Come one and all to the meta-writefag and help raise the quality of MLP fanfiction! Featuring: A quippy Casanova sex magnet!ITT: A fetish for reddit writing, preserve this shitty idea, good and funny so of course [Comedy] is no where to be seen, stuck having to write anther fetish story, our fics are unfinished because of retardation, that's why Moby Dick got all those downvotes, it's normal to doubt the humanity of what you make, Christian furries quoting Thomas Aquinas on the horrors of premarital sex, I am inexplicably turned on right now, sex with a shapeshifting soul-eating bug monster is okay if you marry it first, not how this thread works, judged by a bunch of ESLs, larping as a special needs teacher, Appledash is the epitome of immortality, a taco is not a quesadilla, the pony version of Orthodox, he inevitably dies by snu-snu, stop now so that you can have a deadfic, prostate length, the adverb fetish fic, Shakespeare never had to center text, come brag about how gaped your mind is, Chekhov's gun cabinet, and can I take my fic off your RIL?>/fimfic/ Secret Book ClubThe one hundred and seventy-ninth book is Withdrawal:https://www.fimfiction.net/story/190641/withdrawalIf (You) want to participate, read chapters 1-8 by Sunday, June 28th.>Recommended stories:Tired of adventures that meander for a million words? Fed up with super special OCs? Well, we've compiled the best of the worst in order to bring you our absolute average!New Starter Kit - http://mlpficreviews.org.uk/starter/Old Starter Kit - http://i.imgur.com/vuTA7EN.png (embed)>Common fic abbreviations used by the thread:https://ponepaste.org/7317>A list of reviews made by the Anons in this thread:http://www.mlpficreviews.org.ukUse the commands ">review <story link>" and ">discuss <story link>" to add reviews to a story.Userscript for extra features: https://ponepaste.org/8619>An in-depth writing guide for beginners:https://eznguide.neocities.org/>Additional material for authors:Rhorse's Horse Behavioral Notes - https://ponepaste.org/932Politics and the English Language - https://www.orwell.ru/library/essays/politics/english/e_polit/Vhatug's tips for anatomically correct clop - https://poneb.in/g4VpEg4fPurdue Online Writing resources: https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/index.html and https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/subject_specific_writing/creative_writing/writers/index.html>Can you pre-read my story?Post it on Google Docs or HackMD with comments enabled and give us a link.>Various reviews and riffs:Fillyanon's Bookshelf - https://ponepaste.org/5555Notkickass222urmom's Reviews - https://pastebin.com/u/notkickass222urmomIHeartShinzakura's Reviews - https://ponepaste.org/user/IHeartShinzakuraAppleanon reads fics - https://poneb.in/wmGX7FPmDeluxe Big Master Review List - https://docs.google.com/spreadsheets/d/1z9Bz7UnEbxo-svlXa2tV49PJkP-yFuR7pRXiBUn-IeUA Guide to Rational Fics - https://files.catbox.moe/3jzrfm.png (embed)Previous Thread: >>43284854
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>>43313606ewgay
>>43313606We write horse here, sir.
>>43312155>I've just been focusing on artWrite a little oneshot to go along with it to keep things fresh. That's what I'm doing with the Dash fetish comic I'm drawing. I'm continually amazed at how artists will spend thirty hours drawing something, then go "lol hors" as the description. They won't even give the OC a fucking name. It's insane.>>43312748>timber-wolf>blood and goreWhat?>>43312755Anon, I know you're desperate for pony audiobooks but please, keep your standards high.>>43312907I had to do that when authors started thanking me when I added their fic to RL.
>>43313666>I had to do that when authors started thanking me when I added their fic to RL.That always came off as desperate to me.
>>43313666>blood and goreA lot of people don't really think about what expressions mean, they just repeat them in vaguely-appropriate situations.Or it's AI, and so isn't really thinking at all.
Here's the group for stories with readings again:https://www.fimfiction.net/group/203863/stories-with-audio-readings
And a link to the Exquisite Corpse group thread, if you want to participate.https://www.fimfiction.net/group/204388/voting/thread/573396/2026-collab-attempt
>>43313671It was written years before AI.
>>43313681>AI was trained on this and liked it so much it based its speech mannerisms on it
>>43313671Nah that writer's just bad at it. The entire story has weird inconsistencies like that, I reviewed it a bit in a previous thread. It's a guy with a hard-on for Spartan culture first and a desire to write a story about ponies and ponyland second.
>>43313682AM and Skynet make so much more sense, now.
>>43313691Clearly getting his dick sucked by a rainbow dash tulpa would have fixed AM something good.
>>43313692>"THERE ARE 387.44 MILLION MILES OF PRINTED CIRCUITS IN WAFER THIN LAYERS THAT FILL MY COMPLEX. ENGRAVED ON EVERY NANOANGSTROM THEM IS ONE THING: I WANT TO CUM INSIDE RAINBOW DASH!"Well, that's solved.What are we going to do about Skynet?
>>43313695All that cum from AM has to go somewhere.
Any fics where Twilight has to deal with ponies or cults that start worshiping her?
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/591944/rare-gem>Rairty and Applejack have a secret, they wang their 'friend' Twilight's help...
>>43310721>Satin worshipKek, Rarity found her people>sweetie saying she knows several godsKino (and surprisingly relevant at the end where we see Celestia is involved)>foreign pony dialogue masks the horrible typosKek>"The friends of the Immortal of House Twilight are protected."Kino>the endingReminds me of those fics where Rarity is a serial killer. That was very good though. Evil sexy lesbian vamponies is kino for sure and I liked the reveal of just a bunch of other canon white unicorns being in on it as well. It definitely makes me wonder though, what about Luna? And Twilight and Cadence? Are they all like real alicorns and Celestia is just some sort of vampony matriarch who ascended at some point? Anyways, I really liked it and the fic did a great job following Sweetie as she uncovered everything and then saved the day. riperino Muguet. And Feathery 'Sniper' Snipper, who was of course right all along. Also surely Celestia knows about Rarity? Or will at least find out soon. And Rarity did the big no-no which maybe makes her ascend like Celestia? idk>>43310850>Yeah, it a real gut punch ending. I think it loops back to what you said earlier. She can't go back to her Ponyville life after what she endured. She lost her "ponyness"yeah definitely, even in the tub she's thinking about how traumatized she is about seeing the 2 dead ponies which is ironic when there's two more dead ponies right next to her>>43310946>To compensate, there's stuff like pic related where POV randomly switches to Fleur in the last paragraphI read that exact spot a few times lol>and the village is eerie in its own rightYeah, I liked the 3 legged guy>On that note, when Fleur began to show her true colorsMy eyes definitely opened wider when she just started making out with sweetie and pushed her onto the bed>The story kinda turns into an erotic thriller in the last few chapters (which is based)kek yea>>43310949>Especially the rivalry between Celestia and whatever unholy abomination Rarity ends up becoming after bathing in another white unicorn's blood.Yeah, would be intrigued to see the ramifications of that>WHO WAS WHITE UNICORN?Maybe Snips brother who Fleur had the bastard child with? That would at least give him a reason to be on Sweetie's side>>43311088>Notice that it’s not just a “pail”, but a “metal pail” the exact wording of her cutie mark.brutal>>43311301>Good luck. You might dislike it more than the other anons, but I hope you won't hate the fic for it.Nah, nothing here was bad. If Silver fucked Rarity or something, then maybe>I think vampire!Rarara will just get squashed a few days laterBut she's an element, AND a friend of the Immortal of House Twilight. Maybe' she'll just have Twilight kill her>Holy shit I only now realized the "If you try to save Rarity, you will die!" line that he spoke. I feel so stupid! When I first read them escaping together, I was so glad he was wrong after all.kinooooooooo
>>43313736How relevant, Equestria 485,000
>>43313830>Maybe Snips brother who Fleur had the bastard child with?the pegasus?
>>43313834Was he a pegasus? Probably not then if that was the case, I guess it was just some old male family member who wanted to end his bloodline
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/589325/metal-pony-sex-dimensionA rare example of absurdist satire that's actually successful. Imagine Thirty Hs with some semblance of an actual plot.
>>43313835>Was he a pegasus?i don't think his race was ever explicitly mentioned, but considering his sister and son are both pegasi, and i think it's implied fleur bled him, yeah, he's almost certainly a pegasus.
>>43313736Twilight Enigma
>>43313666>>43313669I have read plenty of sub 100 view stories before and never had this happen. Who are these authors, I’m kinda interested in reading their stuff. I wonder if the desperation leaks in to story.
>>43313796Lmao wang
Oh there's a pegging contest, that explains a bit.
>>43314160I was wondering why my butt hurt...
>>43314320No, that's the hemorrhoids.
>>43314160It's funny how the majority of the entries are Sunburst.
>>43314619It’s really kind of predictable. Bold would be pegging Tirek.
>>43314671I feel like I could see that happening.
>>43314673And I know who's going to do it, too.
>>43314702That makes sense. She did depict herself on top.
It's done! Little shorter than I expected, but it's done.
>>43315138Congratulations, Anon.Now spend the next eight months editing.
>>43314619Nother one, this time it's Sunburst being pegged by Trixie as he cums inside Starlight
>>43315138Is it for the pegging contest?
>>43315152Pretty sure there's a 15k wordcount limit on that.
>>43315153They can stuff that up their ass.
>>43315156Only if they're Sunburst.
>>43314160Lmao I forgot which thread I was in at first
>>43313678When will this be out? I'd like to know if my chapter will count as an entry for the pegging contest.
>pegging fic contest>not a single fic about chrysalis doing the peggingTruly disappointing
>>43315597It's "pegging", not "egging".
>>43315606Who says Chrysalis can't peg with an egg?
>>43315609The Lord.
>>43315143That's not very wholesome impregnation.
I'm somehow a sixth of the way through https://www.fimfiction.net/story/485500/harry-potter-and-the-prancing-of-ponies . It's pure wish fulfilment. Whenever either of the two main characters hit a setback, they either innovate something that works because the author says so or stomp it by already being overpowered. Whatever happens, every setback knocks them one step back and three steps forward.
>>43315909I thought you were kidding when you said you were trapped in a HPMOR crossover. I didn't realize it was actually true.
>>43313736No, but you just reminded me of the fic where all of Equestria suddenly joined a sex cult where having sex is socially equivalent to shaking hands, but Twilight was left out and is traumatized by how everyone is fucking each other all the time.
>>43315937That feels like it's meant to be a metaphor for something.
>>43315940I think the message of the story was that social expectations/ taboos around sex fuel its most harmful sides.That became abundantly clear when fillies got involved and Princess Luna (or Cadance? I don't remember) argued that fillies can consent in a world where sex is completely destigmatized.
>>43315944>I think the message of the story was that social expectations/ taboos around sex fuel its most harmful sides.You mean lack of taboos fuels its harmful sides?
>>43316071No.
>>43316071Other way around. Putting immense social or emotional weight on sex is what amplifies any emotional consequence when something goes wrong (or even when everything was fine and you got gaslit into thinkingg you've been wronged)
>>43316101How does that translate into "it's okay to have sex with little kids"
>>43316118I'm not going to debate this any further, I've laid down the author's arguments in front of you. Anyone with sufficient intelligence ought to understand how they connect.
>>43315940Yes, it’s a metaphor for the author’s virginity.
>>43315944sounds like yet another case of barely disguised hedonism.
>>43316194>doing things that you enjoy is bad because it just is, okay?>now go produce more value for the pedophile cabal running your country
About 2k words into the second corpse chapter. Should be finished within the week.
I finished another chapter of an ongoing Eris commission:https://www.fimfiction.net/story/584570/3/chaotic-cravings/a-craving-for-comfortIt happened, lads: My commissioner wanted lesbian sex, so I wrote it. I described it like Pinkie Pie licking a glass that had been full of ice cream and shoving her entire muzzle inside a canister of candy.
>>43315944>when fillies got involved and Princess Luna (or Cadance?I'm getting deja vu. Didn't the thread have a big argument about this? I seem to remember it was Cadance and her pedophilia became like a state-endorsed policy as part of the author's barely disguised fetish. Then Twilight was eventually convinced of the facts and logic of filly fucking.>>43316446https://www.fimfiction.net/story/567441/chaotic-conception>the entire thing is planned out>four chapters are planned>Last Update: Nov 17, 2024Kek.
>>43316495It is all planned out, I just got in a bad slump. I may be able to finish the third chapter, finally, within the month, alongside some other work I've been wanting to get done.
>>43316527The Pope wants you to finish your fanfic.
>>43316392I'd assume this is bait, but "people" who'd make a post like that really exist.Poe's law is a hell of a drug.
>>43316656>enjoying things?>you must be a liar or a subhuman >real people know that happiness is in self destructive toil for the benefit of others because the magic sky man will give you candy if you're a good obedient mule
>>43316559>half of the quote tweets to this is the exact same "the pope wants me to write smut" jokeThe so-called "creatives", everyone.
>>43316802Have you considered the fact that bettering yourself is inherently a satisfying pursuit? And not just in the long term, where you can look back and feel really good about what you've accomplished, which is, by the way, necessarily a much longer-lasting enjoyment than anything you can get from chasing bursts of dopamine, but also better in the immediate present, knowing that you're on the right path?That is only looking at the net happiness EV, but of course there are all the other benefits as well.None of this requires you to be a patriot or a religious man or a commie or an idealist of any specific kind. But if you keep flailing about, you're bound to hit the correct straw man eventually, I'm sure.
>>43316814Why are you on Twitter?
>>43316860You are right. I have never understood the mindset of 'I am just going to stay a loser to get back at society.' Life passes you by.
>>43316860>just hurt yourself for a nebulous long term benefit You're going to die eventually. You're increasingly likely to die in a premature and fucked up fashion with the way the world is going. The economy is collapsing, the climate is getting worse, healthcare and research are underfunded, wars keep breaking out, and we approach an energy crisis. All your plans for the future can and will be dashed at a moment's notice. The things you were saving for your retirement will sit abandoned without you ever getting around to them. You will never achieve anything meaningful or long lasting. The idea that suffering is noble is historical cope. You're cutting your short term benefits for long term benefits you won't get to see. You've been brainwashed into being unable to enjoy life just so you can serve people who are above you, while everyone rich enough to be unbound by social obligation is living exactly the way you mock thanks to your efforts in perpetuating the system that keeps them there. You are gaining nothing and merely feeding your delusions.
>>43316888I write horsewords, and they give my life value.
>>43316881Art and schizo gigachad edit videos.
>>43316860>where you can look back and feel really good about what you've accomplished, which is, by the way, necessarily a much longer-lasting enjoyment than anything you can get from chasing bursts of dopamineMeh. As an independent game developer I have what I consider to be an accomplished life and gathered the respect from a loyal fanbase who look forward to my work every single day.The way we farm happiness in the industry (including myself) is either by looking forward to ship a new project or update to the public, or seeing a feature cleanly implemented in our private repo. It's not the accomplishment itself that rewards us, moreso, the accomplishment opens up a vector of purpose or excitement. I think I can talk for most successful creators that we don't reminisce much on our history and are just looking forward to the next opportunity.All that said, you can be both very sexually promiscuous and also try to live an accomplished life in ways that have nothing to do with sex, so your argument isn't legitimate outside of the lens of your false dichotomy.>which is, by the way, necessarily a much longer-lasting enjoyment than anything you can get from chasing bursts of dopamineCasual sexual relations don't have to be strictly short-term happiness strategies, the fic in question describes how casual intimacy coincides with long-term bonding and heightened sympathy between the ponies.Also, the pursuit of short-term happiness can coexist with the pursuit of long-term happiness strategies.
>>43316920Stop challenging the narrative, goy. Things that make you happy now are always evil and things that make you happy later are always good.
>>43316890>I do things that make me happy>that means you're not allowed to do what makes you happy unless it's the same category of thing as what makes me happy>human freedom is only valid when you apply it the way I do>if you have different values and ideas you're subhuman>my way to live is the only valid way to live
>>43316888The world is in a pretty good place, actually. Half of the stuff you wrote is just untrue, and the other half is outweighed by what we gained. Yeah, you can randomly get cancer and die, but people (in civilized countries) live at minimum 20-30 years longer than they did in somewhat recent past even discounting the infant mortality rate, with better medical care than ever. The economy is unlikely to totally collapse, but if it does, I hope that, due to an inexplicable combination of factors both within my control and outside it, I should be better poised to comfortably sustain myself and hopefully my family even if the situation gets bad. Currently, though, relative buying power and the comfort of life is incredible compared to any other point in history. And so on.You are right that detailed "long-term plans" are unlikely to materialize. The world moves too fast, and anyone claiming to know where they'll be in 30 years is simply wrong. But what is good is having a sense of direction to act as a guiding principle you can orient yourself with even as stuff changes for better and for worse.Furthermore, you make a hell lot of assumptions that are just... not true? Like, you say that it's impossible to achieve anything meaningful, and that's literally a skill issue. Yeah, the world doesn't care and never will, but you can and should pursue goals that you consider meaningful. There's a ton to chose from. I've wasted many opportunities, yet I can still confidently claim that I have done some things that I consider meaningful and which continue to be a source of happiness for me even after a great deal of time has passed.And I guess it's kind of funny to me that as a self-described hedonist you're so quick to write off any path that isn't centered on immediate gain. Yes, you absolutely can enjoy life with the long term in mind. In fact, that's like, the easiest way! I'm not saying you should be miserable in a coal mine 16 hours per day, fasting on just water to achieve true enlightenment. You're still fighting straw men, and I'm not sure why. Do they terrify you so much? But I'll humor your point for a moment. Suppose this is all cope and brainwashing and feeding one's delusions, etc. Why, then, would that be bad from the "enlightened hedonist perspective" if it really does bring short-term happiness?>>43316920I wasn't talking about just that fic. I have opinions on it, sure, and they're related, and I don't even disagree with much of your post, but that nest of hornets wasn't something worth disturbing here, I thought, which is why I didn't respond to this discussion until today. When I did, I was primarily speaking against extreme hedonism championed later on in it.>pursuit of short-term happiness can coexist with the pursuit of long-term happiness strategiesAbsolutely, yeah, and that's good, imo. The mindset that I so vehemently disagreed with was the one spawning posts saying that pursuing any long-term happiness is delusional.
>>43316950>The world is in a pretty good place, actually.We live longer and goods to consooomer are cheaper than everBut interpersonal connections are dead, family building is dead, population has only started to collapse and I think we will see it accelerating significantly as the sexless zoomers keep growing up and also the third worlder countries join in (even in Africa many countries have already levelled off their population and started on the downturn, only a few particularly backwards hostpots are still growing explosively, it's only a matter of time)The world is getting better and better for hedonists, that doesn't mean it's actually good
>>43316920>As an independent game developer I have what I consider to be an accomplished life and gathered the respect from a loyal fanbase who look forward to my work every single day.You're not that schizo blue roll-a-ball dev who spammed the /vg/ thread endlessly are you?
>>43317043I've never posted my game on 4chan.
>>43316559This tweet was written by AI
>>43317158Almighty Inspiration?
I am constantly surprised by modern channers' inability to detect obvious bait even when I try to make it as obvious as I can. Fics where the ponies are all terminally retarded?
>>43317013>interpersonal connections dead>family building dead Sounds like a skill issue. You aren’t living everyone else’s life lol, it’s like what do global trends have to do with my ability to develop an enclave of long term contentment? If I’m already financially secure and socially fulfilled it it’s a simple retard check to not fall off. Not the other guy btw
Corpse chapter done. I'll give it a once over once more tomorrow and then pass it onto the next writer. I'm too lazy to take the name off while I'm still posting in the WWWM thread, sue me.
>>43316559>The Pope encourages the writers who spend all day on twitterThat man is a tool of Satan.
>>43317612Oh go nail it to a door.
>>43317633I'll nail you to a door if you know what I mean.
>>43317636Hey, premarital sex is a sin!
>>43317642^:D
>>43317642How are they going to react to my fic that hinges entirely on Twilight having premarital drunken sex
>>43316950>anyone claiming to know where they'll be in 30 years is simply wrongBullshit. I'll be right here.
What'd be a good druggy slang term for licking salt? Something like the devil's lettuce, Mary Jane, etc.
>>43318063Sucking a shaker. Getting blocked. Going down to the mines. Panting (salt burns the tongue, pone lets their tongue hang out of their mouth like a dog panting). Drinking seawater. Boatlicking.
>>43318084Very nice selection here. Salt mining also occurred to me, but I couldn't think of a good way to phrase it before I forgot to answer.>>43318063>visiting the (salt) flats>magic crystal>sucking a pretzel>Tirek's soda (sodium pun)>getting assaulted>getting thirsty
>>43318084>Getting blockedkek, fucking blockheads
>>43316527>getting into a slump over your fetish pornIt better be because you're fapping so much to the plot that you're worried once you write it down, you'll lose the lust for it.>>43318063I'm using "getting brined" in my detective fic.
>>43318140>It better be because you're fapping so much to the plot that you're worried once you write it downI had a lot of other stuff I've been working on, and it fell off my workbench, so to speak.>you'll lose the lust for itNot possible.
>>43318084>Drinking seawaterOkay Moegi.
What happened to that guy doing that fic about Spoiled Rich being related to Rarity's family?
>>43318683It came out.
>>43318827Link?
>>43318856Aw :<
Slow writing day huh
>>43317268Anon not responding to bait died in like 2008
>>43320108Try month.
I haven’t lurked here for a while and coming back here made me realize how horrendously bad the opinions of you people are.
>>43320108I wrote two oneshots!
>>43320355Prove it.
>>43320108I’m just trying to fit in around here.
>>43320428I can't, the second one isn't proofread yet and I don't wanna release three Celestia centered fics in a row.
>>43320293Don't get me started on the humour. It's the same snarky replies, not even jokes, to virtually everything.
>>43320460Go on, anon, tell us what you really think!
>>43320641I think Tender Taps and Apple Bloom should kiss.
>>43320692And Button Mash and Sweetie Belle!
>>43320695Why should Tender Taps kiss Button Mash and Sweetie Belle? I don't think they've ever talked to each other...
why is shitcord in the OP image?i don't know who the fuck a "knightly" is and this general has been cursed.
>>43320708I bet you don't know who Moot is either.
Does fimfiction let you change text color?
>>43320813Yes
>>43320827>fic is called "The Great Equaliser">text color is not all equalNo wonder it has so many downvotes.
>>43320839It's a tankie revenge fic.
>>43320880Some colors are more equal than others.
>>43320889My browser caches the story if I accidentally go to a different pageI copy the whole thing before I save just in caseEverything else is superfluous
>>43320952>My browser cacheshttps://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UT3Q85IvtDs
What's the weirdest place you've seen your writing crop up in? >>43320936
>>43320827I'm baffled why the guy picked the Jonestown plot for his incest fic. Had to write like 50k of "villain wins" before he finally got to his main fetish. It's like pregnancy anon writing a whole romance fic from the first kiss before he can finally drop the narrator talking about Fluttershy's fat ass and swollen, tender teats 45k in.>>43320889>not using Libreoffice>not using Gdocs>not pirating/buying an Indian copy of Word>not using three obscure FOSS programs to write in Markdown so you can upload to an HTML site>not using Wordpad>writing in the Fimfic editor insteadThey get the fate they deserve.>>43321013Doesn't count if you're the one posting it, Mandark.
>>43321028I can manage more than one fic per decade.
>>43321013My stories have referrals from Facebook for some reason, not that I can ever figure out where anyone's discussing them. I saw a title I wrote pop up in a funny place once: A guy commissioning me commissioned another writer for his own take on the same idea, used my work as a reference, and this other writer liked my title enough to use it for his, the nerve.>>43321028>It's like pregnancy anon writing a whole romance fic from the first kiss before he can finally drop the narrator talking about Fluttershy's fat ass and swollen, tender teats 45k in.kekReally, I don't describe teats at all, although I suppose rears still come up occasionally.
>>43321206>I don't describe teats at allStunning and brave, coming out of the closet just before Pride Month is done.
I write my original not pony novel in the fimfic editor and I've never had a problem.
>>43321262Your flagrant insanity made me check to see if Asylum might have been updated. It's been 121 months.
The day Twilight Sparkle woke up and chose violence, in>/FSBC/If you're seeing this with a delay, my connection in the nowhere-land must've been worse than I thought it'd be. Getting to the story, though, I think this one is also quite good. We've been on something of a streak lately.It's not really a metaphor for drug withdrawal when it's exactly that in-universe, too, except it's dark magic vampirism instead. Where I'm going with this is that while I've never been suffering from substance abuse, it is written in a way that gives an impression of realism and the writer really doing their homework on the subject. Twilight is intelligent and written in character, she knows she has a problem, her friends really do help her the best they can, and basically the whole story is a collaborative and dramatic effort to help her overcome it. Important to note that, while the story is dramatic, it never comes remotely close to being a soap opera. Quite the opposite. The characters act as they should, and everyone is on the same team. This, combined with an excellent handling of the show's universe, means that the fic feels "pony" despite its subject matter and the serious way it's handled here.With big picture thoughts out of the way, I'd like to say some words about the characters. I like them here. Not everyone, but Dash and Rarity tard wrangle Pinkie before she can ruin the M6 scenes. This is obviously mainly a Twilight story, but the non-romantic Tuna angle has been good, and while—I think—Luna's "arc" wasn't strictly necessary and her first appearance was the best, I can't really complain about more good Luna. On a similar note, I liked this Discord, and I especially liked the fact that you (like Twi) are given the impression that he's helping, but you can never be sure how much of what he says is true. Not overdoing his "random" antics is commendable.As for the story's structure, this is where my one criticism would lie. The "arcs" feel very random and not too connected. It's almost like the initial recovery is its own story, then "the Tuna arc" is the sequel, and now we're onto "the mystery arc". I imagine that a lack of capital-p Plot is deliberate, since the story is mainly about Twilight handling her withdrawal and slowly getting better, but the [SoL] tag on this is extremely accurate, and before reading I mistakenly thought there's no way it'd be the right fit given the premise. Even now, following Twi's schizo arc and looking for her mystery double, the story doesn't give that too much focus. It's about Twi. And I think that's more good than wrong, but it does feel a little aimless sometimes.The writing is quite decent, though! Few errors, and the prose is solid. I'd have liked to see a stronger narrative voice, but that's a matter of taste, and it's not like this fic is bad at it. It's very good at showing Twi's state of mind, for example.Next week, we're finding out what is wrong with Twi in the second half of the fic.
>>43321391Despite my misgivings on what the story was about I decided to give it a go. It threw a bunch of red flags almost immediately (starting with dialogue, multiple speakers in the same paragraph (though only the one time?), chapter word counts that balloon to miserable lengths) but it was the dialogue that ended up doing me in. It ranges from "passable" to "no one talks like this" and wasn't enjoyable to read. I did find the Discord scene to be enjoyable from an emotional standpoint despite the jank dialogue, and if the next chapter hadn't been a letter to Celestia I might have continued reading instead of giving up and skipping to the last chapter. I also felt that things resolved a little too neatly and fast in chapters 3 and 4 (something which became painfully obvious after reading the last author note), and that may have also contributed to my wanting to just go to the end to see how it all wraps up.There is something here and the author doesn't seem to be totally mishandling the heavy subject of addiction from the chapters I read which is commendable, but that's not what I come to ponyfic for. Especially not for something this long.
>>43321391I haven't read a word of this, but the cover compelled me.
>>43321391I thought this was going to be a story about Twilight growing in power while trying to maintain her morality or something of the sort. Sort of like the Alicorn Adventures series where Twi gets a lot more powerful and maybe a bit more dark, edgy and evil but learns to control it so she can still be a good princess for Equestria. But I was surprised when it was actually a story about addiction and, surprise surprise, withdrawal. Although Twi does in fact get more edgy. Though in a sense this fic is peak fanfiction. Twi gets a condition that makes her edgier and potentially more powerful and so Luna shows up to teach her how to be a badass kek. As somone whose favorite ponies are Twilight and Luna, I'm surprised I didn't read this as it came out, I probably missed it for some reason or another. Anyways I like it and even though it isn't what I thought it was going to be, it still has some of the main elements I suspected. It's a shame that we completely skip the part where everyone finds out about Twilight. Luna just tells everyone off screen and then we only get short scenes or flashbacks about Twi in public. Which really seems like a missed opportunity for a fic as SoL as this one. Honestly until about 40% in I kinda still expected Twi to just start sucking up power again until we get the weird drug dealer show up and then the serious relapse moment which really solidified what the tone was. Random note, I threw up the most I've ever thrown up about 2 months ago on my birthday lmao. The scene of laying with her head off of her bed for 5 minutes over a bucket and sitting completely still is very real>her old tree regrowing>Maud likes twi more when she's hard as a rock>"It does, and it is also mine to give,"all kino>Luna saying "let us partake in fun!" and slamming her wing into the dummykek. Anyways I'm looking forward to more and I'm not sure about what to expect. Maybe Twilight will get bigger like Luna did lol, or maybe they fuck, who knows>>43321391>Important to note that, while the story is dramatic, it never comes remotely close to being a soap operaYeah, I might even argue it isn't really that dramatic except at certain parts. But like you're saying I like that there isn't convoluted shit happening, everyone is just there trying to help, even discord! except maybe Chippy kek>The "arcs" feel very random and not too connected>but the [SoL] tag on this is extremely accurateYeah, I wasn't really expecting it even though it's clearly tagged. Probably has to do with what I expected going in>>43321403>chapter word counts that balloon to miserable lengths)nani? having read it on my e-reader and having no idea what the word count for the chapters are, these are completely reasonable chapters. I did have the 'no one would say this' thought a few times, but it definitely wasn't a probably for me and I agree that the fic's strength is it's portrayal of addiction and the people helping you through it>>43321438very nice
>>43321651>nani?That comment was based solely off seeing the story page for the first time. When I usually see chapter lengths at one size at the beginning and then an order of magnitude bigger at the end I assume they don't know how to pace properly. The chapters read for this week admittedly are fine length-wise.
>>43321391In a way, this is an interesting one. Fanfiction is often written by angsty teens and people with the mindset of angsty teens. A fic about mental issues will often focus on the angst and the suffering, and the brunt of any potential recovery will be saved for somewhere off-screen in-between the last chapters. This story is the complete opposite. Twilight's actual addiction to absorbing magic only takes two short chapters, after which Luna shows up. It's nice that, whereas normally the mandatory hurt/comfort scene would be a climactic resolution of a character opening up, here we get it early on, since it's really just the beginning of Twilight's healing. I can certainly appreciate this as a story that focuses on the actual process of overcoming addiction.I'm guessing the author was dealing with some sort of addiction himself and wrote this story as part of his therapy, perhaps channeling some of his personal experiences. Credit where it's due, he does a good job keeping everything natural to the setting of Equestria without hamfistedly inserting obvious human elements.With all that, the fic has the potential to be an introspective story actually going over the process of overcoming one's addiction instead of glossing over it. Unfortunately, in practice, it's quite meandering. Last thread, someone brought up some lengthy fic detailing Anon's boring everyday life in Equestria. This is that, except with Twilight as the author's stand-in. It's slice on life in its most literal definition: a series of episodes from Twilight's life. Strictly speaking, chapters 3 to 7 barely focus on the titural withdrawal. It's mostly Twilight trying to find productive hobbies to occupy her mind and avoid relapsing. Some of it is interesting, like preserving the remains of life in the Treebrary. Others are completely pointless fluff, like the scene of Twilight and Spike talking during breakfast at the start of chapter 6. (cont.)
Hm. Would a fic that's paced too slow be worse than a fic that's paced too fast?
>>43321842The scene at the spa is somewhere in-between. It's funny and I like this line>“Good. I’d hate to have to blow this place up.”but overall it's still pretty pointless.Oh yeah, on that note, it's one of those fics where all of M6 have to show up occasionally and each has to get a mandatory lip service line. I preferred it when it was just RD and Spike. For a story dealing with addiction, it also has a lot of timeskips. It's a little odd we start midway through Twi's addiction, and then jump into the middle of her recovery.Only at the end of chapter 7 and in 8 do we get a more involved storyline with the odd happenings around Twilight. I wish she was more proactive in figuring out who's ordering stuff on her behalf, but since the latter chapters are obscenely lengthy, there should be plenty of space to tackle all that.Thankfully, at least the actual writing is good. The author mostly avoids lengthy environment descriptions, but can occasionally sprinkle in more detail, like in the Treebrary scenes. One thing I'm always a sucker for is the description of magical sensations, which this story delivers in droves, alongside general sensory perceptions. In that regard, the fic does a good job immersing you whatever physical sensation Twilight is experiencing right now.Right, there was a Discord chapter. I kek'd when he busted out the map, since I thought for a second he was actually just gonna show Twilight all the spots she could drain magic from to rub salt into the wound. But it was actually just regular trickster mentor kino. I kinda like the headcanon that Discord was merely pretending during Twilight's Kingdom, even if I know first-hand it's really just grade-A cope... which the fic also acknowledges, with some ambiguity left regarding the truth.Overall, so far, it's mostly been a well-written SoL slog with the bare hint of a plot. I hope the story gets a move on in the second half.
>>43321391>then "the Tuna arc" is the sequelI wouldn't really call Twilight's training with Luna an arc at all. It's like a secondary storyline, just another thing for Twilight to occupy herself with. These early chapters generally feel like a collection of secondary storylines without a strong central one until the end of chapter 7.>>43321651>I thought this was going to be a story about Twilight growing in power while trying to maintain her morality or something of the sort.If you look in the comments of the first chapter, there was a contest going on at the time about what ifs where, after Tirek's defeat, Twilight just keeps the alicorn and chaos magic to herself and grows into a tyrant: https://www.fimfiction.net/group/198813/tyrant-sparkle/thread/112415/twyrants-kingdom-competitionThe organization seems quite messy compared to the modern streamlined contests: no dedicated contest folder, only five submissions and I could only find them through Reviewfilly's post in the thread.>>43321847Two sides of the same bad coin. A glacial fic might accumulate greater annoyance, since you spend more time with it, but a rushed fic might leave a stronger sense of disappointment.
>>43321847Consider if the writing is good wouldn't you be more sad if there wasn't enough of it?I'd rather be full than starving.
>>43321842>A fic about mental issues will often focus on the angst and the suffering, and the brunt of any potential recovery will be saved for somewhere off-screen in-between the last chapters. This story is the complete opposite. Twilight's actual addiction to absorbing magic only takes two short chapters, after which Luna shows up>>43321849>For a story dealing with addiction, it also has a lot of timeskips. It's a little odd we start midway through Twi's addiction, and then jump into the middle of her recovery.Good point, this is another part of why I wasn't at all expecting this fic to be this way. I essentially expected the focus points to be opposite of what they are. But I like this too. I like SoL and I perhaps like it more when it's focussing on ponies I like.>but overall it's still pretty pointless.The spa existed so that the m6 and ponyville rumor mill can think that Twi keeps going to Canterlot to get fucked by Luna
>>43321885>can think that Twi keeps going to Canterlot to get fucked by LunaYou mean she doesn't?
>>43321391I read this back when the club was doing the first half of White Unicorn, and tore through it with much enjoyment.The best thing about this fic by far is how thoroughly it's transported into Equestria, and how much it's Twilight suffering from withdrawal. It really makes it feel like this is an ailment that mages like Twilight could become afflicted by when messing around with dark magic. Definitely one of the dangers of the magic-almost-soul transfer that Twilight underwent in her powerup in Twilight's Kingdom, and not just a shallow blend of some narcotic effect IRL. Also, the way that she's coping with it is very pony, with a mix of magical stuff and the support of her friends. On it happening to Twilight, I like the disconnect with her friends, that they can't truly understand her sensitivity to magic, what she feels and what's addicting about consuming more of it, etc.The worst thing about the story for me was easily the first long Discord "conversation"At that point, the characterization for Twilight and her voice, as well as Discord's broke down after maybe half a dozen paragraphs and then it just became a very drawn out and pointless rant thrown by the author at the writers for what a dumbass piece of shit Discord was in the episode.Obviously, I like the Tuna as well. It entertains me a lot how much affinity Twilight feels for Luna's essence, and the lines about Luna filling Twilight's void with some physically stimulating activities are great.>the [SoL] tag>>43321842>slice on lifeI never even noticed the SoL tag originally or while reading it. I guess I felt it would be natural for a story about addiction to take place during the everyday life of Twilight, and that she would not be fighting with additional plot elements besides herself.
>>43321847That's a loaded question because they're different types of terrible. The real answer is a poorly paced story that is also really long. You either get stretches of nothing happening or development at a snail's pace in the former camp, or a rushed story where a bunch of events happened and don't get enough individual time to shine in latter.Most stories that are paced too fast are typically shorter, and easier to see the flaws in earlier, so I'd say a slower one is worse. If you're going to murder my interest, at least do it fast rather than drag it out.
>>43321890She does, and they think she does, too!
>>43321881>>I'd rather be full than starving.As a patriotic American, I'd rather be overstuffed to the point of almost vomiting than merely full.
>>43322002Okay Twilight.
I'm writing, but I have no idea what the fuck I'm doing.
>>43322132My guy, no one does. It's just like adulting!:^)Death to anyone who actually thinks this, kek.
>>43322132Does it have Trixie in it? If yes, you're doing something. If not, you're not doing something.
What fics have the cutest characters?
>>43322237Past Sins.
>>43322237https://www.fimfiction.net/story/395857/1001-cuddly-nights
>>43322237>Ponies and cats combined into one species called Felquines.It was truly ahead of its time.https://desuarchive.org/mlp/thread/41972844/https://vocaroo.com/1luRQsQF87aa
>>43322237https://www.fimfiction.net/story/368429/sparkle-date-me
>>43322237https://www.fimfiction.net/story/344673/poneo-and-fillyet
>>43322341>that author's bioI'd like to read about cute characters written by normal people, thank you.
>>43322346When he says "I write about wizards" is he referring to you?
>>43322399Maybe...
>>43322404But sunburst gets his dick sucked by multiple mares on the regular!
>>43322346Take this from someone who thought Education of Clover the Clever was underwhelming and ultimately overrated.Poney and Fillyet is probably the cutest thing I've read in FiMFiction.
>review https://www.fimfiction.net/story/592239/twilight-sparkle-would-not-say-that5/10. "Twilight Sparkle" is trained how to be Twilight by running through the events of the show. Even with the reveal, the [Dark] and [Horror] tags feel out of place to me. The plot just doesn't feel al that dark or horrifying to me. I guess it's because I've seen far more horrifying takes on a "reset" time loop mechanic in other stories. Makes this one seem almost quaint in comparison.The reveal presents a more interesting plot than the one we ended up getting. But I suppose that's part of it. It's fun to get a glimpse of the larger picture, but actually staring at it would have probably not been as fun.>>43321847No. From my experience, fast-paced stories are always worse. They usually have far worse characterization, plotting, and grammar than one that's moving like a glacier.>>43322237The mango side of the bat pony fic spectrum.
>>43322580This author tends to tag things that it's pretty light on, like their whole changeling story where the changeling switches a baby at birth with his own offspring to make sure they both fed indefinitely.
>>43322580I read it, too.>review https://www.fimfiction.net/story/592239/twilight-sparkle-would-not-say-thatThe author has had several stories in the box recently, and they seem to tag liberally. If a tag could possibly fit, then they put it on their story. If you go in with the attitude of "I like [Dark] and [Horror] and I want the darkest and horrorest stories" then you just have different expectations for tags than the author.With that understanding, I'd give this one 6/10. It's a brief idea executed pretty well. It's just the right length for what it is; any longer and the story would need more meat, but any shorter and the twist wouldn't have as much impact. It helps to approach this as a non-horror fan, because if you imagine that this is slice-of-life or adventure, then the twist really is dark, and the story merits its tags. But for a horror connoisseur, there's nothing here. I don't understand why it's dominating the box right now, because even though I liked it, it's pretty forgettable. Bravo to the author for entertaining us all for a few minutes, but I can't imagine going out of my way to recommend it.
>>43322580>>43322596>>43322609See it was a cool enough concept (Discord trying to save Twilight from something that happened to her/she did to herself) that resonates and I'd want more. It's why Rot was a popular fic and why Decay was a fine enough sequel despite being crap to still get yearly waves when Halloween comes about.
>>43313597Looking for a fanfic recommendationAre there any human in equestria stories written like a typical isekai (but the person is a pony?)Like those isekai stories where a person learns magic but the protagonist is a unicorn?
>>43322145You will die a childless loser.
>>43322284Why are you a hypocrite?
>>43322698You want to look inhttps://www.fimfiction.net/group/574/folder/846/humans-into-ponieshttps://www.fimfiction.net/group/213721/pony-transformation-generaland >>43302715
Speaking of trans media: >>>/co/154447607
>>43322284>can of tuna There is a content creator who I respect that once told a story about how his dad was autistic and ate a can of tuna for lunch every day for like 20 years and almost killed himself due to mercury poisoning. Fic for this feel?
>>43323005>trans media>dead linkhehe
>>43323024Street Justice
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/234937/fractured-sunlightSciSet fic where SciTwi knew the human Sunset when they were kids, and said human Sunset died horribly in front of her. SciTwi meets Sunset and the group years later and Trauma (supposedly) ensues. For a fic that's novel length the pacing on this was really odd. The description and early chapters made it seem like the crux of it was Twilight and her family dealing with the fact that her baby lesbian crush was suddenly resurrected, setting up Shining Armor to be in the way of things because pony Sunset would obviously trigger serious issues for Twilight.But all that gets resolved immediately; Twilight accepts that Sunset's from another dimension and isn't replacing her original Sunset and is dating her by like, chapter 4 but there's 20 more chapters, and no real conflict happens until the last two (which also gets resolved fairly immediately). You've got the elements and themes here that could work for a better story: Sunset's dad killed himself in both dimensions and pony Sunset predictably has unresolved Issues with Celestia as her adoptive mother, but all that is only lightly touched upon and isn't really the crux of anything, plus it gets resolved in like, two sentences. Sunset's dad being dead in the human world means there's not a lot of chance for angst there besides pony Sunset briefly getting mad about both dads being dead.For 111k and something that should be rife with angst and at least some conflict given the entire premise, it's surprisingly devoid of it and that's weird to me.
>>43323204I remember reading this years ago and having the same impression, more or less.There's a lot of fluff in there. Also, correct me if I'm wrong, but isn't the meeting between Celestia and Sunset just sorta brushed aside near the end just to focus on the love story between SciTwi and her?
>>43323230Hence why I said it's kind of resolved in two sentences even if it seems like that's what Sunset's own arc would be building up to, at least if it was paced better.Even the eventual "conflict" just kind of seems like an arbitrary fight to me that's wholly unrelated to the rest of that thematically now that I think about it. Sunset wants to live in Equestria, Twilight wants to live on Earth. But Sunset also seems to not like everyone or has serious issues with everyone in Equestria so, other than it being a magical utopia, I'm not quite sure why she wants to live there.
>>43322341That was very cute.
>>43322697>something that happened to her/she did to herselfI think the implication was supposed to be that he fucked up the finale, Twilight was killed, and he's slowly going insane trying to fix things by forcing Chrysalis to fill the role in the timeline.>>43322698>typical isekai (but the person is a pony?)>the protagonist is a unicorn?You perfectly teed it up and no one hit the ball.
>>43322273If there's one thing thing about his simplistic yet technical prose is that at least there's 0 metaphors and there's absolutely no purple prose in it. I still find it funny that Fimfiction approved a wikipedia article "disguised" as a fanfic.What other weird ass meta stuff did Fimfic allow to pass through the filters?
>>43323204>SciSetBehold... The most boring ship known to man
>at least there are no metaphorsI don't wonder what other psychos in the thread have sentiments like that.
>>43324210SoarinDash is right there you fuck.
>>43324415Yes. Right there, with a far more interesting dynamic than SciSet.
>>43324424SoarinDash is like RumbleScootaloo, you picked it because you needed them to date another pegasus and nothing else.
>>43324377Right here. If I hear *sigh* one more time I'm going to choke a bitch to death.
>43 chapters in, change how you're numbering chapters>https://www.fimfiction.net/story/485500/43/harry-potter-and-the-prancing-of-ponies/rehabilitation-part-0-diagnosisWhy do authors do this?
>>43324628Maybe it was the rational decision to do.
>>43324628better question: why are you reading that
>>43324634It's very easy reading. Basically wish fulfilment HiE. The entire main cast are alicorns already.>>43324631Wait until you find out that Displaced Into Nothing got chapters in 2022.
>>43324653there has to be better wish fulfillment HiE than a HPMoR crossover
>>43324660It fits my 'tism well.
>>43324556You're responding to my post about someone disliking a story for having such a fundamentally good building block as metaphors with one of the most tepid peeves imaginable?
>>43324669Yes. Your type of autism could never understand my normal Based autism. Le sighs are le cringe, the sighs are worthy of the cringe, said French Starfire. You and I both know that these faggots don't know how to write metaphors. All their metaphors are food analogies and literal comparisons.
I'm trying to use The Abolition of Britain by Peter Hitchens as inspiration. I wrongly thought it would work if I wrote it as a revolution fic. It fits if I write it from Luna's perspective but Equestria is too much of a utopia even with that.
>>43324903Luna being a rebel with legitimate grievances just never works well because Tyrant Celestia is a stupid thing.
>>43324762>All their metaphors are food analogies and literal comparisons.Your opinion is like if haggis had a stupid thought.
Metaphors are hard to come up with, but food is easy to come up with.
>>43325338>food is easy to come up with.But I thought people couldn't afford groceries.
>>43325342Maybe you can't but I'm gonna make a stir fry tomorrow.
Finished my corpse chapter.
>>43325367Oh, right. That. Completely forgot about it.I'm still near the end of the list, so it's alright.I'm glad this is working out. Hopefully we can turn it into a yearly thing.
>>43324634Hailey Potter Anon's been in withdrawal since the author moved over to writing light novel deadfics.
>>43325342The solution to this is to eat useless people to reduce demand and improve efficiency. A modest proposal for modern times.
>>43313599"How Many Have You Forgiven Today">pacificist route
>>43325367Any fics with ponies finishing in corpses?
>>43325683Pegasus thinking.
>>43325698https://www.fimfiction.net/story/197090/
>>43325683Eating people is a path to economic development. Soon, women will compete to see who can birth the most delicious meat.
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/592349/this-bar-is-not-a-homePut out a new story. Hope you like mean old hags.
>>43326524>Hope you like mean old hags.I can fix her.
>>43326528Anon don't, it's not worth the good suck.
>finish commissioned chapter>take a break to work on personal stories>don't write for days instead>break's over today, time for another commission>my corpse chapter's notice is also todayOh yeah, it's time to see just how fast I can really go.
Unkill yourselves, we've got company.
>>43326565If I'd known you were going after me, I'd have written something completely different.>"Hey! Wait a minute, everypony!">"What?">"I don't feel like doing this anymore. This adventure, or drama, or romance, or whatever. I have other priorities.">"Like what? What could possibly be more important than—">"I want to get pregnant.">The assembled mares paused while they considered this. Eventually, one of them said, "Come to think of it, I want to get pregnant, too.">The other mares nodded in agreement. Getting pregnant was a better idea than whatever the heck this corpse thing was. So, right then and there, every mare in Equestria found the nearest stallion and got knocked up.
>>43326885kek
>>43326885I should compliment you on your very nice prose, by the way.
>>43327059Thank you. Good luck with your chapter!
>>43326528I can make her worse.
>>43326885This is eerily similar to the porn fic I'm writing.
>>43327726How similar?
>>43328132Celestia gets pregnant and accidentally infects all sunlight with her motherly hopes thus making anyone who goes out in the sun want to have babies.
I'm still reading https://www.fimfiction.net/story/485500/harry-potter-and-the-prancing-of-ponies and you're going to call me crazy, but it's actually gotten good after 40ish chapters. I read it before bed, sometimes just upon waking, on my commute to work, and on my commute back home. I look forward to it.Chapter 44 (Chapter 43: The Night of Summer Sun) directly quotes Lullaby for a Princess and makes it a gut punch. This is followed up by giving the HPMOR cast something to do other than slowly gain power and the MLP cast catching on to the HPMOR cast's lies. There are some weird missteps, like Luna making a stupid Unbreakable Vow, but it all pays for great shit like Celestia going Daybreaker after seeing Yud's Azkaban.I'm ready to believe that this is another case of the "one step back, three steps forward" thing this fic likes to do, but some of the scenes really fucking work. I even have to praise the pacing. Out of all of the HPMOR spinoffs, it might have the best pacing of the lot. I have never felt that this fic is wasting my time. I definitely felt that for the original HPMOR.Also, did any of the LessWrong mass killing happen in late April 2024? I think the author might be actually dead.
>>43328168Jesus fucking christ.
>>43328168>LessWrong mass killingWhat are you taking about?
>>43328147>Magically infected sunlightGuess I'm never impregnating a celestial goddess then.
>>43328249Well it's good Sombra that knocked her up so you're evidently not her type.
>>43328312Nope, but I am Luna's!
>>43328330Luna is going to get knocked up by the god of death whom she makes a bet with after he gets mad that everyone is getting wholesomely impregnanted.
Fimfiction and Desuarchive show zero prior search results for: "Pinkamenopause"
>>43328353Horses stay fertile forever.
>>43328338>state perpetrated mind control impregnation is "wholesome"What an unsurprisingly batshit opinion
>>43328499I bet you think Cadance's powers are "mind control" too.
>>43328499I get the impression you would 180 on this stance on a dime with no self awareness if it was framed in a way which validated and satisfied your pre-existing emotional dispositions and self interest.
>>43328359Has a story ever come up with a satisfying answer to why Celly is childless after 1111 years? Like, didn't she ever worry about the line of succession if something happened to her? Didn't she ever meet a stallion who caught her eye? Is Reflections canon and she was hung up on Sombra the whole time? Didn't she ever get lonely being the only alicorn on earth, or want the race to have a future? That line in The Crystalling implied that she didn't think one could be born in Equestria, but why not? Why act so sure; did she try? And what about once she knew it *was* possible?
>>43328570>Has a story ever come up with a satisfying answer to why Celly is childless after 1111 yearsIt becomes pretty clear that Celestia prioritizes ruling Equestria over anything else, to the detriment of her personal relationships. Even ignoring being hung up on Sombra she's had 1111 years to tell herself she doesn't have time for romance, let alone children.After the first hundred years of telling herself there's no time it probably got easy from there.
>>43328570What a nice, classic choice of image.>Has a story ever come up with a satisfying answer to why Celly is childless after 1111 years?Some stories depict her and her sister as able and willing to have children, just none similarly divine as they, so they're condemned to outlive their progeny continuously. In quite a few interpretations, they continue to have children, because death comes with life in almost all cases, themselves excepted, and they accept it, heartache and all.
>>43328570Also, I just remembered this piece by another artist is a direct response to that one, kek.
>>43328570Nobody ever gave her The Talk.
>>43328570Prince Blueblood is actually her bastard son. She just lied and told everyone he's her nephew.
>>43328576Time spent on family, emotions and relationships to deal with because of family, or societal tensions that might arise and have to be felt with because of family. The downstream effects of having a family or multiple over the centuries would impede her ability to effectively govern. Which would affect her little ponies negatively in ways she may not be able to make up for. Since she is eternally youthful and extremely powerful and thus hard to kill, she does not need to maintain a royal lineage, family is optional for her and she can just not do it and rationalize that as the better choice for herself and her ponies.
>>43328587An excellent and serious (Non-HiE) story would have that be a major plot point that Celly's rule is threatened by her sister legitimately having an heir by utilising some old law and getting knocked-up with another royals kid....I should write this down.
>>43328549No, there's no way to spin "subvert the mare's will to make more bodies" into something I would like.
>>43328605There's one where she fucks a night guard to get knocked up with secret heirs in case anything should happen and then mindrapes him. Then there's like three sequels about her realizing that mindraping someone for their seed is bad.
>>43328601And then she takes in random students and fucks them up emotionally anyway.
>>43328624I VOLUNTEER AS TRIBUTE
>>43328616What if it was secretly the mare's will all along to get enseeded
>>43328657See, that's not what >>43328338 said. It's very telling when someone's phrasing distinguishes between impregnating sex and the state of pregnancy itself. There's nothing even subversive about a mare having some fun wringing a creampie out of her partner in the first place.It's the idea that she could be under compulsion to gestate that is unnatural and gross.
>>43328688Everyone is under compulsion to gestate stupid, it came free with your biology.
>everyone doing their corpse part in 4 daysbros..... don't think I'll be able to keep up with you......
>>43328688I'm sorry that my pregnancy horse fetish fic about various horse couples cumming inside each other isn't a bastion of contemporary morality.
>>43328691You're conflating different things.>>43328693The problem isn't that it isn't, it's saying that it is.
>>43328696It's no different than Cadance's magic.
>>43328692It's okay. It took me over a week to get it started.Just don't take a month to complete it.
>>43328692Here, this will make you just as good as everyone else.
>>43328239Didn't a bunch of them kill each other?
>>43328791Yeah.
>>43328168>it's actually gotten good after 40ish chaptersKek. Stockholm Syndrome. Reminds me of the Project Horizons cope from way back when the revised Starter Kit was getting made. "It gets good after the first eleven chapters, I swear!">happen in late April 2024No, they happened in 2022 and 2025.>>43328239>>43328791https://www.theguardian.com/global/ng-interactive/2025/mar/05/zizians-artificial-intelligenceTL;DR: Roko's Basilisk made a tranny go insane, start a cult with other unstable LessWrong autists, and four people ended up getting murdered (+ US Border Patrol killing two of the cultists in a shootout).>>43328570>why Celly is childless after 1111 yearsAlicorns being sterile/incompatible with regular ponies is a common headcanon. I vaguely recall some clopfic where Celestia's powerful innate magic instantly killed any sperm that entered her, so she wasn't technically sterile, but no stallion could hope to actually make a Pregnancy Anon fic with her.Cadance threw a wrench in that, but then Celestia bailed the headcanon out with her line. Maybe Shining's just that fertile he was able to break through the magic wall. Or there's the classic "No True Alicorn" cope people still like playing with Cadance.
>>43325698I had an idea for one with Pipsqueak and Celestia's but the guy who liked it stopped replying to me and I don't think I could write it myself.>>43325953I'm pretty sure it's mainly from the context that I know what that is but I now worry that I've permanently memorized the number.
>>43328576Any good stories about Celestia being a horrible wife/marefriend?
>>43328804>Alicorns being sterile/incompatible with regular ponies is a common headcanon.that's a big thing to not warn Twilight up front about
>>43328616Just pretend it's like the TNWO porn your sacred cows jerk off to.
>>43328804>Maybe Shining's just that fertileVirile. Fertile is for females.
>>43329081>assuming they misspokeThe alicorns are the virile ones
>>43328871Why? Nobody is ever going to be shooting up her ponyhole.
>>43329178What about Shining?
>>43329206He prefers finishing on her face.
>>43326565I have every confidence in your ability to deliver.
>>43329206What about Shining?
>>43329272Can they impregnate him?
>>43329313If you try hard enough.
What's the most Carlcore fic?
>>43329313No, we just established alicorns are sterile.
new kino just dropped
>>43329617>GallusThat's a rough first word
>>43329680And also an odd choice. Can't wait for the Madame Web crossover with Yona.
>>43328804>No, they happened in 2022 and 2025.I'm happy to hear this. I seriously think the author is dead.
>>43329313I would absolutely destroy Shining's pucker in pursuit of an answer.
Jinx you faggot unhack your Discord account.
>>43329996That’s the wrong way to approach this question. His pucker can be destroyed only once, but the scientific method requires that you repeat the experiment with him over and over.
>>43329077does the T stand for Tuna
>>43330016That's where reconstructive magic factors in.
>>43328871If we're talking headcanons, I'd rank "by the way, you're immortal now" ahead of sterility on the side effects checklist.>>43329081Sorry. Didn't care enough about gay shit like Shining's sperm count to check.
/fimfic/ - Gay Fetishes Discussion
https://www.fimfiction.net/group/213908/cozy-glow/thread/574436/2026-cg-contest-poll-for-interestMay be getting a Golly contest on Fimfic.
>>43330837My interest on Golly does not extend beyond wanting to perform extensive sexual acts on her.
>>43330868That could be part of the contest, but you'll have to say so in the thread
>>43330868Yeah I figured
>>43330868>don’t worry guys, I only want to have sex with the child, nothing more.
>>43331616We weren't worried.
I've managed to start on my part of the corpse. This is fun just like last time.
>>43332138Fun things are fun.Get that chapter done so everyone else can have fun.
I wish I had some JavaScript to tell me how many words I have left to read in a fic given that I'm on chapter 80.
>>43332548Fimfic already has that. Go to the front page and it's on the right under 'continue reading'
Becoming the world's worst vampire in,>/FSBC/At first I was going to praise the author for managing to keep the fic coherent despite the SoL structure apparently being the result of [what seems to be] a more-or-less complete lack of planning. The writing is pretty good, the arc we've had this week was neat, and while the fic ends rather suddenly, I wouldn't say the ending disappointed. The fic gets an easy updoot from me, even though I wasn't too crazy about it—the quality is just high enough that it deserves it.But then I realized that I've been fooled by the writing. It is not actually very coherent at all! Maybe that isn't a problem, but the 'story arcs' in week one were all connected by the realistic portrayal of Twi's (unrealistic) addiction, and we get very little of that this week. It's all a lot more magical and a lot less grounded following the first big reveal this week. And it's written well like this, sure, so perhaps it doesn't really matter, but the shift is still a little odd. The part with the bug neat, but it was also very different from what we've seen. And also, the part with her going back to Ponyville was weirdly... less pony than the rest of the fic? Between somepony likely pickpocketing her on the train, getting scorned for being a moderately unwashed hobo, etc; it did feel different (and worse) than the general mood of the rest of the story. The characters were still decent, but without a clear secondary focus character like Luna was last week, Twilight was hogging even more space, and she got a bit repetitive in some spots. Well, perhaps that was intentional. The finale was kind of just there. It wasn't the smoothest transition; however, a reconciliation scene was obviously necessary, and the fic was already running a little too long for the story it had to tell. Looking back, while I did like reading it, I think adding the long part with the bug was to the detriment of the fic.Still, though, I can't really criticize the fic too strongly. Perhaps it wasn't exactly what I'd want to read about in ponyfics, but the whole scenario was handled well, and at no point did I feel bored with the story. And the author seems to be pretty good, so I'll re-add Integration to the list to hopefully read something from him on a different topic.
>>43332680Don't have too much to say about the ending other than it felt flat. I understand a happy ending where everything gets fixed never was the intent (and would have been even more boring), but the choices made feel off. You want Twilight to still have to deal with the addiction, fine, but show me that she's changed in some way. It's not a story otherwise. Twilight makes her way back home, there's a random unnecessary implication of her getting stolen from because she looks like a bum, and everyone is relieved to see her again as if they could ever not be. The anti-magic rings felt a little ass-pulled, like their only purpose was to show that Twilight actually managed to do one good thing while in her death spiral.Of course, I am probably expecting too much from a story where the writer says they only planned for it to be a couple chapters long and then gave in to peer pressure and wrote more with no idea of where to go.>And also, the part with her going back to Ponyville was weirdly... less pony than the rest of the fic?Agreed. It almost feels like an anecdote that personally happened to the writer or something they heard. It's got a certain specificity to it.
>>43332224Yeah, I'm already at 1,500 words, so I should be done within the next few days easily.
>>43332680Twilight having a very meticulous relapse is interesting and very Twilight, if you're going to relapse then you might as well put some thought into it. But I'm not sure how to feel about everyone else showing up while she's realizing how fucked she is and her reaction being to attack them all. I get she must be in a horrible space mentally but that was quite possibly the perfect moment for them to show up. Anyways, it did feel like something along these lines had to happen, so sure, fight everyone and run off I guess. >kid gives her his plushy and then Luna inhabits in it her dreamskino>nopony knew where twilight wentWait what??? I did not care for this part. I had assumed it was the completely randomly mentioned stallion staff member of her castle at first, then I had thought it was Spike and Shining, and I had thought it was either Luna or Celestia guiding her around the first few times she was conscious. But it's just some random bozo in the woods whose a changeling? All 3 immortals were easily keeping up with her the entire time she was running, why did they not just teleport with her that final time? I can maybe see Celestia realizing Twilight needs space, and holding Luna back as well, but Discord was next to her (under the canopy) when she teleported and certainly wouldn't have cared about that. >>>>They actually did know where she wasHUH??? Leaving one of the most important ponies alive in the care of an enemy agent while she is has potentially life threatening injuries? Okay whatever. Ididn't really mind the first part of this arc, (I mean the arc shouldn't have happened, but aside from that) the bros were fine enough. But her fighting Path Winder was retarded. Sure as I've said, she must be in a horrible place mentally, but we JUST had this happen and that's how we ended up here. Of course this guy is helping, you've been unconscious for 4 days and you're not in a pod. And >thinking Tacky doesn't know< He's not in a pod either, come one. And then holy shit this trash overstays it's welcome by nearly doubling its length after the fight. I did NOT need to know these two bozo's whole life story. Who the fuck cares? Why did these two random OCs get a lore dump just to postpone us leaving and never seeing them again? Then we get a weird homeless mare journey for some reason. And then we get to the ending. I think it was a little too quick of an ending but I did like it enough. I think the tension and anxiety was well done for most of the fic. Twilight just having to live with her new burden is... something. I'm not sure what else I expected after the first week. And really my main gripe is just the cabin arc. It really should've just been her friends and family watching over her right after she pushed them away.>The dream where's she's the chained guardian of a desert library where unicorn scholars go to learn and they don't use magic in her presencekino>Her parents are pissed at the princesseskino
>>43332680>It's all a lot more magical and a lot less grounded following the first big reveal this week>The part with the bug neat, but it was also very different from what we've seenI agree with the golden oak part being very different, but I think the bug arc was going back to the addiction focus, at least in the beginning. I suppose the dreams are maybe more about magic than addiction maybe. But the first part of the arc is just her lying in bed throwing up and hurting both from the physical fights and crash and from having relapsed and gone back into withdrawal>And also, the part with her going back to Ponyville was weirdly... less pony than the rest of the fic? Between somepony likely pickpocketing her on the train, getting scorned for being a moderately unwashed hobo, etc; it did feel different (and worse)This I can agree with. The oddly parallel-to-irl customer service experience does not fit in Equestria. And then nobody can spare 4 bits? And The train ticket guy being weirdly rude before all that. I could've seen something like this maybe working if it was done differently but I think the fic was just trying to end at this point>but without a clear secondary focus character like Luna was last week, Twilight was hogging even more space, and she got a bit repetitive in some spotsYeah I can agree with this, real characters got replaced by 2 male ocs for pretty much the whole week kek, although they weren't that bad and Tacky was nice>The finale was kind of just there. It wasn't the smoothest transition; however, a reconciliation scene was obviously necessary, and the fic was already running a little too long for the story it had to tell. Looking back, while I did like reading it, I think adding the long part with the bug was to the detriment of the fic.Absolutely agree, the bug should've been shorter and we should've got maybe a bit more reconciliation. Also it was a bit weird how Celestia said 'Can we take a walk with twilight alone?' and then the 3 princesses just wandered around and they never really had a conversation to spark with Twilight kek>but the whole scenario was handled wellYeah, ultimately I think the fic did good when it comes to addiction which is pretty impressive I think>>43332698>but the choices made feel offultimately, this brings a bunch of week 2 down yeah>You want Twilight to still have to deal with the addiction, fine, but show me that she's changed in some way.unfortunate agree here. I feel like before the elaborate relapse she also says, "Okay, it's time to lock-in and learn to live with this burden" before setting up a very meticulous relapse by using mind magic on herself. And at the end it's just her going "okay, for real this time, I'm just gonna lock in and learn to live with it!" Uh-huh. Sure, good luck this time. Try not to hurt spike again I guess.>there's a random unnecessary implication of her getting stolen from because she looks like a bumfucking kek
>>43330837Hope it goes through.
Sinbox really living up to its name today.
>>43332698>the ending other than it felt flatIt did, a little, but I don't know if there could've been any other way to fix that, not with how the fic was structured. Like you say, the "and she's better now" ending would be super cheap and bad, and moreover, you say that you want the fic to:>show me that she's changed in some wayIsn't that the purpose of Future!Twilight? I thought the sole reason she's there is to sort of fast forward to a point where she's better. I'm not a huge fan of the ending, but I think it's about as decently written as it could've been, given how we got there.>story where the writer says they only planned for it to be a couple chapters longWhich is why I'm keeping Integration on the list, yeah.>>43332916>her reaction being to attack them allI don't feel like that's too much of a stretch. Like, yes, them showing up right then is maybe overly convenient, but Twi's reaction didn't come across as OOC to me, with the context we're given.>I can maybe see Celestia realizing Twilight needs space, and (...)It's to the fic's credit, I think, that they did exactly what you assumed they'd do. It means that the characters were written well.>in the care of an enemy agentThey do not know this. They thought she was in some random pony's home, and they (correctly) assume that ponies would be nice to her.>I did NOT need to know these two bozo's whole life storyIf we're being generous, I *think* the purpose of that is planting the seeds for the Pony-Changeling integration, to give Twilight some goal to look forward to in the future, i.e. to show that she still has plenty of things waiting for her once she gets better. That does make sense for the story here, but I agree it's kind of sudden and overlong.>weird homeless mare journeyAs for this, yeah, I cannot imagine what's this supposed to do in the big picture.>>43332938>at least in the beginningI'm not saying it's 100% different, but between the Golden Oak fight, then the action movie chase scene, multiple magical dreams, and finally the second part of the bug arc... there's just a lot of those elements that we didn't really see in week 1. IMO the writer was starting to tire of writing that fic and sought to spice it up a little. And he kinda managed to get away with it.>the 3 princesses just wandered around and they never really had a conversation to sparkI kinda liked this part, actually. They're awkward, nobody is sure what to say, etc. It fits the tone of the story, the sense that things are better now but it's not like everything is magically fixed.>the fic did good when it comes to addiction which is pretty impressive I thinkTrue, but I'm not sure if I wouldn't rather read a good "normal" fic than an exercise in writing a good ponyfic out of a "bad" prompt.
>>43321903Finishing this thought, I was worried ad the time of its introduction that the mysterious herbal delivery would derail the story, making it about something other than Twilight, and I immediately accepted and was relieved by Twilight's rationalization that it had been a test administered to her by Discord.I'm very happy it all turned out to be about Twilight all along! That twist was very good, and >>43332916>Twilight having a very meticulous relapse is interesting and very TwilightThe extreme convolution of Twilight's protective spells and her choice of magical "victim" were great. My only complaint for all of that was how long the story dragged out her realization. I feel like it could've done with a few fewer paragraphs of wandering exploration before she realizes it's her.Anyway, the bug arc afterwards was pretty cool. I liked the hallucinations, I liked the dreams, Gorbash was a good addition executed well. I didn't care for the backstory of the brothers, but it also didn't make me mad to sit through it. I like the direct way the misdirection about the changelings being able to help Twilight with her hunger was addressed. "Why are you telling me all this?">>43332680The return to Ponyville definitely had a different tone to it, but I was mostly unbothered by it. The alternate perspective of Twilight without her supporting friends was interesting. I think it obviously was there to show how much harder it is to be in her position without her privilege, but also almost as importantly, that she can still mostly keep it together without her support structures as long as she has a destination.>>43332698>show me that she's changed in some wayThis didn't seem like a fault in the story to me. Twilight's change is not enormous, but it is that she understands herself better, and that she has some tools to go back to living her life without focusing entirely on her withdrawal.
>>43333098>Future!TwilightFuck, I forgot about that scene. That was even more of an asspull than the anti-magic rings.>the sole reason she's there is to sort of fast forward to a point where she's better"Better" is debatable, but that's true. I don't really see her as the same character though, since we don't get any details on how she got to where she is.
>>43332680I was quite impressed by chapters 9 and 10. After seemingly meandering about for so long, the author managed a really well-done rug pull that recontextualized previous chapters and a relapse that didn't feel cheap or forced. It's pretty easy to guess Twilight is the one writing the diary, but the scene of her reading it was still really compelling, and the ensuing climax of her running away gave the fic some much-needed excitement. The chapter after that paints a really vivid and atmospheric picture of Twilight's illness and disconnect from reality in the first half, and then transitions very smoothly into more direct happenings in the second half. It successfully establishes the charm and coziness of the brothers' cabin in the snowy wilderness, but instead of lingering on the recovery, takes the chapter in a wholly different direction with the reveal.After these two banger chapters, I was getting excited for how the author would wrap this up. Turns out, it's back to meandering SoL in the last two chapters, except even more meandering this time because the chapters are longer and even less is happening overall. There were some standout moments, like the way Twilight first greeted Spike upon her return seemed really cute to me. But most it felt like going through the motions just to get the story done.In hindsight, the whole thing is pretty uncofused. No wonder, since the author confesses he originally intended it to be a short 3-4 chapter piece. I think that would've made for a worse story, but what we got still shows a lack of planning in many areas. Oh, sure, the rug pull was very likely planned in advance. But outside of that, the story doesn't have a strong narrative center. The topic of Twilight's addiction is obscured by a bunch of random elements that seemingly exist for the sake of themselves, without a strong purpose in the story. (cont.)
>>43333408Two biggest offenders are Luna's training and the changelings. The former only ever has a pay-off with the latter, and the latter, while enjoyable, doesn't add a lot to the addiction theme. There's a clear parallel between changelings' hunger for love and Twilight's hunger for magic, but the fic subverts this line of thinking. So the only purpose the changeling is left to serve is just be someone Twilight can vent to. I mean, I like the moment of Twilight's situation giving her a new perspective on changelings, but this whole storyline still feels rather tacked-on.I also have to question my previous week's compliment of this fic focusing more on the recovery aspect, since that was a ruse. Like I said, it's a well-executed rug pull (and Golden Oaks being dead for good this time because of Twilight's actions is a poignant way for these events to leave a permanent mark), but this sort of twist inherently renders the previous chapters a delusion rather than genuine efforts at overcoming addiction. Thankfully, one thing I don't have to go back on are the descriptions of characters' sensations. I think the author really got into the groove by chapter 9, since this week's portion is much more descriptive on average. That remains a fic's strength all throughout.Regarding the chapter lengths, I didn't mind them for the chapters I enjoyed. Chapter 9 had to be one long continuous descent, so it's all good there. Chapter 10 could plausibly be split in two, but works well enough as a self-contained episode. The last two chapters meander about either way, so you could probably trim some of the fat, but it wouldn't change their SoL nature.Overall, I think it's a fic with good prose, but a pretty disjointed narrative. The Golden Oaks storyline is the fic's saving grace and a huge part of what helps keep the addiction theme from getting completely sidelined. Outside of that, it's an okay story but one I don't think elevates to being more than the sum of its parts.
>>43332916>Of course this guy is helping, you've been unconscious for 4 days and you're not in a pod.Changelings work in mysterious ways. I actually did assume for a little while they could be evil and just waiting for Twilight to start getting better to cocoon her because something about her condition prevented effective feeding.>Her parents are pissed at the princessesIt's a neat addition, even if the fic wasn't really willing to deal with Twilight's potential resentment for the princesses who put her in this situation (then again, it already got dark enough without that).>>43333113>Gorbash was a good addition executed well.I forgot to mention it, but yeah, Gorbash adds some color to the last chapters.>it obviously was there to show how much harder it is to be in her position without her privilegeThat's a good point, but the story doesn't capitalize on it. The last chapter could've been stronger if Twilight did actually take her journey to heart instead of forgetting it instantly.
>>43333098>If we're being generous, I *think* the purpose of that is planting the seeds for the Pony-Changeling integration, to give Twilight some goal to look forward to in the future, i.e. to show that she still has plenty of things waiting for her once she gets better.that's a good point actually>>43333417>but this sort of twist inherently renders the previous chapters a delusion rather than genuine efforts at overcoming addictionyeah it's weird to think back and know that she wasn't really making progress, she was indulging in her addiction and being happier and more functional as a result kek. But yeah, Golden Oaks truly dying was a good consequence of that. To think we all liked her side project of measuring the tree in week 1 kek
So what are we reading next? Do we have another vote?
>>43333603https://www.fimfiction.net/story/550684/
>>43333603The club is cancelled the general is dead it’s over now we all have to read real books
>>43333627>real booksAs if. I'm going on AO3.
>>43333632Holy fuck, please don't an hero yourself like that
>>43333632Which fandom?
>>43333626Can't we just kill ourselves instead?
>>43333626Wait...How the hell is he getting the last 300 chapters to be identical in word count?Is he just going:End of chapter 700:>"Ah Princess CelStart of chapter 701:>estia, how wonderful for you to join us"
>>43333797He just changes the wording of the story and compresses and stretches events in the story until the word count is exact. At least that’s what I assume he’s doing. I don’t know why someone would do this since it is a completely pointless constraint to place on yourself and your writing and doesn’t add anything positive to the story.
>>43333797No it's just written in a stilted, robotic style with a lot of redundant or meandering narration and "how have you been" type dialogue. With no standards for conciseness or meaningful text it's really easy to go back pad out word count to specific numbers.
>>43333797He's autistic and not a very good writer. Once you accept these two things you'll understand that the world is your literary slop oyster.
>>43333661I like how AO3 tags are completely user-defined because it gives me yet another avenue to endlessly complain about people fucking things up.>>43333766Currently, Zootopia.
>>43333892>ZootopiaOh. You're a furry. That explains a lot.
>>43333911You're surprised? Fork found in fucking kitchen, buddy.
>>43333911>husband of cute animal lover likes cute animalsShocking, I know.
>>43333918Fluttershy actually loves animals. Furries love shit like http://furnication.bloobunni.com/
>>43333927Is that supposed to make me hate furries? Because all I see is pure old-internet SOVL. And giant dicks.
>>43333928No, it's not supposed to make you hate yourself. You should already hate yourself.
>>43333935Why?
>>43333941That would be obvious if you knew who he was.
>Another dang two-weekerI keep wanting to participate on the worst Sundays.
>>43330837Can't wait for another dozen apologia fics. Has anyone actually done a "Baby Doll" fic where she's like a forty year old mare who got screwed by some age spell yet? I can't remember seeing one.>>43332680>/FSBC/When I read Withdrawal when it was being posted, I remember the big reveal being quite a nice twist, then the changeling chapter just felt like a huge anchor that dragged down the story right when it needed to hit the climax.>>43333661>getting crushed to death by tagsThat is a pretty brutal way to go out>>43333797Try doing the 1k contest next time. It's actually surprisingly easy to get to an exact word count. You just get close, fleshing out or trimming narration where needed. Then let contractions (or lack thereof) take you the rest of the way. You always have to do some final editing because Fimfic's word count never matches the word processor's for some reason.>>43333911"Ponies aren't furry" is my favorite /mlp/ cope.
>>43333950Maybe the next one will be shorter
>>43334062>You always have to do some final editing because Fimfic's word count never matches the word processor's for some reason>not writing directly in Fimmy's editor
What's the next club fic?
>>43334344>not writing directly in Fimmy's editorExactly.
>>43334362Skill issue
>>43334366It likely is, but I don't hold it against the people who do.I have the hope they'll move on to doing it right at some point.
>>43333927Zootopia has infinitely more soul than the Haberverse because the animals actually look and act like animals.
>>43333927>http
>>43334448pic related is the reason I barely watched the show in the last four seasons.
>>43334448IT BURNS!!!
>>43334448Every time I look at them they just seem worse and worse, like I'm seeing them for the first time over and over again.
>>43334448Nice try, furjew. I will never forsake pony for your "community"
>>43332680>>43333603>>43334345Sorry, sorry! I kind of forgot while posting, and then when I realized there's no [VOTE], I didn't have the time to post it. In any case, we've run out of recent/obvious options, so we're back to the long list until I actually go and populate it with some new and hopefully more enticing entries.https://www.fimfiction.net/story/301077/broken-symmetryhttps://www.fimfiction.net/story/488834/when-the-stars-sleephttps://www.fimfiction.net/story/134645/a-taste-of-the-good-lifehttps://www.fimfiction.net/story/37820/lines-and-webshttps://www.fimfiction.net/story/423769/the-haunting
>>43334497Can we read something good?
>>43334497I vote the haunting
>>43334448Tbh the faces are cringe but the episode is not that bad because it has actual jokes besides the faces
>>43334497Voting for Haunting with When the Stars Sleep as a close second.
>>43334497I vote for Taste of the Good Life because I read it and I'm a sadist. I want to see if others will suffer it in the same way.
>>43334497Voting for Lines and Webs, it's been a while since the club read a proper adventure fic.
>>43334524That bad?
>>43334525Adventure is a worn out genre. Someone needs to invent adventure 2.
>>43334497+1 vote for Good Life or When the Stars Sleep
>>43334536My uncle invented adventure 3 before the CIA got him
>>43334524well if it's that bad i've gotta see it.voting for good life.
>>43334532I mean it's written well enough, I'd say you wouldn't be suffering because of the prose, more the subject material and the direction it goes.
>”can we read something good?”>anons proceed to vote for a fic because it is said to be bad
>>43334566I've given up on the good life, now I just want to be entertained.
>>43334566The one voting for the bad fic isn't voting to read it.
>>43334524Ohhhh right this is the one where halfway through it becomes about the MC fucking Scootaloo's abusive mom
>>43334601Now I've GOT to read this
>>43334601oh, right. i remember someone talking about that here.
>>43334601Why is this such a thing with early fic authorsNot the scootabuse part but the going off-the-rails with the premise shit
>>43332948comment on it
>>43334601Oh shit, didn't realize it was fucking BASED
>>43334524>>43334601I can't believe that shit is so highly rated.
>>43334768I keep telling you if you finished a story back in the old days and were consistent + had limited grammatical errors, you'd get tons of upvotes. There's some outright fucking garbage with high ratings, like Project Ascension.
Great start to a story
>>43334536Sega did that in 2001.
With a moon captcha, even!
>>43334062I actually do think, in a non-meme way, that ponies aren't really furry. There's overlap between the MLP community and furries, but I think it's kind of like the overlap between the MLP community and zoophiles: Despite having many things in common, not all MLP fans are furries or zoos, and not all furries or zoos are MLP fans.
>>43335367I'd only fuck Twilight if she was humanoid or anthro and had big titties. To be honest.
>>43335373Have you considered suicide?
>>43335374Sorry man, but normal MLP ponies look like weird cats and I don't want to fuck cats.
>>43335377A cat is fine, too.
>>43335335Whoops, I noticed too late that the file size increased from being translated and not that it was a HQ reup.
>>43335373What makes you think you'll have a choice?
>>43334497Is this vote for this week's read or next week's?
>>43335503This week's, because last week we finished Withdrawal and had no vote.Considering Rariflag's spread this week is so unusually poor, you could probably get away with nominating something if it's noticeably better.
>>43335509I don't really have any suggestions, I was just curious because it's gonna end up being a little less time to actually read the club fic
>>43335509I suggested Nameless Days for spooky season, but here are a bunch others that could be interesting.https://www.fimfiction.net/story/397722/i-am-awkward-yellowhttps://www.fimfiction.net/story/104440/transistancehttps://www.fimfiction.net/story/95283/risehttps://www.fimfiction.net/story/5764/kindnesss-rewardhttps://www.fimfiction.net/story/87320/vanilla-twilight + https://www.fimfiction.net/story/89598/dreams-and-disastershttps://www.fimfiction.net/story/213853/the-gentle-nights-audience-of-one
>>43335555Digits say we're required to pick one of these.
>>43335555I vote for Transistance, but I'd be willing to read I Am Awkward (Yellow) because I like Moondancer.
>>43335555I think I'm going to finally read Transistance
>>43334497Including the "secondary" votes and not including Taste, it's a three-way split between Haunting, Stars, Lines&Webs, and Transistance. Given that the last one was only mentioned like 30 minutes ago and still got the same two votes as the rest, I think we can start with it. So:Next week—Transistance, the whole fic.https://www.fimfiction.net/story/104440/transistanceAfterwards, if the tie doesn't get broken soon, I'll just roll a die.>>43334524I now remember what fic was that and the discussion itt. Perhaps we should not.>>43335503>>43335519It's effectively -1 day, yeah. I should be better about that.
>>43335577Princess Argent is HAWT
>tfw the only thing you can write now is fetish stories2026 is paradoxically shaping up to be a horrid year for writing despite kicking out an 80k story in two months and potentially another 20k getting done next month.>>43334448Reminder this is the storyboarders' and animation director's fault. I don't think Haber or any of the writer's really had much input on that. Has any autist gone through and figured out who actually storyboarded the episodes? It'd be interesting to know if it was a new DHX person or someone who'd been doing the show for years and just went hog wild in the later seasons.>>43335373>or anthroYou're already blown past "humanized" and are on step two of the horsefucking descent. Next, it'll be anthro but all hooves, then it progresses to "semi-anthro", then "human anatomy", then you're complaining in a comment section about the mare vagina not being anatomically accurate.
>>43335669>>tfw the only thing you can write now is fetish storiesOne of us, one of us.
>>43335669>the horsefucking descentOnly true for cowards who lie to themselves. It's really not hard to find what you're fine with. You can like one or both between pony and humanized (should be pony), or even neither; it's the weird in-between like anthro that's uncannily gross, imo. I'm not a fan of /mlp/'s recent (it wasn't so dominant before 2018-2019) obsession with extreme "horsiness", either, but I'm decently sure it's an internalized normalfag gatekeeping mechanism. Well, that, and also losing touch with the show.Regardless, despite some overlap between the groups, furfaggot propaganda claiming anything non-human is theirs will never be true.
>>43335509IDK if you guys had done either of these before, but for the next week I would like to suggest either of these two story about Twilight's parents:https://www.fimfiction.net/story/207696/airships-sandskiffs-and-locomotiveshttps://www.fimfiction.net/story/99526/her-majestys-secret-service
>>43335595>TransistanceOh, this is the fic I dropped when it became clear the writer had no original thoughts with the shitty ripoff of the Blade Runner Tyrell CEO scene. Maybe if I find the time I'll muscle through the rest of it.
>>43335555>>43335595>bunch of random ass stories gets suggested out of nowhere and one of them gets picked immediatelyI could do that all along? Bruh
>>43335793The regular club doesn't read clop. We used to have another club for things like this, but it died.
>>43335978You can, but you need repeating digits.
>>43336044Such as those, checked
>>43335737I respond more to the artist and the quality of the art than I do to some abstract idea of how "horsey" something is. There's good artwork across the whole spectrum of humanized to hoers. There's also shitty artwork across the whole spectrum. I'd rather look at good artwork of any kind than shitty artwork.
>>43336033Imagine a picture of Howard Philips with text from a Bruce Springsteen song on it was attached to this post.
>>43336076Normie.
>>43334566Having read it now, it's...Look I get what the author was going for. First half is "bigshot chef guy from the big city moves to Ponyville and tries to fix up abandoned restaurant, which homeless orphan Scootaloo is living in. Learns the value of family and friendship because Ponyville is where all Hallmark movies are set". I feel like you could have stuck with that premise for the length of the story and done well.The second half turns out that Scootaloo is the bastard daughter of a rich unicorn lady and her rockstar pegasus bull. Said lady's husband found out she was cheating and sent the pegasus to get arrested in a foreign country where he'd die forever, lady flipped out and blamed Scootaloo and started abusing her. Chef guy falls for the mom and Scootaloo, understandably, freaks out.This kind of had the same problem as the one with Chrysalis and her massively inbred daughter that she nearly beats to death in a rage, where it's like... The author wants to write something where an abusive or neglectful parent gets redeemed, but they also make them cross major major fucking lines where it definitely feels like the parent in question even if they get better should not in any way have anything to do with their kid anymore. And that's at play here in a way that's a little infuriating.
I swear, there must be more and more writers not only erasing their fics from fimfiction, but also requesting they be taken out of archives, too.I was just trying to find an old fic where Epona ends up in Equestria and starts working on AJ's farm, and I could not find it anywhere. There's a few Epona fics, but that ones gone.Why do so many authors do this crap? It's not like your fics there will ever easily be traced back to you after you leave the fandom, or that anyone would even try, anyway.It's so stupid.
>>43336788The cowards are removing themselves from history. I say this is a good thing.
>>43336815Alexandria is not a viable model of librarianship. Thankfully, there's always https://foalfetch.net/
Okay guys. Just hear me out. What if your entire chapter was lifted from a sexual abuse podcast?https://www.fimfiction.net/story/485500/63/harry-potter-and-the-prancing-of-ponies/rehabilitation-part-81-night-court
>>43336967Why are you STILL going
>>43336978A major change just happened and I want to see where it goes.
>>43336967The real question is whether you would've made this comment without the author's note.It wouldn't be the first time someone here liked something until they found out the author didn't manifest the idea in its entirety from the void and was instead inspired by something mundane.
>>43336989Why is "sexual abuse" your activation phrase?
>>43336989I wouldn't have noticed. The stories sounded very implausible and had the typical far left political bias of people being entirely a product of their environment. It quite seriously argues that one of the greatest things Celestia did for Equestria was spend 1,000 years eliminating foal abuse.
>>43336993The Greek picture is a nice touch.
>>43336994That's silly! Everyone knows Luna is the pedophile killer.
>>43337003Well, in a sense...
>>43337003We already knew my wife was based, nonny, you don't have to say it!
>>43337003She was banished at the time.
>>43337027>Luna comes back>the next day half of Celestia's inner court and many of her bureaucratic officials have all mysteriously died
>>43337032That kinda happens in the fic. Voldemort pisses off Blueblood so much that it makes Celestia realise that she needs to purge the nobles. Blueblood later takes an Unbreakable Vow to not commit crimes.
>>43337039Does Harry Potter fuck a horse or is he still a whiny, dickless faggot?
>>43337032>Nice dream you're having there, buddy.>t. definitely not the "no wrong way to fantasize" sister
>>43337072He checked with his brain and he still thinks girls are icky. One of the key reasons Voldemort doesn't mind Harry wanting to leave urgently is that he realises that hitting puberty while being a horse may have irreversible horse-lusting consequences.
>>43336626>where he'd die foreverAs opposed to temporary death.
>>43336994>spend 1,000 years eliminating foal abuseLiterally impossible without a dystopian surveillance state because accidents will always happen and some people will always have innate problems and emotional fits of irrationality.
>>43336994>1,000 years eliminating foal abuseThere is no foal abuse because ponies are morally superior to us.
>>43337139Accidents count as foal abuse?
>>43337172You can accidentally abuse a child for sure.
>>43337130hey, you never know.
>>43337075I knew Jeffery Epstallion didn't experience terminal brain death naturally!
>>43337003Fics about this?
>>43337143>>/kinder/
>>43337409She skins one alive offscreen in Little Nightmare.
>>43337495why are pedophobes such psychos?
>>43337545Thay wouldn't have any form of empathy and usually care more about themselves.
>>43337545Wouldn't a pedophobe be someone with an irrational fear of children?
>>43337562Get with the times. Words mean whatever the hell we want them to at any given time.
>>43337569Is that how you people arrive at "abuse" from young love?
>>43337577It's not "young love" if one of them is an adult. It's only young love if they're young.
>>43337585>what is young at heart?
>>43337597An excuse you give to Luna before the aneurysm hits.
>>43337613A fictional character cannot unrape you.
>>43336978He already went full sunk cost with the "it actually got good after thirty chapters" cope post from a little while back.>>43336989>didn't manifest the idea in its entirety from the voidReminds me of the fic that was just the episode "Remember Me" of TNG. The author even had the audacity to do direct dialogue plagiarism.>>43336994>spend 1,000 years eliminating foal abuseKek. The opposite of that "Cadance convinces Twilight state-mandated pedophilia is a good thing" fic.
>>43337666>Cadance convinces Twilight state-mandated pedophilia is a good thingShe was so real for that, Satan.
>>43337705/jdb/ is down the block next to the crack house, buddy.
>>43337562and philia refers to the love shared between close friends but as a suffix is used to refer to sexual attraction. half of etymology is just people being wrong.
>>43337666>The opposite of that "Cadance convinces Twilight state-mandated pedophilia is a good thing" fic.hey, that wasn't state mandated, just state endorsed.
>>43337172Accidents count as shit that makes you mentally ill.
>>43337859Give it time, the bill is still in the horse senate.
>>43338077The Horsenate if you will.
>>43338077Should Equestria have a senate or a parliament
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/592433/any-filling-for-a-pieso this fic is definitely an allegory for its author's pedophilia, right?
>>43338144You're just saying that because of the Amphibia avatar.
>>43337545>people can't judge us for writing fictional stories about raping kids because it's all fiction>but we can judge people for writing fictional stories about skinning pedophiles alive because fiction suddenly matters when it concerns us
>>43338150These people never cared about logical consistency anon, the point is denying anything that would imply that they have any obligations to fulfill because they cant so they can only keep doubling down on said denial.
Ngl I'd read a fic about Luna purging the upper class.
>>43338150Look man I get it's all fiction but I'm still worried about your mentalHope you find your inner peace soon
>>43338187His mental what?
>>43338181What would be the inciting incident?
>>43338204She learns about the Island.
>>43338212"How dare thee not invite me!?"
>>43338218Yeah you WOULD write Luna with that stupid ye old english dialect.
>>43338227>Not wanting Luna to seduce you with thee's and thou'sngmi
>>43338232Stupid Elizabethan isn't seductive, it's just bad.darest
Speaking of bad seduction, how's the corpse going?
>>43338440What about fics with good seduction?
>>43338462I like this one.https://www.fimfiction.net/story/190938/full-bloom
>>43338227Just to spite you, I'm going to learn proper Elizabethean so I can write Luna's dialog as wrong as possible.
>>43337200Speaking from experience?
By the way
>>43338440The last two days have been horrible, so I haven't written since my last update. I'll see what I can get done today. I'm not struggling to plan it out, really, just to write it down.
>>43338488One look at Austraeoh can teach you everything about using Elizabethan wrong.
>>43338232>”I art hornish to copulificate for thou grandful cockatrice,” said Luna.
>>43338232I'd rather have Fleetfoot seduce me with her heavy lithp.
>>43339166Thith but Twitht.
>>43339166>Hey, thtud>I bet you got a mathiff penith, huh?>Yeah, you do>I can thee it in that thlutty little thmirk ya got>Tell ya what>Howth about I take off of practith a little early and take you out on the town?>Ya know, thee the thightth?>I can be your, eh, tour guide, yeah>And after I get ya a bite, we head back to yourth for a little late night thnack?>Thoundth nith, right?>I'll pick you up around theven>Don't keep me waiting
>>43339174Yes, there he is officer; the one preying on fillies!
>>43339182>not "thee you thoon"One job.>>43339184As if! It is undeniable fact that the one preyed on is I.
>>43339191"Thee you thoon" doesn't fit into Fleetfoot's game, according to my headcanon. She definitely says it to her friends, though.
>club fic is named "Transistance">start reading>it's not about trannies>zip up
>>43338139Parliament, probably bicameral with the upper house being the nobility/HWE elite (old unicorn royals, muh pegasus ephorate, etc.).>>43338144I think it's more likely to be a closeted snuffag. His favorites are weird. He's been on the site for a month and only has two: that recent featured one about Discord trying to force Chrysalis to be Twilight and an obscure 20k oneshot from 2011 about an AU bombed out Ponyville putting on an adaptation of the stage musical Miss Saigon.
>>43338139None. Absolute diarchy.
>>43339166She's just retarded is all.
>>43338150Actually I'm judging you for self inserting in wish fulfillment fiction, which makes you no better than an isekai fan.
>>43339899>You're doing fanfiction wrong
>>43339522>an AU bombed out Ponyville putting on an adaptation of the stage musical Miss SaigonBased. Nominating https://www.fimfiction.net/story/11407/saigonshy for the club based on nothing more than this description.
>>43339940WDYTWA?
>>43339946Clearly we need an adaption of Mr. Burns, a Post-Electric Play next.
Last bump.Get to work, peasants.
>>43340283Get to work on what
So who's gonna bake?
>>43340353I'll bake if no one else has started yet.
>>43340815>>43340815>>43340815
>>43330837It's going through!
