>>24722983
imagine fumbling the white trash wannabe stacy at your shitty backwater town only for her to go on to become the world's biggest giga-stacy and world's most massive cunt

I honestly can't tell if it's a win or a loss on his part.

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>>24723201
When I was 15-17, I dated a girl who looked ec-fucking-sactly like this era TS. I saw her recently, and she's shaved her head and grown out her armpit hair and such, so... Idk it could go either way.

>>24723345
>she's shaved her head and grown out her armpit hair and such, so...
this type of woman is the one who begs for you to cum in her ass, anon. she would've slobbered all over your balls

>>24723345
20 years ago every girl looked like this

Hopefully this thread will be free of genreslop. If you write about elves wielding magic laser swords while zipping around space at warp speed you should unironically unalive yourself.

>>24723369
i've seen you post some variant of this low effort bait like a million times. get a life

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When I finished this I had the wild and irrepressible conviction that I had just produced the greatest work of short fiction in the history of our species. Now that I have re-read it to the point of being able to recite it by heart, the familiarity has deadened any appreciation I was able to have for it, so I can no longer tell if it's good.

https://tomasleonas.substack.com/p/the-sorrows-of-young-blakeley

>>24723441
Perhaps it's just my preference, but I think this excerpt is amazing, anon. Just the right amount of prose put towards drawing an exquisite portrait. Almost poetic, but simple enough that anyone could read it. That being said, I skimmed the first paragraph of the substack you posted below, and I think you're laying it on a bit thick too early on. I'd say you should roll back the language just a little; be a bit more casual.

Don't mind me, just testing spoiler tags

test
[spoilers] test [/spoilers]

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I wrote my first light novel ;-) an excerpt my friend picked out:

"I want to believe he’s found a way in you––that used as I am, I have remained faithful to the one I met so many years ago and that all the times he’s left me, by choice or otherwise, have only been the turns inside a braid."

jerdarious.org/betweentwovalleys

>>24723522
/wng/ is the thread you're looking for

Can anyone recommend me books kinda in the style of dark(2019), i am trying to write a cape book where the protagonist has time based power which end up causing a timewar late in the book.

>>24723560
it is a physical book friend..my second one, that is. my third one, which actually is a web novel, isn't that one

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Segway

"You've got your mousse in your hair, you must be going out . . ." Jo', splitting the strands of the shag carpet with her eyes, her head down. Like ever, each gesture -- a caress. Josephine and I's days of communicating are lapsed; -- this has long-since come clear: 'No,' 'Yes,' 'Okay,' -- I couldn't tell you if those things constituted full-sentences.
I knew well enough not to give way to phony-remorse. In my concession to angst I'd begin something forceful, -- pathetically thrifty. In fact I'm grateful this little-tragedy's come here, -- not when I was younger. I've faith enough not to want Jo' her for her body; -- 'I really don't,' -- I figured whilst viewing something *supple.* I'll never want anything cheap again. Either free, or costly will do. That aforementioned 'cheap' thing hasn't my grace.

My heart cares for her and is kind, -- my frame, I'll admit, wants to die against she: slight but *plush.* That felicity I view, is an intelligence of mind, -- rare; is a wisdom of nature's matronly-soul, revealed frail and minute: -- a young girl is destined wise before her years.

'Lost mirth' is a thing you can look at: so more-recklessly I work now. Indifference is starting to set like the flighty-sun. "Jo', babey."
"Baby?"
"We don't feel for each-other any, -- at all. You're going to be my prom-queen beauty right? That's what you really signed up for . . ."
Girls can't really give a deadpan look, now I'd beheld that 'deer-stare;' more crudely like a doggy. The impression falls upon me here, -- she doesn't know what to make of me.
"--Jo', maybe you can try despising me."
"What the hell?" she said.

>>24723441
Why the decision to write in such an archaic voice? Who is your narrator? What is the time period? It is very verbose (not this excerpt specifically but the opening of the story especially). And there is no need in fact to introduce Mr. Hawthorne. You can go straight into the dialogue. You can simply start the story with the line
>“So he went through with it,”

>>24723401
This general has always had a problem with genreslop. Why do you people pretend it’s wrong for me to remind you of that?

>>24723441
You'll grow out of being an anachronistic epigone in a few years.

The user sat in his den, brooding as he always did. Pupils fixed on words upon words of glib gibberish as the clock on the mantle ticked away. Perhaps there is a metaphor here, he thought. Could it be that the ticking of the clock is symbolic of my wasting; life and time; the hours, minutes…why, down to the very second of my life itself!? Wasting away.

The user mused all of this while scratching at his lithe body, hairs sputtering from his palid skin as though he were a leper in Jerusalem. Though he’d never been to the holy city, he felt it fitting and literary of him to compare himself to it.

“No one understands me,” he said aloud. “No one understands my genius!”

The user wrote more. Fingers typing in a flurry. Keys blurring away beneath his concave chest as words transposed onto the message board (not before fiddling with the font spacing first, of course), condemning all who opposed his views while simultaneously wallowing in self-pity. Yes, if you must know he was crying during this ordeal.

“I’ll show them!” he barked as spit flew from his mouth and onto the computer screen. “I’ll show these fucks why I’m a better writer. I’ll debate with them all day and night if I have to. I’ll show them why using a specific app to write is better than their choices!”

Manuscripts of unfinished novels, short stories and epic poems sat on his computer desktop. The user deleted them, before restoring them, reading each and every one before concluding: he was a genius. There was no doubt about it—absolute genius!

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>>24723601
Roll for your autumn gf anons

>>24723690
You really don't like you any of that 'soul,' do you, Anon.

>>24723690
rolling that pumpkin spice

>>24723690
I don't want any of those.

How do i make full, exclusive first person pov for a single character through the whole thing not boring?
Also, how do i expand my vocabulary as a ESL?

>fell almost 1300 words short of my goal this week
Eh I could probably make it up within the next six hours. But will I?

>>24723441
Funny, I'd just heard of The Remains of the Day and this reminded me of that somehow. I like the prose, Anon.

>>24723369
The verb is now “to sui”.

>reddit even says my story is shit
what do i do now?

>>24723749
Use flashcards. Read books from the 1800s and write down the strange, interesting words they use.

>>24723915
reddit has shit taste so feel proud

where do you guys post your things?

>>24723931
Here there everywhere

>>24723931
Scribblehub, RoyalRoad, Ao3...

If i dare use em dashes will i get accused of genning with AI?

>>24723362
This is true. Isn't society so much improved by accepting everyone's worst selves without judgment?

>>24723946
Only by half-literate retards.

asked claude(sonnet) to indicate me some books to help me flesh out a elven society(i plan to write a novel from the pov of a elven heir)

Here are some excellent books to dive into European mythology for your elven society:
Primary Sources & Translations

The Mabinogion (various translators - Gwyn Jones & Thomas Jones translation is solid) - Welsh mythology with complex otherworld politics
The Prose Edda by Snorri Sturluson - Essential Norse mythology, great for cosmic worldbuilding
Early Irish Myths and Sagas translated by Jeffrey Gantz - Includes the Táin and other Ulster Cycle stories
The Celtic Myths: A Guide to the Ancient Gods and Legends by Miranda Aldhouse-Green - Academic but accessible overview

Comprehensive Overviews

The Golden Bough by James George Frazer - Classic comparative mythology (abridged version recommended)
Celtic Myths and Legends by Squire Charles - Older but thorough compilation
Norse Mythology by Neil Gaiman - Modern, engaging retelling that captures the essence beautifully

Academic but Readable

The Celtic Druids by Godfrey Higgins - Insights into Celtic society and priesthood
Gods and Myths of Northern Europe by H.R. Ellis Davidson - Excellent for understanding Norse/Germanic worldviews
Celtic Mythology by Proinsias Mac Cana - Scholarly but essential for understanding Celtic otherworld concepts

Folklore Collections

Fairy and Folk Tales of the Irish Peasantry by W.B. Yeats - Great for understanding fairy court dynamics
Popular Tales of the West Highlands by J.F. Campbell - Scottish highland fairy lore

Modern Analysis

The Power of Myth by Joseph Campbell - Helps understand underlying mythic structures
Celtic Heritage by Alwyn and Brinley Rees - Anthropological approach to Celtic culture

Start with the Mabinogion and Norse Mythology (Gaiman) for engaging reads, then dive deeper based on what resonates with your vision.

Are those good recommendations?

Are there any platforms that let me use inline css to make my chapter cooler?

So, the schizo rescues the billionaire hermit from the ill planned ransom attempt, how do I get them from here to zany adventures?

>>24723946
Avoid using it at least in the first few pages

>>24724042
>Are those good recommendations?
why don't you ask another slop engine?

>>24724061
Why do you hate AI so irrationally? There is absolutely nothing wrong with asking AI what books tackle similar issues or what knowledge would be interesting to make your writing more nuanced.

AI is king.

>>24723931
Amazon

>>24724073
BASED

>>24722983
>And now the part where the protagonist says the magic words that sweep the girl off her feet!
>What happens next anon?
>I uhh uhhh I uhhhh hmmm
I can't figure it out. This is so humiliating but I can't figure it out. Should I try writing and hope I figure this out by the time I get to this point in the outline?

>>24721847
Remember to always make notes of your "eureka" moments.
When I'm daydreaming some brillant ideas can click, but I'll forget them if I let them pile up.
Next step is knowing that you aren't going to get it perfect the first time, accept that you'll have to polish your chapter/paragraphs after a night of sleep, you can become a better critic after focusing on something else and then coming back with fresh eyes.

>>24724114
>Remember to always make notes of your "eureka" moments.
This is what I do, too. I have Writer Plus on my phone and a single file that says "Novel Ideas". It's a numbered list, and when something comes up, I just write my shit there.

>>24724047
AO3 allows you to make CSS stylesheets for whatever you post.

>He felt
No. Show, don't tell.

>>24724173
NTA but how you would rewrite it?

>>24724177
A real man makes his wife happy. His skin tingled as if it were hit with light splashes of rain when he heard the moans coming from his wife. Sweat glistened off the dark skin of his wife's lover. Every thrust of his big thick rod made him powerless, inadequate, and weak, but he knew it was right. Nodding in affirmation, he was good. He had to be. The sounds of joy emitted from his wife's mouth confirmed it. There wasn't another choice. Elation and jubilee surged throughout his veins. It lasted minutes---far too short. She needed more and he needed her to get more.

But first, he needed to post her experiences online for external validation.

>>24724177
>he was angry
He slammed the door
His body flushed with heat
His legs trembled as he spoke
“Blahblah” X said with a twitching lip
Pulled the hair from his scalp
X pictured themselves beating Y in their mind
“I’m not angry!” X yelled with a booming voice

Ect, ect… actions, thoughts and dialogue tell us X is angry, not outright saying “X felt angry.” These are caricatures but the point remains; you use the same methods to convey varying degrees of anger, as well as different emotions

>stopped writing due to life
>try to go back to it
>characters won't talk to me
>reread it
>words are fine, notes make sense, but spark just isn't there
>ambivalence

>>24724213
Just do it. If you wait around for inspiration, you will not finish anything.

I just checked my files. I haven't touched my story since September 30, 2024. How should I celebrate the upcoming anniversary?

My outline has led me to realize how much I'd need to prepare to truly make this story feel the way I'd want it to, instead of a chaotic mess.

Should I outline a separate, highly truncated story partially based on a chunk of this one that's smaller in scope to get some of it out of my system?

>>24724292
yes

>>24724238
I second this. I may not be horny when I start writing smut but by the time I'm five hundred words in I'm ready to goon

>>24723369
I like elves though. They're cute and petite.

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>>24724064
No
Maybe one day tho
>>24724149
Post excerpts pls
>>24724442
Yes
>>24722983

>>24723690
They all look disgusting
I want none of them
>>24722983
>used to write thousands of words a day
>now write maybe 500 a month
I feel my brain dying
Idk why this is happening
Sensation of my mind dissolving in water
Feel weak even in my body and soul
Sinking low as a mist breaking over a field
What do, anons?

>>24724543
Start exercising, go to the gym.

>>24724177
He yelled angrily

>>24724149
I have too many of those. I have multiple of them with several thousand words of notes, but I can't come up with villains or to actually start writing.

>>24724155
But isnt ao3 basically only read by women?

>>24724708
Then I suspect you may have worldbuilder's disease, Anon. If you numbered your ideas, just pick a random number and an idea and write it. Or at least try to work out an outline. You'll develop the idea the more you write the actual story about it.
>but I can't come up with villains
Does the story really *have* to have a villain? A story should have conflict (or at least a "twist"), but some stories don't really need a villain. Not in a traditional sense, at least.

Why are so many modern novels written in first person?

>>24724991
Because it's easy to write in the first person. Also, a good number of first-time novelists use thinly veiled self-inserts as the protagonists of their first-time novels, so the first-person perspective makes it feel like they're writing a memoir rather than a story. Since writing a memoir is a more self-indulgent act of writing, it's easier for writers to fall into this trap.

>>24724991
First-person novels are more immersive, at least if the author is decent at it. It's pretty hard to write a scene that really makes you feel like you're inside the head of someone if it's written in third-person.

>>24724292
Don't discount coming up with new ideas as you're trying to write the prose for your current ideas. Outline until you have an overall idea where you're going, and have specific ideas for what you'll write next, but trust that the act of writing prose will stir up the creative juices & allow you to flesh out the outline more.

>>24724814
I have no idea. I post my fanfiction there because I can format it any way I want.

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Maybe everything I've written is trash after all

>>24724991
Because they are written for dumb bitches.

>>24725266
then why do people on /lit/ mostly write in first person?

>>24724851
It's true that a story doesn't need a villain, but I find that they make stories more compelling. I recently watched that new Mission Impossible movie and it fell flat. I think part of it is that it had no actual villain. Just some nebulous Entity that never properly interacted with the heroes.
Can't really have a proper payoff where the villain gets his comeuppance when he doesn't exist.

>>24723931
Nowhere because I hate formatting for the internet.

>>24722983
anyone have any good recs for exercises to get strengthen your writing? get in the flow?

i would like prompts that don't suck along with feedback and i don't have that as of now.

what do you guys do to get into the groove?

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My formatting and use of tense are probably dogshit but how is this intro to a "short" story im doing so far for a beginner?

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>>24726129
*is

>>24726059
we jsut write. getting in the flow happens a few minutes after you start writing

Hey guys so I write album reviews for a metal website and I’ve been reading some of my older ones and my god I’m really bad. I haven’t written one in almost a year and I can see why. I’m just not good at…
Describing things.

>>24724814
ao3 gives me eye cancer every time I go to the website

>>24725453
Then write your villain, man. I wasn't saying you shouldn't have one. Though, don't write in a villain just for the sake of having a villain. Villains work best when they somehow say something about the overall theme of your story and/or your protag. Even just making the villain a "mirror image" of your protag can help making them a better, more entertaining villain.

>>24724350
Should I change the names of the characters?

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>>24722983
Do you feel like your writing has gotten better? How?

>>24726470
No, in fact I think my prose got worse. tl;dr I stopped writing for five years and only got back to it recently. Still, I'm trying to improve it again.

>>24724671
How or why would this help

>>24727014
You feel good.

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>>24727030
I'm ... but I'm addicted to alcohol... what can I do???

>>24727014
The brain exist and functions within the balance of your own biology, exposing youself to sunlight, exercising, and eating right has an enourmous impact on your mental health and is very much able to improve your performance and cure your depression. Theres a milion studies that have succesfully linked mind and body.

>>24727065

Addicted is the right word. Good on you for being up front with it. My father is a biologist and has studied pro bono the mechanisms of how alcohol interacts with the body for like 15 years. It's not only mind poison, but, unbeknownst to most people. It produces a proven physiological addiction. Since it's an addition, our only recourse is to treat it as one. Abstinence, 0 leniency, and group therapy. Godspeed anon, love yourself, and I hope in 2 or 3 years, u dont come to look back with hatred for your present self.

is of 'worm' prose a good inspiration for absolute begginer?

>>24723690
They all look like shit.