Come one and all to the meta-writefag and help raise the quality of MLP fanfiction! Featuring: Slippery slope GET!ITT: Anon has the flu and AIDS and cancer, Anon's homosexual activities are protected by plot armor, wholesome scenes about Celestia's milk, fics that don't exist, changeling isekais, 2024 statistics, pretending to like Jinglemas fics, Equestrian chicken nuggets, Windows versus Linux, thread meta discussion, creepily keeping pictures from hard drives recovered from a dumpster, shipping in other fandoms, we think fanfiction sucks and is for nerds, filling in those missing little pieces information, spicy food, and this thread is fucking awful!>/fimfic/ Secret Book ClubThe eighty-seventh through ninety-first books are:https://www.fimfiction.net/story/569606/same-day-deliberationhttps://www.fimfiction.net/story/570314/regiftinghttps://www.fimfiction.net/story/569967/great-and-powerful-comeback-tour-one-night-onlyhttps://www.fimfiction.net/story/570138/present-virtueshttps://www.fimfiction.net/story/568786/salvation-aviationIf (You) want to participate, read one or more of these by the 5th.On Sunday we'll discuss what we've read.>Recommended stories:Tired of authors inserting their fetishes out of nowhere? Fed up with blueball endings? Well, we've compiled the best of the worst in order to bring you our absolute average!New Starter Kit - http://mlpficreviews.org.uk/starter/Old Starter Kit - http://i.imgur.com/vuTA7EN.png>Common fic abbreviations used by the thread:https://ponepaste.org/7317>A list of reviews made by the Anons in this thread:http://www.mlpficreviews.org.ukUse the commands ">review <story link>" and ">discuss <story link>" to add reviews to a story.Userscript for extra features: https://ponepaste.org/8619>An in-depth writing guide for beginners:https://eznguide.neocities.org/>Can you pre-read my story?Post it on Google Docs or HackMD with comments enabled and give us a link.>Additional material for authors:Rhorse's Horse Behavioral Notes - https://ponepaste.org/932Politics and the English Language - https://www.orwell.ru/library/essays/politics/english/e_polit/Fluffy Pancake Recipe - https://recipesbycarina.com/pancake-recipe/Vhatug's tips for anatomically correct clop - https://poneb.in/g4VpEg4fSetting a story in motion - https://youtu.be/ufO8LbwTdu0Taking criticism - https://youtu.be/-v4R2ZcxPlA>Various reviews and riffs:Fillyanon's Bookshelf - https://ponepaste.org/5555Notkickass222urmom's Reviews - https://pastebin.com/u/notkickass222urmomIHeartShinzakura's Reviews - https://ponepaste.org/user/IHeartShinzakuraAppleanon reads fics - https://poneb.in/wmGX7FPmDeluxe Big Master Review List - https://docs.google.com/spreadsheets/d/1z9Bz7UnEbxo-svlXa2tV49PJkP-yFuR7pRXiBUn-IeUA Guide to Rational Fics - https://files.catbox.moe/3jzrfm.pngThe Royal Canterlot Library's Top 16 Fanfics - https://royalcanterlotlibrary.net/top16/Previous Thread: >>41769939
So are we actually going to talk about fics this thread?
Second for best duo!Enjoy this conveniently packaged Tuna: https://www.fimfiction.net/story/539121/oneiromance
>>41802345I made progress on fics that have been sitting for ages. :D
>>41802345No. We are going to WRITE fics this thread!
>>41802254Yes. She was born out of the first tide. She still cycles between full Moona and almost-filly S1 Luna depending on moon phase, though.>>41802182Moonfilly is for hugs, ponyback rides, and ice cream.
>>41802378And sex. Don't forget the sex.
7th for actual previous thread: >>41787079
>>41802345I finished some stuff and I'm now back to my Twinkie horror romance.I'm happy.
>>41802456For the love of god please tell me that last line won't be in the final version.
>>41802419What's a sex?
>>41801366>The Naruto, Harry Potter, and Twilight sections of FF.net all beat Fimfiction's total fic count. And if we include AO3, so does Star Wars, My Hero Academia, Haikyuu!!, Supernatural, and Genshin Impact.How? I cannot imagine some of these getting that much fan fiction. Is Naruto even an interesting universe to write in?
>>41802345I've got to write rebellion nonsense so that my fic has an ending.
>>41802486Naruto was definitely huge back in the day, even if Naruto/Sasuke is objectively inferior to Naruto/Shikamaru
>>41802490I agree, but what do you even write in the Naruto setting? Its side characters are its best and its world is a total mess.
>>41802364Good for you, anon!>>41802369I made a little progress on my current fic last nightI'm also reading more; I was recommended thishttps://www.fimfiction.net/story/242635/split-secondbut it's honestly not very good, despite the interesting premise.
>>41802465Probably not. I'm just spewing words on page. Nothing has been doublechecked. Half of the characters have placeholder names.Once all seven chapters are done, I'll go back to the start and start madly editing it all.
>>41802427I swear I thought I fixed that. I still feel like I'm getting the hang of baking. After the disastrous lack of ITT in >>41751638, I decided I needed to stallion up. I've baked every thread since then, but I'm not comfortable with it yet.>>41802396Kys. Last thread, my first draft of the ITT was twice as long, but I had to cut it in half for exactly the reason >>41802462 said. This thread, I knew that if I tried hard, the effort would just be wasted. And even then, I still had to trim my first draft a little.
>>41802493Doesn't matter when you're a 12 year old. The girl who liked me in middle school made me into one and it didn't make sense but kids writing this don't care.
>>41802500Don't forget that last thread was shit and most of it wasn't worthy of an ITT. It'll be hard to do worse, but I'm sure we'll manage! I'll start:I've been thinking of writing fanfic based on Tamers.
>>41802535Is it worth watching?
>>41802548If you think hotdiggetydemon was back in the day, yes. Otherwise no, forced meme.
Would it be in poor taste to write a fic inspired by horselaugh? Too soon?
>>41802486Huh, I wasn’t expecting this. Fanfiction totally died after the pandemic while A03 has continually risen. Also, searching about what media is popular today reminds me of why I have such contempt for normies.
>>41802578Where do I find it?
>>41802579Who doesn't want horses to laugh?
>>41802590Sadly no horses or laughter are involved.
>>41802595Then what even is the point?
>>41802548Think of it like old YTPs except with a lot of toiler humor and faggotry instead of YTP's editing and sex jokes, and with an attempt at a real plot.I've watched three of the movies, desperately trying to understand the hype, and the last one I tried was literally a soap opera drama about Soarin's relationship woes with Braeburn and with Big Mac in the mix. The only serious connection to mlp is that Braeburn and Big Mac's relationship stems from their homosexuality being repressed by their conservative family, which is at best a stretch. More drama comes from the fact that Soarin is ~50 years old and Braeburn is half that, which feeds into Soarin feeling inadequate for his boyfriend (he can't get it up anymore). Also, Big Mac is really into the whole abuse thing, and Braeburn is extremely submissive, which enables him further.The story is as trope'y as possible, and the humor is mostly shock humor from showing farts and feces. Additionally, Tamers hasn't been watching the show in over a decade so his characters are all deliberately OOC. There's usually a bunch of really over-the-top anime bullshit in the finale of each story, which you might or might not dislike.The best thing about it are some of the reaction image moments, when tamers decides to draw a character in a less-shitposty way. Some are even pretty cute, like his Chrysalis often is. I wish he was drawing more of that and less of gigantic human asses on ponies.
>>41802601Mormons are a weird bunch, yeah.
>>41802535>>41802588Retards, don't you know mentioning tamers in the thread summons the shill squad?On another note, I'd enjoy his work if it weren't 50% the most juvenile fart humor I've ever seen. I mean really, 8 year olds are classier and it's obviously deliberate.
>>41802605>gigantic human asses on poniesI'm sold.
>>41802587Fanfiction.net banned smut fics is why
>>41802535You gonna write something about Trixie and Twilight raising a baby Flawless
>>41802617Are they retarded?
>>41802621Yes. And it was retroactive so it wiped out like 75% of the fics there.
>>41802626nta, but why didn't they learn tumblr's lesson? What the hell did they think people were writing about?
>>41802626I FUCKING LOVE DATA ERASUREI LOVE THE TRANSITORY NATURE OF HUMAN CULTUREI LOVE REMINDERS THAT THE VOID WILL SWALLOW US ALLFUCK YES
>>41802626There's no good smut fics, so that's fine.
>>41802617It WHAT?Wow, smut was like 80% of the fics.
>>41802638"Nah I'd win." syndrome.
>>41802638I wonder if anybody has actually tried to study how forums and social media sites have evolved over time and what factors influence their rise and decline in usage among different subgroups of their user base. >>41802643If you really want to preserve shit on the internet you can. if your posting that here that here it means you’re a part of a very tiny groups that has the awareness to do so. history has always usually been preserved by a tiny group of a societies cultural or political elite. May as well be you right?
Sonata saw humour in the situation to start off with. "T-tickling my feet? Hahaha… Is this really going to help you, weirdo?!" Quickly she began to take things more seriously as brushes and claws raked and teased at her plump soles. When it was deemed that her thrashing was an 'inconvenience', she was bound and strapped tightly, the futile wiggling of her toes the only movement permitted in response to the torment. Had she been less inclined to mock Twilight's nerdy disposition amidst fits of anguished giggles, perhaps she could have avoided the addition of a second coarse roller pressed firmly against her supple soles.
>>41802682Anon. I was being honest.
>>41802647Yeah but there were no backups so I can't find that discworld porn fic I used to whack it to.
>>41802846>discworld pornNow that's what I call a clusterfuck!
>>41802344Of the fics in this week's FSBC, how many were written by thread regulars?
>>41802895One.
>>41802895Two. Current plan is 14-15 Jinglemas fics, incl. 4-5 by thread anons.
>>41802857Hey it's got a big tiddy werewolf girl who constantly gets naked.
He's been spotted in the pony transformation general. What do you think of this?https://www.fimfiction.net/story/537057/twilights-felquines-of-xenon
>>41802952I think "he" should stop talking about himself in third person. Literally no one falls for your posts, "anon".
>>41802952Is this how you honor the Sixth House and the tribe unmourned? Come to me openly, and not by stealth!
>>41802952>"""He's""" been spotted in the tranny general>"""He""" has a single published fic from last year (two years ago, actually) with no followers and ratings disabled, comment section is a shitshow>soliciting criticism for """his""" ficReally, Anon, you can just post the thing and ask what we think without getting your disastrous personal identity involved.
>>41802976>Is this how you honor the Sixth House and the tribe unmourned?I read 3 of the 5 club fics yesterday and one of them made this pop into my head kek
>>41803045Lurk moar
>>41803050Any good Morrowind crossovers?
>>41802959>>41802976>>41803045*WEEEDGIEEE*Man doing this for money sure is fun.
>>41803074I don't think I've seen any at all actually.
>>41803125Even with all the autism? Frickin wild
>>41803144There is only one I know of.https://www.fimfiction.net/story/29408/shed-your-travails
Fics that don't stop even when they really should?
>>41803421Bug is the textbook example. I'm sure there are many others ruined by an unnecessary ending too, though. Dark Empress of Teatime comes to mind, if you're unfamiliar with the 'verse then aside from a cool line the last chapter is somewhat of a disaster.
>>41802344You fucked up the previous thread link: >>41787079Also, I've released another fetishistic anthology today.
>>41803601(You) should read the thread before you burst in to shill your shite.
Why do I see more seethe about HIE than smut here? Both are low quality. Both fill the sin bin. Both involve a lot of wish fulfillment. I’d even say that an HIE has a small chance of being good, whereas a smut fic doesn’t.
>>41803605Oh, I missed that post. Sorry.
>>41803626We're all horny bastards, but some of us try in vain to conceal their manlust.
>>41803626Everyone knows that the vast majority of smut are bad stories, whereas with HiE a lot of people on the site actually think they're good fics. Whenever a clopfic is brought up itt, it's usually in the context of "Hear me out, this one has an actually good story."The comedy random oneshots aren't that far off, either, it's just very hard to find them offensive.
>>41803626I've read more good smut fics than good HiE.
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/363036/drifting-down-the-lazy-riverI decided to try and read this since I enjoyed “the one that got away” quite an lot and man I’m kind of disappointed. Maybe I’m just stupid and can’t parse literature but it feels disjointed. Events don’t flow well together well and feel like they lack context.
>>41803626One of the differences is the inevitability of smut. There will always be smut, in every place and in every way and of every kind. Saying, "I wish the sin box didn't have any smut in it!" is like saying, "I wish the sun never set!" Nobody expects smut has a good story or literary value (though it occasionally happens); it just expands to fill the space available to it.But HiE is a narrative choice. Someone who writes HiE thinks they have a story worth telling. But invariably, it's bad, often worse than a lot of smut (we lack the authors to pen HiE stories, etc.). Yet it's not recognized as bad. These stories are perennially popular, and they crowd out fics that are twice as good. When you pour hundreds of hours of effort into crafting a great narrative, and yet the top of feature box is always, "omg im in Equestria and the M6 are my besties lol imma date them all," it stings.
>>41803635>manlustdon't say words that get me hard, anon
>>41803737Why not? Is it such a crime to want throbbing nonnycocks?~
>>41803714>I enjoyed “the one that got away” quite an lot>Maybe I’m just stupidI think that might track.
>>41803714That's disappointing to hear. I also liked that story, and I was looking forward to reading the sequel eventually.
>>41802344Tell me more about the chicken nuggets in Equestria... and Celestia lactating
>>41803811You don't need to know about Celestia
>>41803749it is when you tildepost, nigger.
How can you both have 40 stories and 39?
>>41803626I think >>41803717 accidentally reveals the truth.Everyone is horny. But not everyone likes HiE. So while few would have a bone to pick with a story for being horny, many will end up having bones to pick with HiE. A bad clopfic is just a bad clopfic; a bad HiE is evidence that 'the author arrogantly thinks they are good but actually they are bad and people like them for no reason' blah blah.In other words, it's just prejudice.
>>41804018M filter on? Unpublished fic?
HiE but it's ponies discovering the paleontological remains of a cro-magnon caveman
>>41803801I still have enjoyed it enough to continue reading.
>>41804054Pony on earth but they’re on the Eurasian steppe and get captured by mongols.
>>41804131Pony in Equestria but there's an orb.
>>41804139There’s an orb but ponies keep coming to ponder it and celestia is very worried.
>>41804139Fic about Twilight's new orb but she won't share it.
>>41804039I feel tempted to combat to your mischaracterization of my >>41803717, but your argument comes down to "it's prejudice because I say so," and that's a level of irrationality and ignorance that I'm not prepared to fight.
>>41804162You should self-reflect more. Why do you say 'Someone who writes HiE thinks they have a story worth telling." That is the definition of prejudice, e.g. "dislike, hostility, or unjust behavior deriving from unfounded opinions." Of course, the thing about every prejudicial person is they think their unfounded opinions are actually the founded ones. Like oh, it's not prejudice that I hate [minority], I have real experience with [minority] sucking, or whatever. You are unilaterally assuming things about the objectives/mental states of the authors of some 30,000 stories. Why attach special significance to HiE over generic clop; why not say that, perhaps, it is inevitable that humans will want to write and read porn of humans fucking whatever the subject is? Why specifically make an exception like 'HiE specifically, invariably, are bad from people who over-estimate themselves and then people are incapable of recognizing the quality of?'In short: Prejudice. Spite. Bitterness. Maybe it's a matter of taste; you yourself dislike HiE so you have ire for it in general. Maybe it's a matter of envy, your pony stories or pony stories you like are less popular, and so you lash out. Either way, it's blatant prejudice. The real reason you don't try to combat me is because you know you're wrong. You have no argument. Trying to expose my 'irrational and ignorance' will only reveal your own as you bluster and gesture at whatever few cases gave you your prejudice. But no one will care. Because your juices are for you to stew in alone, forever.
>>41801588>"Nightmare Moon wins"Sounds interesting. Has a nice S1 AU fic vibe to it where the eternal night was always portrayed as something more than just a lack of sun.>>41801707>everyone will know the full plot ITTI'm fine with that, though I doubt too many people have even been keeping up-to-date with the various "how's the fic writing going?" responses. Anyone who read the poem already knows the whole story, anyway.>>41801750https://www.fimfiction.net/story/238757/the-children-of-planet-earthIt'll be like they're speaking a totally different language.>>41802486>How?Some are multi-billion dollar franchises that have massive fanbases and are part of mainstream culture. Some have shit tons of shipping that helps sustain their popularity.>Is Naruto even an interesting universe to write in?I have no idea, but some form of Naruto anime continuously aired from 2002-2023, with another season currently being produced. It's both older and newer than G4 was. That's going to more than sustain a fanbase.>>41802587>Huh, I wasn’t expecting this.Really? I thought it was common knowledge FF was dying and AO3 ate its lunch years ago.>>41802617That was way back in 2002 because muh advertisers, though I distinctly remember the rule not really being enforced for M fics, so maybe they actually started cracking down later on when Unilever got word or something.>>41802952>still only two chaptersC'mon, Mandark. You gotta live up to the schizofic hype. Behemoth Anon's beat the stuffing out of you. Where's the passion? The dedication in the face of a thousand shitposts from the Lunafag telling you to take your meds? This is a pathetic display of autism.>>41804047Probably M filter. Unpublished doesn't show up in the public count.
>>41804577>Sounds interesting. Has a nice S1 AU fic vibe to itThanks for your response, anon. There's still a ways to go developing the idea and creating some kind of significant core story premise for everything to wrap around. I really love the atmosphere of season 1 and the creativity that timeframe afforded to people back when I was there so it absolutely is a design consideration to go for a season 1-era vibe with my future work. Ultimately though I just want to make a quality post-apocalyptic pony story that fits them well and merges the two ideas successfully, because I take personal issue with a lot of pieces in the genre i've read. I guess I am just wanting to make something that I have always wanted to see.
>>41804577>children of planet earth. I read that like two years ago and thought it was decent. >thought it was common knowledgeLiterally who is this common knowledge amongst?
>>41804636>Literally who is this common knowledge amongst?The commoners, of course.
>>41804567>Why do you say 'Someone who writes HiE thinks they have a story worth telling."Because I believe everyone who writes believes they have a story worth telling. If you care enough to write the story down, then you surely believe, on some level, that it's worth telling. Even if you're just writing for yourself with no intention of publication. Even if you're writing stories you hate solely for money. You wouldn't write if you didn't believe your writing was worth doing. I believe that's true of all stories, from the greatest literature to the most childish drivel.>prejudiceIt's called "inductive reasoning." Nearly all HiE I've read or attempted to read has not even been worth the time it took me, regardless of author or genre; none at all has ever impressed me. Ergo, other HiE is also unlikely to be worth reading.>Why attach special significance to HiE over generic clopMost fiction is judged on artistic merit. But clop also has another function, one that requires cleanup afterward, and even clop that utterly fails as art can still deliver on that other function. In addition, clop is usually artistically superior to HiE. (That's inductive reasoning again.)>Prejudice. Spite. Bitterness.>envy>blatant prejudiceYou can use all the ad hominem you want, but it won't change my mind. If it makes you feel better about yourself, though, go right ahead. You can pretend that I'm wrong and that there's good HiE. After all, there's no wrong way to fantasize.
>>41804681I don't care about changing your mind. That's as pointless (and difficult) as convincing a racist that their minority of choice isn't all bad. I care about establishing reality, since it's cheap rhetoric to publicly post about how someone is so beneath you and obviously wrong they're not worth replying to. By calling it out I further re-establish your prejudice in a public setting.And, as expected, as you attempt to expound upon your reasoning you become increasingly ridiculous. First, you ramble in your initial reply and miss the initial point, as if by this point you forgot the rhetorical jab; if your belief is that everyone writes believing they have a story worth telling, then there is no reason to specify HiE as being written by people who believe that as something to disparage.Furthermore, as stated, in my post...>Maybe it's a matter of taste; you yourself dislike HiE so you have ire for it in general.Call it 'inductive reasoning' as much as you like, having a bone to pick with something and then making generalized statements about it based on your negative personal experiences has 0 meaning. For every genre there will be someone talking about how they don't like it's so it's all drivel, from Japanese isekai to dime novels to comedy serials to whatever. It never means anything, just like your position means nothing. All normal, reasonable people (that is to say: not ignorant and irrational people) will see someone say "I don't like X, therefore all of X is not worthwhile / bad / whatever."Finally, you seem to have latched intently on your delineation of "at least clop lets people masturbate," as if there is a dichotomy of 'literature' and 'masturbation' where a work must fulfill one role or the other. It is perfectly reasonable for a work to simply provide spiritual or emotional pleasure (to many - not everyone) without being masturbatory, which is generally what I would expect HiE to do for the people who enjoy them. You're flattening the range of experience to be haughty about your opinions.In short, your rhetoric is garbage and your position is narrow-minded, as one would expect. You may now scurry away or try to ramble more about why your position is totally well-founded and not opinioniated garbage.
>>41804728>reading incomprehensionI think I understand why you like HiE now: Everything else is too hard for you.It's not worth my time to attempt to argue with you. I'm sure you'll say that this means I lose the argument. I'm sure you'll try to provoke me into responding again. Like I said before, if it makes you feel better about yourself, go right ahead. But please, use a flag or a name or a trip so that I can filter you in the future.
>>41804654Fair enough. I’m a schizo-autist that rarely leaves my bubble of fixations over obscure shit nobody cares about so what would I know about that which is common?
HiE is a fundamentally trashy subgenre. It is also quite a bit of fun and I enjoy it.
>>41804799The HIE genre is not for the faint of heart. It’s not just about sending humans into the world of Equestria; it’s about transcending the boundaries of fiction itself. Just as you wouldn't expect to stumble upon a Shakespearean play in a high school drama class, or find the nuances of a Tolstoy novel in a community book club, you simply cannot expect a mere fanfic writer to grasp and master the profound depths and soul-stirring complexities of the HIE genre. It's the apex of storytelling. Too intricate, too delicate, too soulful for most to comprehend, let alone capture in writing. The problem isn’t with the genre. The issue lies in its towering grandeur, which is just too monumental for the average writer. We don't lack good HIE stories; we lack the literary giants to pen them.
>>41804799I guiltily enjoy Ponies on Earth stories about manic pixie dream ponies showing up on some fat sad sack's doorstep to whisk him away into an adventure. It's the lazy man's HiE isekai, don't even have to get off the couch.
>>41804977Outright whisking him away on adventures, or just hanging out in his house? Because>Horses? In my bedroom?is a very silly subgenre but it makes sense, it's a minimalist premise to get a chance to write character interactions and I can appreciate that.
>>41804977I feel like I am in a completely different world than the one this post was made in. That time seemed as though it were an ephemeral dream. Was it all an illusion?
>>41804977>2012 post>predicts 15 years>G6 is comingI have a bad feeling about this.
>>41803662>"Hear me out, this one has an actually good story."So exactly the same as HiE.
>>41804131I watched some random history vid on youtube at work a few months ago and my eyes widened considerably when they said batu khan had a herd of 2,000 mares that he kept with him so he could drink mare milk whenever he wanted. I was amazed. Frankly that man more than any other has lived the perfect life.
>>41805111The (arguably) deadliest warriors and conquerors in history were fueled by mare milk
>>41804728This argument can only exist in a vacuum. All it takes is reading any of the popular HiE stories to find what they have in common and show how low this genre really is at the moment. It's not out of some magical prejudice; it's because the people who read HiE fully expect to read drivel, so the only authors choosing to spend their time writing it over any other genre are those who have no higher aspirations than that, either appealing to those readers or being a part of that group. The meme pasta about literary giants is right, in a way. In other words, HiE isn't all bad just because of the genre specifics that make it flawed (although elements like breaking the nature of the world by putting a literal human in the world of anthropomorphized non-humans make it more difficult to tell a story worth suspending your disbelief for); it's bad because the writers are universally targeting a very specific demographic who does not care about quality. There are many reasons for why that is the case, from the recent spike in the genre's popularity to the simple fact that "the most popular" anything will tend to always fish out the dregs by casting a wide-enough net, but they're not really relevant here.You could try to write a good HiE story. However, it would be wasted effort since all the HiE-shunning people would be unlikely to read it-and for a good reason!-while your usual HiE audience would not appreciate the story.
>>41804977>Past Sins got adapted into show canonWat?
>>41805388Assuming you're not that guy coming crawling back, I will engage here. What's prejudicial is not the asperations on the works itself; we all know from Sturgeon's law that 90% of everything is utter crap, and when it comes to fanfiction you're hard pressed to find anything that's not crap. I fully agree the bulk of HiE is garbage, just like the bulk of anything is garbage, and that anyone who reads a lot of it will have trudged through a lot of garbage. The problem is when starts rationalizing this and coming up with bizarre, prejudicial theories.Let's have a thought experiment. Let's say someone grows up in an isolated neighborhood dominated by some kind of gang that wears red hats shaped like flamingos. Every day the kid gets beat up by people wearing red flamingo hats. He grows to hate these hats and all who wear them. After 18 he moves out with seething hatred for all red flamingo hat people.This hate will have real-life experience. If he recorded it he could share with us all the horrors that befell him. If he asked for counter examples (the analogy is strained here due to the subjective nature of entertainment enjoyment), it may in fact be difficult for anyone to point to flamingo hat wearing people that were nice to them; perhaps we have never met anyone wearing such a hat.Subsequently, the poor boy starts ranting about how flamingos are a secret satanic symbol, how Flamingos suck all good out of people, how only pathetic and depraved people are drawn to flamingo hats, how like the weight of such novelty hats puts pressure on the brain such that they become mentally damaged... So it is that when he sees someone IRL wearing a red flamingo hat he will probably be wholly convinced that person is about to beat the shit out of him or do some other villainous thing. Even though, of course, that is in fact completely ridiculousI have written at such length because this is a very fundamental thought process that ravages the entire human race. One has some kind of personally negative experience and then their mind goes wild with theories: in your case, you project the mental states of hundreds of thousands of HiE readers by saying they 'expect to read drivel,' and then you project the mental states of authors who 'have no higher aspirations than appealing to those who want drivel.' This is clearly leaving reality (the very fair reality that most HiE is bad) and entering bizarre, prejudicial judgments to explain phenomenon: what some may call a just-so story. It basically doesn't really mean anything, it doesn't predict reality, and although the initial feelings may have been based on reality, the conclusions are nonsense. Hence: Prejudice, and why every prejudicial person thinks they're the one who's just being a realist.
>>41805388>people hate this genre because authors write bad stories in it>but also you shouldn't bother writing a good story in it because they'll still hate it anyways
>>41804577>Unpublished doesn't show up in the public countBut it does for blogs. For some reason.
>>41805396>So it is that when he sees someone IRL wearing a red flamingo hat he will probably be wholly convinced that person is about to beat the shit out of him or do some other villainous thing. Even though, of course, that is in fact completely ridiculousAmendment:>So it is that when he sees someone IRL wearing a red flamingo hat he will probably be wholly convinced that person is an agent of Satan with a shrunken brain being puppeted by the flamingo on his head. Even though, of course, that is in fact completely ridiculous
>>41805396Art doesn't exist in theory. Find multiple good HiE or scram.
>>41805396There is one point where the analogy falls flat: If you are living in the red flamingo neighborhood, you probably won't want to wear a red flamingo hat if you don't have any malicious intent. And here, we are all living in the red flamingo neighborhood. Yes, the premise of "all fics that set out to be HiE are undoubtedly going to be garbage because of a divine rule of a universe" is just as ridiculous as asserting that everyone wearing a red flamingo hat is, or will soon become, Satan himself. But if you instead frame it as "someone putting on a red flaming hat is probably not going to be friendly", then it's just making a reasonable guess based on reality. It's not just that most HiE is bad; it's that the fraction of HiE that's good is seemingly much smaller than the same ratio for many other genres. I have read good fics out of the sinbin. Recently, even! I have never read a good HiE story out of the bin.Another reason why I don't think I'm unfairly prejudiced against them is that I don't actually hate the idea behind the genre. It inherently doesn't lend itself to """high art""" or any other semi-pretentious terms, but that's fine with me. What is not fine is when those stories fail to realize the premise they've set out to do. Fimfic's userbase is not very critical as long as you don't step on some landmine, but that's at least twice as bad with HiEs. If we assume that somewhere out there exists a chunk of good HiE, then clearly bad HiEs drowns it out so thoroughly that people just don't care about the quality of the self-insert stories they're reading. And that goes back to fueling the problem, too. If you're a good writer, and you see bad HiE completely crush better HiE, then it'd be kind of stupid for you to decide to write a HiE instead of anything else.>>41805412It's kind of a self-fulfilling prophecy like that. What the readers of the genre want is not what we typically would call a good story. This problem is not specific to fimfiction, either. There are several examples of something similar happening to the trendy genres in real world, too, except there you're also writing for money.
>>41805443> If he asked for counter examples (the analogy is strained here due to the subjective nature of entertainment enjoyment), it may in fact be difficult for anyone to point to flamingo hat wearing people that were nice to them; perhaps we have never met anyone wearing such a hat.You're completely misunderstanding my position and what I'm identifying. What I am saying holds true even if 100% of HiE is bad. For the purpose of argument, here and now, I shall grant that 100% of HiE is garbage and there has never been a good HiE work. It does not follow from this that one can say whatever shit they want about HiE while being free of prejudice. It does not follow that since all HiE is bad that I can make up bizarre theories as to why that is which would be considered valid. It is, indeed, the definition of a just-so story:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Just-so_story>>41805470Sure, you can make guesses like that based on reality. It would not be prejudicial to say something like "Most HiE I've read is bad, ergo the next HiE work I read is likely to be bad." It's also fair to imagine there are some social implications of this situation. The problem online arises with seething and nonsense, where one starts DEFINITELY speaking for the mental state of TENS OF THOUSANDS of people. It's unlikely anyone can accurate predict the mental state of 10 to 100 people, much less tens of thousands. Attempting that is when one will likely be motivated by having a particular bone to pick with a phenomenon and when one will swiftly leave reality. After all, you're not saying 'someone putting on a red flamingo hat is probably not going to be friendly,' you're saying "[all people who wear flamingo hats] fully expect to read drivel" - "[all people who make flamingo hats] choose it because they have no higher aspirations." Etc. And that's when one leaves reality. And one tends to leave reality to make spurious, prejudicial claims based on individual grudges. Well, you don't even necessarily need to have malice, I'd admit. Just a lingering bad taste in your mouth.
>>41805480>100% of HiE is garbage and there has never been a good HiE workBait used to be believable.
>>41805496This is what happens when you chase off the master baiters.
>>41805496I was granting that for an argument, not stating it as a fact. It's a rhetorical device. I mean 'even if I grant you this worse case, what I say remains true.'
Just emerging of a year long period of almost managing to forget this place exists. Amazing to see all the site changes I missed. Outstanding stuff. Just incredible..Any exceptionally good fic come out recently that shouldn't be missed?
>>41805545https://www.fimfiction.net/story/500819/
>>41805545Mine.
>>41805546Thanks. Gonna put this right before Fallout Equestria, at the end of the reading list>>41805548Post link, coward. I'm too rusty to give a good review though, unless you want to be disappointed by shallow commentary
>>41805556Already did: >>41802952
>>41805558Yeah I'm more of a life long Bleedin' fan.Whatever, I'll just sort by ratings and read the slop that falls out.
>>41805563just read the book club's fics, they're likely less shit.
>>41805556He's memeing but that is legitimately a great fic. It's still unpolished though, so I'd suggest Tower of Diamond instead. As for other great or good fic that aren't necessarily recent but the thread did rediscover in recent times: Life is a Lemon, Machina Cor Armageddon, The Rise and Fall of the Dark Lord Sassaflash, Twilight Sparkle of the Royal Guard, Arcadia, Where Only Silver Shines, and a bunch of other stuff you can find in the new Starter Kit.
>>41805576I feel like I'm going to regret this, but sure, I'll check out Tower of Diamond.I've read most of the other ones already, but still not Sassaflash, despite how much everyone kept talking about it. Thanks>>41805566Oh yeah, some familiar names in there. Bit late for me to participate, but you're right, I forgot about the book club
I fucking hate this style of coverart.
Feeling the holiday cheer (part 1) in,>/FSBC/[Same Day DelibEEEEEEEEEEeeeeeee]It's frustrating. On one hand, this reads like a fine SoL fic, and I liked it for that. I didn't laugh or anything ([Comedy] strikes again), but it was pretty fun overall, too. Smooth writing and alright scenes. Also, bats! Except that...Dear Luna, I have never read a more "haberverse" story than this. In just 4k words, there are explicit references to:>CheesePie>one of the all-time worst episodes (A Trivial Pursuit)>Ahuizotl's """reformation""">Giraffelight foreshadowing>everycreatureMy Goddesses, it's like he was trying to handpick all of S9's worst! It's almost remarkable, in its own way.[Twicord]This one's great! Probably the best of the set. These 7k words went by in a flash, and I wanted to read more after the fic ended. So what worked so well?For starters, characterizations. Everypony is pretty on-point here. The fic is set in post S9, but does the arguably best thing you can do with it and only takes the good parts of later seasons' characterizations (Flutterfags might not love this assertive FS, but, imo she's written just right, not as S9's screamo-shy). Twilight feels truer to her early seasons' portrayal again, but she's a more mature version of the character—the Twilight that late FiM should've had. I like this Celestia a lot, too, even with her being such a departure from the default "benevolent goddess" archetype. Her priorities regarding the Twilight problem are unusual, but it doesn't come off as OOC, and her dialogue with Discord hints at a much richer backstory than in some fics with 10x the words. And it's a really good Discord, too. I don't think of him often when the "favorite character" rankings are discussed (because he's not a mare), but a good Discord ought to be pretty high. This Discord is aided by the excellent discord-writing and worldbuilding and propped up by just an effective and clean writing on top of everything else.So it's a good fic.[G&P'd]Listen to the other people, not me, since this is the exact kind of fic that shows that [Comedy] is not my cup of tea. While haber's bat story was a little funny due to the situational humor and some funny lines, here we're exaggerating the characters to the point of OOC just for funni. After the first two chapters, I suspected I'd end up disliking the fic. Twilight's first appearance is her screaming obscenities into a pillow. After reading the rest of it... I don't feel any different. This is the same brand of humor as Fluttershy, Royal Game Warden, except less extreme and less good.Kind of inconsistent, too. Trixie can make a crass sex joke in one scene (much to Twi's annoyance), only to not know what 'courtship ritual' means (making Twi blush). We live in the [Comedy] land. It's a pony-eat-pony world out there, and nothing is sacred. Also "shit" showing up in an E-rated fic. Overall a disappointment, tbdesu. Perhaps this much could've been inferred from the story's premise.
>>41805689[Present Virtues]The two things that stood out to me were Somnambula's characterization and the words. The former is more important, so let's get the latter out of the way first. I like pretty words almost as much as I like pretty ponies. This might be a problem. And this fic? Yep, it's got some pretty words. Also made me look up and learn a new word—canorous—which is always appreciated! The way the words are assembled is also good; I enjoyed the fic's writing style in the first, description-heavy part the most.Then there's Somnambula. She's a noble, but more of a historical noble than the modern nobility of Canterlot. That's both expanding and—to a degree—improving over what little personality the show gave her. The Pillars are not the show's finest execution of an idea. Here, she feels out of date, exactly like a pony from a millennium ago should. At the same time, I like that the story highlights that ponies are still ponies, and how she ends up finding common ground with Pinkie. It's baffling the show never did any of that, unless you count Friendship You. The part where she kind of rants for several pages of dialogue was my least favorite moment of the story (she ends up repeating a lot when she talks about her Hearth's Warming), but it wasn't bad, either, and the first and last parts of the fic make up for it. Somnambula being good at dodging was a neat detail.[Salvation]A very SoL'y SoL fic. I liked this one. I wouldn't want to get this prompt; good effort. Speaking of good effort, I read them in random order, and it felt crazy to go from the most S9 fic ever (FoME's) to a story that opens with highlighting unicorn Twi and promptly proceeds to include Inky Pie! Based, dare I say!Now, I'm not a huge fan of the comedy genre, but the jokes seemed alright, too. It wouldn't be Gold's fic if there were no phallic descriptions, I suppose. I never cared much for LD, but I liked her SoL'y story in here. Feels pretty properly "pony", too.I don't want to be too harsh, but I was surprised that the writing is just... ok. Some parts are pretty and nice (+1 for the poem!), but there are definitely some weird and a little unusual phrasings—which is strange, since the last thing I've read from the author left me with a "huh, he's actually rather good at this writing thing!".[VOTING]How do you want to read the remaining Jinglemas fics? Do we just go for them in the next two weeks, or do we space them out with longer stories?Second issue: Do (You) want to make an exception for that eqg Trixie comedy from Jinglemas? I can't say in favor of putting eqg here, but it was written by a thread anon and we were supposed to read those.Either way, recycling some suggestions for the next week:www.fimfiction.net/story/485206/anemoiawww.fimfiction.net/story/519321/sorry-we-missed-youwww.fimfiction.net/story/423769/the-hauntingwww.fimfiction.net/story/434003/the-archetypistwww.fimfiction.net/story/117214/the-education-of-clover-the-clever
>>41805576>but that is legitimately a great fic.
>>41805689It was nice to get a variety grab-bag selection of fics this week. To get right into it,>Same Day DeliberationI wasn't really a fan of this one (Pinkie and Cheese Sandwich are married, instant 0/10). It's one of the two which I didn't really enjoy reading this week; it certainly had the worst style of the bunch. There was lots of clunky prose that smacked of "purple unicorn" syndrome, the most egregious example of which, to my mind, was "the mare with two older sisters" and "the one with an older brother". There were also far too many idiomatic expressions and quips, for lack of a better term. Stylistic stuff like this made it harder to follow what was honestly a pretty simple story. The actual plot wasn't bad: Hearth's Warming conflicts with a batp-, uh, chiropteron festival, so they end up combined. The batpony stuff was actually pretty cute; it reminded me a lot of the early parts of Beyond the Veil of Sleep. There were some good words, too, like "panoply" and "hipposandal". I just wish Cheese Sandwich and Pinkie Pie weren't married (instant 0/10). As I marked in my notes, I would rather die than name my child "Bourgeoisie". >RegiftingThis, on the other hand, (or lion's paw, or eagle's talon,) was quite a good fic. I normally don't like Discord in fics, but he's done very well here. He's not nearly as annoying as usual, sure; but more than that, his motivations are sympathetic to the viewer. He actually feels like he's trying to be reformed, and the author nicely depicts his struggle with balancing his relationships with wanting to protect Twilight. The hints at his backstory were an interesting decision to include, but I think it added to the story. This is also yet another story where everything wrong is Twilight's fault and things would universally improve if she just fucked off. Like, seriously, she seems to be written to be as frustrating as possible. She just can't take a hint and has to stomp over everypony's boundaries on whatever whim she gets... Celestia was also obnoxious with her Twicord shipping. It felt totally out of place and didn't contribute anything; the story would probably have been better without it. Additionally, the resolution was very abrupt: it felt like the story ended two paragraphs after the big climax. That said, the fic had an interesting premise, and the good style made it a pretty easy read.
>>41805777>triple sevensI'm feeling lucky. >Great and Powerful Comeback TourI really wanted to like this fic, but man, I just don't know about it. It had better prose than Same Day Deliberation, but there were still some errors. It had an interesting premise with good characters (namely, Trixie), but unlike the last fic, every character BUT Twilight seems to have been written to be deliberately irritating (even, or especially, the guards and court ponies). The plot felt unclear and pretty muddled by the obscure motivations of the characters. Trixie's motivation makes sense in retrospect, but Prince Pelayo especially was just not a very good villain. For example, why was he talking about "killing two birds with one stone" when it was Trixie's idea to fake her own death? He never displays any emotion other than smug self-confidence, even when his plans are unraveling and he's on the back foot. His plans are messy and irrational, and he loses what little charisma he had around the time he makes the monumentally stupid decision of trying to capture the castle. Trixie's little "twist" at the end was pretty cool, but so much of her character is weighed down by the baggage of age and her relationship drama with Twilight. The whole plot just feels very contrived, and I don't think it even had anything to do with Hearth's Warming. I was shaky on this one; the prose is alright, but it's probably my least favourite fic this week on narrative alone. >Salvation AviationThis was definitely my favourite fic of the week. I like Lightning Dust! I don't care what anyone thinks! What I like even more is when the vulnerable sides of antagonists are shown and common ground is found with the main characters. The catharsis from seeing Lightning Dust humbled to a thrift store clerk dies quick, and then you're left with a much smaller mare than we're familiar with: one who's struggling - and seemingly succeeding - to find a new path in life. It really cut me to see how she disappointed her parents' expecations, and how she had to avoid showing her face around her former workplace out of shame. (Things any other anons relate to?) Nonetheless, the fic really nicely emphasised how this was fundamentally a problem with Lightning Dust herself, and that she needed to forgive herself in order to move past her issues. Fluttershy and Pinkie Pie were good choices for this kind of story, being the ponies they are. The story ended with a remarkably Christian moral about receiving forgiveness regardless of whether one deserves it or not, which was heart-warming if not more than a little melodramatic.
>>41805845>Salvation Aviation cont.This fic was filled will nice little details that really showed the care that went into it. The poems at the beginning and end of the story were especially nice touches, although I found it difficult to pick up on the rhythm of the verse. Lightning Dust's parents' diner was sort of bittersweet, especially the way LD had to go in the side entrance rather than the front door to avoid being noticed. The other pegasi around Cloudsdale, like the kids and the confectioner, were very lively and really fulfilled the "slice of life" tag. The Salvation Aviators were very nice to read, especially when they took in Lightning Dust. Including snippets of German was an interesting choice; I had no idea the Salvation Army was associated with Germans. On another note, the prose was probably the best of the fics we read this week. I had a really good time with this fic, and it ended up feeling a lot longer than it actually was (in a good way). >Present VirtuesI'm actually the author of this fic (yay!) and I'm curious about what people thought of it, so I'll shut up for now.
>>41805396>Assuming you're not that guy coming crawling backNo, I'm that guy. Now that I've done the public service of identifying myself, I'm going to hide your post and all its replies.
>>41805691Certainly, my prompt required a fair bit of workshopping. I can't understate the vitality of Zaid's offhand suggestion to include muh waifu.>>41805849Thank you. The poem was the first thing I wrote after getting the premise straight in my head, and it really helped to assure myself of team Flutterpie's suitability for this story. I actually thought the melodrama would be received worse, but it turned out alright for something I typed up over an all-nighter.>I'm curious about what people thought of itYou did good, kid:>>41805689I've only read one of these (unless you count all the frantic rereads of my own fic in the run-up to 28smas), and judging by the above posts, I reckon I made the right decision:>review https://www.fimfiction.net/story/570138/present-virtuesI'd have quibbled over "handy", but coming across a fellow sniggerchad more than makes up for it.What a lovely fic! The writing is rich with festive joy, as should be expected of a holiday story, but--not unlike Somny herself--it dodges the pitfalls of purple prose in favor of focusing on the ancient mare's struggle to find her place in a wildly changed world.Pinkie, in all her early-season glory, makes for an ideal foil to Somnambula's traditional self, and their shared (pyhrric and pyrotechnic) victory perfectly wraps it all up with a bow, Somny's psalms of old put aside in favor of newfound fun.2/2 soaked mares.
>>41805513As established earlier in this thread, there will always be masterbaters.
>>41805391Did you forget Twilight becoming a milf?
>>41805777 (Checked!)>>Same Day Deliberation>It's one of the two which I didn't really enjoy reading this weekSame, although I haven't disliked it enough to leave a dislike. Besides, it'd be really fucking weird to be the first person to dislike the highest-rated Jinglemas 2024 fic. I just chalk it up to "not for me". The actual story in it wasn't bad, as you said.>clunky proseI wouldn't call it clunky. From what I've read of him, that's FoME style, and while I am not the highest on it, the reliance on quips gives it a kind of an 'informal' style that didn't seem clunky to me. I never really felt lost in a scene, because it's the kind of fic where you just follow along and laugh (or not) at what gets thrown in your face.>instant 0/10You still haven't watched S9, did you? There are far more "instant 0/10" moments in this one. I wasn't joking when I said he's doing it on purpose.>>RegiftingI agree with most of that, but I'll actually defend this Celestia. Yes, this is not the S1 canon+headcanon Celestia that we all know and love. This is closer to a decent take on S7-ish Celestia, but again you might not have watched those episodes. Celestia from Celestial Advice, except more good. As for her TwiCord ideas, I think there's more to it than we're being told. The way Discord is... maybe not afraid, but ashamed when meeting her, and her being in control of that conversation so much led me to believe she's really trying to help him, even if he disagrees with her methods. Unlike Discord, she doesn't seem to think discordifying Twilight would be bad for her in the long term. After all, he's fine now, and what's a thousand years between immortals, right? Deciding ponies' fates like that seemed a little too calculating at first, but she already did that to Twilight in the show itself, so it tracks.It's like getting a second cat to keep both of them happy instead of having one lonely cat.>>41805845>>G&P>plot just feels very contrivedYeah, I also really wanted to like it, but the humor was a miss for me and the story doesn't really offer anything of value besides that.>>Salvation AviationIn the upper half of this week's fics for sure. As far as the actual stories in fics go, this has probably the best one this week. It's nothing groundbreaking, but as you said in greater detail, it hits all the right character moments and realizes the plot nicely in the space allotted to it. I don't like LD too much, but that's a good way of writing an LD redemption story if you don't want to go the MCA route.>prose was probably the best of the fics we read this weekI'm of two minds here. Some parts were really quite good, but there have been sentences that just didn't seem to work for me, and clashed really hard with the nice ones. I probably reacted way too hard to that contrast. I'd put Regifting above this, which was a well-written story to be sure, but still. Maybe I set my expectations too high, because I was quite impressed the last time.
>>41805689>>41805689>SDDI basically agree with everything you said. The fic itself wasn't too bad; the author just suffered from terminally shit taste, like those people who write EQG voluntarily. >Regifting FluttershyDoes the title count as a Seinfeld reference? I also think Fluttershy is characterised well here. She's not aggressive, but subtly holds her ground against Discord. If anything, she reminded me of ... Sassy Swallow? The therapist who pushed the characters in certain directions simply by asking the right questions and presenting a sounding board for ideas. Celestia acts in kind of a similar capacity, although I think she's probably the single character whom Twilight would actually listen to if told to stop. >TwilightI don't know; I think that, if anything, she was especially immature here. This seemed more like season 1 Twilight to me, where she'd infringe on relationships for the sake of pursuing her own personal goals, especially her obsession with knowledge, which gets tempered somewhat in later seasons. >DiscordVery good Discord on display here. He's not his usual bastard self, and I don't think it's just because we see from his perspective. His backstory makes him more sympathetic, but likewise, I don't think it was even essential for his portrayal. >GPCTI agree, the characters were far too exaggerated. The humour wasn't really funny, and characters actions were pretty inconsistent with their motivations. It seemed like an example of authors railroading the jokes they want at the expense of credibility. The author's certainly not the first to do this, but I really wish he at least had a better sense of humour. It was way too crass for a holiday story, in my opinion; and like I said before, I don't think it was even related to Hearth's Warming. The main antagonist dropping "Dios mio!" was downright ridiculous. I was surprised they didn't go for "ay caramba".
>>41805977>authors railroading the jokes they want at the expense of credibilityAs someone who regularly crams humor into into the unlikeliest places with only limited complaints, I can confidently state this is a skill issue.
>>41805994>into into
>>41805994You're no Terry Pratchett
>>41806006I never said I was a master of proofreading.>>41806020A boy can dream.
>>41805689I only managed to read two of the fics this week.>Same-Day DeliberationI feel like this the same way I feel about every FoME fic I've read: It's serviceable. The prose, the characters, the plot, it's all okay but not impressive. FoME has a floor of quality that he always achieves; I've never read anything by him that was actually bad. But he also seems to have a ceiling. His fics never exactly bore me, but they never excite me, either. This fic sustains that trend. It's fine. It's a half-hour of light entertainment, and I don't regret reading it. But a week from now I don't think I'll remember anything about it.>Present VirtuesI liked this. For me, it really nailed not just the idea that Somnambula has different Hearth's Warming traditions, but also how she and Pinkie would react to different sets of traditions. It's a happy story, not just because their traditions are both happy (in their own ways), but because it shows Somnambula and Pinkie really coming together and sharing the holiday. This deserves more views and upvotes than SDD. It's a better fic in every way I can think of.
>>41805691>PVThanks for your thoughts! Although I wanted the middle part of the fic to be the "meat" of the story, I agree that it ended up being probably the worst, between the beginning and ending. I'm really glad Somnambula's (and that name is a finger-twister to type so much) characterisation came across well, especially her out-of-time-ness; that's probably what I put the most thought into. There's really very little canon material on her, but she's always shown to be very refined, graceful, and positive. Considering her background as an associate of the prince of not-Egypt and the time period she's from, I tried to make her very comfortable with noble protocol and etiquette. Therefore, when she's put out of her comfort zone of established tradition and ceremony, she gets uncomfortable and complains. I don't know if making her the type to lash out was the best decision, though. It kind of fit her underlying spiritedness, but she's never really canonically shown to express any negative emotion at all, so I was writing blind, so to speak. I really wanted to emphasise how her element was fundamentally the same as Pinkie's, just adapted for a different time/culture. Both mares are free spirits in their own ways and offer a ray of light to those around them no matter where they are. Regarding the descriptive parts, I just like to make pretty pictures with words ^:). Somnambula being good at dodging was pure coincidence, by the way ^:)^:). >SAIt was very comfy! The little gags gave it an early season vibe. It also mixed the comedy very smoothly with the heavier, more emotional stuff, and any sexual jokes were subtle enough not to detract (other than maybe the title chapter). I actually thought the prose was very good, although I agree that there were some instances of slightly weird phrasing. >votesI think we could just go for them in the next two weeks; it would be weird for Hearth's Warming fics to stretch out to February, in my opinion. Also, I wouldn't mind including the eqg fic. Anons shouldn't be left out, especially if it was just their prompt that had to do with EQG.
>>41805878>waifuYou can usually trust a waifufag to portray their waifu well. Flutters was great in all her timid glory. >poemIt takes guts to include a poem in your story, I think, so any problems with the poem itself are partially made up by its inclusion at all. My only misgiving regarding it is the syllabic structure, which isn't the smoothest. Your prose is good otherwise. Fluttershy and Pinkie are criminally underrated as a pair, which is probably due to Libman's not wanting to voice act with herself for a whole episode. The story didn't feel melodramatic for me until Lightning Dust turned on the waterworks at the very end, and I think even that was helped by its brevity. Otherwise, you showed her dull, closed nature as a great contrast to her canon portrayal. Including her parents as OCs was risky, but I think it certainly paid off. >Present VirtuesThank you so much! "Handy" was a tough decision, but I really didn't want to fit in "hoofy". I probably could have just rephrased the sentence, though ^:). I also enjoy the use of "snigger" very much and noted it when I read your fic as well. I was worried the beginning was a little purple, especially compared to the rest of the fic, so I'm glad it didn't come across that way. The holiday season is just too rich not to savor all the sights and sounds and smells! The ending was a little convoluted, I felt; I did the part with Somnambula and Pinkie tipping over the cider cauldron first, and writing about the cider spilling out across the hall reminded me of my initial description of the firelight. After that, I went and added more details to call back to the beginning passage more, but it got kind of out of hand. Somnambula was very interesting to write, being almost like a half-OC with how blank her slate was. I didn't want to write a simple "combine old and new traditions" story in the vein of Same Day Delivery, since that kind of plot always feels impractical and reductive of the fullness of traditions to me. Instead, I wanted to focus on how past and present traditions were both legitimate cultural expressions of the same underlying values, and that these values are what fundamentally provide continuity across time. At the root of it, I really just wanted to write out an essay on this kind of thing and had to bend a story around it.
>>41806085You pulled it off with flying colors. I was fully prepared for Somnambula to start belting out thousand-old lyrics and performing her people's (ponies'?) native dance for the sake of MVH TRADITION, but having Pinkie recontextualize all that seemingly frivolous fun to help Somny understand how the spirit of the holiday lives on made for a far, far better story. And yeah, the ending was a little messy, but I think you earned it after all that tidy prose.
>>41805878>Zaid's offhand suggestion to include muh waifu.Flutters contributed a lot to the fic, and although she's not my favorite of the M6, I liked her in the fic so you've certainly done quite a bit right.>the melodrama would be received worseWell, it had good buildup, so I don't see why it would be!>I reckon I made the right decisionRegifting is also good. Despite what you might think, there's no Fluttercord in it.>>41805977>she was especially immature here. This seemed more like season 1 Twilight to meYou know, you're probably right. But I don't think I'm ever capable of lowering my opinion of the fic for having Twilight be too much like S1, so there's that.>>41806037>But a week from now I don't think I'll remember anything about it.You just don't seethe hard enough about the things you should. Jokes aside, this is a very forgettable fic, with really nothing memorable. The batponies with their cardinals and churches (and the bat pope) had some potential to be that thing, but even they just don't really get anything that memorable. Literally a single description of the setting and that's it.>This deserves more views and upvotes than SDD.For sure, but being upset about views is unfortunately not very productive. Especially on Jinglemas, where after the first two days the site is so oversaturated that you kind of need to be a Major Author to hit the box. It's the one disappointing thing about the event.>>41806078>being probably the worstTo be fair, being "the worst" in a really nice fic doesn't mean bad. It just means "less good than the great parts. At least for me; opinions may vary.>probably what I put the most thought intoAnd it was time well spent. I don't know how likely it is I'll ever use her anywhere, but if I do, I'm probably stealing this characterization. The lashing out part was I guess something that the show neither supports or dissuades you from; I didn't love it, but it didn't seem out of place, either. Such is the fate of characters with very thin canon presence.>emphasise how her element was fundamentally the same as Pinkie'sOh, highlighting the Elements and whatever-the-6-Heroes'-virtues-are-called was a clear part of the story, and I liked it. Again, it's super weird that the show never went there.
>>41805908>FoMEIf this is how quippy his style is, then I guess I just don't like his style. It really, really just does not flow very well. Not poorly enough for a dislike, though. >S9Nope! Although Cheese Sandwich really does occupy a unique category for me; he's grated on me ever since I watched his first episode as a ten-year-old. (I realised the "grate" pun after making it, and I suppose that was another pun just now, huh? This is part of the reason why I hate him.) I really doubt I wouldn't pick this out as the worst issue even if I were more aware of the S9 stuff. >S7 CelestiaI'm halfway ... almost halfway through season 6, alright? Anyway, I don't dislike the more hoofs-off or cynical Celestia. I just hated how hard she was pushing the Twicord shipping. The idea seems foreign even to Discord himself before Celestia pokes at him enough to start seriously considering it. >Salvation AviationI agree that the prose suffered from inconsistent quality in certain places. It was also the last fic I read, coming off of Great and Powerful, so I was probably biased in its favour on that point, as well. >>41805994Everything comes down to execution, doesn't it? >>41806037>a week from now I don't think I'll remember anything about itIt's been about 24 hours and I keep having to remind myself that "it was the one with the batponies". Other than the baps, I don't think it had much going for it. >Present VirtuesThanks! Like I said before, I had a lot of freedom with Somnambula to emphasise her similarity to Pinkie, but Pinkie herself also has a lot of depth beyond "comic relief" that a more refined character like Somnambula can really bring out. "Spend time with ponies just like you, and watch your spirits rise" and all that.
>>41805689------ SDD>chiroptera>>>cheese niggerkek, I was expecting gummy or something>"Twilight, I know the important rocks when I see them."Eh, it's alright. Bats living in the crystal mines is neat. a decent amount of typos tho and it really is an 'everycreature' type of story.------ RegiftingA kino fic, but why the fuck did no one except discord care that Twilight was going to suffer in the depths of chaos for hundreds of years? Celestia practically wanted it to happen. Good Discord though.>Sparklepig >an ai music box >a small book titled 'Discord's Mind'god tier scene with fluttershy giggling and taking back the book to read a random page>not the firstKino>EVERYPONY OUT I HAVE TO TALK TO THE UNFUNNY MARE ON STAGEkekI really liked this one and pretty much the only thing I didn't like was celestia for some reason wanting to throw Twilight into warhammer40k tier chaos so she can suffer just so Discord can have a 'better' friend or something wild.------ Present VirtuesHoly purple. I had to reread the first few paragraphs because I wasn't expecting that. It certainly utilizes words in a far more artistic way than any of the other fics. Aside from that though, eh, it's alright. I felt that both Som's and Pinkie's expectations and persuasions felt lacking. I like how Som is almost afraid of the hedonism, but then she starts talking about how we should all be sucking Twilight's royal cock and not making her work with the commoners which pretty much pivoted her argument into 'actually only the royals are supposed to be hedonistic' which is retarded. Meanwhile Pinkie didn't really convince me of anything at all. All the other scenes besides the debate were pleasant though. And I had a dagoth ur flashback when she said "But what of the traditional fast? Ponies have long restrained their appetites during the holy time in memory of the tribes" ------ GaPT,ONOWritten fine, but a pain to read trixie being as much of a nigger as ever but being an old mare who can't match her old performances. I couldn't really even relate to Twilight much because it was just too pathetic to read about the performance. Also Twilight should've just kicked the prince nigger out/ never invited him in the first place. And I have a hard time wrapping my head around the relationship. Did they get married the same fucking night in Las pegasus? If they were never a match for each other at any point in time then how did they end up married for 2 years?------ SalvaviationDamn that hit me in the feels. This one and the Discord one are definitely my favorites. This one's energy was very different from the rest and I think it pulled it off as good as you could've with the wordcount. Makes me wish Pinkie and Fluttershy would fly into my room and tell me I'm not a failure either ^:')
>>41806107>Somnambula to start belting out thousand-old lyrics and performing her people's (ponies'?) native dance for the sake of MVH TRADITIONUnlike black Americans, Somnambula really wuz Egyptians n shiet>>41806129>But I don't think I'm ever capable of lowering my opinion of the fic for having Twilight be too much like S1, so there's that.Ugh, I inadvertently complained about season 1 (best, most-sassiest) Twilight. Maybe if I retroactively say she's more like Lesson Zero Twi...>batponies with their cardinals and churches (and the bat pope) I did like the Catholic (or possibly Anglican) bat Church. Twilight's comment about Luna not discouraging her own worship as much as she could have was a nice touch, and the removable glowing stars in the ceiling of the cathedral still stand out to me. The fic really wasn't bad when it tried to be more creative. Maybe the author was just participating in Jinglemas for the sake of it? >being upset about views is unfortunately not very productiveBelieve me, I'm not upset about getting fewer views than an author from 2011 who already has 2300 followers; it's just the way of things. I still have about a 1:5 like:view ratio, which is pretty good in my opinion. I might have even hit the box if it weren't Jinglemas. >I'm probably stealing this characterizationSomething to note is that, at least in the Middle East several thousand years ago, the relationship between a guest and a host was actually extremely important (or so I've heard). Being the guest of a powerful person was a very great honour, and proper hospitality was central to social relations. You can actually see this in a lot of biblical stories, although much of the significance is lost on modern audiences. Think about all the parables about guests being served, or invited inside, or being moved up or down a table. This is part of the reason why I showed Somnambula trying to show such formal manners, since from her perspective, being the personal guest of royalty was probably the highest honour she could receive.
>>41805689>On one hand, this reads like a fine SoL fic, and I liked it for that. I didn't laugh or anything ([Comedy] strikes again)kek, agreed. I think maybe the best part was the (good)world building, but also haberverse as you said which also removed from the world building>This one's great! Probably the best of the setagreed for sure, but also salviation. Which is ok because they're so different.>For starters, characterizations. Everypony is pretty on-point here. Agreed except Celestia. the other 3 characters were very very good>Listen to the other people, not me, since this is the exact kind of fic that shows that [Comedy] is not my cup of tea.Yeah listen to me: Trixie is a nigger.>E-rated ficwtf didn't even see that. T for sure on this one>>41805691>And this fic? Yep, it's got some pretty wordsagreed>The part where she kind of rants for several pages of dialogue was my least favorite moment of the story ... but it wasn't bad, eitheragreed>I liked this one. I wouldn't want to get this promptYeah, this one seemed like the hardest one to pull off, but I think they nailed it>>41805777>(Pinkie and Cheese Sandwich are married, instant 0/10)Yup>harder to follow what was honestly a pretty simple story. The actual plot wasn't badAgreed, this story honestly reads better if you skim it and block out the shit parts>he's done very well here. He's not nearly as annoying as usual, sure; but more than that, his motivations are sympathetic to the viewer.Agreed and yeah it was unexpected for discord to straight up be the good guy and the voice of reason. Meanwhile Celestia the almost antagonist>Celestia was also obnoxious with her Twicord shipping. It felt totally out of place and didn't contribute anythingFor sure, she played no role in the fic, he went to her for help and she said 'but it would be funni' he should've just gone to Luna after that. Surely Luna would like to try to save Twilight's life since celestia didn't>endingyeah, it was quite abrupt, but not wholly bad>>41805845>every character BUT Twilight seems to have been written to be deliberately irritatingYeah that was a big part of this fic for sure. We were being forced onto Twilight's team because literally everyone around her was retarded, including her past self>and I don't think it even had anything to do with Hearth's Warming.Wait wtf, you're definitely right. I didn't even think about that. I don't even think they mention a time of year. Wild.>but it's probably my least favourite fic this week on narrative alone.Yeah, this then SDD for me were lacking>Lightning Dust's parents' diner was bittersweet>Salvation Aviators were very nice to read>I had a really good time with this ficAbsolutely. A bittersweet story as you said, but with very nice and comfy Shy and Ponk interactions to prevent the story from just trying to crush the reader>(yay!)explains why you said SAVI had the best prose, it was definitely good but I think yours was the standout
>>41805908>Besides, it'd be really fucking weird to be the first person to dislike the highest-rated Jinglemas 2024 fic.wtf, honestly maybe should've been lowest of the 5 we just read>Deciding ponies' fates like that seemed a little too calculating at first, but she already did that to Twilight in the show itself, so it tracks.Seems like a lot of effort to make her an alicorn just to throw her in the chaos blender at literally the first chance she gets>>41806078>I'm really glad Somnambula's (and that name is a finger-twister to type so much) characterisation came across well, especially her out-of-time-ness; that's probably what I put the most thought intoSom and your writing were definitely the highlights of the fic. Also it was very very Hearthswarming based, perhaps the most out of all of them.>Considering her background as an associate of the prince of not-Egypt and the time period she's from, I tried to make her very comfortable with noble protocol and etiquette.Ah, that explains that part of her argument>>41806143>he's grated on me ever since I watched his first episode as a ten-year-oldkek, congrats on being able to drink (or about to be) I was about to say you shouldn't be posting here and then I looked at what year it was>It's been about 24 hours and I keep having to remind myself that "it was the one with the batponies". Other than the baps, I don't think it had much going for it.Same honestly. The good parts were the bat world-building, but nothing terribly new and even if I directly thought about something from this fic I would never actually remember this fic,>>41806189>the removable glowing stars in the ceiling of the cathedral still stand out to meexactly like this lol. I'd probably just assume it came from some Luna centric fic>This is part of the reason why I showed Somnambula trying to show such formal manners, since from her perspective, being the personal guest of royalty was probably the highest honour she could receive.Ah, well all this behind the scenes from you has actually helped my opinion of her argument so that's good
>>41805849Well I just read the salvation army's history page and while pretty kino, it doesn't actually have anything to do with germany. I think that pegasus was just german for some reason. Which is fine.
>>41806150Thanks. While it wasn't the easiest thing to write, I'm grateful for the prompt making me dip my toes into drama.>wish Pinkie and Fluttershy would fly into my room and tell me I'm not a failure either ^:')Me too, nonny ;c;>>41806189While we're being /pol/, it's a little funny you described my fic as having a Christian moral, considering...>>41806290I was inspired by how the Army takes in people from all places and walks of life. Plus, it gave Ponk a chance to show off her knowledge of Ponesylvania Dutch.
>>41806143>he's grated on me ever since I watched his first episodeI'm not too fond of him, but it's rare to see americans who dislike the weird Al pony. Subjectively speaking, the CheesePie stuff in S9 is a little forced, but it's not handled as badly. Ahuizotl (the '800 years of sweltering heat' guy) gets the crown for the worst reformation in the show, and ATP is the episode with a lot of extremely OOC behavior and with animation looking like picrel on multiple occasions. And the author intentionally referenced these moments of the show without it being story-relevant, just for the sake of the reference alone.>The idea seems foreign even to DiscordDon't act like Celestia didn't know what she was doing. Discord briefly entertains the idea (as a "joke") before Celly mentions it, and I thought the story seemed to at least imply possible Twicord in the future.>It was also the last fic I readIt's relevant, yes. For me, reading Regifted after FoME's fic made me appreciate its "season 9" story a lot more than normal.>>41806150>Celestia practically wanted it to happenSee below (you probably did), but she apparently thought that it's acceptable and possibly worth the result.>so she can sufferThe "suffer" part is greatly exaggerated by Discord. Actual suffering is short; the bigger problem is the insanity before she'd stabilize. To be fair, Celestia did say that Discord could help her through the process. Again, that cat example I mentioned. This is literally her logic.>Present VirtuesYeah, I started the fic, read the first few lines, and already knew we're in for a good time.>GaPTYou know? This is the fic that made me understand how you see Trixie all the time. Could've been the first Trixie story where I didn't especially like Trixie.>>41806189>comment about Luna not discouraging her own worship as much as she couldOh yeah, that was neat! Shame the fic only has a few of those "oh, that's neat!" moments.>I might have even hit the box if it weren't Jinglemas. You probably would've, and so would most other thread anons (all our fics ended up with relatively similar scores/ratios/likes), It's just the way of 2025's fimfic that a small author has to make it to the bin to get any real likes, and Jinglemas makes that kind of super hard after day 1. It's understandable: if you want to read a fic and an author you liked just posted one, of course that's what you'll pick.>This is part of the reason why I showed Somnambula trying to show such formal mannersThat's legitimately good to know, and it does explain a lot about her stance in the argument.
>>41806200>agreed for sure, but also salviation.I'd put the three stories fairly close, and you can't go wrong with the order there. Then there's a Mariana-Trench-sized gap, and the two "comedy" fics.>reads better if you skim it and block out the shit partsThat's not a compliment, kek.>Surely Luna would like to try to save Twilight's life.Going to Tia makes sense, but yes, Luna would've been far more helpful, given that she's friends with Twi. Apparently Celestia has bigger fish to fry than keeping her successor an equine. But I don't hate this slightly chessmaster'y, almost ruthless Celestia as long as she has good intentions for her actions. Which, in this fic, she does.>>ending>yeah, it was quite abruptThe author said the story started scaling out of Jinglemas word limits. I think he had to cut it short and that's why the ending is what it is. Twilight completely changing so fast, the Twicord shipping not really going anywhere (especially the "Discord asking Twilight out" bit that was foreshadowed THRICE) — it all points to this story originally being at least twice as long before the author realized he has to pivot to a different ending to write it on time.>everyone around her was retarded[Comedy]>yours was the standoutAgreed. I really enjoyed the writing style.>>41806267>should've been lowest of the 5 we just readYeah. Paying too much attention to ratings is not a good way to go about things, but the 0 (ZERO) dislikes on this is crazy when most of the completely inoffensive stories with a tenth of this one's views get one or two.>a lot of effortWell, it's not wasted effort if she learned from it, is it? She can probably formally make Glimmer the next Twilight (wow!).>good parts were the bat world-buildingAny opportunity to celebrate bat ponies is okay in my book! Even in a mediocre fic.>>41806333 (also checked!)>dramaBeing forced to write what you haven't (yet) is part of the fun in this event, imo. The mix of drama and SoL in your fic was good; much better than most people's first time writing drama. Or even the twentieth time for many.
>>41806596>0 (ZERO) dislikes on thisAbout that...
>>41806037>SalvaviationOkay, I found time to read this one. Wow! That was better than I expected. It felt Christmas-y and not just Hearth's Warming-y. I liked the characterization of Lightning Dust. She's broken not because someone pushed her down but because she understands who she was and feels regret. While I realize this is a one-shot never to be continued, LD here has a depth of character that I'd enjoy seeing explored.
Hancock crossover fic when?
>>41806745my hand crosses over with my cock on an hourly basis.
Read Mare that Lived in the MoonThe romance part was kind of the weakest bit
>>41806796That's how it is with dykefics.
>>41806796The author was going for a classic medieval romance atmosphere, but the fic does indeed struggle with delivering it well. It's not great, but I didn't think it was too bad; the presence of some extremely OOC characters (Pinkie and Fluttershy are pretty much OCs, beyond what the AU tag allows for) and some far-too-human elements (especially allusions to religion) were a bigger issue with the otherwise nice story.
>>41806150>so she can suffer just so Discord can have a 'better' friend or something wildCelestia wants Twicord to happen at any cost. Honestly, it's kind of smart; in the best case, it neutralises Discord permanently and makes an omnipotent chaos spirit out of Celestia's most loyal subject. >Holy purpleI thought you'd like purple, considering your flag ^:). In all seriousness, though, I'm glad to get some pushback on that front. >Som is almost afraid of the hedonismYeah! She's afraid that Equestria has fallen into decadence. >it was just too pathetic to read about the performanceIt was really painful reading Trixie getting brutalised, especially when Twilight starts swinging her around like a club. Really, the author swings every character around like a club for the most blunt comedy imaginable. >Twilight should've just kicked the prince nigger outThis. There's so much posturing from both sides, and not even diplomatic posturing. If the problem is that the griffons think they can take advantage of Equestria, just tell them to fuck off and be done with it. >I think it pulled it off as good as you could've with the wordcountIt's really well done, how much he fits into so few words while still feeling totally complete. >>41806200>reads better if you skim it and block out the shit partsYeah, it's somewhat nice that all the shitty bits are one-off mentions at most. >Surely Luna would like to try to save Twilight's lifeWould loved to have seen best princess taking initiative and cleaning up her sister's mess. With how well this Discord was written, I think there could have been some really neat dynamics. >very nice and comfy Shy and Ponk interactions to prevent the story from just trying to crush the readerI know! It strikes a great balance. >it was definitely good but I think yours was the standoutAw, thank you (:^.
>>41806267>should've been lowest of the 5 we just readFor sure, but that's what the legacy writer advantage gets you. >kek, congrats on being able to drink (or about to be)Not two weeks left! >spoilerThe future is now, old man (:^:). >all this behind the scenes from you has actually helped my opinionWell it's not actually in the story, so your initial impression is still valid. >>41806290>I think that pegasus was just german for some reasonI think it was a reading comprehension issue on my part, since I thought for some reason that there were multiple German pegasi. >>41806333Checked, also>I'm grateful for the prompt making me dip my toes into drama.You've got some talent, anon! Out of all the fics this week, yours and the Discord one were the only two to make me feel emotions. >Christian moralsYou don't have to be of a particular religion to appreciate its morals, and not that they're unique to a certain religion, for that matter. I only said that about morals because it's very common to see similar themes in other Christian stories. >>41806586>it's rare to see americans who dislike the weird Al ponyI don't really care about real weird Al, so the fact that Cheese Sandwich is voiced by a celebrity means nothing to me, especially to 10-year-old me who didn't know who weird Al was. >I thought the story seemed to at least imply possible Twicord in the future.That's exactly my issue, though; same as Twiflag. Discord was idly fantasising, but Celestia wanted to play Cupid. >This is the fic that made me understand how you see Trixie all the time. Oh, this perspective helps me understand Twiflag, too. >Shame the fic only has a few of those "oh, that's neat!" moments.We were really deprived of Luna this week. >a small author has to make it to the bin to get any real likesThe upside, I'm assuming, is that it's easier to get to the bin in general. It was a little disappointing to see the box fics be mostly holdovers from day one through most of Jinglemas, though.
>>41806836I was more interested in them fighting for Pinkies rights and getting her out from under Horse Edison's abusive care than anything else. That or them implementing child labor laws
>>41806586>the CheesePie stuff in S9 is a little forced,Who else is the fucking bugs bunny horse going to fuck besides Weird Al?
>>41807062Me.
>>41807066You're too normal to entice either of them.
>>41807062Copper Plume the CheesePie commissioning cuck guy
>>41807072>It took Copper Plume a long time to get over his and Pinkie Pie’s breakup - a small part of him still hasn’t. But he would never allow himself to be bitter over it, and he was glad that Pinkie eventually found true happiness with Cheese Sandwich. And he had to admit… they made a cute couple, and Lil’ Cheese was pretty adorable.
>>41805689>The FoME OneIt is indeed a FoME fic. Meaning it's pretty good, but not too great. But you don't need greatness in a Jinglemas shortfic. It does have what I'd expect from his work, meaning some downright great bits of worldbuilding or wordplay (Canterburied is a 9/10 pun) woven into a narrative that's just alright. I liked it, and as always he's got a good grasp on the characters, though I did find it kind of strayed from its intended pairing a bit at times. Still, bats are nice, and the humour is rather to my liking.>RegiftingThis fic is a great example into how "proofreading" is not restricted to grammar check, because by goodness is it bad on that front. Repetition, one instance of characters speaking in the same paragraph, and a general lack of polish all around. It's a good fic underneath that, though, mostly. The core plot is solid and the background isn't dragged on too much, it actually gets to things instead of beating you over the head with foreshadowing too long. My main gripe would be how the character voices don't quite work for me. They feel rather forced most of the time. Not a bad story though, and the music box was really cute.>Comeback TourDiscount Aragon. Which isn't necessarily a bad thing, because Aragon is good, but while I enjoyed this one I still had my gripes with it. Trixie and Twi as exes work great and I'm a sucker for the kind of raunchy comedy bits this throws in, but tonally it feels all over the place. I'm thankful it established the catbird wasn't actually killed, just severely injured, but I still think a lot of it feels like it needed to be longer, especially everything concerning the griffon himself, and some bits feel crammed in for the sake of infodumping. Though it's good info. The characters feel just a bit off, too, even accounting for the timeskip. Good enough, and less problematic than SS, but not quite there for me when Evil exists.>PresentBest fic out of the lot, probably. I really like both the styles, and the way the fic alternates them based on perspective. The core conflict was also good and well executed, and it felt like the character development had the proper time to breathe. Spot on Pinkie Pie too, and Somnambula was great, and bonus point for a Jinglemas fic that sticks so tightly to being about interaction between its given couple. Great core message and a surprisingly well done landing at the end.>SalvationAnother really good one, despite being untagged AU. Gold has made some great strides as a writer in a short time. At points a little too early fandom in the wrong way for my tastes, but it's got great characters, a nice message, and a lot of really great bits of interwoven fluff which I really appreciate in a fic, some of which surprisingly contribute to the story (like the Wonderbolt plushie). Definitely one fic I'd recommend to people and one that went tragically under the radar. I may have to steal some of the comedy bits for myself if I ever write more fluff again.
>>41807101Still a better love story than The Mare Who Once Lived On the Moon
>>41805689>picThem.>frustratingCope and seethe, Darling.>Probably the bestNot with that writing quality.>characterizationsTwipig best character.>a good Discord ought to be pretty highYou would love The Archetypist. (You would hate The Archetypist).>clean writingI know I'm eight hours late but do you smell toast?>Twilight's first appearance is her screaming obscenities into a pillowAt Trixie, so entirely deserved.>Royal Game WardenI had the exact same thought.>Trixie can make a crass sex joke in one scene only to not know what 'courtship ritual' meansThat's the point, though. She's only in it at the base level.>EWait, it's E? It ought to be T, someone ping the writer.>>41805691>picThem.>rants for several pagesI do wish the fic actually articulated the "this is the bountiful future you wished for" that so clearly underpins the conflict, which you can safely do in a ponyfic because Equestria lacks real world inequalities, but leaving it implied was fine too.>Somnambula being good at dodgingThat is nice.>I wouldn't want to get this promptI would. I'd have certainly preferred it to the Nyx one I slithered my way out of in guise of martyrdom.>Based, dare I say!Two exclamation marks in two sentences is a certified crime against misery so I'll make sure to get to the Isekai proofreading soon. After the Cygnet sidequel.>phallic descriptionsThat stood out to you more than the coke joke? I suppose you are a Rarity fan, after all.>VotingJingle all the way.>EQGYou will read the EQG fic and you will like it. And by like I mean you will find it okay at best but still passable.>>41805776It is.>>41805777Checked.>the most egregious example of whichMistaking comedy for bad prose does your opinion no favours.>Beyond the Veil of MidI suppose they do both lean towards a more heavily religious society for leatherwings.>hintsI would hardly call blaring sirens hints.>She just can't take a hint and has to stomp over everypony's boundariesWhich is a canon flaw she has.>the resolution was very abruptI think it was fine, I was more bothered by the poor correlation leading up to the solution.>good styleI feel like I'm taking crazy pills.>>41805845>written to be deliberately irritatingWhich they were. Yeah. That's the point. The guards are deliberately incompetent, the reporters deliberately annoying, the griffon deliberately slimy, and Trixie deliberately Trixie.>His plans are messy and irrationalPart of it is on purpose to show he's an idiot, but the fic definitely has some logical issues, as you pointed out.>anything to do with Hearth's WarmingNot actually a requirement as per the official rules. You did read the rules, right? Encouraged, of course, but not binding.>I don't care what anyone thinksI think most people also like her, which is why Hasbro messily shoved her in the comics. You think they would have learned the audience took well to rival characters after Trixie.
>>41806796I don't think the Tuna was the weakest part of TWOLOT, although I wish it were better. The weakest part of that fic surely has to be "Fluttershy."I think there was a whole chapter where Luna wasn't mentioned at all, but once Twilight got to the moon, there was a lot of enjoyable stuff, even on top of the smooching.There's very little of anything good to be found in the orphanage plot.
Hey tunafag, what fics have your favorite characterizations of Luna? I think I may have asked you this exact question before but I couldn’t find it on desuarchive.
>>418072649DD, Apotheosis & Triptych, Cuori Intrecciati are definitely at the top.Also excellent: DoWaS and Wyrmlysan, although the latter is on the way to NMM.I want to say she's probably pretty good in The Immortal Game, but it's been too long since I read it.She's really excellent in a lot more fics, even if she shows up just briefly, that's just a part of being the best pony.
>>41807262There's implications of scootadopt.
>>41805845>Things any other anons relate toYou weren't caught writing clop at your desk, I hope.>ChristianIronic.>snippets of GermanAnd Yiddish. If you've been in the thread long enough you can tell where this would be going if Gold showed less restraint.>I'm actually the author of this ficWell, good to separate the art from the artist, as always. One more name for the list, at least.>>41805878>What a lovely ficI know it's brainrot talking but this paragraph is so GPTcoded it hurts me on a spiritual level.>>41805908>picYou can just tell this artist draws abuse porn.>he's doing it on purposeFoME tends to write very in-the-canon-moment fics even when he doesn't like everything said canon entails. I don't think it's a bad choice in the context of the event because assuming current show state is a safer bet than hitting someone with a wild, near AU premise.>she already did that to Twilight in the show itselfThe temptation to make this about my longfic.>go the MCA routeMore stories should go the MCA route. More stories need a dream flash forward to a post apocalyptic setting. I may be a total fangirl for MCA and one day I will steal from it almost as hard as it steals from Eva.>I'd put Regifting above thisSaying this in the context of poor writing is insane.>>41805977>I think she's probably the single character whom Twilight would actually listen to if told to stopThe first thing Twilight does in the show is not stop after Celestia told her to.>she was especially immature hereYeah, the Chaos Realm'll do that to you. It's drawing out her base instincts after the first time she was there.>>41805994A lack of reaction when you cram stuff in may be an issue of size.>>41806037>FoME has a floor of quality that he always achievesGood way of putting it. I do wish he tried his hand at something grander at some point. I should blackmail him into doing it.>This deserves more views and upvotesThat's a dangerous line of thinking.>>41806078>Considering her background as an associate of the prince of not-Egypt and the time period she's fromSomnambula cosmic horror filed away for later consideration.>lash outIt didn't feel like lashing out, and certainly not unjustified.>Anons shouldn't be left outThank you for joining me in ritually torturing the Rariflag.>>41806085>Dust turned on the waterworks at the very endThat did feel a bit sudden and far out for sure.>the beginning was a little purpleThat was the best part.>>41806107>with flying colorsRainbowDashNod.gif to a fellow FiW referencer.>>41806129>really nothing memorableCanterburied. A few other tidbits were neat, too.>It's the one disappointing thing about the eventWhich is why it used to be a big anthology fic before the mods threw a shitfit and ruined everything, in the most deliberately malicious way possible.>very thin canon presenceI suppose you prefer thick, weighty characters like Rarity.
>>41806862>omnipotentThe fic does put severe restrictions on his powers, actually.>glad to get some pushback on that frontwtf no, that's good purple!>blunt comedykek>how well this Discord was writtenWould you believe it's the same guy known for his pansexual Discord? (no, he did not mean kitchenware, sadly)>We were really deprived of Luna this week. There's no Luna in the next 2 weeks, either. I might have to vote for something afterwards to fix this problem.>easier to get to the bin in generalYeah, but "in general" specifically doesn't cover "during Jinglemas and the last week of 1k contest".>>41807112Good to see you posting; someone needed to defend those two comedies at least a little.>>Regifting>general lack of polishIt's really not that bad. I saw an error or two, but that was also true for almost every other fic on the list. Repetition in a few spots, yeah, but when you start pointing out stuff like a single instance of 2 chars in 1 paragraph, the fic must've already passed the good enough bar. None of the fics this week had subpar writing.>character voices don't quite work for meI liked them. There's a lot of mixing and matching characterizations from various parts of the show, but I can totally get behind that if it makes you write more interesting stories.>>Tour>tonally it feels all over the placeIt's an E fic with sex jokes and (barely averted) implied murder. Duh. And I disliked the characters here more than in the other four fics, but that might be the evil specter of comedy.>>Present>Best fic out of the lot, probably.I promised myself to be more critical about the thread anon fics to balance out potential circlejerking, but if this wasn't written by an anon, I would probably call it such.>>Salvation>too early fandom in the wrong way for my tastesDo you mean Inkie? Absolutely wrong opinion, by the way.>one that went tragically under the radarThe thing that surprised me the most is the ration, and the 2 dislikes. Who out there presses the red button on a story like this? You may not love it and that's fine, but I genuinely cannot understand the thought process.>>41807244>Twipig best character.I don't think I said it yet, but Regifting is also the strong contender for the most fun fic of the bunch. That or Gold's, but this one's humor was much more to my liking than the three "comedies".>The Archetypist. Still on the list and I might just vote for it myself to rig it.>It ought to be T, someone ping the writer.Are you sure? There are many scenes that are so clearly T that I would say so, but a few seemed to be kept relatively tame and the only explanation that I can see is trying to keep it E for some reason.>I'd have certainly preferred it to the Nyx one I slithered my way out ofYou can get prompts for fanon characters from longfics? That's rough.>You will read the EQG ficLooks like we will. On the bright side, this will 100% be the best eqgfic the bookclub has ever read.
>>41806143>as a ten-year-oldThe young age does excuse the stupidity somewhat.>Everything comes down to execution, doesn't it?Especially the blades.>>41806150>Celestia practically wanted it to happenCelestia is used to her loved ones suffering for a long while, and she'd coped herself into thinking it's worth it for benefits down the line.>kekIronically I think I liked the humour in this one better than the drama.>I had to reread the first few paragraphsUnsurprising.>words words wordsTwiflag moment, reading comprehension, etc.>Did they get married the same fucking night in Las pegasus?It's a thing people do.>Makes me wish Pinkie and Fluttershy would fly into my room and tell me I'm not a failure either ^:')As long as it's not AJ, you may have a chance.>>41806200>but it would be funniI think she was playing him, on some level. By forcing him to confront the idea of letting Twilight turn, and admitting why that's bad, she forces him to acknowledge his own past. She didn't expect Twilight to sneak in behind their backs.>bittersweetThat doesn't mean what you think it means and definitely doesn't apply to SA's ending.>>41806862>it's kind of smartMorally Grey Celestia my beloved I need to write more of Twilight punishing you and then feeling remorseful.Also I think it was your fic that mentioned Twi as the newest Princess which is just wrong and DYEWTS bàka? If it wasn't you pretend I'm addressing the actual author it's intended for.>>41806867>(:^:)Spidercorn emoji.>Celestia wanted to play CupidWell, Twilight took her job, it's only right for her to take Cadence's.>>41807062>Who else is the fucking bugs bunny horse going to fuck besides Weird Al?Rainbow Dash. Also everyone she pleases, but specifically Rainbow Dash.No replies- ah, there we go.>>41807465>I might have to vote for something afterwards to fix this problemYou know what fic has Luna in it?>It's really not that badIt really is and I may post examples later.>Do you mean Inkie?Not exclusively and not primarily.>Who out there presses the red button on a story like this?Lightning's hot haters, and the author too. I'm sure you know what causes the latter.>Regifting is also the strong contender for the most fun fic of the bunchProbably true, even if it's the median in quality.>Still on the list and I might just vote for it myself to rig itYou hate yourself more than I hate you.>Are you sure?Profanity and broken bones are more than enough to land it there, even if you ignored the sex jokes and open talk of death.>You can get prompts for fanon characters from longfics?Very very rarely, to the point where I never added a Will Not Write to my message (we've never gotten an anon fic, I believe). I will be including one next year in accordance to the new rules.>this will 100% be the best eqgfic the bookclub has ever readWorse than MCA though.
>>41807244>I feel like I'm taking crazy pills.Don't you usually do that?>after TrixieTrixie is such a better character, though. Worse, as well. You simply can't not love her.>>41807355>You can just tell this artist draws abuse porn.Unlike some people, I don't make it a habit to look up abuse porn.>I don't think it's a bad choice in the context of the eventBut the thing is, half of these references add nothing to the story, other than referencing something that's almost objectively bad. Some parts of S9 are controversial, but I don't think anyone defends Ahuizotl's redemption, not even "redeem everyone" crowd that I'm somewhat partial to. All it would take to establish the fic's "when" is one of those, and then the rest was unnecessary. Just putting Twi on the throne and saying she's still adjusting is enough.>I may be a total fangirl for MCAIt's a very good fic to be obsessed about. Well, other than that random eqg chapter.>CanterburiedThe bats were neat, but the fic blitzes past them in such a hurry that you almost wonder if he just wanted to get the idea out there and skip to the ending. I would've liked the fic more if we got more bats instead of random S9 cameos.>>41807493>I think I liked the humour in this one better than the drama.Part of why this one's so good is that it has both humor and drama that are pretty good.>Morally Grey Celestia my belovedIt's a nice take on the character. I usually prefer the benevolent goddess Celestia, but it's good that someone recognizes that this Celestia was not a bad part of the fic.>Twi as the newest PrincessThis is true in some of the better timelines. Not the best ones, because 4 alicorns is still 1.5 too many, but alas.>No replies- ah, there we go.Posting on Sunday night tends to do that.>You know what fic has Luna in it?Oh goddess. Don't tell me you put that *thing* into your eqg fic. Please no.>I'm sure you know what causes the latter.I may be naive, ignorant, or both, but I don't. Obviously the author can often see his work in the worst light imaginable (and I tend to go through that phase for every fic I write, usually after finishing but before publishing), but if you care about quality even a little bit, then you're definitely improving the site's average with every story you post and that's just a fact.>You hate yourself more than I hate you.I kind of loved the A Once and Future Darkness from him. I know that Archetypist is very contentious, but so was that Lunafic, and I expect it to hit at least some of that story's highs, and therefore I will probably like it.
>Google docs says "nodded uncertainly" should be "modded uncertainty" I hate gemini
>>41807533So just as a quick a side concerning Regifting, we have>repeated words in the long description >asterisks for emphasis >sounded/sounding just two words apart >constant pronoun confusion, with the pig being both it and she in one sentence and Discord himself being inconsistent (and not in the fun Discord way) later on>misused punctuation when it comes to speech tags>three mentions of the chest having hinges in 7 sentences (two or which are three words long in total) And much more if you continue past the first 1000 words. You need to be blind not to see how terribly this needed another pass. Most first drafts I've seen read better than this on many fronts.>Don't you usually do that?I had to stop after I hit 130 bpm at rest.>TrixieTrixie is great (and powerful), yes.>I don't make it a habit to look up abuse pornIt's the fluff and the starry mane. Very qd coded.>>CanterburiedI literally meant the name, but the contents of the place are neat too.>It's a nice take on the characterYou would have such mixed feelings about Behemoth.>4 alicornsWe're up to 6 and a half, old mare. Though if you only count the ones in the mortal realms then it's just 1.5, I suppose. Still, I like Flurry. And not just for the reasons you're thinking of.>Don't tell me you put that *thing* into your eqg ficNot the Trixie one (although this did make me realise I'd accidentally undertagged it). I was referring to either Archetypist, Isekai, or Behemoth, depending on where I decided to take the joke.>I may be naive, ignorant, or both, but I don'tHe's the number 1 producer of posts you need to look up on Desu ITT. I'm not saying for certain it's that, but it wouldn't surprise me if at least one person did a round on all his stuff in retaliation. In fact, the way both his other fics were hit by three downvotes on the exact same date, much after publication, is a pretty good indicator that he's drawn someone's petty ire.>I will probably like itI personally found it an 8/10, but I say it with complete honesty that if you *like* it (not leave a like on it, not rate it highly, not argue it's good, not enjoy parts or concepts or themes in it, not like the fic it could have been, but actively wholly like it as it is on a personal level) then I'm enlisting you as proofreading help for SI.
>>41807533You should post the full list of fics we're reading this week.>GAPT2Oddly fitting Captcha.
Tell me about Arddun Lleuad and its sequel. Reading the descriptions, it seems like blandest, dumbest HiE slop imaginable. It's also incomplete so from what I heard the sequel enbs abruptly on a depressing note. But also from what I heard, allegedly it's supposed to be REALLY fucking well-written?
How big would you say a four year old filly would be? Housecat sized?
>>41807892Newborn foals are canonically bigger than cats. DYEWTS?
>>41807892Big enough.
>>41807903Not my cat.
>>41807942Mr. Tyson...
>>41807892Like a foot and a half tall? In season 4 episode 19 “for whom the sweetie belle toils” we get a model of sweetie when she just turned 5 and some other foals probably about the same age. Depending on the scene the normal female pony model (rarity) seem 2-2.5x taller then the little ones. And the fanon/canon consensus is that they’re between 3-4 feet tall, right? Was there ever a consensus on that?
>>41807722>quick a sideKek. Carefully looking at it again, it doesn't look so great on a technical level, but I had no problems following it and hardly noticed them on my first read. If reading it felt better than it seems to be written, then possibly the writing is good in other aspects that cover its flaws somewhat, similar to how divisive Austreoh was, where some anons were bothered more by the errors than others.>Trixie is great (and powerful), yes.Finally. A good character that you like. Celestia also counts, I guess.>You would have such mixed feelings about Behemoth.Not having read it, I am still confident in saying that it's an understatement.>I'm not saying for certain it's that,I don't think so; that's too much of old news. He got those dislikes back when he was actively spamming the thread on a daily basis. For example, itt we've only had one pornpost that I saw so far. Running into someone so incredibly obsessed as to waste his own time stalking a random small author just to dislike his new fic every 10 months on release feels unlikely.>that if you *like* itAh, so it is an insanity test. Good to know beforehand.>>41805691>>41807817Okay, I already posted it last thread, but those are the fics for the next week:https://www.fimfiction.net/story/569844/villa-ocasohttps://www.fimfiction.net/story/569316/shining-and-crews-most-eventful-hearths-warminghttps://www.fimfiction.net/story/568787/the-cold-wind-blowshttps://www.fimfiction.net/story/570169/beneath-the-northern-skieshttps://www.fimfiction.net/story/568876/backing-vocals
>>41807957Actually the consensus is that ponies are gigantic
>>41807957>Was there ever a consensus on that?I think so. 3-4 feet makes the most sense assuming the world around them is not weirdly downscaled for some reason, so that's how most people seem to draw them. You do run into an occasional pet-sized pony or a 6 feet non-alicorn mares, but I think that's usually a fetish thing.
>>41808017Fuck that pic game me feels.
>>41807112>Gold has made some great strides as a writer in a short time.Thanks. I'm still trying to find the right balance between making deadlines and writing great lines, so it's good to know I'm on the right track.>untagged AU>early fandomI deliberately wrote this fic with the mindset of "Wonderbolts Academy just dropped, let's live it up before we get Larson'd." Glad you disliked it!>the Wonderbolt plushieI'm still proud of sneaking in a plot-bearing SPH.>>41807465>Who out there presses the red button on a story like this?I wish I could say I was the only Jinglemas writer whose fic was double-downvoted 4noraisin, but it seems a good chunk of the entrants got hit. Wouldn't be the holiday season without some grumps, I suppose.
>>41806696>That was better than I expected.Th--Thanks.>It felt Christmas-y and not just Hearth's Warming-y.You can almost pinpoint the exact moment where I stopped listening to One More Day on repeat and put on a generic Christmas playlist.>a one-shot never to be continuedNo promises, but I did have a possible continuation in mind. For now, I've got smaller fish to fry.
>>41808043It always does for me.
>>41808715Self inserting as a faceless green abomination is a greater sign of subhumanity than self inserting as a pony.
Oh shit, the Chinese have fanfics too.>https://fimtale.com/zh-cn/t/70939?firstpageonly=1
>>41808734Deja vu, we were just talking about this in the alt site thread. That IS where you found this, riiiiiiight?
>>41808727Not being able to see him as an idea and a concept is even worse, however. Pics like this are where he belongs, ptfg.
>>41803626Real answer.>>41808727
>>41808740Nope. I went looking at the boorus for a picture I needed, saw a nice Flurry picture in the front page, clicked on it, looked at the artist tag, saw a picture of Flurry fighting a Sombra-aligned version of herself, read the description and it mentioned being fanart for that fic, so I googled it.
>>41808740You're thinking of https://clopfic.com, which is more focused on horsemeat.
>>41808741>reading comprehension
>>41808753There was no reason to bring up pony self inserts otherwise.The need to either ponify or humanize him is way worse than the originals, too. Pure, green, faceless anon is the highest level of abstraction. It falls apart when he becomes a generic self-insert like he always does on fimfic. Some AiE expert could confirm, but I don't even think fimfic's anon is green at this point in time.
>>41808765Anon. Reread the post. If someone says "eating shit is worse than drinking piss" and your conclusion is that they like piss you seriously need to reevaluate your communication skills.
>>41808802You should apply your own advice. Comparing OG green anon to pony transformation self-inserts can only stem from a total lack of understanding of what anon should be, which is what the replies tried to explain to you.
>>41808816The only thing Anon should be is erased.
>>41808752Huh, their porn is just like ours.>https://clopfic-com.translate.goog/?p=1595&_x_tr_sl=zh-CN&_x_tr_tl=en&_x_tr_hl=en&_x_tr_pto=wapp>The head of your cock is raised high, sliding against the soft side of her buttocks, which is pure bliss for you. You bite your lower lip to stifle a moan, and as her seductive ass is revealed to you, the dark side of your heart is fully exposed. Lifting your strong and powerful hooves, you stroke her sexy rear end and cutie mark, sending shivers down the mare's spine. Cloud Chaser's ass is strong yet soft, and the soft fur feels really good to the touch. For a mare who works out regularly, her ass still retains the subtle elasticity that every stallion loves, which is perfect. The faint moans and gasps from your partner boost your self-confidence and nourish the demons in your heart. You have always secretly wanted to do something to the mare in this position, and now that your confidence is at its peak, you take action.
>>41808734>Fimtale>ClopficAre Chinese clop better?
Who's a good fit for pony NL?
>pony NL
>>41809003The what?
>>41809245NL, but pony.
INFRA/Pony crossover
https://fimtale.com/statisticsDamn, fimtale is more active than fimfiction. They’ve had a little over 8000 stories posted in the past year while we’ve only had a little over 6000. If we take that as being representative of the size of the Chinese side of the fandom that means it’s not that much bigger. Only like what the western fandom was in 2020, just after g4 ended.
>>41809295China's getting new G4 merchandise for a reason.
>>41809295Skewed by the fact that they repost translations of English fics.
>>41809339Should we post translations of Chinese fics?
>>41809345I think it'd be funnier to write entirely original fics and just say they're translated from Chinese, Stalag-style.
>>41809345I tried looking for any especially good fics with their dogshit search filters and couldn’t find any.
>>41809358>>41809345Sadly you can't post other people's work on Fimmy barring very rare story transfer edge cases.
>>41809369So it's just like Fimfic.
>>41809295This combined with my fetish for Asian women may push me towards learning Chinese.
>>41809412Don’t you’ll regret it.https://youtu.be/7FBAKg7kCpk
>>41809416Some of that is universal, but China is a very specific mindset. I know a guy who was learning Chinese until he took a 2 month trip to China. Afterwards, he did finish learning the language, but did not want to ever have anything to do with the Chinese.
This is a neat fanfiction related video. https://youtu.be/ys_T7lyQIOw
>>41809398I guess they just don't want custom tags.
Do we add the newest Jinglefic to the third week?
>>41808752Is there cunny?
>>41809534I thought it was gonna be just going through the anon fics released in the last year
>>41809641???
>>41809644????
>>41809648?????
>>41809655??????
>>41809534Comments that describe your dick for ₪1600.
>>41809534>>41809641It was a mix, i.e. all anon fics plus whatever looks nice from non-anon fics. If there's anything in particular you want to read and discuss, maybe we could fit it into week 3>>41809758>Rosa UshiromiyaFunny considering the other bookclub.
>>41809890Sir this is a wendy's
>>41808752>artistI thought nevobaster was russian?
>>41809902Read the filename again, slowly, then study the picture.
>>41809890Need I say it?>>41809898This is a /fimfic/ (thread), we deal in dicks and dick accessories.>>41809902It don't matter, they're all dirty, filthy commie dommies.
>>41809908yeah I see it but the pony looks just like his stylethe xi jinpooh edit doesn't mean it's necessarily a chinese artist
>>41809920Look at the tags and source URL.
>>41809970>furshitYou can keep them company.
>https://www.fimfiction.net/story/363036/drifting-down-the-lazy-riverWell my opinion improved of this improved as I read it. I realized I wasn’t quite picking up on plot details and elements which were not being explicitly said and thus I felt a little lost as the story progressed. It’s a pretty solid story that ties in well with the one it’s a sequel too and is about the same quality. Would recommend for the bookclub.
>>41810056Is there more polyamory?
My reading list is so clear that I must continue reading The Only Mark That Matters.
>>41810133The question is, is Radish Root a mary sue
>>41810082Try and guess from these chunks:@87% into .../story/363036/16/a/ After a considerably gentler squeeze and some thought, he gave her a quick kiss on the cheek and a smile. “Thank you, Pearl.@81% into .../16/a/ They could have remained holding each other for longer, except for the sound of a familiar sharp beeping of the smoke alarm from inside the riverboat galley and some associated commotion. “Oh, fishguts.” Pearl cocked her head to one side and looked at the trail of smoke leaking up from the galley vents.Chunk 951 0.5080815999999999 @73% into https://www.fimfiction.net/story/363036/18/a/ “Ripple is a joy to be around and Pearl is… Pearl, but having you here really makes my day, Turpentine. You’ve given me a look at life I’ve never seen before.” “So have you, sir.@69% into .../16/a/ Gaberdine had confided once that he was first attracted to the beautiful seapony from her voice, but Turpentine was fairly certain that those fascinating eyes had a powerful role in his infatuation, and possibly if Turpentine was reading his eleven years of worldly experience correctly, something far more permanent in their relationship. They were so much like Ripple’s eyes, only with most but not all of the mischief faded away and considerable pain mixed in. Still, the pain seemed muted, even missing whenever Gaberdine was in the immediate vicinity. And over the last few weeks, that same pain had faded slightly whenever Turpentine was around too. His introspection was gently cut off by a soft but persistent touch on the end of his nose. When Turpentine blinked his way back to awareness, he saw Pearl with her own small smile as she continued to boop him until he moved to push away the hoof with a protest. “Hey! Did Mother Windrow teach you that?” “Yes.” She giggled again, a musical noise that Turpentine could never tire of listening to, and much the same as Ripple’s happy laughter, but quieter. It was also far too short, and although her smile remained, there was considerable regret in her eyes when she turned the unwelcome nose-booping into a more familiar caress along his cheek. “I will miss you,” she added. “I feel safe when Ripple is with you. I worry about her so. She’s all I have left.@70% into .../18/a/” Gaberdine nodded and took a quick peek over his shoulder at the riverboat. “She’s a magnificent mare. Whenever I saw that painting you did of her, I could see the stallion who was worthy… The stallion I could never be for her.” He took a long, shuddering breath and looked back up at the cloudy horizon, but did not say anything else. “I talked with Pearl before my birthday party,” said Turpentine, somehow triggered by the distant expression in Gaberdine’s eyes. “She wished she could turn me into a seapony so I could go live with her and Ripple beneath the waves. I thought it was… nice.” Turpentine took a moment to rub a fleck of irritating fluff out of his eyes before they got too watery.
>>41810082>polyamoryWhat? Schizo? No, there was no polyamory. There was no polyamory in the previous story either, you must have wildly misinterpreted things. There are, however, a sprinkling of off vibes that confuse my autistic little brain.
>>41810148Alliterative mares always are.
>>41810169>mare
>>41810158>spoilerAre you a journalist by any chance? You seem quite adept at creating an implied point by stringing together snippets of information out of context.
>>41810172A stallion is just a mare with some extra fun bits.
>>41810160It's a joke about all the rings the protagonist gets for all the hot single moms in his area.
>>41810148>can somehow beat celestia in a fight>and every other character>everyone loves him>spends most of his time seething over starlight for whatever reason (author tract) right nowHe's damn close
>>41810210Does he rape her afterwards?
>>41810215No, but in another universe she's slobbering for his knobber.
>>41810173No, that is too much writing. Are you a schizo, though? You seem easily spooked.The context I removed was some of the chapter links to get the post in the 3k limit. The chunks in question are search results for: "Which scenes depict Pearl and another character having a romantic or intimate moment?" Otherwise, it includes a ton of metadata to get the context for a chunk, so the accusation is pretty weird.Anyway, the chunks tell me that:- Pearl is in a relationship with somepony- Turpentine is probably in a relationship with Pearl- Gaberdine is not in a relationship with PearlI happen to know the prequel shipped Gaberdine and Pearl, so I suspect that Turpentine is an OC that appears in the sequel, and is not in the cover art. Since Gaberdine is excluded, the story probably does not feature polyamory.
>>41810056>Would recommend for the bookclub.I'll bring it up once we're out of the Jinglemas weeks. The issue with sequels is that they limit potential participation to just the people who read book 1 (we did it maybe a year ago?) minus the people who started the first story but didn't really like it. I'm assuming it's not a standalone "sequel", right?>>41810160What >>41810195 said. Some anons thought that the finale with all the separated single fish mares on Gab's boat was sending weird signals to the audience, especially after he got the rings for them.
>>41810238>b&thro and pony mixed togetherFilthy fucking animal.
>>41810221>>41810243Man I thought I was autistic.
>>41810258I'm not!
>>41810258You are, which is why things fly over your head.
>>41810266They'd do that anyway.
>>41810266This string of posts is a good example of that happens when you ignore context.
>>41810264>stimmingThis hits different after seeing all that pony popper porn.
>>41810302Is she even stimming or just special interest
which fimfiction author who just writes the same scenario over and over again is your favorite
>desu goes down>can't access a dozen years' worth of worldbuilding discussion on a whimSomeone hold me...
>>41810347I would do that to if I didn’t have to skim through a gorillion threads just to find the good stuff.
>>41810353>I would do that:)>the restOh. I thought you meant the other thing :(
What non-AU fic has your favorite world building?
>>41810475My own.
>>41810475Mine.
>>41810345RunicTreeTops :3
>>41810345RuinQueenofOblivion
>>41810345Uh... Does CiG count?
>>41810526Who?
I need to include more mondegreens in my stories.
>>41810580I need to make a story that doesn't involve tearful family reconciliation as the climax. But I won't.
>>41810582How does it feel to be a one trick pony?
>>41810264Missed opportunity. The caption should say, "The Autism Spectrum."
>>41810606Pretty good, since people like the trick.
>>41810644Favourite M-rated fic?
>>41810526Wait, is he actually repetitive? I haven't read much of his work, but what I have read hasn't struck me as the same scenario over and over.
>>41810653https://www.fimfiction.net/story/500819
>>41810663Anon, please. That's my job.
>>41802590did you make this?
>>41810704He did not, as far as I know.
>>41810653Cadance In A Minor
>>41810723Second favourite?
>>41810754Idk
>>41810754https://www.fimfiction.net/story/197090
>>41810345Daetrin.But also Phoenix_Dragon.
>>41810525That sure is a lot of fucking "Scootaloo is rainbow dash biological kid".Like damn
One trick authorThe trick is never finishing a fic
https://mlp.fandom.com/wiki/LiteratureSpell Name Anon, I found a literature reference list. I'm not sure how autistic the wiki is, but it seems to be pretty decent, though they have the tendency of declaring the author's name as part of the book's title, when I think that's just the character saying the name of the author.>>41804977>The ProphecyAh, good times. Funniest part was the Sony leaks revealing this almost happened, but Hasbro told them to fuck off with the idea.>>41807892>>41807957Per the candy cane autism, fillies are about 3' tall, so a 4 year old would probably be around 1.5'.>>41809003The youtuber or the anthropomorphic personification of the oldest baseball organization in the United States?>>41809295I'm pretty sure MLP is booming in China right now. Think Hasbro just announced a new licensing deal to make China exclusive merch.>>41810345Chenger. Cloud gets stuck in a loop for an entire chapter debating the whole honor killing her mom thing over and over again.>>41810475Winning Pony, though technically its world building is pretty minimal and it's the -verse stuff that fleshes it out. Runner up would be Rites, since it originally didn't have an AU tag as it was a post-canon fic, before Twilicorn came along in canon to ruin the whole thing.
>>41810526CiG definitely has a recognizable style, but I wouldn't call him repetitive.
>>41811665The contemporary philosopher.
>>41810582I also climax to familial tears.
>>41812193See, you get it.
>>41807262>I don't think the Tuna was the weakest partWow, that means a lot.
>>41809890>the feeling of them becoming hard over timeThis is my fetish but it's so hard to find.
Today I got a real temptation to make my own FoE (not Fo:E) fic except good (the only thing that's changed is reversing the genders and making it futa)
Oh Flurry in Time is a Babylon 5 crossover, I get it.
>>41812975KINOdo it do it
>>41812975Wow. I am in awe of how gay that sounds
>>41813018I'm not.
I'm not gay but I would fuck Fancy Pants
>>41813027Look, somepony like Thunderlane I could get. But Fancy Pants? That's really gay.
>>41813031His name is literally fancy pants. You can't get much gayer than that.
>>41813039Wanting to fuck Blueblood would easily be gayer.
>>41813027It is because he's rich and sophisticated? Or do you just like big stallions?
>>41812975>futa caribou raping stallionsBased based based
>>41813027What do the rich ponies in canterlot do for a living? What’s their class?
>>41813074They're traditional aristocrats whose job is "owning property" and collecting rent/dues/dividends to live off of. Such jobs are very rare nowadays on Earth, though, ever since the upper bourgeoisie supplanted the aristocracy as the ruling class.
>>41813074>What do the rich ponies in canterlot do for a living?Suck the Princess's dick.>What’s their class?Prostitutes.
>>41813074Whore themselves to the princess while ignoring the six ponies who are closer friends.You don't get to be rich in Equestria without also being stupid as shit.
>>41813074They're shown having organisational and management roles within the castle's hierarchy.
>>41812975>except goodit might be better, but I don't know if it would be good
Ponies but good
>>41813084So that's why Rarity wants to be a noble so bad.
>>41813142Her fantasy was to get an inbred british prince to knock her up.
>>41813144Why the tautology?
>>41813159Celestia is not inbred.
>>41813125Ponies' butt good.
>>41813179And Luna?
>>41813199
>>41813226It's a Sweetie Belle situation
Chrysalis fics! I need them!
>>41813229>princest is actually mother/daughter incestewwwwww.
>>41813234Shill, you say?https://www.fimfiction.net/story/540086/a-canterlot-gala
>>41813229Dammit Celestia, how many of your children must you fail to raise?
>>41813234https://www.fimfiction.net/story/510562/the-thrill-of-the-hunt:^)
>>41813264It's impossible to replicate perfection.
>>41813271>Quills and Sofas
>>41813272That's why you improve upon it.
>>41813264>Luna>Shimmy Jimmy>Cadance>TwilightYeah she kind of sucks at this huh
>>41813306It was very gay and I didn't like how they did things.>Write small prompt, review these 6 gorillion other prompts and stories to qualify for getting in and leave a 10000 word review on the delicate intricacies of the prompt>Then your story can be allowed
>>41813319Cadance and Twilight turned out fine, unless you consider alicornification to be a failure of character.
>>41813325>Cadance goes around mind controlling random ponies and calling it love>Twilight is an insane neurotic nutjob>turned out fine
>>41813234Fics about romancing bugbutt into reformation?
>>41813325>Turned out fineHave you SEEN what she did to poor Shining Armor?
>>41813344I don't think she was the one who pumped his ass full of eggs, anon.
>>41813344Shining and candy ass deserved better and could have been more interesting characters. It wouldn’t have even been that hard but hasjew went for the low risk strategy of using them to sell toys rather than make a better story.
>>41813333Shining has a type.Checked.
>>41813347She's the alicorn of familyThere are eggs to spare
>>41813347ITT: Anon confuses changelings and unicorns for seahorses.
>>41813368You think he's had any affairs with Starlight?
>>41813374Not tall enough for him and Shining isn't lanky and pathetic enough for her
>>41813227Fics about heterosexual anal intercourse?
>>41813374Fics about Shining having an affair?I really liked this one.https://www.fimfiction.net/story/546570/what-happens-in-las-pegasus
Is Diamond's tiara silver?
>>41813229Are there fics where Celestia is actually Luna's mom?
>>41813496Yes.
>>41813557Are you just saying that in the hopes that people will like you?
>>41813560Don't we all go through life hoping someone'll finally like us?
>>41813592No, because someone likes me already.
>>41813374>whenever poochie's not in his bed, shining armor should be asking "where's poochie?"
>>41813496>still no answersPlease I'm starving
>>41813683So is she.https://cdn.twibooru.org/img/view/2025/1/4/3423115.png
>>41813708Didn't need to see that.
>>41813708Actually she's complaining about her lack of milk production.
It is quite admirable how WoE establishes that no one contacted Celestia during DB because she was under the effects of the stupid orb.
>>41813708You failed both the original assignment and your shitpost's intent.
>>41813683Adoption anons got a new task it looks like
>>41813863Sunset and Twilight are already her kids, and Luna is also Twilight's mom already.
>>41810723That fic shouldn't hold that spot; if you'd like to fix that, try out this one: https://www.fimfiction.net/story/429016/vertigoAlthough they're generally incomparable, one detail in which they're opposites is fun to point out. Shiny's Therapy Quest.fic was not written to be porn, except for the end yada yada. Vertigo seemingly was intended to be written as porn, but doesn't actually make it there. It's a lot more accurate to describe this fic as Twilight and Luna being nice to each other, sexually.
>>41814357But I'm not here for the porn.
>>41814357Sorry I don't care how good that fic is or isn't it is permanently tainted by its association with that which we shall not speak of.
>>41814369That was my point, and the reason I recommended it.
>>41814373Was it Artist again?
>>41814375It's funny that you see M-rated and immediately jump to sex.>>41814381Much worse.
It's going
>>41814411It's 7 words too many. Or 89,993 too few.
>>41814403I think it would be sad if someone's favorite M fic was M for violence instead of sex.
>>41814438What a sad mindset to hold.
>remember shit from season 8 and 9 after not thinking about it for years >day ruinedFics to cleanse my mind of corpo-slop?
>>41814496We read some comfy early season fics last club.
Wrote today for the first time in months. Yay.
>>41814543I haven't written since last year.
I'm not sure if it's on topic of Fimfiction, but I wrote a short poem on Ponepaste's new. It's 'writing', so it's still relevant?
>>41814550No, this thread has nothing to do with writing. It's just a gay circlejerk. But if you post a link, we might let you join in.
>>41814550Unfortunately, you cannot co-opt fimfiction's attention with non-fimfiction simply because you are aware of the community. You will have to earn an audience on your own, or insert your poetry into fimfiction
>>41814411Mine is, too.
>>41814550I don't see any other writing threads, so I suppose so. Unlike greens, poems fall under the fimfiction umbrella.
>>41814595Fair enough, I'll start writing on fimfic
>>41814550Fuck it, post it anyways. It's rare to see horse poems and I want to read it
>>41814596Just like >>41814411, you have a real problem. You need to either cut 565 words or add 899,435. Otherwise your story can't possibly be any good.
>>41814651What if >>41814596 adds 10,546 words?
>>41814659That would be such a bold and unexpected solution that he'd be worthy of the Equestrian Medal of Honor.
>>41814612I wrote some poems just for you, Anon.There once was a mare from Manehatten,whose rump she thought she ought to fatten.She drank big milkshakes,and ate lots of cakes,and never potatos au gratin.There once was a mare from Vanhoover,whose stallion thought he could improve her.She got smarter than him,and his mood became grim,for now he would certainly lose her.There once was a stallion from Cloudsdale,who always bought groceries wholesale.His suffering purse,too much did disburse."Ten kids is like suffering blackmail!"
How do HiE fics write around the size discrepancy that would exist between ponies and humans? A 6-foot tall man is not going to fit into a building designed for 3-foot tall horses.
>>41814757>Talking about HiE in /fimfic/ Why are you niggers so obsessed with that shit and yet are constantly bitching and moaning about it?Seriously what the fuck make up your mind already. shift + click
>>41814777I was just going to ignore it, the way HiE writers ignore size discrepancies except when it's convenient for their story. But you got trips, so you've earned an answer.
>>41814777Waste of trips. Everything is going to be okay, anon.
>commission artwork based on my story>the artist visualizes the scene very differently>it makes more sense that wayWho else here knows this feeling?
>>41813234Only read this if you like rape:https://www.fimfiction.net/story/545041/from-love-to-changelings>>41813708I'm glad you liked my commission. This was a translation of an anthro piece made years ago.
>>41814757The building in the show have pretty high ceilings, high enough that celestia with her foot+ long horn never had trouble fitting into any.
>>41814612https://ponepaste.org/10644 this is my first time using the site, and I came up with the poem in 10 minutes. Maybe I'll bring writing over to fimfic
>>41814757Yeah, like >>41814840 said, they have really high ceilings. I guess when you evolve from something that ran freely through the plains, you don't like the feeling of being boxed-in overhead.It's the doorways that Anon would clobber his head on all the time.
>>41814862>I guess when you evolve from something that ran freely through the plains.Anon…
I was late to the gym because I spent too long reading The Only Mark That Matters. Am I becoming a faggot?
>>41815020You post here
>>41815020You were a faggot the moment you first opened this website.
>>41814824I'm familiar with a novelist who had almost no mental image of any of her characters until an artist designed them for him.
>>41814833>This was a translation of an anthro piece made years agoLink it.>>41814824That makes sense. Any artist worth commissioning should be better at figuring spatial stuff out compared to you.
>>41815204>her characters until an artist designed them for him>her>for him
>>41815312>Link it.It's actually a pair:https://derpibooru.org/images/2252373https://derpibooru.org/images/2256644I wanted to pay Goodie-bag to translate the pair himself, but he's been gone for years. This is just one of the anthro pieces I've had translated. I get two sketches a month from CBT, so I'm writing about one and usually not the other.>That makes sense. Any artist worth commissioning should be better at figuring spatial stuff out compared to you.My thoughts exactly.
>>41815315Whoops. I was actually thinking of two people and shifted who I was talking about mid-sentence. The first was a woman and the second a man. The latter was a better example. Incidentally, it's Tappei Nagatsuki of Re:Zero fame, who would praise the illustrator like "yeah this character was a blank void in my mind so I let the artist go loose."
>>41814833>>41815342>translation>translateIt's an adaptation, you pretentious pregophile.
>>41815348I wish more writers were like that because a lot of them really aren't good with descriptions and visual and spatial imagery.
>>41815373Just do it Pratchett style, don't describe anything about them just describe them in weird metaphors.
>>41815853sleepy ucuWhy do we rarely see the tops of ponies' heads when they're so cute?
>>41816173Because for most of them they just look weird. Rarity looks borderline bald.
>>41816229Mare pattern baldness is nothing to be ashamed of.
>>41816229That's just how a mane works, thoughIt goes down the middle of the skull to the spine
>>41816243Yeah, but it looks weird on anthropomorphic designs like the FiM ones.
>>41816243>It goes down the middleNot for all...
>>41816266Glimmy's combover is the sort of thing you shouldn't dwell on.
>>41816266That's exactly what Glimmer's does though.
>>41816273You can clearly see her hair coming from behind the curvature of her head, Anon.>>41816267The bangs were so much cuter.
>>41816345Yeah. Then she turns and it comes from the other side. That's exactly why we don't see them from the top. It violates the deliberate inconsistencies in the models and exposes a kind of look the show goes out of its way to avoid.
>>41814777Trips of truth. Begone HiEniggers.
>>41816345Evil is sexy.
>>41816421>love men>hate men inaaequestriaExplain.
>>41816522He can't suck the cocks that make it there.
>>41816522Ponies belong in the pony bit.Humans belong in the human bit.Simple as, innit.Pony temporarily finding itself in some human universe is interesting though.
>>41816552>SimpleYou sure are.
>>41816561Disgusting.
>>41816552>Ponies belong in the pony bit.This is why part of me doesn't like to read AU stories. The (severely autistic) heart knows that the ponies are not where they aught to be.
>>41816581>stallion and mare>gayu wot m8
>>41816561Big pony!>>41816570>he doesn't want to cuddle the mare>yet he puts human things like guns in pony images
>>41813234buggo needs a fuggo.
>>41816552Displaced is a disgrace. End yourself for having such shit taste.
>>41816632Heard of it. It's a shit genre often taken to retarded levels of crossover, if my understanding of what it is is correct.Oddly enough it's not my thing.
>>41816632>PiE>"displaced"Huh?
>>41816650He's probably a dummy that thinks /ptfg/ lurks everywhere as well.
>>41816656
>>41816696>get ridden all day by succulent fillies and coltsSign me the fuck up.
>>41813496https://www.fimfiction.net/story/193909/mother-of-the-moon
>>41816875Alsohttps://www.fimfiction.net/story/228396/1/me-and-my-daughters/But>cancelledAnd thus irrelevant
Fics where all the ancient alicorns attempted to transcend the mortal cycle of endless reincarnation by constructing a giant horse powered by the heart of a dead god with the intent to merge with it only to fuck up the process at the last minute?
>>41816984I'm sure Unwhole Hole has one like that.
I was just thinking about that fic with the weird OC public breastfeeding on Celestia scene. Specifically the conversation around the "I'm changing your diet" thing. I realized that feels like something Twilight would do and then subsequently learn a lesson about why it's wrong and then write a friendship report (or rather a marriage report, I guess?) to Celestia on. Actually I could see that plot working with Rarity or maybe Fluttershy too.
>>41817264You now reminded me of a Gardez fic where Rarity arranges Twilight to have sex with... Thunderlane, I think. and they're having a good time with Twilight being a dork and Thunderlane rolling with it, but Rarity is all "no, that's now how you're supposed to do it!" and I just wanted her to fall down a well.
>>41817268That is a perfectly reasonable reaction to worst pony.
>>41817281No it's not, you can't fuck her if she's in the well.
>>41817281I don't know who's supposed to be worst pony in this.
>>41817322It's a tricky because Fluttershy isn't present.
>>41817264I was the retard that posted that and i still stand by the position that it seemed less weird in context and with how the characters were written and developed. But irrespective, the author, did insert some weird and cringe moments into his fics and that was one of them.
>>41817322truly tricky. the neurotic jew, or twilight?
>>41817322Thunderlane
>>41817447What's wrong with him?
>>41817459Stallion.
>>41817473K
>>41817473And?
>>41817488My word.
>>41817488Is he actually a fag or are /mlp/ posters just mentally ill?
>>41817498Y'know, if Prince cums to GalaCon this year, your fantasies may have a chance at being realized.>>41817506All good artists are a little nutty. That's why we nut to them.
>>41817509Plane travel A SHIT.Dunno if it's worth desu. If I get a written letter from Prince that I'm cordially invited to fuck his arse then maybe.
>>41817511He literally lives in your country. Go suck him off tomorrow.
>>41817517That would explain why I like the sound of his music.
>>41817506He has a wife
>>41817522D'ya think it'd be weird if you had one of his albums on in the background while you reamed his shapely arse?>>41817526Let's hope he can play in swing tempo.
>>41817529Playing 'Connected' on repeat might be a bit on the nose.
>>41817526And?
>>41817526Hasn't stopped me before (she's into it to be fair).
>gayness>infidelity>bri'ish """music"""My word, /fimfic/!
>>41809916>they're all dirty, filthy commie dommies.I sure am not, but i can pretend to be one if it means i can fuck Starlight during her Equalist phase. God she is so hot>>41809295Don't tell me i'm gonna have to learn another fucking language to read horse fiction
>>41817716Refer to >>41809416
>>41817730But what about the horse pussy
>>41815351>you pretentious pregophilekek>>41817696babymaking sex with Aryanne
>>41817746We must secure an Equestrian existence and a future for our white foals.
>>41817268>a Gardez fic where Rarity arranges Twilight to have sex with...This sounds incredibly shitI had a fairly good opinion of CiG until now
>>41817966Looks like he meant https://www.fimfiction.net/story/340086/shall-i-compare-thee
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/464678/flurry-in-timeFinished this, was good (but maybe my bias towards Babylon 5 colors that) but ended on a sequel hook that the author's trying to do as an original series, so that's disappointing, I guess.
>>41814612https://www.fimfiction.net/story/539686/the-bells-tollI'll shill mine as well.>>41814757>3-foot tall horsesPer the candy cane autism, fillies are 3' tall, so mares are gonna be around 5' or so. If you disregard that autism because it's too autistic, they still over-scale most of the buildings. Assuming they're 3', the door's still at least 5' and the ceilings are much higher still.
>>41818033Candy cane autism put mares between 3.5 and 4
It has occurred to me that whenever a fic describes a bedroom there's a 90% chance it looks nothing like it does in the show. Twilight's especially.
>>41818462As is typical of cartoons, FiM has a certain dreamlike vagueness to its architecture. Unless you're writing surrealism, it's a perfectly sound idea to find some sense in the madness by making it conform to--if not housing standards, then--some form of logic.
>>41818462Rarity's bedroom is very different from Twilight's. In fact, everypony of the mane six except Twilight has a fairly normal looking bedroom.
>>41818581>--
>>41818585In lieu of flaggotry, you can use these typographical marks to easily identify the superior self.
>>41818586I switch them around sometimes for this exact reason. And they're all nice in their own ways – why choose just one?
>>41818642Consistency is nice, and Unicode is consistently terrible.
Here's your best duo for the next thread!
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>>41818661Please don't come back.
>>41818666I don't take requests from Satan.
>>41818033By law, every building in Equestria must be tall enough to fit Celestia's fat ass inside.
>>41818672They're not requests. They're orders.
>>41818700Imagine being bossed around by some gay Hellspawn.
>>41818704I miss when he was a good character.
>>41818672>doesn't take requests from himself
>>41818714I will never understand why they took the character whose sole purpose was corrupting the young, impressionable protagonist and switched out his voice actor for someone who had no real-world grooming experience.
>>41818462I mean the Golden oaks library seems kind of limited
>>41818890I'm specifically talking about how her bed is up on a raised portion of the room but everyone treats it like there's no height variation.
>>41818910Isn't it in its own room? At least in the first episode.Does it even have a bathroom? A kitchen?
>>41818948Yes, a raised portion of it's own room.
>>41818997>it's
>>41819010I just showered, okay?
>>41819021Dampness does not excuse retardation. Some of my most cutting retorts have been written one-handed.
>>41819042Post tits.
>>41819052I'm barely an A cup, though..
>>41819067You were given an order, private.
>>41819070Sir, it is the private's duty to inform the senior rizz instructor that the private is, in fact, a sir, Sir!
>>41819085Do I look like I give two shits in a porta potty about that? I don't give a damn if you've got a marecock or a stallion coocher, drop and show me those tits.
>>41819086Damn, the Wonderbolts recruitment process sure is different under Dash.
I can't believe Prince's ass killed the thread.
I'll make the thread.If anyone else is doing it, say so now.NOW.
>>41819322Your service is appreciated. I only saw the scary >10 now.
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