Our hero, weary from trying to rise, let his head rest lightly upon the ground, and as he looked to his right, he saw a serpent of yellow and red colors coming toward him.— I sought you everywhere. It seems to me that what they whisper out there is true.— What is true, talking serpent?—— It is true that thou art the Never-dead, the Corpse. Such a thing is spoken in every corner, and it is impossible that we should not know. For in a certain manner we are the Unity made visible, individuated.— What do you want from me, talking serpent?—— I came only to ask thee some questions, nothing more. Dost thou accept? Perhaps even a proposal. But before thou answerest me, there is another matter that bites at my curiosity: how was thy conversation with Her? For it is not every day that one is granted such fortune — or rather, such misfortune.— Are you speaking of Nature?—— Indeed, of whom else could I speak, if not of Nature, mother of all things?— You had declared that it is impossible not to know what happens here. If that is true, then why do you question me?At that moment the serpent opened its lips. Our hero thought it would attack, but in truth, it seemed a kind of smile — a malicious smile.—— I desire to hear from thine own mouth, Never-dead. To hear thy version.— All I want is only the repose of nothingness, non-existence. I do not know what befell me that such misfortune should descend upon me. By natural law, I should already be dead. Nothingness should be my dwelling, and not this degrading condition. What wrong have I done? Look upon me: my body is the living banquet of larvae and worms, it is dying, and yet I remain with my consciousness intact.And again, smiling maliciously, the serpent said:—— Yea, yea, thou art accursed, thou art degraded. Why dost thou not hearken unto my proposal?— I have nothing for you, serpent. What could you possibly want from me?—— Hearken, hearken. Why not permit me to coil around thee and serve thee my venom? My venom hath no deadly properties; on the contrary, thou shalt feel the most vivid vitality. Verily, my venom shall not remove from thee thy condition of the accursed, yet thou shalt be a new Man. Nay, thou shalt not be a new man, but something beyond. Dost thou not yearn for life? Dost thou not long to become a Free Spirit? It is well known that thou rememberest not thy former life, before thou becamest the Never-dead. Yet therein lies no impediment. Dost thou not desire to build for thyself a meaning, proper and original? Though thy curse remain upon thee, dost thou not long to embrace it and live again with courage? Thou art deceived if thou thinkest that, in giving thee my venom, I would gain advantage. For in the act of coiling about thy body and serving thee my venom, I would be slaying myself. Yet I would live in thee, eternally. Dost thou not long to become conqueror? Lord of thyself?
it could be longer I guess? - annoying professor advice
>>24979360>it could be longer I guess? - annoying professor adviceWhy longer?
>>24979366because i want more?
>>24979358It's too try-hard.
>>24979358Seems out of place for a novel set in Korea
i would tell you what you did wrong but i'm a crab so bad luck to you friend
>>24981120how
are you purposely code switching or do you just have a limited vocab?
>>24981363yes, i'm purposely code switching.
There’s a writing general
>>24979358Edit toAs our hero lay on the ground, he saw a serpent of yellow and red colors coming toward him.— I sought you everywhere. Is what they whisper out there is true?— What is true, talking serpent?—— It is true that thou art the Never-dead, the Corpse. Such a thing is spoken in every corner, and it is impossible that we should not know. — What do you want from me, talking serpent?—— I came only to ask thee some questions, nothing more. Dost thou accept? Perhaps even a proposal. But before thou answerest me, there is another matter that bites at my curiosity: how was thy conversation with Her? For it is not every day that one is granted such fortune — or rather, such misfortune.— Are you speaking of Nature?—— Indeed, of whom else could I speak, if not of Nature, mother of all things?— Why do you question me?At that moment the serpent opened its lips. Our hero thought it would attack, but in truth, it seemed a kind of smile — a malicious smile.—— I desire to hear from thine own mouth, Never-dead. To hear thy version.— All I want is only the repose of nothingness, non-existence. Look upon me: my body is the living banquet of larvae and worms, it is dying, and yet I remain with my consciousness intact.And again, smiling maliciously, the serpent said:—— Yea, yea, thou art accursed, thou art degraded. Why dost thou not hearken unto my proposal?— What could you possibly want from me, serpent?—— My venom can remove from thee thy condition of the accursed, thou shalt be a new Man. Dost thou not yearn for life? The catch is that in serving thee my venom, I would be slaying myself. Yet I would live in thee, eternally. Dost thou not long for this?
>>24979358fun i like it abit bloated and well in light of my current condition >>24979360kek "longer ....">>24983053why are you useing my ambigous writeing style... btw the story i wrote was suposued to contain multiple layers the ambiguity was but a single layer this is clearly copying my prose..... oooor i was always copying your proseinstead of dashes frame it its to complex for no reason or you can explain why your not nameing charicters (btw the ai i used could not understand what i was doing nor parse it)
>>24979358>Our hero thought it would attack, but in truth, it seemed a kind of smileThe two it's have different antecedents, which is confusing
>>24981361IYKYK. You don't have the instinct.
