>On the other hand, Kassaz’s writing style is kind of bland. There’s no effort to generate the atmosphere that would be needed to make this kind of story work, either as pornography or as a horror.

>>43284856
>expecting good writing from a fetishist

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Tuna is gross. Twilight should just go away and let Mooney be with me.

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2+2th for best 2uo!
Enjoy this conveniently packaged Tuna: https://www.fimfiction.net/story/224306/i-watch-the-moon

>>43284876
Twilight should get wholesomely impregnated by the bat pony guard Luna insisted on giving to her.

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>>43284952
Fixed that pesky thing in the corner

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>>43285057
Nuh uh, you misspelled purple and she's supposed to be there.

>>43285278
Any good fics about Mac forced into a fatherly role at a young age?

>>43285564
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/66372/her-brother-doesnt-talk-much

>>43284167
I've tried plenty. No success.

>>43285646
Oh, neat. Thanks.

https://www.fimfiction.net/story/591339/preserves
>be me
>realized there aren't any stories I can think of that pair Granny and Celestia
>new GrannyxCelestia story is one of the first results when I check
Coincidence? Obviously yes. I don't even know if it is good yet.

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>>43286068
To me it kind of works as a ship, at least in terms of something interested to explore. You see a lot of stuff of the alicorns outliving their friends and lovers, you don't really see it when said friends or lovers are super old. Mostly because geezer sex is gross.

>missed the prompting loser's posts last thread
Sad.

>>43284856
>>43284858
I just think he didn't care for the story, but even then, I'm getting better. I recently finished the longest chapter I've written so far at 7,808 words, and it really wasn't that long, but I wrote it in less time and with less hardship than I've written stuff a quarter of that length. Most of it's not even fetishistic, just Twilight having an episode.

Thanks for thinking about me; I'll keep working hard to improve.

>seven HiEs and an EqG in the box
I don't know why I even bother looking anymore.

>>43284856
>either as pornography
Unless the reviewer (I'm assuming it's the Paul guy) has the fetish, it is incredibly hard to tell what the correct "atmosphere" is that's needed to arouse its intended audience. It's almost assuredly a shit horror fic, though. I've yet to encounter or write a fetish fic that was able to flawlessly both do its fetish and the actual plot that was being dragged along.

>>43286068
>anthro cover art for a pony fic
A rare reversal of that one anon's problem.

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>>43286114
I think you make it a Celestia POV or nake it a flashback to make broaden the appeal. Family Appreciation Day also makes me thinks it works as a flashback. The only hurdle is deciding if younger Granny Smith would have a different name or not.

>>43286643
Ponify Maria Ann.

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Which horsewords authors do this?

>>43286825
Ask LLMs for writing advice? Everyone, if we're being honest.

>>43286829
Hey, it's not writing advice. It's looking up trivia on highly specific subject matter that comes up in my story, which would be extremely difficult to google and for which I previously would just have to mostly wing it/infer details from vague info available online and risk exposing that I am a hack writing about something I have no practical experience with.

>>43286829
>>43286837
I just use it for Latin and Ye Olde English so people think I'm smarter than I really am.

>>43286837
I mean, it is googling, with extra steps and spicy hallucinations. If the answer is truly difficult to google, a chat bot will never find it.

>>43286892
Yeah, but consider that a chat bot can come up with more plausible-sounding bullshit than a layman.

>>43286892
>If the answer is truly difficult to google, a chat bot will never find it.
You underestimate how bad Google is these days. You're right for free models, but Claude has saved my ass a few times at work by digging up blogs that were hard to find even when I went looking for them later on.

>>43286829
>t. slop “writer”

>>43286829
I only use LLMs for highly questionable rp.

>>43286986
You are literally me

>http://xahlee.info/emacs/emacs/emacs_abbrev_mode.html
I still have no idea how anon finds this useful for his fics.

>>43286998
I considered Emacs for my fanfics before deciding Obsidian was enough.

>>43286999
>Obsidian
Never tried it. As far as I can see, it's closed source worse Org Mode and the only benefit is that it integrates with shit like your phone.

>>43286986
I swear GPT has given me a fetish for reddit writing.

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>>43287013
The thing I hate most about it is how it constantly shits out random silly details every five seconds when describing stuff. Like its idea of worldbuilding is to namedrop concepts without following through on them.

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Hey writefags, please, I seek your aid.
The original thread is circling the drain, but I beg you to preserve this shitty idea.

>43285852
>The face when you as the immortal monarch of the land.
>Do the whole emperors new cloths thing as a lewd exhibitionist prank.
>Oh shit, ponies don't question it, they copy you instead.
>Fashion makes "how to look good with little" the new trend.
>Some overly loyal but quack scientists spark rumors that cloths can make you sick in anything more than odd accessories.
>Thisisgettinghot.PNG
>Sister doesn't play along however, insisting on full regalia and armor.
>Shirts vs skins becomes the main social strife of the age.
>Nightmare moon happens!
>Now to stay fully dressed is akin to treason.
>I'm in too deep.
>Can't turn back now, ponies died in that war, all because of a joke.
>lockIn.mp4
>After a few hundred years ponies forget being dressed was ever a thing.
>But you remember,
>Pepperidge farm remembers.
Extra thought, 1000 moons later, Sis is back, cloths gone due to moon dust wear and tare +1 rainbow lazer. Now you have to explain to reformed teenage sister that she now is the weird one, and that she has to stay stripped or be suss?

Can someone make this a real greentext, seems like a fun premise.
Can one of you turn this into an actual piece of comedy fiction? The idea got lodged in my brain and won't leave me alone, but I'm dyslexic as hell and write like a concussed toddler. There's no way I can do it justice myself.
Please.
Someone with actual talent, take a crack at it.

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>>43287234
Sounds like you're halfway there already, bud.

>>43287234
You already did it. You told a complete story with a beginning, middle, and end. It has a plot arc and characterization. It doesn’t need anything more.

If you want to expand it, though, that’s fine too. But that’s going to have to be your job, because nobody else knows what’s in your head. Even if you try to explain, it’s not going to come out the way you want unless you do it yourself.

>my talent for planning out scenes in my head and essentially prewriting them so I just need to type them out is a direct result of my tendency to overly plan and mentally rehearse conversations as a coping mechanism for my strain of 'tism

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>>43287709
>my talent for planning out scenes in my head and essentially prewriting them
You mean
An outline?

Guys does anyone else write down all the characters, dialogue, scenes, and the plot of your story before you start writing it?

>>43287810
I usually try to get my stories proofread before I start writing them.
Just to be sure.

>>43287802
No. I don't really ever have a proper outline beyond a vague mental idea of where I want to go which is inherent and almost coinciding with having an idea for a story. I mentally type out scenes word by word and line by line and figure out what works while doing other stuff and then I just copy the results on the page.

>>43287810
Pretty much, yeah. It’s worked for me so far. With the proviso that things often change after I start writing them, and for some stories I don’t go back and change the outline to make it consistent. If the story is short then it’s not worth the trouble.

I can't tell if this discussion is ironic or not

>>43286998
It's just autocorrect. You type "equ" and it'll autocorrect it to "Equestria", "ts" becomes "Twilight Sparkle", etc. If you have a lot of long words, nouns, etc. it can cut down on typing time. Of course, in something like Word, it's a nice and easy find/replace UI and you don't have to make a fucking notepad code file you save in the file directory. Reason #86863 why people will let Microsoft rape them instead of using FOSS.

>>43286999
>uses Markdown
The inability to natively center or right align text baffles me. This is something printing presses in the 1600s were able to do. Who doesn't include such basic text editing features in their markup language?

>>43288123
I didn't think of or realize that.

>>43288123
>typing something else as a shorthand
Programmingshit that's poisonous to your ability to actually write properly.

>>43287810
I usually wordvomit a long summary of how I want it to go, then follow that when I start actually writing. The final story almost always ends up being very different from the summary but it’s nice to have a general idea of where I want things to go.

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So, I've finished another commissioned chapter, and now I'm finally working on a story I started in late 2024 and didn't touch much in 2025. How's your writing going? I've got a commissioner who loves Eris, so I've been thinking about her more than I expected; I no longer think I'll just finish up my current stories and then leave her be for a while.

>>43288684
I've been working on a Shiboyugi ripoff/fixfic.

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Living the 5'11" life in,
>/FSBC/

Size difference fags are eating good today. I think the writer enjoyed himself far too much writing this, especially the sequel. Or perhaps exactly enough, because yeah, it was fun. Can't blame Celestia for having a (good) type.

Honestly, though, I believe the fic is just kind of quite good. Kind of like last week's fic in that it's not trying to be an epic adventure or over-the-top emotional drama. I know I say that a lot whenever we see a nice non-adventure oneshot, but I think it's important to recognize when SoL'y fics are good, too.
Kind of reminded me of Twice as Bright a few times because of Celestia and the similar tone of the fic. It was an enjoyable read no matter how you look at it, I think. The grammar is good (I've spotted a handful of slip-ups, but the fic is written well enough to make me question my error-spotting instincts), and more importantly, the cozy romance mood is conveyed nicely. It's nice that both of these fics are more or less centered on a single event instead of trying to develop the full romance story of these two ponies—it gives the stories the time they need to get into Coco's head and not rush the pacing. The early parts of the first fic also do a good job establishing the setting, avoiding the common SoL+Romance issues of two ponies sitting in an empty room with set dressing. The fic is very funny when it tries to be, too, without getting unfunny and tiring like [Comedy]. The box, kek.

Obviously, the specter of the Adversary hangs over the fic. I actually made it like 20 pages in before realizing it's not meant to be an AU, but rather H*ber's nightmare setting. I'd like to say that it's understandable in the context of the story the author wanted to write (2x Bright used Pinkie's Pinkieness to work around the issue of the crown, but Coco would have a harder time), but it still made me frown at the memory whenever the fic drew attention to h*ber's seasons. The worst was when the sequel randomly has Gallus show up. Gross. Notably, though, I was very impressed that he managed to work one of the show's worst episodes into a central plot of a good story.

I alluded to this before, but a good romance fic must have good characterizations. This one does deliver. More so for Celestia, who, in a stroke of meta-level irony, steals the spotlight from the cute designer a lot. Not in a bad way and certainly not maliciously, but she's obviously the more interesting character, and her actions and implied thoughts are very nice and very Celestia. Coco is, indeed, very cute, however! Also a shout-out to Luna, who does what Lunas are wont to do and steals the spotlight from her sister in turn. I enjoyed the integration of the 'contemporary' idioms. The M6 in the first were rather decorative, and I'm not really sure why that one scene is even there.
So, I liked it quite a lot! It joins 2xBright, K'awka, and the marble-minuette fic as the fourth champion of the cozy SoL Romance sub-genre for me.

>>43289210
This story is fine. It doesn't feel like it quite gets there in terms of cuteness for me, but that could be an artifact of the pairing. Overall, it reads a bit like a first draft where things don't quite line up in the way I expect or take a roundabout path to get there which gets annoying (I wanted to give up at the corruption of the Ship of Theseus). Considering that it was written for a contest that makes sense, though I wish some parts were expanded on like the idea of being a beginner at something. I admit that it was hard for me at points to accept that Celestia, as old as she is, wouldn't understand that being a beginner means being shit at something until you build up skills. At least just make her angry that she isn't performing as well as she thinks she should (which is alluded to at one point but mostly fizzles out), or have her acknowledge that she forgot what it was like to be a beginner.

Big!Twilight and Celestia writing an autistic amount of notes on her interests are excellent, though.

I couldn't be bothered to read the second fic since that seemed like just 13k of relationship issues with the same meandering writing as the first, but I'll probably come back to it when I get bored at work.

>>43289210
TUT
>Celestia hiding in a fake rock
kek, and very good scene. Especially for setting the tone early
>Celestia the thirty something librarian
Hot
>coco is celestia's clippy
>Celestia wants to stop practicing
>coco: nonono keep going, keep professing your love for me. I mean Longshore. You're doing much better!
>"Y-you're bigger than Celestia now."
Fucking KEK. The Unrequited Thespian was very good. Seemed very pony and lighthearted. I really liked Coco lowering Celestia's disguise and then just checking again. Also Celestia's confession was nice. Very cute.

MutmM
>coco getting swept away in the current of covers and getting dragged into cuddles
>coco needs magical scaffolding to dress up Celestia
kek, I instantly pictured the kerbals walking around the catwalks when building a rocket in ksp
>climbing her special kitchen steps onto the counter top
>twilight is turning into a giraffe
>Coco found herself surrounded by a forest on all sides.
>Luna summons the royal doorframe of height measurement
Fucking kek
>A/Ns keep calling me lonely
Brutal. This story is a bit different than TuT. It gets a bit ridiculous but I guess thats part of the fun or the fetish. Needing steps to get onto the kitchen counter to peer into a bowl is crazy, and certainly not the same size we were at in the first fic. It kinda reads like Fae was forced to not write about a foal so he just wrote about a foal sized mare dating a huge mare so he could get the same scenes. Also if Twilight was getting huge, wouldn't Tia and Luna have been shrinking? Anyways, I did like it quite a bit. Luna was great and I really liked the metaphors that came from Coco being much smaller than the world she's in. That said, there is definitely an undertone of fetishism to this that didn't exist in the first one (perhaps until you've read the 2nd one) and it does sort of spoil it a little bit I think. TuT is a much more normal fic. Also both fics were good and funny so of course [Comedy] is no where to be seen

>>43289210
I read the first fic when it came out and didn’t reread it, so my memory may be faulty. I remember it being solid, with a nice concept and reliable execution. I don’t remember it making me particularly excited, but I do seem to have left an upvote.

I didn’t like the second fic, which just seems to be an extended shitpost on the theme of “lol smol Coco.” It felt pointless. Well-executed for what it was, but it wasn’t much. I appreciate that hat it tried to give Coco some angst over being less than (in a literal way) her marefriend, but the resolution of that was just “she is a fetish sex toy and likes it.” Which really did nothing for me.

>>43289210
>I think the writer enjoyed himself far too much writing this, especially the sequel.
Certainly true in the sequel
>The grammar is good (I've spotted a handful of slip-ups
I only really noticed a couple at about the last 20% of the 2nd fic, which is weird. Maybe the very last part didn't get proofed or something
>It's nice that both of these fics are more or less centered on a single event
Yeah, it was nice and to the point (which is just playing around in the SoL zone)
>without getting unfunny and tiring like [Comedy]
kek yup
>The worst was when the sequel randomly has Gallus show up. Gross.
Yeah, kind of a jump scare when they look out of the train's window
>Also a shout-out to Luna, who does what Lunas are wont to do and steals the spotlight from her sister in turn.
Absolutely, the characters were great and Luna stole the show for pretty much the whole tea party
>and the marble-minuette fic
>Luna steals the show here
>Limestone steals the show there
Hmmmm

>>43289221
Interesting that you bounced off it this hard. It's just a cute mare doing cute things and a beeg mare that likes cute mares. And I think the story did spend time on being a beginner. Celestia specifically says she's embarrassed and also wouldn't want to actually be a beginner with any group of ponies since she thinks it might ruin their groups or careers. And I think she also doesn't really know how to build up her skills since she is the former princess and ponies have trouble critiquing her.
Anyways, you missed out on the 2nd fic just quadrupling down on the size difference and Luna showing coco that Tia has a fetish.

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>>43289221
No love for fun-sized Coco? Calling it a first draft is imo pretty crazy. The 'roundabout way' is the fic, imo. Like, yes, you could expand (or trim) some of the parts, but I don't think it really matters to the story? The acting thing is mostly a pretense to get them to interact somewhere where Coco can show off her good side, but even so, I didn't feel like it was glossed over too much.
>Ship of Theseus
Would be the worst reference in the fic but Gallus materialized directly into the sequel just to take that bullet.
>Celestia, as old as she is, wouldn't understand
Eh, it happens. She's extremely well-researched about the topic, so it's normal to feel like you're owed some minimum level of competence.
>Big!Twilight and Celestia
Somehow neither of them is the best princess in this fic.
>13k of relationship issues with the same meandering writing
The sequel is very different, actually. It's mainly about Coco being smol (ridiculously so), but also about her meeting Luna and the rest of pegacorns. There's comparatively less Celestia (by frequency, not volume). It's fun if you like the gimmick, although less of a "complete" romance fic than the first one.

>>43289292
>Hot
Between this (and other Celestia descriptions) and the whole smol!Coco, the writer seems to know what he likes, ha ha.
>The Unrequited Thespian was very good
Agreed, it was a nice ponyfic.
>It gets a bit ridiculous but I guess thats part of the fun
Oh, he definitely pulled out all the stops there: for fun (the box lmao), light emotional drama, and the appeal. Do keep in mind that the apartment was built-to-spec for specifically Celestia, so the kitchen counter is not at the usual height. Although the fic includes a few arguably more ridiculous scale moments, so you're not wrong. She's not foal-sized, though. Not THAT far, and that would be bad and not cute at all. The best comparison is when she's on Celestia and goes "huh, this is how foals feel on their parent's back", so in reality she's maybe like half a head shorter than most ponies. The measuring rod also registers her on the scale of normal ponies, just kinda very short compared to them, and therefore REALLY short compared to the big alabaster mare.
>an undertone of fetishism to this
Oh, definitely, and I'm not surprised it has 8 downboops. But it's like... more wholesome rather than gross? In this regard it's still not nearly as far gone as the (relatively nice) chapter our threadly pregbro wrote for last year's corpse, but kind of similar.
And yes, Luna is great.

>>43289310
>It felt pointless
I think it's a worse story, but it was still fun and mostly cute. Angsty Coco and Luna carried much of it.

>>43289314
>Interesting that you bounced off it this hard
I didn't hate it or anything, it's just a classic case of me the reader wanting more depth on topics that the story simply doesn't have the time or space for.
>the 2nd fic just quadrupling down on the size difference
Hearing that the size_difference in the second fic leans more towards a comedic fetish angle does make me want to read it more.

>>43289325
It was just too much telling at points and I'm currently stuck in editing mode while working on my own project so that's likely bleeding through. I get that you have to move the story along sometimes, but I really hate stuff like "the news genuinely confused the alicorn" and "receiving such kind words from the former leader of Equestria burned Coco's face and ears red." Once every so often is fine, but when they come up enough for me to quickly scroll through and find two several paragraphs apart from each other is off-putting.

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>>43289210
What an adorable pair of stories!
And ponies! It’s pretty dangerous to base a fic off of one of, if not the actual worst Celestia episodes in the show, and while I wish the fic had pulled a Triptych and just declared that Celestia can act, actually, it’s OK that it instead decided to capitalize so much on that one scene of Celestia dancing in place.
Unrequited Thespian was pretty good. Besides all the entertaining sunny mare syndrome symptoms, the thing that struck me most about the story was how fast it went. It seemed like their first date conversation was quite heavy, certainly zooming through the character development.
I was mildly annoyed that Celestia was apparently paying so much attention to Coco, but did not recognize that she was trying to step down as the organizer of the theater event. But, that and Celestia’s inability to act were pretty much the only downers for the whole story. Reading all of Coco’s unabashed praise for Sunbutt was a highlight througout.

Measuring up was just silly. The author was clearly on a lark, and the portrayal of their difference in size completely leaves any attempt at show accuracy behind even from the cover art and description. Not[Comedy] fics keep winning here.
The box and the forest metaphor were especially funny, and I like the idea that Celestia has a pool for a bath in her penhouse in every major city. The idea that she has a smol type is dumb, but Luna did a spectacular job delivering the punchline there. Overall, it was a very welcome surprise both to have Luna steal the show as she did, and also steal the relationship fixup from Cadence, due to her own intimate knowledge of Celestia’s proclivities.

>>43289210
So, what are we reading next week?

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>>43289386
Agreed, yeah.

>>43289771
For once I didn't forget; I just have no idea tbdesu. I can throw a few fics off from the list, but I've been terribly busy these past couple weeks. I should populate the list some more soon(ish).
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/92300/crisis-on-two-equestrias
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/375944/one-white-unicorn
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/57956/integration (possible gayfic [stallions] warning?)
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/159465/brothers-and-sisters

>>43289807
I'm for Crisis on two equestrias

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>>43289807
I reviewed Integration here, >>40158258
I don't know where you got the idea that it's M/M shipping. It would normally be good enough for a club fic except that Twiflag gets filtered by OC male MCs and OC casts. And the Glimmerflag who wanted to read it has left the club.

I reviewed Brothers and Sisters here, >>40813772
It's better than those Dash stinkers we read, I guess.

I'm pretty sure I don't want to read any Unwhole Hole fics, I know I don't want to read Brothers and Sisters again. Integration would be fine if it's not just the two of us reading it.

I'll put a different Raguos fic up too, https://www.fimfiction.net/story/190641/withdrawal

>>43289875
OC casts are fine, and OC males are better with OC casts and not canon casts. That said, the OC cast is ideally mostly mares, but if there's a reason for it then it could be stallions. This fic seems fine (this is not me voting for it)

>>43289807
Voting for the white unicorn.

>>43289807
I'll vote for White Unicorn. Can't recall the last time I read a Fleur de Lis story.

>>43289807
>Crisis on Two Equestrias
I haven't read Lunaverse and I'm autistic where I'd prefer to have read Lunaverse before reading its spin-offs, despite what the description says.
>One White Unicorn
Could be alright I guess.
>Integration
This better not be a [Fetish] fic in disguise.
>Brothers and Sisters
Her Soldiers We was pretty forgettable and this looks pretty similar going off the description.
>>43289875
>Withdrawal
I think I'll vote for this one if it's allowed, post-Tirek magic-addicted Twilight sounds cool.
If not, then voting One White Unicorn as well, but I'd request Withdrawal to be included in the next voting list.

I don't participate in the club, but Withdrawal is a great fic. You Anons should definitely put it on the list.

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>>43289210
I had to leave out early today and I couldn't post my write-up this morning fugfugfug
>Thespian
I have a hard time being objective with this story, because it targets my weaknesses. Not only is it a spotlight for a smaller character, it also has well-executed Princess shipping. The story is an easy read, very light, fluffy, and cute. Coco double-taking if Celestia is flirting with her? Cute. Celestia pranced giddily after helping with the show? Very cute. I like how the author uses punctuation to convey Celestia's funky line delivery, as well as her other little mannerisms. I appreciate the restraint the ending shows, having it end with a proposal for a first date. It feels very "new beginnings" and, before this story had a sequel, I thought it was a good ending.
>Measuring Up
This entry feels a bit more indulgent.
I think, since the original did all the work of building and selling Celly and Coco's relationship, the sequel gets the luxury of cashing in on them being a cutesy couple. I advise checking for cavity after reading, given how sweet and sugary the whole thing is. Also, dang, we are really laying it on thick with the size difference play here. It does serve a purpose, conveying how Coco feels small to compared to Celestia, not just physically. Just because your story has a size difference fetish and fetishist doesn't mean you can't use it for character development. I also thought Luna was well used in this story, her dynamic with Celestia being extra-sisterly, and was a highlight for me. First story is PG and this is closer to PG-13, easily with that ending.
All-in-all, an enjoyable round of feel-good shipping.

>>43288684
>How's your writing going?
I made the mistake of reading a gore horror fic that uses the same structuring and mechanics as my fetish and now I'm stuck having to write anther fetish story to "purge" it from my brain. This has caused the Twidash clopfic to suddenly move up the chain far earlier than I was expecting.

>>43290475
>not letting your readings influence your writings in a wonderful melting point
You'll never be a NYT Bestseller.

https://www.fimfiction.net/story/381734/the-faces-we-share
A solid classic horror fic. There was a Goosebumps like this one. Dash finds a totally-not-evil talking mask and uses it to start spooking other ponies.
For me, the highlights are in the latter of the story, when Dash pranks Golden Harvest and the unicorn stallion. It really shines at building suspense after all the set-up in the first half. As Dash is chasing the unicorn stallion, you get this sick pit in your stomach, like something terrible is about to happen. It's like watching someone about to scald herself because she isn't paying attention to a pot boiling on her burner. I think the story is worth reading for that part alone.
My biggest point of contention is the ending. Zecora shows up at the 11th hour, whips out her signature Rainbow Dash voodoo doll, and put Dash in time-out before she can cause anything of lasting consequence. I was really expecting a big "oh shit" moment during the chase scene. Maybe Dash would have gotten stuck in a transformation, or the stallion would have fought back, or he trips while running away and dies. I get not wanting to do a downer ending for every horror story, but I still feel blue-balled.

>>43290723
I read this one. I was expecting it to have a more traditional structure with the others trying to get the mask off RD after she becomes a monster in the second half, but it follows RD's perspective from beginning to end. I still thought it was alright and pretty good at creating unease with how suspiciously well things were going for Dash and how she was taking it further and further. The ending definitely feels a bit underwhelming, I like the happy ending but ideally there would be more of a present threat before Zecora shows up

Also put >review before the link next time OR ELSE

>>43282699
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>>43285913
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>>43290760
>implying review-scraper-anon will run Flaresolverr and squid on his PC and proxy his script's requests through them to at last update the reviews site

>>43290762
Don't be silly, our fics are unfinished because of retardation, not autism seeking to milk things forever.

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More kino covers

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>>43289210
>>43289807
Alright, then we're reading One White Unicorn next week:
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/375944/one-white-unicorn
The first seven chapters (titled correctly for once!) on week 1, the rest for week 2.

With a note that Withdrawal will be next.

>>43289875
>where you got the idea that it's M/M shipping
Caramel as a character has been memed as gay since the olden times, so a romance story with him and no other named characters in sight (or it tags) was suspicious. A very quick glance at the comments didn't reveal anything, though I prioritize dodging spoilers so maybe there was something.

>>43290274
Man, I always feel bad when I post late and dodge all the other anons. But it's hard to go back into the fix-discussing mood once it's gone. That said, I also agree with everything that you're saying.
I'll try adding some of this author's fics into the list to see if it was a fluke or if he's actually good.

>>43291018
Maybe he will! Or maybe someone else will take up his mantle, in which case, having them properly formatted would be helpful, so yeah, I'm with >>43290760 on keeping the >review.

>>43291632
>I'll try adding some of this author's fics into the list to see if it was a fluke or if he's actually good.
I glanced over some of Rego's stuff and this duology was the perfect club-fic length. A lot of the others are either short one-shots (10k words or less) or really long (200k+ words). There's one where Chrysalis is AJ's dog (not Winona), which looks interesting but is 260k words.

>>43291732
I think the more hilarious example is that trilogy off his that goes
>Forbidden Melodies
10k words. Hard historical drama about old hymns
>Peach shitpost
4k word peach shitpost
>Gloria Celestia
6k words. Historical drama about fanaticism.
>Electro Swing
Motherfucking 423k deep romance drama that pays off the build up of the first two stories near the very end of the fic in ways you don't really see coming..
It boggles the mind.

I need a review to parse if I'm improving or not, anyone interested?
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/588299/unknown-foal
This is the latest story I've wrote with effort, and it did what it could.
Any critique helps.

>>43291908
How can you improve on perfection?

>>43291913
twenty three downvotes say otherwise.

>>43291920
genius is seldom recognized by its contemporaries.

>>43291947
That's why Moby Dick got all those downvotes.

>>43291908
anon have you thought about talking to a therapist about your incest fantasies

>>43291949
It's a LARP, not the real author. The author has been writing this way since 2012 and shows no signs of changing.

>>43291950
>14+ years of nigh unintelligible fetish fics
I admire and fear the dedication to writing their own slop

>>43291908
Sorry, It's a pretty bad story. The prose has a very "ESL" feel to its prose and grammar:
>in Canterlot voice she spoke
>You will both be mating by the time he is a full stallion male
>“For sake, please he’s not even old enough yet…”
I'd strongly recommend reading regular English novels to help improve things. Consulting the Purdue OWL for grammar could also help.

The sex stuff is also bad. For a fetish fic, the narrator is shockingly, almost comedically, bad at describing things:
>She knew it was the workings of Celestia doing this but she couldn’t stop getting erect inward.
>Her open place went side to side on the wooden shaft of the chair.
>She gently twirled around and showed her gaping hole open and tense.
Overall, I'd say the core issue is the prose just being bad and needing to be substantially worked on to improve the grammar and flow. When writing fetish content, you also should really let the narrator run wild. People are supposed to fap to this, so they should get as much detail as possible. But that's a secondary issue here compared to the inherent problems with the prose and grammar.

>>43291920
A lot of that can be because of the poor prose/grammar, but remember that it's also a blatant foalcon fic. Foalcon gets nuked from orbit. There's a solid chance 15 of those dowvotes happened just from the title and rating alone.

>>43291950
>It's a LARP
10/10 cope. I find it infinitely more likely to be an autist with a fetish than some auteur who's been passionately trolling for fifteen years.

>>43292012
grammar is the issue? guess I'll take a class for that since nothing is really clicking for me. A refresher would be nice. Thanks for the tip.

>>43279828
I reported it yesterday and now it seems to be privated?

>>43292107
And it's dead now.

>>43292012
>10/10 cope
No, I meant that >>43291908 is not the real author. It's someone giggling while he tries to get us to read terrible foalcon. The real author doesn't care. He's been writing poorly for fifteen years and it hasn't bothered him before; why would it bother him now?

>>43292418
Maybe he got into a car accident and he's reflecting on his life finally

>>43292107
>>43292210
it'll be back within a week

>>43292625
How do you know?

>>43292645
mods like to private stories that they have “under review”. more often than not they come back as soon as the author and/or enough braindead readers complain that it wasn't actually aislop, *especially* if the story was already popular beforehand

>>43292657
The guy will have to explain, among other things, why the new chapters averaged 160 em dashes per chapter when it wasn't the case before. A sudden passion for them, I imagine.

How do I become a Fimfic mod so that I can mercilessly delete all the AIslop that gets above 80% on GPT Zero?

>>43292689
Hey, that's my fantasy too!

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>>43292689
>using "AI" to check whether "AI" made something
I couldn't get the full resolution of this image because the modern web is utter shit.

>>43292784
I can usually tell by instinct, but you'd need some soft of official reasoning. And what you posted is a fringe case that you'd have a hard time replicating with any half-decent chatbot right now. Honestly, it might even be fake because what kind of chatbot gives such a concise answer instead of the word vomit they're known for?

>>43292784
Already talked about, but GPTZero is solid to detect basic AI usage. It's also not the same technology, algorithm, or usage as a classic chatbot you showcased, but you already know that.
If you get >80% on it with creative writing, you used AI. Point.
All fimfics written before AI will at the very most get 5%, and most of them just get a flat 0%.
If someone finds me a creative writing that is for sure not AI and gets tagged as 20% or more, I'll be surprised to see that.

>>43292810
I put in a paragraph of my writing and it was only 60% sure it was human.
I am just extremely fucking verbose, and I think it felt that was an A.I thing to do.

>>43292841
In this one?
https://app.gptzero.me/
If so, I'd like to see it, if you don't mind.

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>>43292852
Here.
There's a 4% difference from last time, probably because it's the same block put in, dunno.

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>>43292859
It's dumb, but it's because there is only one paragraph and it ups the odds when there isn't enough text.
Which again is a bit dumb because your writing is correctly identified as human (Green).
I think if you put a paragraph above or below, it will correctly put 0%.

Sadly the best way to tell if something is AI is to actually read it and look for tells. Not just em dashes but
>Pointless details that go nowhere
>Describing characters with smells
>Describing those smells as "something distinctly X" or "undeniably Y"
>Describing X character as "X, the Y who once did Z, the Y who once did W, was XYZing".
>Author comments are borderline incomprehensible or overly agreeable
>Inconsistencies between paragraphs: for example one character was sitting in a chair drinking coffee and the next time it describes them a paragraph they're closing a book they were reading while standing

>>43292872
>Describing characters with smells
But what if your character likes smelling people?

>>43292882
Then see the next point.

>>43292872
Don't forget
>It wasn't X — it was Y
or some variation thereof.

>>43292904
I've noticed that AI models have stopped doing that and started going “Not X. Not Y. Just… Z.” which is somehow even more awful to read

>>43292841
Yeah but you're profoundly autistic so it's normal to doubt the humanity of what you make.

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>>43292947
That just makes what I write all the more special.
Needs.
Ha.

I'm writing an extensive guide on some of the finer nuances and subtleties of determining if something is AI-written/AI-assisted, and one strategy that's served me well is paying attention to the unicode symbols used for punctuation.

You've got the straight ones like "quote" and 'postrophe and the common ellipsis made with three periods... but then there's also the “fancier” variants (such as the angled quote marks), which aren’t /always/ used by AI, and which also occur by default on iOS or when typing in programs like Word… (try highlighting the individual dots on that one to see the difference) ...but when a story switches back and forth between variants of a given punctuation mark, and there's differences in the writing that always appear with one or the other—for example, the "normal" quotes are in segments with dryer sentences and occasional typos, while the “fancy” quotes are in segments that are much more polished and full of GPT-isms like “She didn't just X. She Y. Hard. And Z.”—then it's basically like a manuscript with two very distinct handwriting styles claiming to have only one author. The alternative is that they constantly switched back and forth between writing programs AND switched their writing style back and forth with it for no reason (not even insane people do this)—and unless they had the foresight to claim it was co-written (I saw one guy do this where the co-writer also clearly uses AI), there's simply no explanation for this behavior other than AI usage.

Rulebreaking used to be very straightforward: "This is a graphic sex scene and shouldn't be rated E." or "This isn't about ponies, it's an entirely original setting featuring the Power Rangers." or "This is just The Bible. You didn't write that.". Now, however, we have to report things while making the utterly surreal claim that they were written by a guy who isn't actually real, which is kind of unprecedented in anything ever... So finding the kind of "smoking gun" needed to shatter plausible deniability is a lot harder, and our methods need to evolve alongside the technology. It will almost never be 100% certain even when obvious, so sometimes you'll have to point out a few subtler tells that are excusable on their own but eliminate plausible deniability when combined, like the punctuation discrepancy + prose discrepancy in tandem.

>>43292689
That tool seems quite accurate, but even if it was some sort of government-mandated database run by OpenAI, X, Anthropic, etc. in collaboration that scans all chats on file and tells you "yep, we generated that" without ever lying, it still runs the issue of being a black box; it doesn't "show its work" (unless it's locked behind the account/browser extension stuff I didn't bother with), so it requires just blindly taking it at its word, and basically defering authority to an external source. For that reason, I can understand why mods don't see high AI scores as actionable.

It's still good for determining if a story that raised your eyebrow is worth taking a more thorough look at, though. Sometimes I click stories on the front page and look for anything abusing line breaks like

>X. Not Y. Z.
>
>Just... Z.
>
>Mare gasped.
>
>Slowly, she ABC.

and put it in my "check for AI when I have time" shelf. I swear, it's like ChatGPT gets its pleasure circuits overloaded every time it starts a new line or chops up a sentence down to its component clauses and makes them all separate. You can quickly make a decent guess on a story just by scrolling through it and looking at the paragraph/sentence sizes real quick.

>>43292953
IWTCIFS

>>43293016
Gross, she's a kindergartener

>>43293007
>This is just The Bible. You didn't write that
Suddenly the presence of Christian furries quoting Thomas Aquinas on the horrors of premarital sex to me makes a little more sense.

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I ran an original passage from Harry potter through zerogpt and it flagged it as 4.3% AI generated. but a human wrote it 100% so why 4.3% AI help?

>>43293133
Ignoring whatever the fuck that crop is, very little things for me ever completely pop up as 0% AI. It doesn't matter anyway; you're obsessing too much over something irrelevant. You want something with a high percentage.

Funny how even J.K. Rowling’s original Harry Potter text hits 4% AI on ZeroGPT. If almost nothing ever reads as fully human to you, maybe the detector’s just noisy not that it ‘doesn’t matter.’ Caring about how your work lands in a community that side eyes AI isn’t obsession, it’s basic awareness. Wanting clean results isn’t the same as demanding perfection.

>>43293146
AI generated text was still trained off human work, so it won't ever be perfect.

>>43293133
These things are never that accurate. If you want really accurate results, give it a large amount of text, and pay no attention unless you get a high score like 90%.

Also, some detectors are better than others. I can't remember which of ZeroGPT and GPTZero is the rip-off. The best detector I know of is Pangram.

>>43293062
Why would anyone take Thomas seriously? He thought witches could prevent erections instead of the opposite.

>>43293133
>ITT anon doesn't understand probability

>>43293153
Ah, how illuminating. One must commend the perspicacity of dismissing these detectors’ inherent imprecision while simultaneously proffering the sage counsel to furnish them with voluminous corpora before deigning to acknowledge their verdicts yet only when they register some arbitrarily elevated threshold, such as a lofty 90%. Pray tell, if even pristine excerpts from J.K. Rowling’s original Harry Potter canon register a non-negligible AI score on ZeroGPT, does that not rather undermine the very notion of reliability you so blithely invoke?
As for your professed uncertainty regarding which among ZeroGPT and GPTZero constitutes the inferior facsimile, and your elevation of Pangram as the preeminent arbiter… one can only surmise a certain unfamiliarity with the capricious methodologies underlying these probabilistic oracles. In fanfiction circles, where scrutiny is keen and authenticity prized, even modest flags warrant judicious attention not cavalier indifference. But by all means, proceed with your expansive texts and selective thresholds; the cognoscenti will undoubtedly find it most enlightening.

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>>43293160
You fucking tell me, man.

>>43293153
Should the lexicon prove too recondite, procure a dictionary forthwith that you might better apprehend the subtleties of the discourse.

>>43293164
>Draco Dei
Lmao there's your problem.

>>43293136
Thus, with matters clarified, I wish you a most agreeable day, sir.

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>>43293173
I see.

>>43288684
I think I might actually get my longfic finished and edited before the end of the summer. Disclaimer: I said that last summer and here I am shitposting when I'm supposed to be writing

>>43293225
I've set myself the goal of starting publishing on September 12 all the way to Halloween.
I still have two and a half chapters left to go.
I must finish chapter 6 before the 21st. That gives me time for the rest.
Here's hoping, Anon.

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>>43292418
He's posted here before, you can see the behavior is pretty much exactly the same. >>34028851
>>43292012
If you are masochistic enough, you could tell him if he actually improved in 7 years by comparing >>43291908 to >>34029287
That was a fun thread ripping on Skirts, too.

>>43293163
I don't think it matters whether I respond rationally to you or not, since you're already using your thesaurus to disguise the flimsiness of your argument. So instead I'm going to say: Kys, faggot.

>>43293304
Ah, the apex of intellectual brilliance: discarding reason for ‘Kys, faggot’ the instant a superior lexicon appears. How profoundly illuminating.
Such crude slurs from an insignificant, irrelevant pebble of a nobody glide harmlessly past; they merely expose your hollow, pathetic insecurity and withered mind. We who cherish My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic, a sanctuary of harmony and respect, regard your vulgar, contemptible drivel as utterly pitiable and beneath all notice.
I harbor sincere hope that these words prove legible to you, though I gravely doubt whether your scant allotment of brain cells can endure the strain. Should they overwhelm your feeble faculties, scurry forthwith and procure a dictionary. I bid you a most agreeable day, sir.

>>43293354
Fics where someone cums inside these two anons?

>>43293354
>Gotcha! Here's a version of your reply rewritten to be even more verbose. Happy trolling! Let me know if you need anything else.

>>43293354
I am inexplicably turned on right now.

>>43292689
I assume a long circlejerk session on the Discord is one of the first requirements.

>>43292859
>like the pedals of a flower
>sifting out the itineraries whispered before
>was already quieted
>simmered away into nothing
>listened closely to the inscription for faint echoes
It's definitely because of the flowery narrator. I put in my fetish narrator giving a clean, simple play-by-play of Daring's body getting modulated and it spit out a 100% human rating. I'd say the more purple your prose, the more it'll say it's AI.

>>43293164
Is this that changeling cyberpunk fetish fic or is there another pornfic where people are having philosophical debates in the comments? Because it sounds like something the author was arguing about with the other slav in the comment section.

>>43293392
It's https://www.fimfiction.net/story/591389/love-is-a-bug. Apparently premarital sex gets you sent to Tartarus. Even if you're literally the Princess of Fucking.

>>43293398
Not even premarital sex, but sex for any reason that isn't procreation.

>>43293398
>Sex with a shapeshifting soul-eating bug monster is okay if you marry it first

>>43293208
He's friends with Artist which tells you everything you need to know.

>>43293398
>the Princess of Fucking
Flurry Heart?

>>43293007
I accused one guy of AI for precisely the reason that his formatting and punctuation symbols were all over the place, like some sections clearly copy-pasted from another source than what was being hand-written. He completely denied it though and claimed that his writing process was merely to write his emails in Word, but then when pasting he would add stuff in the email dialog... Yeah, sure.

The real problem with AI I've found is people not wanting to admit to it even to their dying breath. There's a few noble souls with vigorous AI acknowledgments in their work, but most people use AI heavily while managing to convince themselves it's "just a tool" that's helping them and that they're still the one doing all the real work, such that even when they're copy pasting paragraphs at you they consider it a human response. In the youtube video essay scene, it's increasingly common for total nobodies to start spitting out regurgitated AI scripts that get hundreds of thousands of likes/views from people in awe of the uploader's poetic grasp of a game's nature, but it's obviously AI. I call them out, no response, EVER. It is their livelihood, I guess.

>>43293484
Ignorance is a commodity in today’s world, why should the common goyim care if something’s AI or not? They simply only care about bing bing wahoo no matter the cost and don’t think any deeper about what they consume.

>>43293484
>just a tool
I mean we had a dude last thread claiming that.

>>43293484
>The real problem with AI I've found is people not wanting to admit to it even to their dying breath
Whenever people try to compare AI for writing with AI for images, I notice you don't have this problem with the latter.

What's the fic for the next club?

>>43293579
Which is ironic because artists already incorporate a shitton of automation in their digital work. The truth is that most of them are lazy fucking retards constantly in poor economic conditions because they refuse to actually treat their job like a job and they're terrified by the fact that people can prompt images better than the garbage they draw for free now.

>>43293651
Not that anon and slightly off topic but the thing is most artists are not particularly good and only a small amount have a unique artstyle that ai can’t replicate to a satisfactory degree to most of the people to can use it to generate substitutes to commissions.
We also exist in a culture that doesn’t value high art and where most online artists draw fucking furry porn or hentai in simple art styles. Which means ai can much more easily act as a satisfactory substitute to most potential commissioners. The interests people have in relation to booba and cute simplicity drawn characters much more easy for an ai to satisfy than anything else.

This fic was decent imo.
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/590637/pinkie-pies-little-foal

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>>43293651
>Which is ironic because artists already incorporate a shitton of automation in their digital work.
The plagiarism machine is not the same thing as a digital drawing program, or even a camera, despite what fools claim.

>>43293663
Yeah, the market for generic shit is dead, but it still can't make original work, just hyper collages.

>>43293666
>Pinkie Pie [Comedy]
This can only be the work of Satan

>>43293614
Read nigger READ >>43291632

>>43293760
>read
That's not how this thread works.

>>43293706
>it's okay if I tell the computer to draw a curve, a line, a shape, or a gradient
>it's not okay if you tell it to draw a shitty picture instead of paying me to draw an even shittier one, reeeee
Also "le plagiarism machine" argument from people who make fan content will never not be hilarious, but sure, continue begging the government to pass laws that will destroy what you've decided to dedicate your life to.

>>43293809
>it's okay if I tell the computer to draw a curve, a line, a shape, or a gradient
>it's not okay if you tell it to draw a shitty picture instead of paying me to draw an even shittier one, reeeee
Yes. This is factually correct.

>>43293809
>>it's okay if I tell the computer to draw a curve, a line, a shape, or a gradient
Gradient is the only thing in this list that is actually automated, and even then I think gradient tool is still seen as less respectable than manual coloring. No hypocrisy here.
>Also "le plagiarism machine" argument from people who make fan content will never not be hilarious
The small artist is inherently more sympathetic than a large corporation with millions of lawsuit money, so no hypocrisy here either.

>>43293706
>plagiarism machine
if ai is plagiarism, then so is an artist even just looking at another artist's work. there are many valid arguments against ai; this is not one of them.

>>43293850
An artist won't perfectly replicate another artist's specific artstyle just by looking at it.

>>43293864
Neither will AI as proven by the very image the pregtard posted. It's arguably harder to get AI to replicate someone's style than it is for a human to trace and copy; and fundamentally "AI chops things up and mixes them together" is a grave misunderstanding of how it actually works that just makes people peddling it come across as ignorant on the matter.
>>43293844
>Gradient is the only thing in this list that is actually automated
Bézier curves are absolutely a form of non trivial automation and so are basically all filters and all geometric transformations you can use to digitally manipulate images. It's not the same as using AI but it is hypocritical and retarded for people who use them to pretend they don't benefit from technology reducing execution toll in favour of planning. You could say the same goes for colour selection and filling. Combined with how ignorantly they talk about AI, it's clear these people are fucking stupid and only in the right by coincidence.

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Just don't create if you don't fundamentally enjoy the act of creation.

>>43293927
>Neither will AI as proven by the very image the pregtard posted.
It's a two-year old image. Today Qwen can probably do a much better job, not to mention a LoRA pre-trained on a specific artist's style.
Source: used Qwen a lot to replicate favorite drawfag styles

Do you tell anyone IRL about your fics?
https://slate.com/advice/2026/06/work-advice-fic-hobby-hr.html

>>43293975
Christ this woman sounds like a piece of shit to work with.

If you guys want a comprehensive list of AI tells then try asking /chag/ for one. Some of those anons can tell you what specific model someone is using by reading just a few paragraphs.

>>43294060
I switched to Claude for writing critique last week and it started bullying me for writing like ChatGPT :(

>>43293809
>>it's okay if I tell the computer to draw a curve, a line, a shape, or a gradient
Yes.

>>it's not okay if you tell it to draw a shitty picture instead of paying me to draw an even shittier one, reeeee
Just stop pretending to be a real fucking artist.

>Also "le plagiarism machine" argument from people who make fan content will never not be hilarious
Corporations don't own culture just because the government tells us they do.

>but sure, continue begging the government to pass laws that will destroy what you've decided to dedicate your life to.
If they enforce copyright laws against me, they should also enforce them against corporations.

>>43293850
>if ai is plagiarism, then so is an artist even just looking at another artist's work
A human isn't a machine that lossily compresses digital information and nothing else. You may as well draw a comparison between storing a movie on your hard drive and having memories, in favour of eliminating human memories.

>>43293927
>It's arguably harder to get AI to replicate someone's style than it is for a human to trace and copy
Yeah, programming a machine is harder than giving a human, another intelligent agent, vague instructions he nevertheless understands how to carry out.

>It's not the same as using AI but it is hypocritical and retarded for people who use them to pretend they don't benefit from technology reducing execution toll in favour of planning.
I don't know about you guys, but I think and speak identically to how I write. I could certainly write without a computer, but it removes the drudgery of handwriting, correcting mistakes, and has plenty of other labour-saving features that while valuable still don't even attempt to rise above the writer. While it's on my mind, anyone using Grammarly should stop. It's like how newer vehicles will jerk control of the wheel out of the driver's hands.

>>43293932
>Just don't create if you don't fundamentally enjoy the act of creation.
If they don't represent themselves as the creator of something the plagiarism machine vomited into their laps, how are they to get the attention those undeserving creators enjoy?

>>43293934
>It's a two-year old image. Today Qwen can probably do a much better job, not to mention a LoRA pre-trained on a specific artist's style.
I wonder if the amount of commissioning I've done for this idea has made it easier for the machine to do, kek. I wouldn't bet on it.

New contest just dropped
https://www.fimfiction.net/group/213901/my-little-reviews-feedback/thread/573762/sci-fi-contest-2026-is-live

What about it, anon? Do you feel like submitting your epic sci-fi tale to be judged by a bunch of ESLs (going off their publicly available reviews) who used AI to define the criteria of their contest's topic?

>>43294348
>they were so lazy that they used AI to define each sci-fi subgenre
OH NO OH NO AAAAAHAHAHAHA

>>43294355
World's first slop contest.

AI tools serve as powerful assistive technology for people with disabilities such as those who have lost the use of their hands or arms due to injury, those born with conditions that limit physical writing, or individuals who are paralyzed and unable to move or express themselves facially. In these cases, AI can translate their thoughts, spoken words, or mental dictation into coherent sentences, stories, or communication on a screen. This is a profoundly positive and ethical use of the technology, essentially acting as a voice or scribe for those who would otherwise be silenced by their physical limitations.
The ethical nuance arises when considering the ‘fine line’ for creative work like storytelling or fanfiction. For individuals with significant physical or neurological barriers that genuinely prevent them from writing or typing independently, AI assistance functions as an accessibility aid much like a wheelchair or speech-to-text software empowering them to participate in creative expression they couldn’t access otherwise.
On the other hand, for able-bodied people who can physically write but choose AI to generate or heavily automate entire stories, the line shifts toward questions of authorship, originality, and community standards. Many creative communities (including fanfiction spaces) value the personal effort, voice, and human imperfections that come from manual creation. Full AI generation in those contexts can feel like bypassing the artistic process rather than augmenting a disabled person’s capabilities.

As a special education teacher, I’m curious; what are your thoughts on this? (I know this is probably the worst place to ask this type of question.)

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>>43294620
If they can't write how are they able to write prompts

>>43294624
If someone isn’t physically able to write at all, they can still use voice dictation, speech-to-text tools, eye-tracking software, or even simple yes/no switches and communication devices. They describe their ideas out loud or in very basic terms, and the AI helps turn those rough thoughts into full sentences or stories. The technology has advanced so quickly that some kids now have a chip implanted in their brain that sends their thoughts as signals directly to a computer on their wheelchair, turning those signals into text. AI then organizes and refines them, adding punctuation and structure to turn them into clear, readable sentences and paragraphs. It’s not about writing perfect prompts from the start—it’s about the AI acting as a powerful assistant that bridges the gap between their mind and the page.

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>>43294620
who cares
they're literally retarded
>>43294624
like morse code with dots and dashes but instead hurrs and durrs

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Why are we getting increasingly invaded by AI bros

>>43294620
I know you're just taking the piss, but this is such a frustrating argument that really only makes people dislike cripples more.

>In these cases, AI can translate their thoughts, spoken words, or mental dictation into coherent sentences, stories, or communication on a screen.
If someone really can't communicate otherwise, this is the opening for a horror story with how unreliable these things are.

>Many creative communities (including fanfiction spaces) value the personal effort, voice, and human imperfections that come from manual creation.
>human imperfections
Something I hate about the "voice" of ChatGPT is how it doesn't use full sentences. Just brief clauses. Like this. Incorrect. Annoying.

>>43294632
Thanks for confirming that you're lying, not that it wasn't obvious.

>>43294597
>boyfriend

>>43294646
That is always what they've used in the show.

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>>43294620
>questions of authorship, originality, and community standards
Setting aside the manual authors seething about slop posters theft of updoots, praise and general community interactions (those events should instead serve as a demonstration of how little they actually matter), you forgot about two more important and practical problems with LLM-generated stories:
- the problems surrounding the lie about how it was made
- limited resource consumption (specifically, fimfiction's moderation)

Besides the general infrastructure and natural resource consumption of LLM-powering datacenters, it is important to prevent slop posters from consuming mod time to filter and clean up stories that don't belong on the site (to enforce the community's will that they be rejected). Additionally, in a general sense, it is good to fight disinformation, and clearly labeling LLM-generated content is at least one of the OK methods of public education. Obviously, that isn't an option on FiMFiction, but they can fuck off to AO3.

I didn't mention the "AI is theft" angle because I don't care about piracy, but it looks like you outright forgot it.

More pertinently, discussing the merits of disabled people proooompting is a waste of time of the same style as the political right's fixation on trans people. If what you're describing even happens, its impact on a community the size of FiMfiction's is nonexistent.

>>43294644
My evidence here. It's a funny youtube channel
@mulletbrosco

Stephen Hawking TOO but He died on March 14, 2018.

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If retarded autists were incapable of writing without prompting we wouldn't have forty thousand Thomas the tank engine crossovers.

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>>43294665
We don't have forty thousand Thomas the tank engine crossovers.

>>43294665
this tbdesu, there's plenty fics out there written by actually mentally ill people for me to care about the ones that prompt through a machine that'll dilute their weirdness rather than letting me see their twisted funky world

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>>43294669
Give TheBlueEM2 some time, he'll get there.

>>43294646
dyewts? the words boyfriend and girlfriend don't get ponified.

>>43294597
I want to know how that sentence ends.
>Sweetie calls upon Twilight Sparkle to magically stretch her asshole
>Sweetie calls upon black magic to shrink her boyfriend's dick
>Sweetie calls upon the power of the alicorn amulet to give herself a huge dick to peg her boyfriend with, despite his objections

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>>43294691

>>43294662
Yeah, I agree it, but I just care too much about disabled people, I guess. yeah, I am pathetic.

>>43294703
Are you the guy last thread asking everyone to debate you on discord

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>>43294620
>>43294706
Jesus fucking it is. Now he's larping as a special needs teacher and STILL using AI to generate his responses.

>>43293484
>giving a shit about AI use in emails
Kek. I got way more important things to worry about at work. What's even funnier is I actually do write some of the longer emails in Word, then paste them into gmail before adding more stuff in and gmail really is horrible at formatting copy/pasted stuff.

>>43293663
>can use it to generate substitutes to commissions
This isn't true. AI art is great when you want something generic or general but the more specificity you give it, the less likely you are to get what you want. Source: someone who gave up after trying for two hours to generate an oil painting of a bulk lake freighter in heavy seas. And don't even think about trying to get your fetish in there, unless you want to end up like the footfags and create a model trained on four million images.

>>43294691
>Sweetie calls upon her Ursa Minor pet to fuck her in the ass
I'm guessing, based on the cover art.

What're you writegenders actually up to, writingwise

>>43294815
Trying to see if I can utilize grammar better with this written story, and if not, I'll take a break and work on that somehow.
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/591700/cupcakes-o-redux
Its short but should be serviceable.

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>>43294815
I don't even know at this point.

>>43294819
I gotta ask. Why?

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>>43294348
Genuinely, is there any argument against using Claude to spam them with entries perfectly tuned to satisfy their tastes going by their public reviews and stories?
>>43294355
Being charitable, you could say it's genuine confusion over Jewgle's AI rollout.

>>43294815
Eris mistakenly tortures Caramel to death several times because she's bored.

>>43294828
Why? What's the problem?

>>43294833
Why did you write a story about Big Mac fucking a black woman.

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>>43294834
He's miscegenationcoded.

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Any fics for this feel?

>>43293932
There is nothing amoral about generating slop for your own enjoyment and nothing wrong with sharing it with people who might enjoy it so long as it's clearly labelled as something the AI made. I think the existence of a bunch of utter idiots who genuinely argue they're creating art by using AI has made people think everyone who uses it thinks that way, when they're actually just a loud subset. The fact of the matter is that while AI isn't good, it's still better than most of the garbage humans make. It's good enough if you're looking for something specific and niche and you're fine with a average quality. Artists are rightfully entitled to charge however much they want for their art, but they're not entitled to people needing to commission them instead of generating slop. The unspoken truth is that a lot of artists who take commissions are fairly mediocre in the grand scheme of things, and people pay for the getting what you want drawn part more than for the quality.
>>43294191
>Corporations don't own culture
Neither do you.
>If they enforce copyright laws against me, they should also enforce them against corporations.
I think they shouldn't enforce either. I think part of the current legal push against AI is another side of Disney lobbying, I think the arguments being raised sound a lot like the kind that would be used to argue for closing libraries, and I think a lot of authors are being really fucking stupid about this. The process by which AI is trained isn't meaningfully different enough from the way humans experience and learn from art for corporations not to target the latter with laws for the former as soon as they can. AI isn't particularly good but I have yet to see a single convincing argument for the whole "AI is theft" mentality that doesn't sound completely retarded and came from someone who's never actually made art in their lives.

>>43295083
Club just read one where Pinkie keeps pranking her friends a a ghost, no romance tho. And it's only 1 chapter

>>43295173
Hmm, a nuanced perspective on this is rare. I broadly agree, although I think that the comparison of training AI versus human learning is a bit off.

>>43295193
>although I think that the comparison of training AI versus human learning is a bit off
NTA. I was at a panel at a con a few days ago about character design. Every professional artist there when asked how to learn to work on that agreed on "get design books for things you like and study / copy / outright trace the art in there to get a feel for it" as being a recommended step in the learning process. Humans pretty broadly learn by dissecting existing art, internalising it, and then building new things out of the base materials they decomposed it in. If anything humans do the "build new things from pieces of existing things" a lot more than AI, because humans can actually do it consciously (or unconsciously) but AI has no thinking mind, it's just rolling dice and analysing probability of things it doesn't understand innately (this is another broad problem with AI discussions; people on both sides humanise it far too much when it's not a thinking being at all).
And that's okay, that's how art has always existed and evolved. Some do it better than others, but even when you can see the clear parallels to something else a work can still be good. I think people are approaching things from the wrong side legally. I think limiting the ability to monetise AI content is what we should focus on instead, and it would discourage corporations a lot more; and I think focusing on the training process like people are doing right now is bad and going to bit people in the ass later. Saying material that physically exists and is made with parts of what you worked on is theft is one thing, and an argument can be made there to broadly limit AI usage and be in line with existing plagiarism laws. You argue that it's impossible to be sure the AI isn't copying something outright, therefore you should always assume it is. But saying the theft happens when the AI is trained on that material is essentially arguing thought crimes are real. If I copy a passage from a book word for word I'm in the wrong. If I can be in the wrong because the passage is only similar but I have read the book and therefore "stole" the information in it that's a fucking problem.

>>43294867
>paw would whoop ya
Haven't you heard? It's fine to fuck anything so long as you marry it first.

>>43295523
Then why didn't we get an Appledash marriage?

>>43295526
They went the Homestuck route and made it happen offscreen.

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>>43295526
Appledash is the epitome of immortality, obviously.

>>43295529
I was inclined to agree until I noticed you didn't type "immorality".

>>43295529
>>43295531
And now after looking at the image do I get the joke.

>>43294703
>about disabled people
Who? Blind-deaf-mutes with no arms or legs? You can't tell me that retards can't use a keyboard to produce reams of text. We're both on 4chan.

>>43295656
He's also LARPing.

Wonder if Fable has produced a fic yet.

>>43295770
I would be surprised.

Is Twilight afraid of tacos? Or does her fear of quesadillas not go that far?

>>43294348
I'm tempted to shit out a halfbaked ponification of BLAME! for this
people still write ponifications, right?

>>43296252
It depends on how cheesy the tacos are.

>>43296252
A taco is not a quesadilla, you hack.

>>43296518
They're both edible items made by filling a tortilla and folding it over. They're really not that different.

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>>43296558
I'll fill your tortilla and fold you over.

>>43294815
I've been struggling to shift out of fetish mode and back to regular fic writing for weeks now.

>>43294819
I'll do the first paragraph.

>“What is it that you need from me Pinkie?”
Missing the comma before Pinkie. That's also a very formal sentence for Dash to use and sounds out of character. She'd much more likely say something like "What's up, Pinkie?" or "What are we doing, Pinkie?"

>said Rainbow Dash while she stood and shaked her body
Shook is the past tense of shake. I'm questioning the narration there as well. Why did she shake her body? The following sentence mentions excitement over Pinkie's baking, which implies Dash is shaking in excitement from the delicious smell, but the sentence after that mentions cold, which suggests she's shivering, instead. Or is she just shaking herself like she's a dog because she stood up? It's unclear and an odd thing for the narrator to highlight.

>The scent of baked goods from Pinkie Pie excited the most reluctant ponies to the flavorful crust.
This one's weird, too. Dash isn't really reluctant and hesitation isn't a personality trait of hers, so why's the narrator talking about it? "Crust" is also a very weird word to use, especially since cupcakes don't have a crust. Something like "treats" or "pastries" fits much better.

>A cold day would endear anypony with the warmth of cupcakes.
This one's okay, but still feels odd. Cupcakes aren't usually eaten particularly warm, as it can melt the frosting and make a mess. They're not really associated with "foods eaten on a cold day".

>Pinkie Pie was a master artist in the way of sugary treats
Another stiffly worded sentence. I'd phrase it something like "was a master in the art of baking."

>Her recipe of any baked goods would entice the strongest of wills.
You could trim that down a bit:
>Her deserts could entice even the strongest of wills
But it's still a weird thing for the narrator to emphasize. It suggests she's tempting Dash into the horror to come, but they're friends and Dash is there, willing to help. There's no resistance or hesitation from Dash that's a hallmark of the temptation angle. The narrator seems to be going on about it for no real reason.

>https://www.fimfiction.net/story/60912/private-gig
>https://www.fimfiction.net/story/19650/the-moon-is-a-harsh-mistress
>the author behind these fucking died at sea or whatever
fucking bullshit, this guy wrote such compelling stories and fucking bounced.

>>43296840
All unfinished, too. Shame.

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>>43296840
>Spitfire fic
>Unfinished since 2013
>Author last seen in 2023
This is worse than just normal bullshit.

New RunicTreetops!!!
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/591723/still-life-yeah-i-sure-hope-it-is

I fucking opened https://www.fimfiction.net/story/136759/6/sufficiently-advanced/chapter-four-emeth again because I wanted to read about how pointless your choice at the end of Mass Effect 2 is.

>>43297492
Runic could be so much better if he didn't waste his time on AiE.

Just to let everyone know that this year's corpse is finally underway.
If you want to participate, drop by the group's thread.
www.fimfiction.net/group/204388/voting/thread/573396/2026-collab-attempt

>>43297659
I don't want to participate.

>>43297599
I think AiE can be funny sometimes when he's written to be an annoying asshole and an amalgamation of thousands of early 2010s internet trolls sharing a body but a lot of authors (Runic included) just use him as their depressed self insert for the ponies to therapy-talk at

>>43297599
In ages past, campfire tales of heroes and their epic journeys sparked imagination and wove cultures together. Today, Anon carries that torch into the digital era, embodying the collective unconscious psyche.
When you embrace Anon's presence in stories, you tap into a metaphysical current connecting all of humanity across time and space.
Anon is the hero's journey re-manifested, a modern mythic avatar through which we explore transcendent truths about existence, consciousness, and our place in the cosmos. His ill-defined nature allows the collective unconscious of endless readers to shape and mold his character.
So, Anon is an embodied dialectic, an esoteric artery pulsing with the psychic lifeblood of humanity’s mythological needs. To deny AIE is to condemn yourself to a spiritually barren husk of a life.

>>43297492
>RunicTreeslops

I've been reading the Calculations of Volume this week (no hooves). It's decent if you don't mind entry tier disjointed philosophical ramblings on life. It seems like to be a professional lit fic author that get massively hyped and translated into 20 languages, you just need to subvert the expected comedy gimmick with surface level insight spread over 800 pages (sorry, "perceptive ruminations on the nature of time").

Have you been taking yourself too seriously, anon? Anyone here try to write serious lit fics recently? Can't be much worse than the real novels getting nominated for awards out there.

How does getting trounced by your contemporaries feel like every single time you write and they get all the views and follower count while you have a measly 20 follower count with 300 stories in weight.

>>43297959
I'm such a fucking failure, I'm just elated I manage to publish anything at all.

>>43297721
I completely disagree. The entire reason I hate AiE is because he's always written as a quippy horny asshole.

>>43298020
Well there's your problem. Early 2010's internet trolls weren't quippy and horny, they were aggravating, antisocial, and got pleasure out of people hating their presence. I didn't bring it up in my first post but AiE stories where he's a quippy Casanova sex magnet are also not very interesting to me. I think Anon is at his best when he's a comedic character and the ponies either hate his guts for being an asshole, or they drive themselves crazy trying to Friendship-is-Magic the exact type of person that should NEVER be engaged with in good-faith friendly discussion.

>>43298041
Yeah I do agree with you there, I actually think the best versions of Anon are the ones that even we as readers dislike him, instead of "he's literally me"

I think having some indulgence in self inserting as him is fine, I think that's what most people want in smut anyway

>>43297965
What does that whole sentence even mean?

>>43298082
The act of creation in and of itself is more holy than the celebration of the act of creation

>>43298113
Humans can't create. They can only generate.

>>43298041
>>43298045
I recall in the early days of 4chan from my time spent on /b/ that a lot of the best greens featured a main character who was sort of hilariously misfortunate. The "thanks you too" type of anon who always had the egg on his face. 4chan humor being derived, ironically, so heavily from Jewish humor, the early days were a sort of good natured lament of our nebbish souls. Even when this character took his wins, they were always in lonesome, private little ways, like the story of the crow factions.
This modern jestermaxxed anon is strange to me. I do not know him. His victories are facile, and his whole existence feels cheap.

>>43298762
So you're saying that the ideal protagonist is a goofy slapstick loser who constantly suffers at the hooves of mares that torture him, unintentionally or not?
So Sunburst.

>>43298775
Sunburst is Jewish comedy protagonist coded, yeah. Look at his mom.

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>>43299046
With a beard like that, he must be the pony version of Orthodox.

>>43299058
He is a great wizard, after all.

>>43299096
Is he over 30?

>>43298762
>4chan humor being derived, ironically, so heavily from Jewish humor, the early days were a sort of good natured lament of our nebbish souls
I've always seen it more as being descended from older anime/manga writing. In manga, especially a lot of the 90s/00s manga that was popular while 4chan culture was forming, the protagonist was always this meek, awkward turbonormie who kept stumbling into socially awkward situations and making it worse by babbling like an autist.

>>43299422
>meek, awkward turbonormie who kept stumbling into socially awkward situations and making it worse by babbling like an autist.
That’s called autism.

>>43298775
>goofy slapstick
can't really say that's what I was describing

>>43299623
Me with Days of Wasp and Spider

>>43297492
>flavor of the week, but there's no show now so it's a crossover with what's currently popular instead

>>43297820
>Anyone here try to write serious lit fics recently?
No, I find actual /lit/ shit to be incredibly boring. If I ever tried to do no hooves, it would probably be some flavor of anime shonen schlock, because that's at least fun.

>>43297959
A far worse feeling is having a 1k uvoted deadfic that 100% would rocket to to the top of the update feature pile the second you post a new chapter and get dozens of comments, but instead of writing it, you spend the last three months writing an 80k niche fetish story that gets a hundred views and five comments total.

>>43299623
Me with Electro Swing

>>43299098
Centimetres, yeah

>>43299874
That's pityful for a full-grown stallion.

>>43299877
The ponies are little.

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Multi-layered pony racism, ho!
>/FSBC/

I'm writing this before I read ch.7, so possibly some things are a little outdated.
To get it out of the way: It's an Unhole Whole story. The prose styl is rather good- -but it reeds worse due too common technical errars and type-o's. Although if you can look past that- -or if you've read enough of UH to be at peace with those- -the rest of the package here is rather good, I'd say. It has a very "low level", unpretentious feel to the prose. Perhaps going too far, and the one thing I dislike there is him being very, very telly when saying how the characters feel at any given moment. But it flows smoothly and is paced well, which is arguably much more important. Oh, and he's extremely based about using pony language in his fic!

As for the story, I'm hooked, too. The story is very good at creating the contrast between the very show-like behavior of the main ponies and the unsettling things that happen in the ancient castle. Also, the characters, like usual in UH stories, are written with very easily recognizable, usually appealing personalities. Of course, here it does a double duty of making (You) invested in them as the supernatural horror elements continue to become more threatening, but Muguet, Fleur, Silver, and Snipper are all very distinct, and you get a good sense of their personalities far more quickly than usual in stories. I like them, even with Snipper being shown as the potential 'villain' (which easily could be a red herring). In addition to that, the mystery/horror of the castle is paced extremely appropriately. There don't seem to be any immediately visible malicious actors, but there are just enough unsettling elements to keep you on edge and waiting for further explanations.

In short, I think he has an excellent storytelling intuition for more fun, unpretentious fics like this one. And so far we've dodged UH's autistically million-layered worldbuilding, which is generally a good thing, imo. Grounding the story in canon timeline helps there. The ponies' ages are a bit weird, as is *also* typical of this author. Putting Rarity at ~29 and Sweetie at ~14 is an opinion you can have, I guess, but then you add Muguet and Fleur at ~17 and ~25, respectively, and some scenes with them become kind of weird. Like when Sweetie calls a 30-year-old stallion hot. I am deliberately ignoring the snippet about Muguet implying she was a whore because that doesn't make sense with what she says about white ponies and neither does it explain how she survived between 0 and [insert-number-here] years old. And Muguet is just too good. I mean, they all are, but Muguet especially!

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>>43299920
(2/2)
Also, on the topic of worldbuilding, the traces of tribalism/racism are expected in this fic, and the whole "White Unicorn" matter is a major part of the plot ("breeding with the coloreds", lmao), but there is a rather strange emphasis on ponies being naked. Fleur being hot (a fact we also see mentioned a lot) is only so a bit of an excuse. Still, though, I really-really like those ponies, the mystery is interesting, and the horror elements sprinkled in are just unsettling enough. On that last point, I was actually rather impressed. Yes, he relies on extremely basic and overused cliches a lot, but it comes together in a pretty coherent whole, and the sense of wrongness in those Sweetie Belle scenes is conveyed well. Those are rather creepy for a written story.
Also, I'm late already, and there are several more things that I'd like to say, but instead I'll just say that holy shit, Muguet the batpony maid is perfect, and if anything bad happens to her I'll be extremely upset. She's just too good, and she needs to be protected at all costs! Oh and yeah, despite the fic's less serious tone, Rarity's personal struggles are kind of pointed. Ouch.

To sum it up: It is an Unwhole Hole fic. Perhaps it might be one of the better ones out there, but either way, it's exactly what you'd expect, and that "what you'd expect" is, dare I say, good. I don't recall if I favorited the last UH fic, but this one appears to be very promising.

Next week, we're finishing this fic!

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>>43299923
>the sense of wrongness in those Sweetie Belle scenes
But she's a normal pony.

>>43299948
There's nothing wrong with wanting to kill Twilight Sparkle!

>>43299920
I’m excited to be participating for a second time.
You can expect this to be like my first…essay? Long, and reading far too deeply into things.

Before my second read through, I reflected on my first and made some observations:

1. The castle is making Rarity age faster. Sweetie Belle, to Rarity’s horror, notices “A” gray hair in her mane. And—I think—there’s a later scene where Rarity remarks on her several gray hairs.

2. Shining Armour, is—at least twice—referred to as “odd”. The only other white male unicorn we see in this story is the mysterious horror monster unicorn. Are the males cursed somehow? Fleur specifically mentions needing a female heir, but generally it’s the male heir who inherits, (I know that this is likely just because Equestria is a more female centric society, but I thought it worth mentioning.)

3. I think that the end of chapter 2 where SB bites into a rotten apple could be foreshadowing. SB keeps getting covered in bruises, sort of like a fruit.

With that out of the way, here’s what I found during my reread.

1. Rarity’s “blue” mane.
Rarity’s mane is going gray,—at least, that’s what Rarity thinks—but as the story:
>”Sweetie Belle was indeed holding a long, white hair”,
and Sweetie Belle herself:
>”It’s not even gray. It’s white”,
call attention to, it’s actually going white—not gray.

This is an important distinction because in chapter 2 Rarity finds a painting of Fleur with an older white unicorn and:
>”although she had piercing blue eyes and a pale blue and white mane. . . . Rarity was immediately able to recognize the elder unicorn as Couleur De’Lis, Fleur’s mother.”
Rarity’s blue mane is being drained of colour, becoming like the mane of Fleur’s mother, it isn’t due to aging.

Okay, I know what you’re thinking:
“Rarity’s mane isn’t blue!”
I know that! …But I don’t think the author does:
>”Rarity took up a brush, she noticed several gray hairs inside her once beautiful blue mane.”
I’d be willing to overlook this if it wasn’t for the story stating that the “gray” hairs are actually white. But as it does, I’m confident this will be relevant in the second half.

Before we move on I want to point out this scene in chapter 6 where Rarity shares her concerns about getting old with Fleur; who at one point:
>”suddenly leaned forward and wrapped Rarity in a hug.”
What’s interesting about this is that in the previous paragraph Rarity does this:
>”But now…I’m starting to get old.” Rarity pushed back her hair with her magic, revealing the several gray strands beneath.”
Immediately after Fleur sees that Rarity’s blue mane is becoming white—not gray—just like her mother’s, she hugs her.
I’m…reading into this too much, aren’t I?

(1/4)

>>43299956
2. Pollarding
Right near the beginning of the story there’s these two paragraphs; both—though mostly the second—have massive amounts of (potential) foreshadowing/symbolism.

In the first paragraph, Sweetie Belle looks out of the carriage and sees that the road is lined with:
>”evenly spaced pollarded willows.”
she observes them as being:
>”strange, knobby trees that had been forced into their twisted shapes by centuries of cultivation. Their shape was strange, like . . . trees that had long since died and yet somehow retained some semblance of what they had once been.”
If we want to properly understand the significance of this paragraph—and the next—There’s something we need to do first.

We need to learn about pollarding:
>Pollarding is an ancient pruning technique where a tree’s upper branches are cut back to the main trunk or structural framework.
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Why is it used?
>Rejuvenation: maintains trees in a juvenile state, which can extend their overall lifespan.
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Key Considerations:
>The process must be carried out during the late winter or early spring months to minimise shock.


>”upper branches . . . cut back to the main trunk or structural framework.”
When we think of what a tree represents, I’m sure that what quickly comes to mind for all of us is that of a family tree. And, of course, the youngest members of a family are on the highest, up most branches, while the eldest are closest to the trunk.


>”carried out during . . . late winter or early spring”
In the second chapter there’s two mentions of it being early spring:
>”she suddenly felt cold. It was probably because of the wind, which . . . still carried the chill of winter despite it being spring”
and:
>”The hall felt cold, and it likely was. This was an old and large castle, and spring had only come recently in northern Prance.”

I believe we can also think of the seasons in a more metaphorical way.
Look at this passage from when Rarity first meets Muguet:
>”Rarity looked at the thestral and felt a sudden pang of jealousy. She was just barely entering marehood, and at the age where she would be the most beautiful.”
Now look at this one from chapter 5:
>”Just fears left over from the vestiges of the fillyhood that Sweetie Belle was on the verge of exiting.”
I would say that Muguet and Sweetie Belle are just about to enter “spring”.
Whereas by looking at this passage—from just before Rarity meets Muguet:
>”Her whole appearance was that of a pony just beginning to pass her prime. Once, she had been beautiful, but now that beauty was fading- -and as old as she looked now, within a few years her appearance would be far, far worse.”
We see that Rarity is most definitely not in “spring”, though, we could argue whether whatever season she’s in is “late winter”.

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