>>24925515>>24925515>>24935432continued from hereLWC has been running, as of this month, for the entirety of 2025. Next month will be the year anniversary. We run the first Friday of every month. A warning post is released on Thursday, requirements released on the Friday, and submission closes on the Monday. Voting ends on the following Friday.WHEN>tomorrow morning at 10:00 GMT the character and theme requirements will be releasedRULES>1. incorporate the theme and character requirements (creative interpretations allowed)>2. submissions must be made by Monday 8th December at 22:00 GMT>3. you must submit by use renty.co and posting a rentry.co link of your piece under a unique tripcode (Namefield: Name + "#" + Password)>4 you are allowed to edit your work on rentry.co page until the submission deadline>5 entrants must vote or will be disqualifiedVOTING>anyone can vote>a Strawpoll will be made where you can rank your top three: 1st gets 3 points, 2nd gets 2, 3rd gets 1For entrants:>use your trip when it asks for your 'name' on the strawpoll reply 'voted' ITT using your trip>anons reply 'voted' ITT first, then use your reply No.# as name>voting for yourself will disqualify you>Results released next Friday 12thTHE COMPETITION:https://rentry.co/Great_Caesar - ProductionBlues!TB/jHk2lt.https://rentry.co/94pbb3w5 - Bartlebooth !.3c0oZ3PRQhttps://rentry.co/Sir-Burton - Duck !mwG/19ioworentry.co/oqo8qti8 - akimbokonata !h5lZis5iEwhttps://rentry.co/Felicity_by_ineptiahttps://rentry.co/Avemas - WouldBird !xODIqgqvrMhttps://rentry.co/brewin-trouble - brewski!Qv6ztbH1lYhttps://rentry.co/3ogsfoxz - Bold !!GeBOMO7W2X1VOTE HERE (ranked 1st, 2nd, 3rd):https://strawpoll.com/wAg3QMzvOy8Please keep the thread alive by critiquing each other and giving feedback and working out your top three.
ProductionBlues !TB/jHk2It. 12/09/25(Tue)02:56:46 No.24936043▶>>24936790>>24935432 (You)voted Anonymous 12/09/25(Tue)14:19:10 No.24937060▶>>24935432 (You)Voted.two votes in so far. let's try and keep the thread alive with some critiques and talk through votes.
>>24940356>ProductionBluesDerivative of Gore Vidal (pseudo historical fiction drivel, no command of language. Limp prose.)>BartleboothDerivative of Borges (literary references misshapenly smeared across a canvas of inanities.)>DuckAnother Borges derivative. Yawn.> akimbokonataShock value drivel. Omg a dead person at the end! Stephen King tier, except even King wouldn’t fall to such cheap devices.>ineptiaLiving up to the name. “Doe Season” by Kaplan has more depth than this prose poem garbage. >WouldBird“The wharf had been put on ice, mongers frozen alongside their wares, as winter swept through the village. Boats bobbed..”You’re not McCarthy. You don’t have his feel for the rhythm and assonance of language: abusing alliteration in this way is just painful to read.
>>24940356>brewski“The glorious rows of amber-colored liquid hidden beneath aluminum”Do you read this out loud? In what way do you think this sentence compels people to continue reading? Please try to “mirthfully transform” this shit into something readable. >bold“The last time he had seen his son was the morgue: suicide.”Wow, way to leave nothing to the imagination. Why bother writing all this shit when the final sentence outright tells you what happens? Not to mention you overuse sentence fragments, creating an overall stilted feel across this entire affair. Learn to guide the reader through your work to reach a point, instead of outright conceding out of fear your writing isn’t good enough.
>>24938362>The “stink of fish her perfume,”That's probably the only good line of whole story for showing that Laura had an element of femininity despite being weathered from her job. I appreciate the harshness.>>24940425>You don’t have his feel for the rhythm and assonance of language: abusing alliteration in this way is just painful to read.But I read Blood Meridian and The Road once. Hated his lack of punctuation for dialogue.
>>24940468>Hated his lack of punctuation for dialogue.Not surprising. You rely on obvious signifiers to convey meaning instead of the inherent feel of language that makes it obvious when someone is speaking and who it is. You seem obsessed with ham-fisted imagery to communicate very little for the space it takes up. Alliteration and figurative language only work if the mechanics are seamless. If the characters themselves are calling each other “seabirds” and “flowersuckers” as the narrator also describes them as birds, it rings as thoroughly desperate. Have some restraint and be more intentional with these metaphors.
voted!
>>24940425I don’t recall there being any literary references in my story, and I don’t think I’ve ever consciously been influenced by Borges. I thought he was okay. Anyway, voted.
Where's the story about the guy taking a shit in the office chair?
>>24940940what?
>>24940937Anon he's semi-trolling to keep the thread alive or a psued.
Voted>>24940937The only one worth voting for (including my own work.) Funny. Not sure why the last sentence felt the need to exist. Seemed like the prompt only made it worse.>production bluesI get the joke, but its not really funny. Seems to care more about pointing at the reader and congratulating him on knowing school yard facts about history than telling a story.>brewskiSnoozefestI read the others, but it was painful
>>24941464Thanks. I haven’t done one of these in a long while but yeah, it feels the entries this time were particularly bad. Any regulars know how this compares to previous turnouts in terms of number of submissions?
>>24941653The number of entries is going down every month as the more talented entrants realise that the group holding this comp hostage only votes and praises their own depressing slop. They have dictated taste for a year. If you are one of them, and your story is about a depressed office worker who wakes up in his house one day and reminisces about his teenage girlfriend, and (bonus points) someone dies sadly, you will win.This is the result. Only the core group of devoted slop churners remains, all writing their next edition of depressing slop every month, all receiving the commendation of their peers.
>>24941653The last time i tried to submit to the competition was in april, but i was around four minutes late and the one guy went on a tyriad about how i broke the rules. The stuff in the comp has never been good. Maybe a total of four good sentence come out of the entire monthly comp, but it could be worse.>>24941673Anyone that genuinely cares about how many votes they get from this isnt gonna "make it" as an author. Though getting upset about people writing about wanting to fuck teenagers is weird because im pretty sure that's the only thing anyone from the dawn of time as ever written about.
Is it normal for most of these to be incomprehensible?
>>24941738Yes. In fact the quality of entries has gotten *worse* over time.
>>24941673poor anon, probably got no votes in the last comp.
how many people have voted?
i thought i was in some caveman type brain with stilted speech until i got to this line >As car with mark will pass by soon.>Her ears lapse back by spell of sound.disappointed by the end of this first bit. i just dont see why its told in verse. feels like the story behind it deserves prose, not obscured through this style and mode you have chosen.>Peach slice stag made snow trot to tuft.lines like this remind me that this is real skill behind this mess, i think some turns of phrase here are really unique and striking constructions, but the act of reading this piece is quite painful.>Too much heat from rich U to hold.>Mark is boss of some far off place.>New bad man with good face for kids.here it's like you really should be telling a story, not just line by line saying stuff. this feels like it doesnt know if its a prose poem or a staccato voice like extremely terse. but its like caveman speak? I just feel like the reading experience is so unpleasant. i think theres something interesting going on, but i just can get over how its told like a caveman speak. https://rentry.co/Felicity_by_ineptia
So who won? Or is this more of a, the friends we made along the way kind of thing?
>>24943099I won
>>24943099No matter who wins, we all lose
>>24943099I'm so anxious about the results here's my story for next month.>The winter is cold on the mind. >I will remember those words. Her words. Not mine. In my mind like wet pebbles bouncing on the sea shore my dreams tormented me. Memories. I woke up in, the room was cold, filigree shadows darted like moving ivy on escutcheons, like ivy had come to life by magic and Bacchus and fluted columns and Bataille and Goethe and Chopin and Ovid. Which was when I remembered I was sad because my girlfriend left me ten years ago. TEN YEARS AGO??? Time flies.>Anyway I live in a nice old gothic house so let me describe it to you as I walk through one room to the next. These are my creaky old leatherbound chairs, that's my walnut desk with mahogony inlay, that's my Renoir on the wall (imagine a Renoir).>Then me mum died. Oh no! The end.
I voted.
>>24943877I vetoed.
>>24941673>>24943847Are you still seething? You had one of these up in the first thread too. Why don’t you write us a story that’s actually funny then instead whatever you coughed up as boiledegg. That was just lazy. I obviously had the best story and it’s not what you describe and it actually was funny. So please write us another or stfu.
>>24940356>>tomorrow morning at 10:00 GMT the character and theme requirements will be released>>2. submissions must be made by Monday 8th December at 22:00 GMTCan you reformat your dumb generals so we’re not in a paradoxical superposition where the prompt is yet to be posted but the deadline has passed
>>24943926quit complaining because you're but hurt you cant post your gay story. it's obvious this thread is a continuation of the previous thread.
>>24944002I wouldn’t have wanted to contribute anyway given the general attitude on this board but not updating your general seems dumb as fuck
voted.
>>24943847Anon's got some wit , but it can only be deployed in the service of destroying others. Many such cases on 4chan dot org.
VOTING CLOSED:The winners:1st: https://rentry.co/Sir-Burton - Duck !mwG/I9iowo13 points2nd: https://rentry.co/94pbb3w5 - Bartlebooth !.3c0oZ3PRQ12 points3rd: https://rentry.co/Great_Caesar - ProductionBlues !TB/jHk2It.10 pointsThanks everyone who submitted and voted. next month will be our year anniversary!
>>24944214Bartlebooth VS Duck, so close in points, they should use fists to determine who is the real winner in life. Imagine standing over a rival, like Jung to Freud, and having the last word.
>>24944312>The stuff in the comp has never been good. Maybe a total of four good sentence come out of the entire monthly comp, but it could be worse.
>>249442143 is a magic number
