"The Death of /wg/" EditionPrevious: >>25059976/wg/ AUTHORS & FLASH FICTION: https://pastebin.com/ruwQj7xQRESOURCES & RECOMMENDATIONS: https://pastebin.com/nFxdiQvCPlease limit excerpts to one post.Give advice as much as you receive it to the best of your ability.Discuss the written works below for practice; contribute, and you shall receive.If you have not performed a cursory proofread, do not expect to be treated kindly. Edit your work for spelling and grammar before posting.Shitposters should be ignored and reported.Beginner guides on writing:https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pHdzv1NfZRMhttps://www.youtube.com/watch?v=whPnobbck9shttps://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YAKcbvioxFk Intermediate guides on writing:https://www.goodreads.com/book/show/48654.Storyhttps://www.goodreads.com/book/show/3097766-borges-on-writinghttps://www.goodreads.com/book/show/23056.Image_Music_TextAdvanced guide on writing:Just do it.Theme: https://youtu.be/ifcV76TwjGI?si=F1C4D4f4iZuuzFMM
I have 11 projects going on at once right now... but I've only started writing two. The other are just some early notes for ideas I had.This is probably a bad way to work, right?
>>25086508not at all imagine finishing them all at once
>>25086508
>>25086558Yes that'll be a grand day once anon is in his 60s
>>25086558>>25086571Well this one book I read about writing said not to discard any ideas for a story. At the very least, write them down. They may not all be good, and you may not finish or even really start them all, but it's still good to save them.I have no idea if it's good advice, guess I'll find out.
>>25086704I'm a believer in "if you love something, let it go. If it comes back to you, then it was meant to be."
https://pastebin.com/ysFEUziMshort story, looking for critique
>>25086843sorry, looking at this again i see that it isn't very good. also, "canere" means to sing, not to shine. whoops
>>25086837So you're saying to not write stuff down? And if the idea comes back to my mind later that means it's good?
>>25086843absolutely awful
>>25087030Yeah, I don't start putting words to the page unless I'm consistently brainstorming the idea
>>25087253What about notes and thoughts? Do you not even write down the idea at all?
what makes prose good?
>>25087744It flows and is clear to understand (cohesion and coherence). Each word is deliberate, progressing the readers knowledge about character, plot, or setting (ideally all three). It doesn't rely on common idioms or expressions, but rather describes something which may be common in a new perspective or way (i.e. it illicits an "I didn't think of it that way before" response).
>>25087744pacing
>>25087749>Each word is deliberate, progressing the readers knowledge about character, plot, or setting (ideally all three).leaves quite a low aesthetic ceiling. ‘voice’ is another key aspect.
>>25087731Not unless I'm consistently brainstorming it. Like I said.
should i delete this and just end myself because I'm a hack of a writer?
>>25087744Quality
>>25087744not these>>25087887>>25086843
>"No man will flay his own skin to save yours if he's not one of your own."does this make sense?
>>25088039Get rid of "if he's not one of your own". Or writeNo man would flay their own skin if it's not their own.
>>25088151>No man would flay their own skin if it's not their own.lmfao wow much better
>>25088039Seems like it should be conditional>No man would flay his own skin to save yours if he weren't one of your own.>>25088151idiot lol
im definetly killing myself. cant even read anymore all i do is i read the dictionary because comfort?
it needs restructuring>Only a man who considers you his brother would flay his own skin to save yours.For example
>>25088296jeeesus
>>25088296That's the best one
>>25088296oh putain
Appreciate the feedback I got a few threads ago. I've touched up the opening to my sci-fi dystopia novella since then. Here's the opening plus the second page. Looking for feedback on how you might tackle this opening differently. Or just call it out for being clunky or boring. Anything helps. Really I just want to know if this has a good enough hook or not so far.
>>25088307>>25088520>>25088915i don't understand these reactions
I hate myself bros. I have a million things I need to work on but I just procrastinate
Stephen King: On Writing, chomsky. Don't do your writing where you game or goon. Prepare a separate space, in your own office if possible. A location set aside just for writing will do you wonders. Remember, don't open other tabs! Good luck.
>>25087887>woglinde Stopped reading right there
>>25089072You should continue
/wg/ can’t die. Where will I go to be crabbed if it does?
>>25087902PYW
Yes it can. We're all sick of your shit faggot.
Ƒuck you, nigger.
>>25089010It makes perfect sense that this general's posters are terrible at written communication
>>25089033Ah yes this advice from a literal billionaire will be much help to me (underemployed and near-broke)
https://pastebin.com/2yAu1DW6got around to writing some morethe first scene with an extended amount of dialogue, I'm not sure how well it all flows though, especially the first paragraph feels rough
Could I ask for feedback on a piece of fanfiction I am writing?Throughout highschool and college I scraped through any class that involved writing. The fact that I didn't like reading back then didn't help either. But over the past year, I've fallen in love with fanfiction, and it led me to start learning how to write.I can look back to where I started and see that I've improved. But at this point, I think I need actual feedback and constructive criticism.
>>25090271>“‘Uncle Grey’?” chimed in Appius. “I didn’t know you had any children, Grey.”Do you not know what an uncle is? Appius could remark “I thought you were an only child.” I struggled to stick with it through the first paragraph but I’ll say it ended better than how it started. It’s a perfectly fine first draft, but when you revise you need to ask yourself “what’s the point?” Your first paragrph’s point seems to be establishing your main character is an autistic faggot who suffers a panic attack by being in a crowd. A crowd which you go to great lengths to describe before really introducing the reader to the autistic faggot. This leaves me with no real interest in him since the story isn’t interested in him. I would advise flipping the focus. Don’t start with the crowd. Start with him and his mission (need to meet military contact). Give me some sense of how he feels about this (excited to have a big job? curious why the military picked him? Fearful he’s not a military man. Frustrated they gave him retardedly vague instructions of who to meet and where? That doesn’t seem military like.) Instead autistic faggot just drifts from his panic attack into a conversation with a stranger under the moronic assumption that the first stranger he meets must be the military contact? And also he’s a very pretty young man. I assume this is leading to porn. If not, radically reconsider this opening.
>>25090097Take it as the advice from a guy who wrote 100+ books you autistic spaz!
>>25090352oh god your right, sorry I definitely meant only childand the scene is part of an ongoing story, the scene prior was a boat trip with a lot of his introspection so I thought a nice bit of external focus to give an idea of the new setting would be good before returning to the characterand it's part of the intro to a romance story, so I think the focus is appropriatethanks for the catch about what Uncle means lol, easy brain fart
chapter 17 done. now onto chapter 18
