yeaaaa, just looking for honest critiques and things i can improve on, i love laura sm i had to draw her. hopefully this does her justice lol
Your rendering and pencil control aren't bad, but the proportions are all off. You need to sensitize your eye to distances. I strongly recommend printing off a Bargue plate, taping it to your wall next to a sheet of paper, and trying to copy the plate exactly on that sheet. Put a piece of tape on the floor a few feet from the wall, and stand behind the tape to visually measure the Bargue plate, then step forward to make marks on the paper, step back again to measure, etc, until the plate is fully copied. Copy a few plates and you'll be much better at measuring stuff with your eyes.
>>7742064Do Betty Edwards or Bert Dodson. Draw what you see. Don’t be lazy. Stop coming to /ic/.
It's pretty good, I like the stringy hair on the far side beneath her chin. Overall, it looks like you'll learn well even if it's just through persistence right now. For critique though, Anon >>7742077 says your rendering is good. But I think the attention you pay to the values and the shapes they roughly make could benefit from a bit stronger focus. Just some examples, the far eye is a touch overly dark near the nose and too pale toward the ear, while the closer eye is too pale over all. And the cheek near the viewer is quite lighter than in the photo, and somewhat more crescent shaped than the semi-triangle form in the ref. Thay could be intentional though, as it makes her skin look thinner and more prone to creasing, kinda creepier. Despite that, I think they should be blended a little more into the larger mass of the cheek. Lastly, the hair could use some closer studies to improve ... however, I can't really explain because I'm no better at hair lol. Except that ot also is much darker than the ref.Anyhow, I think it looks like you did put in solid effort and attention.
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>>7742064Learn to measure first and get things accurate before you start shading and adding details. I know that's the fun part of drawing but you need to eat your veggies before you get to the dessert.
sketch ahead next time and make sure you measure every item in the face ahead. you should also not make a seperate thread for this. getting the angles and sizes right is most important when doing portraits, the details and style come right after you achieved a very high likeness.
Literally no one itt can do better btw
>>7742379here's my first sketch, something OP probably didnt do, just to get it aproximately placed right. now you start to finetune and erase, change sizes etc, maybe even decide what to do with it (ink, stipple, hatch, pencil etc.). i think mine turned out slightly long, so i will make sure to add some width/make it shorter in some places, or rather look out what i did wrong. which OP didnt do as well. these things take time to get right, the shapes, angles, length etc. you cant just wing it, you sketch it out till it looks right. if something looks wrong and you dont know exactly what it is at that moment, you let it rest and come back in a few minutes and figure out why. it's a bad reference picture to begin with, since its very grainy and not detailed, fits more for a scruffy painting style now post yours. oh wait, you dont draw at all!
>>7742518>Looks worse than OP.>Darkens the lines when you're still finetuning the proportionsYou pretty much proved the guy you were replying too right. I suggest listening to your own advice instead of handing it out.
>>7742532>>Looks worse than OP.sure it does ;) post yours
>>7742532you had more than two hours now, you still havent posted yours
>>7742064Last time I drew something The Log Lady died
>>7742064Try going more bold with your shadows. Blur your eyes and simplify her entire face into light and dark. So the cheek on screen-right would be entirely dark except a triangle of light curving underneath her eye. And i when I say dark I mean just a tone of Grey. Save the sharp point of your pencil and your heavy darks for details at the end.
>>7742518Stop giving advice
>>7743091post your work. all the advice is correct
>>7742077He could also just alter the DNA of all humanity so the anatomical canon matches his art. Or, more practically, perform surgery.
>>7742518See >>7742379
>>7743122Theres literally no instruction or critique of any kind. Its a god-awful ugly drawing with a paragraph of nonsense in it. There is not a single line of applicable advice anywhere in that useless waste of narcisstic text. Its a disaster and a disgrace
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>>7743191pyw
>>7742064Measurements are mostly ok, but you use so much pressure on everything you don't have the room to make the blacks dark. Instead of shading with gradient use just 2 tones - shadow and dark shadow. Sketch contours very lightly, then add shadows with half-pressure, then finish darkest parts.
>>7744483His looks 10x better than yours. Stop giving advice.
