>>284675375
The main problem I see is that the pro hero system (and how the culture handles quirks in general) is kinda fucked. Hori is cognizant of this, since basically every villain offers a pretty clear critique of the system from various angles, but he's not actually interested in changing the status quo within the span of the story, so all we end up with is some limp-wristed "And so-and-so has been helping to address this fault of the system" lines in the final chapter. It's kinda like the entire narrative is just Hori trying to deflect criticism of his worldbuilding being a chain of post-facto justifications stemming from the "Super Hero School" idea by projecting it onto strawmen that the heroes can punch and then say "Well, he wasn't entirely wrong but you have to do things the right way."

>>284675375
bump

anal with Momo

>>284675747
I suppose the same could be said about how the society views mutants, right? The first ever quirk user, the glowing baby, was a mutant (otherwise it wouldn't glow at birth), but somehow it's still prejudiced based on appearance

Doesn't this world have a weird eugenics/arranged marriage system where people are forced to be wed and have children in order to produce powerful quirks. Was All Might ok with this or doing anything about it?

>>284677480
people can arrange marriages like that, but it's not a common practice. We only have one example of it in the source material - the Todoroki family

>>284677527
Does All Might know about this?

>>284677653
I actually don't know, I believe he doesn't. He just knows that Endeavor is married and has kids, probably didn't look too much into it

A Manga is not perfect?
Oh no, This has never happened before

>>284675375
There’s a flaw in “One for all” quirk. Why couldn’t any villain just also steal it just as Deku gained it from All Might. Actually why wouldn’t there be a villain who hunts down quirks without hierarchy and why wouldn’t they possess “One for all”. Sounds like a major plot hole that never gets addressed.

>>284677716
oh yeah, never thought of that
theoretically Stain swallowing Deku's blood would make him inherit "One for All" if Horikoshi didn't add the caveat it has to be a willful transfer

>>284677700
I too enjoy reading only the first sentence from the post and commenting only on that

>>284675375
IMO, these are the things to focus on:

One: show more cases of society being unhealthy early on, like heteromorphs being discriminated against. Which logically makes sense, but was mentioned so late in the series that it never was anything but tacked on.

Two: Deku needs to prove that he brings something to the table that makes him a worthy inheritor for OFA, because otherwise its really hard to justify Allmight not giving it to someone else. NOTHING Deku ultimately did with OFA was anything other than fight good that someone else could not have done, so giving OFA to someone who is already a better fighter would have made more sense from the start. Mirio with OFA would have been unstoppable, for example.
Personally what I would have done is have Deku go to UA even before he has OFA on a special recommendation from Allmight, and have to prove that he can keep up with his classmates even without the quirk to earn it. Let him rely on his autistic studying of other people's quirk to eek out wins or rely on support gadgets to try and make up the difference. When he gets OFA later, it should feel earned.

Three: Romance. Deku x Ochako sucks. They don't actually have any chemistry together, they were just nice to each other a couple of times early on and then Hori dusted off his hands and said "Thats good enough, that should last for 10 years of character development, right?" Either come up with a way that Deku and Ochako *actually* fit together romantically, or pair Deku up with someone else that he has more chemistry with or makes for a more interesting pairing.

Four: Give the other characters more to do. Its amazing how many students in Deku's class do *literally nothing* over the course of the story. Sugarman, the animal talking guy, kung fu tail, etc. The girls are mostly useless as well, but at least they get screentime as eye candy, only a handful of the male classmates even get that level of presence.

>>284675375
I'd fill their plotholes if you catch my drift

>>284677692
Is the general public aware of the practice? I'm confused as to why Endeavor's marriage isn't a huge career-ruining scandal for him especially when you consider how it's established public perception is important to heroes.

>>284677809
Thanks for the tips anon

as far as romance goes, it's an OC fanfic, and I do intend to spend some time on the characters just chilling out in their spare time. I've got time for this since I want to split the story into 3 years and cover the whole high school time period instead of a single year

so the pairs I want to get going are
Deku x Ochaco
Kirishima x Ashido
maybe something like Bakugo x Tokage from 1B
and OC x Momo x Jiro (my first attempt at a three way romance, if I don't feel up to par, Jiro will probably go with Kaminari)

and OC's friend group would be more of those characters that do less - Momo and Jiro, obviously, Shoji, Kaminari, maybe Sato? though I don't like his design, probably Monoma from 1B as well

>>284677933
as far as I can google search, arranged marriages are just still a thing in Japan today and make up about 10% of marriages, so yeah, it's just normal to them

>>284678035
Personally I always thought it would be funny if Bakugo was just straight up gay. He never gets paired with a girl at any time in the series, Hori never baited him with a love interest. So you could easily just say he was gay and it wouldn't change anything about his behavior.

>>284678323
but I like him too much to make him a raging homosexual

Ochako Uraraka has great design for great hentai doujins just like Kirino Kousaka, Sumi Sakurasawa and Iroha Isshiki.

The manga plot and all that crap don't matter.

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I wrote a fanfic for nano but I was too ashamed to publish it. I made the world make more sense by introducing cultivation.

>>284677716
You have to give it away willingly. Somebody can't just take it. The only way to do that is to a) know that ofa is a transferal quirk, which is a closely guarded secret only know by about 6 people and b) have a will strong enough to be able to overpower the will of 9 users.

>>284678035
I can sort of believe an arranged marriage flying with the general public under regular circumstances but it's the fact his wife went crazy from it and gave her very young son burn scars for life that should be a huge deal. If you add on the fact the marriage was specifically arranged to produce powerful quirks it's really weird that no one cares. The hero-loving masses would have to contend with the fact that the number 2 hero in the world is engaging in selective breeding and keeping his wife against her will in an abusive marriage. Would people venerate heroes to the extent they do if such a thing was being done by someone so far up the totem pole in hero society? Wouldn't they worry about other powerful high profile heroes doing something similar or being a product of said practices? It's weird it isn't really addressed throughout the series considering how it's part of a main character's backstory which got a lot of focus in the second season. You'd think they would do something with it later on.

>>284678655
I guess someone could extort you for it. "Give me One for All or I'll kill your wife."

>>284678791
>it's the fact his wife went crazy from it

Technically the timeline makes it seem more like what drove her over the edge was Toya's "death". She was happy with the marriage, but Toya dying broke both Endeavor and his wife in different ways, with her blaming Endeavor for what happened and leading to her being both angry at him and afraid of him/afraid for her son.

>>284675375
For me the biggest problems are.
>MC is a status quo defender in a setting with a flawed status quo. Deku doesn't really do anything to change it, with Ochako and Shoji doing more in the epilogue with their respective endeavors.
>No stakes. Not saying it has to be CSM level, but it gets a little ridiculous when you get to the final battle and everyone who dies is a villain while every hero is protected by plot armor.
>Adding to the above, there's a very black/white morality based dishing out of consequences. Villains are mercilessly killed off, the only heroes who suffer long term are the most morally dubious ones (Endeavor, Hawks).
>Anyone who gets redeemed was never that bad in the first place, and has to make disproportionately good actions to pay off their karma. (Gentle, Aoyama) Aoyama especially just got insufferably annoying at a point with the lengths his self loathing went to over something he was essentially forced into by his parents.
>Shiggy's backstory is completely undermined by the AFO twist. Even the payoff with the granny makes no sense because if she did that with child Shiggy, AFO would've just killed her.

>>284675375
Mineta is the luckiest man alive...

>>284677933
It did ruin his career, particularly in conjunction with his son being a serial killer. Most of the public turned on him and his bad reputation affected not just his own, but Shoto's career for years. What it didn't do was get him in hot water with his colleagues and people who had good experiences with him. Even if they are as professional and grateful as can be, it's unrealistic that none of them judge him privately, but the manga doesn't punish him or similar characters that way.

>>284675375
Which one did Mineta end up canonically railing?

The quirk singularity theory/plotline was so retarded and doesn't make sense from a genetics perspective.

>>284677020
Sure, but the average person in the setting is still fairly normal looking, maybe with some extra bits and bobs, so the extreme muties are still gonna be weird.

>>284678035
>Bakugo x Tokage
I will now read your fanfic as long as it has at least one explicit scene with this pairing.

>>284675375
You can try to create a "Quirk Response Units" (QRUs) or police with legal authority, training, and limited quirk use. Show political tension between heroes and cops, and explore corruption, overreach, or resentment (“Why do the heroes get the glory when we die first?”). This alone would make your fic feel more mature than canon.
>>284677809
I don't like Deku x Ochako very much myself. But if you do keep it then try to make Ochako more than emotional support girl and let her have ambition that conflicts with Deku’s self-sacrifice. Have Deku’s martyr complex actually cause relationship strain, etc. Ochako is the poor kid at school, so you can try to explore that aspect of her and how she becomes obsessed with money as a way to get out of poverty.