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Does the liberal use of adverbs make you a bad writer?
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Yeah if you even think about writing down “quickly” you’re an automatic retard with no grasp of language.
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>>24735089
No. Adverbs serve a purpose. Sometimes someone is quickly walking. He's not sprinting, he's not pacing, he's not marching, he's not jogging, he's just quickly walking
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No, because the person using adverbs liberally may be speaking.
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>>24735094
>quickly walking
What a pseud. Just say “stride” or “haste”. As if such a distinction would even matter to begin with, you’re just wasting words to convey minutiae that only autistic fucks care about.
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>>24735094
OP asked whether the liberal use of adverbs makes one a bad writer, not whether the use of adverbs makes one a bad writer.
>>24735100
>>quickly walking
>Just say “stride” or “haste”.
What do you mean?
"Sometimes someone is stride"?
"Sometimes someone is haste"?
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>>24735089
no. it's one of those things that 'show don't tell' 'how to write better in five easy steps' online articles prescribe but no one who's ever wrote something good (or maybe anyone who's ever read anything good) would say.
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>>24735178
Stephen king says it.
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>>24735182
haven't read him, sorry - i was thinking of 'literature'.
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>>24735089
That depends, do good writers use adverbs sparingly?
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>>24735089
No.
>A few light taps upon the pane made him turn to the window. It had begun to snow again (adverb). He watched sleepily (adverb) the flakes, silver and dark, falling obliquely (adverb) against the lamplight. The time had come for him to set out on his journey westward (adverb). Yes, the newspapers were right: snow was general all over Ireland. It was falling on every part of the dark central plain, on the treeless hills, on the Bog of Allen and, farther westward (adverb), softly (adverb) falling into the dark mutinous Shannon waves. It was falling, too, upon every part of the lonely churchyard on the hill where Michael Furey lay buried. It lay thickly (adverb) drifted on the crooked crosses and headstones, on the spears of the little gate, on the barren thorns. His soul swooned slowly (adverb) as he heard the snow falling faintly (adverb) through the universe and faintly (adverb) falling, like the descent of their last end, upon all the living and the dead.
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>>24735297
This would be better without half the adverbs.
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>>24735405
if only stephen king were there telling joyce what and what not to do
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>>24735182
yet he uses them all the time
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>>24735089
Sexo.
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No but letting black mold in your home does.
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>>24736121
i want her to mommy dommy me. a couple drinks so she cuts loose and has fun. the sweet aftercare is where the real fun is though. If you wont care for her like I will you're not allowed to look at my future wife. LOL
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>>24735089
Its the easiest way to tell you're reading something written by an LLM, so yes.
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I don't even know what an adverb is, but I've been writing about 200 to 500 words of fiction everyday for the last couple months.
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>>24735089
>bad writing

George quickly rushed down the stairs, huffing and panting simultaneously with an awful wheeze. Looking at his watch, he made a soft little whimper and cried, “good heavens, I’m late again!” irritatingly.

>good writing

George rushed down the stairs, huffing and panting with an awful wheeze. Looking at his watch, he whimpered and cried, “good heavens, I’m late again!”

>god-tier writing

George rushed down the stairs. Looking at his watch, he cried, “good heavens, I’m late again!”

>s-tier mega brain literary genius writing

“Good heavens, I’m late again!” George said.
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>>24736637
>writing gets better the less words you use
>the best writer uses 0 words
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>>24736645
>the best writer uses 0 words

You are correct. The beta writer will use too many words full of adverbs and adjectives because they lack confidence.

Meanwhile the alpha will use parataxis with six words to make you orgasm
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>>24736602
You might be the dumbest nigger alive.
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>>24735100
>Just say “stride” or “haste”.
Brown hands typed this.
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>>24736637
Needs moar sensory detail
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>>24735092
>he walked in a speedful manner
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>>24735100
Striding and walking quickly are not the same thing, clown.
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"he ran quickly to the door"

no

he dashed, darted, scurried, scampered to the door.
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>>24735410
This. At least King could plot
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>>24737592
All of those have specific connotations that "walked quickly" don't have.
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Adverbs are not inherently bad, but the way they can be easily dropped into sentences to make them more "descriptive" or "impactful" can lead to some writers overusing them. The result is writing that feels cluttered or clunky to read because of unnecessarily specific modifiers to every action, no matter how minor or routine. It's the same kind of style problem as going to extremes to avoid using the word "said" while writing dialogue attributions and having characters ejaculate, pontificate, aver, avow, intone, declaim, and speechify instead of just saying things.
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>>24737592
But what if he was running quickly, and wasn't dashing, darting, scurrying or scampering? Those words all describe different types of movement and have connotations that "run" does not burden the reader with.
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>>24735297
Adverbs fulfill a rhythmic function here. Without adverbs, it loses beauty.
>>24736637
Historical degeneration of the English language in one post.
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>>24735089
I want Rowling to shit on my chest
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I read her new book and it was ok. Bloated but not boring. The male and female lead charcters keep cucking each other its hilarious.
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Jk rowling is an old insane cunt. Her books are trash and anyone who reads and likes them are npcs and should not be spoken with
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>>24737666
>Historical degeneration of the English language in one post.

This might be more your speed:

One…two…three…four, George stepped down each step, quiet per step, quietly tip-toe step upon step. The watch glint of silver and medallion (spelt; to my love, Georgie-boy, he who lies best lays best) upon filigree ornamentation swivelled upon a clockwise spin and were looked down upon by an almond shaped eye. Jowls of pork loin rogued within winter-like light in a pallid pale portly rotundness jiggled and heaved while George—sweet George; upon the lips of jam and mutton and eggs and ale he ate, swore and screamed to all who heard and fear’d: “Good heavens, I’m late again!”
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>>24736635
>not knowing word classes as a writer



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