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Welcome to the Vidya Creepypasta General. Feel free to discuss video game-based creepypastas and their related content. And most importantly, h̷̰̰̋̈́̆a̴̦͘v̸̧̳̦̔͐e̷̞̜̟̕͝ ̶͇͘f̶̨̓͘ú̴̦̰̓͐ñ̴̜̠̦

ROOM #484 - Please Come To The Castle Edition

>/exeg/arbage Site & Archive
https://exegarbage.lol/

>Video Game Creepypastas & Gaming Urban Legends
https://rentry.org/creepypasta-centered-wiki

>Official 4chan-Approved Creepypasta List
https://rentry.org/xpastas

>Creepypasta Games, Web Series/ARGs, SlenderARGs and Fearvlogs
https://rentry.org/Exeg-games-and-web-series-archives

>Old Man Reads Vidya Creepypastas
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=T339A8wlzgs Sonic.exe
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pRL0Rhyrz9g Mario World I HATE YOU
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pt2qpC2Ko-I Sonic 2 Genocide City

>/exeg/ Archives
https://rentry.org/exeg-images-archives

>/exeg/ CyTube
https://cytu dot be/r/exegarbage
https://rentry.org/exegarbage

>Homemade/found pastas
https://rentry.org/4chanpastas

>Room Template
https://rentry.org/exeg-template/raw


>Previous Room
>>499483249
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I know what you're thinking, but the funny thing is, I don't even LIKE creepypastas
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>>500298941
you're not special
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>>500298941
fpbp
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Its a crime that you wont be able to hear the alterworld songs for that long
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https://x.com/pencildoods/status/1850873056400396315 Ordinary Sonic Funkin mentioned
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>>500305242
I wonder how they will cope when OSF will blow most exe games out of the water
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>>500305576
They'll bitch that its too difficult and also that it's not a "real" EXE game because its not ankle-deep horror where you walk to the right and die
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https://voca.ro/18Oe2Ty8BzNS
https://voca.ro/1kgfpcWsWpfp
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SEX WITH RAT LADY
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>>500306660
they don't even have much to stack up to OSF gameplay wise specifically because a majority of them are either walking sim "retakes" or sonic world bullshit with bad level design
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>>500307918
Thats exactly the point, OSF both abandons the scariness and ease of walking right and then getting killed by the horrorbrew of the week
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>>500307918
Exeniggers are literally not conscious
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>>500305242
they fear progress
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>>500307150
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anybody play the new Friday Night Monster of Monsters update?
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>>500308975
Fuck off dad
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>>500308975
I didn't know that came out. Fuck. I want to play it but I'm busy
>>500309054
Fuck YOU we love the latinx here
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>>500309054
You are a fucking kike nigger. Stop posting
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>>500308975
get lost
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>>500309154
>>500309163
I'm sorry that I disrespected your kaijubrews xisters
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>>500308975
Is Fingerbones in it? yeah that’s what I thought, fuck off.
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>Onionsbones
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>>500308375
the only game that can be compared to OSF is spirits of hell because X is programmed to chase the player instead of kill you in a scripted death because "fuck you"
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>>500309481
fikngerbones fnf
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>fnfbones
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>>500309638
That's most of the NU and derivative games, they actually have gameplay of middling quality which puts them above most walking sims
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>>500309731
I'm not interested in your toilet music
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Has /exeg/ ever played Disaster 2D together?
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>>500309968
no one wants to play that shit
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>>500309776
and even then it's only close by an asshair. OSF still has better level design that resembles a classic sonic romhack
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>>500309968
Back when it first released
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>>500310064
OSF is literally just Sonic 1 levels
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>>500310138
I saw a few changes in marble zone
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Don't suck off OSF too hard guys you're making me blush
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>>500310247
shut the fuck up hatcher drop the alterworld badnik sprites already
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>>500309806
Funkchads BROKE you.
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>>500310247
OK I will complain about it instead
X feels way too unforgiving at points in regards to his flight, fucker moves so fast that Marble and Labyrinth will probably be the death of me
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>>500310783
I never cared about fnf mods I just wanted to fuck most of the ocs with big tits
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>>500311449
That just makes you the worst kind of creature. You have no respect for the honorable and glorious quest of our hero Boyfriend FNF vanquishing evil foes in the name of all that is righteous. You are a base creature driven by primitive lusts
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>MELISSA
>KILL YOURSELF
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Creepypastas are 100000000x better when written in universe instead of le spooky haunted cartridge
submit post
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>>500312442
some people just want to fuck, anon.
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Coal...
So coal...
Truth be told...
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what the fuck is her problem
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>>500329430
Being a self-insert I assume
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>>500329496
I don't entirely think so
>got fucked over by Marchionne's greed
>Riba cheated on her
>abused by her own mother
>sacrificed her family for a ritual that failed
>got sealed in a music box
not everything she did was justified but it's understandable why she is the way she is
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>>500324069
i prefer sd64 to the og needlemouse
Needlemouse was never good
(SD64 is not better)
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https://gamejolt.com/games/findtheemeralds/930184
thoughts?
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>>500337601
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>>500310138
aand?
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>>500312442
>honorable
>glorious
good one anon now get out of here you rapscallion
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https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LCZ9ztd4NNU
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>Impastabones
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>>500332448
is this bait
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>>500342202
obviously
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>>500342202
No
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>>500346272
Triki Troy is a really Exetremist-like individual, drawing art of gay shit like this and Sonic 3 Hacked Cartridge. There should be a slur invented for this kind of person
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Fugitive to Collision Detection Hell
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>>500347339
"Sperg"
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>>500347339
he's a literal faggot
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Its clear theres a favorite
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the first person to point out what the song name "the water" is a reference to wins 1 free butthole tickling from osf x
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>>500349620
the water is the name of a zetsubo drawing by joe released on the pc port gamejolt
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>>500350176
wrong
your only hint is that its related to one of the classic trilogy games
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>>500349620
Wave Ocean ( The Water 's Edge)
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>>500350430
wrong
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>>500350503
What if I brainwash you to make it right
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>>500350590
you will never brainwash me out of my autism
try me at sonic brain ranking sometime faggot
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>>500350674
name time and venue
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>>500355312
God I wish that monster was me
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>>500346272
this isn't mario, it's actually 2024M in his faker form as you can tell by his abnormally long arms
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>>500355850
that creature has a name, you know. It's alice. don't be rude
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>>500355312
It's fatal error
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>>500355847
TRANNY
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>>500356509
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>>500357301
he wants to save them so he can have them for himself because he is gay and loves what they call BBC
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>>500358357
i forget why it's SB
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>>500358772
Super Boy
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>>500358398
crazy bitch
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>>500360443
she has nice tits though
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>>500367167
>Realizing you get the 5+ minute long slogfest Sturm song
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>>500367569
I'll maaaaaake
You waaaaait
So LOOOONG
For this song to end

It goes oooooon
For teeeeen
MINUUUUUTES
IT'S BOSS FIGHT
KIIIINOOOOOOO
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>>500367167
kek
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>>500356450
ah yes, a woman
the most despicable of monsters
right behind blacks of course
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>>500356509
Xenophanes's design is like a shittier version of Mephiles... They had one job.
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>>500373375
will xenophanes start screaming about how he wants to exist when (HAHAHAHAHA) his story is finished and he gets defeated in the end
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>>500367167
incomprehensible melodrama to rival silly billy
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>>500374903
is it that bad?
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boo
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>>500375029
it's rayukino
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>>500375730
ah so it's terrible then
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>>500375029
It really isn’t
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>>500377104
It's the average Sturm song. You could get rid of a third of it and it'd improve the song
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>>500377104
so what's the problem?
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>>500377337
nothing really, it's decent, which is weird since many anons here enjoyed redkiller before the updates release.
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>>500375730
you wanna see real ryukino?
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>>500377738
he won't respond because he's a coward
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>>500377810
hehhehehe
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>>500377891
see? told ya
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>>500377570
>many anons here enjoyed redkiller before the updates release.
We are breaking free from the Sturmslop chains. If a song is longer than three minutes, four minutes if we're being really generous, then I spit upon on it
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>>500377570
Yes, i liked it when it was a 2 minute long WIP
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>>500377570
>>500377319 (me)
I am going to reiterate what I said and say I do not like any of Sturm's songs and they could all be cut down by a minute or two. The most egregious ones like Forgotten Remnant and Silly Billy could be cut in half and would gain a lot from it
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>>500378885
>Forgotten Remnant
Sturm didn’t make that, that was a cover of Manual Blast, which was the song Sturm actually made
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>>500380235
>He doesn't know
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Scorched is EXE's loathsome more successful copy
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>>500378024
>We are breaking free from the Sturmslop chains
ok, did Sturm do something? I've been here long enough to know that there's a 8/10 chance we start hating on someone we used to like because they do something fucking retarded. did Sturm do something to make us stop sucking him off or what?
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>>500380740
>more successful
everyone has already forgotten he even existed, even his own fucking creator tossed him out for a new recolor. EXE won the rivalry because nobody gives a fuck about Scorched.
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>>500380740
Jack Gore publicly bent the knee to Revie and drew interaction art of his gay sona being beaten up by Revie's gay sona, which means there is no conceivable reality in which he or his character won over Faker
>>500380846
>ok, did Sturm do something?
He made an FNF song about getting cucked by an Australian Nintendo commercial mascot, he disowned 4chan for being chuds, and he had a pooner who worships Sonic.EXE in real life as his Yoko Ono
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>>500381056
>he disowned 4chan for being chuds
figures
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>>500380846
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>>500380942
i got the two mixed up
exe is scorched's loathsome more successful copy
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>>500380942
let's just say both are ass and leave it at that
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>>500381821
can't believe they let this slide?
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>>500357301
True
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President Trump needs you to save /exeg/. Will you be a patriot and save this general?
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>>500392854
Why save /exeg/ when I can save several terabytes worth of /hmofa/ art
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>>500394032
sick design.
who made it?
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>>500395542
https://x.com/alistartdraws/status/1838593133640106113
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>>500396015
his art is good, but his profile is... expected.
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>>500392854
When I'm president, we're gonna deport the worst of the worst in this fine general, believe me. Those wacky workbench spammers are gonna be thrown out and we're gonna build a wall around them. We have jannies, the best jannies around here, they're really good. Simply the best around, and soon those spammers and /funkg/ aliens are gonna see the door.
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>>500396635
they're eating the drawfags... how could they.
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I hate this motherfucker
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https://nitter.poast.org/GroundedBears/status/1851418306336424265#m
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OSF X wants to fuck Sonic and sees Amy as a romantic rival, whats his reasoning for chasing down Tails and Knuckles?
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>>500401504
same as amy
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why he green
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>>500401504
He's a sonicxtails shipfag and will self insert as sonic, and he's generally uneasy around Knuckles and wants to kill him quick because of his strength threatening X
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morning.
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>>500410063
I HOPE YOU DIE
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https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jhfZVd9N9ww
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>>500401504
He is evil
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>>500413627
All homosexuals are
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Are there people who really just go around drawing e-celeb sonas? What is this kind of person? What do they smell like?
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i need raven beating sadako redraw 3............
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>>500410451
I HOPE WE BOTH DIE
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>>500417473
would you stick your dick in crazy /exeg/
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>>500417473
can you use amy skin in xl mode
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>>500418670
Why do you ask
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>Ice Climbers
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>>500419273
ohhhhh yeahhhhhh
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chroma sonac exe
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do not take chromaeden and change like two letters worst mistake of my life
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New Vermis Malum. Thoughts?

https://youtu.be/6_2Pw31ho6Y?si=cHldNkodojDdrE6s
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>>500396015
>shitter user
no wonder it looks like shit
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>Sonic?(to the left, side front) and Knuckles?(to the right, side behind) in the depths of the scrap brain. >Sonic is confused, hurt, and is motioning for Knuckles to listen. >Knuckles however, is not as eager to open up with them.
>How can this be?
>They clutch their head in denial and shut their eyes.
>The setting isn't doing much to help, dark and rusted with ominous dark stains.
>Sounds of swaying chains and gushing thick liquid fill the emptiness, in the slight reflection a familiar pinprick red dot is seen.
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OSFDS
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https://youtu.be/0dnZbjD0TBI?si=EAvWZOCcH5ZLIUxg
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>>500439843
FUCK
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OSF demo 4 comes out tomorrow
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>>500431129
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>>500447275
This has been posted many times and I still don't understand it
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>>500447552
cirno fucking hates frogs
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https://x.com/PlaySlenderTA/status/1851700447041454096
where is the update you faggots
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>>500453243
Not an anthro girl don't care
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>>500447552
https://youtu.be/Dy1Xg-npZxc
https://youtu.be/GNeyqFfXf7k
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>>500453243
No
>>500457960
Oh, it's some gay pedo tranime shit. Figures
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>>500458440
>wtf this isn't JC exe shit or bing bing wahoo man I can't comprehend this
faggot
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Which horrorbrews hawk tuah spit on that thing?
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>>500459332
My latest creation: Highway.IF who turns all the levels into Radical Highway!
(The IF stands for Ian Flynn.)
He looks like someone had a seizure trying to paint Black Doom.
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>>500460745
>>500459332
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>>500460953
I HAVE NO NEED FOR MEDS
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>>500458802
You forgot Ian Flynn
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How have we not watched Adam Sandler's Pixels on Cytube?
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https://youtu.be/OiNcif5Xqx4?si=rX6TU4WX9Ak3X_RF
new Luigikid upload
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>>500466835
not really
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some of you really fucking don't bother to try and strike up a discussion and it shows
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>>500480067
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>>500480813
is he made out of jelly
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>>500481618
hes red because hes the blood. Lunatic.
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when osf's update comes out i will ensure it gets added to the internet archive mirror as soon as possible
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also if any of you remember the release dates of demo 2 and 3 please tell me
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The Black Moon in Shadow's White Space is just a better version of the Black Sun from Vaporware Prototype 2017.
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It's almost Halloween /exeg/, what are (You) going to do?
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>>500489648
jerk off
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one more thing, is it acceptable to credit godot as "JimmyThrush" on the internet archive page? just things i need to know before the archive lets you log in and edit listings again
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>>500490129
My handle isn't really a secret here, but I'd prefer to just be credited as "anonymous".
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>>500490512
just making sure
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>>500457960
replace exe faggot shit with touhou autism pls
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>>500493743
You watch Ben 10
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>>500493953
when i was 13 yes
what, you didin't? heh
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>>500493743
I've read 2 obscure touhou pastas and both of them have a better premise than sonic.exe
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>>500493743
Blaze is a major rape fetishist, she patiently waits for Silver to rape her as she gets off to the thought of such a naïve person forcing himself upon her.
But because silver would never do that she grows increasingly impatient and sexually frustrated. Eventually she will decide to rape Silver instead, sonic can sense Blaze's aura of rape and watches her closely with contempt.
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>>500494726
>blaze
you mean the sonic clone?
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>>500494726
what does this have to do with touhou
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https://rentry.org/Illusion-of-Oblivion
I got back to making more seeth rentries. here's a recently made megaman rework pasta
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>>500193936
Alright, I read these Xeunoeflaunz stories. Lots of minor grammatical mistakes but I'm not gonna get into that.
More importantly, I think the entire conception of the character is misguided. It shares the issue of the original Xenophanes where the connection to Sonic is extraneous, except it's even moreso with Xeunoeflaunz. The villain is this centuries-old witch who lures children into the woods with toys, and also kills adults who impede on her territory. She leaves a Sonic plush in the woods because the protagonist's nephew likes Sonic. That's it.
And the protagonist makes 2 or 3 references to her nephew liking Sonic, which are irrelevant to the actual events of the story and seem forced.
There's a running theme of the protagonist being worried that the witch will harm her family, and entry #4 reveals that the witch traps the souls of the children she kills in dolls, so I guess the use of the Sonic doll is supposed to be the witch threatening that she'll do the same to the protagonist's nephew. But this is a tenuous connection; any character could have served this role.
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>>500497864
Besides that, it's OK. It's an amateurishly written evil witch in the woods story, but I didn't go in expecting a lot. I'm at least interested enough to read a continuation of it, since chapter #5 ups the stakes with the protagonist getting trapped in the witch's pocket dimension and ends with the protagonist planning to kill the witch, so there's some anticipation of a climax.
I have other miscellaneous nitpicks, like how having to look up translations of the German is a little annoying, but like I said, I wasn't holding this story to high standards going in, so it's fine.
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>>500497864
>>500498273
I appreciate the feedback. the relevance to sonic Is pretty barebones specifically because I thought If xeunoeflaunz/xenia had too much of a connection to sonic like X, she wouldn't be taken as seriously, so I kept it down to earth with her deceiving children with toys and candy. I might make an alternative take on her being part of a creepy tails adventure/sky patrol romhack. this was my first attempt at writing a story about a witch, so I'm satisfied knowing I didn't completely botch it. also fun fact: the ending with her trying to trick dylan in a nightmare is based on her very first ref sheet
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>>500502891
what if you cut the connection to sonic and made it its own thing? you could even connect it to Halloween since it's near (or today for me.)
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>>500503102
I could, yeah. that or I could lean more into the sonic connection in a sequel. this was my overall attempt to bring a lot of story gimmicks from sonic.exe into a real-life horror movie type setting without having to spell it out. the doll vessels are obviously a stand-in for sprite vessels. jaime is a stand-in for derek/tom. and alexander is a stand-in for kyle sending a warning before his demise
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>>500505006
>I wanted to copy the things JC, the pedophile that wrote shitpastas, did and put them into a story that wasn't about Sonic.exe
Why would you admit to this? This is really embarrassing. You'd have to chop off my balls to get me to say this
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>>500505467
I was waiting for this response when I read that kek
>>500505006
The doll vessels were obvious but I didn't make the other connections. Like I said before, I think the whole idea is misguided. If you strip out the Sonic from Sonic.EXE, then you've removed everything funny or interesting about it and all you've got left are horror concepts that are bad or derivative. It's silly to remove most of the Sonic connection for the sake of the character being taken more seriously, but then shoehorning in a few obligatory references anyway. Either cut it all out or leave it all in, but don't pussyfoot around about it. You're right that a horror character with a strong connection to Sonic isn't going to be taken seriously, but is being taken seriously really a goal worth striving for with something like this?
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>>500506851
>If you strip out the Sonic from Sonic.EXE, then you've removed everything funny or interesting about it and all you've got left are horror concepts that are bad or derivative. It's silly to remove most of the Sonic connection for the sake of the character being taken more seriously, but then shoehorning in a few obligatory references anyway. Either cut it all out or leave it all in, but don't pussyfoot around about it.
you have a very good point. like I said, if I do make a sequel, I'll consider making it more sonic related. thanks for your input. there's definitely room to grow here
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>>500506851
Yeah, I agree with this. Either go all in with the Sonic theme or not. By not doing so, it makes the reader believe that the writer is not sure about what he's doing, and that's a terrible thing to happen to ANY writer.

>>500505006
Listen, you don't write stories to earn respect. That's not the goal. You write stories to entertain the audience, and you do that by not treating them like idiots.
I'll be honest here, your story is mediocre. It's nice but leaves a bitter taste in your mouth. It doesn't do anything that provokes a reaction from the reader. It's very milquetoast.

Here's my advice. Remove the sonic themes from your story, for they are weak, and drag it down.
Throughout history, there have been plenty of stories about witches. So, what you can do, is not write something original, but something that makes the reader think. After all, it is a scary story. They push the boundaries for a reason.

You can even make the villain be inspired by the likes of Baba Yaga, Slenderman, Salem, and many more witches from folklore and mythos.
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>>500508167
like I said in the post above, I'll go all out with the sonic connection if I do a sequel. the more I think about it, the more I feel like this is a stepping stone for something more. I really appreciate the constructive feedback here. one of my first ideas was her trapping souls of kids in cartridges for shits and giggles. maybe I could lean into the idea of a curse jaime unintentionally brought home, seeing the ending implies that the story isn't quite over yet
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>>500509880
You could utilize aspects from rituals/hexes/curses for your sequel.
Ex: Midnight Man
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>>500510553
A sonic-themed ritualpasta sounds funny
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>>500510553
I like that. thanks anon. I think next time I'll probably have Katie be the protagonist of the sequel to change things up.
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goodnight exeg
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https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4UXIvhf7raA
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https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ulH05Ha5rkU
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>>500517429
Kino...
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Happy halloweenie
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>>500524445
how should exeg celebrate it?
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>>500524557
Jerking off because I was going to do that anyway



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