Can you write better poetry than this? Give it a try.
Chongfen Ling-Harvey has. Poetic genius, that slanted star.
>>24698679How the fuck is this poetry?Here's my extremely ignorant attempt:Gnawing worms of self obsessionPuncture deeply into firmament And the flesh thereof And the eyes turn. inside inAnd the heart grows black as a cinderAnd the mind in an orgy of congratulatory rapeTurns aside^shitted out of my ass in about 45 seconds, IDK if I made it melodramatic enough
Why does death sound soAppealing to me?I am drawn to itLike a moth to flame
>>24698679idk local literary mag just rejected this one today
>>24698783Yeah that sucks, just get AC
As I was reading the mantraMy head spun like a thousand planetsI was thinking of my mamaAnd the times by the river, the internetI was glad this too shall passLike a laxative in my stomachLike the hill hiding the sun What's the use of pondering so much?There is no need for rhymesWhen you have California cloutAlas, I have noneAnd neither talentSo I shall shitpost till the endMy only purpose is to go out with a bangLike a wet card box turning into a bombLike a sad nerd with a chip on his shoulder
>>24698786the poem, living in florida or both?
>>24698801Yes
pls rember that wen u feel scare or frightennever forget ttimes wen u feeled happywen day is dark alway remember happy day
>>24698804Based
tilt my skull like a glasspour your troubles inthis dreary scenea darkless daydreamand we are wasting away
To suffice unto oneself, Like very God, Three-in-one,Self-enjoying,Indeed a love triangle,From Eternity(A solemn word,And indeed the Word).And yet to be a creature,Contingent, a thing,And yet a being,Mirroring him,Aware as him,I too divine,In a way,And yet contingent,And yetBut a creature."I am enough."To utter thisIs it notTo refuseThe very possibilityOf love(A sentimental word)?God is not sufficientUnto himself;Even GodWho is loveIs a loveFor each other;The Three PersonsAnd all that;And thisFrom Eternity(Again the wordRings solemn).For God is solemn,And God is lightAs a feather;God is light,A blinding flash,A light lethal;A light upon whichOne may not gaze;And yetA light(Very muchLike the Sun)Life-giving.These my solemn words;And to be solemnIs to err;And yet I wrote themAnd (God help me)Shall now post them.
>>24698773If you removed the rape, I could easily see this in the kind of airport poetry books Rupi Kaur falls into.
>>24698827Awesome hahaha time to quit my dayjob and grift off low iq bpd women
if kissing the homiesgentlywith a tendernessi never showed youis gaythen i guessi'm gay-- b. f. t.
>>24698679sparks coat my tonguesmoke rises from memorieseyes bleed salt over firesoot gives way to stale airmy lungs burn in the cindersblood boils to sanguine steamcharred, stinging air on raw skinemergent over a burnt huskan offering, my wicker self
>>24698848Dude, I live near one of the biggest malls in the country, and the "bookstore" in it, is just monster-fucking romance novels, self-help books, and this level of poetry. It's not impossible, lol
>>24698848The problem is that the market's unbelievably saturated at the moment. People started this grift ten years ago, and the style is basically the same across all of the abortive collections in the subgenre. (Trust me -- I've read about fifty of them as a part of my research.) I know a girl who does her own art for her terrible poetry, posts every single day, and has amassed something like 100k followers. Her books don't even sell.
>>24698679cum my pantsshe smirksI hate HR meetings
>>24698679This seems more like an aphorism or perhaps an epigram than a poem.
when you feeling sadslap yourself on headthat your brain may whirrand your heart may stirand you may rememberon this bleak decemberbleak and black and woesaid blind nigger joethat it could get badderlike a diseased bladderwoe piles up on woesaid old hunchbacked joewith his eye of glassand his half-bared assgood ole hobo joewith his purple toe
>>24698679>shit>shit, a poem
>>24699071Don’t speak of me. You don’t know my story.
>>24698783Not a good poem but I picked up ont the Lovecraft themes before reading the last paragraph so good job I guess
>>24698783Florida Man Swamppunk. Keep at it. Do something on El Dorado.
rinky winklepop a pimpleprickly picklepickle pimpwinky winkystinky pinkybelly buttonstinky lintykiss my nipplelick it cleanfor i amthe pickle king
>>24699141Harrowing. Bone chilling. Transcendental. Orgasmic.
The maidens are holding umbrellas,The dogs are attending the dames.They are very guapas and süßchen and bellas,And will never tell you their names.The moon burning red in the sky,For silver's been long out of favor,And yellow the hue of the pie,And sugar and lemon the flavor.How gay to write lines such as these,How fröhlich to frolic like this,To honk like a gaggle of geeseAnd plunge into yonder abyss.
>>24698783Not really a poem, but if that were the opening paragraph to a short story or novel, I would keep reading.
roses are redviolets are blueop is a faggotand so are you-anonymost
>>24698679>2010 era emo Facebook status updates are considered poetry now
>>24698679I wrote myself a droll ol' poemI've written more but none'll know 'emI writ a little gay poem
how comemodern "poetry"is just a sentencesplit upover 10 tenswhat happened toiambic pentameter
ASSPISSINGDICKSHITTINGC O C KC O C KC O C KC O C K
rupi kaur is very easy to understand- women want to be seen consuming poetry because thats in fashion, but theyre ultimately the same people as their live-laugh-love mothers, they just changed the format of how they get their slopyou just read tweets but you get to pretend youre being cultured, its honestly a pretty smart grift. its like how twitter greek statue avatars get to read 60 pages of marcus aurelius and then talk about how theyre into literature the rest of their life
Roses are redNiggers are blueHanged and deadAll for you
>rupi kaur is very easy to understand- women want to be seen consuming poetry because thats in fashion, but theyre ultimately the same people as their live-laugh-love mothers, they just changed the format of how they get their slop>you just read tweets but you get to pretend youre being cultured, its honestly a pretty smart grift. its like how twitter greek statue avatars get to read 60 pages of marcus aurelius and then talk about how theyre into literature the rest of their life
>>24698679Can you write betterpoetry than thisgiveit a try
Can someone find those two faggots from the other poetry thread yesterday? They had that really long argument about contemporary poetry. One of them got so angry he was basically frothing at the mouth kek
My modest Balkan honest friendHas never wanted better lifeI wonder why the case with him wasThat his preference really was to die
>>24698804wise words
Cunt, cunt, cuntYou're mother was a cunt onceAnd probably still is
>>24698679>my fertile, brown field>fertilized by white seed>i hate the bulb that grows inside of me>writhing>twisting>from formlessness springs being>fermenting>and parasitic>i've already made>an appointment>at the>abortion clinic> -rupi kaur
>>24698810Unironically good
>>24698679Trodden pathways of a tall mountain trail,A river flows beside, it carries words,For the poets' flourished lapping tongues,None could babble with such right eloquenceFurther still beneath, adrift incessA pit a yawning maw, their foul stream's source,Paraded masqueraded platitudes,Emperil to drown out the little stream.Let me climb so, to find its source and drink,Drink deep of origin, of truth composedAnd see the world abound without myself,Look upon and know the form of beautywhich self-important poets do oppose.
>>24698878>monster-fucking romance novelsUnfathomably based
>>24698804I keep rembering. Thx anon.
