This is the writing thread, for all things VTuber fanfiction. Our works cover a wide variety of different stories ranging from greentext shitposts, full-length adventure novels and smut that’s been tuned to capture (almost) every fantasy. You can check out the three years' worth of stories we’ve written in the archive below: https://script.google.com/macros/s/AKfycbxZVzygb0QjJ6hksAEYzCbLCegxsjhui97BB73qzPvU7GgJv6fXdAPmmIv6Qt9H5d5Fzg/exec"Isn't this just you fuckers writing fanfiction?"Yes.Previous thread: >>79345020(Where we talked about The Liz Everywhere system, and being a major writing General)/wg/ rentry: https://rentry.org/wgrentry/
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Story recap. There were two stories posted last thread:Too Real >>79393899needs tagsButtslut >>79402890Needs tags
A friendly reminder to please title and tag your fics when you post them to the anchor. It makes things a lot easier for our Archiver.
>A-chan announces her retirement>dramamonkeys accelerate the board with garbage posts and there's no stickyhonestly, this place and my general are the only reason i use 4chan. ITs all so irony poisoned and fucking garbage
>>79416721Pretty new to this. Is there a list of standard tags or do I just spout whatever I want?
>>79417676generally, you tag with: relevent chuuba/s (not every character, just the important ones) if it's sfw or nsfw, then any relevent tag like you'd see to describe an anime or a hentai
>>79417819Alright, I guess you can apply the ERB/Liz tag, dickgirl, femboy, anal, excessive cum and (obviously) nsfw tags to Buttslut. I'm not sure if I'm done editing, so if there's a log or archive it gets added to will any changes be noted?
>>79417150It's not like /wg/'s doing amazingly either...Not in a shitposter sense, but there just isn't as much being written nowadays.
She will always be a staple of my "Tokyo, 20 minutes in the future" fics. Doesn't matter if she's been gone, A-chan will always be there supporting the talents and giving (You) a debriefing on managing the talents/killing their stalkers/wrangling the menheras/teaching them English..
>>79417998What like automatically? No this is done by an Archiver and the anchors are there so they aren't troubled doing this.
>>79418022I think plenty is getting written, it just takes time for things to get finished.
>>79418022When you consider the board we're inhabiting, /wg/ is a shining beacon of civilization. We have fun discussions every now and then and people are generally able to leave tribalfaggotry and other nonsense at the door. That's more than you'll ever get anywhere else on /vt/.
>>79418540What I meant is will the link I provided be what's given in the archive or will the text be copy/pasta'd to some collection, removing my ability to maintain it? Regardless I'll be shipping this one to Literotica shortly anyway, so it'll be there if nowhere else.
>>79418698I noticed that. The last thread had a heavy focus on Liz and virtually no shitposting occurred. Literally unheard of this past week.
>>79418022Oh Elden Ring...>>79418191She's just way to useful to the setting as a named staff member with links to the very beginning of hololive.
Because A-chan OP...https://files.catbox.moe/k2jnkw.mp3https://files.catbox.moe/k2jnkw.mp3https://files.catbox.moe/k2jnkw.mp3
>>79418727What fucking offbrand text hosting site are you using? There's a reason we use rentry as our side fanfic host since it lets users keep their text urls if they edit them.
>>79417150Sister janny blocked it probably.Sigh. Just as I feared. What are they saying?(the catalog)
>>79418698Yeah, only place where we can discuss Stars and Live together without some retard tryna yell at (you) about how it should not be
>>79417676Please refer to https://rentry.org/wgrentry/ (also displayed in the archive linked in the OP) for basic "how do I post fics" questions.
>>79418965You've misunderstood me. I have an edit link for my story, but if the archivist copies the text as a whole to a separate collection I will have lost my ability to edit. Your post suggests that's not what happens, though.
>>79419719If you use Rentry or Google Docs, the original link will be put in the archive for sure.
>>79419776It's a random paste site. I like the throwaway nature for WIPs and betas..
>>79419695 (me) Wrong rentry link, sorry. It's https://rentry.org/VTCFFCD
>>79419719No we don't do that, that's why the archive is a series of links rather than copies.
I'm glad I can still edit my old fics when I reread them and find something I don't like
>>79420571A story is never really finished, is it?
>>79420748To me it's only definitely finished if the author dies without designating a worthy heir. If there is an heir, it's over with their death
We're all just casually ignoring what ALS is and how many laws it violates.
>>79421217I mean is it really incest if they don't even share blood?
>>79421217WTF does Lou Gehrig have to do with anything?
>>79421217I'm ignoring all the illegal violence in action fics, too.
>>79421371>>79421474>>79421560It's actual legitimate cheese pizza. The author actually cooked cheese pizza.
thinking about suiboy ass again, sighstop engaging with shitposters
>>79421599>author>legitimate cheese pizzalol
>>79412037Ayame is trying to organize a big performance project with the whole school and you're the only one who is still refusing to participate
>>79420748I deem my stuff finished when I get tired of it lol
>>79421709Would you be willing to say the same thing before a judge?
>>79421661The day lostwind10 does a video in Suisei cosplay I will masturbate myself to death
>>79421951This is something I’m too straight to understand, isn’t it?
>>79422026Traps are straight-adjacent
>>79422077Nah
>>79421661I still wish a fic doing something like safety spats but as a long form slowburn romance would be made someday...Also that top less male swimsuit suisei fic. (Not the one that got released, the one that got teased involving suisei pretending to be a boy and getting teased for it.)
>>79421843Sure would. Fiction is just that.
>>79422077But nearly perpendicular, heh.
>>79421599And you masturbated to it, didn't you Anon?Did you like seeing the little boy mix his perception of love with lust? Did you cum when he took the initiative?
>>79422169Safety Spats was pretty good until the last part where it does the biggest jumping the shark I've seen on /wg/. Anon suddenly turns from an average nice guy into a super dominating sadist and Suisei into a total submissive boyslut.
>>79422605Yeah, honestly outside of the smut scene making that turn the fic's pretty much that suiboy romance that I've wanted to see but in one shot form. I like it way better than Otoko ja nai suisei desu, that one just didn't feel like it was committed to the bit.
>>79422101What you have to remember that traps are not just any trannies or crossdressers. Traps are crossdressers that are so beautiful and feminine that they or the author can fool you or the other characters to think they're women (draw a girl, call it a boy), that's the entrapment mechanism of a trap.
>>79423071I’m not budging on this
>>79423198Basically the deal you make with traps is this: in return for losing a little bit of the straightness, you'll be compensated in taboo points. But it's still mostly straight in spirit.
>>79423455I get my taboo elsewhere thank you very much
>>79423593That gave me a funny mental image>"May I interest you with some of my other wares, sir? We've got all kinds of taboos here. There's Suicest, there's..."
>>79423897>”we got wedgies on discount”
>>79423897>"Pardon me sir," another fellow speaks up "forgive me if I'm being rude by asking but may you by chance sell Netorare in this shop?"
>>79423897The Suicest, in my hand, post haste!
>>79423897>Ya pulling my leg here Louie, i already have two fluffs in my house
>>79423897>"I'm interested in your 'specialty goods.'">the shopkeep scans the store to make sure there are no other customers before motioning towards the door to the back with his head>they slip into the back, and he opens what looks like an unassuming armoire to reveal rows and rows of contraband fetishes inside>"What's your poison? Dogs? Flies? Scat?"
>>79425086
>>79423897>"Hey, slick, you got any of the, uh..." Anon shivers, a symptom of withdrawal. "You got any of that bdsm shit? The good stuff, you know? Ball-busting dommy mommy crap, yeah..."
>>79424439>"Ah but sir! This the latest entry in the series! Fresh from the author themselves!"
>>79426227>>79425086>>79424439>>79423897Essentially a reskin of that other prompt where fics are drugs.
>>79416540Sad fic about anon failing to confess to his senior, A-chan in time while he laments her leaving and not having the courage to do anything about it.
>>79426957But here, it's presented as a semi-legit business, complete with an honest to goodness proprietor
>>79427970Here, I O (You)s are accepted and encouraged.
>>79423897>The dealer throws two stacks on paper onto the table, snorting and cracking his neck>This right here, is cunny, and this is 'cunny'>Now nothing wrong with this one, good stuff, cute, funny, bald mounds, little girl, all that good shit, comes free with incest tropes and so.>But this one, the 'cunny', this one is so strong you might have trouble putting it down, hell, it's banned by AA, even. This shit oughta put you on a watchlist. I only sell the right goods to the right people.
>>79421599You know, this is the second time my fic gets compared to pizza. Must mean I did something right.
best of luck to you bros, may you write something splendid
>>79421371They didn't share blood, but rather a soul.It's a new dimension of metaphysical incest.
>>79416540Holos having a poolside competition with barely-veiled lewdness in the disciplines.
>>79430383To you as well bro. Thanks for the encouragement.
>>79416540Hey did you know that hakos baelz from hololive promise (formerly hololive council) is only 1 (one) meter and 49 (fortynine) centimeters, a people pleaser and a girl that is always down to help? can you imagine wanting to do something perverted to her? can you imagine her blushing but nodding anyway? can you imagine just picking her up since she's so light and there's that spark in her eyes that tells you she's about to do anything you tell her to?
>>79432056i knew all of that but i cant start another wip
>>79432056I didn't know she was almost as short as Chloe. I thought she was 154 or something
>>79430432did she go full fruit ninja on that watermelon or what
>>79432701shit quality but Kobo being taller than her and chloe is some vodoo shit.but im okay with Nerissa being the tallest (Kaela is 172) since she's cute
>>79432877Kaela is 173cmNerissa is 175cm
>>79432877Indonesia voodoo hitting different
bump
>>79433862Wait the tallest holo is only 5’8”? Kek
>>79437757Coco was 6ft I think
>>79438925Still short
>>79433862They're both taller than me....
>>794389255' 11">making fun of your girlfriend Coco because she's an inch shorter than you>she piledrives you.onto the bed
>>79438990Goliathchama...>>79441034Davidchama...
>>79441034God cursed me by making every single girl shorter than me... I wish i could give you some inches manletbro.... I want your life
>>79443906And tall girls usually don't want to wear high heels, sadly.
>>79443906>I wish i could give you some inchesJeez anon, that's kinda gay but alright.
I don't think there's been a chuuba who's triggered my instinctual desire to breed faster than Raora>Pink>Thick legs and butt>Barely able to speak English>Panther Girl(One of the horniest kemos)
>>79443906i dont need inches, i'm dorfmaxxing
>>79445618She's really cute when wearing her goggles, too.
>>79433862K-kaela-san is almost exactly on my height???? Hell yeah
>>79448437Among all the guys that like short girls and all the guys who want a giant Laplus to toy with them, one brave anon sticks up for women of his size.
>>79437757they are all tiny Asian women. That's why Mori is like a fucking quarterback to them since she's average west height and the IDs are noodles.bet Nerissa must be like Shaq because she's midwestern.
>>79451812The IDs are IRyS's arms?
>>79450373A true hero.
>>79452076worsethey are ao's
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i want to sniff gigi's hikki shorts
>>79445618She's also a hag She should get her own chapter of PD;PT
>>79445618She strikes me as a pleaser, you could probably ask her to do anything and she will not only jump at the chance but make you regret (in a good way) asking.
>love lapras>Hate cunnitrash>no one fucking cares that she doesnt act like a loli, they just paint her as one
>>79459734You're as strict as Flare on this, huh
>>79416540Gigi going "Isn't this romantic~?" every time you two do anything together.
>>79460904I love womanlets.I hate stupid ToT retards because they are creatively bankrupt and try to claim any girl that isnt a titcow into their circle so they can make either most boring pastiche known to mankind or actually fucked up shit that puts them in IRL listsSimple as
>>79461188>Be Sensei. Work at a public school>Give Gigi, the first year her test back (20%) as she tells you how romantic remedial classes are>Second year class. Have to call Bae, Fauna and Shiori out for writing fanfics in class>Third year girls (Mori, Ame and Nerissa) are triying to get in your pants with shit they pulled out from anime>go to the teacher's lounge. Evade Marine and Lui>sigh>Its another day as a guy surrounded by fujos and losers
>>79461325I will travel back in time and sexually abuse your womanlet while she's in kindergarten.
>>79462060you wont because that means doing something original and lolicons cant do that
>>79416540You break into Marine's house with your friend, conveninent character Roberu.You're planning to steal a bunch of shit, but see Marine in a nightgown trying to get it on, 'Sooo, why did you pick my house?' kind of thing. You still try to look for valuables until Marine touches Roberu and he curls up in fear. You call the police because your friend got molested.
>>79416540Tired of being laughed as "the girlfailure of EN", Nerissa shows you she's the very best at somethingsex. its sex. sexo
>>79467592
>>79467750Do you see a "sex with nerissa" prompt every day? every thread?no. Do you see a sex with nerissa fic in the archive? noIn conclusion? Suck my cock and balls like nerissa would do, massive faggot
>>79467906At least TRY to sell it like you want someone to make it for you.
>>79468665And you should try to engage with prompts and/or the thread instead of sitting in the fence and going "no"
>>79467906>Kurokami is in heat. She still doesnt lose her edge>pretty much tells you that she's going to fuck you until you are dry and gives you her adress while ranting about what the hell is wrong with her for finding you hot>when you show up she's hot and bothered and nags on you for taking too long>nags on you for kissing too much and wasting time on foreplay. Starts insulting you>Calls you a pussy and a faggot when you pull out. tells you to not be a coward and impregnate her
>>79469769Holy shit yes
>>79469063Alright fuck you. You want engagement you fucking horny bottom feeder? Here you go>Nerissa, despite her looks, voice, and outward demeanor, is an absolute joke when it comes to flirting and dates>As what could be considered a roadie for the EN concert circuit, you've had to watch the poor girl fall over herself at nearly every turn>When some of the EN girls do their cat calls on you half in jest when you're checking and moving equipment, how Nerissa tries to play along gives you second hand embarrassment>The way she flirts with the girls is not much better, in fact it's even more pathetic, and she somehow manages to trip, stumble, and fall on not only her words, but any and all loose cable in the building, even the ones you tapped to the molding>You've overheard more than what could be considered more than friendly teasing, the poor girl gets absolutely bottom blasted by her branch mates>It's not really you business to get involved, or care, but one night Nerissa trots up to you with a fire in her eyes, after she tripped over an empty coffee cup and dusted herself off>"Hey, I think you're cute and should go on a date with. Yes or yes?" Was all she asked/told you before your shift was suddenly ended early>You guess you could give the girl a break and play along for a night, she might even be a good conversationalist.
So is anybody actually writing anything, or at least reading something and wanting to give a review?
>>79471475i think it would be better if you took her to a bar to cheer her up and since its not a "date" it goes smoothly and it ends with you two going " we should repeat this" until it dawns on you its a date (its been 4 months of dates and sex)
>>79472355What would be a particularly sad or brutal mockery she would have to endure to make you do that? Maybe Fuwawa off handed says some shit like>awww dont worry newissa, you don't need to find a man! You can be an idol forever! Bau bau! >Shiroi mentions that there's always mail order husbands, she hears some are actually great house husbands>Bijou just wants to play video games, and since Nerissa will likely be alone the rest of her life, they can co-op forever
>>79471592Im writing Raden. She's cuteand not a cat
>>79473636Nerissa tries to re-contact her old teather troupe only to learn all of them are in relationships or have kids, and then she gets hit with the notice that her brother is dating someone.So she storms the advent HQ for a "girls night" only to learn everyone has plans. That's where your hear breaks as she mentions she's gonna spend her entire friday playing harvest moon and drinking flat soda
>>79467592Full pic? No litter pls, just catboxGot me all hard and bothered
>>79477470https://x.com/Meme_Aestheticc/status/1806638330119180665 That's the full pic my G
>>79477206>This is when your plan to isolate Nerissa comes to fruition>Now you have her all alone to smoke weed, drink diet soda and play burnout revenge on the ps2 together.
Progress on the filian vore fic?
>>79479622She ate it...
>>79478945I think the other way around is better>Oh hello ANon! Fancy see YOu here. >I was just wondering if you wanted to HANG out with me and listen to choir songs, and fill our bellies with FLAT soda, and play Harvest Moon for the gamecube.
>>79481034Trashy romance with Nerissa! >Going into Nerissa's shitty college gamer cave>Sitting on the matress, kicking away your shoes and moving the covers away. A phone charger, a hair iron and some used tissues fall to the side>Smoking weed together and shittalking people that annoy you> a movie you two already watched on tv plays while you farm for her in runescape>putting a shitty song on the speakers and fucking at a slow rhythm because going too fast is not posible.>finishing inside. Fuck we forgot the condom. Going to the kitchen to drink something and eat some food since she's taking the day after anyway>going for a second round as you two snack on shitty cold pizza>laying on the matress in an awkard cuddle because you two are scared to commit>getting her pregnant and having to get a job>pulling yourself together into a functioning human being to provide>years later telling your kids you didnt pull all that shit they do nowAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH WHITE WOMAN SAVE ME WHITE WOMAN
>>79481034>No thanks>I'm going down the law route, I have to end the world with Justice
>>79479622instead of begging for a fic no one wants to write, why not do it yourself bro?
>>79467592>>79482578I know the saliva strings line up so that it looks like they were making out, but they really do fit the mythical blowjob/rimjob combination we never see enough of
>>79482853never played SMT but im sure thats the neutral path
>>79482853...Anon the full NSFW art for both of these are from both of them (in the aftermath of) sucking cock.
>>79482578https://youtu.be/E6nQEUh0RIs?si=wiocpwiDPaOWm4US>yes Anon.>allow the divine maiden to tongue your asshole for the sake of our lord
>>79482662Can't get off to my own writing for the sole fact it's my own writing
>>79482965yeah, mine
>>79482965there's multiple versions of both
>>79483285So the neutral route is them doing the legendary combination blowjob/rimjob on you.Meanwhile the rejection/nihilism route is them making out.
>>79483457so huuuuh what is supposed to be the tradeoff?
>>79483457Who's the one licking your asshole? Nerissa?
>>79483457You can even remove the SMT context>Nerissa gets caught by Justice>(You) Are the only witness and they need a confession>Nerissa offers to suck you off if you dont testify against her>ERB counteroffers>Whichever you pick, the other one gives you a rimjob to try and dissuade you
>>79477642And a bonus ERB too!Now I'm double hot and botheredTempted to rub one out under the sink
>>79479622Camila tried to eat Filian during their collab on Monday.
>>79471592Tomorrow...
>>79471592>work 12 hours>try to slip some writing in when there's a moment of down time>get nothing>tell myself I'll do a few pages when I get home>spend too much time watching YouTube and occasionally staring blankly at a Google doc>sleep telling myself I'll write when I have free time at work>rinse and repeat why does this keep happening? At this rate, I'll catch a stray blow dart from Azki
>>79483746I think ERB is the better choice for anilingus, as she lacks handlebars to hold onto and you won't have to worry about the potential for her little fire to maybe burn your balls
>>79471592I've got a lot going on right now. Writing will have to wait
>>78538125Alright VNAnon, here’s your review. There’s a lot to unpack, so this is gonna be a long one.I guess I’ll start with the things I didn’t like too much to clear my head. This whole game has so much to do, which is great, but it felt like there wasn’t really a good conclusion to wrap everything up. I know you said these stories happen after I’ve reached the ending but there were some unresolved plot lines that I feel should have had some kind of resolution. Things like Anon’s depression and hidden dread of people leaving him that sometimes slips out, or a conclusion to his harem that resolves his feelings of guilt and puts people like Reimu and Nina who want to marry him at ease. The largest one however is probably Rosemi’s daughter. I thought after finding Pomu and getting the seed out I’d see the true ending to my summer, but we left as Rosemi was stewing in indecisiveness about becoming a mother, then the summer ended, unresolved. It almost feels like you’re setting up for a sequel (I hope you are) with how many loose ends have yet to be tied up. Unless I AM missing a true ending.And now for my biggest gripe with this game: Why the FUCK did you make Anon a manlet? If he’s already jacked and fucking 9+ girls why can’t he be tall, or ar least average height? How is Rosemi of all people taller than him? Rosemi! Now when he picks her up, or is just walking around, I’m imagining some tiny dwarf waddling around like some kind of pet next to all the girls. His height seems a little inconsistent at times too, because during the Zaion handjob, when she stands back up straight, it says she reaches his abdomen. That must mean she’s like… 3 feet tall, unless I read that wrong. In that same scene Anon also says he can only have sex with girls he loves, but he had no trouble busting a nut in the crazy tiger sluts, unless that was somehow love at first sight. Their introduction was hot, but that detail made it a little inconsistent.Lastly, I think in terms of dialogue and characters, I preferred the original for the most part. The characters in the first game felt and acted more like the girls themselves and their “voices” felt more real. The girls in this sequel felt a little disconnected from reality, if that makes sense. It’s hard to explain but I guess they felt a little more flanderized than before. Maybe because they were just that horny.Now, finally, the good stuff. When I first downloaded this game I had expected to only play the scenes of the girls I still liked and steer clear of the likes of Enna, Millie and Elira because… well, y’know. It’s hard not to think about what happened. But something about your writing just draws me in and before I knew it I was hunting down the last few achievements to complete them all. I thoroughly enjoyed playing through every interaction I came across and hardly found any dull moments, if there were any at all. It got to the point where I was neglecting Elden Ring to play this, which you know means this shit was good.My favourites, which were rather surprising to me since I never watched either of them, were Reimu and Zaion. The random silences before cutting to sex with Reimu were funny, she was super sweet and charming and all her serious scenes (the fashion show especially) made me start to fall for a parody of a fictional character. Zaion was full of life and it really felt like all her scenes had a lot of effort put into them and she was super charming too. Every interaction with any of the girls had at least some good parts, but that sometimes made me kinda sad because of what happened to the real Nijisanji EN; particularly during the group interactions. It made me wish things had turned out differently. If nothing else, I started tuning into Reimu’s FNV streams after finishing the game. Her accent is hot.It’s hard to point out good things because basically everything about this game is “good”. Name a single scene and I could talk about at the very least one thing I liked, but it’s more likely that I’d have a whole list. Those things I didn’t like earlier, as you may have noticed, were mostly nitpicks. The humour hit all the right spots, the serious moments were great in contrast, and all the sex was hot. It was fun, addictive and an overall improvement from the prequel with all the gameplay additions. The only thing I’d add is more applications for spending your money, like key items to unlock certain scenes, since I only used the dress up minigame here and there.Well done on finishing this and kudos for making it such a fun game, you have my respect. I could play and read another 20 hours of this no problem.
>>79490783Wait, why is the post you're replying to deleted?Based analysis I should say. Very objective. Anything less and its just a nonstop rant of how they wasted Selen/Zaion and "kill Elira/Millie/Enna/Kotoka/etc".
>>79491127>Wait, why is the post you're replying to deleted?Archived threads only stick around for 3 days, and are deleted automatically after that.
>>79471592Still plugging away at that Sinder Fic when I have the time and energy https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vQjc_DJ-Hwf2C8zjIFc04PoGrvPQGO44D9FXqt8ToY0VNG0LoW4Ronk5X5cUgdoBMHATWvK7ZL0D0kV/pub
>>79450373I do want short girls but I do feel kinda intimidated and insecure around taller girls, no matter how dorky they are (Coco, Nerissa)But now that this layer of insecurity is gone, I could lust after more girls than I could imagine
>>79491223Thanks for the crit-info.
>>79491247Ganbatte!
>>79490783>but there were some unresolved plot lines that I feel should have had some kind of resolutionAbsolutely.I blame this on my scope creep being insane and me underestimating how intensive the scripting was going to be.I thought the mall section was going to just be the first gameIn this way, Ninisanni Scenario: The Harem End is a misnomer. I thought it was funny at one point, but after a certain point I just thought it was misleading. I stuck with it though, for wlsome reason>It almost feels like you’re setting up for a sequel (I hope you are) with how many loose ends have yet to be tied up.The true ending to the story I'll probably never write, I've been kicking around thoughts for a DLC/sequel that covers a lot of the cut scenes and arcs from this one. I mean, I have the structure for the VN already set-up, and half the scenes are written already...I have some great scenes I straight up cut due to time constraints, and a bunch of others that were cut because they were just "alright". The D+B thug route, Maria's end, the Meloco combat scenes, the all-cast hand-breast measurement scene in the ZR route, uncovering Selen's dark and edgy past that I kept dropping plot hooks for...Not to mention the characters that barely get any airtime, those are the ones I feel bad about the most. But I only had so much time, and I chose the best scenes and plotlines to follow.I will say though, one of the themes of the game is of the game is a lack of resolution for anybody. You see characters that develop, like MC, Reimu, and Rosemi. But the happily-ever-afters were all in Ninisanni Scenario 1.>Why the FUCK did you make Anon a manlet?The MC isn't a manlet. He's average height. The dragon sisters are tall, Reimu floats a couple inches off the ground to mock him, Rosemi had a growth spurt (as did her tits), and Scarle is just tall.>when she stands back up straight, it says she reaches his abdomenI meant upper abs, probably. Zaion's short, he's normal size.>In that same scene Anon also says he can only have sex with girls he loves, but he had no trouble busting a nut in the crazy tiger sluts,H-he was having a sexual emergency! It's serious stuff, you know!Yeah, that was inconsistent. I suppose I could've thrown a choice structure/variable to track purity so as to let player's make their choice on willingness to fuck.Truthfully though, I think he has mixed feelings about Ms. Lanza. He respects her too much, I think, and that gets in the way of his normal horniness. In that scene, I think he might be lying a little.>The girls in this sequel felt a little disconnected from reality, if that makes sense.I thought this might be a problem. I wanted the characters to develop a little, and change in little ways from last time. Could just be me not getting the vocal tics right though.Was it the personalities or the way they spoke?>It got to the point where I was neglecting Elden Ring to play this, which you know means this shit was good.The highest compliment!>The only thing I’d add is more applications for spending your money, like key items to unlock certain scenesI considered it, but I didn't want too much scene gating. Imagine it's your first run, you're giving this a go, but still not sure about this ninisanni business. You get to the hub area and you can only choose between Petra and Elira. It might make you frown. But if it's Petra, Elira, Rosemi, Selen, Millie, and Nina, chances are you'll pick your favorite girl out of those options, and then try out the other less preferred girls to keep things fresh on the new run.>Reimu and ZaionInteresting. I'd hazard a guess it's because for their scenes in particular, you can see the MC and those two growing and bonding together. Very emotional stuff. I didn't want to make all the girl's scenes like that, because different people are more inclined towards funny stuff, or lewd stuff.I am earnestly surprised out of how much mileage I get out of Reimu and Zaion in both Ninisanni Scenarios. You wouldn't assume no-nonsense, straight-man characters have that much mileage, but there is a surprising amount of character exploration you can get into when characters aren't being unserious people.>It was fun, addictive and an overall improvement from the prequel with all the gameplay additions.Thank you for the compliments. It's a relief to know I didn't regress, at least.>I could play and read another 20 hours of this no problem.You're not burnt out yet. That's good to hear, because I'll be making more VNs in the future and I need respectable players like you to tell me if they suck or not.
>>79494104 (me)>I thought the mall section was going to just be the first game*first section of the game>for wlsome reasonfor some reason.>burnt out yet.burnt out yet?You would think the typos go away at some point, but they never really do.
>>79494104>The true ending to the story I'll probably never write>the happily-ever-afters were all in Ninisanni Scenario 1Aw... that sucks to hear. Will you at least release the unfinished stuff to provide a little more closure?>I will say though, one of the themes of the game is a lack of resolution for anybody. You see characters that develop, like MC, Reimu, and Rosemi.I'm not sure I understand. Are you saying that they develop as people so they they don't need resolutions?>The MC isn't a manlet. He's average height.Oh... so does that make Rosemi around 170-180cm? Don't think I'm a fan of that either, though I'm assuming it has something to do with her new outfit. At least Anon isn't a dwarf.>Was it the personalities or the way they spoke?A bit of both, I guess. I did like the way they spoke and I think you nailed their verbal tics, but some of the stuff they said or did seemed out of character, at least from what I remember back when I watched nijiEN. Who knows, I may be misremembering.>You wouldn't assume no-nonsense, straight-man characters have that much mileageWhile I thoroughly enjoyed the funny stuff, but Anon's final scene with Zaion and the monologue as he was watching Reimu in the dress hit pretty hard.>You're not burnt out yet?Not at all. While it's a shame this story won't be getting a conclusion, I can understand wanting to move on. I'll be eagerly waiting for whatever you have in store next.
>>79494104Salud to you NS anon. Soldiering on even in the tough present.
>>79471592Been stuck on a "I'm never finishing this WIP" to "Today I shall write 80k" pendulum.
>>79495500>I'm not sure I understand. Are you saying that they develop as people so they they don't need resolutions?Nah, it's hard to explain. This was meant to be book two out of three. I feel like dropping it at book two and never finishing the series, because that's how I feel about how it all went down irl. A fitting, imperfect conclusion. You can see traces of change in Ninisanni Scenario 2, and guess as to what happens next, but it will forever be left up in the air.Asking me to devote another year and half of my life to finish a tale that everyone has already moved on from... I just don't know. I think I need to move on to.>Oh... so does that make Rosemi around 170-180cm? Don't think I'm a fan of that either, though I'm assuming it has something to do with her new outfit. At least Anon isn't a dwarf.Rosemi's just a tiny bit taller than him. The whole of the arc was on the nature of change. She has tits now, she's taller, she's getting redpilled (lol), going to the gym, becoming less naive. She's becoming a little meaner, a little less cute, hardening her heart against the world cruel world. That's why she moved to the city, why she's lifting weights. The height and tits were meant to reflect her mental growth.>Anon's final scene with ZaionzJustTheStart is a great scene, just extremely cute seeing the MC and Ms. Lanza in a casual context. I will say though, zrFuckFuckGames will always be one of my favorite Zaion scenes. uFashioningLittleMissLonesome may not be a standout scene, but I think it was important.>>79496389Thanks, friend.
>>79500381What VN will you make next?
>>79501777Well to start, I'm going to take a year off at minimum to refine my art skills.Once I get back to VNs though I got a couple goid ideas kicking around. All OC, not fanworks. I've got all of them pretty well-built in my head.I'm actually looking for opinions so I can commit to one when the time comes. >ecchi political comedy with voting mechanics >barroom stat raiser/management otome comedy (moderate gameplay mechanics, medium-long length)>horror dungeon crawler about dolls (heavy gameplay, narrative based combat system, medium length)>single girl high school romance (short length, no gameplay, lot of conversational choice structures, already written and scripted in full)>trolly comedy about visual novel development (short length, no gameplay)
>>79503443How about a harem fantasy adventure with epic fights and friendships?
>>79503691I'm still not talented enough of a writer to write adventures I think would be compelling. Because of the limitations of the medium, they've inclined me towards single setting, limited count character stories. Then again, you might not think it, considering how many BGs and characters I've used in my most recent works.I've floated around with an idea about a cowboy western story about a recent age gap married couple heading west for adventure. But then I read a manga with an extremely similar premise, and it mogged the ideas in my head so hard.I have longer term projects in mind, but it would require my art skills to be godtier, so I've decided to bide my time, practice my reps, and publish out littler stuff first.
>>79500381>>79501777>I feel like dropping it at book two and never finishing the series, because that's how I feel about how it all went down irl.I get it. Fuck me if that doesn't hurt to hear, but I fully understand. You'll have my eternal respect for not giving up and pushing this through to completion even after all the absolutely shit fortune that the vtubing world threw at you.>uFashioningLittleMissLonesome may not be a standout sceneThat's where you may be underestimating the Colombian ghost girl. It was my favourite scene because it felt like Anon was proposing to her, and kind of locked in Reimu as the canon girl if Anon were to ever turn to monogamy (in my opinion).>All OC, not fanworksSo by this you mean your own OC characters and not vtubers? I think I'd still be interested if I'm still around. My personal choice would be:>>barroom stat raiser/management otome comedy (moderate gameplay mechanics, medium-long length)Playing your VN also got me feeling like making my own VN with one of the stories I've written as a basis, but I feel like it just doesn't have enough characters. Even in a single girl VN like your one:>>single girl high school romance (short length, no gameplay, lot of conversational choice structures, already written and scripted in full)I feel like there needs to be a decent cast of characters to keep things interesting, even if they're not a romantic option.
>>79471592>Weekend full of social obligations that don't get cancelled and will leave my batteries dryThis sucks on ice.
>>79471592After more than 3 years of coming here my /wg/ batteries are nearly exhausted. It 's such a strange feeling in retrospect, to have a hobby you cherished and were always super excited for slowly become less and less engaging to the point that reading holds little interest and reviewing/brainstorming becomes an irritating chore.I wish there was anti-burnout treatment around.
>>79506885Not sure what the best prescription for burnout is, and what works to alleviate it is different for everyone. Some people benefit from taking a step back and engaging in other things, others find the cure is just pushing themselves through to complete a milestone of theirs. At the end of the day though, you need to do what is fun and right for you. It can be sad to think about a hobby you felt so strongly about falling to the wayside in your interests, but that'll never invalidate the joy it brought you along the way. I hope you find the cure you want though, anon, whatever results it may have.
>>79506885Something something Pagliaci the clown.Watch Polka and don't think about writing for a bit, that will fix you right up.
>>79503443>>single girl high school romance (short length, no gameplay, lot of conversational choice structures, already written and scripted in full)Dealing with the school slut that wants to sleep with every guy until you learn to love her?
>>79505821>absolutely shit fortuneEh, I kinda knew what I was getting into, even when writing the first Ninisanni Scenario. Don't feel too sorry for me.>kind of locked in Reimu as the canon girlYeah, she is pretty far in the running when you think about it. I mean, she got the subroute in NNSN1, her epilogue is the only one that's canon, and it's clear they spend a lot of time together and trust each other. She's his sewing partner, and he also works with her ghostbusting (in essence trusting her with his life).With the other girls, it's like, he loves Nina because she's his best friend. He loves Elira because she's his on-again off-again girlfriend. He loves Finana because she's his little sister. But with Reimu, it's like, their relationship isn't based on concrete titles, but shared experience that we see in realtime.As for the others, aside from Rosemi, he's not as close to any of the 22-32 Quartet. With Millie, he still idolizes her too much and she's probably the most distant from him (except for maybe Elira). Pomu is more like a twin sister to the MC. And with Enna... well, I won't get into it in case I ever do decide to write more, but there's more to their relationship than meets the eye.Again, I feel guilty, because I chose to give Reimu more bonding time demonstrating their growing relationship compared to the others. But it's a lovely relationship, makes for a great story, and you enjoyed it, so it's not that bad, right?I've already written a lot, but I'm going off!I feel like uWedding kind of settled the question on canonness between them. The MC has a thing about commitment. And Reimu is still fairly immature herself. Either she accepts this is the way he is, and chooses to follow him regardless. Or she proves himself to him enough to abandon his entire harem and commit.>barroom stat raiser/management otome comedy (moderate gameplay mechanics, medium-long length)Interesting choice. The MC in this one is top tier, and the ideas I've had for it so far are funny. >Playing your VN also got me feeling like making my own VNDefinitely do it! Steal my code! Making VNs is a lot of fun, and differs in a lot of ways than writing raw. It's sort of like being a stage director. >I feel like there needs to be a decent cast of characters to keep things interesting, even if they're not a romantic option.I get that feeling too. That's the one thing that's keeping me from straightening out that single girl romance story. It just feels like, every scene is just the same face every time. The conversations and antics might get interesting, but it's just the same girl over and over again. Even if the story is novella length.I have a feeling it might just be me though, my writing can get pedantic sometimes.>>79509714Worse. Romancing a megane.>>79506885Burnout sucks. But is it burnout or ennui? I've found that I can only be burned out for a hobby I enjoy and I just need some time away or need to hang out with friends or set a more reasonable timeframe or something.But ennui is the killer. Sheer boredom, no longer getting anything out of it, no longer passionate or curious about what you can accomplish. If it's ennui, there's no recourse of than to just move on. Maybe one day the spark of passion will light back up again. Maybe it won't. Either way, you won't care because you're now apathetic to it. If the thought of abandoning writing gives you fear or dread or something else, then you're just burned out, and that's solvable through copes.
A man went to his beta reader one day, he said "Man, I don't know what to do. I don't know what to write, what WIP to work on, my dialogue feels stiff and my prose reads terribly. Every day I wake up and want to delete my WIPs."And the beta reader said, "Well, it's good you came today of all days. The great writer Anonymous is in the thread. Reading one of his fics might help you get better."The man said, "Beta reader, I am Anonymous."
>>79416540An NTR fic but there's no NTR and it's just vanilla stuff.
>>79500381Man I wish I had your coding skill. Could maybe help with my own game.
>dying
>>79512899You will get that level of skill if you work on your game.
Bumping because I'm writing a post.
>>79512899I wouldn't say I'm good at coding. Renpy isn't that coding intensive. If anything, it's complexity is in it's stage design and having many different tasks to take care of. The complexity is multifaceted based on the different things you have to do.>writingProbably the part you have to be the 'smartest' at. Art brings people in, but writing keeps them there. Will take a long portion of your dev time, but kinda the easiest task? It's just words in a textbox, you know?>artCan be disregarded. If you have special art skills or a theme you want to convey through visuals, by all means do it yourself. But if you don't, just steal. Especially if you're a beginner. Nobody actually cares, because you're too irrelevant to care about.>uiWith my new photorealism style that I've adopted with the Ninisanni Scenarios, UI is pretty easy. Just find the textures, and adapt them to fitting backgrounds/UI elements.Even if you're after a different style, I mean you can make a squere box in photoshop and then make it fuzzy or slap a filter over it or some highlights or something.>BGsFuck handrawn BGs. So much effort, not even the artists you pay want to do them, they just wanna make the pretty girls with the big boobs. So use photo. Slap a filter over them like in Katawa Shojo. Or if you favor the vectorized style, or perhaps a pixelated art, we've now got AI to better filters to do that.Unsplash is a godsend, because a lot of their photographers are straight up pros. Just beautiful photos, all copyright free.>codingRenpy makes the coding part easy with its already established structures, unless you're doing weird stuff like me. But even then, you can operate within understandable frameworks to make something like a jukebox or hub area or a dress-up game. After four games though, I still haven't found a way to make the environmental sound channel an option in the game menu without linking it to the sound channel. >musicLike with art, if it fits your theme or you want to demonstrate your musical talent, then make your own music. If not, the copyright free tracks are really, really good. No stress here.>asset gatheringEither a pain in the butt, or really easy. You would not believe how long it took me to find a checkout desk for the Claire's store. After at least an hour of searching, I finally found a shutterstock image and had to erase all the watermarks in Photoshop. Still would have been easier than drawing it up myself though.For the art elements, I'd say you need a familiarity in photoshop, a good eye, and attention to detail. It's mundane, but kinda chill, since you can watch TV in the background.>staging and scriptingThis could be easy if you're just adopting the simple VN strategy of slapping two characters on the side of the screen and changing their expressions every couple of lines. But if you're after my animation focused style, the journey will be ballcrushing indeed. You will do battle with the developer of Renpy (may god curse his name). It's basically like a lot of repetition and refreshing your VN to make sure your sprites are in the right place (they will always be in the wrong place, even though they should be in the right place). It's """easy""" but poorly designed, if you know what I mean. The complexity is in the frustration.It's time consuming. I finished the script back in January, spent what, five months just scripting and staging and gathering assets?And the jukebox, dress-up section, mallwalk extras, main menu, FAQ, credits etc.? Took me from mid-May to mid-June. That's the rawest coding I've done and it took me less than a month.For comparison, it took me a week straight to script and stage sFightClub alone. Even though staging took less smartitude, it still is harder because it wears on you, you know?Um, that's basically it. I guess I ended up making it sound hard, but at the beginning levels, it's way easier than I'm making it out to be. I just face these problems because I like challenging myself.So like, I feel that VNs are moreso based on your level of creativity and adaptiveness rather than raw talent in any of these categories.Not to be a dick, but >>79514662 speaks truth.Finishing a project is important, even if it's not how it looked in your wildest imaginations. It gives you that sense of accomplishment that shows you what you dreamed up is actually possible. It also gives your players a chance to critique, which makes your next product better and more attuned. If I had to choose between one big project or three games, I would choose the latter. The product gets out in a quicker timeframe.You can make the next better than the last.So make a first VN and realize how fun it really is, and then make more than I can read!
>>79510746Romancing eyeglasses?
>>79517506I would like me some romancing for that. By the by, it got me thinking about how I might be able to incorporate some casual glasses wear within my own story, but unsure who would actually need to wear them. >Watame already has the sunglasses>Polka's eyes are already too keen but maybe she would have her big reading glasses? Seems like it would be almost immersion breaking to have her put those on one night to read. I'm not really sure which characters would have a pair at the moment, but maybe a future one could? It wouldn't really be anything more than a cute scene about adoring how they look on the chuuba.
>>79518050Make the girls discover Anon's preference for girls wearing glasses, so they have an incentive to buy them purely for aesthetics.
>>79518050Fubuki is a massive meganecel so she could start handing them out for no reason
>>79518152I think Lamy would definitely do this, maybe Botan, but the some of the current girls I'm not so sure. More so because they will have no shortage of other buttons to press, and adventuring ain't cheap so you gotta be a little mindful of your expenses. >>79518531Now that could lead to an interesting thing. Maybe I could have a place within the eastern triad country that only those with kitsune eyes could navigate through, so Fubuki could be the solution with some handcrafted lenses. Then it could be set off by anon staring just a bit too long at how some of his ladies look with the new eyewear. A little detail like that could fit nicely into a prep scene.
>>79514662I gotta confess, I'm burnt out of it because I cant solve this big error preventing my progress. I am finishing it alright, I just hope Holo isn't out of style by then.
>>79520449If you have problem with a specific error, explain it and ask for help.
>>79518884>the author's thinly veiled fetishNot that I'm complaining
>>79512799A vanilla fic between (You) and a chuuba that's super lovey-dovey and wholesome but at the end it's revealed you were just on a weekend date with her so she could go report back to her cuck hubby
>>79520671The ones I could ask for help were also stumped on what to do.Worse, a fatal error added. Its an error that occurs while (you) and Sora promote via event. Softlocks the game and no way to dodge it.
>>79521217>Show up to chuuba's house with flowers>She's jerking off her husband while showing her what she did with you>You break down. "So that's it?! I'm nothing more than just a bull for you?!">She sits on her husband's lap, pressing her cheek against his. "Don't take it personally, there's only one man for my heart.">Join the bull support group
Dying all by yourself, handsome?
Survive
>>79523436AZKi it's summer, you're going to be all sweaty when you take that sweater off
no dying
>>79523436honestly a tremednous opening line for a fic where AZKi saves your life and proceeds to fucking destroy it again later
>>79523436>>79535081Yandere Android Azki that keeps you alive both because she loves you but because seeing you squirm and struggle makes her feel human
>>79535598>AZKi in a cyberpunk Neo-Tokyo watching you fight to survive situations she's discreetly caused>"As a robot I'm incapable of orgasm...but that's probably they closest I've ever gotten!"
I don't think you can write an Azki fic that doesn't involve singing or guessing locations
>>79535974i like to imagine her as some kind of AI until she finally gets a body maybe the original's azki likehood was used for the real body and there's this weird torture scene where she's clearly getting off until she's sitting in your lap and prodding you with something until she cums
>>79537329Hot>>79537329
>>79416540being a miserable ice cream shop clerk and meeting a cute goth im willing to include an architect on the equation but he has to swear moderation
>>79537021I want Azki to be my hyper-intelligent AI companion that assists my super-solider ass on the battlefield while also hitting on me.
>>79541152Is 80kg acceptable
>>79541323>She's normally cheery/cutesy as you two start the mission. Doing things with swagger>The more you two kill and penetrate the complex, the more the flirty side intensifies. there's an edge to it>Callouts go from "Enemy ahead" to "2 o clock" to her pretty much syncing completely with you>and then comes the euphoria>its like you two are dancing a lethal tango, filled with passion as you spill blood with no care in the world.>When the euphoria finally ends in an orgasmic climax, both of you are out of breath, knee deep into corpses of enemies,non combatant and collateral damage. Your list of warcrimes keeps expanding>go to your pod, to live your homely virtual life with your virtual wife
>>79541548a bit of chub is perfect.Lardbeasts or feeding play will activate your shock collar
>>79517396Now this is a comprehensive guide. Cheers, Anon. If I feel like trying something new I’ll get started on my own VN.
>>79541905>be supersoldier. your CO is a small girl>Your ai murder assistant is a hag>Your coworker is a dry woman>your target are crazy girls>the police is crzy girls>You weep>When will you get a homoerotic rival to roll off and have cool duels? when will you escape this harem life?
>>79523436>eyes crack open seeing a vague silhouette "no I'm not dying I should be fi-">focus just enough to see Azki"OH GOD! Im sorry Azki! I'm writing my fic! please don't hurt me!"
>>79543057>they see you staring broodingly out the window>he's must be thinking of another girl>'how do I find a true rival...'
>>79541905I feel like I've heard this story before.
>>79543057>Think you finally get your dream bro rival>Even use each other's special named moves during desperate moments>Then during the final duel, where the shirts come off and you fight to the death in the rain you see the shocking truth>You did, in fact, NOT have a homoerotic rival
>>79547126I have thought very consistently about a story where the romantic interest is a genuine rival, espeically in stories where the rivalry is in power/skill/whathaveyou. Too often the rivalry eventually takes a backseat to the romance, but I feel it would be more compelling the other way around.
Anyone actually have any writing they wanna share?
>>79549142You already asked this question Anon, give the writers at least a few threads worth of time to make some progress.
>>79549142This seems disingenuous. Are you just trying to halt the active conversation because you're not a part of it?
>>79549142Like drafts and stuffs?
>>79549142I tossed one up a thread or two ago about Elizabeth Rose Bloodflame swinging a massive dong, but I don't recall seeing any feedback about the actual story. Do people give feedback here? It's hiding back >>79402890 if you're curious.
>>79551807What the bloody hell is a text.is?
>>79549142https://rentry.org/pno72hh4I have this idea on the backburner that generated from the concept of telling a story from a second hand perspective. I guess I'd like some feedback on how the narration feels.
>>79551807People do, it probably got lost in the shuffle when the thread hit the floor. Actually tagging it would help.
>>79552258A generic paste site that 4chan doesn't block for no good reason like all the others.
>>79552694Yeah, I wasn't aware tagging was a thing here. I did reply to the posts above with what tags to use, so if they still haven't been applied it's not on me.>>79417676>>79417819>>79417998
>>79549142Alright, spill it nerd. What wip are you hoping to get a sneaky peak of?
>>79432877These would genuinely look so weird IRL, the proportions just don't work. Most of them shouldn't be below 1,50, let alone 1,40. Japs are retarded for giving them these heights.
>>79554723Gura smol!
>>79551769Yeah, anything from an introduction to a chapter to a full fic, or what have you. Just something that isn't idly masturbating vague ideas back and forth>>79554459Specifically YOURS>>79552634I'm not sure this style of prose, by its nature, is fit for long-form reading, but I feel like it'd be exceptional out-loud narration material. Also, the phrase "Shone with resignation" just does not scan well to me, since resignation is traditionally way more of a dull and muted sort of emotion rather than bright and shiny. It's a small thing, but it caught my attention. Otherwise, good entry into the "jaded-backstage-of-idol-culture" genre
>>79461325Honestly, this. To be very clear, I dont also like the types that oppose them too on twt
>>79556407Fine here. Don't say I never gave ya nothing.
>>79543057>picrelStuck on that song and I'm not complaining. That stare Bae gives off on her throne...hooboy
>>79549142are you actually writing something? anything outside of thread shitting, false flagging, and crying about how people aren't talking about what you want?
>>79558763i am greatly amused you got so mad by him simply including the word "actually" in his question
>>79557603Its a shame shes primer domloss material and has no dom bone in her body
>>79561857Das okIf le retard taught me anything, its that more confident women are more satisfying to dominate.
>>79557463Nice snappy back and forth dialogue, anon
Dying
Any tips to make it clear a convo is over an online platform?
>>79551807Alright so I gave this a read and while I like the idea, and it hits the right beats, it's a bit dry. It needs more descriptive language and sensuality. I like the bongisms though, a bit of verisimilitude I don't think most authors would have considered.
>>79565295Italics, coloured words/highlights, text-message format, usernames… you’ve got a few options.
>>79565295Besides your prose leading into it? The best bet is to use formatting itself. Mess with things like font and font size, bold/italics, centering left or right, and so on.
What's a good fic word count?
>>79565295usually, what I do is put text in brackets [when characters are talking via text or online] because the square border is similar to a screenif it's a chat room[Anon: Then you can do it like this.][Aqua: How can you tell if multiple characters talk, though o.o?][Shion: That's why theres usernames to tell who's talking, genious...=.=]
>>79566044Painting a scene definitely isn't a strong point of mine, but I think I do action well enough. My favorite bit from that one is the concept of a load bearing penis.Also, thanks for reading.
The Sinder fic continues, does anyone mind reading the (decidedly unfinished) first draft I have so far and tell me what works, and maybe some suggestions for what to work on?https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vQjc_DJ-Hwf2C8zjIFc04PoGrvPQGO44D9FXqt8ToY0VNG0LoW4Ronk5X5cUgdoBMHATWvK7ZL0D0kV/pub
>>79552634This is an interesting concept but like not as fanfiction. In fact the tenous connection to this being a vtuber fanfic just drags this down such that the connection via names isn't good enough to really justify it.Like the prose is interesting don't get me wrong. It's just this feels just distant enough from the pillars of what makes something feel vtuberish that the uncanny valley was setting in.
>>79567590Id say it requires a bit nore formatting so its not Big blocks of texts and the dialogue can be given some space for itself.Aside from that the only criticism i have is that it spins its wheels a bit too much. Not saying the descriptions and the fluff isnt good or Nice, but the phonecall for example can be shortened to tighten up the pace.Right now it feels like theres a bit of explanation for every action that could be trimmed down a little bit so it picks up steam faster
>>79566609Smut or non-smut?Word count doesn't really matter as long as you show want you want to convey but smut does kind of have a soft word base needed in order to make it something one can masturbate to rather than fuel fantasies from.
>>79568505Thanks for the critique, definitely agree now that you mention it.
>>79566629Clever way to explain things
>>79566609Imo, 3k per chapter
>>79552634I like it. It has this autobiography feel to it which I find interesting and unique. Although I don't know if this is because it's just a snippet but I feel like it needs some space to breathe.
>>79566609Depends on things like pacing and intent but I've written a couple of fics that were under 4k words.
I am planning to read as much smut and erotica as preparation for writing some smut of my own. Fifty shades look like a good place to start.
>>79574585This better be bait
>>79575517Its the only published smut book i know. Any other suggestions?
>>79575591Just go to literotica, click your favorite genre and sort by rating. Everything that pops up will be better than 50sheds.
>>79575742Notes taken. Thank you
>>79575742NTA bur it's still interesting that 50 shades started as Twilight fanfiction, and now it sold well enough to get 3 movies... not good movies, but still, there may be hope for us, bros
>>79576230I don't need hope. People read and enjoy my stories. That's enough for me.
>>79575591There's a ton of romance books out there that are basically porn. Also, are you a gril? 50 Shades is for women.
>>79576438you're thinking too small, Anon. We're talking about movies and video games, your oshi reading your published book based on your fic. you'll be a king among kings above the peasants who still need to go to that fubuki bar to muck among the commonwealth
>>79577010But I really am happy with the small. First and foremost my stories are an archive of my twisted fantasies. That other people enjoy the fucked up things I pour out of my mind is a happy accident for all parties involved.
>>79577010Yes, when I finish my first story I will finally make it... and my wife and daughter will come back to me...!
>>79577010When I finish my story, I'll finally become rich! My oshi will let me have sex with her! My dad will finally think I'm not a waste of space!
>>79579896>My oshi will let me have sex with her!You have to start by licking your oshi's vagina clean from my cum before you can move up to the sex-haver's position. It's like being a sushi chef, in your first year you're just gonna wash the dishes.
>>79574585Fifty Shades pretends to be about BDSM, but it only teaches you almost the opposite - how to write rich scumbags that women think they want to be abused by.
>>79579836>>79579896and your pp will grow really big (or your bobs if you're double chromosomed)
>>79556407>I feel like it'd be exceptional out-loud narration material. Hey, thanks. That's what I was going for. >>79568333>>79571305I mean, it's a part of a bigger story. I was going to the Alt!Suisei thingy with a murder mystery thrown in. Had a lot of fun regardless. Her sexually pleasing ojisan is just a pit stop for context.
>>79577010One of my fics got immortalized by drawanon. The only thing that could top it would be to get a full doujinshi
>>79582271mind showing it off?I only got AI art for my fic, but I suppose the thought was still there.
My wife.
>>79583873Congratulations Anon! I hope you both are happy
>>79577010Someone told me if I ever got a story based on my fic published, they would get a tattoo based off it.
>>79582271I got a piece made for one of mine, too.
>>79416492https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vQC3lS8geoF7igHxevv43gxaxkO6LFHyK59IMDkWTCm-9EtPojQalIjtAUW4L_2B9V3-Ij771LciEFB/pubShameful Desire (Reuploaded)Tags: Sakamata Chloe, NSFW, Netorase, Maid uniform, Mild Humilation PlaySince it was brought to my attention I'm reuploading shameful desire. Sadly it got deleted since the original file was tied to an email I deleted and just never noticed.
>>79586309How far along is the third part, NTR prophet?
>>79583873the woman you'll cheat on your wife with.
>>79579836Your wife wouldn't have left you if you had sex with her instead of just writing about having sex with her
>>79586675Is that suppose to be Matsuri's oshi?
>>79587619Now that you mention it, that makes sense......FUCK!
im in the weird spot where i want a bibbers fic but i know that people want to plap her.i just think she's funny
>>79589540I see who your daughter takes after
>>79589908Oh man, I can't take all the credit for such a wonderful daughter! It was a team effort.
>>79589875I want a chuuni edgy fic with her, it's probably what she would want too
>>79581847How the fuck is this meant to work with alt!Suisei? While I can kind of see it working in a true (non virtual) idol setting this is neither doing the parallel world where the only difference between them is luck thing or setting up the failing channel versus risen star dynamic.Unless the entire thing is meant as a "this is the 'evil' parallel world where she comes from" sort of thing.
>>79590734>>79416540a SpyxFamily type fic with a wholesome family of 3 but instead of being a secret agent, a killer, and a psychic, all 3 of them are low key retarded and are trying to hide how stupid they are.I bet she didn't even divorce you. She just went for milk and actually got lost and now is wandering aimlessly to get milk because she'd be more embarrassed if she came home empty-handed
>>79591784>all 3 of them are low key retarded and are trying to hide how stupid they are.LMAO
Guys, I made an Anki deck of classical rhetoric stuff. You know, literary figures, methods of invention (how to come up with stuff), writing styles, etc.I think it may be useful to you. Are you interested?
>>79591784>I bet she didn't even divorce youWe're not divorced, we're just separated. She took Aqua with her and they're living with her family. The final nail in the coffin was when she found out about my gambling debts.
>>79590734>You will never spend the last of your days on earth (because the world has gone to shit) cuddling into Aqua and having her reassure you that everything will be okay and that she'll keep you safe from all the dangers that are happening on the outside.
>>79589875You could just be shooting the shit with some casual sex inbetween the banter
>>79592029I can't tell if you're being legit or not, but... just in case, I'm sorry you're going through all that and for me making light of it for fun
>>79592029I can't believe this is how we find out AA got divorced.
>>79592387Don't worry, it's mostly fiction. My gambling for example is completely under control.
>>79588265How does it feel being a retard?
>>79593669Who else is it suppose to be, anon? I ask because there's no other blonde I could think of you would "cheat" with other than Sara.
>>79593503well, whichever part isn't ficton, I hope you can push through bro.
>>79594949>Anon wakes up in cold sweat>"You okay there buddy? your class is coming up">"Shit...thanks Kobo-sensei...i must have felt asleep">Go to your class, tell Marine and Lui to pipe down>Ignore Botan's advances>Tell "Gamers" to return to their seats>cringe a bit when Watame finally gets to class, late>Tell Azki to put down her phone >sigh>That dream where they were all old ladies sure was more peaceful than this
>>79589875I remember posting an idea for a fluff Biboo fic where you both late bloomers in High School and you two fall in love.
>>79589875That old romance idea of being a reformed bully that used to fuck with Bijou back when she was still a rock still has potential.
>>79596248>used to fuck with Bijou back when she was still a rockHow, kicking her down the road?
>>79595552>Foreign Exchange student from Italy shows up>strangely has it out for Bijou-Sensei>She constantly tries to klill Bijou sensei and you either push bijou out of the way, or take the hit yourself then act like nothing happened so Raora doesn't get her and her family deported
Alright, baking. Stand by.
>>79596665Bigboo
>>79597912Bigboobies heheheh
