>>84916982
His callous hands gripped my waist and I gasped. As he began to explore my body, tease my nipples, his heavy breathing intoxicating me, I began going limp. Whats happening? I havent taken any substance, and the only thing i ate that night was the dinner he made us. I never asked for this... but the way he was licking my neck, one hand fondling my breasts and the other teasing my privates... he was trying to attone for the lack of consent by pleasing me.

>>84916982
I don't like that line.
It's too ambiguous. It plays on common tropes, like eyes resembling stars as tiny and beautiful dots of light that iluminate the dark night sky, or them being the most expressive part of the face and the one that draws the most attention.

But what exactly is it trying to say? From the narrator's perspective, is he saying that looking into her eyes brought light to an otherwise dark/foggy plane? Is he saying that her eyes worked as guiding stars for him, suddenly giving a sense of direction? Is it saying that she actually has metaphysical powers which are able to light up the firmament? Is it saying that the stars looked uninteresting or dull until he saw them reflected in her eyes? Is it saying that the beauty of the stars or the world itself isn't in the objects, but in the happiness the narrator sees expressed in her eyes when she looks at them?

My penis got pulled out like a police batton

>>84917098
You need to retardmaxx

>>84917098
Her eyes were like the seed of a stallion

>>84916982
This is why I come up with my own shit when I roleplay in my bed with myself
>hey baby your eyes light up the stars
not even in my dreams would this not kill the mood

Her vagina was brown like poo

He missed this one, boss.