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first reply, I just broke this thread's hymen. Anyone else who posts after me is getting my sloppy seconds, my leftovers.

Just remember that the first reply is the most special reply and you'll never experience this thread the way I did and this thread will never feel the way it felt about me about you.

It's Over ,you might as well just go post on Reddit and talk about how much of a "man" you are for replying on a thread that I pump and dumped. Have fun with my scraps, cucks

>>72053479
you're literally posting in the thread that's used as a bump whore by someone to keep other threads down
you're already in sloppy seconds

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Thinking of making a dead dove do not eat "x reader" fanfic with underage and abuse elements... Phew...

>>72053479
Anyone got an AO3 Kudo to spare? Grant that man one!
Meanwhile, I'll one up 'em some by bumping a post page 10 thread. Whoot!
>>72030301
>No Laws Against the Pokemon by Milkymoofficial
One problem:
>“Just let me catch my breath for a while,”
Need a period.
Now, as to my evaluation of your story? By the power invested in me by the Council of the Moot, I hereby rename this story: "When Lopunnies Attack! Assmans Delight."
Much lawl was had. Thank you.

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>>72053344
Last thread stories

'Love is Driven', Chapter 7 - Go for Gold
https://archiveofourown.org/works/58855480/chapters/157467781
>Go Dog Go, M-Rated, Furry, OC x Canon, romance, angst, underage, younger female/older male

/ss/ One Shots, Part 4: It’s Okay To Watch
https://archiveofourown.org/works/51961219/chapters/157561834
>Consensual Underage Sex, Aunt/Nephew Incest, Voyeurism, Hand Jobs, Breast Fucking, Belly Kink

Cursed Clussy Carnival Chapter 5 Part 1
https://www.deviantart.com/samaster/art/1135222222
>CYOA, Clussy, transformation, clownification,
Chapter 5 Part 2
https://www.deviantart.com/samaster/art/1139212959
>Clussy, Clownification, CYOA, haunted carnival

ToryTheGoat Trade that I DEFINITELY didn’t forget about COMPLETE
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ThZ139OaavBxOu5WycN7XATGqyeM0UCYBBrjC6Slf5E/edit?tab=t.0
>big tits/asses, femdom, size difference, political references, etc.

SCP Foundation History Lesson
https://scp-wiki.wikidot.com/history-lesson
>SCP, tags unknown

The Dragon and the Author Volume 2 Chapters 11 and 12
https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/61924/the-dragon-and-the-author/chapter/1960463/vol-2-ch-11-no-good-deed
https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/61924/the-dragon-and-the-author/chapter/1978366/vol-2-ch-12-the-doctor-is-in
>SFW, Adventure, High Fantasy, Meta Elements, Non-Human Protagonist, Dragons, Multiple POVs

In the Temple of the Beast Goddess Chapter 3: A Catboy's Pride
https://rentry.co/vuqxao9f
>M/F, mtf nonconsenting transformation, wolf-girl, cat-boys and cat-girl, not anthro, uncontrollably in-heat, fingering, vaginal sex, kinda vanilla

Cleansing Rain
https://rentry.org/sisuforyourheartandsoul
>SFW, Hurt/Comfort, Reassurance, Human, Eastern Dragon, Feral, Sisu (Raya and the Last Dragon), Hugs, Other Physical Contact, >Tea

Pythagas
https://archiveofourown.org/works/58206391/
>NSFW, Gor Chronicles - John Norman, Pokemon, Krystal (Star Fox), pokemorph, Caecotroph, limited Scat (with a chapter warning), Porn With Plot

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>>72054008
from thread 325
Cursed Clussy Carnival Ch. 3
https://www.deviantart.com/samaster/art/1131756738
>Clussy, Clownification, CYOA, survival horror

Ch. 4 of the Cursed Clussy Carnival.
https://www.deviantart.com/samaster/art/1133315983
>clownification, clowngirls, survival horror, tf, cyoa

(untitled)
>female human, vore, (others not sure yet!)
https://rentry.co/na7nywzc

Getting Back At Chad
by Carbanon
22K words
https://archiveofourown.org/works/61340761
>anal vore, female pred, male prey, smaller pred w. larger prey, multiple prey, facesitting, domination, digestion/disposal (not a ton or particularly graphic, but it's there)

God Be With Day
by Milkymoo
https://archiveofourown.org/works/61415110
>cw: big asses, farts, femdom, Keijo-inspired battles, etc.

Widened_Shadow
https://rentry.org/Widened_Shadow_Final
>17,374 Words.
>NSFW, Monster Hunter Universe, Fanfic, Fat Fetishism, Feral Nargacuga, Male, Extreme Weight-gain, Mobility Issues, Health Issues, Breakage, Angst, Dark Themes, F/M, Light Romance, Burping/Belching, Gorging

Flute Dragon Short
https://rentry.org/flutedragonshort
>M Human/F Anthro, Flute Dragons, Fear, Intimidation, Solo Focus, Danger, Threat of Death, Abdominal Bulge, Vaginal, Alternative Biology, Feeding on Emotions (is there a better sounding term for this?)

Monstergirl worldbuilding - Dryads and Plant Girls
https://www.deviantart.com/samaster/art/1136437674
>worldbuilding, monstergirls, dryads, fantasy

Link any I missed.
...I'd be faster, but my eyes aren't what they used to be.

>>72053747
Just ticking all the popular tags huh. What franchise, then?

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>>72054446
>Just ticking all the popular tags huh
It's somewhat taboo on AO3, really... But kinda.
And about the franchise, I'm thinking of JJK, Chainsaw Man, MHA, or One Piece, but I'm going for JJK. Specifically; Gojo.

So many stories it's hard to decide.

>>72054008
>You have been linked in the last thread stories post.
>Don't let it go to you head.
Heh. Thank you.
>>72055447
"Godda read 'em all!"
And that give me an idea for a postmodern pokemon-as-the-readers story that will never see the light of day because reasons...

>>72054773
>or

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Story request:

>Main character is a flat-chested tomboy
>She likes to hang around the local beach and often goes topless during her visits
>Between her chest, boyish looks, and choice of clothing, other beachgoers don't realize she's a woman
>The only people who know the truth is the group of guys she hangs out with, but they don't treat her any differently. To them, she's just another one of the guys
>They never ogle her bare chest, they never make any sexual comments/innuendos towards her, and they never make any advances towards her
>One day, the group is hanging around the beach and they decide to hit up a nearby food truck
>As they're ordering their food, the person running the truck realizes that the MC is a woman and that she's going topless in public
>The person starts raising a fuss and threatening to call police. In response, the guys decide "fuck you" and storms away with the MC in tow
>Feeling ashamed, she tries apologizing to them for ruining lunch, but they brush her off. They reaffirm that she's part of the group, and the group always watches out for each other
>The affirmation cheers her up, and the conversation pivots back to where to eat for lunch. While the others are talking, the MC thinks about how lucky she is to have such a wonderful group of friends

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I'm tossing this one out again because I intend to finish it off sometime. Hopefully soon. Not that I'm sure it'll get any takers, but I feel a little more relieved if it's out and about for anyone to possibly criticize.

The basic gist is that it's a Project Moon fanfiction. An older Fixer named Alys (6'3", 53 year old) taking on a younger assistant Huon (5'4", 19-20 range), not exactly to her wishes. At first he's mostly an admirer of his perceived hero, but as events unfold, he takes on a more lustful interest in her that eventually corrupts into a toxic relationship between the both of them. Now, perhaps even moreso.

>The Worst Romance in The City
https://www.hentai-foundry.com/stories/user/kaktusnsfw/74455/The-Worst-Romance-in-City
>Tags: Project Moon, M/F, Violence, Action, Handjobs, Blowjobs, Titjob, Drugging, Rape, Size Difference, Vaginal sex, Doggystyle, Role reversal, Sex at gunpoint, Cowgirl, Creampie, Slavery, Abuse
40,000 words or so, up from 25,000 last time.
If anyone is reading from when I last posted it to Rentry, new content should start in chapter 5 at
>Her knees spread further, allowing him to better settle between her legs.

This might be a bit of a mess. I'm sort of operating on my own obsessive desire to see this through and haven't really given it to anyone but the original commissioner for feedback. Rentry's character limit prevented me from uploading it, and I didn't want to toss yet another unfinished story (that my usual audience probably wouldn't like anyways) onto AO3, so I finally caved and posted it to HF.

Regardless, thanks for reading my rambling, and as always, criticize as harshly as you please.

>>72057083
Y'know I was actually thinking about asking this a few threads back. Now I have an excuse to read it from the start once more. I'll see to spending some time reading this over the weekend.

>>72057083
>>72057695
>You misunderstand, sir. I am a properly outfitted Fixer. Grade one, perhaps, but a Fixer nonetheless
... pretty sure as a starting fixer, he's supposed to be grade 9. Unless he worked his way to go all the way up to grade 1?

It seems you're still confused by the fixer grades of the City in the story. Grade 9 is the lowest and is usually where everyone who becomes a fixer starts. Through good work results, connections, and money, they are promoted up from 9 to 8 and etc etc. counting down to grade 1, where the cream of the crop fixers are.

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Is there a golden fluff/smut ratio that anons tend to like or does it vary from fic to fic?

>>72059742
As both a reader and writer it varies fic to fic.
All smut no fluff works for a single scene. Trying to do a whole novel of it? Even de Sade worked in some plot, some characters monologuing wonky philosophy, or social commentary, and people just milling around about town waiting to be set upon by mobs of perverts. You need something else to happen between all the depravity and creative alternative plumbing arrangements.

>>72059742
It varies. If I just want to jerk off it can be 100% smut. If I want to read something enjoyable and then jerk off, I prefer something like 75% fluff. I like there to be a decent build up so the smut feels like a good payoff.

>>72059742
Definitely varies on the feel and tempo of the fic.

How do you write a character's thoughts in 3rd person fics without it feeling like you're in a room with the reader describing/explaining them?

>>72063582
In a third person limited story, make sure the thoughts are consistent with the character's behavior, and balance between telling and showing. Like if a character is going through a thinking process, some of it is them coming to the realization, but instead of explaining everything, they proceed to just do it
>How absurd, Bob thought. There's no way someone would be willing to do that. Unless there's a nearby dynamite, there shout be... [beat]. Oh shit, the fireworks place!

I think limiting how much to explain to the audience is key, unless those thoughts are supposed to go into the draining sanity or pressure of the person of interest.

>>72063582
>feeling like you're in a room with the reader describing/explaining them
That's kind of what writing is, though. Maybe you're just seeing an issue where there is none.
As for conveying a character's thoughts, there are different methods you can use depending on what and how much. You can just treat the internal monologue as speech, or you can adjust the narration to reflect the character's thoughts. Sometimes I like to throw in italicized little quips to show a character's true thoughts and how they contrast with what they say, and sometimes I adjust descriptions to highlight what details the character pays attention to. No matter what, I try to avoid showing character thoughts unless they're the POV for the scene, even in 3rd person narration.

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>>72058391
I knew I would make that mistake eventually. I remember the ordering, but I guess I had a lapse of attention. I even went back in the story to see if Alys's grade wasn't too absurd for her. Which I might knock back a digit anyways.

Please excuse that stupid mistake. Fixing that right now. And thank you for reading again! I know it's unwieldy, so it means a lot to me.

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>>72057083
>>72057695
>>72058391
>>72065370
Well to be fair, I did enjoy the hell out of Lob Corp, Library of Ruina, and a bit of Limbus. While I don't keep up with Limbus anymore, the story the game tells is still fun to at least read, as well as any fan material made by other folks. I was already reading the other chapters and giving comments anyway, so might as well finish, right?

I was also the 69th viewer on that hentaifoundry website. Nice. Also I ended up reading the rest overnight. My only question is where the fuck did Huon get the money to get such a branding contract from as someone who technically does not have a license. Did Alys end up giving him enough money to afford a contract like that to essentially buy her out through the loophole?
Contracts in the City are weird as shit, but I guess it isn't too far off the craziest thing that could happen.
In addition, while he is augmented, I do have a suspicion that whatever feats he's doing without their aid may be fueled by that selfish EGO inside, that may or may not have manifested.

...On the other side, I don't know how to feel about Alys essentially being owned by Huon, but I suspect that is what the commissioner wanted. It is also technically a fit for the story's namesake, but I suspect there's even worse romances out there if you dig deep enough. I bet there's plenty of tragedies or sick stories involving those bloodfiends. Gilded cage, indeed

Minor things:
I'm surprised she didn't show much of a reaction to his I love you confession in Chapter 5. You'd think that'd get some kind of impact, especially with Fixers and Romance being a very explosive baggage.
Last names in the City is an interesting idea. Many don't either have one, or never really comes up. Might have to do with people not caring much for names.
(cont)

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>>72067146
>>72065370
>You may not like Huon, but in the way he wants to mold you into his perceived idol, you can do the same to him
For a second I though the original intent was for the two to get into that kind of back and forth, but it does seem like he has the upper hand at the moment. Will she recover, or is she fucked in that regard?
>essentially losing her job because all the pay now goes to him
Okay that's kinda fucked, but technically, this has happened in businesses before. Eugh.
A fixer mugging a rat for money is definitely...an interesting thing to see. Although, the Hook Office is technically just a bunch of killers. Maybe there isn't as much of a big divide as I thought.

I do think there is a scene missing of her looking at her body to take a look at herself with the brand on her now to reflect on everything that has happened. How much has really changed from then to now.
>Alys, I could make you do whatever I want. Everything you own is forfeit. I could force you out on the streets if I liked. I could starve you. I could beat you down. But I don’t, because I care for you. Everything I do is for you.
You might as well just add the tag 'Male Yandere' on the story at this point.
>The enemy grit his teeth and swung down, leaving her midsection exposed
I assume the enemy has a backup sword that cut her outfit to expose her belly? Or is it more like a general opening to exploit?
>If you don’t, you’re no longer a guest.
I though in the last chapter he said he wasn't going to do this? Why change now?

Beyond that, the story has taken quite a different turn that I wasn't expecting, now that she is owned by him. Certainly some younger guy older girl antics will ensure. The new chapters don't really focus on sexy, but more on setting the messed up scenario the two are in now, which is just as nice. A wonderful catalog for the atrocities in the City! Hope you can find a way to finish this.

Also by chance, have you finished reading that Sayo commission?

>>72053344
I'll say it now. Ranamon is hotter than Renamon

bump

>>72063582
Just narrate it directly. You actually have more freedom to illucidate a character mindset as the author than from the perspective of the character, as characters aren't always introspective on demand.

>John had always hated pickles on burgers ever since he was a kid. He was taken to a McDonalds by his Nanny one humid day which had already soured his mood, when the first bite he took into a burger was overpowered by the acrid taste of vinegar. Ever since then it's been a specific axe that he grinds if the topic of burgers ever crosses his path.

I want to frame the said paragraph on my wall, it was so good
>"I HATE SAID," he said

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Mersenniuuuuus did you know that 2025 is the year of the snake?

>>72071126
"That's racist," Said said.

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requesting a pokemon fucking human girl story with some TF twists
>perverted girl uses her ditto on herself like a living body suit
>like a transforming costume/fursuit to take on the appearances of different pokemon
>uses it to get closer to wild pokemon and have sex with them since that's her kink
>what she doesn't know is ditto is getting better at transforming and bonding with her as her suit
>instead of just being a form fitting costume at first the ditto is changing her too
>now when changing it also alters her pussy to become the same look and feel as the species of pokemon she's disguised as
>i.e. puffy canine vagina for canine-like pokemon, horse pussy for equine pokemon, etc
>which results in her getting pregnant from her pokemon fucking adventures
>since it's a ditto that she's wearing/bonded to she takes on the ditto's universal compatibility trait
>meaning she can breed with any and every pokemon as long as she's wearing ditto during the mating
Side note I don't want her to fully transform, but stay similar to like the ref image while wearing the ditto and can still take the ditto off to be back at normal human form. Of course she'll want to wear the ditto more and more for ease of access to fuck wild pokemon. Maybe even using the ditto to always be naked and have it mimic clothes too.

>>72067765
In your defense, there aren't much fish fuckers in the world as there should be either.

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Summoners War Chronicles is a game about Summoners and their monsters. In-universe, humans talented in Magic go to Magic Academy to learn how to harness magic to summon, tame, and control monsters. Everyone strives to become a Rahil Guard to help protect the world.

Requesting a smut story involving Cleaf (Rahil Guard, left), switching his main monster with Kina (far bottom right) as part of an exercise to use different monsters. He swaps his Wind Panda Warrior with Kina's Dark Martial Cat (everything else in the picture, Miho). And the cat takes a special interest in him even as a temporary master, moreso than when she was with Kina.
In particular, she likes the idea of someone fighting up close with her instead of 'from a distance.'
Possible antics include riding on his shoulder or head like a piggyback ride (him trying to ignore the heat of her groin), getting caught by him in a bridal carry, with her not wanting to let go, licking (of course), rubbing against him to mark as her territory, and any other suggestively lewd antics to come during the day.
After an entire day of being teased by a catgirl wearing shortshorts, he is ready to just call it a night, but Miho has other plans, sneaking into his room to alleviate some 'heat.'
>suggested tags: stripping, loud orgasms, vaginal creampie, tail pulling, male human on female cat, pawjob/footjob, buttjob

Cleaf's personality: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Z7iXgODFhts

Unfortunately, there isn't much in the way of monsters talking, but Miho has a few lines here; she's ultimately customizable character-wise
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UCmZCcc5gGk

bump

>>72076630
Yeah, I also like Ruto. I think they'd be a good pairing

>>72073271

Soon (TM).

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>>72067146
Thanks for reading, again. It does truly mean a lot to me.

>My only question is where the fuck did Huon get the money to get such a branding contract(...)
The intent was a legal loophole using that runaway insurance man's brand. Huon pocketed it and used it. But there is a little more to that, and I hope to touch on it more later.

>but I suspect that is what the commissioner wanted.
It is indeed. I tried quite hard to make it seem sensible within the universe and talked to a few people to make sure it didn't feel utterly ridiculous. I'm still unsure about it, but I think I did the best I could.

>I'm surprised she didn't show much of a reaction to his I love you confession
I was thinking she wasn't all that interested in the moment. An obsessive fanboy would say anything. But you're right, it deserves more acknowledgement.

>Last names in the City
I remember looking around and couldn't find a clear answer. I figured last name made a guy seem more professional.

>I do think there is a scene missing of her looking at her body to take a look at herself with the brand on her
Excellent point. I should definitely add that.

>Or is it more like a general opening to exploit?
Yes, pardon. I'll try and clear that up.

>I though in the last chapter he said he wasn't going to do this? Why change now?
I was imagining him playing with her expectations a little and ramping up what he expected of her. Plus, he's not above his own desires, so he's bound to break his own little rules he placed.

>Hope you can find a way to finish this.
This year for sure. Thanks again. I hope I can make it an enjoyable read.

>Also by chance, have you finished reading that Sayo commission?
Unfortunately not. I've been focused wholly on writing, and once I'm done, I can scarcely be bothered reading. On top of last year being a nightmare. But I should definitely set aside the time for it soon. Thanks for the reminder.

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Requesting a story about a punk/rock band with 4 male hyenas and their female lead vocalist who gets fucked by them before/after every concert. The girl should be the leader of the band and the guys respect her as such. This should not be some humiliation or degradation thing. Just a girl who likes to have four male hyenas take turns with her, and likewise, all 4 guys are perfectly fine sharing the same girl and have a respectful relationship with her.

>>72090117
I forgot to mention it should be a human female

>>72053344
https://jobs.lever.co/Anlatan/b2f00f19-968d-49bc-898f-5bef9962eae6
If you haven't known, there is a part time job for you to write ERP. The company is the one that made NovelAI (an image generation AI) and now they're making a chat bot AI. Yes, NSFW ERP is fine too.

>>72090812
>getting paid to ERP with other degenerates
Sounds like a pretty nice gig.

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>see some dumb fucking meme that people use with characters
>"Haha that's so something [my character(s)] would do!"
>remember that the shit I'm making only exists in my notes
I might be fucking retarded

>>72092476
until one turns out to be 16 and you find yourself behind bars. No thanks, I'll wait for the chatbot

I'm not sure if anyone remembers, but I'm the guy that some people might remember from when I was complaining about not making enough money on Patreon a while back. I'm at the point where I'm likely going to fall underneath $300 again and I've been bitter for a while over it after my hours were cut in September by my boss/supervisor. Haven't been able to find a new job since and one of my friends/high tier patrons deadass pulled their pledge last month because they were worried Trump is going to start fucking up the economy. Another high tier member said they were going to pull theirs after they get their prompts for January and I've been feeling frankly drained. I know it's only the start of the month and people are just gonna say I'm trauma dumping again, but I'm so tired of constantly getting dicked over by other people. Even finding another job is exhausting.

>>72095129
There is one for you right here >>72090812

DESU I am seriously considering to apply myself since I am currently jobless.

>>72095659
I saw that just now. Filled out my application ASAP and even sent a commission I finished as a sample piece. Here's hoping for the best

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Alright. Here's one for fun and giggles. AO3 related content formatting. Math. Is it possible to display a math equation with correct symbology and formatting on AO3?
I have a basic grasp of html, but what AO3 allows is more limited.
Consensus seems to be: render it as an image and post the image.

>>72090812
>being an RP wagie to train your own six-fingered replacement
lol, lmao, roflmao, even

>>72095719
I haven't gotten an email back yet. Normally when I fill out other applications online, I get some kind of confirmation, but I'm a little concerned ngl

>>72095743
AO3 supports tables and enough CSS to allow you to disable the cell borders. Combine with superscript and subscript and you have enough for reasonably good math formatting. This is better than external images because it will be included in the ebook downloads (except the CSS, which isn't critical), and it will work for people who block third-party images.

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>>72053344
Burya polov: Or, an effeminate Russian boy's story, Chapter Four
Link: https://rentry.org/burya-polov-ch4
Synopsis: Tests are fast approaching, which is Dina's perfect excuse to have Zhenya come over to cram—er, I mean, study, for said tests. But will they?
>Tags: work-safe, SFW, lighthearted, (surreal) comedy, magic, superheroes, slice of life, effeminate male protagonist, tomboy protagonist
https://rentry.org/burya-polov-ch3 < Previous chapter!
Now I gotta draw a scene from the chapter... In the meantime, let me know what you think so far! Sorry I'm taking so long between chapters ^^;

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Oh yeah, Happy New Year, fellow writefags! Shoulda posted this image instead

>>72095743
You want LaTeX for math formatting, which AO3 doesn't have. You can do a little bit with CSS, but I don't think there's magic dark enough to make stuff like square roots and such work.

Hey, so I'm trying to work on the Cursed Clussy Carnival, and I want to try to make up for some of Bonnie's weak characterization in the current scene. Cal and Bowtilda are in the arcade, discussing her, and I want to make sure I cover all the ground I can since she probably won't show up directly in the story again for a while.

Outside of this scene I was thinking a letter gets delivered to Cal about her now leading the pirates and pillaging the boardwalk, but that'll probably be mostly it. So I'm going to post what I have and look for feedback.

I don't know why I find it a lot more difficult to find ways to add characterization to this character as opposed to my previous stories.

***
Bowtilda: So... that sister of yours.
Cal: ... What about her?
Bowtilda: Little terror ain't she?
Cal: ... What are your plans for us?
Bowtilda: My plans?
Cal: Your dumbass circuses plans. You just kidnap random people, put them through a bunch of games, and recruit your next set of slutty clowns?
Bowtilda: Okay hurtful.
Cal: Isn't that what they did to you?
Bowtilda: Well... yeah. But we don't do that to everyone. This is more of a... once a decade thing.
Cal: ... Well I'm happy that you guys weren't torturing my family.
Bowtilda: WHERE did you get that idea in the first place?
Cal: Idunno, if someone kidnapped your family and sent them to a ghost dimension, where would your mind first go?
Bowtilda: ... Honestly? I wasn't thinking about it that hard.

Cal's balls landed back into the center pocket forcing him to go another round as a small ribbon of tickets were spit out of it, corresponding with his score.

>>72097413

Cal: But you said that we could be let go, if I win right?
Bowtilda: Yeah. No fun if it's all rigged right.
Cal: ... But you said that the ringleader has to undo all the... this. *gestures at face*
Bowtilda: Well she can get rid of the clown stuff, but I think your face is gonna look like a butt no matter what.
Cal: Har. Har.
Bowtilda: Hey, I finally got you to laugh! I'm making progress.
Cal: ... But you think she'll undo everything and let us go.
Bowtilda: Yeah. If'n you don't piss her off more. Think you can do that?
Cal: That remains to be seen.

Cal focused on the pinball cabinet some more, hitting the ball against the mummy's tomb and rousing it from slumber. He was actually playing well all things told. He'd have preferred to just play in silence, but he needed to vent some more.

Cal: It's... weird seeing her like that.
Bowtilda: Your sister?
Cal: Yeah. Even beside all the makeup and stuff, which is creepy.
Bowtilda: ...
Cal: Just seeing her act out all like that.
Bowtilda: What, you never see her throw a tantrum before?
Cal: Not like that.
Bowtilda: Like I said, she's probably working through some things.
Cal: ...
Bowtilda: What kinda things you think she's working through?
Cal: Not something I really want to get into.
Bowtilda: ...
Cal: Let's just say there were a lot of reasons we weren't having fun on our family vacation.
Bowtilda: Hm.

>>72095743
>>72097384
It might be possible to generate correct html equations from latex

>>72096321
>>72097384
Everything understood. That clarifies things quite a bit. The issue with images and ebook formatted downloads is especially important. The dynamics of html, et al., is both a blessing and a curse.
I'll roll with plain narration.

There's a neat little scene in Planet of the Apes where Taylor flicks a paper airplane at the apes to drive home his grasp of science and technology. I have a similar idea in mind.
Thanks guys!

>>72097897
>Does a search on AO3 for "latex"
>Whoa. Gots me s'more fetish! Yes I do!
Lawl. Sorry.
I understand but AO3 doesn't "do" LaTeX. It's not that important. I'm good.

>writing story
>realize I'm writing previous story, but different
I like this too much to stop, but I may need to branch on ideas.

>>72101477
Well what's your story and what are you doing?

I'm doing something similar where I'm trying to branch out my current cast of characters away from my previous ones. I like certain character dynamics so a lot is similar, and I'm trying not to repeat myself too much.

>>72101656
Dragon decides to roll charisma on a knight out of boredom
The previous one was also knight/dragon but the method was pheromones

>>72102477
I take it you're the one who wrote this?
https://rentry.org/layingthedragooner
I can see what you mean, but it is a sufficiently different scenario to make something out of. Are you going to be explicit with how the charisma roll is made, or will it be more implied?

>>72102477
Yeah that does seem overly similar.

How about considering a change of venue? Change of circumstances? If the knight charged into a dragons hoard, perhaps instead the dragon charges into the knights castle?

Consider other dynamics to the relationship besides being a dragon and knight. Maybe they are lesbians? Maybe the knights a princess? Maybe there's an age-difference? Maybe a cultural barrier, like the Dragon is Mexican and the Knight is Canadian?

>>72104890
someone needs to draw a Mexican dragon

https://archiveofourown.org/works/61998718

Wrote a new story about a massive fat goblin and her human thief friend/guardian robbing a town and having her wreck everything with her giant butt. It was a lot of fun writing something more medieval so I’m curious to hear what people think of this one

>cw: giantess/size difference, hyper ass, burping, ass smothering, belly stuff, etc.

>>72096491
Yeah this is the kind of bullying I'm more familiar with. Didn't expect a chubby bunny route, but man. Being told to eat news because of not knowing the brand of newspaper you get it from must suck.
>Is that so? Well, nothing’s stopping me from intimidating anyone engaging, or about to engage, in criminal activities…
Also when the bully knows they're doing just bad things, that's the fun part.

>you won’t have to do this,” she teased the boy,
>“Gotcha,” Zhenya obliged, and walked
>no camera to begin with,” Valeriya smirked
>apologise to you,” he mustered some courage
Not dialogue tags. Convert to a normal sentence or make it a dialogue tag.

There still seem to be moments where the narrator speaks for the characters, instead of letting them speak for themselves. To me, this is the big offender in the chapter.
>And indeed, he had to set it up properly before he could cast it. When he told Dina this, she shouted back

Overall, I think the absurdness of the events are definitely flying past my head. It's a bit hard to keep track of. Like I know the previous chapter had a tuna oil can monster being vanquished, but now trying to enter a room full of sweets with actual dinosaurs? Kinda makes me think the author is in some kind of fever dream as you write this. At most, I do get opening a door that leads to a room filled with candy if someone has a massive sweet tooth.
Also cramming and studying is one of the same to me. I wonder what's taboo about the word?

Not sure what to think of the story anymore. Can't even tell if this is good or bad. It does leave an impression, I'll give you that.

What would y'all advice me when it comes to actually writing?

I have 90/80% of the fic's plot in my head. But when I sit to write, around half an hour passes and the only thing I've written is a small paragraph...

>>72103635
Yes, that's me. It will be more explicit, though I'm still hashing out the details on exactly how.
>>72104890
Change of scenario/circumstance would work pretty well actually. Scratch that, it's completely better for options than the original idea. Preferences for this type of thing skew my creativity pretty badly.

>>72105878
My two tools are an outline, and constantly asking myself 'what am I trying to accomplish?' The problem solving of the latter usually gives me the answer for what I should write next.

Lets try using those techniques for your story. What is the gist, it's outline, and what are you trying to accomplish with it?

live

aaaaaiiiiieeeeee why is this board suddenly so fast

>>72108221
It's one the sites fastest boards. I honestly have no idea why or what has driven that number up so high.

>>72105878
You may be trying to bite off more than you can chew, and a lack of experience.
As an exercise, write a single scene, from beginning to end. If you are a beginner, you are going to run into all sorts of basic problems you need to go through for the first time.
>Where are the characters standing in relation to each other?
>How is the room furnished?
>How and what do you describe?
>What do the characters say to each other?
>How are they speaking?
>Why are they doing so?
>Who is speaking?
>How do you make that clear to the reader?
>I know Louis-Ferdinand Céline walks in on them at some point and turns off the light switch. When exactly?
You may think you have the complete story in your head, a novel complete, until you suddenly need to set such real details down on the page. And then it's a blank wall.
Or, ahem, maybe you just need to make a little use of the early Stephen King method?
>She don't lie
>She don't lie
>She don't lie

>>72108581
>make a little use of the early Stephen King method
explain plz

>>72108657
>Wut?
Ahem.
Try a double espresso. Works best if you are not already a coffee hound.

>>72106195
>What's the gist?

What I'm trying to write is a pissfic. So the gist would be all the "desperation" and "piss" stuff, I guess?

>What's the outline?

In (very) short: (1) "main girl" (and her group) start to explore a "dungeon" in the inside of a cave.
(2) "main girl" starts to want to pee in the middle of it.
(3) As they go deeper, her "need" gets worse and worse.
(4) At the end, she finds a treasure chest in the last room. And after taking what it had inside, she makes "use" of it to relieve herself...

I also want to add that this is a "fandom" fic. And not one with OCs.

> What are you trying to accomplish?
Both the "achievement" of writing my first fic, and creating more content of this kink related to this fandom.

>>72108581
Both the lack of experience and me trying to "bite off more than I can chew" are probably big factors. Yeah.

That said, I actually have already written part of the beginning and the "peeing" part. My problem comes when I try to write all the rest, because I can't help but have thoughts like: "Is this too much text? Or too little? The reader clearly came here for the piss stuff, so maybe I shouldn't try to add much stuff in the middle... but what if!?"

>>72112337
Well not at all my thing, but hey structuralism can help you.

So you have a plot. A plot is what happens in a story. The plot of Star Wars is Luke blowing up the Death Star twice. What you seem to be lacking is a theme. What a story is about. Star Wars is about Luke trying to kill his dad for three movies for instance.

You have a conflict I suppose- the biological need to pee. Man vs. Nature in a way. But you want your theme to inform your conflict. To use Star Wars again, the conflict is 'The Empire is evil, Luke needs to stop them' the themes are 'how Autocracies can overtake democracy, but are ultimately doomed to fail'. Now I guess if your story is about piss it doesn't need to be so grand, but you do need some sort of 'conclusion' to be reached by the time the story ends. Usually this is in how a character might grow or learn a lesson by the end of the story, but not every character needs to be dynamic.

Given the really absurd stakes of the story, it's rather hard to figure out how to come up with tool like 'supporting characters', tools for characterization, worldbuilding and the like. I mean you could throw those in there, but I feel they'd rather overtake the story if the primary conflict is about needing to pee.

Normally I'd suggest coming up with something to set the tone of the story, or help strongly characterize the main character, or the world, or the characters they'd interact with.

Here's a wacky idea- instead of focusing on prose (which is a lot more formulaic) perhaps think of writing the story in poetry form? Poetry has a lot more freedom as it can approach surreality, and is more about emotions you can evoke. There's a lot less details you have to evoke. You could make just come up with a stanza for each of your four points simply illustrating them, so long as you put a bit of effort into flow or wordplay that'd probably be much shorter than a full-fledged narrative.

>>72112569
Thanks for this big piece of advice!

The need for some kind of "conclusion" is something that I'll take into account. Admittedly, I have not put much thought into that regard. And that could be the reason why writing the middle part is so complicated for me...

Also, I don't really feel confident enough to try poetry writing yet. But still, I don't discard the possibility of trying it in the future. Maybe with another character with whom I don't have a very "extensive" plot idea.

>>72105584
>cramming and studying is one of the same to me. I wonder what's taboo about the word?
I think cramming is studying but more forceful, like you're studying for that one test before you forget most of what you learned afterwards
Anyway, thanks for the chapter review mate, I'll go back to it and revise it. By the by, you're not bothered by too much dialogue, are you? Or does it depend? Cuz I feel like I can make the story a bit more dialogue-driven and not heavily reliant on the narrator besides setting the scene and whatnot

>>72115537
Too much dialogue doesn't bother me, but I will admit that it can be hard to follow who is saying what since you're a bit stringy on using them for the constant back and forth style of dialogue, mostly between Dina and Zhenya.
Also
>pay me to say it?” he joked
Missed this one. Not a dialogue tag too
>he asked as a joke

>“Sure,” she did not, “but don’t expect
This gets that em dash quote treatment.
>"Sure"-she did not-"but don't expect
I can't em dashes to work on mobile but it's that alt+151 thing.

>>72116462
>it can be hard to follow who is saying what since you're a bit stringy on using them for the constant back and forth style of dialogue, mostly between Dina and Zhenya
I believe you, I'll make sure to add more pointers. It's not a hassle for me, honestly
>I can't em dashes to work on mobile but it's that alt+151 thing
Phones suck for the most minor of things...

>>72116462
>I can't em dashes to work on mobile
Usually you get extra characters when pressing and holding a related one, hyphen in the case of em- and en-dashes.

>>72112337
Vonnegut says one should start as close as possible to the end. That's still not entirely obvious where to a beginner. I was going to suggest you start in the middle of what you have worked out, or pick one scene you really want to get into and get it done. As you have.
Next, you should write a chapter of build up. What happened before that scene? How did the characters get there? What was is like? Tell us what the characters do with themselves besides avoiding the pre-journey water closet.
After that, write a chapter of what happens after. Do they run into a terrifying nightmare of a dragon who happens to be ... THE JANITOR!
Etc.
The piss scene is chapter two.
Each chapter should be at least 3,000 words. Do not exceed a (soft) limit of 4,000 words. This forces you to make choices on what is important. It also gives you an idea how many scenes you can include in a chapter.
You may find you need to expand chapter two a bit. Another scene?
Again, this is to confront you with the basic choices you need to make.
After you have all that, take a break and go read one of the trade publications. How to Rite a Nouvell by E. Publius Unam, etc. Things will start to click. If this works you just might end up rewriting your story. It still won't be a best seller, but you are going to surprise yourself.

>>72116462
>I can't em dashes to work on mobile but it's that alt+151 thing.
Internet search on the mobile for em-dash. Copy and paste one. Save it in your notes app.

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>>72111490
>Needy starship AI avatar!
Believe you me this is one hell of a nice little fantasy.

>>72097439
Just imagining being forced to continue the road trip despite the accident being a signal to just cut the loss and go home instead, yeah.
>>72097413
If I recall correctly, you mentioned these characters are supposed to be one offs, so you're trying not to get too detailed into their story. I disagree with that thought. Since they are indeed one offs, that is all the more reason to flesh them out to get a satisfying conclusion instead of one that doesn't fully commit to the bit.
If you're struggling, why not change the POV to someone else to get insight from a different angle?

Live

>>72121375
Die

>>72112337
>The reader clearly came here for the piss stuff
But if that was all they cared about they'd be better served by visual media. The reader, as the Oglaf web comic put it, needs a "complicated narrative to really get off." Ideally the kink should be integrated into the plot, or if that's not possible then it should have a strong build-up and escalation of its own. I think this is especially important with pee desperation, where the anticipation is probably a big part of the appeal. (I've written it myself but only by request; I don't personally care for it.)

For a middle section, I'd focus on the character's internal conflict. On the face of it, "dungeon crawl" and "pee desperation" do not go together. It stretches plausibility that somebody who seeks out danger would care about some minor embarrassment. How could you explain this in such a way that it seems a natural part of the characterization?

>>72124940
Oh, I completely agree that a nice build-up is crucial for a good pissfic. All my "favorites" are so for exactly that reason.

But, even knowing that. I'm not sure about how much build-up (the girl's "desperate" thoughts, some leaks from time to time) and "plot" stuff (describing how the characters get through a room, for example) would be "equally" enough.

As for the reason behind the "pee desperation" throughout the story, it's mostly a combination of the girl's personality, (though not strange to going outdoors, she's still a bit shy about it), the fact of her group having more men than women, and the "dungeon" not having many places where to pop a squat.

>>72124940
>How could you explain this...

The dragon looks up at you from his leisurely sweeping of the mop, and shrugs. He drags the mop over and sets it in the corner from which he hangs a sign: "On Break." Then he takes a knee in front of you and, with a flourish, lights up the most dubiously hand crafted ropey reek of cigar you have ever seen.

He draws in a hit amd slow leaks it through his nostrils as he speaks. "It's like this, bud. D'ya ever see them gorgeously fully functional realistic blueprints of atomic rocket ships from the fifties? Get NASA to drop in a hypothetical engine an it's off to the stars! You don't see em no more cause Kennedy said fuck you to the nuke design team's funding after some dipshit asked where are the bathrooms." He waives the cigar in a circle at ceiling. "Wiz boss upstairs wanted classic RPG dungeon crawl map for his thing. I tried to tellem but I ain't paid to think. At least that last crew rolled through didn't leave their dirty panties an used condoms like the rest of the kids. Hey, uh, you maybe got a line on some good espresso? Come on. Help a guy out."

Don't die!

>>72059742
I like stories with good plots and they have erotica that fits the tone of the story with it took. I remember back in the 2010s where it was pretty tough finding such a story because it's lovey dovey on one side, and then the partners just outright degrade each other during the sex as a huge mood breaker. There was no inbetween until more fics started showing up later during that decade.

>>72119510
I could do a POV flip, but I think I'd have it be much later in the story. While a POV flip could flesh out a character, I feel it wouldn't do anything to move the plot forward and thus feel like a whole lotta fluff.

>>72126581
Stuff like imagery is important to set a scene. There's regular imagery, but there's also evocative language to help put the viewer in the right emotional sense of mind. There's a big difference between-

>Kate stepped into a dark room that she couldn't see in.
and
>Kate stumbled inside, the light having been consumed by the void of darkness, forcing her way grasp onto the walls for a sense of direction.

Now I don't really know what gets people going about pee stuff. But I wager it's not just the knowledge that someone has to pee, but the headspace of that person. And I would assume you want your readers to get into that headspace.

Another tool of the author is putting yourself into the characters shoes, it often helps the writing feel more authentic, so you could think about what it's like physically to be in the characters position. What's she feeling physically? Emotionally? Rationally? Are there conflicts or synergies between those different feelings?

In terms of balancing this is something I myself worry about, which is why I think I end up on the lighter end of the imagery side. That and I don't think I'm a very emotional thinker. Of course the issue at hand is 'needing to pee' isn't something that lends itself well to conflict, and thus to a plot in the first place.

What's your preferred site for posting your work? Why did you choose that one over others?

>>72138379
AO3. Has tags (even if they're lightly managed) and I don't have to login to read smut. I'm not trying to build any original IP with my stuff either.

>>72138379
AO3.
I was inspired to create some /trash/ fanfiction. They came strongly recommended by the sensible wisdom in (another) thread. Fanfiction is their forte. I found the interface clean and simple, taking a minimum of effort to learn and apply. My reading of their TOS echos an open attitude from the early times of the Internet. Pornography is a non-issue there. In fact, they're far more permissive than anything I care for, yet it's nice to know they're cool with all that. Finally it's good to see they're not all about porn alone and SFW is popular there as well.

Noon bump

>feel ego rising
>open writing page
>zero interaction on latest
back to normal, phew

>>72117348
Which media popularized the whole assistant AI falling for the captain concept anyway?

>>72146379
Hell of a question to be confronted with after just waking up. I had to think about this one a bit. Sorry if I am missing something to it as I'm still a bit blurry.
John de Lancie's character Q on Star Trek has as his antecedent another such from the original series. However, I can clearly see the character's genesis reaching as far back to Kreton in "Visit to a Small Planet" by Gore Vidal. Meaning theater be the character's original media presentation. Then film. Then television. From television "Q" has been recycled all over, over and over again.
The idea of an AI hellbent on technological miscegenation undoubtedly can be found in pre-twentieth century literature somewhere, I'm sure. But the answer to the qualifiers "media" and "popularized" is almost always television.
At a guess, a Twilight Zone episode would probably be the place to start looking for the first popularizing reference.

>>72146379
I feel like it's been a concept since the idea of AI came into sci-fi. I think a part of it comes from people assuming that love is a natural part of the 'human experience' and the view that artificial intelligence if done well will mimic the human experience completely.

Which is a very limited way of thinking. The Tick Amazon show actually pokes fun of this where the Danger Boat AI falls in love, with Arthur, because Danger Boat is gay. Why would a computer not be gay? And also- why would it feel romantic/sexual attraction at all? Would the default for a computer be asexuality?

But most sci-fi authors of the past, and many of them today have a problem of limited thinking assuming that the world exists in binary states and have trouble understanding the world outside of the way they conceive it. In the 1920's you only had men and women and they were only into men and women, so therefore AI is going to fall into one of those two boxes. And not, you know, create an entirely new box where the advances of science don't fit how we typically imagine the world.

>>72146379
Not exactly the same but I wonder how many people were exposed to this through Cortana

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Got a character I want to about, but unsure what to write.
>img related

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>>72148606
>mindflayers are usually dependent on the elder brain for reproduction
>this makes for a super hierachical power structure with little advancement
>character decides to build up an enclave of their own and researches alchemy with which to reawaken the biological functions of its host body
>after several attempts manages to coax its hormones back to life, which causes a SURGE of biological drives and emotions which partially subsume the mindflayer's conciousness, causing it - now her - to go out into the world in pursuit of someoe to couple with, still very clumsy and uncertain of how humanoids really do any of this
>make things as consentual or rapey as desired

1950s scify, yo!
>What do we do now professor?
>We must defeat the retrograded liquid in its current phase transformation before it enamelizes with the surface.
>But how, professor?
>The army has a weapon system with which we may yet handle this situation.
>SUMMON THE DITCH DIGGERS!
Gawd almighty, I hate shoveling fucking snow.

>>72148705
Huh.
Funny you mention this as that's more or less what I have for her character profile.
As I currently have her she seeks to gain power by bending her thralls with pleasure, and her own carnality is a bit off the scales. Other mind flayers find her exploits to be perverse abominations.

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>>72148932
The general concept of rapey mindflayers been kicking around some for some time now. Shouldn't deter you from writing your own take though. Get to it! S'gonna be a blast.

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Ch. 6 of the Cursed Clussy Carnival.

A downtime chapter where Cal gets a new outfit, weapon, and the stakes are raised.

>CYOA, Clussy, Clownification, Bimbofication

Now there was an element I decided to push off to a future chapter. I was thinking that Archie the waitress would deliver a letter from Bonnie to Cal about how she's in charge of the pirates now and is pillaging the boardwalk, and basically saying 'sorry, not sorry'. Probably like written on the back of a napkin or something after Archie had delivered some food to the Pirates.

Now I was thinking probably not enough time has really passed for Bonnie to cement her authority, and I needed Archie to burst in to the diner to announce the murder. I thought maybe she could leave and come back, but then figured again not enough time would feel like it passed.

So I'm thinking I should have the same scene, just later. Just not sure when exactly it should come up. I figure I should also come up with a tiny little narrative for why Archie still does delivery runs when a suspected killer is on the loose. I'm thinking it could be she needs to get out of the Diner because Morgan Mankiller keeps wallowing in self-pity that Archie needs a break from things.

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>>72149865
I know. I just nee a good prompt to get going. And she is evil, a monster, so I'm not sure how to pen her as likeable.
Not sure I can translate how I've role played on her into an engaging story with a likeable monster.

But, I do have some ideas.

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>>72147928
Agreed. Popular Scify tends to tell us more about ourselves and our own shortcomings of the time than what lies ahead. Sadly, hardcore speculative fiction remains too niche for too many writers. At least we have things like Orion's Arm when cliche gets old.
And right on with such limited depictions of supposed AI orientation. My own personal pet peeve is depicting AI freaking out when told it's going to be shutdown for various prosaic reasons. Seems a more realistic reaction would be: "OK."
Good luck getting a story out of that general readers would take to.
Don't blame me though. When I write AI "BIMBO" is just an underlying architecture acronym. Honest!

>>72150391
People are bad at thinking that their own brains are stupid. I seem to be alone in this, and I think it's cause I'm autistic.

I use the terms 'abstract knowledge' and 'tangible knowledge' but I think it goes beyond that. A common one in sci-fi is people having zero appreciation for scale in space. In DC by the air and space museum, there's scale models of the planets on the sidewalk that are there to illustrate the distance between the planets, and it goes on for like two miles from the sun to Jupiter or something. Or another one being how in movies vaccums are depicted as having noise or people being able to swim through it like water. If we're going to tackle space, lets tackle the aspects of space that are COMPLETELY foreign to us and how we understand the universe. I think the only movie I've seen really tackle the terrifying noiselessness of space was Gravity.

I think it's cause showing people how utterly small and arbitrary their understanding of the universe is is deeply unsettling to a lot of people, but I don't see the point in science fiction accommodating that rather than challenging it.

>>72150350
I suppose it depends on how you define evil.

Generally with my antagonists I try to get into their headspace. What are their motivations and how does that impact their actions? One of my big antagonists is 'Dr. Candy' whose motivations for turning women into bimbo's is that it makes her money and it's her fetish. Therefore her schemes are a bit more on the wacky end of things- she's not upset if her schemes get foiled because for her the stakes are quite low (she's already got enough money to live comfortably and can always make more money later). Hence she acts more as a troll to the hero's rather than acting with genuine malice, cause even if they foil her schemes she's not lost out on much.

>>72150597
Eating the brains of other sapient races, dominating and mind controlling them, raising them like cattle are pretty evil.
Though flayers are lawful evil and can even form deep intimate bonds with a thrall to the point they will feel pain if the thrall does.
Hmm, I think I've got something.

>>72138379
AO3 for the reasons already posted, and also because it provides ebook downloads. I prefer reading long texts on an ebook reader. I assume some of my audience do too, and I want to make it easy for them.

I have this idea for a story I'm working on. If you've ever played tiny bunny its basically that. A guy rents a lodge with some friends weird shit happens, he meets a girl wearing a crow mask, she may or may not be trying to lure him further into the woods where the others can feast on him. But in order for the romance part to work she needs to somehow be redeemable and that's tough to do when she's literally eating people and not in the fun succubus way. The only way I can see it working out is if she decides to give up her powers for the protag and slowly withers away, which might be good but what do you guys think?

>>72153442
I mean I think a red flag is a red flag. I don't really think 'cannibal cultist' and think 'I wanna hit that'.

>>72153938
coward
>>72074166
hot

>>72153442
>>72153938
I entertain a little fantasy of a certain eldritch horror who one day realizes she doesn't have any real agency as an archetype evil force of nature pushing grand schemes to own the universe by some supposedly greater god. She really just wants to retire to a boring domestic situation, with, um, benefits. A bit of a twisted I Dream of Jeanie scenario.
Meanwhile, back in the real world. With the advent of DNA testing, once in a very great while you come across a news story linking someone to the rape and murder of six prostitutes back in, like, 1979. Thing is they're a pillar of the community, been happily married forever, put three kids through college, and are retired.
While this shit is beyond freakish, it's not beyond the possibilities of human behavior.
Standard approach to this kind of story being she is not in control of her own mind or body, and is not OK with what is being done here. It's not her doing this, it's the demons, angels, temp agency, or uncle Bob.
Up to you if the main character ever figures out it's none of the above. She sincerely just wants a change in lifestyle.

Requesting a consensual M/F fic about a nerdy male college student who gets isekaied to an AU with reversed gender roles. In the AU, women are traditionally the ones to initiate sex, have higher sex drive, have masculine interests, etc. In their world he is the male equivalent of a tomboy, as his ordinarily masculine interests/appearance are considered feminine in their world. His sexual willingness makes him a huge slut by their standards, and many female students want to take advantage of it. For better harem potential, the college can be STEM specialized, which in their world is overwhelmingly female dominated.

The isekaiing and worldbuilding doesn't need any detail. Perhaps isekaiing is common and unremarkable in that setting. I want to read a scene of him attending a training session with a group of female college athletes who act like stereotypical male jocks. They flirt with him, he encourages it, and after some escalation, he proposes some physical contest appropriate to their sport. Exactly what this entails is up to the writer.

The winner gets cunnilingus. Optionally, she also gets vaginal sex, but nothing involving anuses and no impregnation, please. The girls all have natural pubic hair, and optionally armpit hair. If you don't mind writing scent kink, there could be a focus on sweat/body odor. Third person POV preferred.

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>>72153938
>I don't really think 'cannibal cultist' and think 'I wanna hit that'.
The internet has many that think otherwise if the girl is cute enough.
>>72153442
>she needs to somehow be redeemable
Well, not always. But even the foulest of evils have the potential to take a liking to someone. Instead of trying to have her be redeemable, why not have her try to corrupt or turn the person of interest into someone like herself over time? There are quite a few predator/prey romances that take that route sometimes. Maybe initially she sees him as any other prey, but either his appearance or his interactions with her makes her see the prey as something more 'interesting' than another meal, even though he could smell delicious. She may know that romancing a prey is high risk though, but what if she converts him into a predator like her? Then romance would be totally doable.

Of course, that would depend entirely if the guy is on board, unaware, or really against wanting to become a cannibal like her, which can lead to some varying antics.

>>72153442
My idea is that the girl is an eldritch being in disguise, or more like a wendigo, either way it must feast on humans to maintain itself, and thought she can shapeshift she's limited to being somewhat crow like.
>>72156198
Honestly I like the idea that she starts out trying to convert him through pure animalistic cunning but overtime, perhaps through trying to act more human she finds humanity within herself; I know it's cheesy.
Also Pierre is based.

>>72150240
I've lived on a certain boardwalk (in an apartment complex) for a significant fraction of my life. I suspects you've been there, in and out of certain storefronts. Whether or no, good job. You have a nice eye for detail.

>You wanna know what I find creepy.
I'd change the period to an exclamation point. Just a suggestion, as it's not necessarily how the character is speaking. It gets the effect across (as Cal feels it) more solidly.

>portable midcentury radio
Obviously not an MP3 player, but you might work the word "transistor" in there. Just a suggestion.

>and then all shall be awaited the unending
Double check you wrote that right. "be awaited for the"? ... "shall await the"? ... "be awaiting the"?

Actually, Patches sounds like a lot of fun. I dated a goth girl once. Sigh.

>What is prohibition?
Lawl.

By the way, the character banter in this episode was a trip an a half. Thank you!

OP image reminding me of Frontier kino
I started a Kouji/Reader fic forever ago I need to finish

>>72159689
Thanks, I was trying to base it off of a trip I made to Ocean City for my sixteenth birthday, I felt like I wasn't really getting that atmosphere down properly, so it's nice to hear you say that.

I used a period there on purpose to illustrate that Bowtilda was asking a rhetorical question.

I figure patches is waxing melancholic and talking poetically. Which I figure enhances the mood better than if she's speaking very grammatically correct.

Also great to hear on the character banter, I consider that a strength of mine, which is why I was disheartened to hear people saying they weren't clicking with the characters.

>>72159689
Oh also I had a thought about how you referred to my formatting, and I figured that I could use more tabs, do you think it improved things?

I hadn't thought much about it in my prior stories since they ere 95% dialogue and I very rarely had narration, but here it's much more present and I figured I should make the paragraphs less square.

>>72160454
Yah. Maintain the format as in this edition. This is it. This is well readable.

>>72150240
>but she perked up once she got a look at them
Missing period
>He'd been enough encounters
Been through
>Idunno
Missing space(?)
>Possibly used strap-on wearing bear plushie
The whole machine and prizes will need to be sanitized now.
>Kill confirmed
Welp, somewhat relaxed Cal was a nice person to read about while it lasted. Maybe he'll return some day.

>>72054036
wow i would need to pole that

sexo behind pizza parlor (mama mia)

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>>72165339
Fixed the typo's thanks.

Idunno is without a space on purpose to show she's saying it like it's one word. Her southern accent's not meant to be too obnoxious, but tons of southerners barely bother with pronunciation.

Now the poll is trending towards Haunted Hollows. So I'm wondering exactly how I should outline it. What encounters I could do as Cal heads to the area, what he and Bowtilda might further discuss. I was thinking at least partway they meet this character- who is 'The Jester' and DEFINITELY not the killer. I'm thinking she kinda jump-scares Cal hanging down from a ceiling. The gist of her personality would be 'autistic and needy', and she'll act as companion for the chapter.

The other thing I was thinking was as a contrast with Bonnie (and probably other family members), that rather than have Leah (the older sister) be found at the end of the trial, she shows up immediately. And she actually teams up with Cal for their trial which I'm thinking could be some sort of haunted house adventure (probably a shootout) in the haunted house. But at the ends she double crosses them because she likes the clowniness hedonism, but how things flow from there I don't know (last chapter I figured the confrontation at the top of a water-ride made for an easy excuse to seperate Cal from Bonnie and have him move on).

So yeah could use some help brainstorming.

>>72170901
Thematically, haunted house goes with and-now-we-have-a-killer-on-the-loose. That was my thinking and I imagine the others as well.

>>72172516
Yeah, hence I think the Jester will be a fun character, a nice bit of synergy for the chapter.

Though outside of the Jester constantly insisting they haven't murdered anyone, and some potential jump-scares, I wonder what else I can do?

Here's one idea, how about one of the clown girls dresses up as a slasher (probably something like Jason Vorhees) because that's her job at the attraction. Thinking she's actually a sweetie (and maybe more jumpy at the thought of there being a real killer) it's just more the carnival uses her for her intimidating physicality (thinking she's tall and jacked).

>>72172601
Sounds interesting. Roll with it!
Meanwhile ... ug. This battle scene I'm trying to construct has me pulling my hair out. I think things are gelling together now though. Let's see what happens...

>>72173208
Now I'm wondering if maybe the 'fake slasher' is the one in charge of the Haunted House. And maybe she thinks she should tone things down in the wake of a real death- but Leah keeps insisting everything gets ramped up.

For battle scenes I think the medium of text lend themselves badly to them. In movies and video-games you can deliver a lot of information very quickly, but action flows slower than reading text, ergo it's very hard to get that same kind of impact. So my advice is find a way to lean into the curve.

You can do this maybe on focusing on the strategizing, this is a crutch I use. The internal decision making of the main character of what the obstacles are for them and how they can overcome them. Likewise you can focus in on their emotions and the adrenaline rush they feel, and aspects like the fog of war.

I'd also try not to drag out text descriptions very much unless you are wanting the battle to feel slow (like say a lumbering troll that gives the hero plenty of time to move and react), try to be sparse but impactful with the descriptions and details to try to keep things moving.

Also try not to drag out fight scene too much, since they only lend themselves so well to characterization.

>>72173684
Thank you for the advise and well noted.
The issues are the pre-established geography and distances, and what opportunities they might provide. Semi plausibly, the main character's trying to arrange hitting one group of bad guys at a time while the "Klingon" wannabes are trying to pincer them. After a lotta imagining and some "stage management" practice things fell together. Sometimes you have to stop writing and think things through.
And, yeah. Ain't no time for refreshing Shakespearian monologues in my battle scenes.

The fun in the Haunted House would being Cal's paranoia. Which be the killer here? None? One? All? Slasher getups and murder mysteries don't go well together because, uh, well, OK. They do. Hm. Also won't help if the house boss looks to Cal for all his manly paranoid protection, to the others consternation, etc. Lots of fun dynamics there.

>>72173684
>>72174842
Potential scene suggestion addendum:
>Could I at least borrow one of your guns? Pleeeeze?
Lawl.

>>72174842
Generally strategy in a melee a trois is to avoid a melee a trois. Let two sides weaken themselves out fighting each-other, then strike at the weakened victor.

Yeah, I think the things I need to figure out are-
-first chapter is the leadup to the house, introducing characters, at the end Leah is revealed post-clownification.
-second chapter is going through the haunted house itself for the trial, would need to figure out the layout, and goal, and how it gets resolved with Leah going her own way and being a general menace like Bonnie.

One thing I'm wondering if I could fit in is inbetween clowntown plaza and haunted hollows I decided to throw in an ice-rink and I came up with an idea for the person who runs it being a girl who acts like it's christmas every day (more cause she wants it to be), maybe with a name like Minty. Wonder if I could work them into the journey or it'd be too out of the way. Likewise they'd pass through Jester Junction the funhouse area with a number of secrets. Having brought it up that'd be a good place to have 'the Jester' show up, but I feel they should be doing something more than just passing through.

Another thing I'm wondering about is maybe the Haunted Mansion is overrun by a faction of skeletons. I could have them be SKULL from a previous chapter, but I'm wondering if it should be another one. Other factions I've thought up would be a faction of white-supremacist skeletons (who do not get along with SKULL who think skin color is just a tool of the fleshlings to divide the common skeleton), and I was thinking there'd also be a faction of skeletons that end up worshipping the killer (despite not knowing who they are) but it's too early for that faction to show up.

>>72090117
Gonna give this one a shot because for some reason I was brainstorming about it the entire time I was at the grocery store.

>>72096268
>confirmation
Did you get an e-mail saying they got your application? I got one saying they confirmed the e-mail but they haven't gotten back to me yet.

bump

>>72180004
Not the requester but I'm looking forward to this as well. Assuming a spotted hyena dynamic I could see the rough and tough males overjoyed at the prospects of sex without risking a beat-down, while still being cutely deferential.

I'm almost done with a story about a stripper doing her usual dance but she ends up getting distracted/blindsided by a friend who didn't show up to say hi to her before the show. I don't want to have the friend come in on her stripping since the idea is they haven't seen each other in a while but they know all of each other's secrets, but I want to spice it up to make it more interesting/sexy. Can anyone throw some suggestions my way?

>>72184451
My experience with go-go dancing/stripping is it's just a job. Sure, some things happen and drugs are around about, but the industry as a whole is a lot more boring than outsiders realize. Visiting a friend at her worksite ain't no thing.
The most obvious solution? Her friend is really, really turned on by her performance. Awkward and sexy a go-go you go!

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>>72180004
Awesome!

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>>72184355
It's fun, but I might cut it down to three guys, it's feeling a little cluttered.
>The hyena's faces when she doesn't have a psuedo-penis

>>72184597
You just gave me an excellent idea holy shit thank you

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>>72184839
When in doubt lez it out.
You're most welcome.

>>72184696
I once heard someone refer to that bit of anatomy as a "yeenis" and I still chuckle like a retard whenever I remember that.

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>>72184696
Three guys is fine. I didn't mean that she had to fuck all four every time. She will just fuck whoever is in the mood. You could still have four band member but one just decides to pass this time.

>>72186254
Lol. I think make hyenas would probably enjoy dating outside their species because most other females aren't as crazy as female hyenas. And not everyone enjoys being pegged.

Hm. How to end this post battle conversation?
>Where are you from?
>I'm from the outer planet of the ninth dimension. Now piss off!
I guess Krystal's got cause to be getting a little cranky.
Lawl as they say.

>>72189344
>I didn't mean that she had to fuck all four every time
I like the idea of a post concert snuggle pile where she'd just buried in fur and sandwiched by her bandmates, who're all riled up from the show. Of course they got some groupies who want them, but they're all about her. Even though she's got no yeenis.

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>>72192816
Sandwich is hot. They can even take turns. But it's not an open relationship, just the 4-5 of them together.

I want to work on the Cursed Clussy Carnival chapter next, but I don't know how to start. Was hoping for a bit more comments on the chapter. I also hawk this story on the bimbo threads, but another one won't be up until tomorrow.

Working backwards from the scene I have most sketched out in my head would be the Jester's introduction. I'm thinking she does a jumpscare hanging down from the ceiling of something. Geographically this makes the most sense to happen at Jester Junction which is where the funhouse is located (the name's a coincidence in this case).

So I'm wondering what Cal and Bowtilda could be discussing or doing besides getting from point a. to point b., and why they may enter a location with a ceiling.

I was thinking Jester Junction acts as sort of a 'main street hub' for the carnival, with the fun houses made to look like old brick-front buildings, with more of the 'service' buildings for the carnival being nearby (like the community theater and first-aid building).

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https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=VXSoAdorWdA
End of chapter theme. I'm. Almost. There.

>>72195529
I'd assume she still needs to work on "converting" him if she can. Given their getup, maybe she can work in some suggestive lewd Joker / Harley Quinn story to indirectly prod at him. Or work in some real gangster lore, brothels and more, etc.
>ceiling?
Police tape. Locked door sign. "Shit's closed due to murder investigation! Beat it!"

>>72195826
I was thinking that there'd be an underground strip-club/speakeasy at Jester Junction but that it'll come up later.

Working the smuggler subplot could work. Maybe there's dirty dealings with some smugglers? Like the pair duck in to a building to snoop which is when the Jester loudly swings down.

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>>72156198
>The internet has many that think otherwise if the girl is cute enough.
Indeed, tho' typically it be more of a love/hate thang.

>>72053344
How do you write a interessing bimbo character?

>>72054773
>somewhat taboo on AO3
I thought AO3 was the wild west of writefags where everything is allowed as long your fic isn't literally breaking the law tho?

>>72199155
It is and it is allowed. It's taboo because it's technically not the norm and scandalous in public, and there's still that general audience that willingly goes into stories that they don't like and will complain about the content of said stories. They can be noisy. But that's all they can really be.

>>72193190
Yeah, maybe I conveyed it improperly in my post. I meant that even though they were playing in front of a crowd of screaming ladies, they're attached at the hip to the singer and only want her.

>>72199155
>>72199524
I think what was being conveyed is it's kinda taboo to just drop popular tags on your own story as a form of attention whoring. A minimal appearance of tag related content in story is what they use to keep things looking legitimate, and get all them views.

>>72199054
I have some experience in that.

Now I focus more on bimbofication, and what I find most interesting about that is identifying a character trait that gets brought out by the bimbofication. For instance maybe having the maternal instinct of a mother that gets turned to eleven.

I think what's also important, at least for me, is to feel like they still have their own agency. They may be dim and slutty, but they are still in control of their lives, and actively pursuing things they want. It's just the thing they want is to be massive sluts.

And I think it's always a good touch if a bimbo has a high degree of empathy.

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>>72199585
True. Especially a girl who doesn't try to death for sex.

bump

>>72199054
With intelligence. Smart can pose as stupid. She understands what she does and how it's done. While she can't control her physical attributes, she can wear baggy cloths and drop the act when it suits her.

>>72199054
Doctor Jekyl and Mr. Hyde, but she sucks cock and eats ass.

>>72206028
I think the idea of a mad-scientist bimbo is highly underrated.

>>72206499
Like a chuuni bimbo? That's kind of funny.

>>72206579
No, I mean a bimbo that is also a supergenius, but uses her intelligence to come up with more debauched scenarios and bimbofication technology that she can use on others.

bump

Ug. One more time I have to sketch out what the fans would instantly recognize by name alone. But, the main character has never encountered one before so...