"You look up at the sky, witnessing the cosmic vastness. Motes of light spread over the distant infinite." "You can hear wind, far away. A cliff halves your view above." "A coldness grips your legs, even with the heat from the burning car you had crawled out of." "Each breath becomes more difficult to take and the pooling blood beneath you creates an uncomfortable wetness." "You are going to die." Shaman "Flesh upon the altar, death a few breaths away." Insect "Another sorry fuck to befall us." Nymph "Cheer up, bozo. I think it could make a fine replacement." Insect "No, fear will sharpen it. Look at it, crawling towards choice." "A thing comes closer to view, the blurry mass defining into a horrid shape." "It's addressing you." Insect "Can you hear me? This is more than an insult wrapped in a handshake!" Shaman "Silence, we are in need. A corpse will not provide." Nymph "Could both of you be more dramatic?" Nymph "Listen here human, we need a new eh..." Insect "Slave" Shaman "Family" Nymph "...A servant. We save your life, you work for us. Deal?" "She extends her hand, probably intending for you to shake it." "Her wild hair covers most of her face, yet the goat eyes shine through." Insect "Return to that funeral pyre, leave none for carrion." Shaman "Deliverance from correspondence, human. Will you become?" menu: >"Help me...">"Fuck… Off." (This would kill you, I will post that dead end so you can see it.)>Write in
label die_intro: Nymph "Pffffahaha! How charming, not like you have a choice." Shaman "If it shall not rise to perform, the prelude ends with the assertion of the self." Nymph "What? No! At least let me keep it in the garden." Insect "Ha! Yes! Bite the hand that taunts you." Nymph "Shut it." Shaman "Shut it must, I close the veil for thee, human. Find peace before death does you." "The figures become blurs that blend into the night." "You are alone again, unsure if those were delusions from your dying brain." "It does not matter, you no longer have the strength to fill your lungs with air." "There is panic as you fight the invisible hands that hold your throat." "The sky becomes even more distant. You try to move, to escape this fate." "You taste blood, and it's the last thing that remains certain as you plunge into darkness." "Your story ends before it even properly began."
Hello, this might be a little different. I’m making a visual novel, but I’m stuck. So to motive myself to write and make sure its not garbage I’m making a quest out of it. There is a lot written but not 100% by far. So I would appreciate if you pointed out mistakes, plot holes and the likes.So something you need to vote now is how do you want the post’s to be.From choice to choice (Will select default dialog for minor things and you will things that have an impact in the story.)OR from story beat to story beat (Smaller updates but you will interact with the characters more and everything will be more personalized. This intro post is an example of how that would look like.)Also Visible stats or not? They are Humanity and Freedom, they wont be visible in the visual novel because I don’t want players focusing on the numbers going up or down. But I guess you can choose.Yes, the finish visual novel will be free and yes, I will add all of you to the credits if you want.
>>6396397>"How about paid worker, with an exit clause that allows for permanent life retention, and of course you save my life...">>6396399Choice to choice works for now.
>>6396397>>6396401 +1, we are a modern wagie.
>>6396399>Choice to Choice
>>6396399Also, I'm in favor of visual stats.
>>6396399how many endings are planned?
>>6396399No AI used, right?Also>Visible Stats
>>63965247Unless you count the ones where you ask to break the contract and you die becouse of it.>>6396529In the art? No, I steal references but I draw them on paper.I havent been on this board in 2 years. Is that normal now? fuck.
>>6396557No I mean AI to write. And AI sucks so if you're not using it your good in my book
>>6396397>>"Help me..."
>>6396557Is this the QM from Last Few Fey and I'm a Demon?
>>6396576The art does remind me of that. I kind of miss Pony Phil(?) and his doppel
>>6396561No, I'm not using AI to write. The formating is weird becouse I'm copypasting from the Renpy code.>>6396576>>6396594Yeah, I'm that QM.Sorry for flaking on "I'm a Demon?". For the last thread, the story's focus became too much.Too many moving parts, too many variables to prepare in advance, plus the art... I burned out.I think. My memory's a bit fuzzy.I understand if you guys are mad about it.
>>6396608No prob at all, glad you're back!
>"How about paid worker, with an exit clause that allows for permanent life retention, and of course you save my life..." Insect "You are a tool, in all senses now."Nymph "Look at you, making jokes! This human is doing wonders already."Shaman "To payment time immortal. Death shall be restrained while family you remain."Insect "Stop gilding the chains and give him a proper answer." "The creature with a human face blew a raspberry."Nymph "Let the guy cook. He is VERY old school." "The voices become distant as the cold sinks into your bones." "You cannot seem to be able to grasp the world again, and so you are left adrift." "Heavy eyelids slowly blanket your world, the howling wind lost beneath the bickering of the fae." "You fall unconscious."... "You woke up on a floor. No blanket. No bed. Just the taste of copper on your tongue." "For a moment, you expected to find yourself still inside the wreck. To be greeted by the warmth of the fire." "Light came through a window, tainted yellow by the curtains." "You got up, and everything hurt. You were covered in mud and blood, your shirt broken to reveal a jagged wound in your chest." "You drag your fingers across it" "You don't know what the fae did to you, but no longer have a pulse." "You stepped outside, and you were greeted by the nightmare again. Barely hiding at the edge of the green, they pointed towards work." "You obeyed and the days bled together. Each morning you woke up in that cabin, the wound never healing, making coffee from a tin that never seemed to empty." "Using uniform that didn't belong to you, yet it fit. The forest greeted you with birdsong or silence most of the time." "The task were simple and pointless. Clearing paths that lead to nowhere, kicking down snares set by no one, marking some trees with symbols that vanished by morning." "You never saw another person in all that time. No hikers, no hunters, no sign of civilization. Sometimes you though you heard some voice, but always too distant to track." "The fae came and went, the Shaman and the Nymph instructing some tasks, the Insect only watched from afar." "You started to think this was designed to drive you mad, then came the girl in the mirror and you figured you already were." "First it was a blur in the bathroom glass, then a shape. One day her face was just there, watching." "When you stopped looking altogether, she started speaking." "The radio hums static. You keep working and walking the same loops. You just keep going." "You look into the mirror knowing there is something wrong with your reflection but you can't nail down what." "There is reflection of a girl behind you."Girl "I think you should give another chance to trying to escape."
"There is no response to her words. How many times have you tried already?" "Every time you try to leave this valley a pain stabs you from within and you taste blood." "A warning, the crack before the break." "You leave the bathroom and enter the living room." "This cabin, almost abandoned in the middle of the forest, was small." "Or at least it seemed that way with the amount of papers and junk left by the previous warden." "Now all yours by inheritance of position." "She speaks over your shoulder."Girl "There is a town not far away, you haven't been there yet."Girl "Maybe you'll find something there."Girl "At least someone to talk to other than your jailers, Ranger." "Ranger"Ranger "Do we have names?" "You turned, trying to look at her eyes." "You are alone again." "Looking back at the past gave you migraines and only returned blurred memories." "Like watercolors painted by someone who has only seen the scenes in passing." "Best thing you can do for now is to not think about it." Girl "Maybe there is a doctor in town." "But what was a doctor going to do?" "There was a knock on the door, heavy and slow." "You let the conversation die in the air as you approached the entrance." "Hollowed eyes leveled to yours once it open." "The mass of brittle furs that smelled of dead leaves blocked out the sun."Shaman "Till old night comes, I claim again your debt, Ranger."Shaman "Interlopers besiege the frontier of the veil once again. Upon the mountain, in the forsaken resort, the offshoots of the town are partaking in revelry."Shaman "By your means of preference, expel them."Ranger "Why would you care?":Shaman "This is not something to be ignored. Now make haste." "He palmed your face, covering your eyes with a forceful grip." "It had a chitinous skin that was off-putting to the touch."Ranger "Hey!" "You moved trying to escape from his hold, your hands found nothing in front of you." "And in the second you took a step back the world was turned to white."---
"A minute of stunned silence and slowly adjusting to your new surroundings stretched until the cold forced you to move." "Placed in the mountains, at the boundary of the forest and the wastes of snow and jagged stones." "Further away, after an old dirt road, the abandoned ski resort." "A small mansion of logs and granite stone. The only tell this place was left to rot were the boarded windows and the piles of snow that threaten to swallow the place whole." "The ski lift was no more than pillars of rust scattered across the peak. And on the front entrance, peeking somewhat through the snow, a truck." "You resigned yourself to your task, hoping the Shaman would at least have the decency to return you when this is done." "And while the wind whistles in your ears you evaluate how to deal with this." "You can hear music from the outside. When close, you peek through the gaps in the boarded windows." "In the heart of decay, smoke dances above a bonfire." "And around it are the casted shadows of the youth that have made this place theirs." "Their laughter mingles with a low but jagged music that echoes through the cavernous place." "And from time to time you see the glimmer of a bottle being passed around." "They are just having fun while hanging out." "And it's your job to go ruin it. But how?">Enter as the forest ranger. Issue a warning. (How?)>Enter pretending to be a hiker and talk to them. (And say what?)>Scare them off. >Write in>>6396401>>6396467Do you want me to rewrite the Ranger dialog as disgruntled office worker?Or another type of personality? You guys can choose, just dont pick horny.
>>6396608There's no reason to be mad at you. You're a soulful writer and artist who provides us entertainment for free. Welcome back, QM.>>6396926>Enter as the forest ranger. Issue a warning. (This is an unsafe place, people go missing, maybe there's bears or cougars, etc)>Do you want me to rewrite the Ranger dialog as disgruntled office worker?I'd find it amusing, personally, but stick to what makes sense if you have a mysterious backstory in mind. For instance, we seem to maybe be an actual forest ranger, right? or is that just a cover identity our "benefactors" fabricated?
Islam came and a watch was set and brokeA flower came and died and Holly picked it upAnd cried a tear for Allah>She says hi>Bye>What are we doing here
Nymph
>>6396608Forgiven QM, and from what I remember we basically finished and only had the epilogue thread left to figure out if our peace would work. >>6397134Support
>>6396926>>6397134+1 to this idea
>>6397373>>6397371>>6397134>Enter as the forest ranger. Issue a warning. (This is an unsafe place, people go missing, maybe there's bears or cougars, etc)"You approached the entrance of the crumbling building." "The main door broken into, a jagged hole served as an entrance." "Bending low, you stepped through the opening." "The reception area of the old hotel greeted you, a large and hollow space devoid of much of its original furniture." "Floral wallpaper clung stubbornly to the walls, its once-vivid colors faded to pale ghosts." "The dreariness broken only by the chaotic array of graffiti scrawled across all surfaces." "Drawings, scribbled signatures and hastily scratched messages that formed a discordant mural." "Echoes of laughter and music unsettled the sepulchral quiet that should have cloaked this place." "The light source could be seen from your position, not that far away into the shadowed hallway." "Their silhouettes were more clear, there were seven of them." "You had decided to be civil, but carry authority."Ranger "Hello." "You maintained a calm but firm tone, announcing your presence." "There was a jolt of panic in most of them, turning to your direction." "Some had taken to erasing evidence of wrongdoings." "Moments of silence later, three teens stepped cautiously closer to you, their expressions guarded."Teens "Ayo, who dis?" "One asked, the boy looked no older than seventeen at best."Ranger "I'm the forest ranger."Ranger "You're not supposed to be here. Please leave." "The trio exchanged glances, deliberating how seriously to take you."Teens "You ain't the nature boss."Teens "Just let us vibe, senpai. We ain't out here to hurt nobody."Teens "Deadass" "Behind them, more teenagers approached, their faces a mix of curiosity and wariness as they assessed the situation."Teens "Who's the character?"Teens "He's like, the ranger now." "His tone dripped with incredulity."Teens "Lol."
"Their chatter grew louder, repeating the exchange in discontented tones." "They were young, but not so young that they didn't understand why what they were doing was reckless." "Their presence here was more than just a bad idea." "This whole thing felt stupid."Ranger "Why are you even here of all places?"Teens "We can't vibe in the town, there's always someone cramping our style." Ranger "Well, I'm cramping it now. This place is dangerous and there is at least one bear that prowls around the area." "It was a lie, in all your time trapped here you had seen no sign of any animal larger than a squirrel. It was aerie." "But they didn't now that."Teens "yo, dude's says a bear do be livin' here fr fr!"Teens "Aight, dip out." "There was a mild panic that spread though the teenagers, and they started walking away from you." "Sinking into the darkness of the abandoned building." hide Teens "A few seconds later you heard the engine of the car parked outside start and the sound of it rapidly moving away." "A scattering of trash remained, but it was nothing anyone would care about." "Peering through a window, you confirmed their car was gone." "They wouldn't be back, for some time at least." "The satisfaction of a job well done lingered." "Then reality set in: you had no way back to the cabin." "The Shaman had stranded you here, on the mountain." "You sighed, glancing downwards from the peaks." "From this height, the town below was visible, nestled like a splinter in the valley." "Maybe it was time to explore- step back into a world more mundane, more familiar."Ranger "You are a slave to the fae. You don't belong anymore." "You sighed, invasive thoughts plagued you again." "Maybe there was more work to be done in the forest."What will you do?>Go to the Town>Stay in the Forest
STATS: Humanity = 2 Freedom = 0 Inventory:[Null]For the first half of the game, the narrative will be divided as follows. Mornings consist of mandatory events that the other characters drag you into. In the afternoon, you choose between two options: the forest and the fairies, or the village with its humans. Afternoons are the only time to modify your stats and acquire items.It's not the best system, but I'm already too invested to change it.You generally don't know what you're going to find, and that would be part of the reason to play it multiple times, like Night in the Woods.But I don't think we'll remake this quest with other variations (I don't know if it would be fun; we'll look at it in the future). So, I'll give you some hints about what you'll find.If you want the authentic experience, vote and then you can look at the spoilers.Go to town: Meet old friendly woman who has lived her entire life in this town, you can ask questions.Stay in the forest: The Nymph has stolen stuff, you get to talk about it.>>6397134>For instance, we seem to maybe be an actual forest ranger, right? or is that just a cover identity our "benefactors" fabricated?Its the cover identity, the role given by them.The Ranger is a blank stale, thats why he does not even get a name.The lack of past is something that gets mention in the story and other charactes.You might find bits and pieces, but nothing substancial. Nothing you can lach to.>>6397371>only had the epilogue thread left to figure out if our peace would work.The fall of the Oposing Empire was missing. Had too many variables, too many posible situations.
>>6397489>Stay in the Forest
She tackles her to the ground and says love. And they get up and do stuff. Later they embrace and kiss. Acting Lesbians.The Nymph flirts with the other ones there And drinks a ton of water and does it all over again. *>Go on the ground>Get up puke>Give a diamond jewelry to another nymphماسة بيضاء
>>6397489>Go to the TownLet's at least try before we give up.>>6397569Bro, wtf?
