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ive already been told the paneling is bad
im working on it
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>>764752
I assume you're looking for feedback or critique?
Your style is pretty fitting for what I can assume the story is about and the facial expressions are done well imo.
I think the change in detail and color from the first two panels to the second two is off-putting and red hoodie's dialogue feels as if intentionally saying something that is hard to swallow so she can have this "deep thought" segment about it.
That being said I really like the color change in the last 3 panels for that, and the final panel looks nice.
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>>765102
good notes, i dont get a lot of time for long form comic writing so im just trying to hammer down footnotes of their character i guess until i have enough to work with that i can just fumble about with it.

never cared much for comics that start out with the first three pages just being someone walking around.

have doodles of an oc i never draw anymore
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>>764752
i know i don't interact as often but i want you to know i really like your art
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>>766852
i appreciate that, here i was pretty satisfied with this, so here you go
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>>764752
I can’t say much about the paneling other than it does flow correctly, i didn’t get mixed up on the order.

I would maybe lighten the red on the text in the bottom panels, the contrast between the text and background is low and that makes it harder to read. I like to check my values with digital art by using a black-and-white filter.
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>>766520
>never cared much for comics that start out with the first three pages just being someone walking around.
I agree with that a lot. Cute oc btw.
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>>767213
im running out of time for my passions as im driven by a constant need for more money.

the means by which i need to live continues to be stolen from me by underhanded means and a future that i desire seems to be farther and farther away every time i wake up.

the love that i hold that drives me to continue trying is not focusing on what i actually want to achieve and the fears that i will let down those who are important to me ring in my head constantly like the echos of gun fire.
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>>767655
I want to sniff her sweater.
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>>767674
here you go
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>>767722
Hothothothothothot
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can i read this anywhere?
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>>767763
currently the only place im uploading it that you would have any luck at keeping track of is here.
https://cohost.org/Unspecified

i dont really have anywhere else that im keeping up with, there's not a lot, since i just never have the time usually but its there.
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i hope that im retaining an air of artistry in these
i dont know why im suddenly so invested in doodling these little moments but its good practice i guess.
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>>764752
Hey I'm starting my own, 5 pages in where are you at so I can follow you could use the inspiration.
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>>768210
Its two posts up
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i like how this turned out but unfortunately i edited it and now its all fucky, so this screen cap is the only place it exists
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>>769064
can i lick her abs
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>>769804
Sorry, that ones married
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>>764752
almost done.

i kinda lost focus on this one
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>>766520
Could you try drawing her with a flatter chest? I'm madly in love with her and I want to know if it's just because of her giant tits.
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>>771022
nah, you can have this though
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>>771214
how long did it take you to get to this skill level anon-sama?
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>>771216
well lets see...
my earliest memory artwise was scribbling down a shitty drawing of a snowball fight in crayon during kindergarten, i remember thinking that it was annoying i was coloring snow in white crayon on a brownish felt-like construction paper.

im almost 30 now so... give or take 29 years.

i dont think i actually started getting "good" until about 19 and even then if i look back at it now its gonna be so shit i just know it.
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I adore the way you draw faces anon, would you ever take commissions?
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>>771482
i mean i guess i kinda do?
but i dont really wanna dox my legal name to just whoever, maybe if i can figure out how to set up kofi again, that seemed to work ok.
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>>771487
https://ko-fi.com/unspecified
i think i set this up right?
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testing a different brush
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>>769878
done
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i finally saw all of evangelion recently
i like asuka
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Your art is nice but all of your skulls look like this guy
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>>777813
He does! He's lying!!!!
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>>778569
i dont believe you
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>>778569
kek
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>>778569
drew this special for you after i picked all the smegma off my cock
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i havent actually drawn in a while, i feel rusty
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>>780373
fuck yeah
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did for a friend
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>>764752
I like the style! and the paneling could be improved with very simple increases to the black space between panels. The only other change I would prefer is using a standardized typeface as opposed to the handwriting, but thats entirely up to taste. Keep it up!
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Dont know how this'll work but i was fairly proud of my efforts with this one.

Ive been slowly digging away at ideas ive had years before but planned too much to do until now
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i guess technically this could be a facsimile of isabelle
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>>783906
one more
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>>783906
>>783907
Draw more Isabelle. Stop being horny for beautiful, thicc murders and be sad again.
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>>785625
Hey you might just be in luck, im having a really weird time rn and im trying not to think about it
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>>764752
I came to insult your draws but the character studies are way, way, way fucking better than the comic. As other anons said the faces and expressions are the highlight. You shouldn't cut corners on the comic, remember that shit will be out FOREVER and it's really your worst work.

The second problem is the color. I can see you want to tell a color story but bro, you are fucking ass at colors. You should stick to black and white and some accent colors for when it really matters. Instead what you've done is full color comic with clothes that for some reason change, whole outfits of color and then RED PANELS OF CRINGE. Bro, do the whole thing black and white and then if you really need the sunset panel just do that. Or maybe do the blue panels in the style of the red panels - single color instead of full color. It's clear you struggle so don't fucking waste energy on something that makes it worse.

Which brings me to your worst offense. The text. The fucking handwriting. Fucking STOP. it's not iconic, it's fuck all hard to read and nobody is impressed. Meanwhile it's obvious most of your energy is going into crabbing out each letter instead of what you should be doing, drawing the characters. Pick a font, use it. There are plenty of handwriting and comic fonts, free even. Choose for clarity, but mostly change to stop wasting fucking energy writing.

Last do yourself a favor, get clipstudiopaint. Like the writing if you spend your peanut brain energy trying to get panels right (seriously how fucking hard is it?) you're taking away from making a better comic. Clip is cheap as shit and has all the tools including and especially some super banging comic panel tools. And dont' get fuckign fancy at first, you can break panels and do long mixes and borderless later when you're used to typing and your characters are worth it. You don't need it for this tripe, so just keep it simple clean panels until you figure out your drawings.
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>>787043
i make art for fun, sir
this kind of mentality is something i struggled with for years.

in my personal opinion i believe that using the text function in clip looks tacky, sort of like breaking peoples immersion on something that you should be putting love and care into.

i genuinely love the practice and process of learning and im not so insecure as to be ashamed of my short comings that i wont post anything until its perfect, bro.
it is my personal belief that imperfections are what makes something endearing and im not going to shelter myself from criticism by avoiding attempts at coloring just because someone may have the opinion that i suck at it.

if i ever reach the point that people start pulling up and discussing my work themselves i would rather look back on and remember times when i struggled but felt proud of the progress id been making rather than stare at an endless collage of rigid and uninspired bitter tears.

i hope whoever reads this finds the courage in themselves to try in spite of their fears.
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a commission someone decided they didnt work so i half assed into my own stuff
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I was talking about isabelle with someone tonight
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>>790033
Would
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ive been trying some new stuff
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