25583287>This is why I Save As different versions when I do major revisions.>It was a habit I picked up when I learned basic graphic designWe used to this because we were working in Word 97
>>25583287Yeah I have different revisions, but it wasn't like I did a pass specifically to remove adverbs. I was unnecessarily avoiding them since the beginning. So I really need a new pass to clean up the awkward sentences when an adverb can fix it.
>>25583308I see. Sucks but it's just part of the process of figuring things out. The fact you are pressing forward to address the problem is a good thing. When you get to your final draft all the work will have been worth it.
I’m tired of always getting banned for off topic posts fuck your general and fuck your shit ass writing you fucking retards
>>25582712you're right. when I write I enjoy it. yet starting is difficult sometimes.
can AI stop giving out free 8's to plebs
>>25583378What does it rate the tripe you slopped onto the page?
>>25583287You use "save as" to store revisions? How does that help you compare revisions, or restore text you deleted? Store your prose in a text format, like Markdown, which pandoc can convert back to word-processor format, and use git to store revisions. Get out of the Stone Age already.
>>25583425No
>>25583414also 8
>>25583427Then enjoy spinning your wheels in useless, unproductive effort. You are your own worst enemy. At least you know why you fail–you chose to.
>>25583378also got 8. it's probably hard locked to be somewhere close to that by its prompts. it said i had exceptional prose though and that made me feel happy inside because im pathetic... lol
>>25583414It gave me a 6
>>25583425>git>for manuscript versioningYou will never make it because you are too autistic to actually write anything that people would want to read. Even Aethon's editing process isn't 1/10 this autistic.
just finished chapter 2!day 2, 6000 words. trying to push forward with the momentum I have. writing is really fun right now and that makes me excited. i have to force myself to sleep.
>>25583642>nooo how dare you be organized and thoughtfulWeird hill to die on, but OK. Why don't you admit that such version tracking of prose is completely beyond your ability and comprehension?
>>25583331I appreciate the awfully generous interpretation of what I'm doing
>after 8 hours I've managed to write 500 words todayI wish there was a way to make myself unretarded. At the rate I'm going it'll take me a year and a half to finish my current wip.
>>25584068try sprinto botyes reallyit helped me gradually crawl out of the pit of "huhu 800 in a day is pretty good"
>>25583602getting a six is more impressive than a 8 because you broke free of the ai mandatory 8 glaze
I contemplate, to pass the lagging minutesSuch questions as the skeptics love to pose -Does time have bounds? Has space some outer limit?If not, we've met, and will again. Who knows?Is there a world outside, or do I dream?If dreaming, by what impell'd to dream of you?Is man's will free or pawn in nature's game,And love mere puppetry, pre-plann'd, untrue?On riddles such as these my mind does burn,Old nature's ancient secrets searching out -And yours - yet gleaning little in return,Crowding my head with insoluble doubt.And yet one truth I still maintain:Love's real. For proof I have my pain.
>>25584140whoops the last two lines broke meter.And yet I still one certainty maintain:Love's real. If not * why must I feel its pain?* how can I feel its pain?* I can't explain this pain.* then nothing's real but pain. More like real butt pain if you know what I'm getting at.
>>25583875not himbut using git for writing IS pretty autisticthe good news is autists can get readers too, you just have to write litrpg
>>25580642because the writing is usually terrible on a sentence level and that's often the most glaring issue in amateur writingyou're correct that the people "fixing it" usually arent fixing it thoalso: because more complex advice requires reading and digesting an entire piece and then formulating thoughtful feedback about it, which is easily 30+minutes of work. way too much effort when the response back will be "stfu you just missed the point" or no response at all in 95% of casesvery pointless to engage on either side of the aisle when it comes to posting work here
>>25584238What is the purpose of the general then
>>25584253i didn't say it had some other purpose, i just said it's horrible for fulfilling its supposed purpose
>>25584284I enjoy reading other peoples stuff. I wish you wouldnt discourage them so much.
>>25584303i think posting work to this general is more harmful than not posting. the advice is often shitty and there are a lot of trolls that will try to discourage you
You criticize this, but AI has consistently, using it's data, showed it's the best posted on /lit/. you can't beat actual hard data.
>>25584368Maybe I should just ask my mom for crit then.
>>25580419Post a scene
>>25584303>>25584368The kind that post their 'work' here for validation are exactly the kind that need to be discouraged.
>>25584397>we asked the machine if it was useful and it said yes
>>25584412FUCK YOU CUNTVALIDATE MEhttps://old.reddit.com/r/libraryofshadows/comments/1tmxinw/vicious_hell_a_2026_revision_parts_one_amd_two/
>>25583642hehe I read that as .gifyou DO store your writing in .gifs, don't you?
>>25582087>doesn't loadguess this isn't the rentry killer we wanted
>>25584419There's no other more objective measure than the machine. Why should we listen to your shitty opinion when AI is the collective opinion of everything written
>Grrr, I can't stand the thought of them. Brazenly posting their own work! In the Writing General... of all places...
Get on my level of sycophancy, nerdlingers. AI thinks I'm the next Dostoevsky
>>25584403Eh, it's a screenplay so no one here will read it anyway
>>25584445have you ever tried talking to AI about something you know well?it's really quite dumb
>>25584412Honestly what you see more is anytime a "critic" doesn't get 100% compliance and affirmation of their comically bad takes they have a full on bitch fit for two or three threads in a row. They seem to be the ones that freak out over not getting validated.It's just crab in bucket behavor and a hated for anything remotely sincere. Which is why they don't give the shit poster story people a hard time.
>>25584455Post a page
>>25584459no it's definitely both i have seen authors throw multi thread hissy fits tooit's just retards from top to bottom, this thread is for shitposting or casually chatting, not anything serious
>>25584465
>>25584470Most I have seen is authors shilling their book (which is pretty understandable) or engaging in troll feeding after being intentionally baited. Which isn't the same spite motivated behavor. So not really the same at all. I ain't going to pretend the person who gets trolled into getting irritated as being on the same level of wrong as the troll who is going out of their way to be as irritating as humanly possible.
I like my story.
Sometime in the early 2000sI walked quietly through the darkness of the summer night with the waning gibbous moon highest in the sky. The crowd of the carnival all but gone for a few catatonic witnesses. There was a soft caressing breeze that kissed my glimpsing pale skin outside my black vintage leather jacket. It blew rivulets of blood off my hands as I pulled out the still smoking 10mm Colt Delta Elite in my right hand. The unknown but would be killer gurgled out a gout of blood between his fingers as all his attention was focused on his fatal wounds. His blonde boyish looks that helped him blend in with the crowd didn't help him against my perception. Let alone experience as he thought the numbers would help him. His three partners working together like hyenas against a lion.I purposely bumped into the one closest in the carnival crowd. He didn't exclaim out loud because I had shoved my Nimravus knife into his throat two times quickly before shoving it into his balls. He did try so hard to exclaim at that but all that came out was discharging blood as even his eyes started to bleed."MOTHERFU-," The second would be killer broke his trained composure but only managing the last words of his life as I pulled out the 10mm to his chest and snapped out shots three times before quickly snapping out another two into his head.Then I quickly zeroed in on their leader with the Colt Delta Elite and punched loud holes through the civilian shield he was holding against him and hiding behind. He had foolishly hoped it would have stopped the full discharge of the hollow point filled with full gun powder instead of like the half filled rounds the police used.That was foolish to even think I would hesitate.They both went down in a shower of gore spraying everywhere, into the sky, onto the crowd, and spilt on the desecrated ground that wars were fought on.I knew I didn't have enough time to quickly zero in on the last motherfucker for a quick and finishing kill.So I rammed the back of my elbow in a direct upper strike against his chin and then like a freight train of over three hundred pounds, I slammed another repeated upper cut into his chin with the loud quick snap of teeth breaking. Blood spilled out across my face but I wasn't satisfied in the middle of the fleeing crowd of the carnival. They fucking saw me, my tactics, what I was capable of. The witnesses wouldn't only be interrogated by police but mind fucked into replaying word by word what they saw by the enemy operating within the country. I didn't like that one cunting bit.But I should be thankful they didn't have the technology for real playback yet for another ten years.
>>25584502i don't keep up with this thread as much as i used to but the Boor guy is constantly going out of his way to be as irritating as humanly possibleand you must be a newfag, i have several distinct memories of other author meltdowns over the yearsyou're probably just hyperfocusing on whatever that recent critique meltie was last week (was it last week?), i skipped all of it so I don't really remember what it was even aboutretards come in all flavors and you're kidding yourself if you think otherwise
>>25584521Nah, you are engaged in revisonist history and I strongly suspect you are one of the people responsible for the kind I bad behavor I speak of. Which is why you keep trying to use "both sides" and "whataboutism" arguments to deflect from the obvious and regular problem these threads have, and why most actual writers left these threads a long time ago or stopped posting their stuff here. Hell, you even were pretty disrespectful to the concept of writers posting their stuff in general in the beginning of this post chain, which is pretty good evidence you probably are one of these "critics" who actually are just crabs in a bucket. "yeah writers are on my level in my bucket"type shit.
>>25584499May you have a bright future in making absolute dogshit films that loads of piggies will line up at the troughs to see
>>25584543That's all I want
>>25584537not sure what schizo projecting nonsense you're on about but i haven't either posted work or critiqued it here for at least 2 yearsi discourage using this thread seriously because i think it's actively harmful to writers, and also a waste of time for good-meaning critiquers because you usually get ignored or vitriol in return. just observations at this point, it's seriously not shit I face myself (or haven't for 2 years at any rate)it's just a shitty thread and i only hang out because writing is my job and hobby (and sometimes i'm bored) and so i check in here and there
>>25584548>not sure what schizo projecting nonsense you're on aboutFirst post in the chain>The kind that post their 'work' here for validation are exactly the kind that need to be discouraged.Nigga really?Regardless your whole post is bullshit and a poor attempt at dismissal through non-falsifiable lying.
>>25584436Im sorry. Pastebin isn't working for me and I've been going from one site to another trying to figure out something that will let me post. Does this one work?https://txt.fyi/357c084710d6132d0d785d88
>>25584565what the fuck are you on about retard
>>25584572>willfully ignorant>calls other people retarded
>>25584225I never asked (nor received) the approval of others, and I'm not going to start caring now. Markdown, pandoc, and git can handle screenplay formatting, too. It'd be a lot less dishonest if you admit you have no idea how to save versions of your fiction with git, and that command-line tools like pandoc are completely beyond your comprehension.
>>25584516you're the only one.
>>25584397>AI>hard data
>>25584587>I never asked (nor received) the approval of others, and I'm not going to start caring now.extremely obvious cope stemming from years of failure and constant rejection
>>25584587I just want to click a few buttons and then start writing, this looks like code, I don't like code
>>25584587>git can handle screenplay formatting,Look up the Fountain file format. It's a plaintext markup language for screenplays. It's much cleaner than whatever the fuck that is.
>>25584605Or just use any word-processor that can do whatever mark up in the background for you while you focus exclusively on the writing.
>>25584616I AM just focusing on the text. The plugin for my text editor (VS Code) does the formatting for me.
>>25584624You really are astonishingly autistic.
>>25584624So... You reinvented a functonally worse version of a word processor and acting like others should do the same. Hell, even if you are afaid of word processors for some reason you could use a text editor like obsidian and just download plug-ins to give it only the word processing functions you want.
>>25584637Yes, but just to clarify: I'm not the one doing this: >>25584587There are at least two of us using git and coding text editors.I don't know what to say, other than my past few jobs have been coding gigs, so I'm very comfortable moving around in VS Code. I have it configured the way I like and I know all the keyboard shortcuts. Years ago, when I did technical writing, I was extremely proficient with MS Word (Office 2016 version, probably). I still remember a lot of the formatting tricks for it, so I could go back if I wanted to, but I'm comfy.
>>25584642No, I wouldn't recommend this for anyone else, unless you're already used to working in this kind of environment. Otherwise, it's a lot to learn for probably little benefit.I'm only doing it because I found out about the Fountain file format for screenplays and there's a free plugin for VS Code. And because I'm cheap and don't want to pay for Final Draft (yet). And like I said here, >>25584644, I do know MS Word, but this is easier for me.As for using git... eh, I like it, because I can easily see what I changed between drafts. I know Word has the Track Changes functionality too, I used it when I wrote IT policies in a previous life. But I remember it being a pain in the ass and kind of flaky.
>>25584653final draft is basically mandatory because you have to tune it to be one page per minute of screentime
>>25584669Yes, the standard is to use a monospace font of a certain size with certain margins and certain amounts of space between lines. If you do that (and the PDF-rendering plugin I use does), then you get pretty near to 1 page/min. There are MS Word templates you can use that accomplish the same thing, or you could set one up yourself, but with MS Word it's really easy accidentally tweak with the formatting and completely fuck it. That's why it's important to use actual software for screenwriting. Final Draft is the most popular, and has a lot of other nice-to-have features, but it's not the only one that does the 1 page/min format. They've been doing that in Hollywood since typewriters.
>>25584397AI training trends toward something called "reversion to the mean", where the weighting of ambiguous data (like taste in fiction) tries to split the difference. So if AI approves of your writing, that's another way of saying it's bland, boring, and inoffensive. Certainly nothing to crow about if your intention is to be edgy.
>>25584616I write in LibreOffice, and use pandoc to convert to Markdown before committing to version control. Were you under the impression I write screenplays in straight Markdown? I never said that, and it's insane that you assumed that.
>>25584601No, it's confidence. You're projecting your own crushed self-esteem on me.
>>25584605>Fountain has dot commandsHey look everyone, troff is back.>>25584602>waah waah code scares meSee >>25584690
>>25584680>with MS Word it's really easy accidentally tweak with the formatting and completely fuck itAnother reason why converting to Markdown is helpful–because it's really easy to see tweaked formatting, and then edit it away unambiguously. You're actually complaining about your own broken workflow.
>>25584686>if your intention is to be edgy.most people aren't emotionally stunted 13 year olds
>>25584712We're talking about The Bore here.
>>25578914A bit crude on the first sentence but I like this one
Does anyone have any thoughts on this? opening to the book I'm writing.
>>25584887Seems more like a blog post or rambly diary post than the start of any story I have personally read.What is the rest of it really about?Like elevator pitch of the overall story? Just want a bit more context to know what you are going for and if this page is moving towards or away from that goal.
>>25584928>>25584887It's a non fiction book aimed at demystifying homeless people, societal observations, and collection of essays from the perspective of a homeless person living in the PNW. Kind of part memoir, part salacious shlock. It wants to say."Idk if you want to read this or if you're ready for it. Are you sure? You're gonna read your sisters diary! Okay I'm gonna show you, it's forbidden knowledge!. It's gonna be gross and funny and tragic and way more sophisticated than you expect given the source! Okay here it comes!"It's not a "story" with a traditional narrative.
>>25584887hard to follow. snaps between unrelated thoughts too often>>25584970>from the perspective of a homeless persondoesnt even feel that way. can't even tell there's a character there speaking, just feels like the author blogging about something
>>25584397AI likes mediocre slop. It's trained to favor that (and that's why it can only produce that too).
>>25584397NJB appreciates space monkey anons shilling his stuff but nobody likes AI or really cares what it has to say. Post YOUR opinion of the full story.
>>25585083Ai doesn't like, dislike, or think anything. There is no intentionally behind it's output. It is incapable of having taste. You are basically rolling lots and assuming meaning in the random.
>>25585105Sorry no can do, I wouldn't pay a nickel for your failed screenplay. The first 3 pages are honestly garbage.
>>25585330You don't have to. https://pdfhost.io/v/JQH3HMZNJJ_King_of_L_A
>>25585330>the bucket crab strikes out in fear and confusionevery single white male screenwriter (and thus the movie industry) has "failed" over the last 10 years, zero (0) spec screenplays have been bought and made since the french revolution of Me Too, and yet NJB is still infinitely more successful than your dumb ass.
Today someone claiming to be with an obscure podcast contacted me with a 100% AI-generated evaluation of my novella. I do not think I shall reply.
>>25585670Nigerian scammer fags never sleep. Here's another one impersonating a romance slop author to bait engagement. Didn't even bother with a VPN to change location from "Africa" because boomers won't bother to check it kek.
Is there a political theory that relying on the state for basic needs incentivizes the state to abuse those dependent on them? Does they even make sense?
>>25585600Cope and seethe
>>25585805Communism and learned helplessness
>>25585843>NJB book sales dwarf any other /wg/ poster by orders of magnitude>cope and seetheyep, you definitely are. make sure and stay on these nuts tho, thx for the bump again!
I'm writing a part in a story that's horribly sad and bittersweet and I know it's gonna make me cry, and I don't want to. I don't want my family asking what I'm crying about. I feel like such a pussy.
She reached around on the floor without looking, pushing through the garbage dump of empty bags and discarded wrappers, grabbing the first thing she found. A family size bag of cheddar cheese potato chips. She tore the bag open and started mindlessly feeding them into her mouth. Laying in bed in the position she was in, she couldn’t see her feet over the mound of her belly that rose several inches into the air. She pushed down with one hand to make sure they were still there. She wiggled her toes in her pink socks, then stopped pushing down and they disappeared again. Alissa had never been skinny. Always a chubby little kid. But in the last four months since their dad had walked out, she’d absolutely ballooned. The comfort eating had started day of and hadn’t stopped for even a moment since. Her white pajamas with the green dinosaurs had grown almost skin tight. No, they hadn’t grown. They’d stayed exactly the same. She’d grown. Getting the next size up would have involved an embarrassing conversation with her mother, so she just chose to live with it. There were six buttons, and currently two were undone. She hadn’t looked at herself in the mirror in weeks. Always keeping her eyes closed when she showered or brushed her teeth. She’d accidentally caught a glimpse of herself a while ago and it had looked like a Bigfoot sighting. Under the bathroom sink, lurking like a horrible monster, was their scale. She didn’t dare go near it, in case it jumped out and weighed her. At least she wasn’t crying anymore. She’d start again later, but for now the food was doing its job. She let out a loud, disgusting belch that the neighbors down the street probably heard. The chips were kind of plain, so she fumbled around her windowsill for the nutella. Not taking her glazed eyes off the TV, she started dipping the chips in a thick slathering of chocolate before each bite. From somewhere in the folds of her bed sheets, her phone buzzed a notification. She lurch into a sitting position, spilling chip crumbs down her front, and frantically searched for it. She found it under the covers and tapped the pop-up to see what had been posted. It was Emma Steinwitz. Pretty little bleach-blonde skinny enough she could hide behind a coat rack Emma Steinwitz. She’d posted a selfie in math class with one eye closed and her pierced tongue sticking out from between her glossy pink lips. Alissa felt a pulsing hatred radiate through her entire body. With chocolate-stained fingers and eyes glaring, she left several mean comments in quick succession from her anonymous account. “Slut”“Nice Dye Job”“Didn’t I see you at the STD clinic last week?”She then switched to a second fake account to thumbs-up all her own comments. A satisfied grin spread across her face.
>>25585966Who cares. Crying is the best part of my day.
Wrote 10k words yesterday. Slept three hours. Still writing today. So tired. Send help.
Wrote 1000 words yesterday. Feeling another 1000 today.
All work and no play makes jack a dull boy
>>25586453But what if the work feels like play?
>>25586475Its an allusion you dipstick
>>25586480More of a proverb actually. Anyway, are we not allowed to have fun here or something? Just a playful comment to poke a hole into a common saying. Chill dude.
>>25586487I was making a joke about people saying how many words they wrote, because in the shining he writes that over and over again which would be a very high word count but meaningless
yeah the word count thing seems kinda robotic and meaningless. i measure in pages/day but more importantly does your story suck or not?
1200 words today, all exposition dumping, but at least the characters are moving through locations so I got to describe some weird shit.
>>25583642Not him but I am yet another person using markdown and git for versioning. (I guess that makes three of us total if >>25584644 is anything to go by?) Also a programmer by trade so it's less autism and more just using the tools I'm already familiar with. Unlike other anon, I would not recommend people learn git and other programming tools just for this unless you really want to. Plenty of other options. It's just happens to be convenient for me. I will say that git is specifically built for versioning text. Like that's its whole purpose. That's what code is at its core, just text files with different extension names. So it's an incredibly efficient and useful tool once you learn how to use it. Instead of saving the entire text several times over, it saves the full text once and then saves only what changed between each version and layers those changes on top to give you your current working version so the footprint's really small.
>>25586508I'm the 10k guy. I just really got into the groove yesterday and couldn't stop. Wasn't a goal, just kind of happened. Slowed down today which honestly I'm thankful for, my sleep schedule got recked by that. I usually do 1-2k.
I had AI review and rate my book. It gave it an A-. It's so supportive and helpful unlike /lit/.
>>25586543again, not sure what anybody else is supposed to get from this. how about describe the actual story? you could've wrote 10k words of an encyclopedia volume or a journal entry.
>>25586581>not sure what anybody else is supposed to get from thisNothing in particular, just shit posting. The story itself is about a couple kids whose house burns down with parents inside and they live on the street for a while before getting picked up by some gruff guy. Guff guy becomes father figure and basically adopts them and falls for the woman who helps him care for them. Obviously there's more flavor and stuff going on underneath but that's the gist.
>>25581487>great man theory>great man theoryWhy you keep pointing out great man theory (great man theory) like this, when it has nothing to do with the point? I'm talking about the (great man theory) usage: specific person's life or agentic view is understandable enough. It's like saying crimson (red) or OP (retard): you're drawing attention away from your point and making it seem like you hate great man theory enough to shit it in public places (your mom).
>>25584653>No, I wouldn't recommend this for anyone else, unless you're already used to working in this kind of environment. Otherwise, it's a lot to learn for probably little benefit.I disagree. Pratically the only skill a fiction writers need for git is>git add --all;>git commit -m "X">git checkout -b X_1>git checkout X_2>git checkout X_1The hardest part is trusting what the terminal said. Hell if they're willing to use github desktop, even for docx, you get save as capabilities while being able to navigate between drafts quickly without having multiple files. There's probably some issues, I use markdown (because I write in lunch like a slave I am), but I doubt you couldn't make it work if you really want to.
>>25583023It's the cumulation and not selling me that you earned it. If you're a Victorian writer, I trust you with two dollar words like countenance or ardor. But if you're story is sloppy, description is fake and your diction is violating POV (like having a five year old in 2025 know what countenance is) than I don't trust you with those words. In the modern age it's a glass canon: if you can write well it's great, but if you can't its purple prose.
>>25586475Than he isn't working dumb fuck.
>>25583023They also like present tense.
>>25586663Eww
>>25586636would a five year old in 1855 know what countenance means?
>>25586636>It's the cumulationDude, I have read your sentence several times and this part in context makes no fucking sense. The cumulation of what nigga? > not selling me that you earned itSomeone thinks overly highly of themselves. Who the fuck are you?Do you even regularly read/buy indie books?No?Then no one in this thread should give the faintest fuck about your opinion on anything because you aren't the target audience. You are someone who gets filtered by words. > two dollar wordsWords are free to a free mind. Your mind is contracted so you are on a cognitive budget.
>>25586742Depends on their class. I think it's a word someone of the upper crust would be exposed to enough that they would have some idea of the context in which it is used, even if they couldn't define it. Doubt a lower class youth would know.
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>>25586558Just ask it to be more objective or more critical or something like that and it'll get the message that you want it to shit on you a litter harder
>>25586608did you read Lemony Snicket as a kid?
>>25584397uh oh>>25586733
>>25586742Yes? I got it from Frankenstein and not only did he say it, but he said it multiple times. It's common enough that I imagine lower classes themselves know about it. I didn't research this but this is speculation from first principals. >>25586751Lol I didn't format it correctly cause I'm drunk and a fag. What I specifically mean is you're using ornate diction to hide the fact that your story is garbage. I said Frankenstein because I do enjoy that style (even if I fail at it ), as well as Oliver Twist and House of Mirth. But when I said they earn it, I mean the story actually has things to say, characters to explore, and a plot that's fun. As for your buying indie books, let's set aside the fact that it's easily disprovable, I said "selling it to me" as a way of saying you got to earn that diction. Language that blurs the meaning of the story is just a crutch of a bad story.
>"Build your vocabulary to make yourself a better reader; choose simple words whenever possible to make yourself a better writer." - Garner's Modern English UsageThis is gospel. This is the truth. Anyone who says otherwise is a liar and a fool. No, I didn't take it out of context
I didn't even realize rentry had a view counter. My fat smut got 300 views. I'll take that.
>>25586851Anti-intellectualism is bad. You are bad and whoever you are referencing is also bad. Simple enough for you?
>>25586851I feel like you're simplifying what I said. What I said is simple: unless you have a good command on language and your story is good, you should avoid high diction. A word here or there for description is fine, but it shouldn't be meat of the story unless you know what you're doing. That's why I said I don't mind Frankenstein. Shelly knows what's she's doing. She knows how to portray someone's head, like Victor's autism with alchemy. With that I am onboard for the ride. What I am specifically talking about is writers who have nothing to say, who use big words (or even multiple words) for the effect of one word for no reason. Purple prose.
>>25586866So to simplify even more into a pithy sound bite. >Do it well or don't do it at allWhen it comes to writing "fancy".
>>25586538We live in an age where AI can walk even a cretin through the basic steps of git and Markdown, opening up this sort of highly-functional version-control and document-generation to anyone!
>>25586626>The hardest part is trusting what the terminal said.That's what GUIs are for. Git Extensions is available on most platforms. I use Git Gui and Git Kraken under Linux. You're going to need a GUI for visual-diff anyway. I use Meld.
>>25586636>>25586742I knew big words when I was 5. I've been reading since I was 18 months old. Then I go to school and find all the other kids are undisciplined, ignorant animals. It's never really gotten any better.>>25586753My parents were poor. The library is free.
>>25586887Were there even free libraries in 1855?Also wasn't literacy for the lower classes in that time period really low?
>>25586895The first free library in America opened in 1790, whippersnapper. And literacy is a matter of effort, slacker.
>>25586866I fundamentally disagree with this due to how learning works. If someone doesn't practice something they never will get better at it. Everyone is bad when they first start, they shouldn't avoid something because they are bad at it. They should do it more to practice, learn from what they are doing wrong, and do better next time in the next draft/story. You can not get better at what is difficult by avoiding what is hard. You don't get better if you fear failure or being bad at something. Embrace failure as part of the process. Embrace being bad at something as part of the journey. And most of all reject the small minds that aim to crush you for aiming high, only embrace criticism that is actually factually constructive towards your goals. You reach the highest highs by building up to it, not by tearing things down to the lowest common denominator.
>>25582874Better to be king for a day than shmuck for a lifetime.
>>25578425Read my poem please.
>>25587300I STUDIED YOUR POEM"YOU WILL KNOW THEM BY THEIR FRUITS"- THE HOLY BIBLE
>>25587303I studied your response to my poem.I stared at a rat.
>>25587307I STUDIED YOUR STUDIOUS RESPONSE TO MY STUDIOUS RESPONSE TO YOUR POEM"THERE'S A RAT IN ME KITCHEN, WHAT I'MMA GONNA DO?"- UB40 (MUSIC)
>>25587316I'll tell you what we won't do. We won't eat the rat or feed it. Unless we have cheese, or a fortune teller.
>>25587318"Just" "Release" "IT" to "Nature" and "LET IT GO"Have you heard? https://youtu.be/L0MK7qz13bUConcatenate "Just" with "ice" respectively. Do you know you need two "positions" to measure the "distance"?Do you know in what "unit" is "distance" through "space" measured?If you went through the coming "TRIAL" doing your "Completely Automated Public Turing test to tell Computers and Humans Apart" put in YOUR mind that God does play dice and God KNOWS at what "Face-" would the dice be "UP", We can do it through a Very Advanced Computer with a Very Precise "CAMERA" (A Vision Identification System) and an ((Excellently)) designed "intelligent" software and WE can carefully measure the forces on the dice even with the existence fluid resistance and through the "distance" and "time" it would "Touch The Grass".( We Could Even Touch The Divinely Sky ;)
>>25587483OH SHIT HERE COME THE HEAVENLY MATHEMATICAL GEOMETRICSTHAT'S INTELLECTUALLY SUFFICIENT AND SATISFYING ENOUGH TO KEEP US BOTH VIRILELY AND FEMINELY BUSY FOR AEONS
>>25586830No but I've seen excerpts. What I'm writing has a different tone
What in the damning with faint praise is this bullshit? I should be proud my story has a beginning middle and end?
>>25578753Now kiss.
>tfw trying to write romance while I am a kissless virgin
>>25586857>encourages the cultivation of a broad lexicon>"anti-intelectual"
Oh shit, my screenplay is up to 61 pages and idk if I even have 15 more pages of material planned.
>>25578537tits or gtfo
>>25578571tbf that’s how it is written
>tfw you're cooking and you know it>>25588076Hire a prostitute and whatever you write will get 300% better
>>25588076Romance written by someone who has not experienced it can often be much better than 'realistic' romance written by someone who has
>>25588076Gooners write powerful smut, and yearners write powerful romanceYou're fine
>>25587941What's damning about it? Wow, you really are a depressed 14 year old.
>>25587941>Worked for 10slmaoif your story doesnt take a minute to analyze you're ngmi
Thanks anons. I sold 2 books this month.
>>255890762 more than me. good job
>>25589076Congrats! My books have never made enough money to even pay for the fee to copyright them.
>>25589161I'm losing money on this, but was a lot of fun.
>>25588646Telling people not to use uncommon words is not "encouraging the cultivation of a broad lexicon"It is the opposite.
WHAT YOU'LL BRING:Reggie was sick of seeing it, always followed by some pithy jargon that does a half-job of explaining what undervalued experience he should be lugging behind him into yet another bland corporate sarcophagus. He felt a prospective employee would recognize this language as empty and pandering."But you can't say that..." he muttered to himself, his fingers pecking at another cover letter, most of which was copied and pasted the fiftieth time over, details changed as needed. "You can't say that at all."He grabbed his room temperature bottle of Reed's, pulling it up for a sip, but he clipped the bottle on the back of his laptop screen. in a bad reflex, he dropped the bottle, flooding his dusty keyboard and its ailing switches with the spiciest ginger ale the Kroger on West Dale Street had to offer."God FUCKING DAMMIT!"Reggie stumbled as he kicked his chair back. Struggling to keep his balance, he stepped forward without realizing his bare foot was now beneath the metal five-star base of his chair. A blast of pain fired behind his eyes as the base raked the top of his foot and toes, and he stepped forward quickly with his free leg in an effort not to fall, but the belt loop of his jeans had already been perilously close to the knob of his desk's sliding drawer, and with this newest motion, the knob had caught his jeans firm, and Reggie's battle to stay upright came to a theatrical close.He spun to the right as he fell, his hip hitting the seat of the chair, further scraping his foot as it flew upward from the chair's base, and as he tumbled, his opposite foot kicked the underside of his desk hard enough to knock the laptop onto it's back, further splashing the faux-Caribbean soda all over his workstation.Reggie completed his arc, landing flat on the floor. A sharp exchange of information between his battered L-4 and L-5 made it to his head faster than he could react, and he lay on the floor defeated. A piss-like ginger ale puddle stained the crotch and right inseam of his jeans, the belt loop and waistband of which were now partially ripped."What I'll bring..." Reggie groaned, and he thumped the desk angrily with his fist. Cathartic as it was, this caused the now mostly empty Reed's bottle to roll off of the desktop, tumbling in its descent. Fixated on the bottle's acrobatics, Reggie realized too late its trajectory, and was unable to brace himself as the bottle's aft end landed right in the center of his crotch.An involuntary abdominal crunch from the pain caused his lumbar spine to once more yell upstairs, his mind happy to respond with more pain, humbling him.Opening his eyes as the circus of agony left town, Reggie could see the ceiling fan spinning slowly and off kilter above him, its hypnotic sway a relic of the two mounting screws he'd never replaced. The whole room smelled like warm ginger ale and Reggie wished that the fan would come loose and crush his skull."What you'll bring."
Bit of a cautionary tale. Underage character, but nothing explicit. https://rentry.org/f4zdbefi
>>25589244>"build your vocabulary?" sounds anti-intellectual to me
>>25578425Nice post "Orginal Poster" keep it "UP" "all".
>>25589244if language is for communication, then to obfuscate it because you’re impressed by complicated words is the unintellectual (or should we just say, stupid) move. you might know more but your power of judgement is less.
>>25589723May I resolve this conflict between you?I think, therfore I am :), that the possession of the quality of good judgment makes it obvious for you when to use a specfic word do you need a simple word so the meaning is direct or some complex word that holds a complex meaning, for example you usage of the word "obfuscate", I do not think it is a simple word but it fits well and delivered the meaning you wanted to do so.While many factors are involved such as the circumstances and the current state of the audience... etc.Although I think that judgment and knowledge can be aquired, don't you think so?
>>25589745esl?
I have a question, this isn’t really about the quality of the stories at allBut how do writers create insanely long stories like something like ASOIAF or hell even long convoluted game series like Kingdom HeartsObviously not everything is planned out and you can just write as you go, but how to you not retroactively make things worse, or write yourself into a corner where a twist or reveal wouldn’t make sense anymore
