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Green anchor
Link greentexts into here and write a short synopsis of what the green is about.

Greens linked in last thread

>Dream Annotation, by Slasher Science
https://desuarchive.org/mlp/thread/43275128/#43356594
>Untitled Pastejam, by gumcobbler
https://ponepaste.org/8625
>Pink Regrets
https://desuarchive.org/mlp/thread/43173194/#43175861
>Raretriloquist Dummy
https://desuarchive.org/mlp/thread/43107278/#43145960
>Down from the Stars, by Lurkernon (Archive)
https://poneb.in/yxWP8uXQ
>It's Not Easy Being Pink, by Eppy
https://poneb.in/ey2a421Z
>Tempest Shadow's Troubles
https://desuarchive.org/mlp/thread/43438682/#43498490
>Anon's Heart Song
https://desuarchive.org/mlp/thread/43438682/#43502100
>/yandere/ Sally, by BlondieAnon
https://ponepaste.org/11973
>/jdb/
https://desuarchive.org/mlp/thread/43434842/#43509786
>Teatfire (In Progress), by DaybreakerAnon
https://ponepaste.org/8199
>Bedbug
https://desuarchive.org/mlp/thread/43531669/#43532251

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Communal Green Wishlist
Anchor for any greens you wish would continue

Everyday Life With Guardsmares [https://ponepaste.org/5778] by TheManFromAnotherTime
Anon kills everyone, everything and everywhen [https://poneb.in/QDbJLy08] by PeteQ
This Heart That Fears [https://ponepaste.org/1102] by Ephemeral
A Noble Heart [https://ponepaste.org/4471] by Tight
Verity [https://poneb.in/V6XHRnkV] by Cloudruler
Monkey Business [https://poneb.in/P23JWXP3] by JazzTeeth
Work Hard, Play Hard, Die Hard [https://poneb.in/wzNQAYsh] by handsome_jew
Manos the hands of fate [https://poneb.in/QBMRbrPv] by HumanSuperiority
Bakery Slave [https://ponepaste.org/852] by sophosmoros
Demon Anon [https://ponepaste.org/1292] by Defiant
>Twilight Sparkle is addicted to Anon's cum.
https://poneb.in/search?query=Twilight+Sparkle+is+addicted+to+Anon%27s+cum.&searchType=PasteTitle&searchSource=Pastebin
>Shiny and Corona
https://poneb.in/9d5xtBD5
>Captain Anonymous
https://poneb.in/search?query=Captain%20Anonymous&page=2&searchType=PasteTitle&searchSource=Pastebin
>Equestrian Rehab
https://poneb.in/search?query=Equestrian+rehab&searchType=PasteTitle&searchSource=PonePaste
>Violet memory
https://poneb.in/3184
>Changeling Lifestyle
https://poneb.in/search?query=Changeling+Lifestyle&searchType=PasteTitle&searchSource=All
>Twilight's Secret
https://poneb.in/search?query=Twilight%27s+Secret&searchType=PasteTitle&searchSource=All
>Prince Anonymous & Young Celestia
https://poneb.in/Frkd19Lf
>A Journal Between Two Worlds
https://poneb.in/DzKW8ZdE
>Teatfire (In Progress), by DaybreakerAnon
https://ponepaste.org/8199

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Communal Bump Green
Want to bump but don't want to just say "bump"? Add to the green! Additions must be only three lines long

>Be Anon
>At Sugarcube Corner
>See Mayor Mare
>rape
>rape
>rape
>Veni
>Vidi
>Veni
>Post-nut clarity hits
>Every pony in Sugarcube Corner is staring at you
>They look various degrees of angry and horrified
>"Anon, what are you doing?" Pinkie Pie yells at you; she's standing in the middle of the stairs that lead up to her room, and looking shocked.
"You ordered a stripper, didn't you? I was supposed to come here and do my routine, so I---"
>"Well, yeah, I did hire you, but not for the customers. My party is in my room, silly. Come on, every pony is already up there waiting for you."
>You step over Mayor Mare's thoroughly raped body and make your way up the stairs to Pinkie's bedroom
>Open the door
>Get on th-what the fuck
>Pinkie is a dinosaur
>By dinosaur you mean her mane
>It's literally alive and trying to eat her
>"Anon!" She shrieks
>You have to move
>You leap towards Pinkie, arm - and cock - outstretched
>You lock Pinkie's mane in a chokehold in one smooth motion
>Somehow, in the chaos, your penis ends up in her mouth
>"ANO-mPHgH!"
>You lock Pinkie's mane into a chokehold, the hair creature thrashing and attempting to snap at your face
>You instinctively recoil to avoid its teeth, driving your hips forward in the process
>The struggle repeatedly forces your cock out and back into Pinkie's mouth, the head hitting the back of her throat as you wrestle with the beast
"I think it's finally getting tired," you say, her mane now going limp in your arms. "You can get off me now, Pinkie." Your dick is still poking the inside of one of her cheeks.
>You hear her moan below you and go "Mm-mmm!" as she gently shakes her head from side to side.
>She starts getting the giggles when she grabs your hips and pulls herself forward, digging her nose, which is now drooling with spit and your pre-cum, into your waist and swallowing your cock.
>The adrenaline from battle is beginning to wear off
>You shudder as you're hit with the pleasure from inadvertantly throatfucking Pinkie all at once
>Buried deeper in her maw than you've ever been before, you cum inside Pinkie Pie
>The other party-goers hear the commotion and come out from Pinkie's room to investigate; a small crowd of ponies, with Twilight at the front, watches from nearby as you slowly swab Pinkie's throat.
>Twilight looks over her shoulder, back at the other ponies. "Is this how bachelorette parties usually go?"
>"Only the good ones," Spitfire says before turning back towards Pinkie. "Move over, rookie, I've got next!"
>Your cock is icy cold for only a flash as Spitfire yanks Pinkie off your dick and immediately envelopes it in her chest fluff
>It's only now that you recall your employer's very specific instructions to not fuck the customers
"Wait, Miss, I can't-"

Forgot to add something about the green archiving work that one anon was doing. If he's here, let me know if you'd like something put in the OP of these threads, maybe a blurb about how to help the project

>>43536819
Please do. Need a personal army.

>Also forgot to mention ponepaste in the OP
I should've baked this bread longer
>>43536834
Alright, I'll add https://poneb.in/submit to the OP to the archive section next thread. Any other suggestions are welcome as well

Didn't even notice the last one die

>>43536834
No I don't! But it certainly helps.
Sorry that it takes me this long to look at submissions, been dealing with other stuff.
Currently setting up and trying to understand the source code of ponepaste so I can fix a few things in that.

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>>43536786
>the lines I wrote are all the longest ones
how embarrassing

Posting this here since it could interest some anons:
>>43529267

Given they can count as resources, should I post links to my Horsewords & (You) panels? The three that come to mind focus on how to better learn a character's psychology and philosophy, how to learn that but for multiple characters and how they may interact, and how to start a story.
The oral storytelling panels are more examples of how you can have a sticking point and then just go. Probably won't post those. Next /mlp/con/marecon I'm planning on revisiting those topics since it's been a while since I did them and I've become less shit at discussing points.

>>43537643
I'm amenable to that. Those and any other resources you think would be good are welcome.

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>>43535745
Shilling myself again because the last thread died.
FoE warning.

>>43538038
You got it.
This is Horsewords and (You): Characters & Motivation from the OG Marefair. The focus is on the psychology (short term) and philosophy (long term) of characters, singular. Audio is ass because the panel was in a common room. No mic, no one to stop the dozens around from causing noise. Just a man speaking to those who would listen in the common square. https://youtu.be/4Uqj0orBS0s
This is Horsewords & (You): (You)rself. Apparently I did this Marecon of this year but I have no memory of it. Apparently it is revisiting the focus on characters (singular) and what makes them tick. I dread having to listen to this to see if I did it any justice but whatever. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=T0obm3k1e2g
This is Horsewords & (You): Keep Your Friends Close from Marecon 2024. The focus is on psychology (short term) and philosophy (long term) of characters, plural. The focus builds up on what was spoken about before, as well as how two separate entities can interact with each other in both positive and negative ways. Due to setup, it starts around the 30 minute mark.. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=mYtcqDtoTm4
This is Of Mares and Men. The purpose of this panel, same with some previous storytime panels, is to show that you only need a single, solid lump of an idea. Everything else can be strung up as it happens. No pre-writing, no scripting, no needing time to sit and think for minutes at a time. Don't need an outline to get started and to maybe even surprise yourself. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LRQbk6SBNdQ
The others are old and shit so if you want to go into other things I've done, do so at your own peril. Maybe this helps. At least C&M, I saw some anons taking notes and asking questions. When in doubt, ask questions.

>>43538351
Dang, that's quite a bit. I think I'll just link to this post as "Blondie's Better Bookwriting" in the OP

>>43538447
I hope the content lives up to the name. Even if I spent some time unable to write, I can at least say I've been doing something. Even if (You) aren't writing a story, it can help with D&D and whatever else too. Had a lot of questions and a lot of answers count for any sort of fiction. Kinda surprised I've been able to do so many panels since only the storytime panels involve mares.

>>43536786
Hot, where's the rest?

>>43536786
>"Guh!"
>You're cut off by Spitfire executing her special move
>Fruffujobbu Supleme

>>43537384
You're exposed now anon. Hope someone doesn't make long, embarrassing posts and attribute them to you

>>43539290
>Fuck, this is bad!
>Spitfire is rolling her chest against your penis with incredible control, completely puffed up.
>That warm, soft floof, so plush, so comfy, so enveloping, hnnng!

>>43537384
Only if you pride yourself on concise writing. Some people love bloviating. Like Tolkien.

>>43540197
But I still haven't read Tolkien yet.
Except for The Hobbit.
it wuz gud

>>43536778
Why did (You) start writing?
I, personally, started writing to prove that writefags were lazy bastards who couldn't finish their long form greens. Turns out writing was harder than I thought.

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>>43540820
>be lurking muh favorite general back in the day
>things are slow af
>get tired of waiting for new greens to drop
>decide to try and write one of my own
>have no idea what i'm doing, it takes me six hours to write six posts
>takes a few more hours for me to get up the nerve to actually post muh green in the thread
>I eventually nut up and do it
>feel sick afterwards, queasy and sweaty, mom's spaghetti
>can't even keep browsing the 'log
>get of off 4chan
>spend a few hours doing other shit
>eventually get up the nerve to check the thread again
>anons actually liked it
>even some of the writefags I really admired did too
>mfw

>>43541062
I had a similar experience for my first time too, putting yourself out there creatively is a bit intimidating at first. I'd re-read like three times to make sure there are no mistakes and it sounds okay to read. The first round of positive replies was very surprising. It was also because a thread I was interested in was languishing, I read a green, wanted more and decided to save anons from the mindless bumping that was going on.

>>43541132
>putting yourself out there creatively is a bit intimidating at first
being anonymous helps. I don't think i'd still be writing short little greens around the board today if I had to use a name all the time.

sometimes I wonder what would have happened if the response to my first green had been negative though. I don't think I would have handled it well. maybe I never would have written anything else after that. I remember another Anon posted his first green in that thread around the same time I posted mine, and he didn't do as well as I did; I think he got one (You) telling him he was shit, and that was it. I highly suspect that was his first and last green.

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>>43540820
Before I started on greens I wrote a lot. I felt nothing about it. I'd write something that would take up 60k words and then delete it after going "this is pretty fucking lame". My life was pretty dull and I was still in the process of building myself up to be more than nothing. I wouldn't have called myself human yet.
https://desuarchive.org/mlp/thread/34588777/#34588777
Someone told me that /trash/ was a real board and after seeing a fluffies thread I went back to /mlp/. First time since the board was new and full of shitpostery. Then I saw that thread. Saw Rare and beloved Twill. Something just broke. I had no clue about the greentext format and you can tell it took a bit for me to adjust, but I adapted. I started writing and I wouldn't stop. I couldn't stop.
I had no clue how good or bad I was at it. In a way, it didn't matter if I was good or not. By then, Jacqueline became so much of a focal point of my daily life that I spent 2-4 hours near every day writing. It wasn't just her story either, after a while. Spread out to different threads. Some for shitposts. Some for more goofy stories. Some were serious. Shit or not, I saw the constant lament on lack of greens and I just kept going. I don't think I ever thought I'd change the state of the boards. I believed everything was dead, same as everyone else. Because it was all dead, no one would care if I kept writing. Like a first public debut on the Titanic while everyone was heading to their life boats.
At this point, despite all that has happened and what I still have in front of me, I'm still able to tell a good story. Whether or not it's a green on a revived thread general topic or telling a story orally on a cytube channel. I want to do more. I want to explore how else I can tell a story.
It's not enough that I can write or tell (You) a story with my mouth words. I want to better refine how I see and think of things so others can write. I've never focused on grammar or sounding smart or "you should have good cover art if you want to write a story so you'll attract people". Fuck all of that. All that matters is how (You) are able to better understand your characters. What makes them people and not cardboard cutouts that exist for cheap cheesecake.
I write for myself. But I'll never matter. So I'll also write for my characters too. Their stories matter. They deserve to see some form of comfort and success for having barreled through their perils and managing to live through their trials. Here, among dead threads on a dead board for a dead fandom, they'll find their ways home.
It'll be seven years that I started, in less than two months. I really have no clue if that means anything. I have no cliques, no patreon, not a penny made. But I have my stories. I can show off what others have felt inspired to make too. Couldn't tell you why but that's not for me to presume but it does add weight to their stories. If I last another seven years I'd like to dig up this post.

>>43540820
>Why did (You) start writing?
When I was a much younger Anon, I used to write fanfiction. I never wrote much, but I liked it. I was good at it. For some reason or another, I stopped writing entirely. One day, a year or two after discovering /mlp/, I was hanging out in RGRE and realized my disappointment in lack of new greens. I remembered that I used to write, once upon a time, and decided to take a crack at it. I was able to feel that high of writing again and realized that this is what I'd been missing in my life. I truly believe that if I were a pony, I would've gotten a cutiemark in writing at that moment.

bump

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>>43540820
The first time is now more than 15 years ago. I wasn't even into pone then, but 2hu. A lot of fics got written, but none were quite the way I liked it so I started my own.

Five years later, after losing interest in that fandom and after a brief stint writing pokemons, the very same thing happened when I was reading pony greens.

I'm still just as shit and only write boring crap nobody actually reads, tho.

>>43540820
>Turns out writing was harder than I thought.
Bullshit. Just like type some words bro. Anyone can do it.

>>43542073
nigga you try writing a coherent story that follows logically and has a strong foundation

>>43539838
>You wish it didn't have to come to this
>You'll have to use the ancient Anonstar Family Technique
>You extend your pointer finger, aim, and-

>>43542833
"Objection!!!"
>Spitfire slows to a stop more due to confusion and looks around
>"...What?"

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>>43542846
You're hard for the wrong pony, Mr. Wright.

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>>43542846
>Rainbow Dash suddenly comes crashing through the window, screaming---"AAAAAAAHHHH!"---as broken glass flies everywhere, diigging into your skin like shrapnel.
>Your finger accidentally gets caught in her open mouth as she screams.
>She bites it off.

>>43541340
The -attitude? Feelings? Committment? I don't know what to call it- is the reason I've read fucking kilometers upon kilometers of pony. All manner of irredeamable trash, fandom favorites, every genre, true gems that stayed with me and far far more completely forgotten.

I like to go on places like fimfiction, but nothing there comes close to the sincerity that greens have.

And I'll never speak to anyone about it. Not my best friends, not my therapist, no one, ever. Some part of me wants to share, not with those close to me, but someone who might understand, maybe. At the same time I feel I might lose something and I hate losing.

It isn't just petty ego either, it isn't maintaining the veneer of normalcy for people who are centered on their own. It's the notion that I can't in fact meaningfully take pride im what I read. It's the freedom people sometimes write with.

Not like word diarrheas or wish fulfillment. Something else, more intimate, that readers and writers are not aware of.

I can't bring myself to read regular literature, but I keep crawling back to some generals and keep wondering about the stories that never got finished.

>>43543099
Would you read irregular literature?

>>43543181
What would that entail?

>>43543181
Do greens count?

>>43543099
>I like to go on places like fimfiction, but nothing there comes close to the sincerity that greens have.
>sincerity
I don't honestly know if fimfic is capable of sincerity. It's like a subreddit of updoots, social circles and big brain big boys. Big words because you're showing (You) know big words and are smart because your OC has an inkwell and quill. Fancy, flowery analogies that may not quite make sense but it sure sounds fancy and classy.
What stands out to you the most when it comes to greens? The good greens that make you want to covet and hide them from the normies.

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>>43542219
Yes, Anon. I know.
Starting a story is easy. Anyone can do it. Finishing one is extremely hard. Even I don't finish a lot of my stories because I lose interest part of the way through.
In a way I'm jealous of the drawtists since drawings get a lot more attention and praise for a lot less effort than long stories. It's hard to get in the mood to write if all you're doing is a bridging part between more important scenes and all you'll get is maybe one 'nice'. But I still do it.

>>43544317
>because I lose interest part of the way through
Do you imagine you will never have a rough patch with your waifu, or that it will be infinite fantasia?

>>43544346
I'll get back to one of the two. The other I consider finished myself as I wrote out the climax so all it'd need is a bit of a epilogue. In the other I'm just starting to get to the climax and the build-up feels insufficient to me so it's mostly me being afraid of letting the readers down.

>>43544372
There are no readers. There is you and mares. Only you and mares.
More serious answer is that if the progress doesn't feel right to lead up to what you want, let it progress on it's own. It may take a different path than what you want. They may do something that leads to a different situation entirely.

>>43541340
>I write for myself
Based
>But I'll never matter. So I'll also write for my characters too. Their stories matter. They deserve to see some form of comfort and success for having barreled through their perils and managing to live through their trials
That's reason why it pains me to see dead greens. Their stories will never finish, the characters are stuck forever in time. Fuck you Ephemeral

>>43544412
It's even worse because dead greens are so common that I've talked to a lot of anons that believe greens never finish but just die off. I'm proud that I've finished so many greens. Some are proper short stories, some are the size of a novel. At least one has turned into a full on series.
But you can argue whether or not they exist if no one cares to read them. No matter how positive you want to be, it is incredibly easy to swat that back down to a neutral viewpoint. Except for the pride of accomplishment.

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two greens I did, both recently banished to the 'chive
>>43543214
>>43538516

>>43542931
>You're on the floor crying now, covered in glass and fast horse.
>"Sweet Celestia! Anon! We need to get you to a hospital! Right now!" Twilight cries out, lifting you and Rainbow Dash up with her magic.
>"The horror! The HORROR!" you hear amid the commotion.

>>43545936
>Twilight bursts into the horspital lobby with you and Rainbow Dash in magical tow
>Twilight launches Rainbow Dash at Nurse Redheart
>Twilight then swiftly turns about and runs out of the horspital, carrying you in a completely different direction

>>43545328
Got a ponepaste?

>>43543620
Twilight Sparkle's super secret ship folder, and her extensive collection of human x pony smut

If PonePaste added support for spoilers, would anyone use it?
>>43545920
Asked it in the alt site thread.
Personally I don't see a reason to support it (spend the effort implementing it) because there are not many writefags left and I barely saw any use it when posting greentext.

>>43547257
I think it'd be nice, just because it helps with preserving how the greentext was meant to be read

>>43547590
Why not link to the thread it is in? I did that with Your Night Mare since the presentation fits better.

>>43547590
Filly/Floorb is not really active lately. I have opened a few pull requests to fix some bugs on PonePaste, let's see where it goes.
I could implement the spoiler handling if ppl really wants it, but dunno when will it be merged.

>>43547872
Is there ever any interest in adding the option for comments?

>>43547257
>spoilers
PonePaste should have a block function instead so I don't have to see the hundreds of fetishfag greens.

>>43548131
If it wants to be an alternative to fimfic, then it kinda needs comments, updoots, and maybe even chapters.

>>43548139
Do you actually browse PonePaste? I never searched for anything there. I just check out what's been linked from here. Maybe I go to the author's page but that's it.
>>43548154
We don't need another social site. So no comments, votes, etc.

>>43548171
NTA but I do browse ponepaste for greens to read, the random function is really useful. You find some good reads out there. Wish poneb.in had that too.
>>43548139
>block function
Agreed. What's the point of having tags if we can't filter some of them out?

Also no comments or votes you retards it's supposed to be a pure archival site for greens. Keep green discussion on the board.

>>43548439
Hardly anyone discusses greens at all. Not often their own threads, not in this thread.

>>43548635
Great, then we don't need comments on ponepaste if no one discusses greens.

>>43548139
congratulations on your transition to becoming a real woman anon or should I say femanon

>>43548674
Why shit up the catalog with a thread that doesn't discuss greens?

>>43548748
You're right, we should have another 10000 EQG imagedump threads where "slut" is the only word ever typed

I really gotta write more

>>43547257
i'd probably use it, but not very often. i've gotten pretty used to not having spoilers on Pastebin and Ponepaste.

>there are not many writefags left
did we ever figure out how many are actually left?

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>The "What if Vinyl Scratch was your sister" thread died
I kept hoping someone would write a green, but it didn't happen.

>>43549690
>"What if Vinyl Scratch was your sister"
They're really innovating over in EQG land, huh?

>>43549681
>did we ever figure out how many are actually left?
No, but you could estimate it by reading the OP of all threads, checking PonePaste's updated pastes feed, spotting greens in the threads, etc.

My guess is between 10 and 20.

>>43550233
>Spoiler
It's probably around 10 or so from my estimates. I wish another covid would happen so everyone comes back :(

>>43550503
>so everyone comes back
Turn that clock back 4-5 more years.

>>43550555
Checked, but a lot of good greens happened during the coof era.

>>43550503
That's a pretty small number. Makes me wonder how many readers there are on the board at all.

>>43550798
Whole board is maybe 2000 people.

>>43550800
2000 people or 2000 "people"?

>>43550800
more like under 25 people at best

>>43550233
i'm trying to newfag writefag. it's strange not seeing many oldheads who people recognize greening. feels like trying to reinvent the wheel. i have been seeing more popping up just in the time i've been using the board, so i have hope. be the change etc

>>43551313
>not seeing many oldheads who people recognize greening
What do you mean? I think certain generals are quick to recognize regular/consistent artists and writers but I don't often see any sort of widespread notice. Almost everything passed around tends to be very old.

>>43551351
yeah, that's what i mean. it doesn't seem frequent for the people whose greens are passed around or in the pins of a general to still be actively posting new material

>>43551530
To be fair, most of the greens in the OP are years old. Many of them are long, long gone. Every now and then one or two of them pops in, but I think they're off in other places like Dicksword. Like Notonefuck's trip popping into /rgre/ out of the blue a while ago to do some random shitpost chain with a few other writer's trips. Sad, innit?

>>43550555
>4-5 more years
more like 13-14 years. old AiE used to go through about three threads a day back in 2012

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>>43551313
>it's strange not seeing many oldheads who people recognize greening.
p sure the few oldheads that are left have retired from writing and mostly lurk these days. and if they do write something, they can always choose to remain anonymous too. I hardly see anyone name/tripfag around here anymore, and there's always been a stigma attached to doing it. I could imagine a lot of oldheads thinking about putting their name back on but also being, like, "Well, i'm not gonna put my name on cause nobody probably remembers who I am anyway, so I'll just look gay if I do it."

>>43551786
I did not get to experience that, I think I joined /mlp/ in early/mid 2014 or something (despite watching the show since early S1). Still 10 times the traffic as now.
Most high traffic threads were a mess. One could barely keep up reading it. I liked when it slowed down a bit in ~2016, you could keep up with a general even if you were not checking the board 3 times every single day.
The early days was an unorganized mess. Also the overall quality of greens was much better after ~2015. Early days were full of extremely short and quickly abandoned greens.

>>43551805
There was once a time when someone else could write and post green while posing as (You).
But, nobody bothers putting that much effort into shitposting anymore so I don't bother using a trip. You can still tell who I am by the ponepaste account, tho.

>>43551885
I do remember a few instances where anons would shitpost while using a certain writefag's name, just to make them look bad.

>>43551885
Namefagging makes it easier for the readers. At least it used to. But one huge positive for archival purposes is it makes the posts searchable.

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>>43546568
>When you both arrive at Carousel Boutique, you find that Rarity is already wearing some very hip-hugging scrubs and a nurse's cap. There's a diamond embedded in the front where the red cross should be.
>"Ah, there you are, Anonymous. I've already heard everything, and I just want you to know that, by the time I'm done stitching it back on, you will look as good as new. Why, it'll be almost as if your finger was never even bitten off at all."
>"Oh, his finger! I forgot to get it out of Rainbow Dash!" Twilight says, facehoofing herself. "I need to poof over there really quick. I'll be right back."

>>43551805
I only stick my name on when I'm actively writing. Or I'll zalgo text the name up to show what I'm writing isn't necessarily connected to the main story. I didn't have one until after a while when some anon mentioned it.
>so I'll just look gay if I do it
At that point, why even write if you're worried what others will think?
>>43551895
I never worried about that. If I had someone writing up a green that wasn't mine, it'd be easy because they'd have to write like me. If it was random shitposting and I wasn't aware of it, I probably wouldn't know but if it's not focused on anything I made who would care? I get why the con threads have trips for Purp and all that so you can point out what's official event news.

>>43551915
>Twilight drops you on the floor like a textbook in the middle of class
>Twilight then hollers "POOF!" at the top of her lungs before rushing out the door again
>Now you were alone with Nurse Rarity, still sans a finger

Another reason writefags are dying is because you can't make any money writing the way drawfags can with porn. I think a lot of the popular artists we have now wouldn't still be here if they didn't have Patreon accounts.

>>43552605
>you can't make any money writing the way drawfags can with porn
Nah, even the drawfags are leaving. They go get their (You)s from twitter now. Look at plunger and maretheory.exe. Everyone is moving on. Anyways, people aren't reading as much nowadays, unfortunately.

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>>43552602
>"Here." She gently lifts your head up and places a dainty throw pillow under it, so you can stare at the ceiling more comfortably. "Twilight may have stopped your bleeding, but you still look a little woozy, dear."
"Thanks, Mrs. Harshwhinny," you say to your boss. You think that's her; you feel pretty disoriented right now, wherever you are. "Yeah, I went to the party, and those mares tried to rape me. But I didn't fuck any of them, I promise."
>"Oh, well, then I suppose you got lucky," she titters, "otherwise Rainbow Dash might have bitten off something else of yours, and if what I heard from Pinkie Pie is true, then I'd certainly need a lot more thread to put that back on."

>>43549681
>did we ever figure out how many are actually left?
According to this >>43490606 check in the last thread there are 11 writefags. Or at least, there are 11 writefags who check /green/ there's likely more than that... probably.

>>43552732
I lurk a bit. But I no longer have the time that I had 15 years ago. I haven't written in a while, how long until you lose writefag status

>>43552996
Once a writefag always a writefag.

>>43553135
Jesus Christ, how horrifying.

>>43553299
You can take a fag out of the write but you can't take the write out of the fag.

100th reply and it's not talking about greens. Get fucked, writecucks.

>>43552674
"Do y'know what's weird? I can't feel my hand."
>You look to your hand and see blood gushing out like Niggeraria falls or whatever its called.
>"That's nothing, dahling, just a little flesh wound. It'll grow back."

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>>43553594
"It'll grow back?" From out of your brainfog comes a moment of clarity: Fingers don't grow back. "They don't grow back!"
>"No, no. You're not listening to me. I'm -saying- that you need to lie back." She takes a deep breath, then starts talking to herself: "Alright, Rarity, it looks like you're going to have to restrain your patient."
>She stands over you, looking down into your eyes, and flicks her tail to the side so the coils hug her curves; her legs give and she drops all of her weight onto your lap, sitting on you with a ladylike grunt.

I'll save you.

>>43554043
>Your pelvis instantly shatters
"AIIIIEEEEEEEEEEEE!!1!!11!!!1!!"
>At that exact moment Twilight runs in yelling "POOF!" as she carries your slightly digested finger

>>43554708
>"Oh Anon, you wouldn't believe what I had to do to get this back-"
>Twilight pauses, your dismembered finger hovering beside her head.
>"Rarity! Stop riding Anon, medical erotica is supposed to follow a very precise script, you're doing things out of sequence!"

>>43555356
>"Out of sequins?" Rarity asks, busy cleaning an ear out with her hoof
>"Oh, how dreadful Darling. Here, take some of mine."
>Rarity levitates a metal bucket of sequins over, only to suddenly sneeze and drop the bucket directly onto your face

>>43555996
>out of sequins
KEK

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>>43555996
>You sneeze a real man's sneeze (totally unlike Rarity's) and unintentionally blow the sequins everywhere, dusting the entire room with shiny little flakes.
>Applejack knocks on the door, which is still open from when Twilight barged in earlier, and peeks her head inside. She's pulling a cart; there's a barrel of cider on it.
>"Hey, I heard about what happened and---What in the hay?" Now seeing the mess, she stops just short of coming inside. "Uh... what's goin' on? Did y'all put Anon's little piggy back on yet?"

another one I did, banished to the 'chive.
trigger warning: EqG
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>>43553303
But can you take the fag out of the fag?

bump

>>43556485
>"I was GETTING to that, Applejack darling. You cannot rush true art," Rarity stated sharply, her horn shimmering as she retrieved your finger from Twilight.
>"Uh, well all ah see is you stradling Anon's hips like yer prepared fer a full blown rodeo."
>"I'm simply ensuring he's well secure. Now, let's see, the choice of thread must be perfect. I think I'll go with emerald, that should blend nicely with his complexion. Hmm, or perhaps lavender for contrast..."

>>43557334
"O-oh, I...I think I'm lost too much-"
>"Hush, Darling. I'm musing."
>"Uh, Twi? Anon ain't lookin' too hot. Can't you just...magic him better?" Applejack asks, gesturing to Twilight's horn with a glance

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>Flutterrape died again
big oof
one shit greens I did:
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>>43557991
>"I can't just poof it back on," she says. "Magic affects him differently than it does us. I've been casting tourniquet spells on his arm to help slow down his bleeding, but I don't want to put him at any more risk than that---especially since somepony decided to go off script and jump on top of him while I was gone."
>Twilight leers at Rarity, who holds her head high. "I assure you that I only used a little bit of force, just what was necessary to help keep our dear Anon calm."
"I can't breathe..." Feeling you stir beneath her, she lifts her rear up briefly before slamming it back down onto your crotch with all of her might.

>>43557151

>>43549690
Unfortunately this is the dark ages dude. That means if you want a green, and nobody else is doing it, you have to.

Taking requests. Gonna try to make them relatively short.

>>43549690
Some writers need to know they aren't writing into the complete void anon. You can't ask for storytime in your living room when you're in the other room listening to fillystep.

>>43559101
NTA but Gonna have to agree with you. Something that was really nice about the old fandom was you had feedback on EVERYTHING. Even if your writing was total shit, you had feedback. It was great, there was always engagement.
I write a lot for the board now (I archive almost none of it), but I get almost zero engagement. When I make something relatively good, the responses are so few and between it still feels like I'm just writing into the void.
It's really discouraging when you work hard on something for an audience you're not sure really exists.

>>43559123
The answer for me is to accept that you have no readers. You have no one who's reading into the smaller details that some may not get. You will never have many, if any, even remember your name.
Now that the doom and gloom is out of the way, you're free to swing for the cheap seats with every story and idea. You're free to put that molten emotional core into your story and hammer it out the way it whispers to you. You're free to tell the stories of your mares. They matter. If they didn't you wouldn't spend dozens to hundreds to a thousands+ hours telling the world about their lives.
When you're in love you wanna tell the world. But I also fully accept my approach is difficult because this arguably worthless endeavor is what keeps my corpus warm.
I don't know how much it matters but archive what you write. If you think those in the story need to be remembered.

I do done a thing in /rgm/ with my old green (rewriting) >>43558413. I left a bunch of random ideas/drafts in the old paste so you can look at how much I suffer from writingblockinitus.

>>43559279
I like that idea, I think it's a good perspective. Thanks anon.
>I don't know how much it matters but archive what you write. If you think those in the story need to be remembered.
I might, it's just hard. Part of me is really attached to the old style of "if the people like it, they'll save it." But maybe it's time for me to move on from that

>>43559355
Do yourself a favor and use libreoffice or something to write it and keep a local copy of it on you. You get spellcheck as an added bonus.

>>43559358
>Libreoffice
Wow, that's a call back. I used to use it years ago, back when I exclusively wrote greens only on my raspberry pi. Honestly did some of my best work on it.
For whatever reason, nothing else has ever worked as good for the writing process as libreoffice. Trying to write in modern docs and docs-like programs feels impossible.

I can't believe I haven't thought about libreoffice in years. Thanks anon, I think I'll fish out my pi and start doing some stuff today.

>>43559355
You can do both. An anon that cares will find a way to save it. Meanwhile you can also keep track of your own things. Having a ponepaste will also make it easier for others to read and keep stories that they like.

>>43559358
Question. I often hear people talking about the software they use to write stuff, and I'm just wondering why it matters. I've been writing on notepad for a year now and if I need a spellchecker, I do my editing on a different website before archiving/saving it. Whenever I need a friend to brainstorm with me, I just send it in a google docs. So, what would change if I used a proper writing software? Is there something I'm missing out on?

>>43559808
I've never written anywhere but the text window, anon. I don't think you need a program because you can write anywhere you like. Most browsers automatically have a spell check now too so your only concern is taken care of there. May be good for keeping a copy to yourself but it just never felt right to me.

>>43559808
Automatic backups, quick navigation, and version history, all of which you get with Google docs.
If you just want to make a novel length rat's nest of notes and worldbuilding without ever actually writing something, Obsidian is pretty cool.

>>43548171
>Do you actually browse PonePaste?
I pop in the archive and take a look every few months or so.
>>43548635
True. This is why I'm not wholly against the idea of adding comments to Ponepaste.

>>43559092
Yeah, how about a cute Anon x Chryssi short?

>>43558166
>"Speaking of magic, it's a good thing you're here, Applejack. Here, go hold this in place so my magic doesn't interfere with Rarity's."
>Twilight holds your slightly digested finger up the Applejack's scrunched snout
>"Ah...Ah ain't puttin' that in mah mouth."

>>43560606
I still think it would be a good idea. It isn't a forum or a way to have two way conversations. Just ways to comment on things.

>>43560606
>>43562112
What's stopping you from leaving a comment in the general?

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>>43562210
I've done that before but rarely do I see other anons do it. I'm not entirely sure that Anons would write comments on Ponepaste either if it was enabled, but I'd be interested to try it out, and hopeful that they would.

>>43562210
One or two anons commenting in a thread isn't a reasonable excuse to not add it. And it is usually one to two anons. The boorus have comment sections, they are either ignored outright or you have a small handful of anons commenting. Comparing that to it becoming fimfiction is silly.

>>43562860
>>43563125
Fair point, it could be tried as long as the comment user's name is Anonymous. Only issue is getting Filly to implement it.

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>>43536778
>SNRRRTTT SNRT SNRT SNRTT
Unnnghhh!!
>Splat!
>You look down at your hand, covered in seminal fluid. It does not glisten, the light in the bathroom is not even directly from the sun. No, your bathroom has only a dark, off-blue hue from the ambient light of the day.
>You look at it for a moment, transfixed, then look back to the window sitting up by the shower wall. You can see the much more vibrant, endless blue sky out there.
>You look from it to the semen on your hand several times, before giving a deep sigh and sitting up off the toilet.
>The bathroom is just barely clean, or perhaps just barely dirty. Clothes litter the floor here and there, grime sits on only one part of the light switch, the sink...
>Whatever.
>You wash your hands and follow the motions.
>Outside of the bathroom, outside of your home, a group of two ponies is waiting for you. They've been waiting for you for the past forty-five minutes. The purplest amongst them looks to you, then between her white unicorn companion. They whisper something to eachother, you don't really hear what. You don't need to.
>"Please....?"
>"I'm sorry but there's REALLY nothing we can do about it.."
>"But..."
>She just shrugs her shoulders and hangs her head down, mumbling something. This sad exchange goes on between the two before you step close enough that the purple one stops the conversation entirely.
>"Hello!" She chirps, looking you up and down, grimacing for a second before she speaks again "You must be *Anon*....right?"
>"Oh, please tell me you are. We spent a really, REALLY long time trying to figure out how to find "earth" and I swear to Celestia if I messed up the coordinates again I'm going to scream...hahah, kidding! Kidding! I'm-I'm totally kidding."
Yeah, I'm Anon. This one to your left there is uh...
>"Rarity," the white unicorn responds, grimacing. "Charmed, I'm sure."
Sweet. Been waiting a real long time for you to come here.
>"Aheh...naturally..."
>"SO!" The purple one exclaims, stepping between the vision of you two "Is there - is there anything I can help with? Do you need me to explain a little of pony culture for you? Or...orrr....well...maybe we could talk about pony history and I could fill you in on..."
Nah.
>"Oh...but...well, it could take HOURS but..."
I said no, I don't need to know anything. The deal was pretty simple. Are you trying to queer it now you gargantuan purple faggot?
>"No," her face goes deadpan "Not at all, Mister Anonymous."
Then get the fuck off my property and back to your shithole.
>She looks to you, then to Rarity...then to you...then to Rarity. This goes on a while, before she just mumbles a soft 'Alright', leans in to hug the other unicorn and, soon enough, is gone.
>Rarity and you just stand there for quite some time. Neither of you saying anything. Occassionally you scratch your testicels, which catches her eye each time and always has her looking like she's about to vomit.

>>43563466
>There's tears, quiet, almost unseen, but still they are there. She dabs them away with her forehoof as quickly as they come, careful not to mess up her makeup. You don't say anything, you just allow the space to hold. You don't need to disturb the moment as it is, spacious.
>Eventually Rarity turns to your home, simply staring at it, her eyes analyzing each and every detail.
>It's alot like your bathroom. It lands somewhere between just barely clean and just barely dirty. Your yard has decorations...but they all seem out of place. The grass is shorn to a point of artificiality, especially given that it's dying. There are lovely butterfly stickers on your home bt the door, though they've begun to fade from years of sun damage. Your home has some delightful christmas decorations on the outside of it and within the window sill.
>These stand out given that it's summer.
>Rarity just looks, taking it all in. She takes in the slightly damaged curtains, the out of season holiday decorations. The yard ornaments. She takes in the asphalt leading up to the stairs that is even more damaged from the sun than your butterfly stickers. She notices the peeling paint that's only on the stairs themselves, but not the handle.
>She looks at the trees that surround your home, all of them half alive..or maybe half dead, ruined from climatic change you cannot control nor have any interest to.
>She looks at it all, then takes a perplexed sort of sigh, before turning to you. She looks at you the same way, like she's analyzing you, taking you all in.
>Then she asks it finally, in a soft, delicate voice.
>"You took me out of Equestria to live here?"
>Then it's quiet again, the air feels almost like glass. Or maybe like water. It seems so delicate, betraying some other depth that can't be seen. There's a kind of sadness here, neither of you address it directly. Maybe you can't.
Real crap-shoot, I know.
>She waits a while.
>"Do you suppose you could still perhaps be persuaded against the.."
No.
>"Really I hardly see how having me as a..a..a "wife" would...."
No.
>"Buh..."
>She waits again, a little less longer than she had before.
>"Why?"
>You shrug, ignoring the fact that your hand smells like your sour genitals when it comes past your face, the same way you have been ignoring the gentle smell of gasoline on the wind, or the wind chimes twinkling whenever the ghost of a summer breeze decides to haunt you two out here.
Your name was the first that came up on the list.
>"Oh.."
>"I...I see," she chokes for second, "and you really won't change your mind then?"
No.
>"Of course, so simple, I.."
>She looks around.
>Then...just sits.
>Big, wet tears bead up at the corners of her eyes, then run down her cheeks, trailing mascara all down them. Makeup that must have taken her hours now being ruined in a matter of seconds.
Come inside when you're done, ok?
>She doesn't respond, you walk past her and head back into your home.

>>43563341
Worst that happens is that it becomes vulnerable to spam or bots, depending on the details. Keeping the name to Anonymous means whoever can put whatever down. Given the level of esoteric ponepaste is on, I honestly have no clue if we'll see hundreds of conversations going on. If it's still only a handful of comments at all, it'll give someone some idea of the quality or flaws of the story. Or give them a chance to speak up on a one-way basis. Make it so you can't comment on your own greens and that'll ensure no astroturfing... presuming that isn't too difficult to include.

>>43563494
>You do what you always do when you're bored and you can't..or don't want, to go outside. You sit your ass right on the couch, ignoring the teeshirt that's been left on it for a month, turning on the TV.
>Gradual human extinction may be an issue now, but you still have television. Thank god for that! Atleast, you have it sporadically enough that it still feels normal.
>You don't like to think about that, so you don't. You turn it on and are silently grateful that the streaming service you pay for is working this month.
>Like always you pick one of your favourite shows. Something you've seen so many times you could probably recite every line in every episode by heart. It's one of your adult animated sitcoms...the name doesn't matter, they all sort of blurr into eachother. Don't even know if enjoy is the right word, but it's good. It lets your mind dull away.
>You pick your favourite seasons, one of the early ones from when it was still good, you pick it and you lt it come to you.
>The tv is alive with colours and sounds.
>And just outside your door, you can hear Rarity crying.
>It's surprisingly easy to ignore. You just let her do it, and do it she does. She weeps and sobs until it's dark out and you're well past your favourite season to one you don't like as much. But it doesn't stop you from changing it. You just sit there and let it all in.
>And just outside, Rarity mourns.
>Eventually the door opens and Rarity steps in, sniffling. Makeup on her face smeared, but seeming to have also been through some half-hearted attempt to clean up.
When's dinner?
>"You..huh?" Rarity echoes back.
When are you going to cook my dinner?
>"You can't possibly be expecting me to cook your dinner when I just spent the better half of the day, completely bawling my eyes out!"
I can and I do, so answer the question..when can I expect to eat? I'm hungry and I need to sleep eventually.
>"But...I...you're being unreasonable, atleast allow me a few days to get used to our arrangement and I assure you that I will make you SPECTACULAR dinners. Otherwise I must assure you that I simply cannot.."
No.
>"Is that all you ever say?!
No.
>"Oh, come on! I can't be expected to cook when I'm this upset!"
You are.
>Rarity lets out something akin to a scream, before breaking down again and stomping into the kitchen. You hear a hazard of pans clattering and the fridge opening, which proceeds a ghastly scream.
>"You...oh Celestia, you eat..."
Yes.
>"Suh...surely you d..don't expect me to...to COOK that...oh please,"
>You can hear her begin to trot back out of the kitchen, but you stand up when she does, turning to face her from the other side of the couch, staring her down.
>"I don't want to be here,"
>She croaks.
>"Please."

>>43563515
>You shake your head and point to the kitchen.
>She trembles and complies, though not without loud and consistent complaints the entire time. Not without loud mutterings of your barbaric and brutish nature. Not without comments on the hygiene of your environment and your person.
>Eventually she's out and there's a steak sitting in a cast iron skillet on a gas powered stove. She asks if she can lay down, vomit on her mouth. You don't protest.
>When she's gone, you take the thing bare in your hands and sit back down on the couch, resuming watching tv. You pay attention half way, if that. Just eating, losing yourself in the noise and the taste of the meal.
>It's overcooked.
>If you had to guess, she wanted to cook away the scent of fat and blood.
>You don't care either way.
>Time passes.
>When you finish your meal, you don't leave to bed right away. You let another hour of tv watching go by.
>Then another.
>And another.
>You remind yourself each time that you need to go to bed, that you SHOULD go to bed. That you have work tomorrow. Between each time you say you have work, you groan and quietly remind yourself that you don't want to go. Then that proceeds another reminder that you really should go to bed.
>it's four hours past midnight, which promises you won't be well tomorrow, by the time you finally will yourself to turn off the tv and trek to your bedroom.
>Rarity lays awake in your bed, trembling.
>She couldn't sleep either.
>You ignore her and shift into bed, getting into the covers and laying down next to her, completely naked.
G'night.
>Rarity is quiet.
>It's not until she's sure that you're finally asleep, and you are, that she lets out one long sigh.
>The first day of Married Bliss
-----

Should I continue this? Let me know.

>>43563524
>Entire paragraphs within a single >
Just do it in prose, man.

>>43563524
this is depressing. why is this guy being such a dick to Rarity?

>>43564783
>This is depressing
Awesome!! That's exactly what I was hoping for.
>why is this guy being such a dick to Rarity?
I'm not sure if I'll continue yet, so keep in mind I'll leave probably most of the reasoning hidden still within the text.

But generally, he doesn't want to be there either. He has more power than Rarity in this situation, theoretically he COULD end this whole "marriage" and give Rarity back her freedom. But he doesn't, because he's decided he NEEDS to do this. There's little hints as to why he feels this way. But maybe the most obvious is that Anon is extremely nostalgic, to the point it's sort of killing him emotionally. He's stuck in a past that no longer exists and keeps reliving on a loop. When the future eventually intrudes (and it does) he doesn't know how to respond to it and just lets the depression, the misery, all crash in on him. He keeps reliving the same feelings because he thinks he has to. The future intrudes and he just gives up when it does because he thinks he has to. He does everything he can to avoid the present moment.

This is part of why he's an asshole to her. He doesn't want to be with her. He's not a rapist, but he's not a good guy either. He doesn't even want to be at home, but he thinks he needs to. The same reason he goes to work even though society is crumbling apart enough it doesn't matter....he thinks he's supposed to. It all forms the same reason he's cruel to her. For reasons hidden in the text, he thinks this is what marriage is. So might as well stick to the script. Especially if your scene-partner doesn't get she's in the same boat as you now.

Anyway this is just some of the surface level stuff. When I write, I layer my stuff with alot of symbolisms and themes. I'm hoping other anons pick through and discuss more and find my "clues".
>>43564005
>Just do it in prose, man.
I probably should. It's just hard, greens were alot more varied in their early stages. I guess I'm still there in development.

>>43559092
Write about being Cozy Glow's exact twin sister who's actually a very sweet filly

>>43565103
>greens were alot more varied in their early stages.
I mean, I guess nothing's stopping you from continuing this way, but I think I agree with that other Anon when it comes to having, effectively, prose in place of green. There should be a choppiness to a green

>>43565103
>>43565821
I think the odd part is that anon is going halfway. Some lines are pretty concise and it has that sharper read to it because you're focusing. When you then see something that is multiple sentences long, you're being told to slow down. That each > segment has meaning, so you're kinda stuck focusing on something that could've been reformatted.
Good example:
>You remind yourself each time that you need to go to bed, that you SHOULD go to bed. That you have work tomorrow. Between each time you say you have work, you groan and quietly remind yourself that you don't want to go. Then that proceeds another reminder that you really should go to bed.
Could be:
>You remind yourself each time
>You need to go to bed
>You SHOULD go to bed
>You have work tomorrow
>Between each time you say you have work, you groan and quietly remind yourself that you don't want to
>That proceeds another reminder that you really should
I don't want to be seen as egotistical and I'm not trying to rewrite anything. That's more how I can see that segment getting cleaned up a little to keep to the flow without removing stuff and I know I already removed a word or two. It can be worth it to read through your stuff as you're typing it so you can keep track of the pacing. The mindset and mood of (You), etc.

>>43565889
That is the most helpful advice I have ever gotten on green writing, thank you!
I don't think you came across egotistical at all. This was majorly appreciated.

Can you explain a little what the shift here is between example A (the original) and example B (the reformat). Why is it the reformat works so much better? I kind of get it, I can see how much better the pacing is, but having more insight would be wonderful.

>>43565981
>>43565821
Just saw this. Really interesting. This description of choppy would track with the literary style greens evolved and solidified into.
My understanding so far of that advice given is that prose is effectively taking you out of Anon's POV > sections should be written much shorter and allow for a quick seamless transition between scene to scene.
Is that about right? Thanks again everyone for the feedback, this is awesome.

>>43565981
NTA but starting a new line has more "impact" to a reader than reading a proceeding sentence.
>Little impact, with a comma
>Separate sentences with a period, or something similar. A bit more impact.
>Separate lines
>The most impact
Probably because your brain/eye has to reset to read the next line, each line becomes it's own entity in your mind. That anon also did some light editing with omitting needless words. That's another advantage of greens, the format lets you cut the fat way more than you might be able to with typical prose. It makes me consider writing my original fiction in greenform and then converting to prose.

>>43565988
Again, some of the most helpful advice I've received on green writing. So when were doing greens, we don't really use punctuation normally do we? It's just line format. What does this look like when we are in a scene between two or more characters?

>>43565990
>So when were doing greens, we don't really use punctuation normally do we?
Periods at the end of sentences are typically omitted, but it's mainly preference. Any other punctuation stays, since it's necessary
>What does this look like when we are in a scene between two or more characters?
Dialogue is it's own line.
>Be Anon
>See Twilight and Applejack
"Sup, Piggy?"
>Twilight's ears fold back against her head
>"I really wish you'd stop calling me that, Anon."
"And I really wish you'd stop making the Hayburger run out of fries before I can get any."
>Twilight's face falls and Applejack's scrunches
>"Rarity's right, Anon. Yer a sorry excuse for a man."
"Up yours, Appul."

>>43566000
Amazingly helpful, thank you. I might try cutting more of the "fat" from my original as a style experiment. Thanks again! Appreciate everyone helping me to shine better as an artist for the community.

>>43565981
Glad you're digging the advice! I've seen a lot get snooty or egotistical and that's just not the way at all.
>Can you explain a little what the shift here is
It works for me because, the way I see it, you're reading at the speed of thought. You are (You). Even if you aren't, (You) is the character you are seeing the world through. Abandon more objective third party narrative, focus keenly on what (You) see and how (You) take events. That is how you can maintain a consistent emotional core to what is going on.
Because of that core and that you are seeing (You) through (You)r own eyes, you can have shorter lines that are quicker, more stark, more concise and only given detail as it matters to (You). For example, you and I go for a handshake. I then do the weird hand slap secret hamshake routine and you don't know what is going on. Do you go through it and try to follow along or stop or go "what the fuck"? Have that subconscious layer on (You) and through your own selective narration and way of describing things, you build (You)r personality without having some goofy multi-paragraph exposition on what makes (You) tick.
>>43565990
Punctuation matters but more while talking. Under the presumption that these are thoughts and insights (You) have, you can get away with things being a little more sparse. Especially if (You) aren't so well read or educated. Everyone loves to write smart but with greens, you need to remember whether or not your character/viewpoint into this story is smart.

>>43566003
This is so interesting. That line on thought is interesting for me, because generally my way of thinking is very synesthetic. Prose comes naturally to me because of this. Having this advice for putting myself into the perspective of others/my character is so good.
>Glad you're digging the advice! I've seen a lot get snooty or egotistical and that's just not the way at all.
100% agree. I'm happy we can both help each other shine better.
Honestly, I think people get like that because they're writing for the wrong reasons. I don't write because I want others to like me, I write because I want to bring joy to others. So anything that helps me get better will always be appreciated.

>>43566008
It is a very awkward start but you'll get used to greens before you know it. A good thing I've said a few times through panels is that if you wanna learn more about characters, write them doing the exact same thing. Like four chumps walking into the same room. Everyone is going to see something different first. Everyone is going to be interested or repulsed by something unique.

>>43565301
>Twilight encounters Homely Light
>"WTF HOW DID YOU ESCAPE?"
>"n-nani?"
>Sperglight Sparkles instantly zaps her with the full might of the sun and moon
>stoned™ instantly
>imnotdealingwiththisshit.scroll
>throws her into the river
>never realizes it's not Cozy because she never checks on the actual statue

>>43566301
Do I get to cum on the statue before she dumps it in the ocean?

>>43559005

Thread dead

>>43565988
As someone who's trying to get into green writing, I struggle a lot with the concept of "cutting the fat" as you put it. Whenever I get a writeboner I end up doing a lot of purple prose. I've even caught myself writing a paragraph in a single > like the other anon, to the point I wonder if I should just write prose. If I had to guess, it could be a problem with the "choppiness" that the greentext format is known for, I don't want to overuse the strength that comes with short sentences to emphasize a scene - but that leads to feeling like I'm fitting a lot in what should be a single sentence. Maybe I'm just overthinking it, but it feels like reconfiguring my brain

>>43568322
>Maybe I'm just overthinking it
You are. If you're in editing mode, try seeing how your work reads if you remove a particular sentence or even just a word from a sentence. Do you /need/ an adjective there? Is this description necessary for what you're going for?
>inb4 but it's a good description/I worked hard on it/my writing will look short without it
None of these are strong enough to outweigh the question of "Is it needed?"

>>43568322
The biggest thing is
>One sentence per line
>It can be a long one if really necessary since sometimes you do need proper descriptions, but it's still just one per line and never more
>Short lines make for intense scenes
>Don't interrupt those for descriptions
>That kills the mood
>But if it's quiet and tension is low, you can go ahead and describe how the mare brings a good up to flick her mane as a hint of red rises to her cheeks after your joke
>But only if that's relevant to the story

>>43568634
>But only if that's relevant to the story
I have a similar rule in regards to story: After three lines of green, something has to happen that moves the story forward. It's not, like, a hard rule that I never break, but it is one that I like to keep in mind, and I do ask myself sometimes when I'm writing something, "Does what I'm trying to say here really need more than three lines?"

If you're writing well enough, then sometimes three sentences can easily be enough space for you to get your point across.
It's just enough for:
>A topic sentence.
>Analysis of the introduced topic.
>Final judgment on the topic.

If you can stomach reading some non-horsewords, then the opening paragraph to the first Bloom chapter of Ulysses is a good example of this.
>topic
---Mr. Bloom ate with relish the inner organs of beasts and fowls.
>analysis of introduced topic
---He liked thick giblet soup, nutty gizzards, a stuffed roast heart, liver slices fried with crust crumbs, fried hencods' roes.
>final judgment on the topic
---Most of all he liked grilled mutton kidneys which gave to his palate a fine tang of faintly scented urine.

Those three sentences would be three separate lines of green; if I had written this myself, I'd be tempted to combine the last two sentences on the same line, but I probably wouldn't because the second sentence, the one about nutty gizzards, is kinda chunky by green standards.

Once we've moved past Bloom's ghoulish fixation on organ meats, the sentence on the following paragraph moves the story forward. It keeps the earlier topic of kidneys at the forefront though, to make for a smoother transition into the plot.
---Kidneys were in his mind as he moved about the kitchen softly, righting her breakfast things on the humpty tray.

This sentence moves the story forward by both setting the scene (placing Bloom in a specific time and place; breakfast, the kitchen) and telling us what he's doing (making breakfast; he's also dreaming of kidneys, which will motivate some of his later actions.)

>>43568634
>>43569165
This is a good example of how greens focus on efficiency. 500 words in prose can be a fraction in green. It isn't laziness, it's direct. Focused. Limited by the eyes/perspective of (You) in the story. I wish the fimfiction goons understood that it can be lazy but it can also be far more precise too.

>>43569394
>It isn't laziness, it's direct
AI has fried my brain. I can hear the machine saying that in my ear

>>43569394
>I wish the fimfiction goons understood that it can be lazy but it can also be far more precise too.
You forget that they worship only the purplest of prose

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>>43570026
Purple prose is fucking stupid. For one, you show how smart you aren't by trying to sound like a genius. For two, it's fluffed up to the point it has no purpose. It's masturbation for exhibitionists. I've seen them jerk off so much over muh word count but you read four paragraphs and it's just asinine. So little is said but it wants to impress you by using words no one ever uses in any practical situation.
>>43568322
>whenever I get a writeboner I end up doing a lot of purple prose
Case in point. Sorry anon but you've admitted that you want to jerk off for others to go "wow his literacy must be through the roof".
Here's a silly way to get my point across as well as only slightly make fun of you for having a silly habit: greens can have punch to them. Impact. Writing a green efficiently and effectively to evoke emotions is the equivalent of a solid gut punch. Focusing on word count, needing entire paragraphs and using flowery language is the equivalent of you doing some twirls, an anime styled dash with speed lines, and calling your ultimate attack. It might possibly be on par with that solid gut punch but you're taking so much more time to do the same thing that your emotional punch is going to be a fraction of what it could've been.
>Maybe I'm overthinking it
You are by default because you are saying you enjoy purple prose. Think of a short story. Try telling it as if the person you're telling it to isn't willing to stand there for twenty minutes for you to make your first point.

>>43570044
This feels like a meme I'm not in on

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>>43561383
>"I came cause I heard about what that ol' feather brain Rainbow Dash did to Anon here. I figured he'd be in a heap of hurt, and would appreciate this cider a lot more than those cackling hens back at Pinkie Pie's party.
>"Now I know it ain't exactly the same as going to the hospital to get a head full of knockout gas, but sometimes the old remedies can work just as---"
>"You mean anesthetic!" Twilight shouts, beaming with pride because she knows something. "That's what it's really known as, not knockout gas."

>>43569850
Same

>>43568164
I blame the anni

annibump

>>43576113
gonna be desu, bumping because I don't feel like slapping together the next OP mid/immediately post anni

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>>43536778
/R/equesting a green where (You) and Luna smoke a fat bowl, like >>43578137

>>43536778
/R/equesting a sunset shimmer horror green with something like this premise:
https://youtu.be/TIsWng5E3mc?si=_ouMENdsab6pnLxZ>>43536778

>>43578555
The absolute state of internet horror

>>43578767
Horror? I thought that was comedy!

>>43578555
man do I hate tranalog horror

>>43570612
Claude's logo looks like an asshole

>>43579553
u look like a asshol

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>>43571007
>Applejack saying 'Anon' and then 'cider' is the last thing you remember, before the booze started flowing down your throat, and the room started spinning.
"Ow!" The nub where your finger was still hurts though, even with a belly full of country anesthetic. "Twiggles, before you start poking me with any needles, I'm gonna need you guys to give me some more drinks first."
>"We already sewed it back on. You're drunk, Anon."

>>43584432
>You take a look at your hand
>Rarity went with the lavender thread
>She also embroidered her cutie mark into your flesh

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22 days later, and another one shit is finally in the 'chive
trigger warning: Dazzlings playing Mario party
>>43529411
>>43529548

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>>43587144
>Your eyes drift until they land on her own cutie marks. She's still sitting on your lap, and looking quite pleased with herself, as she raves over the stylistic choices she made during your surgery.
>"... Because, after thinking it over for so long, I really do believe that lavender was the natural choice to match your skin tone after all, considering that I didn't have any green..."
>You grab Rarity's hips, your palms cupping her diamonds---"Anonymous?! Oh my!"---and test out the sturdiness of your newly-attached appendage by kneading her ass cheeks like they're two big dough balls.

>13 hours since last bump
Thank Faust for the anni

>>43594986
Retard

>>43540820
>Why did (You) start writing?
To bump dead generals. I get very flattering (You)'s but I wonder if it's because Anon's are just desperate for any kind of OC content
>I, personally, started writing to prove that writefags were lazy bastards who couldn't finish their long form greens. Turns out writing was harder than I thought.
Fuck man. A measly 20,000 characters takes me a whole day. Actual long greens must take weeks. With short-medium stuff you can kinda just write as you go but longer stuff requires actual planning and commitment. I've also struggled with the fact that the greentext format forces brevity and discourages proper description and narration. It's hard to vividly describe a scene with single sentence lines.

>>43596282
>I get very flattering (You)'s
really? well you're doing better than me then. I get no (You)s, I am (You)less. even back when there were more than two anons on this board I never got any (You)s, and the writefags that did get (You)s aren't even around anymore. they all left and took everyone, and all the (You)s, with em.

>>43596282
20k may be easy but 30k is exponentially less so. Nevermind more. You have to make sure the structure is solid as you go and that it all fits. You can build a deck pretty fast but a small cabin takes a ton more effort despite just being a deck with more walls.

>>43598008
Here's one for the road. Don't spend it all in one place.

>>43596282
>actual planning and commitment.
Beware the long green format - for there are many that ruin their creative flow by writing themselves into a corner, going on meta diatribes, or simply losing interest and burrowing themselves in self-doubt. I love reading them, but they remind me too much of fimfic authors that go on a permanent hiatus or just abandon the story.

>>43602604
Yes.
Long stories have to be planned before they are started. You need at least the ending thought out along with the major plot twists. Otherwise they will fizzle out.

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>>43536782
>My Little Whore: Consent Is Nonexistent, by Anonwriter
>20 part epic about Anon having his way with various characters
https://poneb.in/9wYFQpyc
The lewd parts are great, and the setup/context is good, but this is definitely one of those greens you follow for the erotic content more than the story itself.
If you like depraved and and detailed lewd scenes, it fills the hole pretty well.
If not, this ain't it.
Obligatory
>no hooves
warning.

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Any thoughts on AI writing?

>>43600298
no one can use this (You), it's not genuine

>>43605230
Yeah, here's a thought: Kill yourself.

>>43605230
If you are too retarded to know how to write, you will not understand how badly an AI will botch anything it spits out.

>>43605230
no

>>43605230
All greens should be human-written; that's the spirit of the thing and what anons want to read. The format is good for exploring stupid ideas, going wild, experimenting, trying things, etc.
Nobody wants to read an LLM's idea of what an Anon in Equestria scenario should be. They want YOUR retarded idea, badly executed, with soul.
And I say this as a /chag/fag.

>>43605690
all AiE greens are on the same level as AI writing aka both shit so it makes no difference.

>>43605705
Yet The End of the Universe mogs any non-Anon green.