Previous: >>25122533https://warosu.org/lit/thread/25122533~Itinerary~• Friday, April 3rd, 10:00 AM GMT>Character & theme requirements revealed; start writing!• Monday, April 6th, 11:59 PM GMT>Submission deadline; voting and critique begin.• Friday, April 10th, 10:00 AM GMT>Voting ends; winners crowned; critique persists with thread.~Rules~Writing>Write something that fulfills the character & theme requirements.>In all ways, your piece must belong to you—no plagiarism; no AI.>And it must be written AFTER the requirements have been revealed—no previous work.>Do not edit your writing on rentry after the submission deadline.Submitting>Format and publish your submission on rentry.co>In this thread, open a reply window, then type a unique tripcode (Name + “#” + Password) into the Name-field.>Using that unique tripcode, post your submission here as a rentry link.Critiquing>Please refrain from sharing critique until after the submission deadline.Voting>On Strawpoll, rank your top 3 submissions: 1st (top) = 3 points; 2nd = 2 points; 3rd = 1 point.>Do not vote for yourself.>Vote as the “Name” part of your tripcode.>Immediately after voting on Strawpoll, reply “Voted” in this thread, using your full tripcode.>Non-authors (Anonymous voters) can skip this in-thread verification.Cont. from >>25182719
~Requirements~Character: Has a body mod (body modification).Theme: Invisibility.>[Countdown to submission deadline]https://countingdownto.com/?c=7011492
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didn't get much time this month, so it's a bit of a shitpost. Read in Hans Moleman voice.https://rentry.co/suchfuninanunbelievabletechnonightmare
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I finished mine but I still need to edit tomorrow.
>>25189834Space Brazilians... Scary...
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Here is my entry. I was invited by a friend to this contest so I just brainstormed a simple whodunnit on saturday and wrote it during sunday and this morning. It might be a bit longer than the usual entries apparently so thank you in advance if you read it all.https://rentry.co/the_exterminating_angel
https://rentry.co/rqiods3p
Too much procrastination on my part. Now to do my gacha dailies...https://rentry.org/q4ftt4ns
https://rentry.co/Praeternoctabunt_by_ineptiaAs always, best wishes to all!
The submission deadline has just passed.This month, 5 authors are offering their work for us to read, critique, and vote on—thank you all.I will post the Strawpoll and voteing countdown within a few hours.
~Competition~>fagheart40 !!v1cgDTiOwNz — Such Fun in an Unbelievable Techno Nightmarehttps://rentry.co/suchfuninanunbelievabletechnonightmare>Kopi !!Syjgnas/tSI — The Exterminating Angelhttps://rentry.co/the_exterminating_angel>Delonism !.hoXLNX0hg — An Appalachian Talehttps://rentry.co/rqiods3p>DollFucker !!Q/JVbAmFQeA — Ballhttps://rentry.org/q4ftt4ns>ineptia !!/7cMIiSCHvi — Praeternoctabunthttps://rentry.co/Praeternoctabunt_by_ineptia~Voting~https://strawpoll.com/40Zm4pBDRga>[countdown to voting deadline]https://countingdownto.com/?c=7018265
>>25194920I so plainly and obviously won the January competition and this was not reflected in the votes. I am glad this circlejerk is reduced every go round.
>>25195060The true reason these are falling off is because the new OP pics are gay and I miss the monkey.
>>25195182This. OP has a faggy style of posting
>>25195060Post your story from the january thread. I would like to read it
>>25195581My mistake, it was from the December contest. I’m no Hemingway, but every other submission without exception was complete trash. https://rentry.co/94pbb3w5
>>25195060>I am glad this circlejerk is reduced every go round.From my point of view, it’s just the opposite—last month meteor wrote an all-timer, and this month a new author comes on the scene with a locked-room whodunnit that’s actually short-story length.I enjoyed your December piece, and hope you write again for this event (submission or critique).>>25195182>the new OP pics are gay and I miss the monkey.I don’t like looking at a photo of an animal seperated from nature.The Mucha art is cool because it’s kinda like /lwc/—each month was a different theme for him to creatively personify.Plus it holds me to completing the set of all 12 months.
>fagheart40 - Such Fun in an Unbelievable Techno NightmareNot that bad for a shitpost. Pretty funny all things considered at the beginning and turned into existential despair at the end, I guess it should be expected from such a ghastly 9-5.>Kopi - The Exterminating AngelWell done at achieving a well developed plot in a short story format. The expectation I have and I guess many others here would be the exploration of one particular theme (alongside the requirements tacked on) but what you did here is like a microcosm of a longer work. Some of the punctuation felt a bit weird, at times you were repeating yourself with lines such as>The living room was filled with ornaments and vintage decorations. It almost made it look like a Renaissance painting.And then soon after you write>the lights on the chandelier were electric and the frames on the wall were electric panels that displayed old paintings with such a vivid look that it almost looked like a real painting.so finding different ways to strengthen and diversify your descriptions would help.At times there was too much telling instead of showing, which I guess it's ok if it was an intentional decision but maybe consider the intentionality behind the way you write, if you truly want to write that way or would prefer to let the story speak for itself more through smart use of language rather than just stating plainly what is happening. I would also remove the prelude about the 22nd century. The conclusion felt a bit forced, with the villain explaining everything. I guess it's more satisfying that way but if it's too forced it doesn't come out as well imo.>DollFucker - BallInteresting tale. I like how you explore what we all probably day-dreamed about doing as kids if we could be invisible. Pretty dark twist at the end I was not expecting. I don't know if I got it very well but I'm guessing it's supposed to be a Faustian tale? Not sure if Ball was actually a bad guy or not.>ineptia - PraeternoctabuntGave this one a reread and I'm not sure if I understood it any better. I like how you pull off the quasi-stream of consciousness at the beginning and the words of wisdom of the father, if we may call them that, are pretty beautiful in a way. Are they supposed to be dead and watching or about to die? Maybe it's on me here but this one turned out to be too unexplainable for my taste, compared to your previous submissions. Also>Do nothing; winIs that supposed to be a Xi reference lol. Anyway I'd say it's still written quite beautifully, hope the Latin learning is going well.Will be voting soon.
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>>25195814I read it. Thought it was ok but it got funnier towards the end. Then the ending had me looking for the acrostic and I actually laughed out loud when I saw it. This banger of a line also made me laugh>and I knew if Greece had produced such great men as Alexander and Aristotle Onassis then this symbol would not fail me
