Have you ever written horsewords that weren't shit? Or is shit all we're destined for?

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First for best duo!
Enjoy this conveniently packaged Tuna: https://www.fimfiction.net/story/459048/natural-ones

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>>42629805

Reposting this from >>42629684 since I think it shouldn't get forgotten:
>Are there any numbers coming up that we should choose a special fic for? Something sexy for 138 because 138 = 2*69? For 140, something with a social media theme in honor of Xitter's former character limit? Romance for 143? A dozen dozens is called a gross, so gore for 144? An alcohol-themed fic in honor of Bacardi 151?

>>42629804
I consider all my horsewords to be good.

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>>42629816
Pretty bad time for the question, pretty much all of the upcoming club fics are better off being picked for seasons theming than the equivalent of dubs.

It's kind of funny to me that I prefer to write shorter stories, so my commissions are going to end up my longfics in all likelihood. How's your writing going, guys? I've got a loop of commissions that's taking up most of my writing time now, and I just recently remembered the humanized story I planned for Nightmare Night. I still haven't started on my chapter of the group anthology.

>>42629802
kek

>>42629805
kek again

>>42629816
What >>42629824 said.
I'm not against doing something special for big milestones, like 150, 200, or 222.
Aside from that, Holiday themed clubs seems more appropriate. We've already done Jinglemas batches for Christmas, and I'm down for some horror for Halloween.

>>42629824
>>42629834
Sounds like the answer is a resounding no. That's fine by me.

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>>42629825
>I still haven't started on my chapter of the group anthology
At least you're writing something.

>>42629940
Why aren't you?

>>42629969
Sleepy

When did you last check for a FiMC update?

>>42629981
NaN, because I've never checked.

>>42629981
>One update in five years
The sequel is dead. I stopped reading it eight years ago, roundabout the same time I decided not to read unfinished fics anymore.
>Checking for updates
Any incomplete fics that look interesting get added to a bookshelf with email notifications enabled. Each new chapter gets ignored until the fic is complete where it will get ignored further. My backlog grows stronger

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I have a question.
I'm currently at a very crucial point in my story, and I was wondering if this part carries across the necessary oomph for this point. For a bit of context. Pinkie and Twilight have been going around the eerie town of Hoofamr trying to figure out what the villagers are up to, with middling success. The village elder seems to be onto them, but they don't know for sure.
At this point, Pinkie pushes their luck too much, and picrel happens.
Do you think this works? Could be better? Am I stupid for sharing a snippet of a larger narrative without proper context?

Fics for when you realize it’s worse than you previously thought?

>>42630525
The name "Sigallop" makes me think of Svengallop. So that's who I have in my mind.

I don't have enough context to say anything else. I have no idea why the Lake is significant or what Pinkie is trying to figure out. Sigallop's reaction is incomprehensible, as is Pinkie's reaction to his reaction. My guess is that the excerpt doesn't have the oomph you want. It doesn't feel oomphy. But maybe it's fine and I just need more context.

>>42630525
The setup and Sigallop's reaction are cool, but the balloon simile sort of undermines the mood. It's already a lighthearted image, and if you're trying to build tension, then a deflating balloon suggests the opposite of what you want.

>>42630541
It's meant to, yeah. I was looking to ponify nordic sounding names, and that's honestly the best one I could come up with. The name of other town ponies are worse. Here's hoping I'll come across something better.
The only thing I can say is that for the past day, Pinkie and Twilight have been feeling increasingly worse due to the plot. They feel everypony is in on the evilness, and the village elder would be the obvious one at the top, so they're trying to get some info from him.
What I had in mind was the Elder acting relaxed, looking into the distance while saying cryptic things until Pinkie overplays her hand and there's that snap of his eyes towards her that make Pinkie go "Oh, I messed up."
>>42630554
Yeah, I think I should probably trim the fat and just let Sigallop's reaction carry the weight of the scene.
Thank you.

Guy who dislikes Kassaz not for his fetish but for his style.

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I can't even be upset at the pre-clubbing this week,
>/FSBC/

This will be a shorter post. In one part due to me not taking any notes, but mostly because, well, what's there to say beyond praising the fic? In truth, focusing and trying to analyze it, looking for flaws, would be much more productive than doing the same with the usual bookclub fic, but I just don't really want to do that right now. The Princesses are still great*, and while I may not love Pinkie as a character so much, well, this is a really good Pinkie. Read this fic right now if you want good Pinkie. Also read this fic if you want great Princesses, great show-like stories, great slow burn, etc.
*Oh right, that's one of the things I was mildly disappointed by. Luna is gone in for the last third. She was never the *main* main character and I get wanting to put 100% of focus on Celestia (and Pinkie, but mostly Celestia), but with how good and important to this fic Luna was in week 1, I'd have preferred to see her in at least one more scene towards the end.

The other thing that might be a downside to some people is that this is firmly a very fimmy romance-first, comedy-second. In terms of priority, not order of appearance—because the first third is where most of the funni lives. There are still some pretty good jokes and funny moments later (+1 for the older fandom memes), but the focus is on the romance. That just seems to be what this author is best at. It is good that he tried to not be a one trick-pony, though; this fic makes up for all the small issues with Lost&Found. This story is in the running for the title of the best bookclub fic of 2025 for me, and that's despite some REALLY strong competition like Mono's "Best fic I've ever written" (or maybe the Maize). I guess some of the "classics" really do deserve that title.
Now I really want to go To Perytonia someday.

And speaking of the classics, next week, Allegrezza!
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/2365/allegrezza
A.k.a. "the other TaviScrach fic after University Days". Hopefully better than it.

[Voting]
Well, Allegrezza is short and I have a lot of post space, so we might as well pick what to read after it. We've already worked through much of the 1-rec fics from the new SK, but it's a good place to mine for other, more unassuming suggestions. After all, some anon liked each of them so much that he wrote a mini review to shill them. Here's one batch of options:
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/3479/the-games-we-play
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/2432/school-daze
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/76931/the-monster-below
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/450660/trouble-in-tiatarta
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/489858/the-tower-of-the-fallen-star + https://www.fimfiction.net/story/195240/succession

>>42630525
Ditch the "She just needed to keep poking" line and ditch the "popped her confidence" line. These things are implicit in the rest.
Assume da cops or whoever are tapping on her shoulder and not Sigallop, that should probably be it's own paragraph for max dramas.

>>42631523
>assume
assuming

derp

>>42631458
My thoughts are pretty much the same as week 1, but I think the fic finished very strong so that's good.
>RD laughs at pinkie pie when she asks her to come with her on the date saying 'thats not how dates work'
>Celestia brings 3 other ponies
Lmao
>Pinkie can't even focus on Celestia saying a single sentence to her
These parts read like a story about a mental disorder or something. Like the one fae wrote about the pie sisters. Pinkie's internal struggle to do what she knows she is supposed to be doing but can't.
>"Is it because your so pretty you don't need a dress because you know I'd love a hug anyway?"
This somehow leads to Celestia bursting into laughter. The fic continues to just not feel natural to me with a lot of these scenes.
>his snout had been pointing skywards from beforehoof, and now she could look straight into his nostrils.
Wait wtf?
>Celestia uses her wing to block them from the view of the restaurant
Kino. I think I like Celestia once the date started, not necessarily because the date was a test but because of how she starts to act
>"There are limits to how many hours siblings can spend bonding over staring off into the horizon while talking about eternity."
Kino
I think it finished strong. I really wasn't that into it in the beginning and even for some of this weeks reading. Thankfully the date was nice and Celestia improved in my opinion. I also appreciate that the romance didn't go very far, I think what we got fits very well but more would've somewhat spoiled the nature of it. And Luna remained the best pony here as expected.

>>42631458
>*Oh right, that's one of the things I was mildly disappointed by. Luna is gone in for the last third. I'd have preferred to see her in at least one more scene towards the end.
Yeah, there definitely could've been more than Celestia just silently leaning on her in the 2nd to last scene, but I do think that scene was nice. I'm surprised she didn't watch the whole date though and then admonish Celestia for testing pinkie like that.
>this fic makes up for all the small issues with Lost&Found
Funny enough I couldn't get L&F out of my head starting the second week. I kept thinking that this was the fic where Celestia stepped out of equestria and felt the light of all of her little ponies and then passed out for a while. I definitely think the author was using a bit of his same headcanon and it shows pretty strongly in the final scene.
>REALLY strong competition like Mono's "Best fic I've ever written"
kek, ironically not one of my favorite mono fics

>>42631458
OK, I don't have much else to say about this that wasn't said last week. It was more of the same, for the most part. I didn't mind the diminished presence of the M6 after the carnival chapters, but we could have used a *bit* more Luna, you know? Parts of the prose continued to drag on for a bit too long, and characters sound pretty similar no matter which scene or chapter they appear in. Pretty flat; even Pinkie and Celestia start to fall into this. I'd say the first week was stronger, but the second week finished appropriately.

There are two counts on which I think the fic is worthy of some recognition. One is continuing the story beyond the confession scene, which is where so many "will they? won't they?" stories end. In fact, a confession ending wouldn't have been satisfying at all for this particular fic, and the one we got gave some needed depth to the actual relationship. The other count is for showing some turbulence in Pinkie and Celestia's relationship all the way from "making it official" up until the last chapter. That made this crackship feel less like a crackship, more believable.

Overall, it doesn't exactly leave me wanting more Pinklestia, but that's perfectly fine. Certain parts were a bit dull or predictable, but never too dull or predictable. It was a good story and earned a like from me. It was a solid concept executed well. That's it.

>>42631458
>despite some REALLY strong competition like Mono's "Best fic I've ever written" (or maybe the Maize)
Look, I like the story, but it hardly measures up to The Creature/Knight or Maize. The prose is good, but not very good like either of those. The early-season comfiness and low-stakes, character-focused plot are nice, but they're also just not that creative, or engaging enough to last 50k words.
Admittedly, week 1 did a very good job of setting up characters, emotions, and a few twists here and there. However, week 2 didn't really do anything but step through the motions week 1 had already laid out for it. And yeah, it was tightly choreographed, but you could already get the broad strokes of week 2 without even reading it, and no individual scene in week 2 tried to do more than fulfill its role in the larger story. We get a Ferris wheel ride where Pinkie *almost* hugs Celestia. We get Celestia and Pinkie in a storage room, but the actual stored items are relevant for all of five seconds before Pinkie pops (or doesn't pop) the question. Then they go to the kitchen to bake stuff, but the "baking" isn't anything more than a distraction and could be substituted by any other activity. Most week 2 scenes and about half the fancy party feel mostly like the author needed "a location where Pinkie and Celestia can talk about X/Y/Z" and just plopped them down.
>but the focus is on the romance. That just seems to be what this author is best at
Honestly? The Twilestia in Lost and Found was out of place and distracting, but it was also more interesting and engaging on its own merits than the Pinklestia here.

>>42631616
>Pinkie's internal struggle to do what she knows she is supposed to be doing
Pinkie's internal monologues (and the way she rambles out loud) characterise her really nicely.
>This somehow leads to Celestia bursting into laughter.
It's a particular Celestia made to fit this particular Pinkie, but I agree it feels a bit forced here and there.
>not necessarily because the date was a test
See, this kind of came out of nowhere for me. We don't get to see Celestia's perspective before the date, which I suppose is deliberate, but wasn't the whole reason she liked Pinkie because Pinkie doesn't care about Machiavellian mind games, and in fact effortlessly evades them? If Celestia is attracted to Pinkie because she respects the fact that Pinkie treats her like a regular pony, then why doesn't she respect Pinkie enough to spare her the psychoanalysis and just go out to have a good time?
>I think what we got fits very well but more would've somewhat spoiled the nature of it
Yeah, the author knew when to quit. Not too little, not too much.
>I definitely think the author was using a bit of his same headcanon
Was it just me, or did Twilight's reaction to Pinkie getting together with Celestia seem a bit like jealousy? I'm thinking Celestia's mental problems aren't the only headcanon the author was attached to.

>>42631648
>Pretty flat; even Pinkie and Celestia start to fall into this.
I like Celestia a lot more here than the first week but yeah
>Overall, it doesn't exactly leave me wanting more Pinklestia, but that's perfectly fine.
Yeah, that was enough for a long while I think
>>42631699
>We get Celestia and Pinkie in a storage room, but the actual stored items are relevant for all of five seconds before Pinkie pops (or doesn't pop) the question.
Wow wtf, we don't get any follow-up at all on the magical Equestria snowglobes. Luna just takes hers to her room and finds pinkie singing in her closet looking at her onahole collection
>If Celestia is attracted to Pinkie because she respects the fact that Pinkie treats her like a regular pony, then why doesn't she respect Pinkie enough to spare her the psychoanalysis and just go out to have a good time?
Yeah. Maybe some princessly obligation to make sure pinkie wasn't winning her heart by simply pretending to be retarded
>Was it just me, or did Twilight's reaction to Pinkie getting together with Celestia seem a bit like jealousy? I'm thinking Celestia's mental problems aren't the only headcanon the author was attached to.
I mean, yeah. But jealousy towards losing the exclusive closeness she shares with the princess that was previously only matched with Luna, or because she herself wanted to romance her is the question. Also the added weirdness of it being pinkie. Surely the 'I'm gonna be your dad' part didn't help her

>>42630525
>It popped her confidence like a balloon, leaving a little hiss of doubt in its place.
I would probably write it like this:
>All of a sudden, her confidence popped like a balloon, and in its place came a little hiss of doubt.
A little slower to make the moment flow better, and more emphasis on emotion.

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>>42631616
>These parts read like a story about a mental disorder or something.
Well duh, it's a Pinkie Pie fic.
>>Celestia brings 3 other ponies
Guards do not have a thinking mind when on duty, signified by their identical coloration. They're pony-shaped golems.
>leads to Celestia bursting into laughter
Because she's smitten with the genuine cuteness of Pinkie Pie, who says things like that without hesitation.
>I think it finished strong.
Yes, but it started pretty strong, too.
>I think what we got fits very well but more would've somewhat spoiled
Agreed. The fic stopped exactly where it should've, which is a skill that's unfortunately rarer than you'd hope.
>I definitely think the author was using a bit of his same headcanon
But it's good headcanon. Perytonia never ever [in the book club].

>>42631648
>It was more of the same, for the most part.
It was, but not quite. This is definitely the shipfic part, which only started for real in the last or second-to-last chapter last week.
>we could have used a *bit* more Luna, you know?
Definitely could've, yes. Maybe the author was incorrectly afraid of biasing the fic even more towards Celestia's scenes, or maybe he didn't want to interrupt that final stretch of romance chapters.
>two counts on which I think the fic is worthy of some recognition
Three, because you miss the biggest one by far.
>That's it.
Your soul will not reach Equestria.

>>42631699
>it hardly measures up to The Creature/Knight or Maize
I think it could be higher than them, easily. The prose is worse and the story is "objectively" less intricate, but the stuff that you mention as nice immediately catapults it super far ahead.
Those are ponyfics. Firstly PONY, secondly FICS, and also implicitly stories third. You can go off that path if you have a way to use the setting or the characters for some other purpose, but this is such a good example of respecting and contributing to the PONY part that CiG should weep knowing he could never be this good despite being a much better writer.
And yes, Twice as Bright isn't a literary nobel material, and I would also not pick it as a fic to prove to a normie how "good" ponyfics can be, but that's not what it was meant to be. It's a Ponyfic.
>[Twilestia] on its own merits
>it doesn't exactly leave me wanting more Pinklestia,
Well yeah, Pinklestia is a crackship and that Twilestia touched on a lot of good ideas for the ship. But taking a crackship and selling it to the readers like a regular shipping fic that's not any worse than the "default" pairings also deserves praise. It works a lot better than you could hope, and twice as well in a show-adjacent story.

>>42631724
>I like Celestia a lot more here
That's understandable. She definitely changes from week 1, especially in the last carnival chapter.
>we don't get any follow-up at all on the magical Equestria snowglobes
Yeah, and if I recall correctly, it's the last of *any* Princess interaction we get unless you count that no-dialogue Luna appearance in the last chapter.
>or because she herself wanted to romance her is the question
I think the author likely intended it to actually be the first, but you could easily read it as the second. Pinkie's implication that Celestia is awkwardly too much of a mom to Twilight is accurate, regardless, and Twilight doesn't have a good answer to it.
>>42631842
>Well duh, it's a Pinkie Pie fic.
Ignorant slander.
>maybe he didn't want to interrupt that final stretch of romance chapters
Honestly, it could have used an interruption or two. Maybe of Luna or some of the M6 spectating the party from a distance, or just talking about some of the external drama of a mudpony dating the Sun Princess.
>Your soul will not reach Equestria.
Lots of talk of where my soul will or will not reach! I didn't know you had a hotline to St. Faust (pbuh) where she stands at the gates.
>Three, because you miss the biggest one by far.
Those weren't the only two by any means, but what would you consider the third?
>but the stuff that you mention as nice immediately catapults it super far ahead
Look, I like pure S1-ish pony stuff as much as the next guy, especially when it's integrated into a more ambitious story, but this story just didn't have that much interesting going on. Sure, pony aesthetics and themes should be the core elements, but the show itself was more creative and elegant with the way it set up plotlines (at least in S1). Here, we get some sweet Pinklestia, and it's an accomplishment to pull that off believably, but it was hardly inspired or original.
>CiG should weep knowing he could never be this good
I'll agree with you that CiG isn't capable of capturing pure pony this well.
>selling it to the readers like a regular shipping fic that's not any worse than the "default" pairings
But this perspective is exactly the problem! I do agree that it's admirable to pull off a crackship as well as a typical default-ship, but that doesn't automatically make it better in itself. For example, The Creature/Knight was basically top-of-the-line Raritwi, deviancy from canon notwithstanding. This Pinklestia is above-average for Pinklestia, and you'd be hard-pressed to find better, but it's still on the level of your average Flutterdash or Tuna or whatever.

>>42631122
Yeah it's really basic. He's got the same problem fae does: you could stand to extend scenes and let them breathe more

>>42632055
How are you supposed to breathe when you're submersed in amniotic fluid?

>>42632067
Through the placenta, stupid.

>>42632067
Through your gills.

>>42632075
I wouldn't call that "breathing", per se.
>>42632078
Ponies don't willingly crossbreed with seaponies.

>>42632082
We all have gills in the womb.

>>42632105
Not me, I was born different.

>>42632196
Anal birth doesn't make you special. Just look at Tel Aviv.

>>42632200
>Anal birth doesn't make you special.
Tell that to Applejack

>>42632203
Apples grow on trees, silly.

>>42632055
>you could stand to extend scenes and let them breathe more
This is the second time I've been told this, the first time was by the guy who liked my rape horror story with Queen Chrysalis. What do you mean by it, exactly?

Now that I think of it, most of you don't read my stories—not that I blame you—so I don't have any reference for the writing to which you're referring. My latest writing could be completely free of these issues, and you wouldn't notice.

I've just typed 3,000 words in 90 minutes. My hands are killing me. Is this normal? Will it hurt my ability to fap? I have a fap booked in.

>>42632329
Use a cup, sponges, and a rubber glove.

>>42632339
That won't help. I've tried the anal stuff before and it kills my arms.

>>42632341
You're doing it wrong. Your arms aren't part of your anus.

>>42632277
Well I'm thinking of like, for example, that one compilation of pregnant stories that you update. Half of them are literally just the comic you commissioned translated into text. Nothing extra, no setup or going into the characters thoughts at all. And I get it, fetish writer and all, but you could do more than just write a paragraph.

Most fanfic authors are too prosey, you have the opposite problem.

>>42632341
>skips leg day
>can't use legs as backup for dead arms
shiggy diggy

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>>42632015
>Ignorant slander.
It is. Also known as having fun.
>it could have used an interruption or two.
Not the mudpony drama (I don't think the tone of the fic was right for that), but a warm chapter of Luna could've been nice. Twi gets a resolution of her part arc; she doesn't. Hell, he could've done the Lost&Found thing and actually shipped RD with Luna.
But that would all make the fic more complex. Usually it is a good thing; however, here the straightforwardness is a deliberate part of the story's presentation.
>what would you consider the third?
>I like pure S1-ish pony stuff as much as the next guy
^This, basically. I don't think this fic would've been better if it was more "inspired". It's a small, self-contained, cutesy, and very FiM'y thing, and that's what it dreamed of being. It has nothing that would ruin this mood or overly complicate things, and while there is some tension and drama, it gets resolved in a fairly predictable fashion, as you mentioned. Except that I don't consider this a bad thing here. This kind of simplicity would be a bad thing in many other fics, but here it's actually a strength of the [character-focused] story. It's a little unfair to compare it to something like Mono's The Creature, because that one decided to paint a "better" story using ponies as the canvas (and took heavy liberties with it still, since it's actually written to be a fairy tale first), whereas for this fic, being "show-like", "pure pony", etc., was a big part of the mission. Me making grand statements praising the objective goodness of this fic was done slightly in jest and to trigger some responses, because of course that's not the only standard that you can aspire to, but I did want to highlight how well it was done here. Somewhat surprisingly, we don't get enough of these fics written well. Perhaps it's because many of the better writers outright dismiss this as a worthy goal, and that approach is simply wrong.

Any fics with wizard towers

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>>42632560
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/255709/the-quest

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>>42632560
What about wizard realms?

https://www.fimfiction.net/group/568/badass-twilight-total-domination/thread/565946/its-been-a-while
>It's been a while, perhaps 8 years since I really payed attention to the badass twilight space. Lots of nostalgia looking for some epic tale to try and fill the void left by the show not fulfilling Faust's vision.
Ah, yes... Faust's vision of epic action tales

>>42632712
>Ah, yes... Faust's vision of epic action tales
yes. are you not aware of faust's original ideas for season 1? the confrontation with nightmare moon was supposed to be the season 1 finale, and everything in between the opener and finale was supposed to take place in eternal night. i'm not sure how much room there is for cute low-stakes slice-of-life while the land is currently being cast into nighttime eternal by an evil alicorn.

>>42632764
>the confrontation with nightmare moon was supposed to be the season 1 finale, and everything in between the opener and finale was supposed to take place in eternal night
The former is well-known, but this is the first time I'm hearing about the latter. Is that really true?

>>42632779
i might be remembering wrong, but i'm pretty sire the idea was that episode 1 would go pretty much how it did in the actual show, and the rest of the season would basically be what episode 2 was. the mane 6 slowly make their way through the everfree forest to nightmare moon, while overcoming obstacles and becoming better friends.

>>42632796
I thought it was almost the opposite: She wanted to go a lot slower on introducing the cast. But Hasbro didn't like that because they wanted to sell toys.

>>42632560
Yeah. Open any AiE porn fic. Whoever wrote it is a wizard, and when the story talks about Anon's hard dick, that's metaphorically the wizard's tower.

Also, you might like the first half of Anemoia: https://www.fimfiction.net/story/485206/anemoia

>>42632806
possibly. like i said, i could be remembering wrong, or i just misinterpreted the idea of nightmare moon being defeated in the finale instead of the opener. and i think i might also remember
>She wanted to go a lot slower on introducing the cast. But Hasbro didn't like that because they wanted to sell toys.
as being the case too? maybe they were both the case at different times in the shows development? i don't know. but given that the show was originally called "my little pony adventures" i think g4 being originally planned to be more action focused is definitely possible.
take everything i just said with a grain of salt though.

>>42632796
Are you sure that wasn't just Vogelfag's schizophrenic idea

>>42632834
probably

>>42632834
i don't know. maybe that's where i got it from, but i think i actually did just interpret "the final confrontation with nighmare moon was supposed to be the season 1 finale" as moving friendship is magic part 2 back, but not part 1. and the result you get from that is the season long trek through the everfree idea.

>>42632857
No, I definitely remember Lauren wanted it to be more magical girl like.

>>42632857
I do think you're right that the confrontation with NMM was supposed to be the S1 finale. And when you said
>maybe they were both the case at different times in the shows development
that sounds kinda familiar too.

S1 being a long nighttime romp through the Everfree is just schizo rambling, though. Nobody involved with the show would have ever considered that. Even Haber wasn't that retarded.

https://www.fimfiction.net/story/320094/the-universal
2.2k words. Hard to sum up beyond "Luna and Celestia existed before everything, and will exist long after".
>>42632796
>villain is set up at the start of the season but the final confrontation happens in the finale
does not instantly mean
>the entire season revolves around the villain and nothing that happens in the opening is resolved until the finale
I'd imagine something more along the lines of NMM escaping in the beginning but not being back to her full power yet, maybe causing a few problems in a handful of episodes in the middle like she already does as Spooky Fog™ in the everfree, and then finally capturing Celestia/bringing about eternal night in the finale, leading to the final showdown. I'd imagine it would've also given more substantial opportunity for the other 5 to demonstrate the elements they represent across the season, making that scene a bit more impactful.

If (You) from an alternate universe were told "they don't actually defeat/reform Starlight Glimmer until the season finale in our timeline, instead of it all being in the premiere like in yours" would you have imagined that the entire first half of our season 5 took place solely in Our Town and the second half was spent time travelling?

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>>42632952
>would you have imagined that the entire first half of our season 5 took place solely in Our Town
I would have been okay with that.

>>42632407
>Well I'm thinking of like, for example, that one compilation of pregnant stories that you update.
I figure you refer to "Sexier Short Stories with Particularly Pregnant Ponies" and not "Short Stories with Pregnant Ponies" here.

>Half of them are literally just the comic you commissioned translated into text. Nothing extra, no setup or going into the characters thoughts at all.
I noticed the same thing, I agree. The first two were really just meant to be short stories, not even collected into an anthology. Even a short story can still add to a comic by giving context, but I started to see it as a waste to not expand on the scenario the artist created, yeah. I wanted to keep them short and all roughly the same length at first, but I started doing a bit better with the third story, "Bug Shy~!!" by adding, as you noted, a paragraph that covered what wasn't shown. That paragraph at the end is my favourite in that story, actually, and adding to the comics' stories is a good excuse to have more scenarios for illustration, as I did with just that paragraph, if nothing else.

>And I get it, fetish writer and all, but you could do more than just write a paragraph.
I've started doing this with the most recent three. I do think writing a story that covers the comic and little else is valuable for context, especially since none of the little comics have any explicit dialogue, but I've also got to keep the things short enough so that people will actually read them. I was talking to some other pregnant pony producers, who praised me for my taste and getting so many commissions, but when I asked them about the stories with which the artwork was associated some of them went all "Stories?" on me, kek.

Still, yeah, I've started writing longer and longer chapters for that anthology as I get more comfortable with it, and thinking about what would be cool to add to go along with the comic but which it hadn't shown. I don't think my other anthologies have this problem, because I'm taking just a single point in time rather than a full one-page comic, and I'm also writing longer chapters for most of them. The anthology I've got planned for Queen Chrysalis and her many children will have a standard chapter length around two thousand words.

>Most fanfic authors are too prosey, you have the opposite problem.
This is the first time I've been told this, I think. I've been told the opposite before, however. I don't know, do you believe what you've written applies to my "more important" stories, too? The silly anthology about comics is one thing, but not necessarily representative, you know?

>>42633425
>my "more important" stories
You have those?

I just looked. The only non-fetish stories I see are "Ideas of Starch", "Trinket's Nightmare Night Trinkets", and "Trinket's Magical Mishap Memories". Is one of these somehow "more important"? Or do you consider some of your fetish stories more important than others?

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>>42633454
>You have those?
Yes.

>I just looked. The only non-fetish stories I see are "Ideas of Starch", "Trinket's Nightmare Night Trinkets", and "Trinket's Magical Mishap Memories".
Trinket has hardly any artwork, so those latter two just use her prior owner's original sketch of her. She magically impregnates herself and causes a shitshow, kek.

>Is one of these somehow "more important"?
Well, the first is just a political joke, so it's certainly less important.

>Or do you consider some of your fetish stories more important than others?
I do. Ignoring the two I submitted for the printed anthology, limiting myself to only one, I think "Short Stories About Fizzle Before She Pops" has turned out pretty good so far, and is something a general audience could enjoy, even. I ended up really proud of it, and am planning to ask Paul Asaran to review it after I have time to add more, and also let my previous story get reviewed. So, I suppose that story is most representative of my current style, maybe. It really surprised me with how well it came out, since I don't usually write about characters from later on, but it's all self-contained so I can ignore the parts of the show I dislike.

>>42633514
>She magically impregnates herself
So the only non-fetish fic you've ever written is "Ideas of Starch", which is just a political shitpost.

I have a serious question: What the fuck is wrong with you? Don't you have any actual ideas? Or are you just gooning 24/7?

>>42633590
>So the only non-fetish fic you've ever written is "Ideas of Starch", which is just a political shitpost.
Well, "Ms. Mare: Convicted Crotch Sniffer" is more of a humorous story. It's not my fetish, anyway.

>I have a serious question: What the fuck is wrong with you?
kek

>Don't you have any actual ideas?
Of course. I just like pregnancy and want to propagate more of it by writing, commissioning, and other avenues.

>Or are you just gooning 24/7?
Nah, this is just the only side of me you see. I write a lot of other stuff, just not pony fanfiction of any other flavours. It's like how artists fixate on certain topics. Now, I've read those artists tend to have issues with the non-fetishistic aspects of artwork, but I got my writing fundamentals down when I took a long break from pony nearly a decade ago. I returned a man with real writing experience, who had grown past greentext, and decided I'd like to return and dominate the niche I'd entered so many years ago.

I just like it.

>>42621824
>Where's Spike?
>It's first person and Twilight's so much of a schizo she completely forgot he exists
Kek. One of the funniest explanations for an author forgetting about Spike I've seen.

>>42623778
Don't forget about your Little Caesar's pizza, anon.

>>42630525
What's the tone supposed to be? The balloon simile and "keep poking" from the narrator make it seem more light, but it sounds like it's a spooky "lovecraft town with a dark secret" plot which doesn't match what the narrator's putting down.

>>42632764
https://archive.org/details/MyLittlePonyAdventures-ShowBible/mode/2up
Once again, anon. I need a sauce for this. The show bible makes no mention of that idea, nor has Faust ever talked about it from what I can remember. In fact, I remember the exact opposite. She was surprised at how popular Luna was and hadn't planned for her to show up again in S1. So all the Lunafags needed to wait until S2 to see her again.

The show bible instead talks about "relationship stories" and "adventure stories" that will make up season 1. Essentially the SoL/Adventure dichotomy that carries on throughout the show.

>>42621856
>"Hey Twi..."
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/508734/hey-twi
This one was good, thanks for the recommend!

God I just cannot get through No Nose Knows. Maybe if Bean wasn't a fucking writer but it just comes off as too mary sueish
And I thought Radish Root was too much of one

>>42633648
That's the tainted show bible Hasbro meddled with. There's an earlier one. And there are even earlier plans.

The only untainted show concept is the one Lauren had in her head when watching G1 as a kid

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>>42634182
And the only untainted lewdfic premise is the one she envisioned during her first clop.

>>42634317
I always forget hornjobs and 'horns as an erogenous zone' are a thing.

>>42634331
I always found it to be really funny. It would kill any serious tale, but it's good fuel for comedies or silly clop.

Fics where the villain is actually good?
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Bq9s6j7hekg

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Hornjobs don't kill any serious tale. They were even a plot point in Twilight's Plan. They didn't do any harm in Romance Reports, etc.
>>42634430
Why do you want to read ___ so badly?

>>42634331
Wingboners are better

>>42634430
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/536413/the-first-monster
Less "good" and more "undeserving of the horrible punishment he gets because the tranny author got molested as a kid or something"

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>>42634778
>The story is a message about how pedophiles are bad for society.
How daring.

>>42634784
Give it a few years.

>>42634430
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/58321/exit-through-canterlot
Blueblood doesn't actually do much wrong at all but gets the villain treatment in the story for going against acts of blatant vandalism.

>>42634430
And on a meta level Ritz Cracker's story counts, too, since ending all existence early on would be a boon for that fic.

>>42634794
Man, I remember when we clubbed that shit. I'm glad the punktavia fad died out.

>>42634794
Graffiti is really tame when it comes to "vandalism". 4chan defends way worse things on a daily basis.

>>42634802
That's how I recalled it here, yeah.

>>42634806
>4chan is one person
And yeah, it is tame, but it's so strange when BB's first appearance is being upset that someone spray-painted Celestia's statue purely to disrespect her (not as an artistic expression), and the fic tries to paint him as the bad guy there because he's against our cool and hip protagonist.

>>42634466
>>42634778
>>42634794
>>42634798
I should have worded that differently I guess.

>>42634865
Don't blame yourself for this thread's deliberate obtuseness.

>>42634897
I will blame you for not having watched that yet though.

>>42634949
Goddamn Sodom and Gomorrah.

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Just reached the halfway point in my fic.
Hope you've got a productive month of writing ahead of you, Anons.

>https://www.fimfiction.net/story/583319/is-rainbow-dash-into-spike-not-a-chance
The cancer is back.

>>42635155
I want to finish this longfic by christmas

>>42635178
Qrd?

I think I finally get Homestuck (or why people were into it). It's the music. It doesn't matter how shit your story is, if you have cool stuff happening with good music underneath people will love it.

>>42635178
I refuse to click this link, what is cancerous about it anon?

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>>42635375
It did have some good writing and good characters, once upon a time.
Once.

>>42635178
>stallionfriends
Aye, utterly disgusting

>>42635241
>>42635381
This user creates drama. He has an entourage of sycophants called "The Boys" who vote up anything he writes and who will attack you if you act anything but worshipful towards him.

>>42635675
Is his stuff any good

>>42635675
So does anyone who amasses a sizeable enough circlejerk. Why give him even more undue attention by talking sbout him here?

>>42635675
>tfw no entourage

>>42635875
You just have to network.
Bring the lube to the next marefair.

Is glomp an acceptable verb to use in an otherwise serious emotional scene?

>>42636035
No, it'll ruin the mood.

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>>42636035
No. Glomp is a silly hug-tackle. Surely you, horsewordsmith that you are, can think of a more appropriate word to use that matches the tone of the situation, hmmm?

>>42636040
>tfw no Homewrecker Pinkie Pie

>>42636040
Pinkie what the fuck

>>42636046
Twilight told her that Shining Armor is good in bed.

>>42636038
Dang it...
>>42636040
Alright, I'll come up with a serious nonsense word.
>>42636046
Does EqG Pinkie know Shining is taken?

>>42636056
It could just as easily be Equestrian Pinkie

>>42636056
Why would she care whether he's taken?

>>42636056
What the Ponk wants, she takes.

>>42636067
Because it makes it extra kinky, of course.

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Surprisingly, ship:shiningpie on Derpi is a pretty rare tag. But there are a few pics, some of which can even be posted without taking a vacation.

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>>42636091
I like this one.

>>42636091
That stallion sure loves pretty pink mares.

>>42636108
Would Pinkie like the official MLP tabletop game?

>>42636132
People say it's fun if you avoid combat.

>>42636109
He likes them pink and able to suck a golf ball through a garden hose.

>>42636134
to me, that kind of sounds like
>playing a ttrpg in the world of fim is fun, but the system itself isn't good.

>>42636190
More that the system is designed around non-combat encounters.

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>>42635155
It's going good

>>42636044
I need to finish my fic about that.

Fics with villains who did nothing wrong?
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YTFE79_5e80

Fucked up that macarons and macaroons are two different things.

>>42636766
Have the characters realise they fucked up, too.

>>42635155
I keep having crisis after crisis consume my time. I haven't had the time or energy to write more than a paragraph or 2 in months

>>42637729
Why did Luna turn the stars into spices

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>>42637757
They go well with her cider

>>42637757
She's a frustrated cook, don't you know?

>>42637773
A frustrated cock?

>>42637785
Sometimes, a spice is just a spice.

>>42637811
But it could be a penis?