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A thread for the creation and discussion of fan fiction and other fanworks - anything that involves a story and/or reading. What've you been reading? What've you been writing? What would you like to see more of?

>Thread question:
What's the most dumbest idea you've ever thought of or read from a fan work?

>Previous thread:
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>>58520079
I don't plan on bringing it up often, but in case any other writefags want to add themselves to this collection for easily recommending thread fics to people who ask for them then here is the link near the top of the thread.

https://archiveofourown.org/collections/vpfanfictionthread

Its unmoderated and opt in, and tI think there is a feature to add links to fics off site if you don't post on ao3. Hell, if you want it listed here but don't have an ao3 account I'll just add it for you if you want.
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What are you working on right now?
You can tell me even if you never plan on releasing it.
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>>58520079
>Thread question
Impossible to answer, I am a dumb idea machine. I shit out dumb ideas like I'm guzzling prune juice.

Off the top of my head I was planning on giving a Bulbasaur the Sharingan, making the Dragonite evolving into Yoshi april fools day prank an actual thing, and defeating Mewthree by just shooting it with a regular handgun. Was once going to make an ultra space organization that offered a sort of vacation package to world hoppers that lets them hunt important characters from the series for sport in specially designated 'doomed timelines'. I once turned Roxanne into a Nosepass gijinka. I had a dream once where God was a cute anime girl and I tried to eat her before getting my ass lightning'd, so I considered making that a scene with Arceus if I ever wrote a self insert isekai story. I got wild shit that I can't even mention because it would be spoilers. I plan on making a Magmar into an elegant ladies man. What if there was a scifi setting with cyborg implanted pokeballs where you stored pokemon in different limbs and the. Could use the pokemon's power yourself from those limbs? You ever heard of a Mist Stone? You ever consider adding Masters Ex lore to your fic? Pokemon Snap lore? Don't even get me started on whats going to happen to Erika.
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>>58520394
I’ve been working on a Pokémon dimensional merger DnD campaign set in the modern world for like 3 years, I got distracted tho because I got back into /x/ and now I’m gonna make it happen in real life instead.
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>>58520394
Right now working on the chapter where the giant Dragonite returns to the lighthouse.
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>>58520419
Hey if you're going to merge dimension's in real life please don't add too much dangerous shit I got a bum leg.
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>>58520394
I'm currently writing how Rei wound up with Mia.
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>>58520079
>TQ
My most recent one: A Dusknoir is tasked by the world of spirits to collect 1000 souls so he takes control of the giant mecha Tyranitar from Pokéstar Studios using a combination of Charge Beam and Poltergeist and uses it to destroy a nearby city.
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>>58520394
Still playing Z-A.
Might actually write something for once after though, I'm really enjoying the game.
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>>58520287
Thanks for the reminder, I need to add mine to this. The submission is confusing to me, am I supposed to be filling all these forms out like I'm making a new fic? I'll check it out on my PC when I'm home, I feel like I'm gonna bork it on my phone.
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>>58520596
You go edit the fic itself, then put the name of the collection in the collection part of your fic options.
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>>58520394
NOTHING. I have no inspiration or ideas at all.
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>>58520662
Write vore. As a joke.
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>>58520394
Pokémon related? I'm a gooner so a gacha crossover, be it Azur Lane or Blue Archive, fuck Mihomo

Other media? A Mass Effect crossover with Highschool of The Dead where a new Alliance Marine ended in that world/timeline during the final battle with the reapers and started wondering who's smart and petty enough to start some zombie plague just to say fuck it and blame the Salarians as a natural earthborn, still can't decide on his class tho but sentinel is my favorite
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>>58520079
>What would you like to see more of?
Not gonna lie, the new short has me looking for Gardevoir fics. Too bad I haven't found any good ones yet.
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>>58520900
What kind of Gardevoir fics? pokemonXpokemon I'd assume?
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>>58520931
SoL fics mainly, with preferably no romance.
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>>58520725
>sentinel
A man of wealth and taste I see.
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>>58520614
Neat, added it there. Hasn't popped up on the collection page for me yet but it's linked to it from the fic so I think it should appear soon.
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>>58520596
It was a very bizarre process. I think it was set up with writing contests in mind, but it doesn't give power of your fic over to the collection itself.
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So, I thought aura was overdone in fanfics but Arc-Suits are getting up there in official media
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>>58521489
what do they do anyways?
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>>58520079
>Thread Question
Templar Knight from the crusades gets isekai'd into PMD and starts evangelizing the natives
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>>58521489
I don't think people care much for the gacha, just look at how much fanart the protags of it get. Can you even name them?
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>>58521520
>protags
To be fair almost nobody cares about a gacha MC unless they have a canon design like the Gudas in FGO or Jobibito in Genshin
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>>58521528
>Jobibito in Genshin
And even then Lumine gets all the art
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No violent Gallade x Gardevoir fanworks exist which makes me sad
I have some ideas/plots written up in my notepad a while ago but I haven't written in so long I don't even know
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>>58521604
Just write it. The worst thing that can happen is that you'll have something that you can improve later.
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>>58521719
>1st review: kill yourself and delete this shit story
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>>58521757
Ey at least it's somethin'.
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Is docs the only good option for writing if you switch between phone, desktop, and laptop all the time?
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>>58521757
Kind of a right of passage. If you post on Ao3, just disallow guest comments for a while.
>>58520394
Choreographing a large skirmish.
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>>58521757
Who gives a shit? Are you writing to make a story or to get somebody to pat you on the head and tell you that you did a good job? If its the later you'd probably have better luck in a sub dom fetish club.
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>>58521875
I just write directly into ao3's submission box and post unfinished chapters as I work on them. But that's cause my work computer doesn't block a03 but does block google docs.
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>>58520394
Drawing an attack icon
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>>58521604
Can I see the ideas if you're not going to use them?
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>>58521757
People only leave angry reviews if you bash a character they like or if your ESL is abhorrent.
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>>58521719
thanks, likely It'll never get finished but at least I'd have tried I suppose
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>>58520394
Just a bunch of random, crack-ish Ashnime one shots that will likely never see the light of day.
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>>58522400
Huh, so I'm not the only one that wants to cripple Ash then. Because I swear that fucker is the kind of guy that would cut his own arm if its in the way of saving a Pokémon
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>>58520394
'Working on' is very charitable given how little I've touched it recently but I'm writing a story on a farm girl (basically pic related) becoming a field researcher for Holon.
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>>58523030
>Holon
Now that's the good shit. I need to shoehorn Holon into my fics sometime.
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So what's the official language?
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>>58523314
Unovan. You can't spell Unovan without Uno, which references Unova's status as #1 and also hints towards being the Unown's chosen peoples.
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>>58523314
none/universal
no tower of babel = one language
this is also why unown are just english and regis are just braille but nobody can decipher them

alternatively, french
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>>58523314
>"My dear students! How ARE you all today? Feeling good, I hope?"
>"Je m'appelle Salvatore. My name is Salvatore!" "Merci beaucoup! That is, thank you very much for your attention here in my class!"
>"I'm so heureux—or happy—for this chance to re-experience my younger days with you all!"
>"Do you know what "Salvatore" means? It means "savior"! So just imagine I'm here to SAVE you from spooooky new languages. Haha! Funny, no?"
>"That's right! My classes will teach you about various languages from different regions. You may say "Good morning!" or "Hello!" as a greeting, but people from elsewhere may say "Bonjour!" or "Salut!" I've heard there's even a popular streamer out there who smashes several languages together and says "'Ello, 'ello, hola! Ciao and bonjour!""
>"There are so many regions out there in the world, and each can have their own unique languages!"
>"Gracias, merci, xièxie, arigato, danke—these all have the same meaning! Can you guess what it is?"
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Doesn't the existence of all our languages developed in the exact same way imply the pokemon world's history very closely mirrors our own? So Pokerome existed, and then fell, and the Pokeromantic languages were developed over time?
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>>58523621
So Volo is just a seething Judas?
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>>58523643
Nah, religion stays the same you just add pokemon
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>>58520394
Little root town nervous wreck of a bumpkin realizing he’s neglecting his Blaziken by avoiding battles and deciding to treat it to a surprise on both their 18th birthday by booking tickets to Galar with absolutely no preparation in the slightest. The concept of someone who’s almost never battled going to Galar, The region completely centered around battling, with a heavily organized Gym Challenges, with a culture revolved around battling, and the most battle focused region out of all the with many career trainers was a fun concept to think about.

I have not touch it in 8 months
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>>58523675
Who was Judas's ace?
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>>58520394
M8 bashfic.
Galar fixbashfic journeyfic.
Galar bashfic again only a single fight this time.
Roleswap AU Japan Region related only things allowed journeyfic.
Slow and steady.
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>>58523782
Golisopod
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>>58520394
Orre journeyfic with way too many toku cues. Gonna have my MC steal Gonzap's keystone towards the end of the front half tho.
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>>58524037
>with way too many toku
Nah, that's based. I've been sneaking an increasing number of super robot references into mine.
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>>58524051
It's gonna include a Shadow Nymble/Lokix, so I think I'm going too far toku dess
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>>58524158
Bruh I gave a Charcadet Mazinger Z's Photon Beam, there's no such thing as too far so long as you're willing to commit.
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>>58524498
Kanto boys make the best Nurse Joys.
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>>58524173
Why not go all the way and make it a Mazin-Golurk then?
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>>58524537
Why do you think I made (one of) his rival's ace a Golett?
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>>58524498
Damn how bad was my coma that I woke up three decades later in France?
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>>58523943
That explains why Guzma is carying 13 pieces of silver in popt
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>>58523643
Wandering Jew
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>>58523621
How the fuck does that work if AZ is 3,000 years old and he was already living in pokefrance?
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>AZ has an unnaturally long lifespan
>AZ was around before Celestica even formed
>Certain Celesticans have unnaturally long lifespans
>AZ roamed the world
>AZ was confirmed to have had children coincidentally in the same game that had Hisui references, including a strong Volo reference
Bros... You don't think AZ might be Volo's and Cynthia's... maybe even Cogita's...
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>>58526266
>AZ was confirmed to have had children
Where
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>>58526266
So thats why every westerner today has traces of floette dna.
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>>58520079
Anything with Dead Rhydon?
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>finally decide to check out a popular fic people keep talking about
>it's 2.3 MILLION words long
Literally how. Why. Who the fuck has time for this?
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>>58526450
I assume you're talking about IWTTS, and the crazier part to me is it only took the author three years to write that. There was also a fat hiatus somewhere in there as well.
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>>58526478
I was actually talking about Traveler. You mean to tell me there's another fic that length? Jesus. These people need to be locked in a room with an irate editor for a week.
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>>58526450
There's an academy fic with over 7 million words that started before the SM games were first announced
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>>58526812
>academy
About what? Like we didn't know anything about Pokémon schools beyond Cheren being a teacher in one
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>>58520696
Not even close to my fetish. I did come up with a vague idea of beating up Jacinthe though.
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>>58526968
It was a joke anon, calm down.

I'll write your fetish if you write mine.
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>>58525779
I just like how you can randomly bring in Volo to any fucking fic now since he's immortal.
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>>58527990
>immortal
Long lived tho, immortal means he can't be killed
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>>58523598
You can still have different languages but a completely different writing system that doesn't match what we know is the original language.
サルバトーレ is still Salvatore but written differently. You can have people speak German but write in hieroglyphics.
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>>58520079
>TQ
MC takes drugs and sees his Pokemon as Digimon for a whole chapter
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Any of you will use Tierno's sister?
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>>58528971
Mine would be four years older, and have had a different life since Sycamore still being the Professor means my world didn't go through the same events of Z-A. I'd have to think about what to do with her, and all of MZ.
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>>58526450
This but with These Silver Eyes at 700k words. That shit only released it's chapter last year, the fuck do you mean he's already at 700k?
I've read up to chapter 3 so far and I can already see why. It's rambling and full of unnecessary thought dialogue. I swear to god if I have to skim over another 500 words of straight
>Am I in the manga? Or the games? Maybe the anime? Maybe a mix of the three? Wait, does that mean Ash is here? Wait, does that mean x is here? What about y?"
I think I'll spray quicksilver into my eyes until I too have intimidating silver eyes.
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>>58529197
>I'm only gonna be at 80k over the course of a year
Am I cooked...?
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>>58520394
I'm taking a fat fucking dump right now
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>>58526450
Origin of Species is also long as fuck but it's kino
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>>58529181
I mean Sycamore is still doing professor things, he's just out of region with ya boi Trevs right now.
A writer could easily slot him back into Lumiose whenever they want
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>>58529197
But silver eyes aren't even that weird in Pokémon
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Do you think it's bullshit gary sue shit if you give your protag Pokémon they owned before the story? For context, I want to do a rewrite of ZAs story to fix some things and make a romance between taunie and paxton, but I wanted to give paxton a few Pokémon ahead of time that helped define his character. Was thinking of giving him an Aggron, a Garchomp, and a Nidoking, but i don't know if that's too much or too op. They would be present, but not really on his team until his rank could use them.
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>>58528971
As breeding stock. I never got around to writing any pregnancy harem smut.
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>>58529586
Are her GENES good enough tho? Like no Mewtwo genes, no psychic genes, not even aura genes.

Sounds like trash bro
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>>58529197
I don't understand why anyone with standards would click on a fic that advertises itself as a self-insert fic to begin with. There has never been anything good under that tag and there never wiil be.
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>>58529579
No, that's honestly more natural than every single story being about an entirely fresh rookie just getting their starter. I actually have two fics where the equivalent of a champion battle for the MC takes place in the first chapter. A fully fledged team is fine if it serves the story you're writing.
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>>58529595
Her genes are irrelevant, my genes carry.
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>>58529579
I'd think it's gary sue unless it's a grimdark setting where that level of instant strength is necessary to survive.
>They would be present, but not really on his team until his rank could use them.
That sounds contrived and begs the question why they've been given to him in the first place.
Why give them to him if he's not going to immediately start using them? If you don't want him to have OP mons, it's better to give him an aaron, gible, and nidoran so they can be present in the story and grow with him.
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>>58529605
It's a cultured man's obligation to read the latest edgeslop that's gained notoriety. How can one appreciate the brightest heights of man without also knowing of its blackest depths?
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>>58528971
I’d rather use the dragon maid girl.
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>>58529638
Do YOU have MewTwo genes, Psychic genes or aura genes? Because if not you're trash too unworthy of a having a pokédex and being a dexholder
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>>58529649
>why they've been given to him in the first place
They're not gifts, they're HIS Pokémon that he brought from Galar. He was going on vacation, and he brought his friends, not planning to need to use them. Once he joins the ZA royale at the behest of Taunie, he figures it'd be fun to give them a break and try the challenge on his own. Each of them were a pokemon he caught when he was younger, or was given to him somehow. Aron was given to him by his uncle, and while exploring the caves over on the west side of galar, a gible latched onto his Aron and wouldn't let go because he thought aron was food. Last to join was his nidoran, that he caught with the help of his dad.
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>>58529768
That makes me want to ask: What's the worst Pokefic you've ever read, anons? Did you drop it or did you continue to the end just out of morbid curiousity?
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>>58529586
>tfw you were a filthy tumblrite in your youth and have already written descriptions for how all your ships' kids will look, even if they won't appear until the epilogue, or at all
Preg
Preg for everyone
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>>58529831
A fic my friend was writing about being a pokemon hunter, which is basically his equivalent to kratos and went around killing legendary pokemon for money
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>>58529785
Of course I do, I specifically knocked up Mewtwo, Sabrina, and Lucario for those purposes.
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>>58529831
I have only read thread fics and fetish fics. So that in mind, PokeNormal.
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>>58529579
It depends on their experience as a Pokémon Trainer. Usually, the games' protagonists only got their Training Licences. It may be possible that Paxton only came to Luminose City to get his starter Pokemon so that he can participate in the Z-A Royale (which is the reason why your player character came there in the first place).
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Bump
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>>58529831
Into the Unown, it got really boring
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>>58529579
You should make the Rust Syndicate an actual evil team too
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>>58529605
>I don't understand why anyone with standards
Where do you think we are?
Which franchise do you think this is?
No one who's into Pokemon in the current year can be said to have any sort of self-respect.
And honestly? Good for the dude. Is it self-insert power fantasy edgefest sloppa? Yes. But you know what the fucker is doing? He's busting his ass WRITING. And writing what he wants, cringe as it may be. That alone makes him better than 99.9% of people here.
If nothing else I can respect their hustle because we all know how hard it is to be able to get your shit together enough to be able to have such big and consistent output.
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>>58529579
You can have one “non Gary Stu” Pokémon on the team, pre-evolved, and it probably works better if only one Pokémon in the team makes it to the end..

I worked on a concept like that, the MC had a Thwackey and would eventually include getting a Charcadet. But he had a Bibarel and a Yanma, making a 3-team group of mons.
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>>58532145
Trve...
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>>58529831
Trainer Vicky, don't know why it's so popular
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>>58533556
>don't know why it's so popular
It ticked the boxes. OP SI Isekai, frequent updates, etc.
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Any fics where the protag dates both Carmine and Kieran, or has a bisexual harem?
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Fuck it, I think I'm gonna write a full-on AI fanfic and post it somewhere to see how popular it gets and whether or not people notice. What are some pitfalls I should avoid that instantly clue people that what they're reading was written by a machine? Too much purple prose, weird formatting?
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>>58533836
>Too much purple prose
This one is the most glaring issue, the format is whatever if you say you're ESL but over the top descriptions? Fuck off with that
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>>58529836
I've always wanted to do this but I've been lazy.
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>>58533836
Just tell the AI not to write like an AI.

Serious answer, keep it short. AI can't keep long stories going because it doesn't understand the real context of things. So the longer the story the more obvious it will be that it is AI.

Serious advice, just don't bother. You're not going to make any serious bucks trying to fleece readers with an AI story because its not going to be anything worth reading without the intent of an author behind the events of the story. To do so would require so much fine tuning that you'd be putting in the same amount of work you'd be doing if you just wrote the thing yourself.
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>>58529281
I'm gonna be at 50k
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>>58520394
I'm a tourist from /trash/, i'm writing something pokemon, but i'm not writing it for this thread so i'm not sure if i should post here...
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>>58533836
If you are literate. Rephrase everything it puts out in your own words. Remember that it doesn't have your ideas or contextual memory so constantly proofread and edit before sharing to keep things consistent with past events. Even better. At that point just write it yourself dummy.
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So is Emma even a good detective or just larping as one helped by her suit?
>Play the game
Nah, I'm a poorfag and even then I wouldn't pay for modern Pokémon
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>>58534657
Go for it.
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>>58535046
She says that she uses the suit when necessary.
NPCs in game only have good things to say about her, so there's no reason to assume that she sucks at her job.
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>>58536116
Her cases are mostly people asking to see Pokemon like Flabebé though
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>>58535046
She's unironically one smart cookie. She seems to know all the lore about everyone important in the games (Lysandre, Mable, Grisham/Griselle, AZ), has a good rep with anyone that talks about her, Lysandre seems genuinely concerned she's on his ass at the start of the game, and she has no problem running investigations with the player (though she mentions her Espurr can find missing people with telepathy). She has this perpetually smug face the entire game, like she knows something the player doesn't.

I do think the fact that her ace is a Mega Malamar of all things is VERY sus. Do I think she's brainwashing people to get information out of them and then making them forget about it in the name of justice? Blurring ethical lines when questioning people in time sensitive cases? Maybe.
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>>58520394
Decided to actually go forward with jjk 10 shadows idea.
https://rentry.co/qewqwmix
Maybe I'll post it on the big three sites in the future once I go back and correct a few things.
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>>58537150
Her ace is a Malamar because one of her dads gave it to her.
It's really just that shrimple.
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>>58532126
Oh, undoubtedly. Corbeau's an actual bastard, doing other things to entrap her like promising that the Rust Syndicate will stay at her hotel. In reality, it's positioned in a blind spot to Jacinthe's SBC, which is also a far more sinister group too. There's a massive power struggle between the two currently going on in the city. The Rust Syndicate isn't fully evil, but if you know anything about GW Plunkitt, he's operating similar to them. Calling it "honest graft", where he's trying to make money but doing it to help lumiose. Meanwhile, the SBC is basically team flare 2.0, and believes that those who aren't rich aren't worthy of living in lumiose, and wants to evict anyone who can't join the club to transform Lumiose into a city similar to Monaco in terms of wealth.
>>58532313
Define "non gary stu" pokemon. Do aggron and nidoking constitute that?
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>>58537413
You're so right anon Malamar is just so...friendly, so it would never do something bad like that! It's only natural that her trainer would be friendly too, so I can be at ease and talk to Emma about anything she wants! As a matter of fact, detective, I did see something suspicious last week, I shouldn't be talking about this but I just get the feeling I can trust you...
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>>58537426
Are they fully evolved at the start? Maybe one of them is but the other isn’t for whatever reason. Unless you NEED those two at the start. Also based Kaiju-mon enjoyer.
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>>58537467
The plan was for them to be fully evolved, yes. They're his bros he's had since he was a kid, and I'm placing his age at around 22-23ish? So he's had them since he was around 4 when he was given his aron, and then obtained the gible when it tried to eat his aron, and when he turned 10 Nidoran was his first pokemon he caught. Once he gets to the city though, and obtains a totodile from Taunie, he decides to bench them until the rules of the royale say he can use them. They'll still be around for the slice of life moments of the fic though. Aggron is a happy giant, garchomp is kind of grouchy but still gentle, and nidoking is the peacemaker who mostly gets by on looking really scary.
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>>58529579
For one-shots it's fine to do whatever.
For gym leader/elite four/etc fics already having a team is fine, they're characters expected to have a name for themselves.
For long fics with a self-insert or the default main protagonist? Then I want to see him/her start at the bottom and go to the top.
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>>58537150
In the original XY she's brainwashed so her having a Malamar is kinda like a nod to that fact.
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>>58537509
You lost me at Garchomp desu

It’s the ultimate min-max pseudo. If you’re going for power fantasy and “this character is fucking AWESOME” I guess it’s necessary, but it’s something I like seeing in antagonists or rivals because of its reputation. That’s personal preference for me though. It’s your story, you can do anything in creative writing as long as you do it well.
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>>58537578
>keeps a picture of xerosic in her office even now
Yeah, I'm sure the fat bastard wasn't draining his balls inside her brown pussy every time she was knocked out and acting as Essentia. I'm sure her relationship to the evil scientist was purely platonic, surely. She definitely doesn't have reoccurring dreams where a fat older man is rearranging her insides, only to wake up and masturbate guiltily, desperately trying not to think of her father, rationalization working overtime to spare her from uncomfortable truths.
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>>58537645
>It’s the ultimate min-max pseudo
Yeah, that's the unfortunate part. I honestly wish he was less good so that he didn't have the reputation. I think the flavor reasoning of it is fine, also he's one of my favorite pokemon, but I'm fine with devolving him down to a gabite by the events of the story. I like garchomp for the story because my vision for him is the OPPOSITE of what he normally is. He's a grouchy goofball, behaving more like a cat shark than anything else and just being generally lazy until he has to battle. He's not even paxton's ace either, that title will go to Aggron.
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>>58529579
It’s definitely a bit bullshit given you start at rank Z. Maybe if they were their base forms. is captcha shitting itself or is it just me
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>>58537690
I’d say emphasize your unique characterization of Garchomp if you’re gonna go that route then.
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>>58537443
>>58537679
You have a very specific fetish, don't you anon?
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>>58537744
Sure, but the idea of paxton having never battled before and turning out to be battle jesus doesn't sit right with me. I wanted to give him some history before he came to lumiose, and hint at him being kind of a fraud despite his strong pokemon and needing to learn how to use them. and yeah it's definitely shitting itself
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>>58537820
Is he a nepo baby or something?
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>>58537829
No, not really. Grew up in Galar outside of Motostoke, uncle worked in the crown tundra as a miner and caught an Aron to give him for his birthday. While visiting that uncle a few years later, a gible tried to eat his aron and wouldn't let go of it, forcing him to carry them both back crying to his parents to get help. A few years after that, he got his training license, and set out to try his hand at the gym challenge. He wasn't able to make it past Kabu, unfortunately, and so he gave up to focus on school and learning instead. He caught a Nidoran during this time, and that formed his team for the challenge.
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>>58537820
To be fair ZA's story definitively would flow better if you came into the city as an experienced trainer.
In other games you need to go through humble beginnings and by the time you have some bigshot characters saying lines like "I put faith in you, etc" you have a background of genuine accomplishments, barely having a LV5 start and being asked to join AZ and do a battle royale that you can be ambushed is a hell of a learning curve (narrative-wise at least).
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>>58537867
That's too many cooks in the kitchen, I have literally zero idea what to think of this character, pick one story.
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>Champion level trainers can only do ONE (1) Mega Evolution per battle because the toll on their body is too high
>Pax and Harmonia can easily manage unlimited Mega Evolution on different pokemon, without any side effects
How are they so FUARKING STRONG and have so much Aura?
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>>58529579
>Garchomp,
No.
Just no.
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>>58537892
Gotcha. Then I can simplify it to "got aron as kid, caught gible and nidoran on vacation in crown tundra". I'm still pretty inexperienced so feedback like this really helps a lot.
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>>58537899
The AZ bloodline flows through their body. You didn't think something was odd with how well AZ treated them and how much interest he took in them?
Their branch of his lineage has managed to condense his bloodline's power into the lifespan of a normal human. They're at LEAST as powerful as 30 humans, and that's on top of the latent alpha genes in AZ's bloodline which might have also been condensed into raw power.
fuck captcha's loading times btw
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>>58537820
Give him the Ash treatment: bring in one Pokémon (preferably pre-evolved but experienced) and have him use his knowledge to train new Pokémon that he befriends.
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>>58537899
>city is currently suffused with Xerneas' life energy
>by battling so many alphas, aka pokemon infused with xerneas' energy, we imbibe upon it
>this rejuvenates us every time we fight, reversing the side effects of mega evolution
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>>58537928
Imagine If there was a way to continuously farm the virile, precious life energy of Alphas...like maybe ingesting their semen or vaginal fluids h-haha...you could keep sucking them off and you wouldn't have to capture them or defeat them and you'd get really good at battles...that'd be pretty funny...
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>>58537941
that's certainly an idea anon hey you should go share that with your parents or grandparents i'm sure they'd love to learn about this
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I don't browse this thread for furfaggotry, tone it down.
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>>58537382
I don't know jjk but I'll put it on my read list.
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>>58537899
I thought it was because the city was saturated with mega energy due to the ultimate weapon and Ange.
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>>58537914
Personally, I don't think it's that complex. You pretty much summed up the entire history in a paragraph. I honestly don't see why people are saying to change your original idea, I like the idea of a more seasoned pokemon trainer being the protagonist. I don't see what the need to build a team for scratch in the story. Unless you're specifically doing a power fantasy thing about starting out weak then its perfectly natural for somebody of Paxton's age to have 3 fully evolved pokemon. I like your idea of him already having experience to explain why he's competent at battling. Might just be personal tastes but I feel like pokemon trainers are more interesting once they've gotten some experience. A rookie trainer is going to be boring unless you specifically are making a story about a rookie trainer and intend to make it interesting somehow. If the story isn't about being a rookie then it just feels like needless busy work to get to the meat of the story.
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>>58537941
>ingesting semen
What a fucking waste. If it's not knocking something up its useless.
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>>58538082
>>58537928
None of the other trainers in ZA can Mega Evolve multiple times or with multiple pokemon in the same battle thoughever
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>>58538105
>None of the other trainers
*Cough*every PC is the literal child of destiny going by SV DLC*Cough*

Even the manga has X doing it
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>>58538176
Yeah okay that's fucking stupid
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>>58538176
Are they strong because they're the child of destiny, or are they the child of destiny because they're strong?
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>>58538509
Is Fugg strong because he knows about NUTRITION or does he know about NUTRITION because he's strong and a foxfucker?
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>>58538176
>every PC is the literal child of destiny going by SV DLC*Cough*
What do you mean?
I thought the DLC just involved Kieran whining about how the main character of that game is a prodigy and keeps getting lucky, rather than implying every MC is canonically a chosen one
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>>58537914
You don't need to change the story just to please one guy, anon
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>>58537914
Ecchoing the other anons, there is nothing confusing about it at all. His ''constructive-criticism'' had zero effort in it, just like his reading comprehension.
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>>58539247
Don't listen to this one anon, he doesn't speak for everyone!
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>>58537914
So if you’re going for the “got filtered by Kabu” thing (which is beyond fine and I honestly like), I really don’t think you can have all three fully evolved at the start of the story. This is literally me being my autistic self, so no worries, but I’ll try to explain my thought process.

Garchomp will hard stomp the whole way up the ladder until rank D and above. It’s basically a cheat code even if it gives no fucks except for meaningful competition. If you haven’t read Borne of Caution, I’ll just say that when you have OP protag Pokémon, every battle you’re trying to make compelling will be such a fucking nightmare to do in order to make it debatable whether the MC will win that you’ll likely lose motivation to do so (like Fuggman himself has).

How I’d do it (which I will re-iterate, you don’t have to, this is just my autistic idea for your story which shouldn’t hold too much weight) is I’d have Gabite and Lairon, but Nidoking got evolved too early so it didn’t learn whatever “necessary skills” it needed as a Nidorino, so it still needs a lot of development. Possibly even have the MC be psyched out by Fire Type specialists, so these would be easy rival characters (or eventual love interests). Take everything I say with a grain of salt tho anon, it’s your story.
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>>58539377
And to further expand upon this, I will say that none of us anons in this thread know the vibe or vision you have for your story. For my WIP, I tossed a lot of suggestions into this thread, some good, some bad, and if the feedback wasn’t well thought out enough for me, I’d disregard it. Some anons will at least catch some of your vision, or at least see what you’re going for and will provide GOAT feedback, but not all of us are those anons. It’s up to you to decide what’s best for your story at the end of the day. Which is most of the fun of writing, isn’t it?
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>>58537867
>walled by Kabu while having a Gabite/Garchomp
only works if it doesn't obey order like Ash's Charizard



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