Come one and all to the meta-writefag and help raise the quality of MLP fanfiction! Featuring: Spoilers! So many spoilers!ITT: Horses writing!, Utter devotion to accurately tagging cock pictures, Writers hating Twilight, Birth control at the last possible moment, Being stuck with your fellow miserable autists, Learning to love again, Awaiting the launch of the FSHIEBC, Shining's frightening masculinity, Anon's WIP sucks ass, The Rise of the Secret Club of Downers, Paying money to suck someone off, Bad memory warding off purple prose, Being overwhelmed by Celestia's terrifying presence, Human stories running about in pony suits, Dead corpses and deader threads, A build up of verbal diarrhea, Anon trades his life for like five fics, Shouldn't have let your language die out Greeky-boy, Reading comprehension never existed on Fimfic, It's never good to release a clopfic, Losing a beloved pet, Mayor Mare sweeps the polls once again, and love but also loss!>/fimfic/ Secret Book ClubThe eighty-third book is 'Into The Depths':https://www.fimfiction.net/story/60514If (You) want to participate, read the entire story by the 10th.On Sunday we'll discuss what we've read.>Recommended stories:Tired of authors inserting their fetishes out of nowhere? Fed up with blueball endings? Well, we've compiled the best of the worst in order to bring you our absolute average!New Starter Kit - http://mlpficreviews.org.uk/starter/Old Starter Kit - http://i.imgur.com/vuTA7EN.png>Common fic abbreviations used by the thread:https://ponepaste.org/7317>A list of reviews made by the Anons in this thread:http://www.mlpficreviews.org.ukUse the commands ">review <story link>" and ">discuss <story link>" to add reviews to a story.Userscript for extra features: https://ponepaste.org/8619>An in-depth writing guide for beginners:https://eznguide.neocities.org/>Can you pre-read my story?Post it on Google Docs or HackMD with comments enabled and give us a link.>Additional material for authors:Rhorse's Horse Behavioral Notes - https://ponepaste.org/932Politics and the English Language - https://www.orwell.ru/library/essays/politics/english/e_polit/Vhatug's tips for anatomically correct clop - https://poneb.in/g4VpEg4fSetting a story in motion - https://youtu.be/ufO8LbwTdu0Taking criticism - https://youtu.be/-v4R2ZcxPlA>Various reviews and riffs:Fillyanon's Bookshelf - https://ponepaste.org/5555Notkickass222urmom's Reviews - https://pastebin.com/u/notkickass222urmomIHeartShinzakura's Reviews - https://ponepaste.org/user/IHeartShinzakuraAppleanon reads fics - https://poneb.in/wmGX7FPmA Guide to Rational Fics - https://files.catbox.moe/3jzrfm.pngThe Royal Canterlot Library's Top 16 Fanfics - https://royalcanterlotlibrary.net/top16/Previous Thread: >>41599983
Second for best duo!
Third for best trio!
>>41620346Based amish.
It's 3:30am and there's a cat absolutely fucking wailing somewhere outside, keeping me and my cat sleeping with me up. I would assume it may be getting raped, but the season isn't quite right for that. I hope it's not one of my cats and it's not getting hurt.
2+2+2th for best duo!Enjoy some conveniently packaged Tuna: https://www.fimfiction.net/story/18270/within-and-without
Man it must kinda suck to be an earth pony and have to do everything with your teeth.
>>41620370Earth ponies kinda forgot they have telekinesis magic too
>>41620378Probably would make raising babies a lot easier
>>41620378The tickets are enchanted.
>>41620401You are right, but also...
>>41620401Unicope
>>41620406That's just your run of the mill mutant.
>>41620406Tiny horn
>>41620346Based straightposter
>>41620346He really mines her rocks
yo, Anons. I'm trying to remember the name of an old story. It's Rainbow Dash dies at the start of Season 1 and you're(?) her grim reaper. she plays along with the events of the series and (not sure about this) falls in love with youAnyone remembers the name?
>>41620589https://www.fimfiction.net/story/146556/to-be-human
>>41620406If only others were so lucky.
Work on my fic or farm the Lapras Ex event... Hmm...
>>41621306Why Larpas Ex when you can LARP a sex?
>reading a fic>Hoping it goes in a particular direction >It does and it does it wellFuck yes
>>41622017I'd like to hope we don't have *that* many politically-inclined posters.As for me, it's just been a busy week.
>>41622017 The thread can be very slow outside of club hours if we don’t have bait, an off-topic subject, or some circlejerk thing to hook everyone.
what fics should I read to distract myself from my surging manlust?
>>41622142I'unno.Some sappy dyke shit to even you out.
>>41622142https://www.fimfiction.net/story/538478/manhunger
>>41622051I had to learn that my grandmother in law has dementia and my wife's side of the family has been lying to her constantly as a ploy to guilt trip her into moving back to her shitty home town. I'm done with things, imma just write about Twilight getting knocked up.
>>41622292By who?
>>41620299Balled the fuck out on this chapter I'm writing. Got so in the zone I finished it in one sitting. This is the 2nd or 3rd redraft and it feels good to have it finally come together.
>>41622394By me.
>>41622017Anon, it would absolutely be the latter if anything (but unfortunately not the tunafag apparently)
>>41622607So a HIE? Cool!
>>41622624Did you just assume Anon's species?
>>41621306>>41621437Update: I have gotten a Lapras Ex
>>41622631Gachaniggers don't go to Equestria
>>41622617It's very good that we don't have actual /mlpol/ faggots, but there's also only exactly one militantly leftist poster. Every other anon simply acts like at least a mildly civilized person and doesn't bring this shit here.
I'm curious now.Are there fics about anyone running against Mayor Mare? I don't think I've ever read about something like that.
>>41622394I dunno, Shadow Lock or some shit. Who kind of dude is she even into
>>41622728Canonically big strong guardponies.
>>41622707The comics did that once IIRC
>>41622744So flashMagnus
>>41620765>canceledShit, I was interested in the premise and now I can't even start it
Any fics about the responsibilities of ruling? Preferably with Celestia and/or Luna, but any royal starring would do. I'm not meaning a SoL thing, but more along the lines of moral stuff. This feels like a premise that would've been written at least a thousand times, yet right now I can't find a single fic like this.
>>41622909Moon and Stars, Triptych, The Immortal Game, ___For a bad fic about ruling: Sharing the Night
>>41618634>tfw you have to be a liverymare from one of the Ponyville guilds to vote in the mayoral election>>41619233Some restriction, such as land ownership or guild membership.>>41619684Had a dog. He was put to sleep three years ago from the cancerous growths he kept getting. I still miss him.
>>41622880Better than being incomplete/on hiatus for eternity. At least here, the author has the decency to admit it's abandoned.
>>41623180That feels too medieval fantasy compared to Equestria's setting.
>>41623788Fantasy? It's how things are still done in the City of London.
>>41623791Silly anon, everyone knows the UK isn't real.
>>41623794It might be gay, but it ain't fake.
>>41623788Equestria isn't even a coherent setting in the show, it can be as modern or medieval as a fic requires.
>>41623536Yeah id rather these dudes admit they're done.
>>41624378It's like when you're RPing with someone and they just ghost you mid-typefucking. Just admit you're a quickshot, there's less shame in that than in leaving your partner high and dry.
>>41624456People are fucking flakes.
>>41624472They do?
>>41624571Use orange juice like a normal person.
>>41624591Semen is a less degenerate choice than OJ.
>>41624611I'm sure the feds will agree when they ask about my choice of refreshments at my cousin's birthday party.
Fics I can stare blankly at?
>>41624958You can sort your RIL by random don'cha know.
>>41624958What did he mean by this
>>41624958The Ziz universe chapters of Behemoth.
>accidentally put new chapter in completed story instead of the correct storyWell I guess that story's getting another few hours on the front page, lol.
>9owarida
>>41625656We'll all writing right now.
Is there anything exploring Celestia and Cadence and all that jazz?
>>41625700Shining, usually.
>>41625700My dick, usually.
>>41625767I mean she raised her, I was wondering if there were any fanfics exploring that.
I am growing stronger.
>>41626043There has to be a lot of fics focusing on that, but the closest three I can think of (that are also good) each come with some warnings:>A Scratch On Shining ArmorIt features this relationship as a major part of the story, but even though the fic is good, it's not an AU that I'd recommend to Cadance fans.>Moon and Stars This is another AU that's quite good—better than Scratch—and has a bunch of Cadance interacting with her Princess aunt, but this AU's whole thing is that Celestia and Luna's roles a thousand years ago were switched, so you get Luna and Cadance, not Celestia. Cadance is also not the main character here. And she's a pegasus for story reasons.>Princess Celestia the Changeling QueenEh. It has some nice Tia&Cadence moments, but the fic isn't that good to start with and iirc Cadance gets overshadowed by the actual leaders pretty soon.
>>41626082You'd think but I found a whole one that seemed to really have that as a thing.
>>41624611>filenametfw no charming ficwriter to roofie me..
Christ, its still updatingfucking hell. why am I getting the 15 minute timer now?
>>41626258>why am I getting the 15 minute timer now?Hell has a waiting list.
>>416262584chinz changed something in the backend. Maybe cloudflare got sick of all the bots clogging up their captcha service.
>>41626258That’s supposed to only appear for new users as a tool for undermining bots, but it will appear again if you delete your browser history.
>>41626748Bottom is better
Dead general
>>41627109the corpse killed us and it's not even published.
>>41627111I can't believe we managed to finish a writing project and it's dead because one faggot didn't finish a drawing.
>>41627119maybe he wouldn't have lost interest if some of you kikes didn't take so long with your chapters.
My fellow fimfic writers, please stop being unreasonable. If we don’t learn to embrace HIE, then we won’t survive.
>>41627111Damn. Maybe we should've made a writing project years ago.
>>41627142The only embrace HiE is getting out of me is the iron tight grip I'll use to keep it with me when the abyss swallows us both.
Is it bad form to slip some British English into otherwise all-American prose? There are some bongisms that have captured my heart, but I don't want my writing to come across as jumbled.
>>41627284It can be as simple as saying "zed" instead of "zee", or using the metric system, but yes, sayings are a big draw, especially when ponified. That said, picking and choosing stuff I like from different dialects seems like a good way to throw off any native readers, leaving me with a grateful audience consisting mostly of ESLs.
>>41627142Sorry, Twilight is only into pegasi and autistic bitches.
>>41627335 She’s canonically into human chads.
>>41627343Only when she's a human.
>>41627329>so long as you write wellif by 'well' you mean AiE garbage, then yes.
>>41627329Do you have some style guide you follow, or is it all just EFL instinct?>>41627349>abloo bloo humiesHush, the grownups are discussing fics.
>>41627343Who are pegasi in the real world
Fics about arcane industrial knowledge?
>>41627491You mean steam engines?
>>41627582>guns
>>41627694
>>41628077But how does she fire them
>>41628095With her fat marecock
>>41628107Not into that, sorry
>>41628107Not into /lgbt/, sorry
>>41628107>ponies have no fingers>so they’ve evolved to all have prehensile dicks
>>41628360>docking is just how ponies hold hands
I was talking and trying to think of any real major male characters in thisWe got >Shining Armor>Discord>Big Mac>Spike>Gallus>Sunburst
>>41628548Needs more Fancy Pants
>>41628548I know people meme about him but Sandbar is as much of a character as Gallus is, he just has a subdued personality. The male Pillars are all relatively fleshed out. Flash Sentry can count if you transplant his EQG personality. Garble is there, alongside a few other non-pony characters. Rainbow Roadtrip had the mayor and the movie had Capper. Really it depends what you mean by real major character. That's not even getting into G5.
>>41622728Man now I'm not sure if I go with Shadow Lock with Stygian as the disapproving father or Flash Sentry with Flash Magnus as the disapproving father.Edgy wizard boy disappointment or military musician boy disappointment
>>41627250The narrator can be whatever you want them to be, but dialogue-wise, if it's a canon character, you'll want to stick to the right VA accents they have. You also may want to be careful when the narrator does introspection. If he's "getting into a character's head" you'll probably want the narration to more reflect that.Now, if we're talking something more anal like spelling, I don't think too many readers care or would even notice. Stuff like grey/gray isn't even perceptible.>>41627491Rainbow Factory and its -verse. Writing on the Wall and the entire Yucca Mountain genre also technically qualifies.>>41628548There's Braeburn, who I think has the most dialogue of any male pony in S1, despite only being in one episode. Tirek's also in multiple episodes.
>>41629499>Tirek's also in multiple episodesAnd you know what else he's in?
I'm just noticing now, but the last schizo club didn't happen. It was supposed to be held on Monday instead of the usual Saturday, but the Anon who makes them just disappeared, and I guess no one else bothered making the thread.We truly ARE dead. And considering I didn't contribute anything normal to these threads in months, I guess I'm responsible too.
>>41629778It should happen today, if I can get my shit together (which isn't a guarantee). Turns out losing at least 2 hours a day on hospital trips is terrible for one's schedule.
Futa is quite gay
>>41629804All futa ponies are mares with flares, but not all mares with flares are futas.
How would you guys rate the writing for the quests in legends of equestria? assuming you will ever actually play those quests or at least watch a video.>>41628422
>>41629813I only go on loe to erp, tbhdesu.
>>41629813Becoming better as a writer inevitably makes you aware of the flaws in media's writing, even on a technical level. I recently got into the Breachway early access and jeez some of the stuff there is rough. And I haven't played Sea of Stars but the writing in it famously has problems with commas and sentence structure.
Odds Con te partirò, evens Creekflow.
>ò
>>41630042If you knew what the second is referencing you'd be retching even harder.
>>41630053When the fuck will somepony go and give that talentless troon the John Lennon treatment?
>>41630061Unfortunately some of the music is good.
>>41630072You wouldn't know good music if it played at your upcoming funeral.
>>41629542G1?
>>41630084That's the weirdest euphemism for cunny I've ever seen.
>>41630113G1 is a lolibaba at this point, wouldn't G6 be more fitting?
>>41630076Post your favourite albums.
>>41630118
>>41630121Do you ever wonder if this wasn't an early script they retooled? Christmas Carol riffs are ubiquitous in media, Twilight's absence is conspicuous, and she would make sense in the role given her arc in the show premiere.
>>41630130Tara Strong wouldn't have been able to get halfway through before bursting into flame.
>>41630137Silly anon, Tara is too stupid to self combust.
>>41630061Why do (You) know about it anyway?
>>41630165I Yandex'd it.
>>41630168Your filename is missing an 'all'.
>>41630175I was trying to keep it short enough so it wouldn't be truncated, but that didn't work out.
>>41630176I'm sorry to hear penis inspection day was rough on you.
>>41628940Flash because theres not enough of that.
The schizo club is dead; it’s time for the HIE club to rise. Let’s decide which fics we want first.
>>41630521After putting myself through the trials and troonbulations of TOL, I've gotten an itch to reread WASLC. Ease into humanity by starting with a TF'd humie.
>>41630521Shining Isekai
>>41630558Seconding.
>>41630554>>41630558Didn't we read both of these already?
>>41630592 Not in the HIE club. It will be composed of HIE gentlemen, so the analyses will be better.
>>41630592You say that like clubs have never read other clubs' fics.
>>41630614The only one I recall was Sunday club's LIAL attempt, which was a failure exactly because every anon interested in the fic already read it.
>>41630521A random fic by RunicTreeTops
In my defence, I never specified which Monday.
>>41630631Daring today, aren't we.
>>41630521How Many Friends Have You Made Today ? of course.
>>41630795Friends are for fags, real niggas have goonbuddies.
>>41630778>>41630801
>>41630521Everything by ruinqueenofoblivion
Are you going to participate in Jinglemas, Anon?
I have the feeling tomorrow will be a lot of fun. Call it a hunch.
>>41631431Please don't do it anon. I'm far too behind on everything. I keep on trying to do what I set out to do, but other important things come up. Don't add to my stack. Please.
>>41631117Yes.
>>41631117No
>>41631117Maybe
>>41630521I can’t think of any I want to read.
>>41632021Collected Works of RunicTreetops, volumes I through XXIV.
>>41630521This >>41630795I'd love to see the thread seriously tear that fic apart. But then again I'd like to see any thread tear that fic apart.>>41630137
>>41632021That's OK, it sounds like it's strictly about fics nobody wants to read.
>>41632071Very ironic.
>>41632035Runic is slop for ~80 iq people
>>41632167What's some good slop for cultured, 95 IQ individuals like me?
>>41631117Can't, almost done with the nyx fic
>>41632167If we're going to have an HiE club, we need to do it right.
>>41632167Perfect for this thread.
>>41632167Perfect for me
>schizo club dies before reading BehemothDamn, what a shame. I would have thought the EqG slasher fic would have been the one to do it, not Norse Words.>>41629542Your mom?>>41630130>wasn't an early script they retooled?No idea, but it would have had to come from S3+, since HWE already fills the Christmas slot in S2 and S1 didn't have any spare room for a holiday episode. Given how cliche it is compared to HWE, I can't imagine the early staff would have come up with it. That's got Haber written all over it.>>41630521Pirene. I've always wanted to read it.
>>41631431I have to move my car in the morning and if I didn't then I absolutely wouldn't be waking up early for this one
>Austraeoh kills the schizo clubOkay, now which fic will do the same to the standard club, I wonder?>>41632167Dab on Runic and his readers all you want, the rest of this board would read a Runic fic before any of the serious stuff this thread tends to prefer.>inb4 hurr-durr bcuz we're so smrtAnon has a serious legacy on this board. It just happens he became so massively popular on Fimfic in the recent years. Even only 3 years ago, the sinbin wasn't full of Anonfics on a regular basis.
>>41632739>the rest of this board would read a Runic fic before any of the serious stuff this thread tends to prefer.I love this board and respect Anon as our icon, but it's true that most people everywhere tend to have bad taste, and it's the easiest to see this by looking at the stuff that was made with mass-appeal as its main goal. It feels like the last decade or so has seen self-insertion media get insanely popular. This happened to more than just fics, and seeing it happen has been disappointing.>he became so massively popular on Fimfic in the recent yearsYes, and that's wrong. He's barely even associated with /mlp/ these days, instead becoming your cookie-cutter self-insert like the literal faceless protags of the worst moege VNs.
>>41632971As a complete aside, it's a shame that the dating sim genre died so hard that people nowadays think the term refers to VNs.
>>41632990I don't think I ever played a dating sim that wasn't on Newgrounds. Did I miss much?
Rolled 7 (1d10)There will be a slight (15 minutes?) bookclub delay. Sorry.Also:1-5: 1-Watch the Moon, 2-Anemoia, 3-The Bug in the Cave, 4-Cadance in A Minor, 5-Sorry we Missed You6-10 Equestria 485000
>>41633088>Equestria 485000Welcome back FSSBC
Eight editors and proofreaders,>/FSBC/Eight. I mean, it's not a huge deal, but the fact that this fic is strangely unpolished despite that, and despite being written by a Serious Author. “” At the start of the dialogue lines (but then not the end, random missed spaces/capitals, a few words with typos so bad they end up having no vowels. The writing style isn't bad, and as a whole, I wouldn't say it's bad-bad on the technical level; it's just not what I expected from EIGHT proofreaders.We also get no tags besides [Dark]! Some of it is a case of woeful undertagging (he did not add red tags to it after the site got them? really?), but some—like the absence of any real genre tags—could maybe be intentional. I am unsure if this tries and fails to be a Horror, or if it was an Adventure story gone awry during the writing. Because this is not a good horrorfic, imo. It definitely has its moments. There are some periods of exploration—especially in the first half—where the atmosphere gets a little chilly. Except that the author discards it later and goes to write a campy horror adventure. Again, it could've been an intentional decision, but I really doubt it because of one more thing: the story is kind of bad. It trips over itself with constant repetitions (of the story variety, not the word variety), and it decides to start going action-scene-heavy once its absurdly over-the-top quasi-horror could no longer withstand raising the stakes. The giant skeleton chase scene where ponies end up fighting while standing on Celestia's back is somehow not the most silly scene in the fic! So yeah, the "horror" of it got me lost earlier than I'd have liked, and while the adventure was still entertaining enough, the fic felt directionless in its writing. Quite possibly the worst offender is the penultimate scene, when the six random demons that have been set up as this eldritch, mystic, practically incomprehensible force start bickering like cartoon villains (which half of them are, desu). And then the fic takes another turn with its weird finale.I am being too harsh on the fic. I ended up finishing it as I posted >>41633088, so this is more ramble'y and less measured of a post than I'd usually like to write. I should've read it earlier so I wouldn't rant as much. The fic did some things right, notably the horror in earlier scenes and some of the action in the later ones. But it feels incoherent and aimless—adjectives I was certainly not expecting to use when talking about a fic with nearly 2k likes written by one of the most well-known authors on the site. I was expecting to put it into my favorites, not leave it without a like! Also,>A/N: "It [Lemegeton] is a mythology book."Yeah, that's... one way to put it, mr. writer. Certainly a choice.Next week we're starting Equstria 485,000https://www.fimfiction.net/story/385770/equestria-485000Up to, and including, Chapter 18: Recollection
>>41633085Yes but the really good ones are JP only anyway. TokiMemo 2 is a masterpiece and also the single biggest PSX game by size, and the whole series was widely influential to Japanese media. If you've ever seen an anime where a girl getting angry is represented with a bomb or something similar, that's a TokiMemo reference. Just pretend 3 doesn't exist.
>>41633105I think the opening of this fic is by far the weakest part. The only thing the cold open does is give you a thought (and only a thought, it never seemed like Twilight was gonna be a character who dies to me) that Twilight, wing blade, and path finder are going to die when you get to the part of the story that's just them and Celestia. But the cost is having the reader start by reader a page 95% towards the end of the fic as the first page. It would've been so much better to just start with the spot where the story actually started, Celestia finding Luna in her room. Then my suspension of disbelief gets pummeled in about every scene for the first 20% of the fic after the cold open. >The news she had been given was... horrible. Luna and Twilight had gone missing.Huh? Why is that horrible? She just found out they're both doing secret things why would she react like that?>maybe Luna is in this super secure quadruple enchanted chamber, and of course she went in and locked it behind herselfKek? Just fucking hire a tracker next time, or fucking winona. they even talk about how everyone is leaving hoofprints everywhere they go>buddy system. Except for Fortress, no one likes you>push ups during a missionRetarded>message bubbles apparently just fly to their recipientJust text luna wya>2 of the 3 most important ponies alive are missing so we gathered a team of the very best guards>"ey bb send nudes big bobs yes?"Retarded>Celestia doesn't care that 2 ponies just died>guards die cuz a weapon rack falls on them, "don't touch anything, you might cause a cave in"Wtf are they doing? They're looking for two ponies, they don't need to touch every shelf and walk down every isle (yes I know they didn't knock the shelf down onto themselves, I'm mad they they were even near a shelf in the first place)>musical chairs with lanterns and getting shot in the head2 of the 3 ponies were unicorns, just fucking grab one? Just put a fucking shield around one? Wtf is anyone in this fic even doing?>"Now go get all of our supplies and get them in the center of the room. Then get ready to take the first watch."What? Huh? Your comrade just got shot in the head 15 seconds ago so you decide to send an earth pony to wonder the room alone then go to bed? It's like if I squint and skim the whole story I can come out of it with something better than when I actually read it. Trapped in the rotunda while time starts to fly by and corpses start decaying, cool. But that's not what we end up reading, we read some weird scene where it takes more than 3 royal guards to change a light bulb and a sniper attack is treated with less gravitas than a pony sneezing in a library. But then the good passages start to sneak through where they are not perceiving time correctly. This scene was both the worst scene yet and the turning point where the fic gets its act together.
>>41633158>email in a/nSomeone send him dolphin porn>spell to turn a unicorn's head into a telephoneLmao>5 second countdown to breach the doorKek>but, without her magic, she was little more than an oversized pegasus with a forehead deformity.And the biggest earth pony alive? Gj forgetting about 1 of 3 types of pony>sp00ky skeltal scene>Twilight hiding in a coffin full of light gemsKino>Luna's guards don't listen to her>Luna 1000x more adept at adventuring than celestia>we even get a flashback of twilight chillin in the coffinKek>Twilight Astral projects and just watches niggerass fuck around>Twilight must Astral project to save Equestria from the elements of disharmonyAs kek as it is at least the fic is trying to tie this in to Equestria>scene of the demons bickering just so they can all name drop each other>just shoots the power of the dark rainbow back into Tartarus and returns to normalLame. I'm glad the fic ended how it did more than I'm not since it at least made an effort to be a pony story. It was frustrating I guess to see Celestia actually do so little throughout the fic and then get her head caved in by Fortress, who thanks to cannibalism and having gone insane, now knows how to use her magic to grab a lantern. And then when we get to Twilight she's basically a super weapon. The lore dump also sucks ass, it's like oh here's Twilight, the fic is gonna end now. And the only time anybody in the fic dies and it seems like they died is Night Gaze being kino. Nopony else is treated like a pony just died and the worst one by far is the scene where they have the first 2 deaths and Celestia is in the room and never mentioned once. Anyways I'll give it a thumbs up for trying to make it pony but I don't care for it just like most of these fics>>41633105Eight. I mean, it's not a huge deal, but the fact that this fic is strangely unpolished despite thatkek, I forgot about that while reading but yeah, eight people didn't notice "spn" instead of "spun" in the 4th chapter? Also holy shit that's the most elaborate copy paste on every chapter I've seen yet>author discards it later and goes to write a campy horror adventurethat's a good way to put it, a lot of it seems campy. The first two people dying to a weapon rack falling on them isn't scary in the slightest and sets a weird tone>one more thing: the story is kind of badkek I'll agree with that
>>41633105I wrote that in a rush and didn't have the time to open my notes, trusting I remembered enough from just reading.But no. I missed The Worst Possible Thing!I somehow forgot that the fic goes out of its way to de-canonize batponies. Boo! Saged&reported to the taste authorities! Please imagine that post as at least 20% more mad.>Past Sins lampshadingKek, was this before the massive editing/quasi-rewrite or after it?>>41633158>wing bladeRight, that! Sure is 2012 around here.>It would've been so much better to just start with the spot where the story actually startedI am not a fan of this cold open, either. As you said, it doesn't actually do anything. But maybe the author thought that the slow-ish start would have too many people drop the fic otherwise.>RetardedThere's so much more that's retarded, too. For instance, no one finds the smell of decomposing bodies after 1000 years suspicious in the slightest. Same with the constant "body odor" in the rooms (which is a phrase the author seems to enjoy a lot). While one wouldn't be a big deal, all these things combined make this horror not scary. It's an OK adventure fic, I guess. The people in the comments praising it for the horror elements surely are insane.>>5 second countdown to breach the door...as Celestia was fucking dying from holding her spell on for so long, yeah.>KekI think it was around that point (and the skelly chase) that the story completely discarded any notion of trying to be scary.>it at least made an effort to be a pony storyDid it? Everything about that is so incongruent with the horror part. I have finished this fic and I can't with good confidence guess what GENRES the author was targeting. It's a bunch of scenes connected together, but arguably failing at being either a good horror story, or a pony pony adventure. As you said, the deaths and the horror build up are not very pony, so then the climax being 6 occult (and G1) demons bickering in a cartoony way comes off as out of place. This would be an okay ending to a "Celestia is awesome"-type story, but that's just about the opposite of what the first part of the fic attempts to be. She's constantly weak, afraid, hurt, etc. I know I'm kind of repeating myself, but aimless storywriting with no clear goal or tone is probably one of the things I dislike the most.
>>41633209>I somehow forgot that the fic goes out of its way to de-canonize batponies.I also forgot about that and it's dumb>>5kino post kek, this anon is surely still waiting with baited breath>Did it?Only in the sense where it isn't literally just niggerman, they tried to use tartarus and completely randomly grabbed some names to use with him. Somehow tirek is involved and somehow a unicorn queen caused all of it. I'm just saying that it seems like all of that was more pony effort than most of these fics have. Do I think the fic sucked? Yeah, but most of them suck and aren't trying to stay pony. So even though this one might've failed, I at least saw it trying something>aimless storywriting with no clear goal or tone is probably one of the things I dislike the most.fair enuf. I definitely would've preferred a celestia is kino story>>41633223no
>>41633225>kino postI'm a >>10 man myself.
>>41633223Yes
>>41633105>Eight editors and proofreaders,Yeah, when none of them noticed gauging in place of gagging, it's almost as impressive as the way my phone's notepad would not even let me type it.I picked up this fic hoping that there would be Tuna, but instead it's off to the races with survival horror. Man, it really hurried to get those ponies in the catacombs, but immediately stopped going anywhere once they were in the right place to start getting picked off.>>41633179Yeah, the ᓬ:V telepone spell was one of my favorite ponyisms from the fic that I read. I only read the first half and then went to bed.The mad dash to save the lanterns was, I guess, one of those kinds of scenes of crazy ineptitude from horror flicks that's supposed to build tension? Fortress was charging a shield spell to protect them from the bolts, which was important, so she couldn't telekinetically grab the lanterns. Overall, the story is all over the place, simultaneously better written and worse than I expected. A lot of the horror scenes read like a worse implementation of 9DD. That fic did so well injecting standard tropes like LEGO and having them fit seamlessly in place. On the flip side, there were several scenes that actually did have atmosphere. Too bad they were like a little patch of fog rolling by.I'm not particularly motivated to finish it, unless I can skip the deaths of the red shirts and get to the scenes with Twilight and Luna.
>>41633105I found this fic to be quite good, lack of polish aside. The style struck me at first as a little predictable, but still clean. I guess that's what happens when you have 8 editors working on the fic. Still, the quality of the prose did deteriorate towards the end of the fic, especially the last chapter. I also don't think it was necessary to include the title and author at the top of every chapter when they're already at the top of the page, or the author's email address and a hasbro copyright at the bottom, but hey, what do I know? As horror, the fic worked very well. The author's use of sensory descriptions other than purely visual ones filled in a more complete picture of the tunnels. I especially enjoyed how grim the sounds and smells of the corpses and skeletons were. The stifling darkness muffling sound also reinforced the sense of isolation. To make a comparison, it kept making me recall the undead crypt from Dark Souls 2, if anyone here's played that before. The atmosphere was suitably oppressive, and the pace at which the threats to the ponies grew was excellent. The guards behaved in a believably guard-like fashion; as cliche as it is, watching trained professionals get picked off by an invisible monster is nonetheless pretty gripping. Fortress's death was surprisingly distressing. Being trapped in a time bubble resorting to cannibalism was terrifying enough, but running off into the dark right on the verge of rescue was pretty tragic. I really wanted to just give her a hug. Night Gaze's death, too, was striking. I think it's because of how sudden it was; like real death, you hardly realise it happened until it's already over. As with most horror stories, the story works best as long as the monster isn't revealed. Tirek and his posse were an interesting choice of antagonist for sure, especially given that the fic was written before the season 4 finale. However, I think the author tried to fit too much exposition immediately before the climax. I mean, Twilight literally jumps out of a coffin to give everyone a history lesson. We also have seven (7) main "villains" who show up, when all of the actions taken against the guards could have easily been performed by just one actor. It just seemed excessive to fit into the last quarter of the story. This, combined with the aforementioned decrease in writing quality, made me less engaged with the fic towards the end. The conclusion was practically rushed along, having Celestia defeat Tirek and wake up at home in the last 3k words or so. Overall, I still enjoyed the fic. It's at its best when teams of guards are getting Predator'd and the threat is still uncertain. The not-Necronomicon and "harder" elements of eldritch magic were a bit much for me.
>>41633337>Man, it really hurried to get those ponies in the catacombs, but immediately stopped going anywhere once they were in the right place to start getting picked off.yeah, the beginning was garbage and I had this same thought. Once we see Fortress and the 2 others wasting away I instantly realized 'oh, so this is where the story wanted to be and everything before this was essentially a waste of words to get here'>On the flip side, there were several scenes that actually did have atmosphere. Too bad they were like a little patch of fog rolling by.Yeah, out of context some of the scenes were decent>I'm not particularly motivated to finish it, unless I can skip the deaths of the red shirts and get to the scenes with Twilight and Luna.honestly just skip to when they find Twilight, it's kinda kino and then the rest of the fic is weird, but it's also probably where most of the non-existent discussion has focused>>41633370>The stifling darkness muffling sound also reinforced the sense of isolation.That was my favorite descriptor by far, but then over the next few paragraphs we hear about it over and over and over. Yeah we get it, the echoes dont sound how they should, can we move on?>The guards behaved in a believably guard-like fashion; as cliche as it is, watching trained professionals get picked off by an invisible monster is nonetheless pretty grippingNot the feeling I got at all. In fact, thinking back, I think the fortress scene post sniper is the best scene in the fic and nothing else really comes close except Twilight in the coffin>However, I think the author tried to fit too much exposition immediately before the climaxabsolutely, Twilight just crawling out of the coffin and lore-dumping felt very rushed as you said
Why everyone here hates anon?
>>41633225>they tried to use tartarus and completely randomly grabbed some names to use with himBut it's not random. Those are actual demon names that have been crossed-over from irl occultism stuff. It's exactly like the niggerman you dislike, except borrowing from a different book and being far more literal with it. The book they're looking for in the fic is a Lemegeton reference in the first place. Actually I think the author was into some pop-occultism himself given the completely unnecessary and basically irrelevant (but definitely accurate) infodump about tarot readings.>I definitely would've preferred a celestia is kino storyI would've preferred that. But unlike you, I would've also preferred a proper horror fic. To put it more succinctly, I think it's a worse crime to tank your story by haphazardly trying to tape it to some scraps of FiM lore at the end than to keep things unexplained. The execution of the horror in the first part is janky, but it would almost objectively be a better story if it just didn't have the infodumps in the second half and let the threat stay at least a little menacing.>>41633337>TunaThere's one short flashback scene, but other than that, Twilight and Luna are never in the fic together. I don't know where exactly you stopped, but there aren't really any scenes with good atmosphere in the second half, imo. A couple of the actions scenes are pretty nice, though. I'll once again refer to that skeleton monster's part, because as ridiculous and not scary as it is, it's a very adventure'y adventure scene.>A lot of the horror scenes read like a worse implementation of 9DD. That fic did so well injecting standard tropes like LEGO and having them fit seamlessly in place.Absolutely. 9DD knew what it was trying to do with those and made sure they serve that purpose.
>>41633414Why are you falseflagging as an ESL?
>>41633431Post moar Khazmares.
>>41633414>Wants to fuck horses but is too cowardly to just make his own horse OC
>>41633105>Because this is not a good horrorficI thought it was serviceable as horror, to be honest. I wasn't actually *scared* during any of it, but the themes and tone of the story were certainly horror. To make another Dark Souls comparison, the skeleton worm felt just like something from the Catacombs or Tomb of the Giants from DS1. I think it struck a good balance between feeling scary and thrilling. The horror definitely ceases the subtler, more psychological style of the beginning, but it seemed like a natural progression. The fic seemed pretty campy from the beginning to me, so maybe I just had different expectations for it. >Quite possibly the worst offender is the penultimate scene...Agreed. Having six demons quip at each other was underwhelming, to say the least. I get that the author was trying to make them the anti-elements of harmony, but it really wasn't necessary. And the "Archer" as the opposite of Laughter? That didn't make any sense. >>41633158>I think the opening of this fic is by far the weakest part. I'd say the conclusion narrowly beats it out, but yes, the author tries to fit in way too much information for what it is. I also agree that starting in media res detracted from the efficacy of the fic. It basically spoils the greatest extent of intensity the fic reaches, and the scene it comes from also isn't reached until right before the end. >>2 of the 3 most important ponies alive are missing so we gathered a team of the very best guardsThis, as well as the other logical holes you mentioned, hurt my suspension of disbelief. These were supposedly the elite, special operator, Navy-SEAL-type best-of -the-best guards in the whole country. I can believe that they goof off and joke around, like any soldier does, but they should have been more competent at their jobs. >But then the good passages start to sneak through where they are not perceiving time correctly. Seeing them run out of food literal minutes after saying how they had an excess due to all the deaths was disorienting, but in the way the fic wants it to be. >>41633179>Gj forgetting about 1 of 3 types of ponyI really hate when people act like only unicorns and pegasi have unique abilities and leave earth ponies out to dry. They're not flashy, but earth ponies are supposed to be stronger and more resilient than the other types. That said, Celestia was surprisingly weak through the whole fic. I guess all the magic in the world can't overcome a life of sitting around and eating cake all day. >And then when we get to Twilight she's basically a super weaponYeah, never forget that Night Gaze dies not 10 seconds before Twilight comes out of her coffin, but as soon as she does, everything is suddenly peachy keen. Celestia really doesn't GAF about anyone other than Twilight or Luna.
>>41633451This is boring ngl. >"Muh horse self insert".If you gonna self insert at least do it in a fun wacky way.
>>41633408Your comment about how it should've started with Celestia stalking Luna in her bedroom is hilariously spot on. I've advocated before for several elements in the way ITCON starts, and one thing this fic did well is give you an immediate point of reference for the range of "nice" and "ugly" the fic will have. Well, I didn't finish it, so I don't know for sure if it gets uglier than it did there, but based on the comments, it seems right.That's one thing it would've lost if it started there, but the pacing was already incredibly fast up until they get to the rotunda, so the fic would only lose some initial readers who probably would've been lost as it slowed down anyway.>>41633431Like >>41633158 mentioned, the gravitas of scenes is completely incoherent. I also noticed how incredibly long and detailed the tarot scene is, it's crazy that none of it even mattered. Meanwhile, the deaths of the first four guards are barely a blip. Five or six sentences to wheel them out (while requesting reinforcements) or defile the corpses and that's it.I did notice the excessive in-story repetition, too. Anyway, I stopped right at the beginning of Bound for the Surface when Celestia gets strongarmed into regrouping on the surface.
>>41633470>If you gonna self insert at least do it in a fun wacky way.And Anon is the most boring and straightforward way to self-insert.
>>41633209>She's constantly weak, afraid, hurt, etc.I think this is just the price of having an immortal goddess of sunlight be the main character in a fic where the monster's main weakness is light. She has to be crippled in order to not completely dominate. I think the author handles it as best he can, by focusing on her lack of practice in real danger, but the fic might have worked better had Shining Armour or some other pony gone down instead of her. >aimless storywriting with no clear goal or tone is probably one of the things I dislike the most.Tentative agreement here. I think there are too many plot holes and forgotten threads to say the story has a clear narrative that it follows. >not very pony>>41633225>Only in the sense where it isn't literally just niggermanI think that making positive themes and morals of a story the only criterion for being "pony" is pretty narrow. The characters *acted* in a pony enough way, I thought. For example, Path Finder and Night Gaze's bickering in the face of serious danger was lighthearted in a show-like way, even if it was incongruous with their roles as guards. Like Twiflag said, the author also tries to integrate the story into the world of Equestria as a whole, however clumsily. >>41633337>I picked up this fic hoping that there would be TunaI was disappointed at Luna's lack of influence in the story. She's literally a princess waiting to be rescued, not to mention the instigator of the whole story. I don't think it detracts from the first half of the fic, but it makes the ending very unsatisfying. >The mad dash to save the lanterns was, I guess, one of those kinds of scenes of crazy ineptitude from horror flicksAgain, I read this as being campy thriller more than pure horror going into it, so I wasn't as turned off by this as most other anons were. >get to the scenes with Twilight and Luna.Don't bother. I don't think they share a single scene together.
Someone sure is jealous of the club.>>41633462>they should have been more competent at their jobs.In defense of this concept, I do like it when the "elite" royal guards act about as competent as a regular non-soldier IRL person, due to the implication that they don't deal with this kind of thing in their normal job. That being said, the fic throws away any benefit it gets from that approach by adding in all that "check your corners" room pieing CQB talk.
>>41633470Right, so actually making up a character that fits the setting. Instead of just Literally You.
>>41633520He's the most creative way. Just by appearing in the world as a human he changes character dynamics allowing a vast number of interpretation of his character and how the world would react to him.
>>41633546This is the mindset that lead to the introduction of the Student Six.
>>41633562Strawman, the student six where made to push a message of "diversity" they are impure from the start. While anon have many facets for his character and they are mostly done for fun so they are pure.>>41633545Very few anons are a direct 1 to 1 representation of the author.
>>41633408>this is where the story wanted to be>Yeah, out of context some of the scenes were decentSee, I enjoyed the story when it was in those sections where the guards were isolated and threatened. The rest of the fic was clearly just a vehicle to get there, and the ending almost seemed like it was invented purely to cap off an otherwise unrelated story. >Twilight in the coffinI actually didn't think her reveal was very good at all. She just kind of appears in an area where Celestia and co. had already explored and totally undermines the previous tension from Night Gaze's death. She doesn't even do anything after that beyond loredumping and getting everyone to the surface for real this time. >>41633431>if it just didn't have the infodumps in the second half and let the threat stay at least a little menacingTo tell the truth, up until the whole Tirek/Grogar thing, I was expecting it to be the "pony of shadows" or some other remnant of NMM that Luna was trying to clean up. Tirek was an interesting choice, but it just didn't work. >>41633483>one thing this fic did well is give you an immediate point of reference for the range of "nice" and "ugly" the fic will haveIs this a good thing? I think the horror would have worked better if the reader hadn't been given a bound on the "worst" things would get right at the beginning.
The number of good HiE fics is a prime number contained within the Fibonacci sequence. I'm confident it's 5, we just need to find three more.
>>41633546Imagine I bothered to put the HiE copypasta here.
>>41633590What is "good" for you?
>>41633462>Celestia really doesn't GAF about anyone other than Twilight or Luna.It doesn't even feel like that though, it feels like she never even noticed that ponies were dying. We don't even get a sentence of her thoughts about how it's necessary, she simply just doesn't participate in any scenes where some pony dies>>41633483>I also noticed how incredibly long and detailed the tarot scene is, it's crazy that none of it even mattered. Meanwhile, the deaths of the first four guards are barely a blip.lmao I pretty much forgot about the tarot scene by the end, the entire lore dump chapter was forgettable honestly>>41633526>I was disappointed at Luna's lack of influence in the story.Agreed, at least we got a flashback cameo where she's far more competent than any other character in the story>>41633534completely agree with you, it would be fine to have goofy incompetent top-tier guards if they weren't acting like larpers playing a tactical shooter>check your cornersWith my spear? lmao what does that even mean>>41633586>I actually didn't think her reveal was very good at all. She just kind of appears in an area where Celestia and co. had already explored and totally undermines the previous tension from Night Gaze's death. She doesn't even do anything after that beyond loredumping and getting everyone to the surface for real this time.I don't really mean her reveal, and especially not her lore-dump. I meant her situation is kino. Luna shoving her and every light gem they had into a coffin and sealing her in. >>41633615kek
>>41633590And I know how we can do it:Introducing the /fimfic/ Midweek Manlove Book Club!Have (You) felt like bemoaning the state of modern horsewords together with "people" of a similar outlook?Have (You) been itching to rip apart HiE fics as surely as a fresh-faced humie tears through a pack of timberwolves?Have (You) enough tolerance for amateurish attempts at anon adventures to get through countless pages of humanity's finest?If (You)'ve answered yes to one or more of these questions, join us this Thursday, as /fmmbc/ picks through...https://www.fimfiction.net/story/543280/It-Can't-Be-TaughtSaint Runic's longest fic, and as good a starting point as any. Be there, or be mare.
>>41633635shoulda started with piano man to set the mood
>>41633639/fsbc/ already read that one, there's no sense retreading old ground. In contrast, I couldn't find any mention of ICBT on desu. It might just be the hidden gem this thread's been looking for.
>>41633546sounds like cope to me
>>41633615https://vocaroo.com/13cOyTNExCyk
>I want to fuck this horse girl>Ohh but I don't want to be a horse noooCowardice. Sheer cowardice.
>>41633656Quailty slop.
>>41633646>I CBTwhat is it with you >people and genital mutilation?
When in the timeline does the Cupcakes fanfiction take place? Is it before or after season 3?
>>41633714Well before.It was circulating online well outside of pony internet circles in 2011~2012.It was written with S1~2 in mind.
>>41633635https://www.fimfiction.net/story/471615/my-little-humanI recommend we (you, since I already did) read this next since it’s a reasonable length as well as being fucking awful and perfectly representative of everything wrong with anon or HIE fics in general.
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>>41633809>RGREThat's a no from me.>>41633817Got to the end of Asylum yesterday. An important case study in writing oneself into a corner.
>>41633370>I also don't think it was necessary to include the title and author at the top of every chapterBut how else can you communicate that you're a Big Writer who writes Fanfiction and not fanfics like the rest of the non-popular folk? In all fairness, I think this is subtly influencing my opinion. Most of what I've seen or heard about Pen Stroke paints him as a self-described Big Writer, but the quality of the fic does not match that description at all. I was lower on the fic than you are, but it honestly struck me a little... amateurish? in its execution. Errors that slip past 8 editors contribute to that, but it has the kind of structural errors that don't match the "10k followers & multiple interviews on Writing on eqd/conventions" persona.>As horror, the fic worked very well>(alright, coming back to this later, I see what you meant)>The author's use of sensory descriptions They were good. They also unfortunately kept being repeated and recycled until I got a little bored, but it would be unfair not to notice the writing's strong points. Some of the more horror'y scenes were written really good in isolation; it's just that they didn't add up to a good horror story for me.>DS2 Undead CryptIt also made me think of that. It's a very good location, aside from that one Leydia ghost gangrape room you drop into (you know which one). DS2 was the best in the series at many things, but the atmosphere of trudging through these tombstones and watching out for traps shows the strengths of DS2's design.>Fortress>Night Gaze's deathSome of the better parts of the fic for sure. It's a shame the fic forgets them instantly after they die.>I think the author tried to fit too much exposition immediately before the climaxI won't harp on about the ending for much longer, but yeah. It should've been just one villain. If you really want to reference G1 and make him some sort of anti-harmony satan instead of some sort of nightmare creature then by all means use Tirek, but please don't start introducing SEVEN villains mid-climax of a horror fic. What the hell.>>41633408>we hear about it over and over and over.Exactly.>nothing else really comes close except Twilight in the coffinThat a pretty bad scene, imo. It could've been decent, but it just has no weight to it and Twilight's panicking felt comedic rather than serious. Which, to be fair, came after the skeleton chase and the history lesson so it's not like we had much of the horror atmosphere to lose by that point, but it certainly didn't help it.
>>41633828What kind of gay you are? RGRE is kino! It explores gender dynamics in a way that no other fics does!
>>41633867The Jewish myth of "gender" has no place in Equestria.>Verification not required.
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>>41633883lollmao even
>>41633462>The fic seemed pretty campy from the beginning to me, so maybe I just had different expectations for it.It's possible that I misjudged it, or at least latched on the stuff I liked too much. The themes are horror for sure, but by the chase scene and Twilight's introduction I'm not so sure I can agree the comment on the tone. From there it felt like action-heavy adventure. They infodump in peace, Twilight just blasts enough light to push the terrors back, Celestia meets the evil gang before promptly going god-mode on them and banishing them back to hell—to me, none of that felt consistent with the horror tone from earlier.>Celestia really doesn't GAF about anyone other than Twilight or Luna.I'm sure it's not what the author intended, but that's how it reads and it was not great, yeah.>>41633483>the gravitas of scenes is completely incoherentYes, that's exactly what's wrong with them. It's what made me think that the fic doesn't want to be all that serious, but I really doubt it was the intended effect.>when Celestia gets strongarmed into regroupingYou're skippable horror one scene away from the skellies (they try to get out but the corridors stretch endlessly so they decide to go back down instead), and then Twilight immediately afterwards. I wouldn't recommend reading this fic past Twilight's reveal, but if you're curious about Twi and the coffin scene, it's at the end of that chapter and the start of the next one.>>41633526>She has to be crippled in order to not completely dominate.That's fair. The monsters could've also not been this weak when shined on. Clearly the light alone is not enough to save you from their influence and magic as Fortress's demise proved.>The characters *acted* in a pony enough way, I thoughtYou know, I think I'll take what I said back, because I don't actually disagree. If it had kept the more atmospheric horror until the end, it would be pony enough for me. Circles is probably the best example of a classic cosmic horror story when the characters act straight as if taken out of the show. The Needle less so, but—like this fic—it clears the bar with room to spare. It's just that the shift to the more overt Harmony-oriented plot (with EoH, anti-EoH, etc.) clashed with what I thought the story had been doing until then.>campy thriller more than pure horrorProbably the right way to approach it.>>41633586>I enjoyed the story when it was in those sections where the guards were isolated and threatened.Definitely. Those did feel like "proper" horror and I liked them as well.
>>41633714Sometime after Griffon the Brush-off and before BNE.
>>41633867>>41633877Wasn’t the guy who coined the word gender a Marxist and a pedo?
>>41633981Only sex should exist.
Does anyone read non-fiction to help them write characters? I'm currently a third of the way through Getting to Yes because I'm writing Celestia in a negotiation. Was it a good idea?Is it a good book?
>>41634021Does that negotiation involve selling herself to sexual slavery for the good of Equestria?
>>41633961>a Marxist and a pedoHoly based, I hope he was French too
>>41634026How did you guess? My other primary non-fiction source is the Japanese comfort women. Do you know what having sex 40 times a day does to a vagina?
>>41633586It is a good thing, but a lot of its goodness is related to its importance in commercial fiction. In that context, the representation of the story in its first chapter is pretty critical, mostly for the many ways in which the first chapter of a book is used to market it.Now, the importance is mitigated on FiMFiction because of things like tags and groups, and the comment section, but this club fic definitely has issues with being unrepresentative of what its front page suggested. Besides expecting two particularly pretty ponies to be much more strongly represented than they were, everyone going into the fic expected the horror to be much better and generally more atmospheric than it was. Part of that is because of the tone set in the flash forward scene, and I'll say that is the scene doing its job, but the author, at the time, was not able to deliver the fic that he advertised with it.I have bias in favor of wanting to know as much about a story as early as possible because I can't read all the fics I want to read, so I almost never view spoilers negatively. If a story is good, spoilers can't ruin it, the journey, all that jazz. Even so, I find it easy to argue that for a horror fic, that scene is not meaningfully a spoiler. The author still has a lot of room to subvert expectations about how ugly the fic will get, and even more importantly, if the author chooses not to subvert expectations, you will still be able to see what the story's maximum tension will be by the rate at which it's escalating relative to your progress by page number.To its credit, the one in this fic does also emphasize the tags' suggestion that the fic is about Celestia and not her better 2/3.Anyway, all this to give an emphatic no on setting the bounds making it worse. If it were a good, dedicated horror story like, say, The Needle, that would not harm it. I went into that story already knowing its ending, and it was still mostly great.
>>41634055No, but he was a Jew called Money.
>>41634067Thank god for alicorn endurance.
>>41634121Too bad about alicorn fertility
After over a week of severe depression, another chapter is done. The quality of this one is going to be worse than the others since I had to force this to happen, and my mind is wandering.>>41581369
>>41633646On the /fimfic/ dicksword, Runic once called it his best work. But I'll still keep a bucket next to me in case I vomit.
>>41622653It looks like nobody fell for this, which should've been a given after two of them lost an argument with each other last thread, so they just gave up.
>>41634150What about alicorn fertility?
>>41633853>paints him as a self-described Big Writer, but the quality of the fic does not match that description at allAs we saw with The Changeling Queen, an author's fame is often more due to cultivating a persona and follower base than actual skill. I didn't look at the author or like count beyond a cursory "oh, this guy's fic is popular" before starting to read, so my expectations were probably lower than most anons'. >unfortunately kept being repeated and recycled until I got a little boredThis is something that I didn't mind on my first run through but feels more grating when I look back through the fic. I was light on the author for this in my initial post, but I agree that he relied too much on a fairly small set of descriptors. Like you say, the horror scenes were good in isolation, but many of them played out with the same recycled phrases. >Twilight's panicking felt comedic rather than seriousIt felt like the author had a pretty shallow read of Twilight's character. When she was revealed, he immediately defaulted to the typical "academic rambling, losing train of thought" Twilight instead of something with more nuance. Now, it was nice to see early-season naive Twilight who isn't extraordinarily powerful in her own right, but she's more than just a nerd. >>41633908>the chase scenePersonally, I actually felt like the initial skeleton fight scene was more tonally dissonant than the chase. During the chase, the characters are comical, but they're also helpless in the face of this overpowering threat like in the rest of the fic. The fight has Celestia killing skeletons a dozen at a time without even using magic. It made the skeletons seem too weak for single skeletons to be threatening later on, like when Path Finder couldn't take one and Night Gaze had to sacrifice himself. I totally agree that from Twilight's introduction on, the horror atmosphere is spoiled and the fic turns into an action movie. >shift to the more overt Harmony-oriented plotYeah, in the early seasons themselves and a lot of fics from around then, inclusion of the EoH often feels more like an obligation than actually appropriate. >>41634081>I have bias in favor of wanting to know as much about a story as early as possibleI'm the total opposite, which is why I disagree with the majority of your post ^:). Personally, I derive a lot of the enjoyment of a story from finding out new information. Not everything has to be surprising, necessarily, but if I already know for certain how things turn out, then the journey to get there loses some gravitas. I understand your argument that a well-told story can stand without needing to conceal information from the audience (that's why people retell stories at all, anyway), but I also think that restricting information is a powerful tool that an author has to create tension and engagement with the reader.
>>41633223>dock upside downREEEEEEE
>>41634266Celestia's been getting cummed inside for how many years and there's how many alicorn fillies calling her mom?Oh right, zero.
>>41634421>Celestia's been getting cummed inside for how many yearsAlso zero, actually. Somehow I still haven't made it to Equestria.
>>41634433cope. the only reason equestria isn't swarmed with alicorn bastards is that celly's womb got irreversibly damaged by big chaotic cock.
>>41634231Thanks for the schizopost.
/mlpol/gommiesuhhhwokehortlerThere, that should get things moving.
>CELestia>CELibate>inCEL
>>41634535>inCELInvoluntarily Celestia?
>>41634541I saw a fic like that in the box a few weeks ago.
Celestia is the untouched virgin par excellence. It's right there in her design:>Coat: White. Not just any white, but the white. The kind of white that isn't just untainted, it's so blindingly pristine it makes you feel ashamed of your own filth just looking at it. It’s not "ivory" or "eggshell" or "soft pearl." No, Celestia’s coat is the "untouched snow on a Himalayan peak," a white so pure that even thinking about impurities within a 10-mile radius might make it dim. Faust might as well have inscribed "VIRGINITY GUARANTEED" in gold on her forehead.>Mane and tail:Not just any colors, but a rainbow. And we all know the rainbow is the very essence of wonder, innocence, and childish fantasy. NOTHING ELSE.They doesn't just flow with the wind; they billow with the very essence of virginity itself.>Crown, Collar, and Horseshoes: Crafted from 24-carat 'PURE' gold, devoid of any impurity.>Wings:Again, purest white. These aren't just any wings. They're the wings of an angel who has never known sin, whose feathers are as spotless as her virtue. To gaze upon them is to understand what it means to be celestial and chaste.Meanwhile her sister:>"Mare of the night."Kek. The contrast couldn't be more stark, and the implication more clear.
>>41634541What kind of faggot wouldn't want to be Celestia? You'd have a nation of adoring subjects, all the cakes you could eat, and the biggest penis in all the lands.
>>41634616Muh waifu never L&L'd, FGT.
>>41634616I really want to write that story where Luna becomes associated with sex due to being in charge of the night and that leads to ponies appreciating her more.
>>41634632Have the cold opener be a cloaked mare entering a house of ill repute, only to reveal it's Luna, who just wants some cuddles ;c;
>>41634421Sunset Shimmer COULD be an alicorn! She could be!
>>41634616Then where are all the lunar bastard fillies, hmmm???
>>41634652Give it time, Luna just got back from the moon and batponies only get hard for one day out of the year.
>>41634652
>>41634621Have you never heard of the sword of Damocles?
>>41634665I don't think his dick was bigger than Celestia just because he gave it a fancy name.
>>41634632
In my neverending pursuit of family fics I notice that Luna does tend to get knocked up by bat ponies more than any other character, save perhaps Fluttershy.
>>41634664She never slopped out of anyone's monster door, not a real pony.
>>41634669
>>41634616Imagine being this anti-pink-princesses in $current_year.
>>41634688>anti pink princessAre you implying Cadence is a virgin? The one princess whose entire thing is NOT being that? One of the few characters who was canonically cummed inside?
>>41634616This pasta but unironically.Her swan-like appearance is no mistake.
>>41634694Celestia was fucking mirror Sombra so much that Horse Gandalf had to intervene. She likes them big and black.
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>>41634702You took the IDW comic that's now without a doubt 100% headcanon?
>>41634725Well if I'm doing a momlestia fic who ELSE is gonna be Twilight's bastard deadbeat father?
>>41634731How could this have made sense chronologically?
>>41634731Shining.
>>41634738If I wanted to do incest I'd be retarded, and I'm only autistic.
>>41634737I mean IIRC it goes that like, Luna gets banished 1000 years ago and she starts seeing Mirror Sombra, Starswirl gets angry and destroys the portal.Then recently within the last 10-20 years she starts seeing him again after she rediscovers a way to reconnect the mirrors?
>>41634731Just a guard, like in >>41605003
>>41634747If Celestia was shacking up with random royal guards she'd have a lot more than just Twilight
>>41634746This. But make her the rape baby of Sombra with EVIL CELESTIA for DRAMA.Good Sombra found a way to transport his daughter to the good Celestia for protection and so she don't turn EVIL.
>>41634758Well, that's up to Celestia.
>>41634767She's the sun alicorn, not the birth control alicorn. Conceptia died long ago.
>>41634772She just instantly teleports the fertilized egg into a random mare's womb.
>>41634806cum*
>>41634814>fertilized cumPony biology is weird. Or is this just a thing with all magical creatures?
>>41634806The sun would never miss an opportunity to feel the warmth of new life inside her.
>>41634831I don't like the other implications of this.
>>41634837Celestia is furious that she never gets knocked up, she's the life giving star that all things orbit and she's just got the worst fucking luck
>>41634806This is an Aragon joke that spawned an actual fic.
>>41634854>an Aragon joke?
>>41634861https://www.fimfiction.net/user/aragon
>>41634854Wait fuck I was wrong it was an Estee jokehttps://www.fimfiction.net/blog/898550/free-crackfic-idea-seeks-good-homehttps://www.fimfiction.net/story/466632/the-immaculate-deflection
>>41634847Existing research suggests mammals have a finite number of ova. Celestia may have gone barren with age.
>>41634882This seems just dumb.
>>41634884I don't think alicorns obey normal existing biology. Being horses with wings and also immortal gods and all that.
ive never been a greentext or a fanfic guy, i enjoyed more of the shitpost vids on yt. what are the highlight stories written by the fandom that arent foe.
>>41634893My Little DashieYou're in luck, since there's an animated youtube version for shitters who don't know how to read
>>41634884So with Luna up in stasis for a thousand years you're saying there's a chance.
>>41634886No it isn't, >>38302186 is a great fic idea.
>>41634884They have so many and shed them so slowly that Celestia won't be anywhere near running out for a very very long time.
>>41634936So you're saying that alicorns only go into estrus once every thousand years?
>>41634942No, they just have a fuckload of eggs.
>>41634954So you're saying all the high prices of eggs are because the alicorns are hoarding them?
>>41634959Yes. They're causing eggflation.
>>41634961Well stop cumming in them dammit. That's what we were JUST talking about. Did none of you learn anything from flurry heart???
>>41634933>03/07/22Good times
>>41620299>tired of authors inserting fetishesI want more fetishes that aren't snuff or foalcon.
>>41635044I can help.
>>41635044I have an inkling that pregnancy seems to be on the rise, trendwise.
>>41635060Pretty based, anon.Pregnancy is the best 'fetish' (even though, since it's the result of sex, it should probably not be a 'fetish' per se).
>>41635096I just like cute family shit. It also my fetish.
>>41635110Probably one of the most natural fetishes.
>>41635120Same with braps
>>41635120Where's anthro futa on the natural fetish tier list? Asking for a friend.
>>41635141In the trash where it belongs.
>>41635141Natural?Near the bottom.But you are competing with the literal biological imperative to reproduce.Imagine fist fighting Tyson in his prime as you are now.
>>41635149>>41635153Damn...well what if it was pregnant anthro futas, would that help?
>>41635158No. 1/3 is a failing grade.
>>41635158See:>>41635159Worse, it's multiplicative. Your futa fantasy reduces even a 100% to <70%, you will always fail the test.
>>41635141>anthroCloser to humans and thus less fantastical than ponies outright, ergo more natural.>futaJust a penis, albeit part of a hermaphrodite. Still quite natural.Overall I'd give anthro futa a nature score of 7/10.
Stop talking about penises and post some fucking stories.
>>41635402I finally finished my first long fic. Now I gotta proofread and get proofreaders and all that before I publish it in pieces.
>>41635240>Closer to humans and thus less fantastical than ponies outright, ergo more natural.A hybrid amalgamation that exists solely to make deviants feel better about themselves and their perversions. unnatural>Just a penis, albeit part of a hermaphrodite. Still quite natural.a penis attached to a vagina. hermaphrodites are abominations. mutated genitals are unnatural1/10 deviant fetish. only rates above feet people vorefags, and cuckolds >>41635402what if the stories feature penises?
>>41635457can you teach me your art based man?
>>41635421I'm proud of you, Anon.
>>41635493Thanks, it's sappy and cringe but I am happy with it
>>41635240Never again use muh waifu's visage for your degeneracy.
>>41634893There's a starter kit in the OP.
>>41635967and it's fucking worthless.
>>41634616Celestia is a very light pink.
>>41634177>SciTwi gets Anatoli Bugorski'd and told to shut the fuck upHilarious.>After over a week of severe depressionI thought something was up considering before you were pumping out chapters every other day. Did you finally run out of cocaine? Honestly though, you've inspired me, so thank you.>The quality of this one is going to be worseI can see that somewhat; some descriptions such as "sparking, surging mess" don't do anything for me and feel sloppy. But at least this chapter is not almost entirely dialogue like some of the previous ones — it all seems balanced now. I like what you refactored (although you didn't have to make such a nice, elaborate description for the meeting room that may not ever be used again). I'll try to pick at it more when I have the time.In a single day, Twilight has been put upon her knees twice before Sombra (and once on hard stone). What is Shining going to think when he notices that his little sister has bruised, scraped knees and has been around the principle most of the day?Anyway, as a prude, I think you may be once again flying too close to the sun with how suggestive some of this is: you have a middle-aged man thrust a young woman onto the ground where he then pets her head which I imagine is level with his crotch or at least thigh. She also looks to be turning into a filthy masochist.I suggest letting readers cool off a bit more from the first Sombra outburst. Maybe swap to Canterlot High's perspective (if that was something you were ever planning to do) after Chapter 6 — you have Shining jokingly reference a few characters you can lead from, or start with Shimmer and possibly have her run off that hooded, snooping figure. You could then return back to Crystal Prep with what you currently have as Chapter 7 and make it so SciTwi has been working on the device for a couple days rather than stupendously managing to remake it in an afternoon. Let her ruminate.I hope you get a second opinion from a different anon, because I'm probably talking shit. Bad advice being worse than none.Also, thanks for adding the X-ray and uranium line, since my autistic suspension of disbelief was on the fucking edge that no-one was pulling a fire alarm and/or calling the hazmat emergency services.
>>41636071>What is Shining going to think when he notices that his little sister has bruised, scraped knees and has been around the principle most of the day?"I like this principal's principles."
>>41635421Bruh you know you're not supposed to finish these, just string people along indefinitely, right?
>>41633908Well, I skimmed the rest of the fic. The door breach scene was horrendous. The skeleton worm was funny.>>41633526It did, in fact, have a long flashback section with Twilight and Luna, which was what I was looking for to start with. It's too bad it's just a highlight reel, and yes, Luna was quite disappointing in the story. Almost the exact same idiot ball to drive the plot as WaSLC.
>>41636275I don't like to do that.Now the hard part is finding people who are willing to help proofread a 50k word baby nyx fic.
>>41636612She looks breedable.
>>41636620she's seven.
>>41636621And?
>>41636740This is a thread for impregnating mares, not fillies.
>>41636758>
>>41636781>
>>41637027Weird ship but okay.
>>41637027
>>41637034Imagine the power move of Diamond Tiara teasing your for being a blank flank, and you just go "Yeah? Well, I fucked your mom!"
>>41637064>so that's why she tasted like your brother's dick!
>>41637027Not today, pedofaggot
>>41637073>"It's Ponyville, Diamond Tiara. EVERYTHIN' tastes like mah brother!"
>>41637109Don't forget the Princesses.
>>41637089How do you know he isn't a MILFaggot?
>>41637128Because he already said he is a pedophile.
>>41637145>posts groomer princess
>>41637226Whose she out here grooming
>>41637238Foals, of course.
>>41637145I know you struggle with telling different users apart, but I'm the one who was pedoposting earlier and I didn't post that image. Now if you'll forgive me I need to go continue my Loli Glow story.
Need to find me a good cover art piece for this nyx fic.
>>41637270>go continue my Loli Glow storySuccubus Anon, is that you?
>>41637270 loli cozy glow ? Friday Night Golly is that you anon???
I need the best fic about a hotel attendant. Mystery, SoL, scary, hearing ponies fuck, weird guests, whatever.
>>41620299Does anyone know anything about TheManFromAnotherTime, Bobbles and the 'Everyday Life With Guardsmares' fic?The Royal Guardsmare general seems to have died out, and the fic hasn't been updated in months, so I haven't heard any news of it.
>>41638017No idea, but I'd read that story.
>>41638286He has a kid, so it's being worked on really slowly.
>>41638286Hot mare unf
I'm making an HIE without humans
Dear princesses in space, not the gates!
>>41637040FUCK I'VE AVOIDED BEING SPOILED ON HER CUTIE MARK FOR YEARS
>>41638963>Anon experiences infohazards
>>41638963Watch the fucking show. Season 5 is good.
>>41638973I know. I stopped at the Rarithon. Life got in the way and I never caught back up.
>>41638973fuck off, glimmerfag.
>>41638984NTA but I love season 5 despite strongly disliking Glimmer and the castle/tree bullshit. The season has so many great episodes and not very many misses.Besides, poochie only shows up in four episodes, and is good in two of those.
>>41638990Actually she shows up in at least 6.
>>41638992You know what I meant. But these appearances are good, too, so if you want to count them, it bumps the number up to at least 4/6.
>>41638994I think it should be 5/6. The horribly written resolution to the finale should not detract from its first part.
>>41638755Pony archeologists exploring the remains of an ancient human settlement?
>>41639104>inb4 "the world on the other side of the mirror"
>>41638963You don't spend enough time gazing at the best mare's butt.
>a fic got into the bin at 2 likesI've seen 4, but this has to be a record. He got the literal perfect refresh timing.
>>41639228That's not Rarity.
>>41639228Thanks anon. Now I need to visit /h/.
>>41639303Is the bin chosen by mods or is it like a hot files kinda thing
>>41639424It's entirely heat based, but no one knows the exact formula. By watching it, at least for the first 7 spots (the last 3 are for fics that updated rather than new ones), you can infer it's some combination of how many like and views you get, how quickly, and the ratio between those two. One interesting example is that collabs will tend to shoot to the top immediately because they get boosted by all the participants liking them as they drop, but may not stay there long afterwards. On average, fics in the box have a higher like to views ratio than new fics outside the box at a given point.
>>41639305You are correct!
>>41639451>vector>png
>>41639424In addition to what >>41639446 said, it works just like the New column in that it only updates every X minutes so if you get lucky and post right before the update, you might get catapulted into it early due to the formula dividing (in some way) your fic's heat by the time it's been out.
>>41639488What's your vector, Victor?
Well, would you look at that.Slop's coming for you one way or another.
>>41639544>Gemini
>>41639544I'll use beta readers and El Goog can take them from my cold dead hands.
Good hatefucking fics?
>>41639612If you hatefuck on the regular are you enemies with benefits?
>>41639659That's how "Always Hungry" ends.
>>41639659This is literally the plot of a tailso fic. I'm not even fucking kidding, it uses that exact wording.
>>41639678Not a fuckbuddy but a fucknemesis
>>41639597>slaving over someone else's draft when you could be writing your own masterpiece with the help of readily-available AI"Beta" is right.
>>41639684I invite others to share in the joy of creation because I am not a soulless bug person
>>41639684>readily-availableThere's a fucking drought rn and I'm not shilling for legal access.
>>41639685As a soulless bug person, I take offense to that. AI is for private cooming only.
>>41639685>the joy of creationIsn't that getting a remake?
>>41639689You should be cumming with ME!
>>41639692This poor baby gets subjected to so much shit...
>>41639692>mfw I'm playing block-based indie games.
>>41639703She's the Princess of Lust, celibacy is starvation to her.>>41639704I am disheartened to find that a Minecraft clopfic does in fact exist:https://www.fimfiction.net/story/550367/anons-gay-story
>>41639712Bruh. She's a baby. She isn't even potty trained.
>>41639692I have multiple Flurry cards. Though the most recent one an anon made is broken.
>>41639712Any Terraria ones?
>>41639733This is the closest you're getting:https://www.fimfiction.net/story/528114/the-infernal-tyrant-king
>>41639740>Clameme
Post will have to wait a touch because I was hit with the 15 minute captcha wait.
>>41639862Just DM it to me and I'll post it, geeze.
When will I finally break?>/FXSBC/>https://www.fimfiction.net/story/25966/austraeoh (5/5)And so it's over. Kind of. It's not really much of an ending, is it? It's a stopping point, and a good one even, but oh so clearly just 'part 1 of X(II)'. Do I hate that it immediately makes me want to read the next one? A little. Not a lot. I will, one day, if things permit. With this club, if I get to decide. I guess I'll need to split this post between general thoughts and last fifth specific ones. For one thing, I realised I'd stopped earlier than I thought the first time through, and I know exactly why. Sadly, it has to be acknowledged, this fic is marred by minor flaws. It's death by a thousand cuts. So many wrong words and typos and inconsistencies both minor and major, one of which reminded me of HoD in a bad way. The prevalent external links I'm ambivalent about, though mostly said they're mostly dead. And I can't fault the commenter references too much, I stole that too.Is Austraeoh a good story? As a series, it's too early to tell. As a single fic, it's complicated, but I suppose it merits discussion. It is not, fundamentally, a bad fic. It's a very flawed fic. It also has some impressive highs. The scenery porn of its early portions is great, if you're into that. The lengths to which it goes to make you feel the scale of Rainbow's journey are nothing short of admirable. The emotional beats didn't hit me too hard, but by any meter they're done well. The worldbuilding is good. The original characters are all nice. And yet, can you build something great on such shaky foundations? Does it get better, or worse? But it makes me want to keep going, after all. It is interesting how deliberately darker things get the further Rainbow moves. It's a well executed shift, even if it ultimately lands the story as a whole outside the ponyness of its earlier parts.Right. The last third. Sam is cool, I guess. I called what Dash would do with the Death Water before it happened, but that's just a sign of proper writing. We get a lot of answers to things, and a few more questions, but really it's solidified how much the story and the series are about the journey. The book is a great example of this. Learning it's not some secret or other, but just Dash's memories and her refusal to confront them, is a really good moment. Dash is still great. I've said it before, but Skirts writes a great Dash, and particularly in this last portion you really get to see and understand how what happened affects her and why she acts the way she does. It's great character work. The matriarch is a nice character too, and a good bit of worldbuilding. And it was nice to finally get to see Dash interact with Celestia, it's good closure on the first portion of her character arc. I suppose I'll see the rest of it in time.This week we're reading:>https://www.fimfiction.net/story/35717/the-stars-will-aid-their-escapeYou should decide what we'll read after, too:>https://ponepaste.org/8813
Veteran sinbin inhabitants, what would you say the ideal posting time and day is?
>>41639895When Leech and Runic's posting schedules coincide.
>41557659>picCute.>they read not that different from Lyra's BP inner monologues, though to be fair, RD punches herself to stop thinking about it hereThat one I think was a very deliberate BP reference.>Perhaps the signs were there all alongShe's crossdressing the other way, to be fair.>This reads like a story written very in the moment, with the most nebulous of ideas about where to take it, but it looks like skirts actually planned it from the start, or at least the major elements of itHaving experience in something similar, that does sound plausible. Behemoth has key points and scenes pinned down (like that dance between Twilight and C), but a lot of breathing room too.>Mr.NoFunAllowedHe was nice.>Good to know that skirts was capable of having fun once upon a timeWe need to read more of his stuff. I'm sure he's got good comedies in there.>41558086>He's quite the silly guyWhat a quaint definition of silly. Not that you're wrong.>a group of people who were way in over their head wanted to make an Austraeoh animationAh, foolish ambition, how I know thee.>>41583417>picShe do be swaying.>I think I liked the unicorn guard boomer moreC-squared is great. I hope he's alright.>Maybe he comes back in a future Easthorse bookI find that unlikely. Rainbow abandoning all that she passes through is a pretty big theme, at least for the first fic.>was Silvadel's ruling class the first example of a slightly clunky retconEverything about Silvadel suffers from HoD syndrome. I'm pretty sure the messenger CC saw was forgotten about and then retconned into having been sent at a later point when he was initially meant to have fled the original destruction.>Will I run out of solo RD pics?She's like the second most popular character, you won't.>>41583509>You can't do a pit filled with foal corpses in a PG movieNot with that attitude.>They wanted to turn Darkstine into a musical number that would gloss over the dead foalsDare I say kino?>It would've been the biggest clusterfuck everAs if the norsewords series itself isn't.>Stratopolis is a mythReal subtle, Mr "I got in the fic".>>41583537>when he was literally punting foals into a pitWhat could possibly be more idealistic than that?>The description was very gruesome for a T-rated fic with zero death tags, and we didn't really read anything close to it previouslyYeah, you're right there. There's a reason Behemoth is perhaps overtagged. I suppose it's a philosophical issue.>And apparently so are 'Sun' and 'Moon', which makes no sense given their hunting trips outsideNot really. You can have light cycles without seeing the sky. Remember, the place is permanently shrouded in clouds because dragons.>>41584946>Who would have thought this would be the fic to kill the schizo clubI lived, bitch. And thankfully not just me.>It is clearly a schizoficHow sweet of you.>>41584988>some of the better lines of narration be turned into Dash monologuingHysterical.
>>41639892I can't believe the photo album fucking died.Ah, Austraeoh. What a journey you are. At the very least, I'd say it's an enjoyable one. But that's the issue, isn't it? It's not "one". How do you recommend something that's clearly part 1 of a long running series that eventually died?Easy, you tell them to stop 90% through the last chapter.In all seriousness, I'm glad I went through this story again. Many good memories were had. Not only of the fic and the FiMFic scene at the time, but also of me spending the chunks between classes on my first semesters at uni reading ponies while pretending I was using the computers for homework. Good times.>it ultimately lands the story as a whole outside the ponyness of its earlier parts.I'm reminded of how there was a little town where Dash just played ball with some random ponies. I think it was skirts's way of saying "alright, kids. Have some candy, nothing from here onwards will be nice.">StarsOh, God. I remember that fic.>votingFoggy Overcast, because that's the shortest non-M-rated fic I find at first glance.
>>41639892I procrastinated on writing this for 10+ days, so I'm probably forgetting much. Regardless, I doubt it's a huge deal given that most of it tracks with the last couple weeks. The lack of proofing is still there and bad as ever (I am genuinely unsure if the prince is named Sam Rose, Samrose, or Sam the Rose). The main thing that changed, or rather didn't, is that the story's content rating remained darked after last week's shift. It does feel like it tries to do a bit of pony pony pony with the attempted peaceful resolutions, and Dash's character connects it to FiM (duh!) despite whatever happened in Equestria, but it's a far cry from the earlier parts. References are here to stay, as well.The action, though, was good. RD zipping past dragons, dodging dragonfire, and being awesome (TM) is still great, and we get more of it this week than perhaps in any of the previous ones. Really making the full use of the magic shield to make the action more intense. Samrose/Sam Rose/Sam the Rose plunging down and splitting dragon skulls as he falls was the most over-the-top example, but who cares—I liked it.This was the first week where the fic broke the structure of having a separate RD introspection-plus-exploration fragment before going into an action mini-arc, with the RD having to do the thinking on the fly, as it were. That was nice, though I missed the Austraeohian sightseeing we've been treated to until now. I suppose there's plenty of worldbuilding with the dragons, which is weird for a story that was already ending. I mean, Rainbow Dash is fucking dead.JK, here's where book 2 comes in. Whoever said that Austreoh is mostly standalone was interpreting it very generously, because while reaching the goal is not actually this fic's goal, pretty much nothing is resolved aside from RD's situation with Celestia.So what is the final verdict? I liked the fic. I think I can't favorite it due to all its little mistakes, but I liked it enough to actively want to read the rest of it some day in the future. Maybe when skirts finishes it.>>41639892>>/FXSBC/Should I be afraid?>With this club, if I get to decide.Maybe skirts will finish the series if we catch up for the fic's 25th anniversary.>reminded me of HoDBut it's almost the opposite breed of errors. Here it's extreme carelessness coming from a writer who must've thought himself good enough to pull it off—slightly misused words, sentences that change course partway through, incorrect character names, missed words, etc. HoD was just written by someone who either didn't know basic English or was very dyslexic. While HoD had more (and more jarring) errors, this is almost kind of worse since you know he could've easily written it correctly.>It is not, fundamentally, a bad ficI'd go a little higher. If you're looking for an adventure'y adventure about Dash adventuring, this could be the fic for you. The flaws are annoying, but they don't drag it to 'not good' for me.
>>41639892>It's a well executed shift,I guess. But I wouldn't love it if this was the new normal for every other book in the series.>how much the story and the series are about the journeyThat much is clear. Honestly, I'm a little disappointed that none of the arc left a bigger impression on me. It's not that I'll forget them soon; they were good. None of them were great or exceptional, but I suppose asking for that on top of everything else the fic did is unreasonable.>>41639947>a very deliberate BP referenceIt probably was.>We need to read more of his stuff.Clearly even Austreoh shows that it's not all good and—if OOC was any indication—sometimes he's in way over his head (or just doesn't have a point to make), but he's probably one of the best "classic" Big Writers that either bookclub has read thus far. I'm still very disappointed Pen Stroke's fic was so not-good.>Rainbow abandoning all that she passes through is a pretty big themeFor Austreoh? Definitely. But she can't keep going straight East for 10 more books, can she? Now that I think of it, we weren't told how close she got, but it felt like she'd crossed a huge part of the world. There's only what, like two more countries that anypony has heard about? And getting that thingy from the dark side of Equestria would be pointless if she didn't bring it back. I could totally see the fic taking the time to show how much every land had changed as a result of her actions as the Spark. Maybe it's just cope, but CC was my favorite secondary character. Ember and Steelteeth are not far behind. Now that I wrote this, not including the Gold-something mare from week 1 feels wrong, too. Anyway, CC was still the best.>What could possibly be more idealistic than that?Yeah, but I meant that the fic sort of presents him as being in the wrong, but only that. Like "what he thought was not the right way forward"-type antagonist whose evil was downplayed by the end. He's a foal mass murderer.>place is permanently shrouded in cloudsBut moonlight shines through with not too many problems when Dash needs to call Luna. They had to have seen it previously, unless it's the first time ever that this happened.
>>41640014>How do you recommend something that's clearly part 1 of a long running series that eventually died?Carefully.>spending the chunks between classes on my first semesters at uni reading ponies while pretending I was using the computers for homeworkMood.>Foggy OvercastLet's go, I can dump Cake lore on the thread. Pic related.>>41640021>The action, though, was goodIt was.>Sam the Rose plunging down and splitting dragon skulls as he fallsSee https://derpicdn.net/img/view/2017/9/14/1534997.gif>a story that was already endingSkirts mistakenly believed the Fimmy chapter cap was 200 rather than 2000, which then led to all norsewords fics keeping to that for tradition until it almost killed the whole series and he admitted he couldn't keep doing that. It also led to one particular chapter in Behemoth.>spoilerRoll on snare drum, etc etc.>Should I be afraid?Always.>Maybe skirts will finish the series if we catch up for the fic's 25th anniversaryMaybe I will find him and force him to finish it in person.>it's almost the opposite breed of errorsI was mainly talking about the timing inconsistencies with when dragons arrived. It changed between a clear starting implication of just ten years, to a vague generations, to a clear a hundred years, to one instance of 'multiple centuries', and back again.>>41640024>But I wouldn't love it if this was the new normal for every other book in the seriesSame.>she can't keep going straight East for 10 more books, can she?There's a reason there's 12 total books and they go A E I O U Y Y U O I E A. I'm sure you can figure that reason out even without the short descs giving it away. Even if it doesn't actually match up with when she gets where. But you need to really, truly realise that Austraeoh as a whole is a massive project, and that's the point. It's foolishly huge, which may well be what kills it, because Skirts has always been ambitious to a fault.>CC was still the bestIndeed.>He's a foal mass murdererThe less preferable foal-related crime, admittedly.>But moonlight shines through with not too many problems when Dash needs to call LunaThat part is weird, yes. I took it as Sanctuary being so far from the dragon place that the sky is actually visible there, which seems supported by just how far it actually is (literally over a day of travel on hoof, and still several hours for Dash), but is then seemingly contradicted by how the ending chapters frame things (unless those were simply the new clouds dragons were brewing, which could make sense). Sanctuary is supposed to be huge and its tunnels long, so it could work out, but it's definitely wonky.
I hope people like my fic...
>>41640188I can almost guarantee you'll get more upvotes than downvotes.
>>41638973No it's not.
>>41640021>Whoever said that Austreoh is mostly standalone was interpreting it very generouslyNot really that generously. You know you can also describe it is a series of standalone fics glued together by scenery porn.It is mostly standalone, unlike the others which have a many cast members that span multiple stories. I think the only generosity needed relates to the way it doesn't answer the trick question, "why horse east?" It is still "east horse," a story. Yes, "why" is more explicitly answered in the sequel, but even from where you are, you can see it's "because."
>>41640123>picI always wondered if changelings have normal skeletons with black hides, or have chitin shells, and they're all squishy inside just like actual bugs?
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>>41640551This is significantly more disgusting than if she just died horribly.
>>41640551Dont do that, those are her bones.
>>41640646>you'll never de-bone ChrysalisWhy even live?
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/564885/far-beyond-equestriaNinerfags, has anyone read it yet? I'm assuming muh wormhole aliens are responsible but I don't know why they'd pick Sweetie Belle to plop at the start of the Dominion War. She seems like one of the worst characters to pick for a solo crossover.>>41639424https://www.fimfiction.net/faq/questions/124/how-are-featured-stories-selectedIt's an algorithm that uses likes, like/dislike ratio, total ratings, views, and time since upload to determine featuring. No one knows what the exact weight of each factor is to prevent rigging, but the common assumption is that likes matter the most.
Hello, I have been looking for a story that I remember, but don’t know the title or author of. It is a short story, probably less than two thousand words. It begins with Twilight Sparkle taking full responsibility for some sort of mistake, I don’t remember what it was. Celestia then orders her guards to kill Twilight. She panics, and pleads for mercy, only for Celestia to reveal that she never intended to kill Twilight, but had pretended to in order to win a bet with somepony (I believe that it was Luna). The author stated that it was inspired by a story in the Pony Psychology Series, by SaddlesoapOpera, which ended with Celestia saying “kill her”. I have made a considerable effort to find that story, but unfortunately I have not yet been able to locate it. Does anyone remember this story? If I knew the title or the author I am confident that I would be able to find it.
>>41640518You're even more of a drooling retard than anticipated if you think "Rainbow Dash passes out" is in any way a satisfying stopping point.
>>41641288Well that's how it works in all his clopfics.
Skirts fan herehttps://www.fimfiction.net/story/174483/bullet-pointThat ending was fucked up. I was expecting something happier. I recommend. Some typos, some ooc moments, but good nonetheless. Not gonna read the sequel cuz why tf would it have a sequel
>>41641387>dangling grandpa crossover with TwinkieAlright, I'm interested. Sell me on it, Skirts fan.
>>41641401Minecraft hunger games free for all. It was intriguing, I didn't sleep at all lol I read it in just 10 hours. I'm not sure if I should read the sequel or not because the og fic's ending is depressing for the sake of being depressing.
>>41640590Fics for just changelings dying horribly?
>>41641470https://www.fimfiction.net/story/518190/the-princess-and-the-kaiser
>>41641470Manos is p good 4 dat.
>Lunaflag drops a fic because of typos >read it>it's not that bad>read something else he also read>the technical quality of the writing is an order of magnitude worse>he never made mention of thatHow fascinating his mind is.
>>41641603Let me guess: the latter leaned much more heavily on his favorite statutory rape pairing.
>>41641401>>41641425Forgot to add: among us. Gonna read this next:https://www.fimfiction.net/story/418498/good-trooper-gilda
>>41641649Make sure to post about how much you enjoyed it, otherwise this thread will make fun of you.
>>41641640Strangely, no.Oh what the fuck is this new greyscale circles Captcha.
>>41641649One of the most divisive stories the bookclub read. Was truly fascinating to see.
>>41641658It almost killed ED.
>>41641656You've been marked as high-risk, I'd recommend lying low for a while.
>>41641670Filly Body Inspector...
>>41641691interesting premise for a foalcon story: the hunt for a serial colt rapist and murderer. bonus points if it turnes out to be an expy of someone from this thread.
>>41641703Oh, me, me!
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/297255/aletheiaJust read this, it was decent but very short.
>>41641793That's what she said.
>>41641799I'll be the judge of thatpost it, nonny :3
>>41641401A neat little series of mysteries in the spirit of the games. As someone who's never played the games, and only watched some playthroughs (and the anime) years after reading this fic, I still had a good time.There are a few points that seem really weak and rushed--because they are--but I can guarantee you everything has a reason, even if that reason takes twenty-four chapters to be fully explained.>>41641425It's certainly a downer ending, but I wouldn't call it depressing for the sake of being depressing.>Not gonna read the sequel cuz why tf would it have a sequelTo get to the happy ending, of course. Even if there will be a tad more suffering to finally get there.I like the sequel for different reasons that I like the original, and one of them is how it ties everything together in a way that leaves me immensely satisfied.I love Point and Storm. They are honestly one of my favourite stories on the site, despite being very flawed.
>>41641640Speaking of, here's a fish prevention post.
>>41642328Their ship gives me bicurious lesbians who want corrective rape.
>>41630795I still find it wild just how much of a miserable cunt that author turned out to be. The more he opened up about himself using Anon as the proxy the more I hated him. I'm glad he canned the final story in the series because it probably would've just been another 200k words of "I am a morose sociopath that hates humanity but I'm too mentally weak and self-absorbed to be satisfied going innawoods and ignoring other people" as his menagerie of OOC pony waifus suck his dick and tell him that him being an emotionally weak autist is actually hot and awesome.
>>41642335*need
>>41642349HiE club's looking good.
>>41642357*wantit is common to lesbians to have rape fantasies
>>41642427*womenJust read Bride of Discord to see a chick creaming herself over the idea of being taken by a beastly man under the guise of a pony fic.
>>41642427>>41642443In defense of the thots, one of the most popular fantasies among gooners is to get unga-bunga'd by a big furry woman and this board is filled with people obsessed with getting crushed by Celestia's fat ass. I think it's just a human thing in general to fuck a big monster.
>>41642458It's a pony thing too.
>>41642465A story about pony fetishes is a story about people fetishes.
>>41642465"Mares fuck an average of one larger creature a month" statistic found to be incorrect. Rarity from Ponyville who fucks 15 larger creatures a week is a statistical anomaly and should not have been counted.
>>41642473I mean that story where shining armor makes cadence age regress herself so he can feel powerful again
>>41642458im inoccent, so your point is fake
>>41642458Every self proclaimed gooner who fantasises about sex is a fucking poser.
>>41642474>15Ponies are canonically awful at seeing through disguises so I just wear two different wigs every day to get more free samples at the market.It's not easy being a hustler.
>>41642487You could say the same about the women that get wet at the thought of fucking beast men. How many people would actually fuck a werewolf? Probably a micro-fraction of the people that say they would. Doesn't change the amount of people that still masturbate to the thought of it, on both sides.
>>41596569>>41642474Who will put an end to this menace to statistics?
>>41642494That's not the point. Gooning is supposed to be about the fetishisation of masturbation and porn consumption over real sex. People are losing their way.
>>41642489>Ponies are canonically awful at seeing through disguisesAre they? I know you'll say Chrysalis but between her magic aura and the lack of comments on discordification I think ponies just suck at seeing colours.
>>41642514I disagree, they're simply growing to understand the value of interpersonal relationships over simple hedonistic joyseeking. Y'know, FiM and all that jazz.>>41642526Well then this scene comes across as a bit hypocritical
>>41642458Counterpoint: I'd much rather fuck a cute monster than a huge monster.
>>41642526No, it's a thing that comes over and over again. See picrel or the reverse situation in the Sphinx episode in S7.It's this way for the kids watching, of course, but taking it as canon is more fun and less cynical.
>>41642536What about a massively adorable mare?
>>41642540>comescomes upAlso, this is what I meant.
>>41642541I actually don't understand macro. At first I just assumed it was some exotic offshoot of snuff where it's people fantasizing about getting Godzilla'd by their waifu, and then I realized nobody ever dies in macro and they're instead just cartoonishly pressed against the pony. And then I thought it might be like vore and it's people fetishizing being "enveloped" by the body of their lover, so to speak. Except half the time macro involves absolutely no smothering or penetration. And then I just assumed hey, maybe it's just a bizarre way to express a... destruction fetish? Except most of the porn that involves a macro destroying something has the destruction as an after thought they barely even cared to draw.So what the fuck is the deal with macro? What's the fetish about? I can understand big size differences, but macro seems so cartoonishly absurd that even the most depraved of fetishes get dulled when combined with it just because of how pointless macro makes everything.
>>41642561>nobody ever dies in macro>he doesn't know
>>41642577I know sometimes people die in it but for every pic of someone getting crushed to death you'll have a dozen of people being cartoonishly stuck in their macro-panties or pressed against the side of their ass, which is such a goofy image that even if they are dead in the picture it looks so stupid that it's impossible to accept as gore or snuff.
>>41642547Sometimes ponies simply don't care enough to remember.>This scene kills the Rarifag>>41642561Gulliver's Travels has been a disaster for the human race.>tfw no Houyhnhnm gf
>>41642664It doesn't excuse their ignorance, but to be fair, F&F didn't interact with her since S1.
>>41641480Not worth it.
>>41642813Anon, the cider ep was S2.
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/568063/little-nightmareFinally, first chapter is up.
>>41642829Fuck. I'm a fake fan.
>>41642844Good luck, hope it goes over well! Also;>alicorn foal finds herself experience the
>>41642884Now you know why I have proofreaders.
>>41642844>baby nyx>not a clopficFUCK
>>41642893I have a fair amount of fics involving families that are in progress. None of them are clopfics.
>>41642900Based nyxfag writing his happy family fetish
>>41641603Well, you can have an explanation if you name them, but I probably already described what's more to it than that.
>>41642945You should be able to guess them from contextual clues.
>>41642999You're asking too much of us, this is fimfiction.
>>41643073Isn't this 4chan?
>>41643078No. Are you lost?
>>41643086/fimfic/ is a part of /mlp/, which in turn is part of 4chan. And to answer your question, autism did compel me to make this post.
>>41642999But remember who you're talking to.
>>41642844Why the FUCK does your stupid story makes it, and interests people while my stories never did? And it's not even HiE!FUCK!
>>41643297I like seeing Twilight be a mom.
>>41642844>Third fic in sinbinFucker
>>41643407>>41643407>>41643407>>41643407
>>41643313Fucker?I barely know 'er!
